Jonen’s Tale

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Jonen is from the Robiku family. I just thought that I would post this before I post the story so that you know what the hell I’m rambling on about I’ll post the first part later.

Robiku

The Robiku clan is a family of bird-like creatures that live in small tribes all around Oddworld. Although having the major appearance of birds (feathers, talons, beaks, etc), they are devoid of wings, during evolution, they found their wings to be useless for hunting land creatures (Use it or lose it). They are the next major enslavement project for the glukkons, having immense strength and possessing very determined personalities. Males usually stand about 7’ 5”, whilst females are about 7”. The average age for this species to live to is about 60 years.

Kupki

These wetland-dwelling cuties are closely related to fuzzles. They have a thick layer of black, luxurious fur (think chinchilla) and are therefore hunted for their pelts, which can be made into expensive clothes and stuff like that. Also helping to cut down their numbers are their teeth, young Kupki teeth are like ivory and are also worth a lot. They are very vicious and prefer to live in pairs, usually killing and eating any intruder that enters its well-protected territory. Kupki can live up to 20 years in the wild, but large numbers are kept in fur-farms, labs and as illegal pets, cutting down their life expectancy.

I can't write these description thingies.

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Go me. Here's the first chapter-thingy..

The summer night was beautiful. Fireflies were buzzing happily around the huts, my tribe members were happily eating in front of a large fire, Kupki were bouncing around happily and the smell of flowers and grass hung in the air. But something was disturbing it. Although nothing was visibly wrong, I could sense that there was something strange going on. I’m Jonen, leader of the Kire tribe. We live near the wetlands, but the sun was quickly zapping away the ‘wet’ part of it. The little Kupki had been edging towards the tribe for a while now, wanting to cool down in our water supply. Cute little things, but Odd, the amount of fur that they shed. There was a rustling in the bushes, but no wind to shake them. The four Kupki were still bouncing around, and the five (excluding me) tribe members were all away from the bushes. I was extremely tempted to go to the bushes, but when I was young I was told not to go near dark bushes because of scrabs and stuff. Looking around at my small tribe, I noticed something on Myka’s vertebrae. A tiny red dot was moving upwards, from an almost invisible laser beam. I realised where it was coming from, and what it was coming from…

[Abeguy]

A SLIG!!!!!


please, don't let me intrude

please continue

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Another chapter fresh from my strange mind:

I dived forwards towards Myka, trying to push her out of the way. Darts travel quicker than stocky Robiku, though. It hit her right in the back of her neck. She twisted around, trying to knock it out of her skin. The liquid gripped her body and she fell to the ground, motionless.
“Bingo!” Said a voice in the bushes. A slig jumped out. He grinned happily and let out a bark-like laugh. Three more sligs materialized from the undergrowth.
“Catch the cupcakes as well!”
“You mean Kupki?”
“Whatever. Just get ‘em!”
I shouted to my tribe, and ran like hell. I really didn’t want to leave my poor Myka behind, but I had to get the rest of my tribe to safety. I felt so bad listening to the sligs laugh gleefully as they got ready to take their bounty back to their boss. We ran for a while and realised that there were hundreds more of the mechanical-legged scumbags running around, so we decided to scale the treetops..

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[Abeguy]

It rocks!!!!!!!!!! now, anyone else have a idea?

[T-nex]

YIY! I only love good storys, and this is good story.

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I'm having connection problems with my computer, so I wont be posting in my story for a while.. Stupid NTL broadband.. *grumbles and walks off*

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Sorry for double posting. GAAAH! Now that I've fixed my stinkin' internet problem, Microsoft Word has stopped working, meaning more delays. I hate my stupid computer.