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Thank you! Hmm it's strange when I type out these chapters they seem so long. Yet the one I did was only a mere four paragraphs. Not even worth to turn in as a school essay! Meh it matters not right? RIGHT!? :P

ch.14 Roit I wanna number 1 with no cheese.

While Jobe was knocked out he was dreaming. His dream consisted of something strange. Before him was an exploding factory. Each boom that occured seemed to replace blood instead of ordinary explosions with sparks and fire and such. He heard screams of glukkons,sligs,muds,and some other strange creatures he could not make out.

The creatures he heard in his dreams had a very low voice. Much like a raspy throat from an old man but much more energetic. Of course since he can't really see them it does not matter anyway. There were two figures beside of him. One on each side. One that looked like the creature that has just rescued him, and one that looks lik the size of an ordinary mud.

In a blink of an eye before Jobe the factory exploded. The explosion was not a small one and a huge tsunami of blood came torwards him. Jobe did not know what happened. What he did know though was that he was now in a bloodsoked ocean and he drowned quickly.

Jobe woke up opening his eyes quickly. He brought himself up and found out he was laying on a furry bed. He was in a room that looked ancient and worn out in time. He saw to the right of him a table full of diagrams for some strange weapons. Behind him were jars full of screeching critters.

Another thing Jobe noticed was that it seemed like he was not in oddworld anymore. Beside the bed he was laying on was a window. In the window he saw a long neverending river to a mountain. Besides that river were gravestones of some sort of creatures. "Young muds who died at an young age?" He thought to himself as he tried making out the heads on the gravestones.

Soon Jobe just remembered what really happened. He was about to have his life taken by the evil Hail, but he was saved from some creature. The first thing that popped up in Jobe's mind was "I gotta get out of here and get back to wherever oddworld could be fast!" Jobe jumped out of his bud and started looking for his gun to see if his unkown rescuer retrieved it to, but as soon as he started looking he heard a deep calm voice.

"You looking for your gun buddy?" Jobe turned around and looked at some sort of strange furry creature. He had the lower body of some sort of possibly 4 short legged elum and the upper body of some hairy.....Thing. "Sorry there I could not get it for ya. It would have just slowed me down anyway."

After Jobe looked at the creature for a good long while he asked nervously "Listen. I'm sorry for not introducing myself but I gotta go back." The creature laughed hartily. "What? And get yourself near the urge of death again?" Jobe looked annoyingly at the creaure. Since for some reason he knew he could get back on foot. This must still be oddworld. Yet some strange things still concern him."

Jobe then asked nervously "Can I ask you some questions then?" The thing said calmly to him "Shoot". Then Jobe laughed a little nervously and then asked quickly "Okay: What are you? What part of Oddworld am I in? What is your name? Also what are those drawings on the wall?"

The creature looked at Jobe for a moment and then said: "Well....I don't wanna talk about those paintings, but I can still answer all those other questions. First of all I guess you can call this "Western Mudos" since many people here like me are a little bit in the cowboy side." "Okay and what are you and what is your name then?" "My name is Roit......and i'm a steef."

END OF TEH CHAPTEROO!

We have a new character! did you think it was stranger? Well no....No stranger in this story. Actually stranger,Abe,and Munch are dead at this time of the storyline.
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Cool. He seems like a pretty cool character......and no, I knew it wasn't Stranger.....I had a feeling. Anyway, I thought that that was your best chapter yet-even better than your other one. Nice work.
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ch.15: A sligs first glimpse. On a whole new odd

"So your name is Roit? That's a very odd yet attractive name." Says Job in a reply to the steef's name. He never knew such a creature could exist. So naative and free but strong in nature. All the muds he ever saw needed a weapon of some sort to survive. Yet from first glance it seems like this steef can take down a whole army of sligs.

"Why thank you there. Now that we have me covered. What about you? I never really saw a....thing like you." Jobe was kind of taken aback at the sudden question. Especially since Roit diden't know what he was but still saved him anyway.

"Well then my name is Jobe and i'm a slig." Said Jobe as calmly as he can. He looked at Roit and noticed seeing him a little confused. "A slig eh?" Said Roit in some curiosoty. "Are you some kind of outlaw who takes care of the slegs?"

