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The Chronicles of The Runeblade

Hello, I’ve been working on this for a while. This is one of my first fan fictions, so input is also welcomed. If you would like to know Jakob's profile, please go here and scroll down to my post with Jakob's profile. Thank you, and please enjoy:


The Chronicles Of The Rune blade




They say that whenever a mudokon dies, a tiny part of nature dies with them. This saying is connected by the belief that mudokons are so tuned to nature they are actually nature itself at times. Jakob had heard this time and time again, yet he had never understood it, until ten years after that terrible, terrible day the Industrialists had killed Tree-talker and his family. He had been walking through the lush forest of pines, oaks, and evergreens that seemed to mock him with their apparent abundance of life. The forest suddenly stopped in a clearing. All around it, in a circle that extended about a mile in every direction, the trees were dead, the bushes non-existent. In the middle of the clearing were the remains a wooden hut, its various timbers worn and rotted from the weather and bugs.

Jakob slowly approached the hut, tears gleaming in his eyes. In his hand trembled a handful of Woldermons, flowers he had picked to lie on Tree-Talker's, his father's, and his mother's graves. He acutely became aware of how foolish he would look to an outside observer, but pushed on nonetheless. He knelt at a single stone, which crudely read:

TREE-TALKER (733-821 D.O.)
RAYNON TOMAHAWK (782-821 D.O.)
MARIKO TOMAHAWK (784-821 D.O.)


Jakob slowly put the flowers on the graves, remembering the final moments...

"Get up, you good for nothing slacker!" A slig screamed in his face. Jakob was hauled roughly to his feet between two of the group. Cruelly, another slig, obviously the leader, stood over the prostrate form of his father, who was sound asleep in his bed from the wounds. It was incredible he had not woken up, but it was a blessing so he would not feel what was to come. The slig slowly bent down, his knife gleaming like his eyes as he rested Death on the mudokon's slim throat. Jakob incredibly burst forward, screaming. "NO! DON'T YOU DARE TOUCH HIM!" Too late, the slig looked up in surprise, and slit the throat in a moment. Jakob gave another scream. The next moments were a blur, but all too clearly he was kneeling next to his father. Tree-talker's corpse lay only inches away. He had already passed on from the strain.

"Jaaakob...Jakob, listen to me..." His father spluttered out between bloody lips. Blood bubbled out from his throat. The only reason he was alive was because the slig had been to surprised to properly slit the throat. Jakob, sobbing, leaned over, and his father whispered the location of a mystical weapon into his ear, telling him about his true origins...

...Sobbing as Death stole over the last of his family...
...Tearing himself away, and disappearing into the forest, barely aware of who he was and where he was...


Jakob's long and lonely memories were cut short by a movement in the brush to his left. Whirling, he looked over. Out of nowhere an Industrialist grenade exploded, knocking down a tree as the shrapnel pounded into the ground. Jakob, in a flash, drew his Rune blade, the letters on its side coolly pulsing blue. A small, diminutive head poked out of the vegetation, and called out in a wheezing voice, not unlike a slig's. It was to far away to make out the features clearly.

"Freeze, dirt bag! I've got a whole squad's worth of guns on you, and the only reason you aren't in a heap is my order. Give us your possessions and I’ll consider letting you go!"

Jakob roared in defiance, and charged forward, swinging his blade in a deadly circle as bullets exploded from everywhere. The runes glowed in a hypnotic light, as it's owner moved in what seemed to be fast forward. The agile mudokon jumped, dodged, and lunged in every way, making him an almost impossible target. Stray bullets managed to hit his enormous sword, only to deflect off of it like rubber and bounch into the dead brush. Jakob jumped higher than what one could think possible, and slammed his blade just short of the tree line. A massive, blue shockwave rippled out it waves in all directions, pushing loose objects into the sky, and almost knocking over numerous trees. The bush in front of his would-be attacker was blown backward, hitting it right in the face, and propelling it backwards. Jakob dashed forward, and approached it.

"Please, don't hurt me!" The puny figure squealed as Jakob got closer. Jakob looked at it shock. He grabbed the Steef by the cuff of its shirt, and pushed it against the tree until they were at head height. The steef all but looked at Jakob's eyes, looking pathetic as it glanced around. Jakob let a moment of pity touch him as he looked at the small figure. It had torn, dirty clothes, which looked like rags on such a small frame. Dirty brown eyes dominated most of the face, and a broken horn contrasted with the oddly neat hair. The creature saw the pity, however, and took the moment to extend a hidden knife and stab Jakob's hand. Jakob yelled in pain as he dropped it. The steef kicked him twice, and hard in the shins, making him fall. In a flash, the steef had him pinned on the ground, with a knife against Jakob's throat. Jakob was now at the mercy of an individual almost a third smaller than himself.


