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Growing up; Pre-teens

*Setting: The scene takes place in a gym like room. The room is quite small, only fitting in three blue landing mats which are approximatly 7ft by 7.5ft. On each mat there is two 8 yr old children, the test subjects, taking part in a bout of fencing. Minus the protective clothing. One of the six children is Aisha, equipped with a long, silver bladed Rapier. The walls of the gym are dull red bricks, 4 foot in front of the wall is a metallic barriar that acts like a cage and stops the spectators from interfering. On the far left wall is the door in which the children enter and exit and on the far right is the door were the spectators enter and exit.*

Cornesh: "Come on Aisha!! You can do it!!"

Cornesh cheered his daughter-like friend on. Although he hated what the Medical Council were putting her, and the others, through, he knew the only way he could help her come through it was to encourage her. She was fighting Zakk. A normal looking Orkhid with a lisp, his hair was short and black, his eyes dark brown. He was quite tall, taller than Aisha and in fencing, that was an advantage. Aisha was wearing a pair of white shorts and a white-ish T-shirt as was her opponant. Her blonde hair had been tied back in a pony-tail and beads of sweat were forming on her brow. The Dr's and other medical personel had predicted that puberty would take place in a week, a month at the most. That was the stage the Council were excited about, that was when the Nanobots became active and the experiment truly began.
*Cling*
Aisha blocked a head swipe from Zakk. Smiling at him as she noticed his frustration.

Aisha: "What? You expect me to let you slice into my neck?"

Although the fencing blades were blunt at the end and couldn't exactly cut off any limbs, they could still slice and cut the skin if swung with enough force.

Zakk: "Keep thmiling whiltht you thtill can defect..."

He winked cockily at her and then staggered backwards, swishing the sword down near his side. His blonde opponant cracked her neck, moving her head from side to side.

Aisha: "Want me to make your tongue even shorter, lithpy."

She mocked his speech, calling him the name that she adopted him with a month or two ago. He hated it and thus loathed her. It was the only thing that Aisha knew actually got to him and she used it whenever she saw fit. Zakk's dark eyebrows narrowed and he snarled at her, wanting her dead, wanted to see her die painfully. He patted the side of the blade on his leg and passed the sword between hands, finally deciding to arm the left side. Aisha blew a kiss at him and then swung her sword, her un-armed left hand away from the action.
*Ching-Cling-Cling*
She swiped for his mid-section, wanting to see at least a smidge of blood on the tip of the blunt blade. But all attempts were foiled as Zakk knocked them from left to right, backing away as she advanced.

Zakk: "What? You expect me to let you thlice into my tortho?"

Aisha halted her mid-attack and then swung her weapon down low, cutting his calves with the Rapier and making fine horizontal lines across his legs. A short gasp of pain and astonishment shot out of his mouth as he realised his opponant had cut him.

Aisha: "You know you have a lisp, so, whats the point in saying words which include 'S'? Huh?"

She smiled and straightened up, pleased of what she had accomplished. She could here her Mentor cheering her on, she turned her head to face him and smiled. Cornesh waved back at her, proudly. Ignoring the other Scientists negative standpoints on such closeness.

Zakk: "Trying to impreth your fat thugar daddy?"

Aisha's head snapped forwards, facing the lisping Orkhid. Her grip tightened on the blade handle and she slowly stepped forwards.

Aisha: "Wanna take that back? Now."

Zakk's head shook from side to side slowly, mocking her.

Zakk: "People like him thould be put to thleep."

He said, sneering. Finally finding something that could wind her up. Aisha smiled sinisterly, stepping forwards. For her, everything seemed to go in slow motion, the action around her smeered into one. The sound dulled down until all that was left was a low rumbling. All that existed now was herself and him...

Aisha: "Mind your 'S's..."

She scoffed at him, lunging forwards, forcing her Rapier blade through the air and towards the Orkhids chest.

