My Brand New Fan Fic: The Invasion

[Fuzzleman54321]

Hello! Welcome to my Brand New Fan Fic! The Invasion!

ENJOY:


Chapter 1



Bullets zoomed past me as i rolled behind a rock for safety. I could hear the bullets hitting the rock. Mudokons Were screaming in pain and agony. There invading......There invading........

"AGGGGGGGRHHHHH!!!!!!!" I Screamed as I shot up in bed! I Quickly hid under my sheet. Shivering, i looked out, to see nothing is actully there. I relaxed and got out from under the sheet, and got out of bed. I sleeply yawned and slowly walked to the bathroom. I came out with my face and ponytail wet. I grabbed a nearby towel and dryed myself. I looked in the mirror, to see tears in my eyes. My Brother, Geth had just Died Protecting Our Village From Scrabs. That day was his funerul. I looked down at the coffin, with Tears streaming down my face with Big Face Chanted: " Oh Great Odd! Take This Pure Innocent Mudokon Soul Into Your Kingdom! Let him Live in harmony and peace!" I took out a picture of us playing when we were young and placed it ontop of the coffin. At This Point, I fell down to my knees and sobbed and cried. He was my freind. My only freind. Noone likes me. There say im differnt because i help people to often. They say...... I should of never been born..........


As i slowly walked back to my hut, i had memeries of Geth and me. I remember us playing in a leaf pile...... "Hehe! Take this!" I said and threw a big pawful of leaves at Geth. "Your Going Down!" Geth replied Grinning and jumped ontop of me and we rolled in the leaf pile. But My happiness gone now... I dont think there is anything left for me..............

End Of Chapter 1

Comments?

[Abe16]

Good story Fuzzleman, keep'em comin'!

[Fuzzleman54321]

Thanks Abe16.

Next Chapter

Chapter 2


So much screaming............. I cannot take it................ To much pain...........

I dont know why this Horrible Thought Just Kept Coming Back. Maybe im cursed. I looked outside at odd's moon and looked at Abe's Paw Print. "I wish i could be like him... Then everyone would like me, not hate me. "Are you okay?" I heard a voice behind me. I looked around to see Abe! "What is someone like you out here at night?" I asked him. "I love the peaceful nights, just sitting down and looking at Odd's Moon. I way to get away from all my freinds." Abe said and smiled. I only replied with sniffling and a bit of tears. "Whats wrong?" I asked and came up to me, with his Paw on my back. " I dont have any freinds. Everyone hates me!" I said and burst into tears and curled up into a ball. "Listen, as long as you are with me, you wll always have a freind beside you." Abe said. "Thanks Abe." I said and looked up and smiled at him.

"Ahhh the moon is great." Abe said. It has been Ten Minutes now but we are still staring at it. Abe saw my hut. "What are you doing living over there?!!?" Abe said worried. "Yes i know i live in the scrab fields. I thought if the scrabs killed me, noone would have to put up with me anymore." I said looking down. "If someone does not like you, that dosen't mean you put your life at risk." Abe said. "Here take my paw." He said. I grabbed his paw and he ran. Wow. I never knew abe could run so fast. "Where are we going?" I asked him, with my ponytail in my face. "You'll See!" Abe Replied Smiling. We finally stopped at Abe's Hut. "I have a spare bedroom. Do you want to live here?" "Thank you a lot Abe!" I said happilly. "Yes Please." "Right come on lets go get your stuff from your hut."Abe said. We were walking when I asked "Abe?" "Yes?" "Now i have a freind." I said smiling at him. He smiled back, and we continued walking.

[LoboDiabloLoneWolf]

Awwwwwwwww! How cute! Yeh, I like it! Keep it comin' matie! Couple of critiques; start a new line everytime someone new talks. It gets confusing other wise. Try not to Capitalise Every Word, it's kinda off putting, other then that, watch yer spellin' an' grammer and it's fine! Apart from that, excellent.

Just a question, is the speaker male or female?

[Fuzzleman54321]

Female. Welcome to the new world. :P

[Fuzzleman54321]

Sorry for not updating. Just got the time to write chapter.

