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Happy The Jukabo Mud.

Chapter 1: Decisions


Chevil was looking out of the cave, wondering if they would see him. Chevil was a mudokon, once a slave but escaped and hid in a cave. Sligs have been trieng to find him ever since. Because chevil did something worth killing. Before his escape, he had messed with the manager, sneaking around in his office, Gereld, the manager saw him. Chevil hesiteted as the gluk was about to scream out help. Chevil hit Gereld with his bank vault and got knocked unconscience making him forget everything including his name.Sligs came running toward Gerelds office, but Chevil had already climbed out the window.

Chevil heard a slig talking about hearing voices and seeing fire in the cave and bet 50 moolah to go inside. the slig foolishly agreed, not knowing what was to become of him. " See! No monstAhh!" the slig screamed. "Yo! Y-y-ya in here? Hello?" The other slig No. 1632 shuddering. "Yo, poo brain, say cheese." The other slig shot No.1632 repeateingly. but stopping and morphed back into Chevil. "Ack! uhhhh," The slig Chevil morphed into moaned. He swung back and forth and fell over. See, Chevil came from the Jukabo clan. A Clan where mudokons are taught to slip into other species and control them, sorta like posessing but you go inside instead of making a morph ball go inside for you. He had learned it as a child but forgets to use it at times of need. Chevil walked outside, decideing to go out and find his tribe.

End of chapter 1. How'd ya like it?
(Well, i havn't really thought of name yet.)
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i think it's good, i can' wait for another chapter!
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Chapter 2: Sightings

Chevil was walking along the never ending rows of trees. Wondering where he was going and where to find his tribe. Meanwhile, an industrial place that also worked for Gereld were said to keep a look out, as having Gerelds memory almost back. A slig, No. 64325676 and No.96545 thought they saw a mudokon. With No.96545, or Gary, (easier way) Gary's zoom in googles he held the wantede paper close to his face and...."It's a MATCH!" Gary yelled out. No.64325676 (or Cody) sounded the alarm. Sligs were running in the forest. Chevil was running ahead of them trieng to get away! "Now what!? Wait!" Chevil said having an Idea.

He saw a tree, he grabbed hold of the stump of wirled around the fleing mess of flieing sligs. whew, that was close Ack!" Chevil was startled by the loud bark of a sloggie. "Go! move it! thes sligs need you!" Chevil tried to get it away. The sloggie grrrd and Chevil. "uhoh." Chevil climbed up a tree as fast as he could. "What's going on ol' pal? Meh com'on. That mud escaped. Chevoil climbed down and headed toward a stream to rehydrate. chevil thought he should of never left the cave, but there was no turning back now. Chevil practiced morphing into scrabs and paramites, knowing he might need the knowledge later...

there's chapter 2! Ch. 3 coming soon.
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Nice chapters, Chevil got in big trouble!
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Note: I will be gone tomarrow, I don't know if i'll be using a computer, don't know when the story will be updated. see ya. Peace out.
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CCCCCCCOLOOOOOOOOOLLLLLL! GREAT! ! Can't wait till the next one!
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I have not left yet. i will leave soon. This chapter will probably be short.

Chapter3: Mysterious visits

When chevil scooped his last drink of water, he felt somthing cold at he back of his head. "freeze." Said a slig. Chevil was VERY fightened. He turned around and...."aHHHhh!uhhh," The slig yelled. Chevil was now controlling thslig. He walkied over to the building and stasrting shooting 4 slig poppers!After all 4 were dead. Chevil morphed out and WHAM! Everything went dark.

Chevil woke up in a cell. Wonderi ng what had happend when he killed thoe 4 sligs. He was chained to a ball that had a ean face painted on it. "i am so screwed." said Chevil. Chevil heard chanting and screaming, soon a slig came by and opened the cell door and suddenly exploded! "Wow, that was toatally wierd. Chevil said to himeslf. "I gotta get out of this plce! huh?" chevil saw the words, "This way" spray painted on the wall. " Wow, i guess I'll follow it." He said again. The arrow led all the way to the poop chute. He climbed it not knowing the suprise he'll get.

End of chapter 3. Note: Cameo/appearences: the ball Chevil was chained to was a joke of a bullet bilL. lol.
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That was really good! Have a good time!
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Good news! My cousin has a laptop! I will be writing little less though...