"The what? What the heck are slegs?" Said Jobe confused. "Hmm.... So if you don't know what they are then you must not be one.." Said roit scratching his chin in thought. "Can you please answer my question...Um...Roit?" Said Jobe with some annoyance in his tone.

"Oh right slegs." Said Roit a little stupidly and out of his train of thought. "Well slegs are nasty little critters mate. They're like chippunks, but bigger and longer teeth and much more carnivorous." "Chippunks?" Asked Jobe with even more curiosity. "Hah I guess I should tell you the basics about everything in western mudos. Don't worry it won't take long."

So there Jobe sat at the comfy bed learning about the basics in this strange oddworld. What really caught his attention was the steef hero Stranger. Who saved the mudokon like species known as grubs from extinction. Even though this oddworld here is so different. It seems eerily strange.

How there was a hero for a weak species. How that the villians known as outlaws were money hungry and greedy. Also how a dangerous octigi known as Sekto is so relativly close to the glukkons. As the day passed Jobe learned. As he learned he knew more ways of defense, offense, and how to get back at the betraying glukkons.

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Sorry for it being short. I had to make this quick cause i'm leaving to a b-day party soon.
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It's ok-it's quality, not quantity, mi amigo! (As I've said a few times before. ) Anyway, I thought it was interesting. I'll be waiting for the next part.
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ch.16: Jobe's new weapons....

After learning the history of "Western Mudos" Jobe felt like he needed to go back. So then without hesitation he asked "Hey that was great knowing about Western Mudos really! It's just that..." Jobe laid his head down "I need to go back. I need to stop Hail from controlling the part of oddworld I live in."

Roit burst out in jolly laughter "HAHAHA man I told you. If you go back there you'll be a goner!" Jobe suddenly felt offended. "What are you saying that I should have a flipping handicapped glukkon taken over the oddworld I live in!? Is that it?"

Roit then explained quickly "Nononono my friend it's not that. It's just that...." Roit looks out the window and looks at a village nearby. "You're just gonna need some help. Come on you're gonna learn how to take out that legged octogi freak." Roit slammed his fist on the bed and yelled out "STEEF STYLE! Come on follow me!"

Roit led Jobe out of his stone cabin and led him to another one next to the one they just came out of. In it were many strange devices. There were: bows, nets, and all kinds of stuff made out of sticks, leather, etc. "Come on your gonna have to be geared up Jobe." Roit said in a calm yet energetic tone.

Roit grabbed some of the items attached to the wall and showed Jobe some kind of strange wooden gun. "This is a crossbow Jobe!" Said Roit in the same tone. "It's what stranger used to use to save the natives. After he did us existing steef's addapted to his style. To tell you the truth this is the better that any gun in my opinion."

Jobe examined the crossbow and asked "What do you use for ammo?". "Hoho you will be plenty surprised my slugy friend." Roit opened up a cabinet, and tons upo tons of furry and tiny critters came out. Jobe noticed one of them immediatly.

"Good lord it's a fuzzle! Get it away! Get it away!" Roit then broke out in laughter again. "Oh don't worry there Jobe. These fuzzles will respect ya! As long as the crossbow doesen't shoot them at you!"

"You use fuzzles as ammo?" Asked Jobe dumbfounded. Roit then replied heartily "Oh yes! There is many of these critters here you can use for ammo! There's chippunks who talk trash and lead enemies to traps, theres thudslugs to knock those buggers out, and there's even stingbees that work eactly like an outlaw's machine gun!"

Jobe was surprised at this. "Wow I never knew that......That such things that seem useless to us at first can be so handy." "Jobe...." Said Roit calmly as he knelt down in front of him. "That is why you should never jusge a book by it's cover. Or else it's just gonna come back with a cold hearted vengance."

Jobe understood this and said. "Well this is interesting and all but is this the backup you were talking about?" Roit then smiled and said "Oh no! This is only the tip of the iceburg! There is much more that I must show you Jobe.... Oh yes much more..."

