19's destiny

[Abe16]

Okay!where do I start...

A long time ago, baby slig was born from Skillya, then soon brought him in to a buisness factory called Meats r us.they made him, num. 19. When he was 24 they ranked him to be a bodyguard for Mack, the factory boss. He had other jobs too, like cleaning up slog poo, the janitor and tons of other jobs.

Then one day, A report came in that mudokon warriors were heading straight toward this factory, Num.19 got scared and tried to escape, but Mack told him he had to protect him. When Mack went to sleep, Num. 19 went to the back exit, but that was the meat grinding room, but he had no choice, it was either staying there and get humiliaqted by muds when I die or die trieing to get out, and of cource, he chose the 2nd one. Luckily he was in gymnastics in school and got out fine.

He went to the exit which was right under a meat chopper, he held his breath and ran!... "Am i alive!.. Yay!"

i have to log off, my dumb bro wants to play!

[odd chick]

Um......that was a bit too short. It could've been way better as well, but it IS a good idea for a story. Don't give up.

[Kimon]

Way too short. I know nothing about the character, where he lives, what he does, nothing. If you embellish it could turn into a good story though!

[Abe16]

Uh, I thought i made it clear, my baby brother scrwed things up, I had to let him cause my mom wanted me to let him,
chapter 1:
A long time ago, baby slig was born from Skillya, then soon brought him in to a buisness factory called Meats r us.they made him, num. 19. When he was 24 they ranked him to be a bodyguard for Mack, the factory boss. He had other jobs too, like cleaning up slog poo, the janitor and tons of other jobs.

Then one day, A report came in that mudokon warriors were heading straight toward this factory, Num.19 got scared and tried to escape, but Mack told him he had to protect him. When Mack went to sleep, Num. 19 went to the back exit, but that was the meat grinding room, but he had no choice, it was either staying there and get humiliaqted by muds when I die or die trieing to get out, and of cource, he chose the 2nd one. Luckily he was in gymnastics in school and got out fine.

He went to the exit which was right under a meat chopper, he held his breath and ran!... "Am i alive!.. Yay!" So he went in the stockyards, then he saw a big cage with scrabs, "Ready.....Aim..... FIRE!" BAMBAMBAM! "Hehe, all in the wrists!" He said blowing the smoke off his gun, "now to continue!" He encounterd , scrabs and bats and paramites when he reached a part where there was a.....KING SCRAB! "Oh darn..." Said num.1 "RAHHHHH!" screeched the scrab, BAMBAMBAMBAMBAMBAM!!!! Went the gun "RAHHHHH!" screeched the scrab again, then it pushed num.19 aside and was ready to stick its sharp foot in his stomach when....PEWPEWPEW! went a mudokons gun, "I think I heard it over here!" said the mudokon, "Uhoh!" said num.19 and in a dark corner, ''Hey what are those glowing red eyes over there?" said the 1st mud, "poke it with a stick!" said the 2nd mud, "Don't you dare," 19 said, "Ahhhh! a slig run!" screamed them both running. "Ha! now to continue my quest," he said. And he walked off striding with every step....

there! next chapter tomarrow!

[Leto]

Bares resembelence to my previous topic, 'Unidentified', which most likely bares resembelence to other topics.

Still, keep it up. I never finished Unidentified, sadly. Please finish this one.

[Kimon]

Okay, good story! I'm looking forward to more.

[Abe16]

chapter2:Okay, here we go.part:1

Then he reached a point with a gigantic moon "What the!stupid moon" he said, bam! went his gun. "Woahwoahwoah!ahhhhhhhhhhhh!Uh!!" screamed 19, What he didn't know was that was the end of the line, seriously! He banged his head on the floor "owwwww,what the heck!" and what we didn't know folks this was rupture farms So anyway he didn't know he was at Monasiac lines! "Hey! Monasiac lines! I've heard about this through legends!
Gotta go the school! part 2 when I get back,

[odd chick]

That was pretty good, Abe16. But, like some of your other stories, one event leads into another really quickly. Were you rushed because you had to go to school? :S It's okay though, because it's still a good story. Keep it up! I can't wait to see what happens with number 19 in Monsaic Lines!