Chapter 3

When we brought back all my stuff, Abe showed me around his hut. "Here is the bathroom." Abe said pointing to a bush. "Only toilet on oddworld. The bush." I said smiling. "And here is my bedroom." Abe said as he grinned at his king-sized bed. I grinned too. "And here is your bedroom. Enjoy." Abe said. There was another king-sized bed, and lots and i mean LOTS of room! I bet 300 Mudokons could live here. "Wow Abe. You sure have a big hut." I said amazed. "Do you want some dried scrab meat?" Abe offered. "Sure" I said hungrilly.

Screams...So many screams.... So much Blood... So much gore.....

"AGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!" I Shouted screaming and sweating in bed. "Whats wrong?" Abe said rushing in, worried. "I just....just.... keep having these nightmares." I said shaking. Abe lead me into the kitchen to eat breakfast. "Paramite or Scrab?" Abe asked. "Hmmm... paramite." I said. We both sat down and ate. But little did i know, someone was watching...ready to strike. I went to put away my dishs when a slig grabbed me! "AHHHGHG!!! LET GO OF ME!!!!" I screamed. "No!" Abe said and chanted as fast as could. But we were both knocked out.

End of chapter 3

Diid you like it?

[LoboDiabloLoneWolf]

Oooo, the suspense! What's gonna happen next I ask myself?

[Abe16]

Can't wait what'll happen next man!

[Fuzzleman54321]

Thanks for the comments guys!

Chapter 4

"Uhhhhh.............My head..." I mumered as i woke up in a prison cell. "No No NO! How can this happen?" Abe said who was pacing nearby. "What's Wrong?" I asked him. He looked back gloomily with tears in his eyes. "You have to work here and me...." Abe said. "What about you? You working too?" I asked him. "NO! I HAVE TO BE EXECUTED!" Abe shouted out, tears streaming down his face. I embraced him, to calm him down.....
"Abe! Get yer fat ass here!" A slig said and grabbed him. "So long..." Abe said. "ABE!" I shouted after him. I started crying. He showed me a better life, now he is gone.

Meanwhile in the Execution room...

"COME COME COME!! THERE WILL BE DRINKS, FOOD, MUSIC, PARTYING, AND OF COURSE, THE BLOODY EXECUTION OF ABE!!!" A slig on a microphone said. Glukkons, Sligs and other industrial member cheered. Mudokons were strapped to chairs, forced to watch their hero die. Abe was dragged on by 7 sligs, and strapped to this target. "Target....???" Abe thought. "Ladies and Jents, Sligs and Glukkons, Slogs and Sloggies, HEEEEEEEEEEEEEERRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEE'SS THE EXECUTION OF ABE!!!" The Slig Cheered. Everyone was silent then. "A target, ha!" Abe thought. Then 98 Meat saws appered, and starting going toward the target. "(The classic saying when you kill a mudokon) Opps." Abe said Wide eyed.

End of Chapter 4
So So So! How do you like it? How do you like it? (Thinking of a song )

[LoboDiabloLoneWolf]

GAH! Oh no! Somebody save Abe!

[outlaw king]

nooooooooo! take me , take me!
on second thought , dont take me.

[Fuzzleman54321]

Chapter 5

"Gotta.....break....free.." I said. Suddenly, with a burst a energy, i reached out from the bars, and slapped a slig. I just had enough time then to, get his gun, kill him, and get the keys for the cell. I opened the cell, and ran as fast as i could to the execution room.

From then everything went in slow motion......

"AAAAAAAAaBBBBBBBEEEEE!" I screamed, but it was too late. The meat saws hit him, and bits of him splattered everywhere. "NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!" I screamed a cryed. "Hey FREEZE!" A slig shouted. But i didn't care. Abe was dead.

"GRRRRRRRRRRRRR! I HAVE TO AVENGE ABE's DEATH!!!" I screamed in my head and suddenly turned around, and broke the sligs neck. I then stole his gun, and shot every Glukkon in the room. All the sligs gave chase, and i ran for it. I ran and bumped into a wheel. it said "Absolutly, never ever, positivly, pull this wheel." I then realised this was the boiler. "This is for you abe." I said, and pulled the wheel.