End of Chapter

I likey this chapter! you likey this chapter?
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Yup, I did like the chapter, but if I must be honest, it was a bit weaker than your past two. Not that it was bad-far from it-it just seems to be lacking something, but I'm not sure what. Perhaps it was description (even though there was some of that there). I don't know, but it was a good chapter. Keep on writing!
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Curses! Is zee juicyness of the story being dried out!? Sorry had to say that . Anyway

ch.17:Think of a title yourself ....Fine fine Jobe meets grubs.

Roit led Jobe out of the shack and into a village. Inside the village were strange little lizzard like men. They all seemed to have the same voices both male and female. "Well these people seem to know the meaning of similarity. They're doing a good damn job at it to." Jobe thought to himself out loud as he kept looking at his surroundings.

This village must be the one Roit was talking about to Jobe While he was still at Roit's home. For these creatures that were scaly, wide-eyed, and just plain creepy in Jobe's eyes. They seemed to be rich in economy too. Jobe saw plentiful markets around him selling food, weapons, tools, and bricks for building houses. Jobe also noticed they had their own ahem "special language".

For Jobe while following Roit wherever he was leading him overheard a group of grubs behind him. What they said wasn't interesting to Jobe but how they talked was. He figured the grubs had handicapped minds or maybe even (If there were such a thing) conversation organs(Don't ask I coulden't think of any way to call it.) because they would always stop they're sentences with "like" and "you know" occasionaly.

"Ah here it is!" Said Roit as he stopped in front of Jobe. Jobe accidently bumped into him from surprise and stood up to look in front of Roit. What was in fron of Roit was some kind of blood red tent with a sparkling ruby like outline. "Jobe this is the grub's village chief tent. It's where he lives, and it's where he'll lend us something special."

Roit and Jobe walked into the tent and saw something strange. In front of them were two grub gaurds gaurding the chief (of course ) and what the chief was doing was strange indeed. At least to Jobe's eyes. The chief was in a meditating position, and saying out some sentences loudly. Maybe a little to loudly.

"Okay like steef god! We need to like...you know need help against this new Wolvark base and stuff! We want you to bring us a hero man! Bring us a hero! So like....He can kick their ass and stuff you know what i'm saying man?" Jobe was strangely confused at watching the leader talk to absolutely no one with his eyes closed.

"Don't worry there mate." Said Roit whispering to Jobe. "He's a little loony you know? Believes in a steef god that protects the grubs. I'll snap him out of it." Roit looked at the chief and yelled out. "Hey my best grub buddy! How ya doing!?" The grub chief opened his eyes and smiled.

"All right man! Like...The steef god answers once again dude! It's great having you here and stuff Roit!" Said the grub chief cheerfuly. "So like what did you need dude! Oh and who's the outlaw looking dude with the metal panties?" "WHAT!?" Said Jobe angrily. He rushed out but Roit grabbed him.

"Don't worry Jobe he likes to joke arround a bit. Anyway chief this here is my buddy Jobe! I saved him from a near death situation, and now his people are in peril! So I was wondering...." "You were wondering if you could borrow my fully compatible army to help dude?" "Yep." Said Roit releaved for some strange reason.

"Oh yea sure dude sure.....I just need a favor first that's all dude." Said the grub quietly. "What is that?" Said Roit. "Oh maybe oh I don't know small thing....Maybe..... KILL ALL THE WOLVARKS THAT ARE TAKING OVER OUT LAND!?"

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This chapter was for pure plot advancement and comedy. I hope you like it.
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Yes!! I loved it, actually! It was funny......I think you got the Grubb personality downpat-they seemed exactly as they are in Stranger's Wrath. I especially got a bit of a chuckle out of this:

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Roit led Jobe out of the shack and into a village. Inside the village were strange little lizzard like men. They all seemed to have the same voices both male and female.
Yeah, you know, I was wondering why both the male and female Grubbs sound EXACTLY ALIKE! It's kind of wierd to hear a female speaking with a male-like voice. Anyway, nice work, Metroixer the Metroid Freak (I now dub thee that! )! Keep it up.
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Yay! I felt like I was trying to hard but I guess I wasen't! Good to know my story got you lol'ing

ch.18 Oh....So now I take orders from a lizard....Just....Great..

