Under the moons -an Oddworld fan fic.-

[sliguy101]

Chapter 15-A painful death

As they walked along the factory, there was not a slig in sight. The whole factory had no sligs outside the office. Only mudokkons. Molluk had heard about what happened. Of course, he was angry, but then calmed down and then had some time to calm himself down. All of a sudden while Fren, Abe, and Munch saw a Shrykull portal with the number 9,000. "Aw, dangit!" Exclaimed Munch. "Freeze!" Yelled a slig. Fren, Abe, and Munch raised their hands up in the air. Molluk went towards them. "I've had just about enough of you two. Take them to the slicing room." Ordered Molluk. Guret took them to the slicing room. They saw a giant blade that was running very fast. Molluk and Guret was right behind them. "Any last words?" Asked Molluk. Abe started out. "I've had a heroic life. Very adventurous and fearful, but now it must end here. I shall go down in histroy after I die. I'll be known as 'Abe the mudokkon hero'." Said Abe. Munch then said his last words. "I started out as one out of lots of gabbits, but since all of them died exept me, I was the only one remaining. If it wern't for those Vykers, I would have never met Abe. I think he is a hero because he saved my life. So now all I have to say is goodbye cruel world." Said Munch. Fren went last. "I've had a normal life until I decided to be a hero. When I was about to go on a quest, Rupturefarms was re-birthed. That's when a saw Abe and Munch there, my two heros. That's when we joined forces and decided to shut this place down. Yet we end up here. I'll never forget this, the two moons up in the sky, and my two heros Abe and Munch." Said Fren. They were pushed in and then sliced up by the blade. Molluk and Gret laughed so hard.

Let me tell you something readers, this story will not end with a bad ending.
Once you see the next chapter, you shall understand why this isn't over 'till it's over.

[odd chick]

Wow...I don't know what to think about that chapter...It's good to know that this story is not going to end like that though. Anyway, that one was very well-written sliguy! Although I must say that I would like to think that Abe and Munch would panic a bit more if they thought that they were going to die. You saw how much they freaked out in all of the bad endings in the games, right? Anyway, it was just some constructive criticism- other than that good chapter, sliguy!

[sliguy101]

Chapter 16-Big Face comes to aid

After Fren, Abe, and Munch were chopped up, they were in a white place, like a dream. Big Face appeared. "Where are we?" Asked Fren. "In my home." Replied Big Face. "Why are we here?" Asked Abe. "I like what you're doing. You see, I'm like a god. I can revive people and come to their aid, but it will cost them." Replied Big Face. "I like what you three are doing, so I shall revive you three." "Alright, what's the task?" Asked Munch. "Just as ushual. Get through the two temples. One is the temple of scrabs. You'll be departing there first. One is the temple of paramites. You'll be there after you get though the scrab temple." Replied Big Face. "What shall happen when we get through the temples?" Asked Fren. "I shall bring you three back to the Shrykull portal and all 9,000 mudokkons will be there." Replied Big Face. "Big Face, you're the greatest." Said Abe. "Thanks." Said Big Face. "How will you get us to the scrab temple?" Asked Munch. "By bird portal. I'll make one." Replied Big Face. With the power of his hands he made a bird portal to the scrab temple just for them. Big Face chanted and the portal was opened. Fren, Abe, and Munch stood back, ran, and then leaped into the portal. They found themselfs in the scrab temple. "C'mon guys, let's go get our lives back." Said Fren. They all ran on to get back their lives.

[odd chick]

I just knew that it would end better than the chapter before even before you said it wouldn't end that way, sliguy! Nice chapter!!

[sliguy101]

Chapter 17-Scrab fight

They got deeper into the temple and found a heard of scrabs. Abe chanted, but then was shot by a floating security ball. Abe got back up. "Who puts these here?" Asked Abe. "Beats me." Replied Fren. They snuck over. The scrabs responded imediatly. Our heros ran for a good 6 minutes, then climbed over a ledge, and rested. "I don't like scrabs. Someone has to go down there and teach those scrabs a lesson." Said Fren. Munch pointed to Abe. Abe crossed his hands, made an angry face, and then went down. Abe found a rock in his pocket. When the scrab rushed at him, Abe threw the rock directly at his snout. The scrab howled. Abe realized the crab was now at his command. "You guys wait there." Said Abe. Abe went off with his scrab. He went to another heard. All the scrabs declared a fight. All the scrabs were spinning and spinning around and bitting eachother. Soon, all the heards of scrabs in the part of the temple were causing madness. Abe took a few steps back. There was lots of yelling going on. Blood and ashes of the dead scrabs came out. Abe couldn't tell which was his. The battle was soon over. His scrab was remaining. Abe could tell. He told his buddies to continue on. They went over. The scrab howled at them, but Abe told the scrab not to harm them. The all went out of the room and then went on.

