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07-27-2010, 12:27 AM
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A small suggestion:

When you use "these", then you may want to make it more like this:

"We need to get out of here," Said person #1
"How?" Said person #2

Rather than:

"We need to get out of here," Said person #1 "How?" Said person #2

It makes it a bit easier to read, and looks a bit more tidy. Otherwise a fine chapter.
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This whole thread is not dead, I'm just having a lot of difficulty writing any fan fiction I make. This is one major writers block i'm having and I may have to take a break for a while.
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I am having problems writing a new fan fic...
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09-09-2010, 09:55 AM
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Good News. Since I've started college and gone away from the distractions of the summer holidays, I can now do more to The Slig Chronicles, I've been continuing with the next chapter today and I may have it done tomorrow, but I'm not entirely sure about that.
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That's great to know!
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Chapter 7
Night Shifts

The night drew in and it was time for Tarios, Skye and the others to move out and for the others to hatch out their plan. “Alright people, this is it” said Kemi looking over the group, “this is our final push to the S District, we won’t get caught this time and we won’t fail this time”. There was a strict rule on not being allowed in the streets after the sun had set unless under direct permission and supervision under a soldier or the nearest CP outpost. So this time, they were going to break a rule or two. “Alright people, let’s move out, and let’s hope the new guy doesn’t get killed out there” Kemi finished with a quick wink towards Yarza and Garia. They both tugged a small evil smile; Tarios and Skye didn’t notice this. The group walked up the steps and Kemi opened the door to the alleyway. The group headed out into the night, the search for the settlement had begun.

Meanwhile back at the prison, Valken and Vankor sat and waited patiently for anything to stir up. The occasional Rat scurried out of its hole in the concrete wall to look for any crumbs of food on the floor. Valken and Vankor were given a Scrab Cake as a snack for the last bit of the day, so there had to be some crumbs left on the hard floor. Eventually, something did stir up as a prison guard opened the cell gate. He looked like any soldier from outside but his uniform was different. Instead of green camouflage, he wore navy blue armour, gas mask and clothing. He looked at the two prisoners eyeing him; suspense was in the air. “Things have changed” the prison guard said with a dark tone in his voice, “you two are moving out to a security outpost in the S District, were moving out now”. The two prisoners stood up from their beds as the guard stepped out of the cell and out into the main detention area. The prisoners followed him with no other choice and took a good view of the detention area.

The room was huge, with at least 200 cells holding two prisoners in each cell. Valken and Vankor kept their emotions inside themselves to avoid attracting any attention from the guards. They walked on a narrow, metal catwalk held up by steel cables attached to the walls. There were also at least 40 guards, 2 patrolling each catwalk with 10 cells on each. Vankor and Valken just kept on walking behind the prison guard and kept their thoughts to themselves. Their new time at the outpost was only minutes away.
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09-14-2010, 09:37 AM
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Chapter 8
Night of Peril

Back at the S District, the group snuck quietly in the many connecting alleyways along the brick houses until they were a short distance away from the outpost blocking their route to the District. The brick houses didn’t stop until at least half-a-mile into the D District, so the group had plenty of cover to get into the S District. The outpost only covered the road into the District, but the alleyways into it were blocked by electrical barriers so people could only access the district via the outpost. However, at this time of night, the outpost would not let anyone, except soldiers, into the District unless supervised by a Soldier. So the only option was to find someway through the electrical barriers.

Kemi peered out of an alleyway towards the Outpost. Around 5 guards were patrolling around it. He then looked at the nearest alleyway on the other side of the road where he could see an electrical barrier in action. He ducked back to the group. “All right guys” he whispered, “we can’t just stroll towards the outpost at this time of night, so we have to shut down that barrier at the other side”. “It’s never easy” whispered Yarza looking at the barrier. He was also carrying a crowbar. Kemi looked out again to see if the coast was clear – and it was. “Ok, let's go” he whispered to the team.

All of them stayed low and quiet as they ran quickly. However, the squeak from the pistons controlling their metal legs started to give their position away. The group hid behind the alleyway wall as a guard looked in their general direction. However, their sight was their handicap as they couldn’t see well in the dark of the night. They could only rely on their hearing to spot any unusual activity. But the soldier just shrugged and returned to his duties. This time, Garia peered around the corner of the building, wielding her Colt Python 357 Magnum. It was scoped and the whole condition of it was not entirely up to scratch. It was scratched and scraped and the scope lens was nowhere to be seen, perhaps shattered in a previous event.

“We’re gonna have to be quick about this” she said turning back to the group. “You can count on me” Yarza whispered while approaching the barrier. He started to inspect the sturdiness of the barrier while Tarios kept watch. Then Yarza came up with his verdict. “It looks like the barrier of electricity itself is held in place by these supports” he whispered pointing out the black, metal supports attached to the walls, “If I were to shift one support out of place, the barrier would shut down. However, it would trigger an alarm as it is wired but we have no other choice on how to approach and this is worth a shot”. “Ok then, get to work” Kemi said. Yarza nodded and immediately set about disabling the force field.

