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okay, I wrote a chapter, like, last week, but the computer shut down right when I tried to submit it, and I never got in the mood to re write it, but I am, slowly, and painfully, and it should be up soon. Sorry for the slow posting, but my job really does suck up alot of time
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Can't wait, Abeguy!
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*bump* just got home from camping, will continue soon...promise

okay, long enough

So we went on walking. Past the Dry Marsh. Past the rolling hills blanketed with trees.
"How much further?" I asked.
"Only another hour," Abe said. Another hour! I was already feeling like my feet were just about to fall off.
"Ah, you humans," Stranger said, mockingly, "You guys tire faster than the Almighty Raisin." He chuckled. I ignored it, his racial superiority attitude was starting to neutralize in it's effect.
As we walked through the Forest, I got time to see the wildlife. I saw creatures that I recognized from the game, and even creatures that I had never seen before. I saw a Scrab, stomping down on a Fleech. The Scrab seemed like it was going to come out victorious. Then all of a sudden a saw the flash of the fleech's tongue and in a flash, the Scrab was gone. All there remained was an extremely fat fleech. I continued walking, thinking about what I just saw. That small creature, stuck between a Scrab and a hard place, overcame all the odds, and won. It was simply amazing.
"Well, we're here." he said. I jerked back to reality. My eyes were not greeted with a fiant temple, like I expected. But instead, there was a small straw hut. I walked up to it and looked inside. Nothing. I looked down. There was a hole.
"Hey guys," I yelled. "check it out." They came up.
"Well?" Stranger asked.
"It's a hole," I said.
"Well duh," Stranger said. "Whats in it?"
"I dunno," I said.
"Well, then" Stranger replied, "See what is," and he pushed me into the hole.
I fell down the hole, not knowing when I was gooing to hit the ground. As I braced for an impact, I felt myself slowing down. I opened my eyes to see myself enter a cave while I am slowly lowered to the ground. I see a raised platform at the end of the cave, with light beaming down on it. I heard a light thud and turned to see that Abe had floated down, shortly followed by Stranger and Munch.
We walked forward in typical Wizard of Oz fashion, toward the platform. Abe stopped us when we were about 10 ft from the platform.
"I'll handle this," he said, and took a few steps further.
"Hey! Ketais! It's me, Abe! y'know, the Savior of the mudokons!" He was treating the whole affair very casually, as if he and Ketais were very good friends. I waited for a response.
"Ahhh...Abe..." I heard a voice that now that I think of it, it sounds like the


(SPOILER FOR POTC2)


Witch doctor lady from POTC2.



(END OF THE SPOILAZ)



Deep Jamaican accent. Smooth, yet mysterious at the same time.
"I see you brought company," she said, "I always love da company." I was looking around for where the voice was coming from, but couldn't see anything.
"Yeah," Abe said, "I have a friend who has been looking for you." I stood straight, just in case she was watching.
"Yes..." she hissed, "I could sense him from a mile away." I was still looking for the source of the voice, when I saw something from the corner of my eye. I looked, and there, in the shadow, was a pair of eyes, glowing. The eyes got closer and out of the shadow walked a dark green mudokon, wearing a simple but modest tunic, and had a whole bunch of small, dread lock type strings sticking out of the back of her head. She walked up to me. Looked deep into my eyes. It was creeeeepy. Then she turned and walked over to the raised platform. She walked to the center, and raised her hand over the ground. Vines started sprouting out of the ground. They grew and grew until they turned into the shape of a chair. She sat down.
"Come, huuman..." she hissed, and motioned me forward. I stepped forward, kinda in a trance.



I continued walking until she motioned for me to stop. Still kinda entrance, I stopped as if on auto pilot.
She raised her hand...






Cliff hanger, but hey, you got more to read eh?
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EEEEK!!! OMFG! MY FANDOMNESS IS OVERFLOWING AT THE MERE THOUGHT OF DOING SOMETHING LIKE THIS!!! FRIGGEN AWESOME! FAN-GLUKKING-TASTIC!!
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OMFG! Finally an update! Awesome!
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Ooooh I can't wait till the update either - great continuation!

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"Human," she spoke, "You are here during Oddworld's darkest hour."
I started feeling restless.
"It is true," she stated, "that your being here is no coincidence." She started to raise her hands, and a strange buzzing noise started brewing. Yet she continued to speak.
"To stop this...impending doom. We needed someone from outside. A being not of Odd."
The buzzing grew louder. And then stopped. And then she whispered.
"We needed you."
Then all of a sudden, a giant bolt of lightning came out of, well, nowhere, now that I think about it, since the cave had no openings. The lightning did not strike me. But surrounded me, as I started to rise into the air. I looked back at the priestess, who now had both of her arms raised, with her eyes raised to the ceiling.
"Human, you are our savior, the savior of all Oddworld. Take this gift, so that with it, you may bring order back to our land." I looked around, and noticed that the electricity surrounding me turned into multiple "arms" and started circling around me. They went faster, and faster...and even faster. Then BOOM! All the electricity hit me at once, and the world turned to black.

