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*sigh*, writing for me right now is in slow progress. I don't know when the next chapter will be finished
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I don't know how well i've written this chapter, So please point out if there is anything wrong.
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Chapter 4
A Long Way from Here (Part 1)

Meanwhile, somewhere in the residential area of the X16, a light green haze appeared in a small alleyway. Then suddenly from the haze appeared a green Slig with a Walther SP22/M2 following close behind him. It was Rigel who had strangely teleported to this destination. “Where am I” he thought as he looked around. He looked at the ground to find the Walther lying on the ground. He picked it up and put it in his right jacket pocket. He then heard the radio chatter from outside of the alley. He walked towards the end and peered around the corner. Standing by what looked like a small, abandoned car dealer was another soldier also by a retinal scanner. However this time, he was Slig like. “Unit 155, possible threat has been detected in your area, suspect wears a black leather jacket and black trousers, situation is shoot first, ask questions later, over” said the radio on the Slig. “Roger that” replied the Slig down the radio. The soldier cocked its M16 assault rifle and immediately went on full alert. Rigel wouldn’t even look out of the alleyway in case of being shot. Luckily, some metal stairs ran up the side of the brick wall building next to him. He decided to climb up to the rooftop to gain a better vantage point. He had to be quiet so the soldier didn’t hear him.

When he finally reached the rooftop, he started to calculate his best possible route back to where he started. Over in the distance were taller brick buildings. He thought he would travel there first to make a better prediction on where he was and sort out his route again. Suddenly, a ricochet sounded right in front of him. He ducked behind a vent shaft and readied his Walther. He peered round the shaft and saw nothing but more brick buildings. But then something caught his eye. A soldier was stood on a balcony and it was carrying a Steyr SSG bolt action sniper rifle. “Damn” he thought as there was probably an armed sniper on every street, “This is not going to be easy”.

Meanwhile, near the cafe/secret hideout – “Where do I start” Tarios thought as he looked down the quiet streets and trying to act normal and not to raise any suspicion. It was mid-day now but everybody was still quiet and nobody wanted any attention. The radio still played the bossa nova genre tunes on the same station. Tarios walked down the soundless street and past the café but then he heard a voice that said “Hey, you”. It was the soldier outside the café. “Yeah” Tarios replied. “Let me see you’re ID” said the soldier taking out his pocket size retinal scanner. Tarios obeyed the command and walked over to the soldier. The soldier then scanned the Slig’s eyes with the scanner, but was then suddenly and quickly punched in the stomach by the fist of Tarios. He then slashed the soldier again in the face and he went down. He grabbed the Walther SP22/M2
from the Soldiers belt pocket. Some others stood in shock at what just happened. Then another soldier, carrying a M16 assault rifle, appeared from the corner of the street and saw the commotion. “Freeze” he shouted readying his rifle. Tarios quick-drew the Walther and shot the soldier once; the bullet hit the soldier’s right arm. The soldier stumbled with his arm crippled from the impact and Tarios managed to run down the street unscathed. The soldier took aim with his left arm and fired a 3-shot burst. All bullets ricocheted near Tarios since the soldier didn’t have a good aim with his left arm and the recoil was too big.

Tarios needed to get to an alleyway since a sniper could easily pick him off in the open. He reloaded the Walther and zipped into a small alleyway unharmed. The eeriness of it immediately made Tarios nervous. He didn’t want to go back as he would be the first head-shot of the afternoon. He crept down the alleyway, keeping a good guard of himself using the Walther.
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I thought it was good. Plus, I'm always happy to get story updates! =)
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A Long Way from Here (Part 2)

Rigel prepared to scale the rooftops of the close brick buildings. However, with the itchy trigger fingers of the snipers, it wasn’t going to be easy. Luckily, parts of the rooftops were lined with ventilation shafts. He took a deep breath and ran for the next rooftop, He jumped and landed on the next rooftop only milliseconds before a Sniper firing at his position. The bullet zipped past Rigel by a couple of inches. He zipped behind the next vent shaft. Then suddenly, a small hatch opened on the roof and a soldier wielding a M16 rifle climbed up to the roof. Rigel reacted quickly to the new threat and quick-drew the Walther and shot the soldier in the leg. He stumbled and accidently fell down the open hatch. The M16 clattered on the ground. Rigel carefully looked down through the hatch to see the soldier lying on the metal floor below, unconscious. He didn’t dare lift his head just above the vent shaft. “Unit 23 down, close in on the kill” said the chatter of the radio attached to the soldier’s belt. Rigel had to move fast as the death of Unit 23 was notified to the other soldiers. He grabbed the M16 rifle and slid down the ladder down through the hatch to the metal floor. He checked the clip in the M16 to find it full. He checked the Soldiers belt pockets for any spare clips; luckily there were 2. He put them in his leather jacket pockets and set about getting down to the streets – the roofs were too dangerous.