Tarios was starting to feel uneasy about this. But Skye was by his side and seeing how she saved him from the other three made him feel slightly better. However he had to try and trust these three as they knew what they were doing and they knew about a settlement. However, being beaten up didn’t reinforce that trust; it more or less broke it. Yarza inserted the crowbar into a gap in the left support and started tugging at it to weaken its structure. He tried to avoid hitting the barrier itself as it could administer a lethal shock, enough to render the victim unconscious. The rest of the group stood in suspense as the alarm could go of any moment. “I think I’m almost there” Yarza whispered as the group could clearly see the support breaking away from the strain. Then all of a sudden, the support broke and the barrier shutdown. However, immediately after it broke, a loud alarm sounded and all of the Soldiers turned in shock at the presence of it. “Alright people, let’s move” said Kemi. But before Tarios could even turn his body around to follow them, he felt a strong kick in the side. He was knocked back through the entrance of the alleyway and landed on the pavement. Kemi stood before him. “You’re not coming, you’re the prime suspect” He said smiling evilly at Tarios. Skye couldn’t react fast enough as she was also kicked and she landed right next to Tarios. Garia sent the blow towards Skye and Yarza was just standing there looking at them. “You too Skye” Garia said. “So long now” Kemi said and with that, the three ran down the alley way, leaving the other two alone. The soldiers were quick to run towards the position of the broken barrier and they quickly drew out their weapons and pointed them at Tarios and Skye. The three other Sligs were now out of site and well on their way towards the settlement. Tarios and Skye looked at the soldiers in fright, the betrayal had left them gobsmacked and speechless. But all they could do was stay still as the soldiers eyed them with their weapons.
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Awesome new chapters! It's good to see this series come back.
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Chapter 9
Arrival and Delay (Part 1)

Meanwhile in the S District, Rigel and Lotice were still making their way towards the settlement. It was still night time “Where is this settlement” asked Rigel. “It’s just one block away based in an old sewage runoff system” Lotice Replied as they were coming towards the entrance of an alleyway, “you can’t miss it”. “Surely the settlement would be a cause of concern with the soldiers” said Rigel looking out at any activity along the road. “No actually” Lotice said surprisingly, “they don’t bother the settlement because they don’t cause any sort of trouble or disturbance and the soldiers think it’s just a place where others can live in, as long as they don’t stir up any trouble”. Rigel looked both ways across the road, but there was no sign of any soldier activity. “Looks like the coast is clear” said Rigel looking back at Lotice. She nodded and they both crossed the road quickly. Now the settlement was only a couple of alleyways away.

Meanwhile, Tarios and Skye were still being held at gunpoint near the broken electrical barrier. But it was then that a soldier abruptly hit the two Sligs in the head with the butt of his M16 assault rifle. They were rendered unconscious and were soon dragged towards the outpost. “Take them to the detention cells” said one of the soldiers standing by the entrance to the outpost. The soldier dragging the Sligs nodded and took them down through the outpost’s underground passageways.

Rigel and Lotice were now within a stone’s throw away from the entrance to the settlement. It was made up of a broken sewer grate partly covering the runoff hole. The runoff chamber had long been drained out to house the many residents who had no other place to go. However, there were still a couple of damp patches in the chamber. “Well, here we are” Lotice said stopping at the entrance of the settlement. “Not bad” Rigel commented on the settlement’s construction and the social structure that was housed inside it. The residents had built small shelters out of corrugated iron and other types of metal. Some shelters were beginning to rust away. “Let’s get inside” said Lotice now walking through the broken sewer grate. Rigel quickly followed behind.

Most of the residents were sleeping in their makeshift shelters. The two crept across the area, trying to keep the noise level of their footsteps as quiet as possible. The sleeping area was connected to a smaller room ahead. This was where the medical and other supplies were kept. “This way” Lotice whispered pointing towards the supply room, “we can meet the head of the settlement in there”. Rigel nodded back to her. Once they were in the supply room, Lotice walked to the back of the room where a grey Slig was sat on a small wooden chair facing an old desk. “Ah, welcome back Lotice” he said rather calmly, Lotice smiled back to him, happy that she was now in safe hands, “and who’s this”. “This is Rigel” she replied bringing him to the front of the desk with her arm, “I found him one of the alleyways in this district, he needed somewhere to stay and he did save me from a Soldier, so I helped him out”. “It is good to meet a newcomer to the settlement” the grey Slig said, “I’m Lewis, the head, the sheriff and the negotiator of this settlement”. He took out his hand as a gesture to shake hands with Rigel. He responded by firmly gripping Lewis’ hand with his. “Good to know that we can get along with each other” Lewis said smiling at the same time. Rigel gave a smile back. Lotice stood there looking content with her doing. Rigel was now safe at last.
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How is Tarios shaking hands with Lewis if he's in the detention cells?
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Oh, my mistake. Thanks for pointing that out
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