When I awoke, Abe was kneeled over me. I could see that Stranger and Munch were there too, but they all looked different somehow.
"What...what happen?" I asked, looking at them strangly, then getting up on my feet.
"It happen!" Abe happen, "It really happen!" He was grinning like a dolphin.
"Eh, what happen?" I asked.
"You got powers," Munch said, looking up at me. I looked down. my clothes were different. They now resembled Roxas' clothes from KH2, but with a more yellow/black theme.
"What powers did I get?" I asked, turning back to the priestess. She stepped down from her stand, and started walking toward us.
"I gave you the power I thought would be most helpful in the times to come," She said, "You now have the same powers of an elemental of electricity."
I couldn't hold in my excitement. I let out a long yell of excitement. And basically went crazy for a few seconds.
"With Strangers hunting skills, Abe's posessing, and Munch's abilities, you shall be aided, but in the end, it will be you, who saves us." I was still trying to process all that had happen. I stepped back, and looked at my hand. I shot my hand out. And sure enough, a bolt of electricity shot out. I let an even longer whoop. I was giddier then a fat kid in a candy store.
"I can't thank you enough, for everything " I said, she nodded.
"No, it is I who should thank you, in advance, for saving us." I nodded back.
"Well guys," I turned to the two, "I think it's about time we get going." They both agreed, and we started to turn to leave.
"Wait," Ketais said, we stopped, and looked back "I have one last thing for you. Someone, rather. Someone who I think will help out quite a bit."
I wondered who she was talking about, I turned to Abe, Munch, and to Stranger, and they all had confused looks too. Then we heard a voice say.

"Ahh...What a brutal ballad this will be..."




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NEAT!!!! Stupid character count...
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I always post before I post another segment don't I?

It's like the silence before the storm...

New Entry tomorrow!!!
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WOW! This is really old. How about a new years resolution for a couple new chapters or something, before I take over?

hmm, I think it's way past tomorrow...

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Out of the shadow, stepped forward a figure bigger than any of us. It was kinda like Stranger on steroids. He was ripped, for lack of better description. With leather straps wrapped around his arms. His only clothing consisted of a spartan-esque skirt, a weird hat thing, and his huge boots. But since he was covered with fur, it didn't bug me as much.

Back to his boots...

If looks could kill, His legs were lethal enough as they were by themselves. But the boots rose that lethality to a new level. They appeared to be leather, which buckles running up the seem. They had no toes, leaving his gigantic toes to sit there, staring at you. as if they were an entirely different entity.

He continued lumbering toward us, the cave shuddering with each step. I was scared out of my wits whether or not he was an ally. My eyes snapped shut, and I raised my arms up in defense. Right when I was sure he was going to eat me, he stopped. I peered out of the corner of my eye. The thing I saw next nearly exploded my brain.

...he was kneeling.

"The name is Fangus, Fangus Klot" He said, his voice an evil movie trailer guy, "I am at your service."
I was at a loss of what to do. Here was this leviathan of a creature putting himself under my command. Not only that, but this was Fangus Klot, The character whose game was appeared canceled, but here I was, face to face with him.

"Fangus Klot?" I asked. He stayed kneeling, but gave a grunt in response.
"At ease, soldier," I said, half sarcastically. He snapped up, Moving faster than I though possible for him.

"The rabid Shepard Fangus Klot?" I said. He grimaced and looked away.

"That Fangus Klot is no more," he said, as if ashamed, "I wish myself to serve the savior of Oddworld." he crossed his arm across his chest, Roman style.

"Don't be so humble," Ketais said, stepping up from behind, "You have a fantastic history, though a bit brutal" she turned to me, "He's just a bit emotionally drained from his...adventure. Don't worry, you'll just need to help him get his spark back."
I nodded.
"well then," She continued, slapping Fangus on the back, "You guys should get going, Oddworld isn't going to save itself!" Fangus popped over to our side, and turned to face Ketais, she looked us over.
"You guys are quite the group, eh? A Mudoken savior, One of the last Gabbits, One of the last Steefs, and...Fangus" she sighs, "Go on then, get dirty. Abe, save your people, Munch, ditto, Stranger, do whatever it is you do, and Fangus, go redeem yourself." He nodded.