Back at Rupturefarms...

Molluk and all the Magog Cartel began partying. Guret got a new job. Instead of hiring new sligs, they put cameras all over the place. He had to watch all of the T.Vs from that showed the camera's view. "The heros are now gone. All the glukkons and villians win!" Exclaimed Molluk. All of the mudokkons were sad that our heros died, but didn't know they were soon coming back.

[odd chick]

I really like how you wrote the Scrab fight because you described the process very well. I could actually picture that scene happening in my head! Molluck's partying, huh? He shouldn't count his chickens before it's all over! lol. Great chapter, sliguy! Your chapters just keep getting better and better!

Edit: Yay! Someone else is commenting on the story besides me!!!

[Angel-FoX-crescent]

Hmmm... pretty interesting indeed.

[sliguy101]

Chapter 18-Stories on the walls

As they went on, their scrab got killed because of another scrab. So Fren, Abe, and Munch just ran on to a well and jumped in it. When they came out the other well they saw strange markings on the walls. "Abe. What are these?" Asked Fren pointing to the markings. "These must be old stories of heros." Replied Abe. "Can you read them to us?" Asked Munch. "Sure." Replied Abe. He began to look at the markings closly.

"Once upon a time in Oddworld." Abe read. "A young mudokkon hero was enslaved by glukkons and sligs. The glukkons and sligs teased, tortured, and made fun of him. Finally, he couldn't stand it anymore. He was so angry, we actually gainned the power to chant. So the mudokkon stood up to the bad guys and zapped them with his chant. To show that he had the power, he made a mask out of some treewood and paint. To this day, he is known as a mudokkon healer. To some, he just might be known as an angel." "That must be the story of Big Face." Said Fren. "Must be. It shure looks like him on the wall." Replied Abe. "Read the next one." Ordered Fren. "Okay. Last one." Replied Abe. Abe once again studied the markings.

"There once was a small slig in the woods. He wasn't like all the other sligs, because he was nice. All the other sligs made fun of him and told him that soon, he was goanna have to get either pants of wings and then join the bad guys in their mudokkon killing spree. The slig didn't listen. So when he grew up, he got some pants, went into the factory, and killed all the sligs there. The slig was later killed. To this day, he was known as the only slig that was nice." He read. "Wow. The only slig that was nice." Said Munch. "Hard to believe, isn't it?" Asked Abe. "Sure is." Replied Fren. "C'mon, let's move on." Ordered Abe. So they walked on depper in the temple.

[Angel-FoX-crescent]

Aww cute about the nice slig I wish their was more of them as they could be quite cute if they wanted to be... instead of been dirt-bags.

[odd chick]

Yeah, I thought that was cute too....too bad he died. I liked that chapter, sliguy and I feel that this is going to be an extremely important part of the story, am I right?

[Angel-FoX-crescent]

Hmmm you could be odd chick but only time will what could happen...

[odd chick]

I hope I am! It would be really cool to have that play out as an important part!

[mimic12455]

A nice Slig... I wonder if bringing a slig to Bigface has something to do with the nice Slig...

[sliguy101]

Chapter 19-The statue

When they moved on they found themselfs lost in the temple. "This is just great." Said Fren. "Abe should know what to do." Said Munch. "Nope. I've never been in this temple." Replied Abe. They kept moving on deeper in the temple. After a while, they found a huge statue of a scrab. "Wow." Said Abe. "This is cool." Said Fren. They got closer to the statue. They spotted a story stone. "Read it Abe." Ordered Munch. Abe put his hand into the story stone. He read in his mind:

"This statue is a memory of all the scrabs that got killed because of the past Rupturefarms incident. We spirits hope that peace and harmony will be with the scrabs for many generations to come."

"Well their wrong at this time." Whispered Abe. "What did it say?" Asked Fren. "Nothing important." Replied Abe. "Let's continue on."

Back at Rupturefarms:

Molluk was still happy that Fren, Abe, and Munch were dead. All of a sudden, a slig came in. "Sir, all the scrabs escaped." Said the slig. "Impossible!" Exclaimed Molluk. "How could they ever escape this high security?" "I dunno boss. Some people say that they dissapeared." Replied the slig. "Foolish people. Scrabs just don't dissapear." Said Molluk. "It's a odd world, boss. Anything can happen." Replied the slig. The slig went out, and Molluk growled.

