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01-24-2002, 08:32 AM
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Wackawacka, I'm reading this.
Nice cliffhanger!
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01-24-2002, 09:57 AM
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I'm reading it as well, but then I tell you that in IM.

[ January 24, 2002: Message edited by: Teal ]
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01-24-2002, 08:02 PM
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*chuckles at "He's mostly dead."*

I'm reading, although I seem to not notice this topic until I'm 4 or 5 chapters behind, annoyingly...
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01-25-2002, 10:33 AM
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*grins* Methinks Rach missed a "likely" there... (Funny, until you said that I didn't see the funny side to it, as I knew what she was on about... )
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01-25-2002, 11:16 AM
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I am. Great fanfiction...... already up to chap. 13....... GREAT


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01-25-2002, 08:34 PM
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to Dan: thats pretty bad considering how slow this fic is going...hehe

Edited that chap BTW...yet again I screwed up...*sigh* I am too eager to finish this fic I think...

Spider: more like desperate...

Shut up...
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No more? *pathetic voice* Hey, I want to know what happened to that spider guy... Oh, well. It's a really good story, sooo I guess I just have to wait for the next chapter... *stares at screen*

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02-06-2002, 11:16 PM
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*bounces about excitedly* YES YES YES! THIS FIC IS ALMOST DONE!!!!! *does cartwheels*

Chapter 14

Bas took a deep breath before answering: "He'll be alright."
The clan cheered; Shriek nearly fainted with relief.
"But..." Bas continued, stopping their cheers short, "He will take a while to recover."
"Why? It didn't take him very long to get back on his feet last time..." Kilk said.
"We had to operate on him to remove the cause of the electric shock that did this to him. Something that he must have had in his neck from when he was still in captivity years ago."
"What...what was it?" Hoth asked, curiously.
"Some sort of control device, according to Doc Simvass. He’s studying it now."
"You mean... like one of them accursed implants?" Skan asked, wincing in spite of himself. “EnnEsses, they called ‘em, I think…”
"A whatits?" Kilk asked confused.
"An EnnEss...a control device the Cartel at one time was having implanted
in all of its...less trustworthy employees. Spider first came to us not long after our own 'encounter' with those things...so I wouldn't be surprised if that's what it was."
"It's not a EnnEss..." Bas said reassuringly, "I remember Rek tellin' me 'bout them and the thing that was in Spider's neck doesn't even look like one. Looks like a little box with wires comin’ out of it, but EnnEsses were like insects."
Skan was about to say something...but Shriek interrupted.
"Can't this wait til later? I want to see Spider..." she said, her eyes pleading.
"Yer right... Bas said with a nod, "He is weak...so won' be able to talk much."
“We moved him to wards, as operatin’ theatres ain’t the best place to go and kip after anesthetic. They give people the creeps, I heard…” He cocked a head and set off down the corridor. “C’mon, peeps, this way…”
Shriek nodded with understanding and followed Bas into the Medcenter, the rest of the clan following...

On the way to the wards the group met up with Dr Simvass, who told them what he found out about the device that he had removed from Spider's neck. In short it ended up being a rather simple remote controlled device designed to administer an electric shock when (prompted? activated? *shrug*). Apparently, when Malice bit Spider in the back of the neck a few months back, it was damaged and started drawing and storing more energy then normal. The bang Spider gave it recently was enough to cause it to discharge all that stored energy at once...nearly killing him.
Simvass also warned them that due to the nature of the surgery he had to perform, Spider has to remain heavily drugged with painkillers for a while, so he would be dopey at best when they saw him . He also reassured them that Spider should make a fully recovery.
When they finally got to see him a few moments later, they found out Simvass wasn't kidding; Spider was barely awake and didn't much sense all when he said something. But still they were happy he was alive, especially Shriek, who took up a position right next to his bed and simply refused to leave when the nurses came and said visiting time was over. After she growled and bared her teeth at them they got the hint and left her alone. Fortunately...the rest of clan weren't so stubborn and left without a struggle. Though...one of the aides had a spill when he slipped on a puddle of Goliath's drool....
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YYYYEEEEESSSSSS!!!!!! FINISHED!!! WHEEEHHEEEEE!!!!! *runs around crazily*

