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01-18-2002, 07:06 PM
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Higher Motives [my latest fic]

I've decided to post some of this, in the hope that you will give me greater pressure to write some more...

It's rather long...

Chapter 1

The worst thing about it was the stench. Visk’s nostrils began to close up as he gagged in the foetid air. The windows were sealed shut, preventing any circulation of the relatively fresh air outside, which might have made the atmosphere more bearable to the senses. The smell may have been the worst thing, but the sight wasn’t much better, and Visk found it difficult to look directly at the corpse. But he had to. It was his job.

“The deceased is mudokon, fairly well nourished, dark skin. Cause o’ death: hanging. Prob’ly suicide. Time o’ death uncertain, but the body is in an advanced state o’ decay. Forensics could narrow it down further, but I’d estimate about two, three days.” Frack, one of Visk’s fellow officers, stopped talking into his radio and held it up to his ear, waiting for orders. Visk looked up at him, his eyes glad of a relief from the bloody corpse.

“How can yer talk so calmly about something like this?”

Frack smiled at him thinly. “Yer’ll get used to it after a while. You kinda become desensi-” His radio bleeped, and he listened to it, nodding. “Yeah… Okay… Yes Boss…” He turned back to the younger slig. “The Boss says we should treat it as Suicide, and get back as soon as possible.”

Visk frowned slightly. “So we’re not even to investigate to see if it is suicide? What if it isn’t?”

“Look, this mudokon wasn’t anybody. Why would anyone want to kill him? And if there’s no motive, why would there be a crime?”

“But why would he kill himself?”

Frack shook his head. “Who knows? Maybe one of his friends died, maybe he lost his job, or maybe he just couldn’t face being relocated when they build that Dam. There could be any number of reasons.”

“I just feel we should look around,” Visk said, feebly, “Just in case, yer know?”

Frack sighed and put his hand on Visk’s shoulder. “Well, I guess the car might’ve broken down, meaning we couldn’t get back to base on time…” He looked down at his friend, smiling. “A moment ago, yer couldn’t wait to get out of here; what’s changed?”

“I just find it hard ter believe that someone’d kill themselves on purpose.”

“Well, if it makes yer feel better, we can have a quick look around, okay?” Frack smiled as Visk’s face lit up. “At least it’ll give yer a bit more practise in Forensics…”

“So where do we start?”

Frack smiled slightly. “You tell me.”

Visk’s brow furrowed as he thought. “We could dust for fingerprints?”

Frack shook his head. “Too late fer that; this hut isn’t very well built, and weathering’ll have wiped most of the fingerprints. Besides, a lot o’ the villagers have been in here anyway. The only thing we can really do now is to examine the corpse.”

Visk drew a sharp breath, and his tentacles clenched in disgust, but he tentatively approached the suspended figure, looking at it but trying not to see.

“Get used to it, kid. Ye’re gonna be seeing a hell of a lot more o’ these in this job.”

“Do hangings usually give this much blood?” Visk was reaching out towards the bloody neck, trying to steel himself to touch it.

“Sometimes. If the rope’s very coarse.”

“Actually, I don’t think this was the rope…” Biting his lip, Visk reached up and lifted the rope from the neck a little. “There are fingernail marks on the neck; that’s where the blood’s come from: he was trying to get the rope off!”

Frack was unimpressed. “So he changed his mind, so what? His fault: if he’d used a proper noose his neck’d have been broken instantly, and he wouldn’t have had time to struggle.”

Visk turned to his superior, disgusted. “How can you speak like that? Someone else was obviously trying to hang him, and he was trying to escape!”

Frack shook his head, his expression resembling nothing more than sympathy. “Visk, ye’re looking for conspiracy where there ain’t none. This is just wasting time; let’s get outta here…”

Visk was about to protest, but then thought better of it, and sulkily made his way out of the hut. On the floor outside, however, he saw something that rekindled his zeal…

“Frack! Take a look at this!”

Visk’s superior rushed out of the hut and looked over his shoulder, anxiously.

“How many mudokons can afford shoes like that? For that matter, how many mudokons have feet that big?” Visk turned to Frack to gauge his reactions. The footprints were slightly washed away by the rain, but it was still clear that they were very expensive shoes, on very big feet. Only Glukkons could wear shoes like that…

Frack swallowed and backed away. “We have to go. Now.” His breathing getting faster, he frantically began to kick mud over the footprints. At first confused, then angry, Visk tried to hold him back.

“What are yer doing? That’s the only evidence we have that this wasn’t suicide!”

Frack turned to Visk, his eyes full of fear. “Visk, yer don’t understand. This was suicide! The evidence doesn’t matter!”

Visk’s eyebrows raised, confused. “What? But- But this proves that something dodgy was happening! That’s the truth! Why else would Glukkons come to this hut?”

“Visk, ye’re gonna have to learn one o’ these days that Truth isn’t an absolute. It depends on who you are, and in this case, Our Truth doesn’t matter! Neither does his” Frack chucked a thumb at the dangling corpse in the hut. “If we went back to the Boss and said that one of his fellow Glukkons was a murderer, do you think he’d believe us for a second? No, and we’d be out of a job, and probably ‘disappeared’ completely, or at least arrested for something. Anything. It doesn’t matter, they’d find something to get us on!”

“But-”

“Visk,” Frack visibly calmed himself. “We have to go. Apart from anything else, we were disobeying orders simply by investigating this. Nobody cares about some mudokon drifter, and they’re especially not gonna listen to us if we blame a Glukk for his murder. There’s no point in losing your career over something you can’t make a difference over anyway. Now just get in the car.”

Visk blinked back his frustration, and nodded, reluctantly. They got in the car and drove almost to the edge of the Shanty Town without a word, but when they were near open ground, Visk gestured at the mudokons who had stopped to look at the car. “What about them? Does their truth not count?”

Frack shook his head, smiling humourlessly. “Buddy, from the city’s point of view, they don’t even have a Truth….”

* * *

“Deep thoughts?”

Visk didn’t reply, but continued staring into his drink. He sensed Frack sitting beside him, but did not acknowledge him.

“Come on, Visk, ye’re not still mad about that mud, are yer?”

Visk still didn’t look up. He was too busy fighting to keep his fists where they were. “You know full well that wasn’t suicide…”

“Visk… Crimes are committed every day, by everyone. We can’t investigate every one of them.” Frack paused, but continued when Visk didn’t reply. “We have ter be able ter prioritise. The death of one mudokon is not really that important, in the grand scheme of things.”

Visk looked up at Frack for the first time. “How can you say that? If someone’s been murdered, it’s important, no matter who they are!”

He saw his superior shake his head. “Yer’ve got a lot ter learn, kid. Being a Policeman isn’t about righting all the wrongs of the world. It’s a Job. Yer first priority should be ter keep it. And yer keep the job by doing what the Boss deems is a good job.”

Visk looked down again. “And the Boss doesn’t think Muds’re important…?”

“It’s not just that. He’s a Cartel Executive, and he doesn’t want his fellow Glukkons implicated in a murder. Which is what you’re tryin’ ter do…”

Visk downed his drink and stared listlessly at the dregs. “I just want justice…”

Frack smiled. “And so yer should. But yer’ll learn, eventually, that Justice isn’t the same as Truth. Come on, let’s get yer home…” He helped his drunken companion to his feet, and they set off out of the bar…

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01-18-2002, 07:19 PM
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I see you've decided to make something of that 'Missing facets of Mudosian Society' topic, with the whole policeman thing. Great start.
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01-18-2002, 07:24 PM
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Naah, I started this before I thought of that... Besides, I think the Police're run by a different species, anyway... I just can't write about something we haven't found out about yet, so I stuck to writing about Glukks and Sligs...

EDIT: Oh yeah, I forgot. Thanks and things and stuff...

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Very good start of your fanfic Dan.
...interesting plot.
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01-20-2002, 08:05 AM
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Very good! Brillint! (A bit long ompared tomine check it out, its called: the girl!)
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Thank you for your encouragement, people...

