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'Worst Case Scenario'

My first fan fic. I hope its good!! Im really nervous too. ok. here goes. This is the boring chapter. Itll get better i assure you.
Chapter 1

Mervick the slig was sitting at his post, a filthy, oily, humid corner of Rupturefarms. He was watching some of the Mudokon workers scrubbing away the blood from previously executed Mudokons that had collapsed on the job from exhaustion.

It happened every day. He'd be watching the Muds pull the levers back and forth and back and forth, until they couldn't keep up with the demand anymore. It was his job to dispose of them and keep them in line. At first it amused him to see the brains, and the guts, and the blood splatter against the wall and the floor. Now he saw it every day, and it had started to make him sick.

Right now he had to watch these slaves for hours and hours and hours, like he did every day of his existence. It got extremely tiresome. He saw another slig coming down the catwalk. Finally, his replacement for the next 7 hours. "Hey Mervick, Molluk says you can go back to your quarters until your next shift." "Alright. See you later Norak."

It was a long trek back to his quarters. Once he got there he took off his pants and got in his sleepingbag. When it was time for his next shift, a Big Brother slig came to wake him up. He hated being woken up by them. They just barged in and didnt even care to knock. He could tell it was going to be a bad day. He already had a splitting haedache. He met Norak on his way back to his post. "Have fun, they're wily today," Norak said. "Great. Just what I need"
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that's quite interesting...
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That's actually rather good. I'd like to see more.
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thanks for the good comments! i know the chapters are short and that chapter was boring, but itll get better. im working on the next chapter right now.
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Yeah, i'm looking forward to see the next chapter!
But the first was good too!

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Hi
Yeah!!I´m really curious about that too!
I like it to see other fanfic.

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well i know this has been buried for a while but i think ill start it up again fer the fans! now lets see.... where did we leave off? oh yes!

Chapter 2
Mervick got back to his post. The mudokons working there were angry with each other. Mervick wasnt in a particularly good mood today. he didnt feel like his normal sombre self. This arguing between the Muds wasnt going to bring any moolah if it kept up. "FREEZE!", Mervick screamed. "Stop arguing and get back to work ODD damnit!" "But he ain't doin' his job!", the mud explained. "SHUT UP!" "But!" "THATS IT!" Mervick shot the Mud without a second thought. He ordered the others to take the dead Mudokon away and clean up the bloddy mess. But, to his surprise, they wouldn't. They became depressed and wouldn't do anything but mourn. "DO IT YOU GREEN BASTARDS!". It was no use shouting. They weren't listening. They just sat there, useless. Mervick became terrifyingly impatient. This had pushed Mervick beyond his mental limit. Violent images passed through his head. He couldn't shake them even thoguh he wanted to. He went to his Glukkon superior to request more Muds. Mervick didnt usually go through more than one Mudokon per day. The Gluk could tell something was wrong, but he couldn't put his finger on it. Still seeing aggrivated images, Mervick was outwardly dangerous. When he got back to that cursed, filthy corner of the meat factory, he ordered the Muds to clean up the crimson liquid that once gave life to now lifeless corpses. These workers were nervous around Mervick, because they could tell he was aggrivated. This was going to be a long shift for Mervick, and even longer for the poor creatures that were under his orders.

Well end of chapter! i really hope you liked it! i would appreciate feedback. (honest feedback ) i dug that up and decided to post it so ill start working on the third chapter and i hope to have it done within a better amount of time than this one!
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Hey look! it didnt take me months this time! *grins* i hope this one is good too!