Spider: Ike! *takes cover*

Chapter 15

It took Spider two months to recover completely. During this time he was told to take it easy and not to stress himself, which Shriek absolutely made sure he did. She treated him like an overgrown pup, and Spider didn't mind at all...in fact he milked this for all it was worth. Of course...if any one else tried to baby him he would simply refuse to cooperate, being a major pain to the medical staff that were trying to help him when Shriek wasn't there. The rest of the clan pretty much kept to themselves, helping around the village every once in a while and making sure they stayed out of the way.
One day a group of muds and a single slig came into the village. Apparently, at least one of the travelers used to live in the village, judging by the commotion the group caused. One of the newcomers, a very old looking mud, seemed excited about seeing Spider and his clan. But none of the clan could make heads or tails out of what the mud was babbling about, other then something about a great destiny being in store for them. They could only guess that it had to do with the task Stienix had given them before: to restore a lost race. He also said something to the effect of: 'beware the menace that will return twice'....
Spider got a real shock one day soon after when Hak tapped him on the shoulder and actually spoke. If Spider was wearing shoes he would have jumped clean out of them. Hak had laughed at Spider's surprise and explained that a couple of the village members had left to find the means to reverse the effects of the 'incident' that happened a few months back and all the 'sleepers' were awake now. Xar had walked up to them then and mumbled something to the effect about missing the change to operate on Spider. Spider's response to that was to stick out his tongue and laugh, but welcomed him back to the land of the 'living' so to speak.
Later on Spider tried to find the individual who was responsible for healing everyone...but the young slig he was told that had done this had disappeared, much to everyone’s worry.

One day, Spider was patrolling around the village, having offered his services of such while he was there. Hoth was with him.
"So Spider how long are we going to stay in this area?" Hoth asked as he walked with Spider on the patrol route.
"I don't know." Spider answered, "Was thinkin' at least through winter. After that no idea."
"That's at least four months...." Hoth said a little surprised. "Why that long?"
"Well one reason is that it is nearly winter and I doubt we will find another place to camp out other then here durin' it. Plus I still have a lot of catchin' up to do..."
"Once we leave here you'll have to 'catch up' again anyway if we come back this way."
"I know...I guess right now I jus' want to be around old friends fer awhile."
"Nothing wrong with that I guess."
Suddenly a mud and slig staggered into them, one of the patrol groups, both looking very pale and ill.
"What's wrong?" Spider asked, concerned.
"We...we were going to relieve one of the other patrol groups..." the mud managed to get out, before getting sick in a bush.
"But we found 'em dead..." the slig finished for his partner, "and mutilated horribly..."
"We...barely reconigized them..." the mud added, when he was through.
"Which way?" Spider asked, a sickening feeling in his gut.
The Mud pointed a shaky paw in the direction up ahead.
"Hoth stay with these two...I'll be right back." Spider said as he walked up ahead.
"Becareful..." Hoth said with a respectful nod and settled down on his elbows, but kept all of his senses alert.
"Who could have done such a thing..." the mud said, shaking.
"I don' think I will be able ta eat anythin' fer a while..." the slig
mumbled to himself, looking like he was trying his best to keep his lunch where it belonged.
"Eat nothing!..." the mud cried, "I won't be able to sleep for days!"
Hoth didn't know what to say to comfort them. They way they were talking it was as if they had just seen a very groutisk and horrifying movie. Little did he know how close he was....
Spider suddenly charged back into the small clearing they were in, looking both furious and fearful.
"What is it?" Hoth asked, jumping up to his handfeet.
"I don' know how..." Spider said in a low growl, "but Malice is back...."


Comments!!! I want COMMENTS!!! IF no one comments I'll hunt you down and inflict PAIN!!!!

Spider: *pokes head out* she doesn't mean that...really....

WANNA BET!?

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02-08-2002, 08:41 AM
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Rach is thinking she's special again - why should SHE get preferrential treatment over all us other fic-writers who don't get replies...? (j/k, Rach. Still replies are always good. Maybe I should do an Al and start plugging my fics in every post I make... *grins*)

You know what I think as I've already told you.

*arms self with dragon-prod and sits in corner* Before you comment about electric immunity, this is a positronic one. So there.

Hey, just think... now you can start writing the NEXT one (and not get any replies to that either)...! Do we do it out of love for all these ungrateful people (all that free fiction)? Or are we just stupid? Or both?

*wanders away mumbling to self*
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02-08-2002, 09:48 PM
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"Start writing the NEXT one"? She's got about 8 on the go already... Let's give her (and our eyes) a rest for a while, shall we?

Sorry I haven't replied. I haven't had much free time online recently...
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W00t.WOOT SAYS ME!

This story is CLEARY VERY developed.A nice comment is that it progresses very interestingly over time.That's all I can say now...I "are" just speechless..:drools:
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I don't have THAT many on the go! I have 'Path of the Cursed' and 'Shades of Red' on the go...the others I only write notes to when I think of them...

Kye: you got my fic too...

oh yeah...thats 3...ONLY 3 on the go!
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"Shades of Red"? I never heard about that one... I'm scared...

What the hell does "w00t" mean?
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