End of Chapter 5

So?

[Fuzzleman54321]

I cant write the next chapter until at least 1 comment.

[LoboDiabloLoneWolf]

YAH! You killed Abe! O.O How could you!? What's gonna happen! What's our Mudling gonna do!? UPDATE!!!

PS. You can take this as a happy reader.

[Slaveless]

You said this was an invasion. Hmmm. But you killed Abe! You dirty monster! (Sorry) But won't our fella die as well? So, this is how it's gonna end. Well, update!! I'm gonna die of suspense!

[Fuzzleman54321]

Hahaha i can make the story though. :P

Chapter 6

"WHO WAS THE MORON TO PULL THAT WHEEL??" A Glukkons voice boomed through the hallway. I turned around and shot the sligs. I fell over a rock, and a slig's brain landed on my lap. I kicked it off, and ran. Red lights flashed through the factory, which i now know is called Perfect Paramite Pies! I ran and saw some mudokons screaming and running around, panicing. "Hold on..." I said and had a quick flashback....

"I wish i could be like him...then everyone would like me, not hate me............."

I know what i must do. "All 'o ya!" I shouted to get the Muds attention. They turned around and looked at me. "Follow me if you want to live!" I shouted.
"Mmmmm.. B'okay!" And they ran towards me. 5 Muds.
1 was immidently killed by a grenade, thrown by a slig. "RUN!" I shouted and we ran off, not realising we only have 4:00 minutes left.........

End of chapter 6

Do you like it? *hopes*

[LoboDiabloLoneWolf]

It's like those timed runs! ...I hate those... Always got killed... Anyway, what's gonna happen next!?

[Slaveless]

I hate when the idoits take a second to decide to move. It's extermely annoying! But this is not my story. Continue please.

[Fuzzleman54321]

DUNDUNDUN!! Another chapter tonight! OMFG.

presentingf teh bg chpter 2!! :P

Oops i mean Chapter 7 :P

I quickly looked at the clock. 3:30 minutes left. I ran to a bird portal. I cant chant. Suddenly time froze, and i was transported to necrum. "What the f*ck?" I said. Suddenly, this Big face appered from nowhere. "I have frozen time. If you want to chant, plus have shrycull, you must go through the Mudmo and Mudachee temples!" The big face said.
"I would be risking my life... at least ill do it for abe." I said.
"What happened to him?" Big face asked.
"He......died....."I said.
"NOMM "Oh right." I said gloomily.

"How can our mudokon Saviour die?" Big face said. "Unless...he was not our proply chosen Saviour...." Big face said thinking.
"What do you mean?" I asked.
"I will answer as soon as you come back from the Temples." Big face said and disappered. I have to find my way through necrum.

Alone.

End of teh chapter 7 :P

[Slaveless]

Holy moly. But isn't the weirdos control the Necrum temples? Oh well. But mudokons don't have a very long lifespan, so wouldn't BigFace explain that Abe would die easily. Continue! I need a break from my own fan fic! *shakes the story out of Fuzzleman54321*

[Fuzzleman54321]

Ahhghghgh dont shake me!! OKAY HERE IS THE STORY!!! JUST DONT HURT ME"!?!?!?!?!?!?! *shrinks into corner*

Chapter 8

As i walked along the dead grass, i saw dead mudokons, and graves. Well that's Necrum. I saw this Huge Statue of a mighty scrab, and a teamworking paramite. There was a well. So i jumped into it. "AHHHHHHHHGHGHGHGHGHG!!!!" I sceamed as i flew through the well. I flew out of the other end, and was in the scrab temple. I saw a white looking Figure, and sorta shaped like...no it cant be..... ITS ABE!