Chapter 3
It was the end of the shift. The Muds (by pure luck) were still alive. Mervick had changed considerably. He knew it. Anyone who knew him knew it. No-one pushed him around. Not even the Big-Bro's who used to constantly annoy him because he was so much smaller than they were. Well, Mervick didn't feel small now. He felt powerful. Respected. Even though that "respect" came from fear. The Glukkons were worried about his change. They thought he wouldn't make a good worker anymore. He was brought (by much force) to his superior's office. "It's about your temper Mervick," the Gluk started. "this new "flare" of yours has gotten in the way of our production. Over the past few days you killed so many slaves that it cost us Moolah!! You're fired Mervick!" The Glukkon nodded to a BBS in the corner. He was hesitant at first, having heard of Mervick's new demeanor. After a few seconds though, he grabbed him by the wrists. It was apparent what this meant. Mervick was going to be executed. He struggled, but it was painfully obvious that the Big Bro was much stronger than him. When they reached the Execution Room, Mervick was thrown under the spinning balde of a meat grinder. Just as it was about to force itself down on his faceplate, Mervcik rolled. He got up and grabbed the BBS's baton. He struck him on the back just in time to see Big Brother flesh fly every which way. Still carrying the Baton, he made his way to a Weaoons Locker. When he arrived, he grabbed the first rifle he saw. He began to think about the escape route he planned some time ago. "It's about time I got out of this hell-hole".

End of chapter. Chapter 4 coming soon!
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you know.... you guys can respond anytime now.

Chapter 4
He had made it through his escape route without any problems so far. He was walking slowly so no-one could hear him. This was a dark part of the factory. There was only one light in the entire corridor so far. He inched his way through the corridor. He though he heard footsteps ahead but he wasn't sure. He was afraid that they were searching for him. There were speakers every few feet. Suddenly, a booming voice came over the intercom. "Attention all Sligs! We have a Worst case Scenario on the loose! There are search parties throughout the factory! Be on the lookout for Mervick the Slig!" Mervick thought about the words. He thought he had heard of a 'Worst case Scenario before, but he couldn't confirm it. He kept moving. He was positive now that there were footsteps coming from ahead. There was a corner in front of him. He got up against the wall and stayed quiet. Maybe it might be dim enough for the stranger to pass by him. When the owner of the footsteps rounded the corner, he learned it was none other than his good buddy Norak. Mervick's buddy saw him but didn't say anything. They stared at each other. Norak seemed wide-eyed and frightened. Without warning, he bolted back down the way he came. Mervick tried to pursue him, but by the time he rounded the corner, Norak was gone. "What in Odd's name?" Mervick thought. "I thought this corridor was much longer than that." He shrugged off the thought, thinking he was wrong, and kept following. After a while, he noticed that there had been no sign of Norak coming this way in the first place. No foot-prnts in the dust, no nothing. Even some of the Muds that were cleaning hadn't seen him. Mervick decided that he couldnt chase Norak forever. He continued on his original escape route. If you're going to get out of a huge mechanical factory with bounty-hunters chasing you, then you'd best do it right.

Thats the end of chapter four. Like i said before, you guys can post what you think about it anytime now.
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wow, thats a really good concept! I like the way that you really put the reader in Mervicks's head. Maybe you could write another chapter? Ill help ya if ya need any.
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A REPLY!!!!! Sure Matt...err...Sal. I'll be happy to co-write with ya. And thanks fer the compliment. I was wondering if this thing would ever pick up speed again...
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Thats really good. Just the kind of stories i like. Keep it up, buddy.

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Another reply!! HA! And I thought no-one read this. Thanks fer the compliment, Silversnow!
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OK people. Here is Chapter 5 for those of ya who still read it.

Chapter 5
Mervick had been walking for several hours now. He felt mentally exhausted at how intricate this route was. Tiny corridors, cramped air vents, nearly impossible security voice locks. Mervick was facing insurmountable odds, and didn’t know if he could win this gambit much longer. The thought of a ’Worst Case Scenario’ was still running through his head. Glukkons often train young Sligs. Mervick ran over all the training in his mind. The answer had to be somewhere. Back to ’The Mission’, as he called it. He was in a large room, with many machines that processed the meat from the production line. This part of the factory was nearly un-inhabited- except for a few maintenance Sligs- because all of the machinery was automated. This was probably the most dangerous part of the whole route. This machinery was dangerous. Mainly because mechanical arms swung low, grabbing for large boxes of Scrab cakes. Mervick had to duck often, and be very careful. This was a large room, and might take at least 45 minutes to get through. Past this room, and through a few more passageways, was the Mess Hall. In the Mess Hall, he was most likely to be caught. IF you are inside Rupture Farms all of your life, it’s hard to tell what time of day it is. Mervick would have to rely on luck, hoping no-one was eating when he managed to get there. He corrected himself; if managed to get there. He was about 1/3 of his way through the room, when he started hearing voices. He stopped, and sat silent for a few minutes. The voices seemed to move off to the left, so he continued on. What he didn’t know, was that it was a search party circling around the room. Now he heard voices approaching from behind, and to the right. He was almost surrounded. The only direction he had left to go, was the front. Mervick was paying to much attention to voices around him to notice the large mechanical arm swinging at him from the front.