*Setting: The blonde female lunged forwards, her sword on a course to the chest of her opponant, however, as it neared his body a sharp 'cling' sound rang out through the gym, he had knocked her sword away from his chest, making it swerve off to the side. Aisha stumbled forwards, loosing her balance for that brief moment. Zakk on the other hand stood his ground, smirking as he saw her stagger towards him her face facing downwards and the back of her head facing upwards. Slowly he raised the hard handle of the blade up in the air, once he had reached his armspan he brought the weapon down. Connecting the handle to the back of her head. The thud, as the weapon connected to Aisha's head, seemed to splice with a 'crack' that could ever so slightly be heared. The female fell straight down, the side of her face hitting the cold, blue mat. A slight gasp escaped from her mouth as she realised she had been felled. She blinked, everything was still in slow motion for her. Cornesh' shouting dull and monotone. Slowly she attempted to push her self up, only to feel the boot of her opposer connect to her chin. Finally time quickened to its normal pace...*

Aisha: "Arrrgghhaa...!!"

The injured creatures body hurtled backwards from the force of the kick. Blood burbled out of her mouth as she lay on her back, looking at the Orkhid attacker.

Zakk: "You'll never be better than me...Your jutht another defected piethe of thhit who rideth a dirty old man every other night..."

Pushing herself with her arms Aisha again tried to stand.
*Whoooosh*
Zakk brought the blade down diagonally. Slicing into her pretty face and causing a fine line across it that was quickly beginning to ooze with blood. Another stunned gasp escaped her and by this time she was confused and only wanted to stand, if not sleep. She couldn't hear anything anymore, only her heartbeat that echoed in her ears like a drum being beaten randomly...and then...nothingness. Complete silence and complete darkness. Her limp body flopped to the ground and Zakk refrained his footing, blood staining the soul of his shoe as he had just kicked her face. He was pleased. This was their first time fighting each other and he had won. He had proven himself to be better than the cow who had tormented him these past months.

Voice: "You f*cking idiot!! Im gonna kill you...!!"

Zakk turned around, shocked by what he saw. Jaques had pushed through the exit and was heading straight for him, fists clenched and anger seemingly dripped from his essence. Following his harsh words was the sound of Cornesh' voice, shouting Aisha's name franticly, worried for her. The other personel watching did not care, she was a defect...all she was capable of was the downfall of the Orkhid race...nothing more.

Jaques: "Aisha!! Aisha...!?"

As he neared the two Orkhids his anger turned to worry and he ignored her attacker and dropped down next to his friends limp body, clutching it.

Jaques: "Get help!! Cornesh!! Hellllppp!!!"

(OOC: Comments?)
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09-01-2002, 03:11 PM
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I like that. The violence is very realistic, along with the characters. I enjoyed reading that. Please write more
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09-03-2002, 02:08 AM
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Oh WOW!

You just gotta write more! This is gonna be a good one!
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09-03-2002, 01:53 PM
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Part 2

*Setting: The room was silent. White light shone from the overhead lights and on the right hand side monitors beeped their rythmic tune. On the other side lay one chair in which the Orkhid Cornesh was sat. Aisha lay unconcious on the white bed. The sheets upto her chest, her arms out of the covers and black blood staining her golden hair. Her breathing was slow yet stable. Many of the medical staff did not care for the little 8 yr old. Merely because she was nothing more than a germ, according to them. They felt ashamed that Cornesh was milling about her, it was sickening. Out of the room and down the corridor Janek was storming to the room which held the little girl. His black boots hit the white marble floor hard and his black, red seemed lab coat with the upturned coller, which he wore with pride, glided behind him. Following him were two troops, they, too, were dressed in black but their clothing consisted of leather and dark-grey armour. They each carried a Socom equipped with laser sight and a powerful M-4 Carbine Rifle. Each of them had a stern expression on their faces and little stubble. Both seemed to mean buisness.*

Cornesh: "Dont worry, as soon as you get better...I'll make sure that you arn't forced to compete anymore in the fencing..."

The chunky Scientist stroked the unconcious Orkhids hair, speaking softly to her. He was worried she would never wake up and if she did, he was worried that the same thing may happen again. His chubby fingers ran through her blood stained hair, she looked so vulnerable. As he spoke to her and attemtped to get her to wake up the door was sharply opened. Turning Cornesh saw Janek.