"Wait we have to do what?" Said Jobe at the grun who just yelled out rather rudely. "Dude open your ears man! Like I said we're like being attacked by those freaken wolvarks man! This town is like.... Rich in economy and all that jazz you know what i'm saying? The wolvarks are gonna attack us next though! You gotta help us dude!"

The chief stood up ran and grabbed him and started shaking him violently saying.. "YA GOTTA HELP US!" Jobe got annoyed and pushed the chief away. The grub gaurds took this as an offense and jumped on Jobe and started punching him, biting him, and kicking him. "Get the hell of me!" Yelled Jobe violently.

"Chief come on! Can you get those grubs off of Jobe he doesen't know what he's doing he's new here!" Asked Roit loudly with a bit of annoyance. "Yea yea fine whatever get off of him guys..." Said the grub chief while rolling his eyes.

"You're not making a good first impession here mate." Said Roit to Jobe quietly. "If ya keep this up they're gonna expel you from the village. Now I don't even think they have your trust anymore." When Roit stopped talking he turned to the chief and said calmly.

"Fine we'll do your little mission for Jobe's people. Protect your village and scare off the wolvarks right?" The chief put his arm around his head and thought for a long time. After some thinking he put his arm back down and said. "You know what? Since that green dude pissed me off and stuff NOW ya gotta infiltrate their main base and destroy their leader along with protecting our village."

Roit and Jobe were both surprised at this. Roit started "But....How can we do two things at once?". The chief smiled and pointed at Jobe "Also since he pissed me off he will have to be the one attacking the base. ALONE, with you Roit protecting us. Why? Cause that guy is in my sucky journal now!"

"I love you too." Said Jobe in a deep cruel tone. Roit's mouth dropped open is surprise. "But all he did was knock you down! Surely it can't be that bad." "I am like very sensitive dude okay? I'm like a slurg ya know what i'm saying? If he ain't doing it then we won't lend you our army."

"Jobe...." Said Roit as he knelt down beside him. "Are you sure you wanna do this? To save your and the other people in your part of oddworld?" Jobe looked at Roit. Then at the chief. He then said in a most confident voice "Sure...It'll be fun."

end of chapter

Uh oh Jobe! Joo are going to the dark side! (Kidding) So the plot thickens even more...
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Heh, that Grubb is one nasty one, huh? Just kidding, but I liked the whole "I'm like a slurg" bit-I thought that was pretty clever. Nice job-I personally thought the chapter before this one was funnier, but that's cool. 8) Keep up the good work.
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You thought there were no more chapters but guess what there's a chapter! (Stolen from strong bad).

ch.19: OH GOD HE HAS A MACHI-*dies*

"Okay dude now that you're acting confident and stuff I guess I should tell you the date when this is all gonna happen. Well you see here." The chief pulled out a scroll with badly drawn wolvarks and other industrial things on it. "Okay well today is Friday. So it's marshmellow night for the Wolvarks. We would have the element of surprise on them, but Wolvarks just seem stronger with marshmellows. Don't ask me why okay dude?"

The chief then pointed to some kind of betting table. "Okay and tommorow is betting day. This is where the wolvarks bet all their savings and stuff to become most popular, and all the jazz ya know what i'm saying dude?" Jobe nodded his head calmly.
"Okay okay dude that's good ya know good ya know.

Anyway We still can't attack them that night since security is hellishly tight yo. There are some wolvarks...No many wolvarks that will give up their life to gaurd the place. So we'll cross out Saturday and Sunday since those two days are both the same acivities there." The chief then suddenly gave a relieved smile to his face.

"Anyway it doesen't matter cause the wolvarks diden't plan to attack us on any of those days! So Monday which is the day they will attack us is the best bet. The wolvarks will be like tired and stuff from partying all night dude. Just like a monday in school during the morning ya know?" Jobe then suddenly thought of something that made him confused.