Chapter 4: All tied up

"Ahhhhhhhhhhhh!" Screamed Chevil whil he was being thrown out of the poop chute. Some grubbs saw him and ran right where he landed. When Checil woke up he was tied to a stick post! "Who are you and whyed ya land near our village!" Screamed the leader Grubb who's name was Jamon. "uhhh, huh? oh, well my name is Chevil and i'm not a flying or sent mudokon to destroy your tribe, i'm just tieing to find my tribe and be one with them again." he said. "How do we know you're not a spy from Vykker's lab?" Said jamon. Chevil asked them, "Why don't I have my industrial uniform on?". "Good point, sorry for tieing you up. We just wern't sure." apolgized Jamon. "Meh, it's okay." said Chevil. "So what's your story?" jamon asked. Chevil explaind about the sneaking and glukkon and jumping ot the window. "wow, and they've been hunting you ever since?" A grubb asked. "Yup." Answerd Chevil. "You can't just keep running away from them! Fight!" jamon said. "But All i hve is my morphing powers! and they run out sometimes!" said Chevil. "Well, then do you know how to use a arrow and bow?" Jamon asked. Well then put some make up and give you and bow and arrrow and then bam! You can be fearless as a mudokon shaman" jamon said. So they got to work!

"i don't think he looks half bad!" said a grubb. "Now! go get'em!" said jamon. "um, sure, but can i take half the gear off!? I can bearly move." Chevil said. "Sure."Jamon said. and he was off.

Okay, gotta go!
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thanks mudling!

Chapter 5: Ambush

When Chevil was off to the industrial place he workd at, he saw some mudokons running toward the place. "Go get'em boys!!!" Yelled a mudokon. They started shooting the place with spoocebows! "hello? exscuse me, um anyone no what a Jukabo mudokon is?" Chevil asked out loud."Woah!Wait, you just can't get in the cross fire! what's your name? And where do you come from?" asked the mudokon named Monroe. "well, my name is Chevil and I come from the Jukabo tribe." Says Chevil. "Wait! the jukabo tribe? You can morph intpo things!!!" exclaimed Monroe. "Hey you there! freeze!" said a slig. "in your dreams!" Chevil said while morphing into the slig. "Ahhh! Get....ou....t!!!Ahhh!" the slig screamed. "Well, I'm off! See ya!" said chevil inside the slig.

"Uhhh, boss? you have your fulll memory back right?" asked Gerelds slig."Hey! Yeah! And we have toi find worker Number: 43855424298!!! hey, what's going on out there?" Asked Gereld. "Mudokons are attacking sir! But we have our best men out there fihghting!" said the slig. The door to Gerelds oom opened. "Hey butt-wipe, smile, don'tblink, and say cheese." Said chevil in a slig's body. "Wha-!!! hey! What the heck was that for! You killed my best slig!" Gereld yelled. chevil pointed the gun at Gereld's head. "No, you wouldn't! Help!!!!" cried Gereld. Sligs came falling from the surcerity chute. "Freeze! Put, the gun, down. NOW." said one of the sligs named Lane. chevil put the gun down. "Should we put him in the prison boss?" Louis the second slig asked. "No, put him, in th interrigation room. Hehehehehe." Laughed Gereld. And chevil was brought...tothe interrigation room.

That was chapter 5. chapter 6, maybe tomarrow or later.
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That was really good! Good chapter! WRITE MORE! *Starts drooling*
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Thanks! Sorry I havn't been writing much, I was VERY buy.

Chapter 6: Intrrigation

So there Chevil was. Chained up, dressed like a slave. "Boss will be here in a secoond.hehehehe." chuckled a slig. The doors opened. "What a poor excuse for a rebel." Gereld said. "tell me. What is your name?" Asked Gereld. Chevil remained still and quiet. "I said WHAT is your name?" Gereld asked again. Still, Chevil remained quiet. "So you wanna play games with me eh? Let in the slogs." Commanded Gereld. The slig let in three angry and hungry slogs. "M-m-my name is Chvil" Chevil murmmrd under his breath. "I can't hear you!" said Gereld. "My name is Chevil. "That's a good slave. Now, could you explain why you had to hit me?" Asked Gereld with a evil grin. The slig accidently pulled the lever that set Chevil free! "Oops." said the slig. Chevil ran out the door! "What were you thinkin g! Get him!" Screamed Gereld.

I have to gO! I'll finish later!

