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04-17-2005, 12:59 PM
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Thanks!

Chapter 14 The tabels turn!

"Aggghhhhh more sligs!" Abe said as they were standing in Zualg 4. FART! Abe said and paramites and scrabs came and killed the sligs! But suddenly the tabels turned! The scrabs and paramites wen't after Abe and munch! THen they ran into a poop chute! "Hey i wonder why they call this a poop chute?" Abe said. Then he figured out why, After fuzzle, scrab, paramite and mudokon poo laned on his head! Then the poop chute opened! They started falling! But suddenly abe and munch were dangeling in thin air! "Huh? AGGHHHH!!" Munch said as he saw paramites puling them up to them with a web! "hmmmmmM!" Munch said and morphed into a paramite! Then climbed up the web. In paramite he said" Hey you don't wanna eat him! I know where a meat stack is! Come on!" Munch said and the paramites followed him. But he lead them into a recycler! THen Munch morphed back! Meanwhile.... SPLAT! POOP! Abe was getting filled with poo! But munch came and pulled him up! "Hey stinky!" Munch said laughing! "Grrrrr!" abe said and they rolled into a fight! They rolled into a lever! "Hey we just did Zualg 4!" Abe said. "Now to the final zualg!" Munch said and they ran off.

End of chapter 14

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04-17-2005, 01:25 PM
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That was awesome! It was funny when the poo landed on Abe's head LOL!
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Yeah, it was funny. But there's one thing that I could point out about the story-Munch turning into a Paramite. Now, I could imagine Abe turning into a Paramite (hey, he can turn into a shrykull. ), but not Munch. The only thing Munch can turn into is a steroid version of himself, pretty much. (Man, too bad that part was cut from the game. ) Other than that, it was a hilarious chapter! Keep it up!
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05-09-2005, 11:22 AM
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Thanks! And Odd chick that is right! Hmmmmmmmm........

Anywho, I am going to write the a chapter! Enjoy!

Chapter 15 The final Zualg

"well...... here we are." Abe said scracting his back and staring up at the zualg. "Let's do this!" Munch said and they went in. "Freeze!" "freeze!" "Freeze!" Loads of sligs shouted as they walked in. "Your trapped now!" Stenix said. Then a vyker came but tripped and a vyle spilled all over abe! "Aggghhhhh! Oh god no!" Abe said as he started spinning! Then he got up. "The matrix is something all around us." Abe said with sun glasses on! BLAM! The sligs shot at him but he did the matrix and dodged them! "Quite intresting." Abe said as he did kung foo on everyone and they died."DIE STENIX!" Abe said and shot him! He shived up but the blew up! "Well that's a bit of a sticky wiccet!" Munch said as blood and guts splaterd everwhere! "Whoo! He's dead!" Abe saaid. Whoom!Whoom! An alarm was going off! "There blowing up the factory, and were still inside!" Munch said as he pulled a lever to do Zualg 5! But then they ran out and all the zualgs blew up! "Come on hurry! Let's get out of here!" Abe said and they ran off.

End of Chapter 15

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That was amazing! Id, jigglyph, Guvj, i'm buying you, a pizza!
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He he, that chapter was funny! I could imagine Abe being in the Matrix-now THAT would be hilarious! Keep it up-it's a really comical story!
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Yeah, humor, is better. Great job!
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Thank you ,thank you all! *takes trophy*

Warning!!!! This is my final chapter!!

The Final Chapter The escape

Whoop!Whoop! "The alarm is going even louder!!" "I.....will.....KILL....yOU!" Stenix said and limped over to them and kicked a greanade but narroly missed Abe and Munch. But then there was a door! Ding dong! "Just a Minute!" Stenix said and opened it. "Here's Ya pizza!(Burp)" an drunk mudokon said. "I did not order any!" "Oh......Here's ya pizza's man!" "I am not a man I am a Glukkon!" (Spewing up)"Oh....Here'ss ya pizza's Glukkon!" "AGGAGAHAGAHGAG!" Stenix screamed! "Wait(hicup)...... You get a free squewaky toy!" Squeak! "I'll take the toy!" Stenix said, grabbed the toy and slammed the door. "O.k.... what just happoned?" Munch said to Abe. "A gient bolder squashed Stenix?" "Really?" "Yep!" Abe said and pointed at the squeshed glukkon! "Well.. that was stupid!" "Let's go!" Then they dodged rocks and other falling obstculs. "The entrance!" Abe said, picked up munch and ran through it! Then BOOm! CRASH! BANG! The factory explodded! "We did it!" "Yeah!"

THE END!

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05-10-2005, 03:06 PM
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It was pretty funny when Stenix got smashed by a bolder! I liked this story-if it wasn't humorous, then I don't know exactly how good it would've been, but the humor is what really made it fun to read!
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That was awesome! It was a great chapter plus a great stroy!
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