"Wait how do you know all of this?" Jobe asked quizzically. The grub answered in an annoyed voice. "Oh ya know we have spies and stuff to take hostages and steal stuff and that king stuff." Jobe was really annoyed now. "So you're telling me that instead of activating a boiler in that factory using your spies, you just used them to grab all kinds of information that can be near useless?"

The chief was looking at Jobe. Jobe looked at the chief. Eye to eye it seems like a staring contest and Jobe was winning. "Oh my Odd. I am so stupid man! Stupid stupid stupid!" "That you are." Said Jobe in his thoughts in fear if the gaurds get aggrivated again.

The chief stopped and said. "Okay whatever man! Just....Just get ready for Monday okay!? I gotta go get some paramite plushies to make me feel better..." and with that the chief went into his private room, and Roit and Jobe left the tent.

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Nice chapter, metroixer. It reminded me of something I've seen in Ratchet and Clank before (with the badly-drawn plans, mainly) Keep it up-this is getting very interesting and funny!
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Oh yes I have something in mind right now that could work quite nicely ! You know whn this story first started it was all serious and stuff but now....Let's just say it seems like the genre of the story changed! For the best it seems!

ch:20 Omg it is teh twentieth chaptah!

As Jobe walked torward Roit's shack Roit started appoligizing. "Jobe i'm sorry about this. I never knew the chief would become this short tempered! I-I mean..." Yet as Roit kept talking Jobe had something else in mind. If he were to destroy this wolvark base he would have to know how the wolvark's are, what their IQ is(!), and how cleverly they would defend themselves using team formations.

Jobe then interrupted Roit. "Roit you can stop now. don't worry I can handle this, but you have to show me something first." Roit looked at Jobe quizzically. "Well there Jobe what's that?" "I'm gonna have to see videos on these wolvarks so we can see what they can do." 'But we only have videos of Wolvarks celebrating a marshmellow night that was taken two weeks ago!" "Good enough."

(NOTE: This should give you a good hint of what's to come.)

When Roit and Jobe got to the steef's shack Roit went to a kitchen. After a while Roit came back with a dusty looking tape. "You guys use tapes?" Asked Jobe with a strange tone. "Yea we think it's a lot easier...No offense to you slig guys of course." "Bah it's okay. Lets see that tape."

Roit went into a room with a tv in it.(Surprised there's a tv in a steef's home?) He popped it in and both him and Jobe sat down. Roit turned the tv on and waited for the vcr() to load. It started, and the first thing Jobe and Roit saw was a grub wearing a ninja like mask.

"Okay dudes so like...This is grub spying wolvark LIVE ya know what i'm saying?" Said the grub in the video. "I have picked one of the most like dangerous nights to invade their base ya know? Marshmellow night that is. With that we move on to see what the wolvarks do here! Come on man!"

The screen was getting very blurry, but it soon stopped. What Jobe saw now were a group of wolvarks sitting around a campfire doing (You guessed it) marshmellow roasting. As they were sitting around they were singing a crude song. "25 alive grubbs on the wall! 25 alive grubbs! You shoot one down, kick it around, 24 alive grubs on the wall!"

Jobe saw the grubb who was hosting the video getting uneasy. So with that he(The grubb) said. "Okay dudes um....Let's go see what the gaurds do!" The screen got blurry again. It yet again stopped. What Jobe saw were two wolvarks wearing gas masks. He thought THESE wolvarks would be a lot smarter, but he was mistaken.

As the camera was focusing on those two wolvarks they were complaining about something rather silly. "Dammit give me back my blisterz booty card! It's a collectible!" The wolvark on the left yelled out. The one on the right snickered and said. "HA! I told you we did an *ahem* "secret" trade while you were asleep! two jo' mommas and looten duke for that blisterz booty er THIS blisterz booty card!"

"I don't even remember doing that trade!" The one on the left whined. "Well that's because you were asleep." Said the right one cleverly. The other wolvark looked at the one that just tricked him. With that he shot him in the head "The left wolvark shot". He then walked away with some cards grumbling "My blisterz booty....The bastard.."

"Well okay dudes that's all for now! Join us next month to learn more about wolvarks!" The grubb yelled out. With that a green THE END screen came out. Now if Jobe had a mouth and looked at him...You would have seen his mouth wide open right now. Roit diden;t need a mouth to tell what Jobe was thinking right now though. The silence is all the answer.