"Well then," I spoke up, "lets get this party started!"
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We left the cave, it took a while to get our eyes adjusted to the glare shining strongly through the trees, but I didn't waste any time in trying out my new powers.
It didn't take any learning either, for some reason it came naturally, as if I could do it for years.
I stretched out my hand and visioned lightning leaving my fingers, feeling energy rushing toward my fingertips, a bolt of lightning shot out. This was incredible

"yyyyyyyYYYYYYYESSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" I screamed out, jumping for joy, I turned to the others, who I expected to look at me as if I was crazy, but they seemed to just as interested in what I had just done as I was.

"That's a pretty nifty gift ya got there," Stranger said, chuckling, "almost makes us equals" Shooting that joke in my direction
"Yeah," I said, shooting a little zap at him, "just a bit more practice and you'll be up with me" everyone laughed at that, including Fangus.
It was weird hearing him laugh, it was dark, dark and threatening, but safe somehow. We continued on our hike, and I was continuing to experiment with my powers.
I must've been pretty distracted by it, cuz a few minutes later, I was alone.
"Stranger? Abe? Munch? Fangus?" I shouted out, with no reply, the foliage was absorbing my sound.
"Guys?" I yelled louder, "Where are you guys?"
"Greetings again, Human," A voice said, I turned, It was that creature I met moments before I ran into Munch in the Bath house. I stepped back.
"Scared, are you?" he said rather eerily, "Don't worry, I don't bite,"
I stared, "What do you want with me?" I asked, looking for an answer in his eyes.
"I said earlier that tears are not magical portals, aye, and that they couldn't get you home, but that does not mean that you can't get home..." He stepped closer, I stood there, thinking.
"You can get me home?" I asked, with a puzzled look on my face.
"I didn't say that," he said with a shake of his finger, "But I guess you could come to that conclusion after what I said," he started circling.
"Then you can't get me home?" I asked, eyeing him closely.
"Again, with the jumping to conclusions," he said, laughing like it was a joke, "I can indeed get you home, but it'll require cooperation," I thought for a sec.Truthfully, I kinda felt like I didn't want to go home, well, not yet that is.
"Do you wish to go home?" he asked, extending his small hand. I stared at his offer, and looked him in the eye.
"No, there is still much I need to do here," I said, starting to turn.
"Oh?" I asked, like a child,"And what is that?" I turned back.
"Something like saving Oddworld from total distruction," I said, he looked amused.
"What makes you think you're the one to do it?" he said, rather mockingly
"It says so in the prophecy!" I said, getting a little ticked.
"What does this prophecy say, exactly?" he asked, pulling out a little pad, like a reporter.
"It says, when the rabid shepard is kil...," I paused.
"Exactly," the being said,"My offer still stands," and then he vanished.
I stood there in the clearing for what seemed like hours, thinking about what I had said. The prophecy said when The Rabid Shepard was killed, but Fangus was alive, what could it all mean? I suddenly heard voices.
"Phill! you here?"
"Where'd you go?"
"Told you he was chicken"
"Phill!"
"Over here you guys!!" I yelled, a couple seconds later
the group broke through the bushes and found me.
"What were you thinking!?" Stranger yelled, "You could've been lost! then what would've happen to the fate of Oddworld?"
"Yeah, about that" I said sheepishly, "I think you have the wrong guy," I said, turning away.
"What do you mean?," Abe asked.
"Yeah," Stranger continued, "After all we've been through, after your 'divine intervention', after you got your powers, YOU GOT FRIKKIN POWERS, you're giving up, saying your not the one to save us?" He was pacing madly about, tossing up dust.
"It doesn't match the prophecy," I said, point blank.
"What doesn't?" Munch asked, looking up at me.
"He doesn't!" I answered, pointing at Fangus. Fangus looked down at himself, and looked back, asking with his eyes.
"It says in the prophecy, 'when the rabid shepard is killed, a being not of Odd shall come and redeem the planet,' and there he is! The rabid shepard! Alive and kicking!" I put my hand down, and fangus followed suit with his body.
"Now don't get me wrong," I said, "I want help, I really do, but the time is wrong, you got plenty of time," and I started to walk away. I felt terrible, giving up on them, leaving there planet in the path of an impending doom.


"I did die..." Fangus said, near silently. We all turned and looked.

