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OWF - The Untold Legend 3

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OWF - The Untold Legend

OWF - The Untold Legend 1.5

OWF - The Untold Legend 2

OMFG it's here! Yes, I know, it's waaaay behind what I said it be released on, but summer jobs have prevented me from getting to this. Ah well.

Anyway, this is most likely the last installment of Untold Legend, since it's become quite a hard time to sit down and punch out a chapter or two. Perhaps if I get an uncontrollable itch to start this again will #4 come out.

Whatever.

Now, before I begin this tale, here are the two ground rules.
  1. Please, consult me on anything that is related to this story. Be it fan art, alternate chapters, requests for my autograph, whatever. I'd hugely appreciate this, as I'm not really excited at this becoming a long-running fan fic, as they usually get taken advantage of by the less honest/coherent members looking to get quick fame. Any Untold Legend not written by me is not endorsed by me, unless I post otherwise.
  2. If you wish to send in plot ideas, or alternate chapters, do not post them here. PM or e-mail me, at xxmitsurxx@hotmail.com. I will most likely reply within two days, so don't be discouraged. All ideas are welcome!
And now, before you all e-attack me for not hurrying up, here's the start of Untold Legend 3!

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OWF - THE UNTOLD LEGEND 3

Prologue - It has to start somewhere...

Smack.

"Ow! Sun'bitch!"

Mitsur's eyes cracked open, music still blasting in his ears from his iPod. For a moment, he was disoriented. Then he realized he was leaning against the wall of the Simulation Room, and had apparently fallen asleep. As for who had hit him, well...

Nobody was there.

"What the hell?"

Mitsur glanced around, his cheek still stinging from the slap. He glanced down, turned off the iPod, and surveyed the room.

Emptiness. Just the hum of the machines and the occasional creak of metal. Nobody was in a simulator, nobody was in the room, period.

"Hello? Heeeellllllllooooo?"

Nobody replied. Mitsur shrugged, brushed himself off, and headed toward the door.

He reached the door, leaned toward the knob, but heard a noise behind him. He whirled.

A figure in black stood in front of him, the whole body cloaked in darkness. Only by the expansion on the chest could Mitsur tell it was a female.

"Who are you?"

No reply.

"Don't play dumb, babe. You're here for a reas-"

Mitsur was rudely interrupted as he was slapped for the second time, and in the same exact place.

"Yeow!"

Mitsur bent over from the pain, biting his tongue in the process. He quickly straightened up. The girl was gone.

"Bitch..." He muttered, and spat out blood. He opened the door, left, and walked out.

No one was in the hall, either.

"Where the hell is everyone?" Mitsur said to nobody in particular. Then he realized.

"Somehow, I've become the last man on Earth!"

Mitsur flung his arms out magnificently.

"A crushing burden to repopulate the Earth with the last woman on Earth is now placed on my shoulders!"

Mitsur paused, considering the possible significance of who the last woman on Earth would be, and, how he would find her.

A door slammed open at the end of the hall, and Rexy, yawning and in pajamas, strode out, and stretched.

Mitsur paused.

Silence in the hall.

"Rexy!" Mitsur yelled out from the other side of the hall. Rexy started, but calmed. She turned.

"Eh?"

"Wanna hear something cool?"

"Meh. Sure."

"Remember that bet you made about not going out with me even if I was the last guy on Earth?"

"Yea."

"Well, I think I'm the last guy on Earth now."

"..."

"What?"

"....Nothing."

"Sooooooo." Mitsur yawned out. He fiddled idly with the ear piece of his iPod.

"..."

"Now what?"

"I dunno. I'm going back to bed."

"That's cool. Maybe later, then."

"Yeah, suuuuure."

Rexy went back inside her room. Mitsur shrugged, and headed down the hall, toward the cafeteria. He trotted down the hall, reached the main entrance, and noticed decorations were strewn everywhere. One of the signs was laying in a head, covered in paper dollies cut into the shape of a DNA strand. Mitsur walked over, brushed off the paper, and lifted the sign up into some light.

CONGRATULATIONS ON SEQUENCING THE DNA OF A ZOMBIE, BULLET MAGNET! JUST DON'T FREAKIN' LET IT GET FREE!

"Wow, that's a pretty retarded reason to throw a party," Mitsur said out loud. "I wonder why nobody else is partying, though?" He tossed the sign aside, and continued onward toward the cafeteria.

Completely disregarding the hand stretching out from underneath the paper, still flexing toward him with a horrible animal energy.

***

Mitsur opened the cafeteria, and stopped. The cafeteria was smeared with blood and small intestines, with various bodies lying around.

"Freakin' vandals. Covering the cafeteria with ketchup and macaroni. And the stupid mannequins look retarded. They could at least be bothered to buy high-detailed dummies."

He approached the serve-yourself island, put on some food onto a plate he had picked-up from a nearby table, and approached the bar. He took a seat, and grabbed a fork from the other side of the bar.

Calmly, he began to eat, oblivious to the death around him. Groans began to drift up from outside the door.

"Ooo, must be my stomach working up again,"

Mitsur finished up eating, and wiped his mouth as the moans intensified.

