The near end of oddworld....

[metroixer]

Okay this is my 3rd attempt of a story. After many tips and hints I swear I swear this will be good. Anyway this takes place after my 1st fanfic. Although not many people read it I’ll create a prologue so you won’t be confused. Anyway here is my story. Here is where the conclusion of oddworld may lie….

Prologue

It has been 5,000 years since Jobe the slig has destroyed the magog cartel. With the help of big face, other sligs, and a strange creature called a steef named roit. The oddworld came in peace. Or has it? In these 5,000 years much of Jobe’s antics have been forgotten. The sligs are working for glukkons again. So mudokons are being slaves yet again.

Jobe is now like a fairytale along with abe and munch. With no real saviors this time there seems to be no heroes. With the magog cartel destroyed all of oddworld broke out in a war. Nowhere in oddworld seems to have peace now. Territories are being taken or stolen.

At first it seems it was only the glukkons doing this. Soon outlaws came in the war to get their own land. Then the grubs and steef. Soon the muds even joined. Yet I will tell you how it happened from the beginning. Where it was only the glukkons who were fighting, and who started it all.

Ch.1: The war on the march (Now a changed name!)

“The war on the march. New that will kill you!” As the slig newscaster started talking about how this new industrial program is having it’s first episode (Expect to see many more) he suddenly got to the real subject. “Okay now that I’m off with my rambling.” He said in a comedic tone “Our big story today is the start of a new war. With no magog cartel to lead them former glukkon general Moss, and pud jink have declared war against each other for the territory. Here is the interview between them.”

The attention was suddenly drawn to a glukkon who was blind. That or he has dark eyes. He says it’s the latter. He has a voice a normal glukkon would. Proud, arrogant, and full of ideas to build profit. He then starts talking in an ear piercing tone.

“That Jink guy has nothing on me! I mean look at me! A general of a well known factory known as post industry. Now look at this guy! No money at all and his office is probably as filthy as a mud’s bed!” Then without a warning a second screen showed up with a glukkon pud wearing the usual pud close and with green eyes and a deep voice.

“Yea right!” He says angrily. “I have a whole army of sligs waiting to taste some blood! Not their own mind you! Besides! You rely on vykkers!”

“you rely on vykkers!” Said Moss in a annoying repetitive imitating voice. “No wait that doesen’t sound right.” He said at a very fake surprised tone. Here is how I should off said it. “YOU RELY ON VYKKERS!” Moss said at a very deep voice that made him sound like a steef on crack. “I’ll show you what vykker power can do on the battlefield you got that buddy!? The wanted to have a glukkon test subject for a long time now!”

“Fine we’ll settle this at the battlefield.” Said Jink at an annoyed tone. The two screen’s were gone and were now concentrating on the slig news castor. “Ooookay then.” He said at a very wierded out tone. “Well who will win!? The pud or the general? Find out tomorrow! Now in other news fuzzle hair is all the rage and” So the battle was set tomorrow. The first part of the war of oddworld.

End of chapter….

Well? Questions? Comments? Complaints?

[Icarus]

better than most other shit i hear, well read, people write. uh i suppose if you plan on ever writing more you should.



good job, keep up the good work...i guess........

[metroixer]

Well i'll gladly make another chapter then!

ch.2: The first battle

Before the day of the war each glukkon (Jink and Moss) had a meeting with their army to bring out a fully descriptive plan on how to win the upcoming war. Each glukkon had theit own so-called "special troop". This special troop would be the main man on the war. To be more descriptive it is this troop that secretely invades that other armies home base, and set off the boiler. Of course there is always the other type of infantry and machinery used in war for they must assist the special troop so he would actually be able to get in.

Anyway we will take a look at what Jink's meeting will go out. So without furder ado our story will now concentrate at this time. It was 8:00 at night during Jink's meeting was being witheld. With about 100 sligs in his army. A low and risky army to use for war, but it was all that Jink had. "All right everyone sit down, sit down so we could get this started." Yelled out Jink while going torward a microphone on a stand so he won't have to yell.

"Is this thing on? Okay well everyone I know we are outnumbered. I know we don't have much experienced fighters here. Hell our economy even sucks. Don't worry though. I have deviced a fullproof plan to get us out of this sticky wicket."

At the same time as Jink was talking a group of 3 sligs were sitting together as friends. The one on the left of the group was called Mak. Mak was a slig with a vykker's mind. He is much of a biolegist, and gets teassed a lot by other sligs. The slig on the right was name Iris. Iris had a birth problem which stuck which makes him unable to do anything correctly. To prevent this his whole body is covered with mechanical machinery which (although makes him handicapped) make him kind of a super slig with all the added features the mehanical suit gave him.

Finnaly there is the slig in the middle named Sat. He is actually a proud slig. Determined and adventorous. He would do anything to support his army,factory you name it. Life risking or not Sat will take the chance. this three sligs (Now that we are done with there profiles) have been having a conversation while Jink was talking.

"Listen Sat I don't care if you want to be well known. You're best abilities as a slig are too record the weaponry and such. You just won't survive out there even if you have the spirit." Iris was talking to Sat on how he shoulden't take the chance of going to war. Although Iris was strong and such he still had feelings and cared for Sat like a big brother. "Listen Iris" Said Sat in anannoyed tone. "I don't need your compassion or warnings man. I don't care if I die or anything. As long as I die with a slig's pride i'll be fine.

Iris sighed, and looked at Sat. He then looked at Mac and asked "You think you can knock some sence into this boy." Iris nodded his head and said "I tried Iris. Give it up he's to stubborn." With that Iris looked away from Mac and back at Jink. Who was done explaining his plan (Don't worry you'll see it soon).

"Now sligs I am sure you are all aware that we need a special troop for this war. Well I happen to have this little hat full of names in it, and my personal slig helper will pull a name out with his eyes closed of course, and whoevers name he picks out gets to be a special troop!" Now slig helper.

"What a stupid way to decide." Said Sat quietly. The slig pulled out a name from the hat. He read it. He told it to Jink. "Well sligs it seems that our special troop for the war will be....

MAC!"

End of chapter

I hope you liked it.