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Well, who has the time to do that? I seem to remember that you don't. August 16th, what do I get? Nothing from you!
Ah, you get the idea. Just mention it, and we'll say happy birthday!
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Cheers, sorry i mised your B-day last year, i didn't come on much over Summer. And you hadn't ben eading my stories for really long back then (at ast comparitively) but dont worry, i may have something planned!
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OOOHLALA!!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!! How cruel of me not noticing it
Did you get some nice presents????
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Yeah, what did you get? If you don't mind us asking.
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Um... i mostly got money. But i did get a t-shirt and a load o' sweets and... my sister's gonna kill me if i don't remember... oh, i got a parody version of "Lord of the Rings" and... oh yeah, a mini remote control car!

Oh, and that's a card that i got off my best friend!
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are you gonna write another chapter or what?!
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YEAH!! Acyually we are waiting for your super chappies!! YAAY super... woosh woosh...
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Writers block!!!
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Hmmm... must have forgoten to reply earlier... oh, well...

AH HAH HAH HAH , Hah Hah hah , hah...
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What a funny card.

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Got it. Hope you like and sorry it was a while coming: I got exams after Easter so I've had a lot to do.


Chapter 10, Drawing near.

Aaron arrived at his cage at about half nine. That meant an hour and a half till he escaped. There was no sign of Bill but the map was stuffed under his bunk. He tried to study it and test himself but couldn’t concentrate. He curled up and tried to catch some sleep but had the same result. There was still no sign of Bill and Aaron didn’t want to lave without saying bye. And on the other hand if the guards arrived with Bill at the same moment be made his break he was dead meat.
The hours had dragged by all day, every hour seeming like a week. Now that there was only an hour and a half till he escaped time was passing even slower. The dangers and warnings of the night and the days to follow passed through his mind, blotting out his courage and hope. “So much for being an optimist,” He thought to himself.
As the seconds ticked slowly by Aaron became more and more terrified at the thought of what he was about to do. Desperately he tried going over the instructions in his head. After a while he decided he had them sussed and recalled the map and the exact passages he would have to take to avoid the worst of the guards. He was starting to wonder if he would really be able to cross 1 floor every 10 minutes. Then could he really escape and get a mile away in 20 minutes? He went over his instructions again:

20 minutes to reach the weaponry and 20 minutes to grab some useful stuff.
50 minutes to reach the engine room and 5 to shut down power in AC.
An hour to get to AC and minutes to get the Orb.
Then an hour to get to the engine room leaving 20 minutes to escape.
(Climb onto boiler 3 and through the skylight, then 15 metres from the left wall)
A few days of leg it Southwest to reach the forest-and safety.

Bill sat wondering what exactly was in the forest to keep him so safe when the door of bunks swung open and a beaten up mudokon fell inwards, landing on his chest. The mudokon dragged his body between the rows of cages. As he drew nearer Aaron suddenly recognised him. He gasped.
It was Bill. But he was covered in long, purple scars. Where he wasn’t scabbed he was bleeding; he was soaked in sweat and blood and stank like a toilet! He dragged himself over to his cage and glanced at Aaron: “What time is it?”
Aaron glanced at the clock on the wall beside the door where the sligs could see it as they came in and out. “10 to.”
“To what?”
“10 to 11. 10 minutes before I leave.”
Bill looked up at him from the floor. “You ready?”
“As I’ll ever be I suppose.” Aaron sat for a moment and then made up his mind: “Bill, you can come with me, we can both get away from this place, you don’t need to stay here. You can see freedom to.”
Bill let out a hoarse laugh and then answered: “Think about it Aaron, you know I can’t do that. You need to be as quick as you can getting out.”
“But you could go down to the boiler room and w-”
“Aaron, you have to escape, whether you like it or not. I don’t. You can save us Aaron. Only you.”
“But...” He wanted to tell Bill that by the time the Orb was safe he might be dead, that he deserved and needed freedom. But looking at Bill he knew it would be pointless. The sad heap of skin and bones and blood in the cage opposite him looked back through dull, empty, trapped eyes that would never know freedom. There was nothing Aaron could do to change the lifetime of pain and suffering that Bill had seen.
Bill broke the silence by glancing at the clock and saying: “It’s 11. You’d better go.” Aaron slowly got to his feet, pushed open to door of his cage and jogged towards the door.
“Wait a minute!” Bill called after him. Aaron stopped and looked back hopefully. Bill continued: “It takes a slurg almost half a day to climb a wall.” Aaron looked at him in confusion and then turned and ran.
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Huh? Whuzza... What's that about a slurg!?
Oh, well. Good chapter, want more, all the rest..
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Maybe you should hav a look at Aaron's instructions in this chapter and what Bill said wen he tested him in the last.
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Thanks for making me go over that, Splat. I just noticed something.
We are missing chapter eight.
I've gone over the last two chapters and am quite sure that there is no other mention of a slurg. I have noticed something else that is quite disturbing, however...
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Wee! Finally! You didn't mention how many minutes he had to get the orb... But anyway, this is cool!
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Oh yeah, sorry, it's 5 minutes. And Sorry about not including a chapter 8, there isn't one, i just missed a number. Sorry about that too! (wow, I'm doin well lately!)
The bit about the slurg should become clear in one of the next 2 chapters (I'm not exactly sure which yet)
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Ok, then. If you say so.
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Nice! But we want more!! :P:P:P
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I've read you're story - its brilliant! PLEASE right more, it was just getting really good! I love it! Continue writing!