[odd chick]

Hmm...scrabs disappearing even after Abe, Munch and Fren are "dead"? That's interesting. Nice one, sliguy! Keep it up!

[sliguy101]

Chapter 20-Scrab doors

After a while, our heros found themselfs even more lost. "Why does this have to be such a big temple?" Asked Fren. "It must carry many scrabs. If we had small temples, scrab would be easy to capture." Replied Abe. "Yet Rupturefarms has many barrel loads of scrabs." Said Munch. "They must have come from the Stockyards and not from here." Replied Abe. "Must be because this is a secret place." Said Fren. They walked on until they saw a well. "Jump in here." Ordered Munch. They all jumped in. When they came out, they saw a big room with ten doors. "Aw man! I knew the other trail would be one of these!" Exclaimed Abe. "Look. A story stone." Pointed out Fren. Abe put his hand into it. It read:

"You are not yet done with your quest. You must beat these ten doors that lead to small areas of the temple. You must complete these areas by getting rid of all the enemies and then possesing a spirit. When you posses the spirit, guide it to the exit. You'll see that there is a big lock on the exit. You can un-posses the spirit, then it will explode, and finally the door will be unlocked. Once you've got all then doors beat, it will unlock an other door. Beware, this level is very hard to get through. Once you've beaten the final level, Big Face shall teleport you back into the dream world and then give you half your lives back."

"Okay people. First door." Said Abe. They all walked up to the first door, and then entered the first room.

[odd chick]

Ooh, our heroes have a tough road ahead! Good chapter, sliguy! I can't wait to see what happens next!

[Angel-FoX-crescent]

Wee more story goodness! ^-^

[sliguy101]

could people please comment this story more? They're important to me.
BTW next chapter should be here by tommorrow.

[T-nex]

ok. Umm.... I like the idea of this story, but it could be better if you took more time on describing the things. I'd also like if you were a bit slower on moving to the next event. Take your time. Other then that, yer story's great

[sliguy101]

Chapter 21-First door

When they went to the other side, they first saw two levers, one had an X by it, the other was by a lifting wall with fleeches behind it. "I have an idea. Fren, go to the level with the X by it, not don't stand on the X, I'll go near the other lever. Munch, you better stay back." Ordered Abe. They both did as he said. Abe pulled the lever, and ran. Fleeches were slowly running after him. Once Abe was at the end and the fleeches were near the X, he told Fren to pull the lever. He did, and the fleeches were crushed. "Moving on." Said Abe. They did as he said. When they took the next path, they saw the spirit. "Not just yet. The path is not yet cleared." Said Munch. They went on to the other path. They saw a scrab behind bars. "I'll try to posses it." Said Abe. So he tried, and did it. The scrab walked to the other path. He was still behind bars. So the scrab chanted, and was un-possesed. "We somehow have to get that scrab out." Said Fren. "If that scrab is out, we'll be his dinner if were not lucky." Replied Munch. "Let's just climb over the ledge then." Suggested Fren. So they did. The next path they saw a level. Abe pulled it, and the scrab was free. "Posses it Abe!" Ordered Munch. He did as Munch said. the scrab was possesed again. The possesed scrab went to the next path, and saw another scrab. They put up a small fight, and Abe's scrab won. On the next path, the possesed scrab saw a ledge he could not climb. So he possesed Abe back. "Once the scrab get's under us, we'll jump off this ledge, and run to the next one." Said Abe. So once that scrab got under them, they leaped out and ran as fast as they could with the scrab running after them. They climbed over the ledge. The last path showed the exit with a big lock on it. "Back to the spirit." Ordered Munch. They outran the scrab yet again, and went back to the spirit. Abe possesed it, guided the spirit up in the air where that scrab couldn't get them, and exploded the spirit right in the center of the lock. The lock fell off, and the door was opened. So then they outran the scrab AGAIN, and finally made it to the exit. "That made me tired." Said Munch. "You better get used to it." Replied Fren. They went through the exit.

[odd chick]

It seems like you planned out this chapter before writing it because everything was so detailed and descriptive-especially how they were outsmarting the fleeches and possessing scrabs. That was a great chapter-keep 'em coming!

[Angel-FoX-crescent]

Yahoo! Show us more! It's swayed! (cool) ^-^

[Alpha]

nice story.

[sliguy101]

News Flash:

This story might progress slowly. I have a life, ya know.

[odd chick]

That's fine. I can wait.

[sliguy101]

i just don't want this thread to die out if ya know what I mean.