Meanwhile, Tarios entered a small building inside the alley way to evade the soldiers. It looked abandoned but something didn’t seem right. He walked down a small set of concrete stairs into a small room. It was very dull and had little furniture – only a couple of wooden drawers and a wooden-framed chair covered in yellow fabric. He took a cautious step towards the furniture but the lift of a Colt Python 357 Magnum to the side of his head stopped him in his tracks. “Get down on the ground” snapped the Magnum wielder pointing the weapon towards the ground. The wielder had a feminine voice. Tarios obeyed the command and slowly knelt to the ground. She grabbed the M16 Rifle away from Tarios and placed it on one of the wooden drawers while still pointing the Magnum at Tarios. “Why are you here?” she snapped holding the Magnum firmly in her hands. “I’m in a bit of a situation here” replied Tarios trying not to make eye contact with the female, “I was escaping from the soldiers and I needed to find some safe cover –so I dashed in here”. “Well, you’ve come to the wrong place to find cover” replied the female holding the Magnum right up to his head. Tarios tried to think away out of this but the female was thinking of another way. She yanked the surrendered Slig by the arm up onto his feet. “C’mon” she said, “were going somewhere”.
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I've de-railed my train due to a writer's block. May take a bit of time for me to write the next chapter
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Sorry for the delay, revision and exams going on, and the fact that I had a short writer's block, but here is part 3 of chapter 4
edit in the last part: The point were it says "She grabbed the M16 Rifle away from Tarios and placed it on one of the wooden drawers", the M16 Rifle shoud have been a SP22/M2. Little mistake
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A long way from here (Part 3)

Meanwhile, in a large prison, Vankor and Valken sat patiently waiting for something to stir. They were in a small, concrete cell. Two beds, a sink and a shelf were the only things in the cell. Only a couple of rats scurried around the cell, completely oblivious of the two Sligs, both lying on a bed. “We need to get out of here” said Vankor quietly. “Well, we can worry about that later, as there is pretty much no way we can escape” replied Valken looking at the bars of the cell gate. A soldier patrolled past the cell and then past the other cells in the block. The soldiers never eyed the prisoners as they didn’t want any trouble stirring. They knew that nothing was going to happen for a while. So they would have to just sit and wait, and wait, and wait.