[Abe16]

Ah Finally, the weekend!Part2:

Then he reached a point with a gigantic moon "What the!stupid moon" he said, bam! went his gun. "Woahwoahwoah!ahhhhhhhhhhhh!Uh!!" screamed 19, What he didn't know was that was the end of the line, seriously! He banged his head on the floor "owwwww,what the heck!" and what we didn't know folks this was rupture farms So anyway he didn't know he was at Monasiac lines! "Hey! Monasiac lines! I've heard about this through legends!"Woah! big stu,woah! big rocks falling from the ceiling!?De Ja Vu!" said Num.19. "helipants activate!" commaned num.19. "helipants, engaged," said his pants.LOL.

"Ha! now I'll get past!Wait!Wha-!?" wonderd num.19. Fwoop!out in a flash came a mudokon with a sligshot demanding a password! "Uh, ok! mudokons suck!Haha! wait what are you doing!you don't have to-!" BAM! and that was all he said. "uhhhhhh,wha?" grunted num.19. "Gluck gluck gluck ya!gluck gluck gluck ya oooooooh! caribou!" chanted the native muds. "WHA! Urrrrrr,urrrrrr," grunted num.19 trieing to get free from the rope that held him, "Face it, you are trapped!" said the leader native mud. "urrrrrrrr,urrrr!uh, there's only one thing to do!Pants!disableize!" commanded num. 19. "Get him!" said a native."Huhuhuhuhuh!All this running is hurting my lungs! " so he quickly dashed behine a bush, luckily, they didn't see him. "Phew! that was close!, what the! par-a-m-o-n-i-a? s-c-r-a-b-a-n-i-a? wha!? You must jump in, wha!? no way! nu uh!, Woah!" said num. 19 as the mysterious stranger pushed him in.

"ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!UH!, that jerk!

What will happen next! tune in next time!for another adventure of... 19'S DESTINY!

[Abe16]

reply, REPLY!

"grrrrrrr, why I outta, Huh?" said num.19. "Hey! a crawling slig! so what number are you?" said a slig on duty. "Uh, number 19, and you are..." asked number 19. "19 eh, number's 28,I'm on duty here, and it looks likes you need some pants, here," offerd 28, "urrrrr,uurrr, POP! thanks, I-" Clomp clomp clomp! "shhh, there's someone spying on us," cautioned 28. 28 slowly walked over to a rock and..... "Huh!?Ahhhhhhhhhh!" screamed 28, "NUMBER 28!" Look, it's the slig!" said a native mud, "Get him!" commaned another native mud, "Uhoh! Ahhhhhhh!huff,puff!," screamed 19, uh oh, another gap, Helipants, activate!" commanded 19, "helipants, activating" said his pants and took off, finally, a place with sligs best friend, 'Helipants disableize!" commanded 19 "helipants diableizing," said his pants, "Uh! Okay, Here boy!," he called a slog, "Ruff,ruff ruff!" said the slig, the Abe guy disappered in near the temple!?He's probably inside, let's go!"

It took a while to get inside but eventually made it, " let's- shhh, waith, it's them again, I'll just get my gun and- wha! my gun!my gun! where's my gun!Grrrr! go sic'em! boy!" commanded 19, 'GrrrrrrRuff!" snarled the slog and started attacking, "ruff ruff!," said th slog happily, "Hehe! good boy! here's a treat!" said 19, and gave him a sloggie treat, good nutriton for your slog! LOL. anyway, he gave the slog and activate his helipants and got out of there as quickly as possible, hehe, no job is too tough for me, wait! is the Abe!?walking into a door!" he screamed, he and his slog, just barely made before the door closed. ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZT!!!!! went a loud noise, "hat in the oddworld was that!" said 19, and it was Abe getting his first tatoo at big face's place. and he went into the portal that abe went to....

REPLY!!!!!please,

[odd chick]

That chapter was better than the others that you've written. So, the time of this story is set during Abe's Oddysee, right? I've only read a few stories based on that game from a slig's point of view. This is a very interesting concept. Keep going with this story-I think it could turn out well.

[Abe16]

thanx Oddchick!

Fwoop!, abe popped out of a portal, and into the paramonia well, Fwoop!,19 popped out, "geez when I find that guy I'll knock his teeth out, Wha!" said 19, "So, you came back in one peace, now you must hop inside the paramonia well," said the mysterious guy, "Nu uh! you are going dowahhhhh! put dowahhhhhhhhhh!" screamed 19 as he fell down the well, "hehe, get's him every time," chuckled the mysterious guy.

"Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!Uh! the son of a geek!" BOOM! went a bomb, "what the heck!" said 19, abe just blew up the slig that was guarding that place and called Elum and leaped the gap, "oh geez,another gap!, said 19, so he got the helipants started until he saw a mudokon demanding uh password again, "....sic'em, boy," said 19 "ahhhh!" said the mud running off. what the mud didn't know was that he accidently pulled the lever, "ha, com'on, uhhh, Sparky! yeah! com'on sparky," 19 said, when they got up there, an elum was eating honey, when a rock hit the hive a honey bee hive, "oh crud," said 19, he activated his helipantsand got passed the the bees, following Abe.

When he reached the challenge room, "Gulp, this is it, heyb wait a minute, I can fly!" so he went in and did what he always does and went in the door with Sparky.ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZT!!!!! "huh! wait for me!" Fwoop! said 19, "grrrrrr, that sligs going to pay." Bigface said with anger.
Fwoop! abe ran to the other room and-"ROOOOOOOOARRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!" Abe screamed as the Shrykull, BOOM BOOM BOOM BOOM!!!!!! went Monasiac lines, "Ahhhh!It's gonna blow!" said a Native mud, fwoop!.....Fwoop!
Abe and number 19 jumped into the portal,

Hehe, last chapter tomarrow or later.

[Abe16]

Okay you can reply now!


"That blasted 19 left me! And we're losing money brother!" Mack said. "Don't worry, we haven't run out of Sligs yet, have we?" Molluk said in a sneer voice, "Even though the battles been 3 days long that doesn't mean I'm not rich." Molluk said again.

Later in the stockyards....

Fwoop! "Uh, hehe, now all I need to do is shut down Rupture farms and get through the stockyards unnoticed." Abe said to himself. Fwoop! Uh!, hey! sligs and slogs!" said 19 happily, "Hey guys!It's me!Number19!" 19 said happily again, "Hey! you're the chump that left Mack!" said a slig, and then there was a blackout, the slig had punched 19 so hard, he had a bleeding nose, (or tenticle) and was knocked unconsious, but so was Abe, the 4 sligs dragged Abe and 19 to the punishment room.

Just then number19 woke, up with Abe staring at him,"What did you do?" Abe said softly, "I uh, left Mack, he was making me die for him," 19 said, "dont worry, you'll soon be rewarded, for your bravery," abe said gloomy, just then molluk came in with Mack and Toast, their glowing eyes and startling appeance could even scare a big bro.

"Ha!so this is Abe huh?Not much to look at." Molluk,Mack and Toast all chuckled, "So, you thought you could leave my brother to die eh? well you've goy another thing coming, AND you Abe, you think you could rescue all your friends and shutdown half of my fatory eh? well yeah ya did but not all of it!Bah, pull the lever," Fwoop!Fwoop! Then, the mysterious guy and Bigface popped out and electricutied Mack,(who died) Toast, (who died) and Molluk(who becomes a crazed sicoteck gluk, who runs around the building,)The mysterios guy frees 19, and Bigface frees Abe, "I thought wrong about you 19, you truly are great," said Bigface to 19, "And you!Abe!yoy both have a lot in common," said the mysterious guy said to Abe. Fwoop!Fwoop!Fwoop!Fwoop! And off they went, to the Monasiac collisium.
THEEND!
"Wow grandpa 19,you're the best storyteller ever!" said 19's grandchildren "Yup, and that was, ME!" said 19 as a grandfather.

Hope you liked the story and ending! (All the characters bow )

[odd chick]

I thought it was really funny when the beehive fell on 19! I got a bit of a chuckle out of that, but the story was way too short! Everything was just like 'ZIP!!!!' and then it was over. Well, overall, it was a decent idea for a story.

[The Marching Mudokon]

You had a great cocept for the story but like what others have said it was a bit too short.

[Leto]

Found link to Unidentified. http://www.oddworldforums.net/showth...t=Unidentified

Hey! You posted in it! (At least different numbers in the heirachy...) Damn! You also (somehow, I don't know, mentally) used my idea for a plot development! Good slig. Damn! You must be phsycic or something...