Chapter 2

The tone tore through the air and through Visk’s skull like a surgical laser. Burying his head under his pillow, Visk did his best to ignore the piercing ring, but it just kept coming. In the end, he had no choice but to pull himself out of bed and crawl over to the Fone.

“Hello?”

“Hi, Visk?” It was Frack.

“What is it?”

“Where are yer?”

“At home, why?”

“Yer should be here by now!”

Visk glanced at his clock. Stopped. Shit… “I’ll be right down, just give me a couple o’ minutes.”

“Don’t bother, I’ll come and pick you up. There’s been another one.”

Visk froze. “Another…” Please don’t say murder…

“Another Murder…”

* * *

The building was abandoned, but still sturdy. The walls had not yet begun to crumble, but the old wallpaper had peeled long before, and there was no intact furniture. The local Council had been planning to demolish it long ago, but hadn’t yet found a profitable use for the site. Glukkons weren’t superstitious, but Visk was prepared to bet they’d be even less eager to build on this site now…

This one was, if anything, worse than the last. The floor was so sticky with blood, it only reluctantly gave up its association with Visk’s feet. The blood was ubiquitous, covering the floor, the walls, and all surfaces with a thin layer of viscous scarlet liquid. There was so much blood in the room that it was hard to make anything out against the messy red background.

The victim appeared to be tied to a chair, the only intact piece of furniture in the building, but closer inspection revealed that nails had been driven into the wood through his ankles and thighs, and his wrists had been nailed together behind the back of the chair. Incisions had been made into his calves, thighs, and arms, and his head had been pulled back, the feather tied round his mutilated wrists. His arms were both broken, possibly in an attempt to free himself from this painful position. The head was forcibly tilted upwards, the face facing the ceiling, the mouth gagged with a thick strip of cloth. The eyes appeared to have been wide open, but were now sunk into the skull; the eyelids wriggled. Visk tried not to think about maggots.

“The deceased is mudokon, skinny, pale green skin,” Frack dutifully reported to the station, “Appears ter have been bled to death. Victim is tied to a chair, and some clean incisions have been made into limbs, which were apparently the chief cause of death. Time o’ death fairly recent, judging by the corpse, which is mostly intact, and appears to have only recently stopped bleeding. No apparent decay.” Frack switched off the radio, and reached out tentatively with a scalpel, to take a closer look at one of the incisions in the thigh. Visk looked over his shoulder, but backed off, gagging, at the sight of the masses of maggots that were consuming the corpse from the inside. Frack turned away to watch Visk. “You alright, kid?”

Visk made no reply, but composed himself enough to glance back towards Frack and the corpse. “Yer can’t possible pretend this was suicide…”

Frack looked from Visk to the corpse and sighed. “This never happened…”

The outrage in Visk’s voice was almost tangible. “Oh, come on! Yer can’t just brush a case away because yer don’t like it!”

Frack’s eyes flared. “I can, and I have to! I have no desire to lose my job, which is what’ll happen if we follow this through.” He visibly calmed himself. “Look, yer’ve got a whole career ahead of yer, if you play yer cards right. Don’t throw it away like this…”

Visk was silent for a while, but then he looked up at Frack. “What if this is the same killer? What if they’re connected somehow?”

“How could they be connected? Why would they be? One was out in the countryside, near the river, the other in the middle of the city. One was hung, the other bled. What connection could there be?”

Visk hung his head, thinking. “Let me stay and check it out. Tell the Boss the body made me ill or something, and I had to go straight home.”

Frack began to shake his head on impulse, then caught himself, and slowly nodded. “What good’ll it do, though?”

Visk didn’t reply directly. “If I discover that they are connected, d’you agree we need to investigate properly?”

Frack nodded even more slowly. “Okay, but only if yer have concrete evidence.”

“I will do.”

Frack sighed, and bagged up his own equipment. “Good Luck,” he wished Visk as he stepped outside to get back to the station.

Visk had never been alone with a corpse before. He wasn’t a superstitious person, and he liked to think he was quite cynical about the supernatural, but there was something undeniably creepy about being alone in a [literally] blood-red room with somebody who’s been dead for about a day. Okay, you can handle this… Just try not to breathe in… Visk approached the corpse tentatively. Donning his rubber gloves, he gingerly opened the wound in the leg that Frack had opened earlier. Holding back his disgust, he scraped out as many of the maggots as he could, and tried to look at the shape of the wound. It had been a fairly clean cut, made by quite a sharp blade. There was no lateral stretching of the flesh either, suggesting that it had been cut inwards, rather than downwards; the whole incision had been made more or less simultaneously, with one edge of the blade, instead of being punctured with the point then extended downwards with the leading edge. This suggested quite a long blade, possibly curved. This didn’t really help much, as knives of all shapes and sizes were freely available in the market twice a week, but it was evidence, so he noted it.

He made his way to the doorway of the room to catch his breath, and then realised that the door had been open when they had gotten here. If nobody else had touched it, then maybe the killer’s fingerprints might be on it. Rushing to his bag, he seized a can of flour, and began to sprinkle it on the handle. The handle seemed fairly clean, but Visk continued anyway, becoming quite frustrated with the brass knob.

“Do you know who killed Rab yet?”

Looking up, Visk saw a young mudokon stood just outside the doorway to the building. “Not yet,” he replied, and returned to his irritated dusting.

“There was some glukkons ‘ere yesterday.”

Visk froze, and slowly looked up at the mudokon. “Glukkons?”

“Two of ‘em; a huge one and a short, skinny one. We was excited, cos Glukks don’t norm’ly come down here.”

Visk straightened and walked outside to the mudokon. “Did they come to see… Rab, was it?”

“I dunno; once we realised we wasn’t gonna be able to nick anything from ‘em, we lost interest. But they was around here when we left, and when we came back they wasn’t, but Rab were like that…” His eyes dropped to the floor.

Visk tentatively put his arm around the young mudokon, but removed it when he realised it wasn’t helping. “Did you know Rab well?”

“He used to look after us all. He told us the best places to find food, and how to avoid the cops, and… And now he can’t…” Tears welled up slightly, but the mud blinked them back.

Visk looked around, nervously. He wasn’t good at comforting people , and was becoming quite uncomfortable. “Look, do you know why anyone would want to kill Rab?”

“Nobody would… He was, like, the nicest person anyone around here knew… Him and Tel from up by the river were gonna arrange for all the workers in the city to go down and protest about the new Dam, but now they’re both gone, so I don’t know what’s gonna happen…”

“Hang on, they’re both gone?”

The mudokon looked at Visk. “Tel went out to the villages up where the dam’s gonna be built to try and organise things that end, but he never came back.”

Something clicked in Visk’s head. “This Tel… Was he quite, well, fat? With dark green skin?”

The mudokon nodded. “Yeah, how did you know?”

Visk put his hand on the other’s shoulder, and tried to think of a tactful way to say this. He failed. “The same glukkons who killed Rab killed Tel… I’m sorry…”

The mudokon nodded, sadly. “I thought so. Rab weren’t well known, so they must have learned about him from somewhere… Thanks for telling me, anyway…”

“No problem…”

The mudokon began to walk away. Visk watched him until he turned a corner, then shook himself, and turned back to the murder scene. Glancing at the floor, he realised that his flour can must have sprung a leak, since there was flour all over the floor. His eyes widened as he saw, beside the footprints of himself, Frack, and some muds, several clear prints of the same glukkon shoe he’d seen at the last crime scene…

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01-22-2002, 12:55 AM
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this to is pretty nice, visualy nonappealing but still a nice piece of work. quite a different style than undercover opperations, but i like how there are sensible sligs with feelings that arent corrupted like in the games. really, your a good writer and keep it up, i wanna hear more.... just try to keep the quarts of blood down a little, eh?
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This fanfiction is really creative.....
Keep it UP!!!! J/k ..... Do what you want...