That's the end. Sorry the Chapters are so short. Chapter 6 coming soon. (I will make an effort to write at least one chapter per day.)
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YER story is great Joe.........

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Well, for you few and dedicated fans, here's chapter 6!

Chapter 6
The arm from the machinery hit his mechanical pants just above the knee. He was thrown backwards almost three feet before he landed on his back. The arm had severed the legs completely, leaving only mechanical stubs. Without his pants, Mervick was forced to crawl on his hand-feet. The voices he had heard earlier were very close now. There was definitely no way to run, so he had to find somewhere to hide. There was a machine with a conveyor belt, and a side wall next to it. It was dark, so he figured the search parties might not see him and go right past into the next room.
He hid there, for about 10 minutes, until he was confident the voices were gone. He got back up on his hand-feet, and continued crawling. His progress was noticeably slowed without his pants. He would have to find a locker sometime later and get a new pair.
After almost 6 exhausting hours, he was at the Main Exit. It was a large steel gate-like contraption, with huge steel hinges and enormous rivets. There was one voice-lock to get past. He repeated the series of phrases, and let the door open. The search parties had to be far past the Mess Hall by now. When the door opened, he saw hundreds of rows of tables, all lined up neatly, but the tables themselves were hardly neat at all. Piles of meat, some at least a week old. The combined smell of every table in the room was overpowering,, and almost enough to make even the toughest Slig vomit. At least fifty yards away, he could see the Kitchen. The sound of steam and sizzling grease from food being prepared for yet another meal. The scrubs could be seen sweeping the floor and mopping up blood from dead Elum, Paramite, and Scrab. The cook scrubs were running around, yelling for more meat and extra pots. While all this was happening,, Mervick was un-noticed, slipping quietly and stealthily to and from the tables.
Mervick was trying to keep down the puke from the smell of two-week old Paramite intestine, when a scrub shouted acknoledgement of a pants-less Slig behind a table. “Uh, sir? What are you doing behind that table, with yer pants off?” the scrub asked. Mervick tried to think of something to say, and all he came up with was: “Get back to work, stupid!” The scrub did so with a look of bewilderment, and started whispering to another scrub.

The phone rang in the Glukkon Junior Executive’s office. A small Slig answered. “Sir, the Mess Hall wants you on the phone. The Slig held the phone to the Glukk’s ear while he talked. Then the Conversation was over, and the Secretary Slig hung the phone up. “Well I’ll be Odd damned,” said the Glukk. “What is it, sir?” The Glukk responded, “They think they’ve spotted the ‘Worst Case Scenario down in the Mess Hall. Get some Big Bros down there immediately!” The Slig followed orders, and called the Security detail closest to the Mess Hall.

Mervick thought he was in the clear, when three Big Bros stomped in the door to the Mess Hall.
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Joe the Inturn,This chapter was GREAT......Very epic

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Great story so far its nice to hear a story about Rupture Farms very cool.

ALso check out My New Fan Fic.

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This chapter is short, but it will have to do.

Chapter 7
Scrambling from table to table, Mervick was in one hell of a crisis. No pants, no gun (since he had to crawl on his hand-feet), and no good place to hide. The floor rumbled under the combined steps of the three behemoths. There wasn’t much Mervick could do but run. So, he ran. He ran like a bat out of Hell. The intense adrenaline and stench of the room made him throw up at least twice. The security team came up next to and behind Mervick, so as to flank him. When he was finally surrounded, he would have to take a stand somehow. It wasn’t going to end that easily. He had come too far to be caught like a Fuzzle in a trap. To his horror, a Big Bro picked him up by the end of his tail and held him, dangling in mid-air. He couldn't think of anything else to do, so he punched the Big Bro in the face tentacles. The giant recoiled, holding his tentacles, and dropping Mervick. Mervick fell to the floor with a thud, and was out like a light.