MY LIFE DEPENDS ON IT!!!!

Oh yeah, when you have writers block I found it good to read a really well written story and you start getting tons of ideas.
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Cheers Paramite hunter. Acctually, you're right. I just spent an hour writing a chapter of my other story (see my sig). I'll get on with this next.
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Such efficient posting form T-nex! Hers your chapter, hope you like it.

Chapter 11, The Orb.

It was 11:22. Aaron arrived at the weaponry 2 minutes late. He’d had to take a detour to miss a drunken slig who was attracting attention. He’d almost run straight into a B-B slig and his heart was racing.
The sligs’ weaponry was, to put it bluntly, a mess. Weapons and various other metal… things… were piled randomly into crates and drawers as well as strewn all over the floor. There was a rail running across the ceiling on the wall furthest from the door. Several hooked objects hung from it and lay slightly bent on the floor beneath it. A gun-rack lay on its side in a corner – surrounded by rusty guns. There was a very wide shelf on the left wall from the door piled up to near breaking point with metal objects.
It was the rail across the wall that Aaron went for first. He ran his hand over the metal tubes and spheres till he touched to object he was looking for. A grappling hook was the most important thing.
“A grappling hook, something you can measure a metre with, a compass and a few weapons,” Were the words of the old mudokon. The door, Aaron knew, was a metre wide for “quick access”. Aaron clambered over to the gun-rack and grabbed a few rusty broken weapons he thought were about right. Then he measured them in the doorway and found the one that was closest to the right length. He also found a small compass on the floor just inside the doorway.
“A few weapons.” A quick excavation of a draw revealed a small clear plastic bottle labelled “NERVE GAS: HIGHLY DANGEROUS. DO NOT APPLY TO SKIN, EYES OR ANY ENTRANCES INTO THE BODY.” The liquid was clear and so much like water that Aaron decided to test it on some mould that was growing over something in the corner. He squeezed the top of the bottle very gently and a drop of liquid came out and dripped onto the mould - which was completely dissolved!
Aaron glanced at the clock; he had 2 more minutes before he had to leave. Aaron dug through the rubble on the floor and found what looked like a small handgun with an “energy gauge” and 2 wires protruding for the barrel. He squeezed the trigger and a shot of electricity burst out.
“Wow, a long-distance cattle prod,” He muttered, stuffing it into his loincloth and running out of the door, gun in hand.

12:30. Aaron was in the boiler room. Stopping on the way in to shove the rusty gun under boiler 3, he ran up to boiler 7 and typed clumsily into a keyboard designed for a slig’s hand: C.AC R.56 drain:75min.
That would give him an extra 10 minutes to take the Orb in case something went wrong.

13:28. He was in the room behind the Orb’s and had 7 minutes to get it if he was going to get out on time. He had crept past a sleeping slig in the corridor outside that room. That had given him an extra 2 minutes which he otherwise would have spent waiting for the guard to pass.
He shoved a few empty boxes underneath the grate overhead, thankful, for once, that they starved the mudokons in that place. Otherwise, he felt sure that the flimsy cardboard boxes would not hold his weight. He tugged at the pre-loosened grate and it came loose easily in his hands, then he wriggled up into the ventilation shaft and tugged himself through the narrow passageway forward until he reached another grate which he shoved loose.
Last time he saw this place it was alight with red motion beams. Now it was in almost complete darkness. As he wriggled out of the shaft, grate in hand, he gasped at the ice-cold air in the room. He had turned off the heating in that room and an icy chill had filled it.
Shivering, he stumbled through the room to the pedestal on which the Orb stood. He picked up the metallic green ball in both hands and instantly felt an unexplained warmth spread through his hands, up his arms and into his body. He felt suddenly comforted and reassured. With a determined look on his face, he pulled himself up into the ventilation shaft and wriggled forward through the darkness…


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We have the orb! We have saved ourselves ten minutes! We have some ammount of time to get out!
We have no patience for the next chapter!
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Go Aaron! Go Aaron! GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Aaron!

More chapters! More Chapters! This is totaly great!!! You should ask OWI permision to publish!:P
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Oh yes! The orb!

This is totally brilliant Splat, and I urge you to continue or you're fans will turn into an angry mob!
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YAY!! The orb is safe in Aarons hand!!! Yeh you heard me IN his hand!!! INSIDE IT IN THE FLESH!!! err....e....um.... Yeah eh that was all...
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um... wouldn't there be a great big lump in his hand if that happened? Worse yet, his hand might explode from the pressure!
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Yes of course there would be a big lump.... But it looks beautyful, and then all the girls will like him
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