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This one's shorter than the last two, closer to my usual chapter length...

Chapter 3

The Police Station was an imposing sight. One of the older buildings in Kryellos, it was built in the same faux-Gothic style as many of the buildings of that period. The matt wrought-iron fence ran all the way round the yard, its only concession to the modern age being its recent electrification. The building itself looked more like a Fortress than a building supposedly intended to house a Public Service. There were only two floors, but the upper floor had battlements running around the roof, with bright, incongruously modern floodlights bearing down on the imposing gates to the complex. It was at these gates that Visk now stood, shivering, clutching at his kit bag. I’m sure they keep you waiting deliberately, he thought, maybe to make sure you know your place…

He’d arrived nearly half an hour earlier, but had discovered that Frack had signed him out as sick, so he had to wait for a messenger to come and verify who he was, and then the messenger had told him that the Boss had to be consulted before any (supposedly) off-duty officers were allowed in. ****ing formalities… It was getting late now (Visk had spent most of the day collecting evidence at the crime scene) and since winter was now closing in, the nights were getting longer, so it was almost dark already. And it was cold. And it was raining. And he had to use his coat to keep his bag of evidence dry, so he was soaked already.

Finally, the messenger returned and told Visk to report to his desk and await an assignment. Once the gates were opened, Visk and the messenger scuttled to the doors as fast as their pants would carry them, united in their eagerness to not become any wetter.

Once inside, Visk made his weary way to his desk, roughly towelling himself off with the inside of his coat. He reached his desk just as Frack returned from a cigarette break. Seeing his colleague, Visk changed direction to meet Frack by his own desk. Leaning over it, his voice low, he said: “It was the same Glukks!”

Visk had thought he’d been speaking quite quietly, and so was a little surprised when Frack clamped his hand over his mouth, hissing: “Not so loud! We got our jobs to think about here!”

Visk tightened his tentacles into a grimace. “Sorry about that, but I’ve got evidence!”

Frack looked over his shoulder nervously, then nodded. “Okay, what’ve yer got?”

Visk took notice of his colleague’s caution, and to care to hide the photographs he’d taken from anyone else in the room as he drew them from his kitbag to show to Frack. “Look at these footprints. Look familiar?”

Frack stared. “They’re the same as…”

“…as the ones we saw outside the hut, exactly! And I spoke to one of the other squatters, who says there were some Glukks around yesterday. It’d be a bit of a coincidence for two different pairs of Glukkons to come to Mudokon habitations shortly before someone dies there, all within a week, wouldn’t it?”

The Sergeant frowned. “We’re taking a huge risk here…”

Visk raised his voice a little, involuntarily. “You promised!”

Frack stuffed the photographs back into Visk’s kitbag and looked round, anxiously. None of the others seemed to have heard them. Visk hung his head a little sheepishly as Frack turned back to him. “I said to keep yer voice down! Okay, look, I’ll help yer investigate, but yer have to keep this quiet; we can’t have the Boss-”

“I see you’re having quite an animated discussion over here…” Visk jumped as the voice boomed out from behind them, then turned to look up at the Boss.

Flakit, the CEO of the Kryellos Constabulary, was an imposing figure. He towered over even the tallest Bigbros in the Riot Squad, and his muscles bulged against the fashionable uniforms he tended to wear, and yet he had a habit of moving almost silently, allowing him to appear behind his officers at the most inopportune moments…
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...and then there was Dan..possibly one of the best OW fanfic authors out there.
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ah......... nice.......... want more....... hm, not bad. well keep it up, this is nice.
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I decided that was a bit short to be all of Chapter 3, so I've added this next bit to it...

Chapter 3 (Continued)

“Kryellos is almost unique, in that its council have decided to experiment with a publicly funded Police Force. In most Cities, most crimes go totally unsolved, because nobody who can afford to pay for the investigation don’t care. Do you understand this, Constable?”

Visk nodded, without looking up; he didn’t want to see Flakit’s face…

“So, you must understand that Free Crime Investigation is a luxury that the citizens of Kryellos alone enjoy.” Visk heard his boss move, leaning across the desk. His voice was quieter, but clearer, since his head was closer. “But we are on a limited budget here. Kryellos Council invested money into this Police Force because I convinced them that the money would be recouped with higher production, as the workers would be happier and would work harder and revolt less. Now, however, with this new Dam, protests have begun again, and they are beginning to question our effectiveness in keeping the workers happy. As their confidence in us becomes less, they give us less funding, and we are even less able to contain the crowds and prevent riots, so they become even more convinced of our uselessness. Because of this, our funding becomes continually less each month, so we simply cannot afford to investigate every single crime that takes place.” Flakit paused briefly, thinking. “In fact, we’ve never had the money or the manpower to do that… But now more than ever. Clear?”

Visk nodded once more, and risked a glance up at his boss. Flakit’s face didn’t seem angry as much as irritated, maybe even worried.

“That in mind, if I order you not to waste valuable police money and time investigating the death of an insignificant worker, you don’t investigate that death. Is that clear?”

“Yes sir…”

Flakit’s face softened. “Look, you’re new here, so I’ll let you off this time. I expect Sergeant Frack’s probably told you that your job’ll be on the line if you disobey orders. He’s right, but it’s not because of me. With the current poor state of worker discipline, we are having to devote most of our funding to Crowd Control. If we can’t convince the Council that we can control the crowds, and therefore that keeping us on would be profitable, then we are all out of a job. Myself included. So please, for all of our sakes, don’t waste our time with pointless investigations. That is both an order and a plea. Is that all clear?”

Visk looked up and nodded. “Crystal, sir.”

Flakit smiled. “Play your cards right, and you could go far. Dismissed.” Visk turned to go. “Oh, and one more thing. Nothing I’ve said goes beyond these walls. We have a reputation to maintain among the workers. As far as anyone else is concerned, you just had a verbal warning for disobeying orders. Clear?”

Visk realised that his throat was dry with the effort of not breaking out in tears. Without turning around, he nodded, and exited the Office.

* * *

As Visk left the Office, Frack ran up to him. “What happened?”

Visk looked up at his Sergeant numbly. “I… I got a Verbal Warning.” He swallowed. “I need a glass of water…”

Frack followed him to the tap. “A Verbal Warning? Is that all?”

Swallowing deeply, Visk nodded.

“But what about the photos? I’m surprised he didn’t fire us the moment he saw them…”

Putting the cup down, Visk looked down at his left hand, which was still clutching his kitbag, and realised that Flakit hadn’t even mentioned the Photos once. “He didn’t ask to see them…”

Frack was speechless in his disbelief, then he grinned widely. “Get home, you lucky bastard, before he remembers them! Throw them away the moment you get in, okay?”

Visk nodded earnestly. “See you tomorrow!” He made his way for the exit, grabbing his coat as he went.

The rain had lessened to a pleasant drizzle. As he walked through the dark, dimly lit streets, Visk felt a sudden euphoria come over him. It was as if he were waking up from a terrible nightmare to realise that it was just a dream. I’m okay… I’m alive… I’ve still got my job! Laughing, he did a little leap, punching the air.

He sobered up when he saw the odd looks he received from passers-by…

* * *

By the time Visk reached his apartment block, he was very tired. The euphoria had worn off, and the weariness of having been on his feet all day began to kick in. Even the drizzle, which had been light and refreshing at first, had begun to feel like he was being pelted with pebbles. Once through the door, he went straight to the bedroom and collapsed onto his bed, exhausted. I’ll throw away those photos in the morning…
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not bad, not bad at all. how come i think not throwing the photos away is gonna cause a catastrophe? or somethin like that.... keep it up.
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Once again Dan wows the public with another fic... (Psst, Dan, you want me to code it so you can put it on your site? I have a few "cheat" ways to do it.)
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That would be nice, Abby... Thanks...

I'd better write some more of this at some point...
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I finally got off my arse and got this next chapter onto paper (metaphorically speaking). I'd been running the first half of it through in my head for a couple of weeks, so this ought to be good... (No guarantees, of course...)