So, what did you guys think? Post suggestions and comments below. A bit much for an opening, but I'm planning to post more when time allows! Expect new chapters at least once a week! Oh, and in case you're wondering, DO stands for During Odd.
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02-03-2006, 01:40 AM
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It's certainly got a dark twist to it at the moment; but it's very good. I'm liking the idea of a meeting between A Mudokan and a Steef; although wouldn't an average Steef be much bigger than a Mudokan? Then again maybe you've intentionally made this Steef small.

Also, I like the sound of this Runeblade sword; sounds like a pretty mean-ass weapon - no one would wanna pick on Jakob if they knew what was good for them!!

Keep up the good work; it's nice and neat too, nice use of italics and all that jazz. Very well presented is what I'm saying, as well as a good story
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Very nice, very nice. Quite a good work you have made. It has a nice nature blend feel to it in the beginning, your interrpretation of the action is good too.
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The Chronicles of The Rune Blade Chapter II

Jakob lay on the ground, thoughts whirling through his head. Who was this Steef? Why did he want Jakob dead? Was he a roadside robber? The thoughts pinged worthlessly off the side of his skull as he looked into the Steef's murderous stare.

"Okay, mister. Since you put up some resistance, I’m afraid I’m going to have to make this...painful." The macho words sounded and looked ridiculous from some such a small person and a high, squeaky voice. It contrasted greatly with the rough, raspy, and nasal voice of the slig Jakob had heard earlier. But still, there was a knife right up against his mouth. Slowly, Jakob looked carefully to his left, and saw his Rune blade lying on the ground. The Steef had incredibly ignored it.

Jakob licked his lips. He had only one chance. Carefully looking over the Steef's shoulder, he let a glint of recognition show in his face, and then just as carefully made it look like he hid it in his face. He then looked back at the Steef, and saw that it had seen his bluff, and believed it. Using the voice one would use when distracting someone, Jakob spoke, slowly and carefully.

"Ok, Ok. I'll give you everything I have. Just, please, don't hurt me. I'm sorry about what I did, and-" At this, he gave a slight nod, and the Steef whirled around, knife still at Jakob's throat. Quickly, he pushed it off-balance, and jumped for his blade. In the seconds when the Steef re-gained it's balance, Jakob had his blade against the Steef's throat instead of his. The Steef collapsed, and started to cry pathetically.

"Please, mister. I didun m-m-mean any-any harm. I-I-I j-j-just gotta fe-feed my family. We're d-d-damn near broke wit the Industrialist everywhere. You gotta b-b-believe me!" It said out. Jakob hesitated, and slowly put his sword down. The Steef opened its eyes, saw that the sword was down, and got up, it's crying stopped. "Now then," It said it a voice quite different from it's previous one, "I would like to thank you for the mercy." It held out its hand, while at the same time shedding its outside clothes. As Jakob had half-expected, underneath them were the kind of clothes a person with high standing in a village would where. It had a cleverly spun green tunic, and pants made from what looked like the finest-made cotton pants Jakob had ever seen. "I would like to extend my apologies for the rude interruption, but as I said before, my village has since been steadily losing resources, and have had to resort to common thievery. Quite degrading. Well, it seems I have not even told my name! It is Jonathan Thomas. A strange name, so feel free to call me JT." Jakob stood there, nonplussed, as the Steef, or, JT, as he had said, prattled on.

Shaking himself out of it, Jakob shook the hand, which was still out. "My name is Jakob Tomahawk. Pleased to meet you, um, JT. Now, how did you make the slig voice? I could have sworn it was the real thing!" He said. JT gave a smile, and took out a small device, made of what looked like salvaged machinery, and a small cone. He spoke into it, and, instantly, a slig's voice came out.

"It was quite easy! I just had to engineer a few spare parts, make them do what I wanted to, you see, and voila! A instant voice changer!" It was incredible Jakob thought, taking the device and running it over in his hands.

"So, you're a mechanics expert?" Jakob asked, still looking at the device. JT blushed, and took it back.

"I would hardly say so! I'm nothing but an amateur, I’m afraid to say! I just work on these parts when ever it tickles my fancy." He said, a little modest. He clapped his hands. "But never fear! You look hungry, and I must thank you again for the small mercy you gave me, especially after what I did! I will show you my village, if you would like to, that is!" Jakob nodded, and then eagerly took the Steef's hands.

"Yes, I would love to! I haven't sat with real friends in such a long while! Lead the way!" Jakob said, and gathered his things. JT looked happy, and lead him into the brush, taking Jakob hurtling unknowingly to his destiny.
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Is anyone going to post what they think of this? Because if no one is looking at it, i'll just stop writing.
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Well, I guess if no one posts a reply in awhile, i'll take it as no one is going to read it. Just bumping it up for one more chance.
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