Tarios however couldn’t wait as he was being dragged to a new part of the hideout. The room was pretty blank but again had a few bits of furniture around the room. The most important bit of furniture in the room was a small wooden table with a TV on top of it. Two Sligs, one orange and the other turquoise, were sitting on a yellow couch facing the TV and a black Slig was sat on a wooden stool. “Guys, we’ve got ourselves a straggler” shouted the scarlet Slig shoving Tarios towards the three. They all looked at him until the black Slig stood up. “C’mon, Garia where’s your manners” said the Slig looking at her. “Oh yes” she said scowling back at the Slig. The Slig only just smiled. “My name is Garia” she said to Tarios, “and this is Kemi”. “How ya’ doing” he said to Tarios. However, he didn’t respond. “This here is Yarza” he continued pointing at the orange Slig; he gave a simple hand gesture to show his gratitude. “And this is Skye” he continued pointing at the turquoise Slig. The Slig just said nothing and looked at the TV. Then suddenly, cracking sounds came from the TV and a fuzzy picture came up on the screen. “Look, something’s coming on” said Yarza pointing at the TV. Everybody, except Tarios, gathered round the screen and waited for the picture to come into view. After about 10 seconds, a picture of a Vykker in a black suit came into view. “We now have direct conformation of two disruptors in our midst” the Vykker said, “recent reports showed some attacks around the D District and the S District. You are advised to subdue the attackers on sight, and then bring them to your nearest CP station. Do what you can citizens of Outpost X16, the future of our futures counts on you”. The transmission then faded away into the empty screen it was before. Yarza, Garia and Kemi all looked at Tarios who had sat down on a wooden chair at the back of the room. “Well, we know we don’t work for the oppression, but we might want to ‘quiet’ you down before you create a bit of a stir outside” said Kemi smiling evilly at Tarios. Garia and Yarza got Kemi’s hint and started to advance towards Tarios. “Fine, if you want me out, then I can go out” said Tarios standing up looking worried at the two advancing Sligs. “Oh no, we could use you in this operation” Kemi replied looking calm, “as a punching bag and target practice”. Just as he said that, Yarza slashed at Tarios who stumbled from the blow. Then Garia sent a blow towards Tarios who this time fell to the ground. Kemi kicked him in the stomach a few times to force the wind out of Tarios. “You do make a good punching bag” said Kemi sarcastically, “let’s try and work on putting up a fight”. He slashed downwards with a hard blow and smashed Tarios’ visor. Yarza then kicked him in the stomach with another hard blow. Tarios screamed in pain with each blow as he felt blood trickle down from his wounds and mouth. “Stop!” shouted Skye surprisingly and abruptly. The three attacking Sligs stopped and looked at Skye who had stood up from the couch and walked over to them. “What are you going to do about it, eh” shouted Kemi, “report him to the soldiers and then we get arrested ourselves”. “No!” she shouted back, “we are going to help him. He can be of help to us in the future – not as a punching bag or target practice, but as a good rebel”. She shoved Garia and Yarza out of the way and picked the blood covered Tarios up into her arms. “I’m gonna take him to the spare room where the mattress is”. She continued, “Then we will sort things out using no violence”. “Alright then, be my guest and alert the whole oppression” shouted Kemi. “I won’t and he won’t either”, she shouted back, “their probably too dumb to know that we are here. And more to the point, I think making him ‘quiet’ down was probably loud enough for them to hear”. Kemi just said nothing after that and Skye carried Tarios to the spare room.

When she entered the room, she laid the limp Slig on the flat mattress and looked at his wounds. “How are you feeling?” she asked calmly. Tarios moaned slightly trying to say a word. “Never better” he muttered with a slight smile. Skye slightly chuckled at the comment and tried to tend to the wounds. “Just try to relax” she said taking a small pot with some special cotton wool in it. She dabbed a bit of wool onto a wound on his chest. “Why did you get me out of that mess” Tarios muttered out with a bit of slight coughing. “I just didn’t want to see you being beaten up by those jerks” she replied still tending to the wound, “It was just thoughtless of them to attack you like that”. “Hmm, I call it invading someone’s territory” replied Tarios. “Well, looks like we are going to have to get a new visor” said Skye looking at the cracked screen on his mask. “Good” replied Tarios, “The de-steaming system to stop the visor steaming up was just starting to break up”. Sky slightly chuckled again and tended to more wounds.
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Yay for more story! Development! Secret bases! I am too overly cheerful but that does not matter, because...um, because it does not matter!

Seriously, though, I am glad the story continues. Good chapter.
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Short chapter, but it was late and I was under the influence of this song
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Anyway enough said and sung...
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Chapter 5
Plans

In the residential area, Rigel stuck to the numerous alleyways after he exited the building he was in. This specific part of the residential area was particularly run down and decaying. The residents had abandoned this part a long time ago, now it was just a quiet ghost town. This part was also home to the bunch of outlander Sligs that had taken up residence around the concrete sewage runoffs near the estates and constructed a small settlement. The outlanders weren’t touched by the Soldiers as they posed no threat to the oppressive rule whatsoever. Rigel thought that if he headed there, he would evade the watchful eyes of the soldiers. The settlement was only a couple of blocks away. Rigel gripped the M16 with his two hands firmly and stuck to the alleyways in hope of finding the settlement and safety. However, the watchful eyes of the snipers weren’t going to let him off that easily.