Chapter 4

“…just over half an hour ago…”

“Shhh!”

Bemused, Visk closed the door more gently than he had opened it, and joined his colleagues, who were crowded silently around the Television.

“His bodyguards, who claim to have been ordered to wait outside, say they heard the shot and rushed into the Warehouse, only to find the Vice-President already dead. They have so far prevented reporters from going near the scene of the crime, as they wait for police investigators to arrive at the scene…”

Visk sidled up to Frack, and whispered in his ear. “What’s happening?”

“Vice-President Kilk’s been murdered!”

“…go direct to Kryll Valley Construction Co. Head Office, where President Olek has been informed of the Vice-President’s demise: “Kilk was a good friend and a close associate. But we’re not gonna let something like this stop the Dam from being built. That’s just what these murderers want to happen!” Olek is referring, of course, to the planned damming of the river Kryll, which the City Council are expected to give the go-ahead to later this week…”

Flakit thumbed the remote, silencing the flickering screen. “We’ve seen enough. Sergeant Frack, you and Constable Visk are on this case. Get to it.” He shot a glance at Visk, who shivered, but knew that the CEO was giving him a second chance.

One of the other Constables spoke up. “How in Odd’s name did the ****ing Press get to know ‘bout this before us?”

Flakit sighed. “Information always seems to reach those rats before us… I’m not sure why.”

“’s cos they pay for it…” Frack muttered, not quite quietly enough.

“I don’t remember asking you, Sergeant. You’ve got a job to do, and I suggest you do it.”

Frack nodded sheepishly. “C’mon, Visk…”

* * *

“What was he doing in an Abandoned Warehouse?”

Frack shook his head as he hurried down the street. “We don’t know. He didn’t tell his bodyguards, he just ordered them ter follow ‘im, then ter wait outside.”

“We should check his Office, there might be some information there. Diaries, notes, that sorta thing…”

Frack looked at Visk. “Why don’t you go check that out? Yer’ve seen two corpses in as many days, why don’t I handle this one?”

Visk nodded. “I’ll meet yer outside the warehouse in two hours, yeah?”

“Well, whenever ye’re done; I’m gonna be there anyway…”

Visk nodded again, and set off towards Kryll Valley Construction Co. Head Office…

* * *

“…always very private in his affairs…”

Visk sighed. “Look, I’m not asking ter ransack his home, I jus’ wanna look around his office!”

The old Glukkon who ran K.V. Construction’s records office looked at Visk over the top of his glasses. “There is no need to speak to me like that. It isn’t as simple as that, anyway. There were a lot of secret records in that office. Only I was allowed inside, and then only rarely. Since I have received no contrary orders, I am legally bound to uphold the agreement between the Vice-President and myself.”

I hate Bureaucrats… Visk gritted his teeth. “Look, I could always go ter the crime scene and get his own key, so yer’re not stopping me from going inside. All yer’re doin’ is slowing me down…”

“You are perfectly welcome to do so, if you so wish, but I am still not allowed to give you the key that the Vice-President himself gave me, in trust, and told me not to put into the hands of anyone but himself, should he lose his own.”

Visk closed his eyes and counted to 10. “Listen… Kilk’s been murdered. I think yer can take that as the end of that particular contract. Now, if he were here now, I’m sure he would want his murder investigated, would he not?”

The Glukkon stared at Visk, sighed, and turned to the cupboard behind him. Unlocking it, he took one of the keys from its hook, blew the dust off it, and handed it to Visk. “You have one hour. No more.”

Thank you…” Visk turned and left the office, fearing that if he stayed, he would lose control of his hands and accidentally open a fourth murder investigation…

* * *

Although Visk had never met Kilk, and knew little about him, much became clear about the Glukkon just through looking at his office. Everything was precisely placed in its own spot on the shelves and desks. The books were arranged neatly, in alphabetical order, on the bookcase, and were covered in a thick layer of dust, suggesting that they had not been moved in years. The books on the desk, without dust, were neatly piled up, the largest on the bottom, the smallest on the top, and the books placed precisely symmetrically, each of their sides equidistant to the corresponding side on the book below. The paper documents were arranged so neatly that at first Visk thought that they were a solid white block. The pens (all black) were neatly laid out on the desk, in order of tip diameter. There was an office toy, with the five metal balls on wires, which seemed out of place, but on closer inspection, it could be seen that the balls had long been rusted together.

Visk coughed, having difficulty breathing in such a stuffy place. Looking around, he saw a closed window behind the desk. Striding carefully across the room, he pushed at the window, only to discover that it was painted shut, and that the hinges had anyway rusted away long ago.

Well, no point in dusting for fingerprints. he thought, Nobody could have got in through that window, and I’d like to see any murderer get past that bureaucrat downstairs without going insane…

He turned his attention to the desk. Tugging at the handles of the drawers, he found that they were locked. He cast a glance at the door, which looked soundproof enough, then tugged at the drawer with all his might. With a creaking noise, the drawer pulled free of the desk, splintering the wood around the lock.

Compared to the neatness that typified the rest of the room, the contents of the desk drawer were in chaos. Documents had been shoved in randomly, as if there would have been no room for them if they had been neat. Apart from sheets full of figures and statistics and business reports, there was also a small leatherbound book that looked like a diary, and an ansafone. Visk pressed play on the ansafone, and sighed when he heard nothing. There should be a message that explains it all, he thought, or there would be in a fair world… Then he noticed that there was actually no tape in the machine. That’s odd… Someone like Kilk would never forget ter put a new tape in… And there’s a whole boxful of empty ones here… He scribbled it down in his notebook, and turned his attention to the diary. The most recent few entries were boring – all about business – but he found an interesting entry for a few days previously:

“I think O. is starting to suspect something. Will have to start altering spending to cover losses. Reduce takings in future?”

He must’ve been stealing money from the Company finances. But why?

Copying down the relevant section into his notebook, Visk stood up, and surveyed the rest of the office. There weren’t any filing cabinets, and nothing apart from the desk seemed to have been touched in years. Sighing, he put his notebook away in his kitbag, and got ready to leave. Then, on a whim, he decided to pick up the receiver of the fone, and dial 1471.

[Author's Note for Merkins and other foreigners: 1471 is the number you dial in England to get the number of the last person who phoned you. I know it wouldn't be the same in Mudos, but what the hey. I'll assume they have something similar...]

“You were called. Today. At. Seven. Forty-two. A. M.” the synthesised voice spoke in a monotone. That was less than an hour before he was killed… The number was a payphone number.

* * *

Visk walked through the lobby of the building, frowning to himself.

“The Key?” The voice of the Glukkon record-keeper droned out coldly across the room. Visk strolled over and handed him they key, which he hung on its hook without thanks. “Did you find what you were looking for?”

Visk frowned again. “Not sure.” Looking across at the Glukkon, he put his head to one side. “Can you listen in on the fone conversations in this building?”

The Glukkon raised one eyebrow in inquiry. “I could, but I wouldn’t do such an immoral thing…”

“Cut the crap. Did you listen in on a fone conversation on Kilk’s fone at –” Visk checked his notepad. “7:42 this morning?”

The Glukkon looked over his shoulder. Visk smiled inside, secretly glad to have been able to make the annoying bureaucrat uncomfortable. The glukkon leaned forward. “This doesn’t go beyond this room, right?” Visk nodded. “Okay, I did.”

Visk stopped frowning. “Did you keep a copy of it?”

The glukkon shook his head. “No, my budget for new tapes isn’t big enough to keep all the old ones. But I did make a written transcript.” Looking around, the glukkon reached into a low-down drawer, pulling out a sheet of paper. “Here. And nobody else finds out about this, okay?”

“Of course not.” Visk made a mental note to tell Flakit the first chance he got…
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A good murder thriller, Dan. some parts reminded me those old stories with Mr. Poirot and his sidekick, Cp. Hastings. I'll definetely stay here to know how this whole thing will end.
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Why, thank you, Lampi...