Mervick awoke to find himself hand-cuffed, and being dragged by his tail. They were headed for the brig. If the Big Bro’s grip wasn’t so strong, then maybe he could get away. Mervick saw the Baton on the BBS’s back, and got an idea.

“Hey, Big Boy! Turn around!”
“Huh? What the-”
W HACK! Mervick hit the BBS with his baton so hard, that he got a concussion. The Big Bro slumped over (his four-legged pants kept him from falling over).
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This tory keeps getting better and better. Keep it up Joe! Note I am almost finished with chapter 2 of my story and it will be posted soon.
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Just read the story, its great, I usually like reading from sligs and other industrial creatures point of veiw
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Wow morgan! yer getting good! We have similar writing styles,but your story line has MUCH MORE action! Keep up the good work buddy! Sorry about Whipper. Write more.
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Thanks for the compliments guys. And Matt, thanks for the consolation on my dog. I will miss him.
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Warning: this chapter may be a little gory.

Chapter 8
It must’ve been close to 14 days since he had started his escape from Rupture Farms. The incident in the cafeteria was almost 4 days ago. Since then, he had found a locker and gotten a new pair of pants, and a new gun. It was hard to find safe places to sleep. Sometimes, he had to sleep for an hour or two, and then keep going until he could sleep a little later. He was sleeping now, and he had been sleeping for about 30 minutes. He was just going into REM, the state of sleep where dreams occur. He was dreaming now, and his dreams weren’t peaceful, to say the least. It was a bloody dream. Things like how Scrabs and Paramites were killed to make treats. Sedated Scrabs being sliced open by knives, and Intestines spilling out onto the floor. Paramites under Meat Grinders, with skin and flesh flying everywhere. Blood in large pools ending up on the floors of Butchering rooms. It wasn’t something that you could forget as soon as you woke up, either. This dream would stay with Mervick for days, maybe weeks. These, an many other images flashed through his mind. They were so horrifying, that his eyelids hammered open with a clicking sound. His breathing fast, his heart pumping, and his mind racing, he shook off the dream (for the time being) , with an effort, and went back to sleep. He wasn’t going to forget this dream, not yet.
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WOW! another great chapter, Morgan. your getting a lot better! good luck on the next chapter, hehe!
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Okay, here is the next chapter. Most of the credit for this chapter goes to Sal the Mudokon... who wrote it in 10 minutes.

Chapter 9
Mervick was thinking about the dream he had yesterday. It made him shudder. It was the most gruesome dream he had ever had. Up ahead, he heard screams. Not those of a tortured Scrub, but of something like a wild animal. It was almost a banshee scream, full of horror, helplessness, and despair. Mervick was bewildered. Had he already gotten to the butchering room? He continued and heard another Slig voice. It was giving orders. As Mervick progressed, he could make out what it was saying. Not only was there a Slig, but it sounded like there was a Scrub, too.
“I don’t want to do it! I can’t stand watching anything else die!” said the Scrub.
“I don’t care, you little wussy! Pull the damned lever!” demanded the Slig.
The Scrub started to get angry. “No! This Scrab never did anything to hurt me, or you!”
This was said, as Mervick rounded a corner into the room. He was just in time to see the Slig raise his gun to the Scrub’s head. Mervick couldn’t take it. “Hold it, buddy.” There was another gun raised, now. This one was pointed at the Butcher Slig’s head. The Butcher Slig trembled, and pivoted to fire on Mervick. There was a flurry of fire, and one Slig fell to the floor.
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Hey, that's just cool. Great story. *reads it again* Hmm... Interesting...

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01-06-2002, 11:50 AM
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Gluk Schmuck
Not living with Max any more
 
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If you don't have the next chapter up by tomorrow, I will have to torture you until I find out who fell to the floor.

Aha! Now I know why I stopped reading after the first chapter, you abandoned the fic for several months! So you can't blame me!

mitsur, this doesn't belong in the Oddworld RPG, so why should he put it in there?
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