"I was once a relatively peaceful, young shepard growing up on the outskirts of the Spooce Shrub Forest," he said, standing up, "You had never seen more beautiful pastures, more pristine rivers, more abundant flocks.
Looks may deceive, but I was a gentle being, wouldn't hurt a fly. My parents were small little things, and I loved them dearly, life was...peaceful at best." he then turned his back to us
"and then those...those things came, and ransacked our farm, I tried to protect them, the farm, everything, and was doing a good job too, but they became too numerous, too powerful, and then, everything went black." he was pacing beautifully, as if giving a prepared monologue, his arm movements were graceful, and etc.
"When I awoke, I was in a dank, smelly room, there were these weird purple-ish creatures with needle like arms and nubby lets, but huge heads, they called themselves...uh..." he scratched his head, thinking.
"Vykkers," Munch said with disgust.
"Yeah," Fangus said, continuing his pacing, "They kept on talking amongst eachother. I was too groggy to make anything else, but after they had finished, one of them stuck a needle in my arm, and I was out again.
"The next, I dunno how long, but needless, however long it was, I wasn't myself, most of it's a blur, but what I do remember was all blood. None of it mine. This continued for, as I said, I don't know how long, but I hated every minute of it, I felt as a prisoner in my own body, yelling for me to stop, or for someone to stop me. Suddenly I got my wish, and I embraced the eternal darkness." I almost started crying.
"What surprised me was when I saw light again, I said that it was a bad idea, and it'd be best if I was dead. 'You've been dead long enough,' I heard, and looked around, I was lying on a table, and on the side was Ketais. She walked around, examining me. 'Good as new' she said. I asked what happen, and she explained everything, from me dying to her being able to take me from the battlefield. I stayed with her for a couple days, and then you guys came, and here I am. Though I am cured, my taste for blood hasn't died, it is just way more mild."
"So, what your sayin is..." I started.
"Yes," he replied, "The prophecy is true, from what I get of it...but the prophecy didn't say I couldn't come back to life, now did it?"
"...no, it didn't" I said, coming to terms with what that meant.
"So we good?" Stranger asked, "You feel good that we got that little fiasco settled out?"
"Yeah, I said,"let's get going," We started to mobilize.
"What exactly got you to thinking all that stuff anyway?" Abe asked, "And besides, you could've helped out anyway, and stayed."
"But you see," I said, turning to him, "I have a home, and if I didn't have to stay, I would have tried finding a way back,"
"Oh," he said, It kinda came as a shock over the whole group, that my home was indeed not on Oddworld.
"What'll happen if you don't find a way back?" Munch asked.
"I'm wondering about that myself," I replied, keeping my thoughts of that strange creature and his proposal to myself.
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hmm, I think it's way past tomorrow...

no, it's still today, I have yet to reach tomorrow...but right when I think I've reached tomorrow, it's always today. So that's why I didn't write a chapter for so long, I was waiting for tomorrow, but it never came, so I just decided to write it today.
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We went on for quite some time under a sterile silence, going along the River for quite some time.

"Where are we headed, anyway?" I asked, breaking the silence.
"Wondering when you'd ask," Stranger replied, "The silence was killing me. Well, we're headed to see an old friend of mine...most connected guy in all of Oddworld, as far as I'm concerned. Living encyclopedia."
"Why we headed there?" Munch asked, hopping along.
"finding out where we need to go," Stranger said, "Don't worry, we're almost there, just a few more minutes."
Sure enough, we turned a bend on the river, we saw a very odd site...

it was a small wood shack. looking normal except one little thing.
all the wires.

out of every single possible orifice of the shack came a wire...blending in and out of the natural landscape surrounding.

"Mind you, this guy is...rather unorthodox..." Stranger said as we walked up.
"Don't worry about me," I said, "I've come to expect it." He laughed.