You'll be pleased to know that, for once, I'm not just making it up as I go along - I do actually know how this one's going to end, so don't worry... It's just a matter of getting it from the Brain into the Word Document.
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My Creative Juices have been flowing, and have spawned a 5th Chapter...

Chapter 5

“No entry, ‘cept police – Oh, sorry, Constable; yer can go up.”

Visk put away his badge and began to mount the crumbling staircase of the old warehouse. The slig bodyguards at the bottom seemed to have been successful at keeping the public out of the building, judging by the huge crowd gathering outside. Even reporters and the glukkon’s old colleagues had been denied access.

“Oh, there y’are, Visk. No point coming up here, we’re more or less done with forensics here. The body’s on its way ter the pathologist already.”

“Find anything int’restin, sarge?”

Frack smiled. “As it happens, we’re in luck. The bullet used was quite an expensive one – only two or three shops in the city sell them.”

“Shall I get this down to the Records Office, then?”

“Yeah,” Frack nodded, “Get them ter cross-reference the card numbers from the gun shops with any shops that sell the kind of knives we saw in the other killing, and I suppose yer could narrow it down by bringing in the shoes, if yer need ter…”

“Right. What’re you gonna do?”

“I’m gonna go get the pathologist’s report. Meet you back at the station this evening, okay?”

“’k…” They set off in their appropriate directions.

* * *

The Kryellos Records Office is a small bunch of rooms, hidden away in the dark basement beneath the Library. Lit by a dim bulb that seemed to highlight the darkness instead of dispelling it, the offices gave Visk the impression of being buried alive. The air was stale, and every surface caked in dust. The record books themselves gave the impression that they had not been moved since they were put there in the first place (which was, of course, true for most of them).

Treading softly between the shelves of files, Visk was careful not to make any sudden movements that might disturb the years of dust, and was almost afraid to break the oppressive silence…

“You again…”

Surprised, Visk spun round, trying to find the origin of the dry voice that was lost among the tonnes of crisp untouched paper in the room. Squinting through the dimness and the dust, he managed to make out a small desk in one corner of the room. Approaching it, he muttered under his breath. “Oh f*ck, not him again…”

The familiar glukkon stared at him once more. “I had hoped I’d seen the last of you…”

“What are you doing here?”

“One job in Records sadly failed to pay the bills, so I was forced to take the job at KV Construction to supplement my meagre wages. What are you doing here?”

Visk rubbed his forehead. “Look, let’s get this over with as quickly as possible, shall we? I’ve got this bullet,” he held up the plastic bag with the bullet in, “And I need you to track down its owner. It’s a Scrab .22.”

To his credit, the Glukkon only raised one eyebrow. “They’re not cheap… But even though there are only a small number shops that sell them, they still have many customers, any one of whom could have fired this bullet. Do you want a list of them all?”

Visk shook his head, dislodging some dust that had settled on his head in the short time he’d been standing there, and sending him into a fit of coughing, much to the glukkon’s amusement. When he had regained his composure, Visk pulled out his notebook, and began to read. “I want a list of all credit card numbers that have been used to buy a Scrab .22 gun, at least one pair of Glarmani shoes (size 7 or 9), and some kind of knife roughly this shape.” He showed the glukkon the sketch, and the glukkon nodded.

“The list will be at the station by tomorrow. Thank you, and have a nice day.”

****ing Bureaucrat, Visk thought. “Thank you,” he said, “I’ll try my best…”

When he reached the surface, Visk almost choked on the comparatively fresh air, and vowed never to set foot in there again…

* * *

“…entered the skull just above the eye socket…”

Visk turned, shut the door again, closed his eyes, and breathed deeply. He’d seen too many bodies over the past couple of days to want to see one cut up. Just a week before, he’d have been eager to see what goes on in the Pathologist’s Lab, but now he just wanted to sleep.

The door swung open, and Visk heard Frack’s voice softly beside his ear. “You okay, Visk? Yer didn’t stay in there long, did yer?” Visk shook his head, and didn’t open his eyes. “Well, yer’ll be fine coming in now. Lans’s finished the Autopsy now, so I’m just hearin’ his report. Wanna listen in?”

Visk nodded, and followed Frack into the Lab. The corpse was lying face-down on an operating table, covered by a sheet up to the neck. Lans was stood over it, examining an open wound in the back of the head with a pair of tweezers, and enjoying the activity far too much.

Lans was the station’s chief pathologist. A young vykker, Lans was disturbingly enthusiastic about his morbid job. When there were no murder victims to dissect, Lans was usually to be found cutting up small animals. There were many rumours running around the station as to where he got hold of these creatures, but he had been spotted at least once scraping small furry lumps from the roadside… Visk tried his hardest not to think about what people like Lans did before the Constabulary was founded…

“Ah, Constable Visk, I thought it was you. Come on in, come in, I was just getting to the Exit Wounds… Shall I recap from the start for you?”

Visk shuddered, pulled up a chair, and tried to think happy thoughts. Frack nodded, suppressing a smile.

“Well, the first bullet entered the upper back, just below the shoulder. That bullet was still lodged in the shoulderblade when the body came to me. Now, interestingly, the second bullet entered the skull just above the eye-socket, meaning that the victim most likely turned around in between the two shots. We can tell that this one on the back of the head was the Exit Wound rather than the Entry Wound because of the interesting pattern of dispersion we can see around the wound, where the flesh was literally blown away from the hole by the force of the bullet.” Visk tried not to watch the vykker’s hands, which almost seemed to be attempting to re-enact the formation of the wound… “Now, according the Sergeant Frack, the body was found lying against the wall, facing the stairs up from the lower floor, which suggests that the victim’s killers followed the victim up from the stairs from the lower floors. This is where the investigation passes out of my field of expertise, so I’ll leave Frack to fill in the rest…” Lans seemed genuinely unhappy at having to stop his morbid but animated presentation, but soon got over it, and eagerly began tugging at the flesh on the corpse’s head with his tweezers again…

Visk turned away, slightly nauseously, and left without a word. Frack followed him, but Visk was walking away too quickly down the corridors for conversation, so it wasn’t until they got outside onto the mock battlements, and Visk stopped to breathe the fresh air, that Frack was able to continue where Lans had left off. “We’ve interviewed Kilk’s bodyguards. They started runnin’ up the stairs at the sound o’ the first shot. By the time the second shot went off, they were almost on the floor where the shooting took place. But they still didn’t see the killers, which means that the killers couldn’t have come down the stairs as well as up. The bodyguards did a full search o’ that floor, and found nothing. The only other way the killers could have got out of that building was out of a window.”

Visk looked up, breathing steadily again now. “A window? But they were four floors up!”

“I know. Which means, unfortunately, that we may be dealin’ with professional assassins, rather than just killers.”

“So they might not be easy to catch?”

Frack shook his head. “Not just that. Even once we’ve caught them, we still won’t have caught the real killers: whoever ordered it.”

Visk turned away, looking out over the city. The sun was sinking below the horizon in a haze of crimson, with orange and pink streamers reaching out across the sky, as if the sun were reaching out to grasp the whole city in its thin, colourful fingers. The city, oblivious to the sun’s efforts, continued in its business almost as actively as it did during the day. Cities in Mudos never slept.

Frack reached out a hand, placing it gently on Visk’s shoulder. “You get home. Get some sleep. We can think about this again in the mornin’.”

Visk nodded. “We should meet up at the Warehouse, so we can get started right away.”

“K. See yer at ten, then?”

“See yer.”

They turned away from the dying sun, and walked their way back through the building.
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After finaly coming round to reading your fic iv reached the conclusion that

I REALY LIKE IT !!!!

So I request you continue it becous it's a great story!
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This chapter's a bit too first-draft for my liking, but here ya go...

