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10-28-2011, 02:08 AM
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Oddworld Halloween Experiment 2011

This is a little experiment for Oddworld Halloween.

The idea is, you take part in this little survey by picking various options and then I will write a narrative story involving every suggestion and choice you make. You're welcome to post ideas in here and then we can make a cool Halloween story.

http://www.surveymonkey.com/s/TP53FKN
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10-28-2011, 04:20 AM
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I did mine. It sounds really cool.
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10-28-2011, 07:51 AM
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I wonder how this year will turn out...
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10-28-2011, 08:40 AM
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This is an awesome idea! I already made my own wordy contribution. Best of luck.
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10-28-2011, 09:55 AM
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I done mah part.
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10-29-2011, 02:14 AM
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Thanks for the support fellas. The more people we get to take part, the better this will be. Try to direct your Oddworld friends here. Even if they don't normally take part in Fan Fiction

I'll most likely post the main story on 31st October Midnight (GMT+0), with more bits and pieces added for the next few days after that.
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10-29-2011, 03:05 AM
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Will do. I got 4 of my Oddworld friends to fill it out

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Will this be stat based like the previous ones or open RP?
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Tadaah!

Survey Complete!

Good luck with this year's Halloween RP.
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Open RP to an extent. I've got 18 submissions so far. Thank you everyone who took part. I'll write this up soonish

I'll upload the prologue in 8 hours followed by the full story in 8-11 hours.
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1. What weapons does everyone have?
Top 3 choices: Assault Rifle (22.2%), Blitzknife Katana (22.2%), Plasma Rifle (16.7%)

2. Who is the leader of the expedition?
Vauge, a Glukkon smoking a cigar and barking orders (33.3%)
Second-in-charge: Cedric, a Steef wielding a long spear (22.2%)

3. Where are the team?
In the middle of a busy city (38.9%)

4. The main monster has:
No mercy (55.6%)
Large fangs (44.4%)
Infra-red vision (44.4%)
Four arms (38.9%)
A mouth with moving mandibles (38.9%)

The smaller monster has:
Lots of tentacles (38.9%)
Lack of personal hygiene (33.3%)
Spiked weapons (27.8%)
A mouth inside it's mouth that eats brains (27.8%)
Multiple heads (22.2%)

5. One of the participants is taken by a monster and dies a horrible death. What happens to him?
Throughout the horrible night, these events happen (in no particular order)

- Flobberty is taken to the monster's "lair" where he is left for a certain time and then messily eaten by the monster. (Mmmm, tasty!)
- Krazz suddenly dissappears and the monster brutally mauls him with his spiked body and weapons. (Fatality!)
- Gregg gets slobbered on with the horrible breath, and then gets killed and stays with the monster for the years to come. (That sounds horrible! Poor guy!)
- Well first, Brek gets grabbed by the monsters tentacles, then the monster tries to kill the participant with it's bad breath, but the participant has a gas mask, but the monster hits the gas mask with it's tentacle and proceeds to kill the participant with it's lack of personal hygiene, low self esteem and bad breath! (And the moral of the story is, brush your teeth!)
- Dillon, a mudokon, the multiple heads rip him to pieces, and then devoured and eaten in a horrible death. (Smiley face? *shudder*)
- Zob Rombie just dies in a brilliant an excellent way but over all seven rules the kingdom beeyoch! mmmuuuuuuuuhhhhaaaaaa!! Seven is the mightiest number! and it slay the nine! (Yeah... seven!... (shrug))
- Paulie is slowly frozen by the monster's touch and then struck through the head by the mouth inside its mouth that eats brains. (A nice frosty treat!)
- The monster travels to Ripton (A big bro slig), swipes him into a wall and then crushes him with a spiked ball on its tail, then the monster consumes him. (Messy!)
- Earnie's body is vapourised and just his brain is left on the ground for the monster to eat. (Intelligent Food!)
- Zark gets mercilessly torn in half and the internal organs are used for a romantic dinner with the were-missus. (Wolf whistle)
- A mudokon slave, called Fred, is forced away under the gluk's orders, to act as bait while the sligs move out. There's a loud, hideous noise and a scream suddenly cut off. (I think the bait worked...)
- Lark gets dragged away and killed, then has eggs or something laid in the corpse which spawn more monsters. (Nest Bonus!)
- The monster simply drags Reg around with his tentacles for a while. Reg gets all bloody and gored up, but alive. When he tries to get away from the monster, thinking its occupied, it becomes enraged and rips him into 3 pieces in front of some of the other characters. (Three! It's the magic number!)
- Quentin falls down, deep down. He breaks spine but survives at first. The place fills with water/fluid, he has a communication device a few meters away but reaching it is almost impossible. later he finds out the batteries are empty and monster returns to finish his dirty work. (If only he had used duracell...)
- Near the midway point, Terry is skewered on the tongue of the mouth that eats brains, which will proceed to devour his brains first, then his body. (He got licked!)
- Aaron first becomes covered in herpe-like bumps all over his body before he begins spewing blood over a 3 day period in complete pain. His lumps then begin to start bursting out pus on the 3rd day and he becomes very cold and dies as pale as a ghost. (At least he got some exercise before he died!)
- Frinik the slig gets sucked up into an air vent. The air vent takes him close by the monster where he tries to run away. The monster grabs him with it's tentacles and then slams him against the wall several times. When the slig stops moving, he grabs the slig by it's head and drags it slowly into the monster's open mouth. (Painful!)