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Nice work, metroixer. I got a few chuckles out of that chapter. The only thing I can tell you is to watch the spelling because I caught a few spelling errors, but they weren't that bad. Keep it up!
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Yesh a new chapter!

ch.21: Surprise? You shoulden't have!

"That is it!?" Yelled Jobe furiosly at the screen. "That is the intelligence these so called dangerous villains have!? Why a fleech is smarter than that!" Roit looked at Jobe nervously and said. "Now Jobe calm down. Remember this is only there break night. They are a lot ahem.....Attentive during actualt work hours."

"Well at least I know how smart these guys are. Wait are marshmellows like wolvarks favorite food?" "I heard it is ya." "Well that gives me a clever idea." Said Jobe while rubbing his hands together. While Jobe and Roit were waiting for monday they stocked up on supplies, and practiced. Jobe learned how to get live ammo and use it. He also got some stamina, and health upgrades (:P). Everyone was fully stocked. Then the day came....

Jobe woke up at 5:00 in the morning to get ready and check his equipment twice. Roit was already outside with some grubs wearing makeup on them waiting for the rest of the grubs to arrive. When Roit saw Jobe he ran to him and said.

"Morning Jobe are ya ready?" Whispered Roit in front of Jobe. "Yea i'm fine and ready." "Why do you have a full backpack on you?" "Well...." Jobe leaned against Roit's ear and whispered something to him. When Jobe was done Roit smiled.

"Haha that's a great idea there Jobe! The wolvarks won't know what hit em!" "I know Roit I know." Said Jobe happily. "Well you best be on your way Jobe. The wolvark factory ain't far from here. Just leave from the other side of the village, turn right at the first cave you see to your left, and then once you can't go any farther because of a river keep heading left. You'll see it."

"Well thanks Roit and good luck to ya! Just one question. Will the wolvarks be taking the same way?" "No Jobe the grub chief told me they would be taking a different and longer route." "K then Roit. Survive for me k?" "Don't go dying on me either buddy."

With that Jobe went off to the route to the factory. While Roit and grubbs wait for the huge war that awaits them.

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Not the best quality but I put in a cliffhanger. What IS Jobe's plan to help get rid of the wolvarks?
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Most people don't like cliffies, but I don't mind 'em. This honestly felt like one of your weaker chapters, though. Were you rushed when you wrote this, or something? Because it certainly seems like you were for some reason. Oh well. Keep going at it.
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Yea I was kinda rushed. Sorry about that. Also sorry about not updating in a while. Ah the hell with it let's see what'll happen to Jobe. OH and Happy Crhistmas, Merry New Year!

ch.22: Chapter titles are for the weak....

As Jobe left the village he kept his eyes open. His nerves were at a high peak, and he was ready for anything. Of course he was kind of distatracted by the noisy bugs surrounding him. "Uh get away from me." Said Jobe annoyingly as he was swatting them away with his hands.

"Okay Roit said I should watch out for....A cave to my left...Man but all I see to my left for now are some weeds, and it's not ending as I look farther." Jobe sighed in annoyance. He never liked long trips that involved his legs. This was also the first time he was in a prairie like wildlife alone.

"Wait just a tic." Jobe thought to himself suddenly. "When was the last time I oiled my pants?" At that same time (well waddya know?) his pants started making strange sounds and such. "Uh!" Jobe grunted as he started hearing the annoying shrieks of dry metal. "This is definatly gonna blow my cover away....Hmm well the river I should see after turning right will do fine I guess."

Jobe started to feel nervous. "If I ever turn right. This weed patch seems to go on forever." Jobe heard some rustling and suddenly pulled out a crossbow made just for him. "Who's there? I have fuzzles and I ain't afraid to use em."

"Hehehe we got a new ugly face around here boys." Said a voice within the weed. Jobe saw a figure rise out of the plants, and saw something hideous. It was very very fat, it's lower jaw was way bigger than it's upper, and he sure ain't no wolavrk.