Cornesh: "What do you want?"

His voice was low and after saying this he turned back to his main concern. The Consultant smirked and stepped into the room, followed by the Guards. He sighed and shook his head from side to side slowly...

Janek: "Come, come Cornesh. Surely you must understand that this rediculous crusade to protect such a vile thing is never going to pan out to your advantage..."

The Scientist grunted a reply and picked up the limp hand of Aisha, grasping it tightly.

Janek: "How is she doing, then?"

His voice was still as cold as ever and held little, if no, compassion. Turning his head Cornesh grunted.

Cornesh: "Stable. A 50/50 chance of pulling through..."

He seemed to say it in a hopeful way, but it was obvious he was worried sick. Janek rolled his head around, cracking emitted from his neck. Slowly he stepped over to her, his black clothing and white face made him seem like the mod-con version of Death. He lowered his head and bent his back to get a closer look at the girls face, smirking at the pinkish face of the 'abnormal' creature that he looked down upon so much.

Janek: "I must remember to thank the creature who did this...heh."

Cornesh looked up at him menacingly. Angry at his compassionless words. But as he did so Aisha' eyes shot open, her saffire blue eyes seemingly glowing in the bright-light of the room.

Cornesh: "AISHA!?"

His voice was thrilled and he nearly jumped up in the air and kissed her, but all was not well. As Janek stared at the little AIDS victim her blue eyes were devoured as her eye blood vessels seemed to pop. Black engulfed her entire eye ball and a low snarl erupted from her throat. Janek's grey eyebrows narrowed at the sight of what was happening, slowly her mouth opened and as it did Janek noticed that the girl was missing four teeth. Two top K9 teeth and two bottom K9 teeth (The teeth that go at the side of your front ones). This gave her a strange Rabbit sort of look, but his attention soon got disrupted as she snarled at him. Her eyes as black as coal gave the girl a terrifying essence. However, Janek had seen many worse things than this and smirked at the female before raising a gloved fist and punching her once in the face. She immediatly went unconcious again and Janek straightened up, rubbing his knuckles and smiling.

Janek: "Wvell...wvasn't that informative. DR?"

He called out to one of the Dr's, awaiting a response. Cornesh was close to tears and looking at Janek with utter hatred. He combed Aisha' hair out of her face with his hands and felt to see if she had a pulse. A couple of moments later a Orkhid in a white jacket wandered in, brushing past the armed Guards.

Dr: "Somebody call...?"

Janek turned from looking at the limp body and addressed the creature.

Janek: "Yes, i wvant this female to be kept under observation at all times, you hear me? I think she may of reached the stage wve've all been waiting for."

He smiled and then lowered his voice to a low mumble, placing his head at the side of the Dr's so his mouth was right next to the ear.

Janek: "Put her in the prepared compartment and make sure she has no interaction with the pure bloods. Not even him."

Pointing over his shoulder with his thumb he directed the 'him' at Cornesh.

Janek: "Understood?"

His voice was at the normal tone now and he smiled happily at the Dr, whom nodded and agreed. Turning the Consultant smiled at Cornesh and nodded to him before leaving the room with the Guards, the chubby Orkhid turned his head away in disgust and continued talking to his friend...

***

Sykes: "So, my theory was correct!?"

Sykes was sat in his office, the black phone on speaker so he did not have to hold the reciever. He was listening to Janek' report on Aisha.

Janek: "Yes. As soon as i mentioned her beating she awoke...Although, the troubling thing was her eyes. They...they turned black."

Sykes span a blue pen in his hand and nodded.

Sykes: "Yes, the others have been saying that, that has been happening. Its likely to be a side effect from the Nanobots floating around her body. Not to worry, so long as she keeps on track, heh."

There was a brief moment of silence on the other end of the line. Finally Janek spoke.

Janek: "So...wve're keeping her alive? For wvhat exactly?"

Sykes: "Dont worry, Janek. I know how much you hate defects...We're going to kill her, just as soon as she's been...hmmm...explored."