Chapter 6

The wind whistled past Visk’s face. He looked down, trying his best not to think about how far it was, and tried to think about how he would escape through this window if he’d just murdered a fairly high-ranking glukkon. He couldn’t see any obvious hand- or foot-holds below, and the next window straight down was two floors below. Looking forward, he tried to think about whether or not he’d be able to jump the gap to the building next door. That thought made his head spin, and he pulled back, away from the window, and closed his eyes.

“Think of anything?”

Visk shook his head. “You have a look.”

Frack leaned out of the window. Visk watched him, wondering how he could bear to lean so far without the slightest hesitation. After a few seconds, Frack nodded. “Ah…”

“Yer see something?”

“Yeah. Follow me…”

Visk followed Frack, bemused. Frack led the way down the stairs, right down to ground level, and out of the warehouse.

“What did yer see? Did yer see how they got out?”

“No, but I saw someone who might have seen…”

Visk frowned. “What?”

Frack shushed him, and slowed down as they rounded the corner into the alley they’d just been leaning out over. At first, Visk didn’t see anything worth thinking about, but then he saw a small pile of rags in a dark corner besides a skip. As the approached, a head raised tentatively from the pile. “Spare any change?”

Frack signalled for Visk to keep back, and crouched beside the drifter. “We might do. Depends on whether or not you can help us…”

A spark of fear flared in the mudokon’s eyes for a second, before it was replaced by suspicion. “I ain’t done nuffin…”

Frack laughed gently. “Naah, we don’t suspect you of anything, don’t worry. We just want to know if you were here early this morning…”

The mudokon’s eyes narrowed. “Might’ve bin.”

Frack sighed, and reached into his pocket, pulling out a handful of change, which he dropped into the mudokon’s hands. The mudokon grinned briefly, then sobered up. “Now that I fink of it, I was ‘ere this morning. Bin ‘ere the last few days, I ‘av. ’Course, I might’ve bin asleep…”

Frack rolled his eyes and stood up. “We’re wasting our time…”

“No, wait! I mean, I was prob’ly awake… I just don’t quite remember…” He looked at Frack out of the corner of his eye. “’Course, alcohol ’as bin known to improve my memory…”

Frack turned around. “The Scrab’s Head’s just round the corner. I’ll buy yer a drink or two, and see if your memory ‘improves’…”

* * *

“There were two of ‘em…”

“Glukkons?”

The mudokon nodded, his head sunk low over his glass.

“You saw them both?”

“Yeah… The little one climbed out first…”

Frack patiently continued his interrogation. “And where did he go?”

“He jumped across the alley.”

Visk looked up from his own drink. “He jumped? That had to be a good 5 metres! Without a run-up!”

Frack shot him a glance and mouthed for him to stay quiet. “Did the other one jump as well?”

“Yeah…” The mudokon pulled on his pint. “Then they ran off across t’roofs, and I din’t see ‘em after that…”

Frack stood up. “Well, thanks anyway. Drink up, Visk, we’re off.”

Visk downed his pint. “Where?”

“Back to the station.”

* * *

“Six f*cking pints! And all we got was that they were Glukkons, which was something we already knew!”

Frack turned to him. “Don’t shout. At least we can be fairly sure now that we’re dealin’ with assassins.”

Visk nodded, and pressed the buzzer on the station gates again. “We should’ve expected that, really. Olek wouldn’t want to get his hands dirty with something like this…”

Frack pulled Visk away from the gates, angrily. “Keep your f*cking voice down! You wanna get us fired? It’s bad enough that we’re accusing Glukkons…”

Visk lowered his voice. “We both know Olek ordered these killings! We’re gonna have to tell someone eventually…”

“What makes yer so sure? We don’t have any evidence, or even a motive!”

“Frack… Both of the mudokons killed were closely involved with the Anti-Dam protestors. If Olek wanted his Dam to go ahead, he’ll have wanted them out o’ the way so there wasn’t any organised opposition. And there’s somethin’ else…” Visk looked around, then led Frack around the corner into a side street. “Take a look at this!” He pulled out the sheet of paper that held the transcript of Kilk’s last fateful fone conversation. Frack read aloud.

“ ‘A mudokon(?) voice: “Can’t talk for long. Need to meet to discuss future payments. Meet in the warehouse on Sixth Avenue. This might be your lucky day.” Hangs up.’” Frack looked back up at Visk. “What does this prove? Nothing.”

“Listen! Kilk was siphoning off money from the company accounts. He wrote a diary entry saying that he thought Olek was getting suspicious.” Visk paused for breath. “Now, imagine that Olek found out that Kilk was using Olek’s money to finance the mudokon terrorist movement…”

Frack shook his head. “Speculation. There could be any number of explanations! All we know is that a pair of glukkon assassins killed him. That’s all.”

“What about the footprints at the other murders?”

Frack paused, then shook his head and began walking back round towards the gates. “We don’t have any proof that those footprints were there, since you threw away those photos. Even if the murders were connected – and they aren’t – we’ve got no way to prove it, so we’ll just have to carry on investigating Kilk’s death independently. Okay?”

Visk sighed, nodded his head, and pressed the buzzer on the gates again, impatiently.

* * *

“Sorry we kept yer waiting so long, guys.” One of their colleagues had eventually come to open the gates and let them in. “’s just that most of the lads are out on patrol at the moment. There’ve been a lot of small riots recently, so we’ve doubled the number of men on patrol.”

“’s okay.” Visk could see that the station was practically deserted. He hadn’t seen anyone but the three of them since they’d come in. “Did I get a package from the Records Office today?”

“Oh yeah, almost forgot.” The constable pulled a few sheets of official-looking paper from a drawer in his desk and handed them to Visk. “Anyway, I’m meant ter be watchin’ the security cameras now, so I’d better be off. See yer ’round.” The slig turned and wandered away from the desks.

“Yeah, later.” Visk leafed through the paper, thoughtfully.

Frack leaned over his shoulder. “Anything useful?”

“There can’t have been this many people in Kryellos who’ve bought a Scrab .22, some knives, and some Glarmani shoes…” Visk frowned, and read the front sheet a bit more closely. “Oh, that arsehole’s given us a full list of everyone who’s bought a Scrab .22. I only asked for people who’d bought all three…”

“Well, does it at least tell us whether they bought the other stuff as well?”

“Umm… Oh yeah, it does.”

“How many of them are there?”

Visk flicked through the sheets. “Three. No, Four.” Visk grabbed a pen and underlined the relevant details. “This guy’s in prison right now, so he’s out o’ the reckoning.” He crossed one name from the list. “And this one’s a mudokon, so it couldn’t have been him. He could have been buying for someone else, but these other two names seem more likely.” He read them out. “Smick and Crax, both Glukkons, both have been investigated on murder charges before, but both were acquitted.”

Frack grinned. “Do we have their addresses?”

“Right here.”

“Right. You check out Crax, and I’ll check Smick.”

Visk hesitated. “Couldn’t that be dangerous?”

Frack thought, then nodded. “You’re right. Take a pistol with yer, and keep your radio on at all times. First sign of trouble, call for backup. I’ll make sure there’re quite a few patrols nearby to provide backup.”

“Ok. Good luck.”

“Yeah, you too.”
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Ha ha, you thought this fic was dead, did you? Well, think again! I've just had a lot to do, and haven't been able to write much for the last few months... Plus nobody replied to the last chapter... *frowns*

Chapter 7

Crax’s flat had been above a pub, but the pub had long since shut down. The door to the pub had been boarded over, but the boards had rotted, and collapsed as soon as Visk touched them. Tentacles curling in disgust, Visk stepped over the mass of insects that had begun crawling from the wood, dazed, and pulled out his pistol.

There was no working lighting inside the former pub, but the open doorway and gaping windows provided enough light to at least give the appearance of being able to see. What had been tables were now small piles of firewood lying forlornly on the damp floor. There were several large rags that could be called blankets (but only loosely) scattered around the bar, suggesting that the place had been a home for squatters. Now, however, only the chitter of the newly-disturbed insects suggested any kind of life in the building.