"What in the world are you? Some kind of fat wolvark but a lower class?" Said Jobe as he was staring at the...thing. "Well I should be asking the same question to you too boy!" Said the thing as a response. "We never had any slurg, fleech whatever your upper body is in messed up mechanical pants before!"

Jobe replied comediacly. "I'm a slig buddy." "A slig!? Hahahaha! Woo baby what a name! Oh man what the hells a slig!?" Jobe raised his crossbow in front of the creature. "Your worst nightmare."

Jobe fired 10 fuzzles at the outlaw and watched in joy as he squirmed. 5 minutes later the creature stood up, and was PISSED. "Listen here buddy! I am the most awesome outlaw there is in western mudos for a while now! And I am not getting beat up, by a green piece of cra[ in panties!" "Will people stop saying that about my pants already?..." Jobe thought to himself.

The thing (Do you want me to just call him an outlaw?) whistled at a high tone. Out of the weeds came other creatures just like him (Except less ugly). Some had dart guns, other had maces for hands, and others were snipers. "Okay boys! This thing pissed of Murkey majigal! Now it's time to have him pay the price!"

END OF CHAPTER MADE ON CHRISTMAS

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Nice-I loved the little insults that Jobe and.......whatever the heck that thing was threw at each other. I suppose you could just call him an outlaw, but did you ever think of a name for his species? Oh well, it really doesn't matter, I suppose. I'll be waiting for the next part.

Edit: And Happy Christmas.......late.......and Merry New Year to you, too!
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nice work... my dude..... that wasn't like me
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I'm not dead yet. I ain't dead yet oh no!

ch.23: Oookay.....

As Jobe saw the outlaws around him he git kinda annoyed. He withdrew his crossbow and said. "Look I don't have time for this. I only shot you because you seem to be with the wolvarks." The outlaw had a surprised expression on him. "The wolvarks? Does clean priviledged nice smelling bastards!?"

The outlaw laid his gun down. "We outlaws hate those guys! Why one day I met into one and-" A minion stopped him. "Okay Murkey not THAT story again!" "Oh yea...Hehe I almost went off rambling there again. Would have taken me forever to stop." Jobe rolled his eyes and mumbled annoyedly. "Well thats a relief..."

Murkey(I'll be naming the head outlaw that now.) suddenly had a confused look on his face. "Now why would you be attacking a wolvark anyway? Doesen't seem like they did anything to you." "Well actually they diden't. I'm just forced to so I can save my race.."

"Oh I see now. That grub chief forced ya to go after the wolvarks because they were attacking his land?" "Oh yea how did you know?" 'OH he always does that! Like one time-" A minion shouted again. "NOOOO! Stop!" "Oh yea hehe stupid me."

Murkey looked at Jobe then said. "Well if you are gonna go after those wolvarks thats fine with me. Oh and one more thing." Murkey took something out of his pocket and crushed it. All of a sudden the weeds and tall grass was gone and the cave Jobe had to reach was not to far.

"Yea we were using holograms to sneak up against traveling salesman and stuff. Ah outlaws gotta eat. Cause if they don't it's a bad thing. Like one time I-" Jobe suddenly rushed ahead. "Yea okay thanks bye!" "Oh! And just to let you know! Anyone who tried to destroy the wolvarks failed! Like one time-"

Jobe got out of Murkey's voice reach. For his sanities sake. He got to the cave and went to the right path he saw. He walked, and walked, and came into a river. He stopped there and cleansed his pants. He felt satisfied that they were working well again.

"Well that takes car of that little problem." As Job looked to his left he saw the wolvark factory. There were cranes working to make the factory more powerful. Gaurds from many directions slacking off or being alert. To Jobe's left he saw a big group of wolvarks leave the factory. Supposedly the army that is going to attack the grub village.

"Whoah that beach looks familiar." Jobe said as he looked at the wolvark docks. "It's giving me a strange D-day vibe. Eh its nothing I guess..." As Jobe walked torward the factory he thought. "I sure hope Roit and the grubs will do fine.....Besides that chief. He can die for all I care..."

END OF CHAPTER MADE BY GUY WHO HAS A BANNER NOW.

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