A slight laugh came from Sykes, closely followed by Janek. After this they both said their goodbyes and hung up. Waiting with baited breath for another day...

(OOC: Thanx for the comments by the by!!)
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09-07-2002, 12:01 AM
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*Setting: The room which the situation takes place in is dark and dingy. In the middle is a large, glass compartment. The floor is white and stained with the black blood of 'food'. The glass compartment has the sort of glass which can only be seen from one side, and the inside is the mirrored part. The walls of glass itself reach upto the ceiling and so technically its like a box with the only light source on the inside. Three children are inside already, two boys and Aisha, the only female so far. Around the glass case are many computers and electronic record keeping equipment. Also, on many of the walls are the yellow signs graced with black writing which states; 'Silence. Experiment in progress.' or 'Please do not tap on the glass.'. Heavily armed guards watch from all entries and exits and Scientists, Psychologists and other medical personnel bimble around merily, somethimes pausing to watch the children mope around...depressed or dis-heartened by the sudden change in scenery.*

Psychologist: "Have the males interacted with the female, yet?"

The Orkhid whispered gently into her lab partners ear, taking note of the signs. Her darkish hair was up in a bun, tied with a purple bobble. She held a clip board in her hand and tapped a pen gently on the front.

Dr: "Hmmm...not that iiiiiii am aware."

He stretched out the letter 'I' as he scanned through some notes given to him by his partners. His hair was dark also, but cut very short in a crue cut like fashion. His face was very young and fresh. They both stood in their white Lab coats, proud of being apart of something so fine and majestic.
*Quiet beeping*
The Dr turned around, the sound was coming from a white telecom system on the desk behind him. He carefully leant over, his eyes still focused on the inhabitants of the glass cage. His lean fingers patted gently around on the telecom system until finally he found the button that was upstanding, he quickly pressed it.

Dr: "Carter here, how can i help?"

He turned his head briefly to address the caller whom responded immediatly.

Voice: "This is Janek, im on my wvay down. Get all updated records for me..."

As soon as Carter heard the name 'Janek' his head span around to face it, giving the caller his undivided attention. The Psychologist whom stood next to him seemed to do the same. But as soon as the last sentence was finished the line between them was cut off and all that was left was a mild hum.

***

*Setting: Outside of the room is a guard post. The corridor leaving is white and well lit with metallic pipes on the walls, possibly providing water and heat etc. The doors that lead to the observation room are large and metallic with a small hand-print panel on the side around shoulder height. For extra security there is a Guard situated at the guard post. He is pale, sat on a dark mauve swivel chair and dressed in the usual black gear with his rifle underneathe his desk an arms length away and a baton holstered on the side of his leg. On the metal guard post lies a small Tv and a jug and glass of water. The guard casually sips the glass of water whilst watching the Tv, un-interested by any comings or goings that happened around him.*

Tv: "THE GRRRREAT POWERRS THAT BE ARE SPEAKING TO ME-A!! YES, YES, YESSSS-A!! I CAN FEEL THEM, NOWA, AND DO YOU KNOW WHAT THEY ARE TELLING ME-A!? SAYING TO ME-A!? TELLING ME TO DO-A!?! THEY ARE SAYING 'HELP PEOPLE-A, MAKE MORE PEOPLE HAPPY-A!! GIVE PEOPLE YOUR LOVE-A!!!' AND I REPLY TO THEM 'BUT HOW-A!? HOW CAN I DO THIS, I AM BUT A MERE MORTAL-A!?!?' AND THEY REPLY, THEY REPLY TO ME AND SAY 'JOI, JOI TAKE THAT SINFUL MONEY AWAY-A!! BURN IT FOR THEM, MAKE THEM SEE THE EVIL THEY ARE PERFORMING BY KEEPING THAT MONEY IN THEIR POSSESSION-A!!!' AND SO, THAT IS WHY I ASK-A YOU!! I ASK YOU TO SEND YOUR MONEY IN, SEND IT HERE WERE I CAN BURN IT AND FREE YOU OF YOUR EVIL-A!! LET ME CLEANSE YOU OF YOUR DARKNESS...EVILNESS...SINFULNESSSS!!! BECAUSE BELIEVE ME-A. IF YOU CANT TRUST JOI LALLM, YOUR DOING YA SELF MORE HALM..."