Cringing as he kicked the sodden heaps of wood out of the way, Visk made his way to the stairwell at the back of the room. There was little or no light here, so Visk reached for his flashlight. When he illuminated the stairwell, he saw the most treacherous set of stairs he had ever had the misfortune to be required to climb. More than half of the steps were missing, and those that were there looked as if they’d rather not be.

Tentatively mounting the stairs, Visk wondered idly whether Crax came up and down this way every time he left the building, or whether there was a back door. He paused, then cursed himself for not looking for a back door before. Ah well, I’m half way up now. May as well go the rest of the way…

Visk sighed with relief when he reached the top without a mishap. Pausing only to conceal his pistol, he knocked loudly on the appropriate door. There was no reply, so he knocked a little harder. This time, the door creaked open slightly, letting a chink of light out of the room. Visk couldn’t make out the figure stood in the crack, since it was in silhouette, but when it spoke, he was surprised to find that it sounded distinctly mudokon.

“What you want?”

“Umm… Hello…” Visk tried to think of a way to word what he wanted to say. “Is there a glukkon by the name of Crax here?”

The mudokon’s voice was flat and guarded. “Ain’t no glukks ‘ere…”

“Well, do you know if there ever was, and where he is now?”

He could sense that the other was staring at him, and felt relieved when it turned back inside the flat.

“Oi! Crax, Glukk, ever lived ‘ere?”

There was a murmured response, then the mud turned back to Visk.

“Who wants to know?”

Visk froze. “He, umm… I’m with the police, investigating the murder of several muds. We just want to have a word with him…”

The mud paused, then seemed to relax. “There was a glukk ‘ere a while back, but he had, umm, a bit of an accident…” Visk could see the beginnings of a smile on the mudokon’s lips.

“What happened to him?”

The mudokon seemed to suppress a snigger. “Well, he slipped on those stairs out there, and while he was down, we – I mean, someone apparently took the chance to stave ‘is ‘ed in with a brick…”

Visk sighed. “You mean he’s dead? How long ago was this?”

“Good couple o’ months…”

“Well, thanks for your help, anyway…” Visk turned away and began to walk away. As he reached the top of the stairs, he imagined a glukkon tumbling down them, and shuddered. Turning back to the flat, he saw that several of the mudokons had come out, and were grinning at him ghoulishly. He walked back towards them. “I don’t suppose there’s another way out, is there?”

The mud he’d spoken to seemed almost disappointed. “Umm, yeah. Down that way, there’s some stairs on your left…”

Visk sighed with relief. “Thank you…”

* * *

Stepping out into the comparatively fresh air, Visk paused for a while, leaning against the wall and breathing deeply, regretting (not for the first time, and certainly not for the last) his choice of vocation. Then he remembered Frack, and pulled out his radio.

“Frack?”

After a few seconds of static, the reply came back: “Yeah?”

“Where are yer?”

“Just around the block from Smick’s flat, why?”

Visk set off walking in that direction as he spoke. “You’d better wait for me. Radio the rest of the lads, and tell them to meet you where you are. It’s not Crax…”

* * *

“You been checking out the flat, then?”

Frack nodded. “Yeah. Looks like there’s more than one glukk in there, unfortunately. Criminals tend to be cockier when there’s more of ’em…”

“So what’s the plan?”

Frack motioned to the other four officers to listen. “I’ll go up there and ask ’em nicely if they’d like to come to the station and answer a few questions… You guys wait in this alley. I’ll keep my radio transmitting; if yer hear anything that sounds like trouble, come and give me a hand, okay?”

Visk nodded, and the other officers followed suit. “Good luck.”

“Thanks. Fingers crossed I won’t need it…”

Without another word, Frack holstered his gun and tucked his radio into his belt. Buttoning up his jacket against the wind, he made his way out onto the street and approached the building. Visk backed back into the alley, tensing slightly, and keeping his ears peeled for the first signs of trouble on the radio. The other officers were silently attentive, listening to the distorted silence, and sensing very little else of the world. Visk wondered if raids like this were common in the force; this was his first, but that wasn’t to say that he wasn’t just extremely lucky… For all he knew –

He was jolted from his musings by the crackling of voices on the radio. He almost drew his gun and charged into the building then, but he realised in time that the voices were merely the sound of Frack and the building’s occupants talking quietly… Visk strained his ears to make out the muffled and distorted words, but was unable to distinguish anything more than a dull mumbling. He began to become accustomed to the noises. What had he been thinking? Oh yes, about raids. Odd, did all officers in stakeouts find their minds wandering like this? He thought about glancing behind him at the other officers, but found that his body was too tense to make such movements without great effort…

The gunshots his subconscious had been secretly listening for came. Leaping into action, he shot around the corner and pounded down the street towards the steps, his fellow officers not far behind. Visk paused in his haste and fumbled with the door handle, before one of the others grew impatient and shoulder-barged the door, splintering the frame and knocking the door open. Without hesitation, they charged up the stairs towards the suspect’s room. As they rounded the corner onto the landing, Visk saw the crumpled figure of Frack lying beside the open doorway, blood dripping from a wound in his upper arm. Assuming the worst, Visk ran up to him, jumping in shock as bullets whizzed around his head as he passed the doorway. Diving to the floor again beside Frack, he saw to his relief that the wound wasn’t serious, although Frack’s right arm appeared to be unusable, and he seemed to have passed out. Turning to the other officers, Visk saw that their guns were all out and ready. Shaking his head, he called out to the occupants of the flat.

“We’ve got you outnumbered! Give up now and we won’t hurt you. Carry on shooting, and we may be forced to kill you…” He was taking a huge gamble. For all he knew, they might not outnumber the flat’s occupants, and it was reasonable to assume that the glukkons inside were trained assassins, whereas his own men were rookies, like himself…

There was a pause, and the guns inside the flat were silent. Clutching his rifle in his sweaty palms, Visk leaned his head slowly round the doorframe. He didn’t see much inside, however, as the moment his head rounded the frame, there was a blaze of gunfire, and he withdrew his head swiftly. Turning, he nodded angrily to his fellow officers, and indicated that they were going in…

After making the signal, Visk dived into the room, his eyes immediately seeking shelter. After a moment’s indecision, he dived behind a sofa in one corner, managing to avoid the hailing bullets. The officer that followed him, however, was not so lucky, and collapsed to the ground, blood fountaining from the bullet-wound in his shoulder. Two of the others made it behind Visk’s sofa, while the third stopped to drag his injured colleague behind a different chair, narrowly avoiding being hit himself.

Breathing heavily, Visk tried to consider his options. Cursing himself for diving in so recklessly, he realised that he still didn’t have a clue how many criminals they were up against, or even how well armed they were. Glancing at the others, he realised that they were looking to him for orders. He wondered for a second why he seemed to have fallen into the role of leader almost by default, but decided that they shouldn’t wait around to think for too long…

“Okay,” he whispered to one of the two sligs beside him, “I’m gonna make a run for them. You come with me, you two – ” he addressed the other slig and the slig behind the other chair, “cover us. Okay?” The sligs nodded. “Okay. Go!”

Heart pounding, Visk leapt from behind the sofa, running erratically towards the table behind which the enemy seemed to be sheltering. He saw a stocky Glukkon rise up on one arm and take aim at the slig running beside him, but one of the sligs behind them managed to get a bullet into his hand, making him grunt and drop the weapon.

Then they were upon the criminals. Swinging his gun round to bear at one of them, Visk realised his mistake. The glukkon snarled, and with one swing of his arm, knocked the rifle from Visk’s arm, and knocked him to the ground with a jarring thump on the side of the head. As he sank into unconsciousness, Visk realised that they might have had a chance while they were further away, since they were more or less on equal terms with the glukkons when both were using guns. The one thing they shouldn’t have done, however, is get close enough for the glukkons to use their powerful arms…
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as always, Danny's done it again, with another great fanfic keep it up, pro!
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This one was only written yesterday, so is still a bit first-draftish...