Chapter 6: Interrigation, Part 2

"Gotta...get...out!" Screamed Chevil. "WARNING, WARNING, mUDOKON IS ESCAPING. bLOCK ALL EXITS! SHOOT TO KILL!" a slig over the speaker yelled out. Chevil saw one unclosed exit. "What the! Close the main gate! Now!" Yelled a slig. "Yaaa!" Chevil ran for the exit! But missed. " there's no whre to run Chevil, you're trapped! Wait, what's that sound!?" Asked Gereld in a harsh voice.BOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMM!!!!!! "get them! " Yelled a familiar voice. "Jamon! You came! But, how, when?" Stammerd Chevil. "I knew there was trouble, and there was a wanted sign on a paramite pie box.Now get them!" Jamon screamed again. "Nooo! Heeeeellllllppppp!" Gereld yelled. "You are a demon! Take this! and that, and... this. aw man." Chevil looked up and saw Jamon and 10 other Grubbs ran away because the others died. "hehe, Iwas joking! Ahhh!" Chevil sceamed.

That is chapter 6! I'll finish later.
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I am back! I'll probably be writing more.

Chapter 7: The massacre
Chevil was running down the halls trieing to escape from shooting sligs. chevil morphed into a bigbro rapidly fireing! "This is madness! i have to find a way out!" Thought Chevil. He ran into Gerelds room and locked the door. He came out of the bigbro and prayed to Odd alive. He suddenly heard morphing sounds outside the barracaded windows. He came out the door and saw mudokons running around killing sligs. He looked around. he found Jukabo muds! "they were living with another tribe all along!!" Chevil thought. "Don't, move. it'll be very quick." said a slig holding a gun in his hand.

"Take this!" said a Jukabo mud. He punched the slig and bit part of his skin off! "Yaaaa!" screamed the slig. "woah, you're wild!" Said Chevil. "Yeah! what's your name?" Asked the mud named Charles. 'My name is chjevil I'm a Jukabo mud looking for my tribe, but i seemed to have found them!" Said Chevil. "Well, to your luck you're talking to one right now!" said Charles. "No! My beautiful City of machines! All ruined! All because of you Chevil!!! I WILL HAVE MY REVENGE!!!!!!!!" Gereld swcreamed out loud! and with all of Gerelds madness he turned into a a** kicking machine! "Uhoh. We're in very big trouble." Chevil said.
that is chapter 7!
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Very, Very COOL" Please contine! Or else... Muhhaaahhh! Aham. Great story!
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Thanks Fuzzleman54321!

Chapter 8: Mass descruction

"Muahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!!! Puny Mortals! Bow down to me!!!!!" Screamed Gereld. "He's lost it!" said a crouching slig. "You got that right!" said another slig. "ahhhhhhh!" Screamed Chevil. Mudokons were shooting from spooce bows and throwing spears and hitting him hard! Nothing worked! "You cannot defeat me! i'm Invincible!!!!" screamed Gereld. Suddenly he shot a beam of light that destroyed everything in it's path! "Ack! there's no way to defeat him!" charles said. Chevil spotted a remote control on Gereld's half-burnt desk. "Not if i can help it!" Chevil said. "Huh? And where do you think you're going!?" Gereld screamed.

Gereld shot beams at Chevil! Chevil dodged every one of them! "aha!" Chevil said. he pushed one of the buttons! That let Gereld out of his seat! "hey! Why'd ya do that!?" screamed Gereld. Chevil pushed a button that made the beam aim for Gereld's suitcase full opf money! "Noooo! You fool! My money!" Yelled gereld. Chevil finally pressed a button that made the machine push down and crush gereld! "Nooooooooooo!!!!!!AHHHH!" SMUSH! Which made an earth quake causing oil cans to drop and spill causing a big fire! "We have to escape! But how!?" Chevil screamed.
that was chapter 8!
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Thanks mudling, thanks Fuzzleman54321!

Chapter 9: fire escape.

Oil cans were spilling by the second! (BTW it's a oil factroy.) "We're All gonna die!" Charles screamed. Suddenly a circle of fire surrounded Charles and Chevil! Then, Chevil fainted! "Too, much...heat.uhhh." Chevil moaned. "Chevil! Wake up man!" charles yelled. the fire circle was closing in! It seemed all hope was lost! "Chevil, wake...up," Charles was actually crieing for help! And when the circle was about to hit them, A shaman appeared in the sky! Pushing the fire away leaving Charles enough time to drag Chevil out. the whole factory blew up in a GIGANTIC Explosion! Charles saw it from a nearby hill.

Charles led Chevil to a small stream, and poured water on Chevil's face. "What? What happend?" Chevil asked. "You fainted in the building when it was on fire, a shaman helped me rescue you. You do know what I'm talking about right?" Charles asked. "Yeah, but where am I?" Chevil asked again. "Hehe, welcome, to the Jukabo Tribe." Charles said.
FIN
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That was soooo cool! I liked that story! make another story soon!!!!!!!!!!
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