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The composition is well placed, and if I knew what it was like to be a girl telephoning another girl I might be able to comment more.
However there is one suggestion, what does the poem sound like if you change the last two lines around a bit?
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Hey, thanks! By the way, this probably isn't what normal girls sound like when they telephone each other--as Rexy can tell you, I'm hardly normal
But thank you, I'll change that when I get time.
And ta, Slaveless. Much love.