As we walked toward the door, I heard a definite buzz of electricity, I could smell the current...and feel it.
Stranger opened the door, the smell was...different...it was strong...but not bad while at the same time not good. It took a bit for my eyes to adjust...but what I saw, I was not at all prepared for.
It was a glukkon...The first I had seen since my being in Oddworld. But he was different, not like other's I've seen.
his arms and legs were reverse than normal glukkons, the huge arms were in the center, and they were arranged more like normal legs. and his legs...which on normal glukkons are small, limp, and useless...he had them more like regular arms...which was a sight to behold.
"Ahh! Stranger! My all time favorite Steef! and I should know, I've seen every single one!" He walked over to Stranger and gave him a hug with his modified legs.
"Doin good, Frank," He said. "Frank here was the guy who told me about Doc...," he looked at me.
"Yeah, Doc," Frank said, "Great guy, rest his soul, he was the one who set me up with the swip swap and muscle graft, making me the great biped I is today" he said with a bow.
That's when I noticed. A huge bundle of wires going straight into the back of his head. Matrix style.
"Say, how did you do that fancy wire get-up?" I asked.
"Oh, this little thing?" he said, feeling it with his hand, "I had a group of Vykkers Doc recommended...Smart beings, them Vykkers."
"Sure, whatever," Munch said with a tint of hatred in his voice.
"I can unplug myself whenever...but I hate feeling disconnected." He said.
"Yeah...well," Stranger said, "I'm not sure if you can help...but I'm wondering about some stuff on an apocalyptic scale."
"end of the world? No can d...wait..." he stopped to think, his eyes grew big.
"Nope, just rumors...nothing concrete." He said quickly, and he started acting nervous.
"You sure?" Stranger asked?
"Yes, yes, nothing at all."
"Okay, that's all I was wondering," Stranger said, "let's go."
"Stranger! wait!" Frank said, "I mean, I need to give you something." He scuttled around his little shack, rummaging through piles of junk. When he pulled something out.
"A book?" Stranger asked, "Didn't know you were so primitive."
"No, not the book," he opened the book and pulled out a small little object. He handed it to Stranger, clasping his hand.
"Take this..." he said, with a look of desperation in his eyes.
"Now get out!" he said, shoving us through the door.
"What's his problem?" Abe asked, as we left the building.
"I dunno," Stranger said, he looked down at his hand, and opened it , holding what Frank had given him. It was a small metal object, octagon shaped, with a phrase written on it.

"The End is near, No details."

We heard an explosion...
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03-22-2007, 04:33 AM
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y'know, if nobody give me feedback, it doesn't really inspire me to write anymore. Gimme Feed Back!!
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No, don't stop writing I still read it!!! It's an amazing storyline - keep it up

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I just started reading this today and man is it awesome, really gets my odd juices pumping.
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Although I don't give you feedback I still read and love the sory.
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yep. a hidden jewel. just move the plot around a little bit.
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04-10-2007, 07:36 PM
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wow, actual feedback, I'll be sure to continue when I ain't so damn busy. I promise it'll be soon
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Wow, I'm not busy

Here we go


"FRANK!!!" Stranger yelled, running toward the now burning building.
Electric wires snapped, sending sparks in all directions, blocking any access to the building. We all knew Frank couldn't of survived.

"But why?" Stranger asked, "Why did he do that?"
"My only guess is," I answered, "is that he did know something about the end of the world, and he knew it was over for him, as well as everyone else."

"No," Stranger said, "This isn't like Franky, If the world was going to end, which it is, I suppose, He wouldn't of done that. Franky was murdered."

"Who do you think did it?" Munch asked, hopping up to Stranger's side.
"I don't know, but I think that if we pursue this saving the world job, we'll find out."

"Well then," Fangus spoke up, "We better get going, shan't we?"

"Aye," said I, "I thinkest we shall. For Franky, all the other innocent lives that may have been lost."

"But where exactly is it that we need to go?" Abe asked, "Frank didn't tell us anything, all he gave us was that piece of metal."

"I think," Stranger replied, holding up the knick knack, "That that was enough." As he held up the piece of metal to the sun, the reflected light from the surface shown as bright as the sun. Everyone covered their eyes.
"Look, here," Stranger said, pointing up to the sky. There, up in the sky, was what appeared to be a holographic map of Oddworld, and on the map were two dots, one which appeared to be our current location, and another that appeared far to the north of our location.
"Well I'll be damned," Stranger said, "He gave us the way,"
"How is that possible?" I asked, "That is but reflected light?"
"Don't question Oddworld," Abe replied, "You'll simply find a headache."
I laughed, "Well, whatever, I say that we should be heading toward that dot."
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...*sigh*...
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Plot officially moved.



"Sir!!! Sir!!!"

"What is it?"

"The Prophecy!! it's about the Prophecy!!"

"Which one?"

"um...Lemme Check...Ah!! The end of the world one!!"

*glass break*

"W...wh...what did you say?"

"Yeah yeah, the one with the 5 heroes, 1 nameless evil, a life changing choice, and a mysterious medium"

"Why haven't I been contacted sooner?"

"Well, sir, owing to the fact that we ourselves just learned of it"

"and the human? there is actually one among us?"

"Indeed, alive and ready to play his part"

"Excellant, prepare my suit up, I think I may be going out for a walk today"

"Yessir"

"Oh, and Toast?"

"Yes?"

"Make sure to pretty it up, I wouldn't want to appear...ugly"

"Yes, Lord Mullock"

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Very good fic. I certainly liked it. My favourite part is when you and Munch saw each other and ended up screaming at each other. I love this fic. I know it's awesome.
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