"Well, this looks like it'll be a boring day," he said to himself as the door crumpled inward and zombified OWF members slouched into the cafeteria.

Mitsur stood, stretched and yawned, and casually walked out of the room, pushing aside and sometimes shaking off the zombies that lunged at him.

He jogged down the corridor, reached the Infinite Hall, and stopped and Rexy's door. He lifted a fist, and before he could bang on the door, it opened and he was pulled inside and thrown on the bed.

"Whoa, don't get excited that fast," Mitsur said, a smile forming on his lips.

"Shut up, you idiot," Rexy said, slamming the door in a zombie's face. "Haven't you noticed the zombies outside?"

"What zombies?"

Rexy sighed.

"Never mind. Just stay in here. I'll be right back."

She opened the door, bashed in zombified Cullen's head, and slammed the door behind her.

An uncomfortable silence filled the room. Mitsur shifted, a bit nervous. He stood up, moved to Rexy's makeup dresser, and idly went through all the female cosmetic products. A glass vial broke, and Mitsur cursed just as the door opened. He quickly jumped to the side, holding the broken vial behind his back and whistling innocently.

"What'd you do this time?" Rexy asked suspiciously.

"Oh, nothing...except I broke a makeup vial."

"Good, because then I won't feel guilty about doing this."

"About doing what?" Mitsur asked confusedly as Rexy strode up, grabbed him by the back of his jeans, and threw him out into the zombie mass.

Rexy closed the door, jumped back onto her bed, and drifted off to Mitsur's horrible screams of agony, smiling.

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06-03-2007, 11:10 PM
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Yay! I love your writing, Mitsur.
So far it sounds great, but that's probably because I'm obsessed with zombies.
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I knew a mention of me was coming as soon as I saw the letters D, N and A.

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06-04-2007, 05:56 AM
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YES! The waiting paid off! Now you've got me curious as to who the mysterious woman is, though.
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06-04-2007, 07:41 AM
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Finally! I love it how you made Rexy all violent like that.
Weird storyline though... Can't wait for more, are members gonna be mentioned like in 1 and 2?
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06-04-2007, 07:52 AM
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Hurray! The epic story is back! Can't wait for more
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Side thought!

Are you going to include the returnees that seem to be coming back rather rapidly?
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Edit:
Meh, nevermind.
I did have something that may have contributed to the thread, but then I realised it could make Mitsur's work harder, which is something I don't wanna do.

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Very interesting start to the story Mitsur! I'd like to read more...
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06-04-2007, 12:04 PM
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Awesome. Mitsur's total obliviousness to the impending disaster and the scene where he tells Rexy he's the last man on Earth is great! Good to see this back at last! (And if you don't write any mroe after this I might be able to regain my title of OWF's best author! MWAHAHAHAHAHAHA! ) (Oh, and feel free to make somwthing of that. I can see lots of James Bond villain style assassination attempts approaching...)




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Haha, that's awesome. :P Made me laugh so much. *Feels violent and powerful and all that*

But still... Not even if you were the last man on earth.

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Computer privleges have been taken away for a bit, due to over-sleeping when supposed to be working.

No Untold Legend for awhile, with some bad luck.

Sorry.
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*snaps fingers* Drats.
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But... But... ZombieSplat?
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This is your fault, Arxryl!
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How did you know- I mean, I didn't put sleeping pills in Mitsur's Moca!
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I think OWF should add "Zombie Cluster Fuck" onto the state of emergency list, right after "Newbie Trollers" and before "OANST in a bad mood."
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The only things that should come before 'OANST in a bad mood' are 'Hobo in a bad mood' and 'OANST in a good mood'.
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Whoa, I come back to ZombieSplat? Interesting.

Expect chapter one soon.
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Whoa, I come back to ZombieSplat.
Well, you're in Zombi Siege. Anyway, great chapter! I knew you wouldn't resist adding zombies to the plot.

Dude, get on MSN and contact me, we need to talk and it's VERY urgent.
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Sorry to say this, but it looks like Untold Legend will be put on hold indefinetely. My heart just isn't in it.

/sob

I'm doing this so you guys won't have to keep waiting for things I won't be on deadline for.
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First summer job?

lol.

I'm working at Gelsons. I GET FREE FOOD!
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Ho,hum. Oh well. If your heart isn't in something, it's not worth pursuing at the moment.
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NOOOO! I need this story! I want to see Rexy explode with anger! I want to see Havoc horribly embarrassed in front of the whole forums! I want to see Splat come after Mitsur with oversized lazers, cobras, rocket exhausts, beautiful athletic female assassins, nine-foot-tall men with metal teeth! Alcar's bling, the Infinite Corridor, the 1000 posts or more bar, the Desert of Ignorance!
I'd wait two months for every post and be happy rather than know it's never coming!
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That was me trying to entice Mitsur into not giving up on us.
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Hmm, disappointing. I get my PC back, see this thread, start rejoicing, then have my hopes curshed. Bravo mitsur, you played to every emotion, but unfortunately that included disappointment.
It was an unusual plot, this one, and I was interested to see where it was going. Still, if you can't bring yourself to do another, then nevermind
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