Chapter 8

“You idiot!”

Visk blinked as he awoke, a bright white light glaring in his eyes. As he became accustomed to the light, he saw that he was lying in the Pathology Lab, on one of the operating tables, with Lans and Frack standing over him. Several of the other operating tables were also occupied, although it was difficult to make out which of the prostrate forms were alive and which weren’t…

Frack’s arm was in a sling, and his face was furious. “Did yer not think of the safety of the men? Didn’t yer even think of yer own?”

“What… What happened?”

Frack’s frown deepened. “I’ll tell yer what happened! You cost us three good officers and almost jeopardised the entire investigation!”

Visk tried to sit up, but only managed to prop himself up on his elbows. “They died?”

“Two of them. Drak bled to death from a wound in the shoulder before we could get him to hospital. Rett took a shot in the head, and Volt was paralysed from the waist down when they broke his spine.”

Sinking back into his pillow, Visk buried his face in his hands. “Oh god…”

Perhaps a little nervous at having live bodies lying on the beds he usually reserved for corpses, Lans had retreated to the corner, where he was rearranging his microscope slides.

His anger spent, Frack sat himself down on a chair beside the bed. “I’d already called for heavy backup from the station when I saw how heavily armed they were. I tried to warn you guys off, but you must have not heard me over the gunfire…” He looked across the tables in the lab. “By the time the backup got there, Rett was already dead, and Drak, Volt, you, and me were all unconscious. Only Frag was still holding out, and he was almost out of bullets.” Visk felt Frack’s eyes fall on him, and turned his head away, saying nothing. “When the heavy guns got there, the glukkons gave themselves up.”

Visk turned back. “They just surrendered? Didn’t they give you any more trouble?”

Frack shrugged. “They might have planned to. We broke their arms, just to make sure.”

Visk sat up, shocked. “You broke their arms? After they’d surrendered?”

Frack seemed more than a little taken aback by Visk’s outburst. “Hey, we couldn’t afford to take any more risks, okay? They’d already killed two of our men, and we didn’t want to let them try again. For f*ck’s sake, we just saved yer life, and covered for your cockups as best we could, and you object to us exercising a little caution!”

Visk frowned. “Aren’t there any rules about treatment of prisoners?”

“Not that I know of. They’re dangerous criminals, why shouldn’t we protect ourselves against them?”

Visk was going to argue further, but realised he was on shaky ground after f*cking up the raid. Besides that, his head was beginning to hurt, so he sagged back down onto the bed, closing his eyes.

Frack must have realised that Visk was tired, as he stood up to leave. “We’ve got them in the cells. When you’re better, we’ll begin interviewing them, but there’s no rush…”

“I can do it now…” Visk said, groggily, attempting to rise again, but failing.

Frack smiled, and pushed Visk gently but firmly back into bed, and began to walk away. “It’s not often in this job that yer get the chance for a bit of rest. Make the most of it…”

* * *

“I told yer, we ain’t done nothin’!”

“Then why exactly did yer need these?” Frack motioned with his good arm to Visk, who pulled several plastic bags from a drawer and set them on the desk before the two assassins, then looked up to study their faces. The big muscular one was expressionless, as he had been throughout the interview, whereas the small wiry one’s fiery rage of earlier had by now settled into a quieter, colder fury. Visk watched their expressions closely as the contents of the plastic bags became apparent. The bulky one, whose name they had established was Ludd, simply became still more impassive, while his diminutive companion, Smick, stared at the bags in wild-eyed apprehension.

“Recognise them?”

Visk watched as Smick dragged his eyes from the desk surface to the angry face of his interrogator. “Well, I’m a collector, ain’t I? I collect valuable weapons, and ‘em blades are worth a bomb.”

Visk inwardly smiled. “Then can you explain why there are traces of blood on some of these blades? Bloodstains that are proven to be from no more than a week ago?”

Smick glared at him in unbridled hatred. “I probably nicked myself while polishin’ ‘em…”

“Have yer seen these stains?” Frack’s voice seemed all the louder when contrasted with Visk’s quiet but persistent tones. “If yer’d spilled this much blood cleaning knives yer wouldn’t be sat here talking to me!”

Smick flared his nostrils. His slings jerked, as if he were trying to tense his muscles. “Look, I don’t know how the blood got on the knives, but I didn’t kill no drifters, alright?”

Frack rested his hands on the table. “We have a very good pathology lab here at the station, and the blood on those knives has been DNA tested, and shown to be identical to that of one of our victims. Can you explain how your knives were used as a murder weapon?”

Visk knew that Frack was bluffing. The DNA testing facilities in the lab were good, but not that good. They could tell you who the blood didn’t belong to, but to whom it did was another matter… Fortunately, the assassins weren’t aware of that.

“They could have been stolen.” Ludd’s voice rumbled through his barely-moving lips.

In for a penny, in for a pound. thought Visk. “The DNA tests showed no DNA from anybody but yourselves and our victims.”

Ludd’s face briefly blossomed into emotion as he shot an angry glance at the slig, before settling back into impassiveness.

Frack began pacing slowly behind Visk. “And in any case,” he said, quietly, “there was more than just the knives…” On his signal, Visk pulled out the bagged-up Scarb .22. “This gun was not only used to fire the bullet that killed Vice-President Kilk, but has been fired no less than four times in the last month.”

Smick seemed about to say something, but bit his lip. Ludd’s face barely flickered. Frack leaned across the desk again. “We have enough evidence against yer ter justify reopening some of the folders of those yer killed in the past… You could get a lot of years when it’s all gone through.” He turned and strolled over to the window. The harsh light of the midday sun illuminated his torso in brilliant bars. “Unless yer can help us.”

Smick’s head jerked up, and Ludd blinked. Visk looked slightly surprised, and turned to frown at the Sergeant. Smick frowned as well. “To do what?”

“We know why yer killed those people.” Frack turned from the window. “You’re Assassins. It’s yer job. Ye’re not guilty, because yer were just somebody else’s weapons.”

Visk stood up with a start. “Frack, can we have a word?”

Frack stopped, and glared at Visk. Wordlessly, he stopped the tape, and led Visk from the room. “What?”

“Yer sound like ye’re going to let them go!”

Frack sighed. “I’m not letting them go, I’m just letting them assist us in our investigation…”

Visk crossed his arms. “So after that you’re just going to convict them anyway, are you?”

Frack leaned his head closer to Visk’s, and lowered his voice. “Look, there’s no point in convicting them, because they were being paid to do it. It’d be like arresting their guns – a killer can always buy a new weapon…”

Visk frowned again, exasperated. “Then what are you going to do?”

Frack grinned. “Wait and see…” And he turned to re-enter the interrogation room. With a sigh, Visk followed, slipping back into his “good cop” mode as Frack’s grin dropped into a sneer…

“So, you two-”

“What do you want from us?”

Ludd’s rumble startled Frack, although he hid it well. He strode slowly up to the desk. “We could get yer convicted with no trouble for killing that Glukkon, Mr. Ludd. But it wouldn’t be what we really wanted, would it, Visk?”

Visk thought about playing along, but was still feeling a little annoyed at not having been told of the goals of the interrogation, so simply smiled at Frack, who carried on regardless. “And I expect that it wouldn’t be what you would like either, would it?”

Ludd remained expressionless. “Cut the crap. What are you suggesting?”

Frack sighed through his teeth, his routine cut short. “We don’t want you. We want whoever paid you.”

Ludd just laughed, while Smick stared at Frack. “We’re assassins. We have morals. One of ‘em is anonymity of clients.”

Frack stood without turning. “Could yer leave the room for a few minutes, please, Visk? Go and catch up with some of our paperwork or something…”

Visk wanted to ask what Frack was planning, but decided against it. As he closed the door, on his way out, he heard the click of the interview tape being switched off…
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