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01-13-2002, 02:20 PM
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Prelude to Munch

okay i posted the beginging of this fanfic a long time ago but i nver finished it so i am writing it again.

Chapter 1
the gentle calls of the gabbit pod echoed throughout the water, their melodious voices mingling together to form a perfect harmony. Satamire Lur swam happily amidst his pod singing with the rest of them and (like most young gabiits) showing off. He peformed agile and daring acrobatics much to the amusement of his elders( for his tricks were quite basic and required little skill). One of the lead gabbits gave a call, he had spotted a school of Worry fish. immediatly the pod swam after them and happily gorged themselves on the fish(who by this time had gone from worried to totally petrified). after only a few the moments of glutony the gabbits left the now decimated school to continue on its way. Satamire however was not so willing to leave the school be, and despite the calls form his elders he swam after the school at top speed. after about ten minutes of chasing the worry fish(who were faster then they looked) Satamire decided to swim back to his pod. he turned and gasped with horror. he saw his pod being swept up in a great web, they sreamed and sung in totall despair and fright, and before Satamire knew what was happening they had been carried off up out of the water and Satamire was all alone.

(more to come soon)

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01-13-2002, 03:18 PM
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good story, cant wait for the rest
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01-13-2002, 10:05 PM
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San the mudokon walked through the dark forest with slumped shoulders. the forest was almost deserted at this time of night save for the sleepy calls of a slumbering birds. San sighed, his race was dwindeling into nothing, day by day more mudokons were captured and made into slaves, and day by day the few natives (like San) retreated farther and farther into the wilderness. San was a poser he had once led a group of mudokons on a spiritual quest. gathering spooce and meditating, those were happier times. but that was before the sligs had found them. the mudokons had resisted like the proud free muds that they were. San was the only one who had survived. the sligs had no use for slaves who fought back. they had loaded their weapons and killed all of the mudokons. san hung his head in sadness over the memory of his lost brothers.

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01-18-2002, 02:23 PM
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For a long time San just stood there, remebering those who had died, Had, Neb,Fabe, and Gabe. San ran his hand up through his long luxurient feathers. He was a poser and thus possesed an abundance of spiritual energy. But, yet, even with all that spiritual energy he could not save his brothers, he had only managed to save himself. He had not known what to do after that. He had wondered the wilderness of oddworld for what seemed like ages, he journeyed through the srab temples and across Paramonia all the way to the Mosiac lines. And it was there that Abe had found him.He had told San that the Mudokon liberation was at hand and that San should join with him to bring it about. But San had refused, he had thought that Abe and his followers were fools, and he still thought that now. Without meaning to he glanced up at the Mudukon moon and almost subconsciouly raised his hand to the Mudukon paw, and for that moment San wanted to join his fellow muds, to save his race. but that want did not last long, how could save his race when he could not even save those under his care. He laughed then, a short bitter laugh, "they are all fools" he cried out, "they are only going to get themselves killed". And then, burning with guilt and bitterness he ran off into the drakness.

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01-18-2002, 03:10 PM
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Spiritual mud that wants to join people he hates but can't even save a few under his care and a lonely gabbit together? That's cool. It really is, I like this. Write more *stares at chapters, waiting for new*.

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03-09-2002, 01:11 AM
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More story

sorry i have not added to this in a while i have been busy...

Satamire was not sure how long he drifted through the water, rembering his family, grieving over thier capture, and wondering how he was going to survive on his. he floated in an almost subconcious state untill finally he smacked his head on something hard. when he came to he realized that it was the ocean floor, he had drifted to a beach! cautiously he poked his head out off the water, it was evening now, the mudokon moon was high up in the sky and the night breezes gently blew across the water. Satamire shivered, he had never been above land before, it was all so strange and alien to him. he looked towards a large clump of tall dark things, which had flecks of green amongst their poles. Satamire grew afraid, this new world was terrifying.
"what difference does it make he thought to himself theres nothing left for me back in the ocean, i have nothing to lose". nd with that he boldly hopped out of the water onto the beach.

More to come soon

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03-09-2002, 02:05 PM
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Zarkaal, Glukkon big cheese and C.E.O of Shrapel (a division of Splinterz) watched with glee at the sight of a heard of scrabs being herded into a pen through the simple method of shooting at them. at last, the scrabs were trapped within the pen, they would be left there for several weeks, without food so that they would be forced to eat each other, then, when most of the heard was dead he would select the strongest and ship them off to his private pen. Zarkaal grinned, "this is only the beginning he thought to himself, soon i will have enough moolah to break away from this tiresome Splinters". with that thought in mind he returned to the tedious business of creating saw blades for Splinterz.

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awsome lantra never knew you had that old fan fiction thing in you
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04-01-2002, 10:44 PM
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actually most of my career plans involve writing

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04-04-2002, 12:51 AM
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Great job how you fill in the gaps between the games. Can't wait for more....
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04-28-2002, 01:33 PM
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ok everybody here is the next part of the story....

Satamire hopped thorugh the jungle occasionaly jumping at small sounds. I dont like the place he thought to himself I dont like it a all. The forest was pitch black and seemed as silent as death itself save for the occasional chirp from a sleeping bird or the snap of a twig. The trees were tall with leaves a variety of pastel washed colours, such as green or purple. As Satamire countinued to hop further into the jungle the undergrowth grew thick and thicker and the trees grew closer together. Suddenly there was a great rushing sound, Satamire gave a scream of terror and then...

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