"Ohhhh............. Parts of my sprit......have been locked up... whooooooooooooooooooooooooooo" Abe said. "Stop it." I said sighing.
"Sorry. Parts of my spirit have been locked up." Abe said as i saw he had no arms, legs, or ponytail. "Within your quest, rescue my spirit, then i can rest in peace." Within that, abe's spirit vanished. I ran into the temple where there were 7 doors.

End of Chapter 8

[Slaveless]

Ohhh, mysterious. I like it. Oh and sorry for shaking. I knew that shaking you for 2 hours and 49 minutes would get me a chapter.

[Fuzzleman54321]

Dont try shaking me again, im armed with waffels!!! HAH!

Chapter 9

First door. I walked into the door, and there was darkness as i walked through the tunnel. I came out of the other end, and the door slammed shut. "You have gotta be kiding me!" I said and tryed to shove it open. I heard a Scrab Howel. This is going to be hard.

What's this? There was a lock infront of me. Infront of it, was a Box with a Padlock on. I slapped it, and a part of abe' Spirit was set free. But then, i heard a howl, and a scrab was behind me, charging up Shred Power. "AHHGHGH!" I screamed and ran for my dear life. I banged on the locked door, and abe's Spirit opened it. Then the rest of abe's Spirit flew away. I quickly ran into the door, hearing the door close, and the scrab charging into it. It couldent get through it though.
When i came back to all the doors, 1 out of 7 torches was light. This is real hard.

Second door. Straight away i heard two scrabs fightting. This gave me enough time to quickly run and climb up an edge. The scrab below looked confused, and howled. "heh." I said and walked. There was 8 scrabs. OH NO! I know what they are doing. To Detirmine the Scrab Leader, they have knockouts. And guess what? The Box with abe's Spirit was behind them all.
I know!!! I thought when the last two were left. I hanged down on the ledge, and the scrabs immeditly ran up to me. I quickly climbed up and jumped over, and ran. I slapped the ghost trap, and a green ring came around me. What's the point? I cant chant yet. I might as well try!!!!! I put the palms of my paws together and moved them in a clockwise direction. Suddenly, blue orbs of energy appered behind and all over me, and some strange song came from my lips. I can chant. I CAN CHANT!!!! Oh yea, my invisabilty is running out. I quickly ran to the door and went through, without the scrabs going. YES!!

End of Chapter 9

[Slaveless]

Waffles?! OMGsh! I'm not touching you again! *burns hands* OK, this was a pretty good chapter, showing our mud's strength.

[Fuzzleman54321]

Here is the next chapter, for my two fans, Slaveless and LoboDiabloLoneWolf!

Chapter 10 (extra long chapter i guess)

Two doors down, 5 to go. Number 3 now.

I walked in, and straight away there was darkness. I could not see anything and reached out my paw to feel things. The thing i felt made my heart skip 3 beats. I felt something musely, and strong. Oh no. A SCRAB!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"AHGHGHGHG!" I screamed as i ran. I ran into a wall. Dang. Trapped now. Unless....of course!!! Worth a try! I chanted, but couldent posses. Dan.... wait a min... the scrab is not moving. Its howling. I knew what i had to do. 3...2...1...now! I stopped chanting, which gave me enough time to slap to ghost trap, chant again, then run into the door. This is an Intreging Devloment.

Time for number 4. Through the door again, this time the room was so bright, i was nearly blinded. When i got my focus there were 4 scrabs. "Phew there gonna fight!" I thought. But they didnt fight. They came charging up to me, with Shread power. "WTF??? Ok just calm down...remember the advice abe gave you....." "If you are ever cornered by a pack of scrabs, stay still, they will think your dead, and scrabs only like enimies THEY kill."
I lay on the floor, absoulutly still. The scrabs came up to me, and sniffed me, grunted and walked off. Phew. I looked around and found a ghost trap. I slapped it, and went out the door.

Nearly there. Number 5. I walked in, and.....nothing. Absolutly nothing. The ghost trap just sat infront of me. I slapped it, and there was a howling sound. Crap. I ran to a door, which wasent open. Of course! It requiers 2. I found the other and slapped it, and the door opened. With a scrab inside. It gave chase. But i chanted. I ran past it and into the door.