Meanwhile back in the alleyway hideout, Tarios was still lying on the mattress recovering from his wounds from earlier. Skye was still sticking to his side, treating the wounds. “How are you feeling now” Skye asked looking at the healing wounds. “Better than before” replied Tarios with a slight smile. “What, better than never better?” asked Skye with a funny tone in her voice. “Yeah, never better better, or any other way you want to put it” replied Tarios forcing a bigger smile. Skye chuckled slightly and dabbed some more cotton wool onto a wound on his face. It was soaked in a special liquid making it sooth whatever pain there was. Tarios just relaxed on the mattress, trying to ignore the pain in his wounds.

Meanwhile outside where the two Sligs were, Kemi, Garia, and Yarza were sitting in front of the TV. Kemi was sat in the wooden stool he was before. “God damn her!” he said trying to keep his voice down, “Now we are all in this mess”. “What are we gonna do about it Kemi” said Yarza sat on the couch. “I don’t know, I'm thinking!" replied Kemi not wanting to be rushed. Kemi stood up and paced around the room. It was a couple of minutes of silence until Garia spoke up. “Well, we were gonna push our way to that settlement near the S District, maybe we can use him as bait, draw the soldiers attention and we can make a good escape” she said, “remember, they’re not after us, he is the target. “Hmm, like the idea Garia” replied Kemi, “although I don’t know what we are gonna do about Skye”. “No need to worry about her, she’ll probably die due to lack of experience, we’ll just leave her” replied Yarza. “Well then, our plan is formed, we will set off tonight, and it will be successful no matter what” said Kemi looking at the spare room where Skye was tending to Tarios’ wounds, “he will pay, oh he will definitely pay”.
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I'm always happy that this story continues, even when others drop off. You have many supporters, Slig75, and that's because this is a good story.
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I still follow, but not as intently as I probrably should be.

Interesting how much they already hate that fellow, despite that he has done naught to them.
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Just keepin' this thread alive...We need more story.
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I think I may have to take a break for a bit, I just cannot think of how to start the new chapter, It may take a while before something pops in my head

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Okay, I understand. I'll just randomly post something encouraging every few weeks to make sure this thread stays alive.
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Finally got some inspiration today and here is the next chapter. Sorry it is short, but it is very late and I had to write something down. Anyway enjoy
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Alley Encounter

Rigel ran through the alleyways with the M16 Rifle firmly in his hands trying to avoid the snipers glare. He tried to keep every step as quiet as possible to avoid being seen by foot patrols on the pavement. He reached an end to the alleyway next to a small apartment. Strangely, there were no snipers around the area. But there was a reason for all this quietness. Down the street was a fairly big barricade. This was the entrance or exit to another district. Then abruptly, a noise could be heard down the alley. “Get the hell off of me!” a female Slig’s voice shouted. “No can do Sister” another voice said that sounded like a soldier, “and you are to remain silent”. Rigel backtracked down the alley to find the source of the distress. It was just by an entrance to the alley. Rigel peered round the brick wall corner to see the female, Purple Slig being knocked to the ground by the butt of an M16. He then felt a sudden surge of anger towards this and ran aggressively towards the soldier. The soldier wasn’t quick enough to notice the butt of Rigel’s M16 Rifle to the head. The soldier fell to the ground, unconscious. Rigel then looked at the female Slig who was slightly moaning due to the pain from the knock. “Need some help” asked Rigel taking out a hand towards the female Slig. She gave no response but immediately grabbed his hand and he pulled her up. “Thanks” she said dusting herself off. “What happened” Rigel asked unknown of why this happened. “I was on my way to a settlement in the S District when this soldier suddenly and annoyingly stopped me in my tracks” replied the female Slig, “he then decided to arrest me for now reason”. She then looked down at the fallen, unconscious soldier. “Oppressive bastards” she scowled. “Well, coincidently, I’m on the run and I need some place of safety. Could you by any chance take me to this settlement you mentioned?” asked Rigel. “You bet” replied the female Slig instantly, “if you’re in that much trouble, then the settlement is a good place to hide out”. “Well then what are we waiting for” said Rigel, “let’s go”. The female Slig nodded and started walking towards the end of the alley. “By the way, what is your name” asked Rigel walking beside her. “Lotice” she replied smiling. “Nice name” Rigel said admiring it. She smiled again at the comment and walked on towards the end of the alley. Both of them didn’t notice the sun starting to set across what could be seen of a horizon. Day 1 was about to come to an end.
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Good chapter! This fanfic may be slow to come out, but when it does, it sure packs a literary punch.
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