6. How do the team feel? (Using average values)
Very Scared (3.94)
Fairly/Average Excitement (2.56)
Fairly Optimistic (1.94)

7. Do you think anyone will survive? (1 = low, 10 = high) (Using average values)
Chances = 4.78 out of 10.0

8. Finally, if you want to write a short paragraph to go into the story, please write it here.

The multilayered city of Graloky runs just as you would expect anything by the Magog to run. The richest are at the top while the poor and unwanted rot at the bottom. The city itself is built upon a maze-like sewage system which is constantly pumped with all the pollution and chemicals created by the upper levels and was abandoned by industrial life years ago. That was until a train in the upper levels derailed, plummeting to the depths of the city. Straight through to the sewage system. (Sounds like a receipe for disaster!)

The team arrives at the outlaw camp to investigate a horrible mass killing. Outlaw bodies and chunks were everywhere, some horrible mangled tents were thrown everywhere. "Jeez, it's like a massacre" says one of the sligs. The bodies had rips and puncture marks all over, as if they were chewed.

The paranoia was the worst thing, everyone knowing they could be next. It was the fear, the dread, the dread that fills you up inside and doesn't go away, not ever, that made you suspect your brothers of anything, that made you care only for yourself. You expected treachery, because you knew your were capable of it yourself; you'd do anything to survive, and so would they.

There is something stirring in the city... Something big... And the inhabitants feel it's every move. Most have left, those left have become paranoid, boarded up their homes, and occasionally fire a shot through a wall. A team has been sent in, with an unfortunate glukkon taking the lead. But there's something else in the alleyways...

Only Vauge's booming orders kept any cohesion in the group; we were used to following orders. But we did so knowing that he, too, was worthy of suspicion; he, too, was scared, and he, too, cared only for his own survival. But there was more, he was scared too, but he didn't show it. The harsh stare, the cigar smoke... it could have been just a regular day for him, but it wasn't.

Vauge glared at his crew, chewing on a stubby cigar. The sligs stood barely at attention, the muds were whispering amongst themselves over the Steef guide who they'd hired and the Vykker Medic was sewing something together in his medical bag that was making an awful screeching noise. "HEY!" He barked, snapping everyone but the Steef to attention. "Wurr hurr tur git some new meat, kapeesh? Been hurrin' stories from the locals 'bout some big creatures round here. This is a Taste Test party. That means we watch each other's backs, even the muds."

Several explosions happen nearby as cars and gas tanks are destroyed by the monster in a fit of rage. It did nothing to make the group feel more at ease. It sounded as if it was moving closer, but they could not be sure.

The mudokons gave Vauge a bewildered look. "S'not our job to procure what or possibly who the holy hell this is, s'our job to kill it, clean it, cook it and eat it." He said, nodding at the sligs, vykker, muds and himself respectively. "S'cold out here, so keep close. No dumb questions to our Steef friend, either. He don't know what this is any mroe than we do, but we know that if catching one is easy we could make a lot of money. Well, some of us." He gave a nod to the muds. A slig stepped forward, wearing a bangle on his arm denoting rank. He coughed and wheezed some disgusting fluid and spat out a few cigarette butts lodged in his facetacles. "Awright! We 'ave sentry guns watching 'ome base. We gotta lure this ting nice n' close and he'll be taken apart real easy. Doc's makin' a lure right now." He said, illiciting another shriek from whatever was in the Doc's bag.

9. That's all. Thanks for taking part in my quiz!
You're welcome (56.3%)
No problem, anytime (43.8%)

Alright guys. Feel free to continue the story. It would be interesting to see what everyone posts.
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Awesome, hope someone does continue this story.
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Then the monster suddenly apologised for causing all the trouble, as it had been struggling to make ends meet recently and was unfairly lashing out. The mercenaries forgave him and they all went home for their tea.

The End.

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That ending is a lot better than the typical horror movie ending. +1!

Anyone else?
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