Their was a brief moment of static on the small Tv screen, the Evangelist Mudokon seemed to roll on the screen, going to the top and disappearing and then reappearing on the bottom, as the Tv jumped. The Orkhid slapped the side, annoyed. He always enjoyed watching Joi Lallm's shows. They were so immensly stupid and yet he was amazed by how much money people sent in. They didn't seem to realise that the money they sent was the money he used, the 'sinful' , 'evil' money. The Orkhid guards attention was drawn to the sudden thumping footsteps of a approaching creature. He sat up on his small swivel chair and clutched his baton, awaiting the first sign of trouble. As the sound got louder a large, rounded Orkhid came from around the corner. It was Cornesh. The guard had been shown a picture of this Scientist and told not to let him in, under ANY circumstances. Something about it being dangerous for the project. As Cornesh neared, the Orkhhid guard slowly turned up the volume on the Tv set so he could, at least for a while, pretend he couldn't hear him. He ignored him the first time, Cornesh did the same. He wandered straight upto the palm security lock and placed his round hand on it. Awaiting it to fully scan in his palm print. As the green light finally finished running up and down the palm of the Orkhid it turned red and a relativly loud buzz came from it. Cornesh snorted and attempted to try again, this time the guard told him he wasn't authorised. He did this without his eyes leaving the Tv set.

Cornesh: "What do you mean!? I am one of those childrens guardians!! She needs me!!"

The guard turned his head and looked up at him, sipping some water.

Guard: "Im sure she does. Now, if you care to go along and actually find somebody who runs the medical authorisation department i will be most greatful."

He turned back to his viewing and snuggled down into his seat, crossing his arms. Cornesh snorted and eyed up the door, he then placed his ear to it, attempting to hear inside and make sure nothing too 'brutal' was happening to his beloved Aisha. Finally after what seemed like minutes of pondering Cornesh stepped upto the desk.

Cornesh: "Where's Janek!?"

The guard merely pointed to his ear and shrugged, not taking his eyes off of the screen nor saying a word.

Cornesh: "I said...WHERE'S JANEK!?"

Tv: "I HAVE SOMEBODY ON THE PHONE RIGHT NOW-A. SAYS THAT IM LYING...SAYS THAT HE KNOWS THAT THE SPIRITS WOULD NOT SAY SUCH THINGS-A. AB..."

Cornesh pulled the plug out of the Tv, addressing the guard again. Standing up the guard un-holstered his baton and slowly walked around the desk, his weapon tapping his leg.

Guard: "What is wrong with you...?"

Cornesh un-phased by such threatening behavior attempted to make himself bigger and puffed out his chest.

Cornesh: "Wheres....Janek?"

His tone was quieter now, but also slower. The guard sighed and scratched the back of his head with a free hand.

Guard: "I, i dont know. But what i do know is...you need to learn some manners."

He slowly raised the baton and as he did so a black shadow swept past him. Its voice quick and snappy.

Voice: "YOU...sit. And you...Come wvith me."

The guard knew whom Janek was addressing without even having to turn around and immediatly backed away. He didn't want to get shipped off to the outskirts of Mudos for just beating in a fat bastard and so attempted to calm himself. Cornesh on the other hand kept his calm composer, although secretly he was thankful that Janek had arrived on time. He wobbled upto Janek who was now standing infront of the metallic doors, his hand on the security panel. A friendly 'Bing' came from the mechanism and the doors quickly opened, each going to the side, followed by a 'humming noise'. Janek stepped into the dark room, slowly followed by Cornesh.

Janek: "Now. Wve have ground rules in here Cornesh...You either abide by them or you never see her again...understood? Hm?"

A low mumble of aggreance was all Cornesh could muster as he stared in awe at the technology which was behind two electronically operated doors. And then happiness over-whelmed him as he saw Aisha...

~End~

(OOC: Wwwwwwwwwell? By the by Lallm is said like 'Calm' but with a 'L' instead.)
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