Almost. Number 6. Straight away 7 scrabs gave chase. I ran completey ignoring the advice. I chanted, but it did'nt give any affect. IM IN TROUBLE. I ran and ran till my legs got tired. I lost the scrabs, but now im lost. Ohh the first ghost trap where are you. I ran again and skidded straight off a cliff. I fell down, but landed in a well, and stepped on a slurg. Hold on ...slurgs? FLEECHES! I felt a wet tounge on my back. There was a ghost trap. Quickly i slapped it, and went into the well, and shot back to the top of the cliff. Heh. Cant get me now. Hold on, sh*t. They used their tounges to get up. I quickly found the door, and went through.


Now time for the final. Number 7.


End of Chapter 10.


Is it good?

[Slaveless]

Oh how it is good! Each door has it's own trouble and not one is the same! And here is to my second fan of my own fan fic, Fuzzleman54321.

[Fuzzleman54321]

Chapter 11

Darkness. Absolut Darkness. But it isent quiet. Howls and Screams fill the air. I can feel things, but not see them. Hold on! What did abe do? He ran of couse! So, i started running, Not knowing a scrab had just dropped of a piller and was chasing me. I ran and jumped over a pit, just. I continue running when i heard a squeak. Of course! A Fuzzle! How one got here i dont know, but i took this advantige and let the fuzzle attack the scrab. I then continued to go through this Death Trap, and came to a halt. I gigantic pit was before me. Only one creature could get me past here.
Elum.

I saw a ring, and i pulled it. There was a bell sound, then an elum appered. I mounted it, and jumped across the pit. I then heard a loud squeak. The scrab won. The scrab ran, and tried to jump over the pit, but failed. It howled, then i heard a sickening cracking, splatting sound. I shuddered, and continued. I got off elum, and patted it, and told it to stay. It howled, but Aggred. Every Corner Brought Destruction and Chaos. But finally i reached a door, which i entered. There was a bird portal, so i chanted, and it stayed open for me. I ran in, and everything went white.....

I appered at a stone, where big face was. "You have done well my child. With this achevment i bring you, the scrab tatoo!" Big face yelled and zapped me with his hand. Pain Shot through my body, but then stopped. I had a big tatoo on my paw. "Now go. To The Mudomo Temples." Big face said, and transported me back to necrum.

End of Chapter 11.

[Slaveless]

Hmmm, interesting. Seems a like a werid twisted verison of AO mysteriously.

[Fuzzleman54321]

Yes....a twisted version..... :tounge:

Chapter 12

"Lets see....if the scrab valts were right....that must mean i have to go left!" I thought. I continued walking through this dead, quiet place. Untill, i reached a well. "This must lead to the paramite temples!" I said and jumped in it. "WHOA!!" I said as i shot through the well. I flew out the other end, and hit a wall. I growled, and started walking. The place was in a cave, with purple light around. "I must walk....AGH!" I screamed as i bumped into a paramite. "Let me remember that saying....

One can be fun......Two you better run!

Well, luckily there was only 1. But its not bright to corner a paramite! So i will have to move fast. Hey a meat sack! I grabbed a chunk of meat, and threw it behind me. The paramite ran for it, and i ran away. "Ok." I said. "Uh oh." Two paramites came down from a web. "AGHGHG!" I screamed as they chased me. "AGHGHGHGHGHGHGHGHGHGH!" One scratched my leg! "Owie!" I said as i jumped onto a edge. I climbed up, not hesitating. I panted, as i was out of breath.

But the fun had just begun.

As i was getting my breath back, 7 paramites came down from a web, not hesitating to hiss. They ran straight after me, and i sprinted. This was a stupid thing to do, since i then ran out of breath. "Hold..on..." I panted. "Nunununununununununu!" I chanted and the paramites hissed! I then caught my breath and ran for it. I rolled through a tunnel. There was a bird portal, i chanted and ran through it.

Im now at the seven doors.

End of chapter 12.

[Slaveless]

Hmm, interesting. How did he know the old sayings? Oh well?