The Four Dominions -

Oddey · #31 05-19-2009, 02:25 AM

Actually... Every fan-fic I've read hasn't bored me. This one is no exception. Continue please.

AlexFili · #32 05-19-2009, 04:54 AM

I don't know where this whole "boredom" thing came from, I just said that my chapter names kinda suck. My character naming style is really quite random as well.

I'm writing this one "on the fly".

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Chapter 13: Watchful Eye

It had been two hours, Une was beginning to show signs of fatigue. "Nara Honora, I shall now be taking my ten minute break". Nara nodded, "That is acceptable".

Une was about to walk down the ladder when Nara said, "Hold... I see something". Une walked back to where she was to see a bunch of objects on the horizon. She put on her binoculars and looked at the objects. "Four outlaws, one with a spear... the other ones are carrying guns. They do not appear to be friendly. Let us sound the warning bell". Nara nodded. She rang the warning bell with her hand, pulling the rope. Mern stopped in his tracks as he listened for the sound, he began sprinting towards the tower.

Une and Nara climbed down the ladder, picking up their weapons along the way. Mern spotted them. Nara called out to him, "There are hostile creatures headed this way, begin the armament". Mern nodded, "Confirmed".

As the figures continued to advance, Une and Nara held their daggers in a fighting stance. Mern was holding one of his daggers in a throwing pose. A sound behind them made them spin around to look behind them.

Oddey · #33 05-19-2009, 06:27 AM

So how is the outsider going to come into play... I'll have to wait and find out.

I don't know how we got around to boredom, but the subject here changes rather fast.

MA · #34 05-19-2009, 07:24 AM

i wasn't expecting outlaws.

this will be interesting.

AlexFili · #35 05-25-2009, 02:09 AM

Sorry for the delay, I had a massive load of exams to deal with. Here's the next bit to wet your appetite

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Chapter 14: Blindside Attack

Mern could hear another bell go off, “A second attack?”. A few moments later they could hear more bells, soon the whole village’s towers were getting ready. Nara looked at Mern, “This is no skirmish, this is a planned attack”. Mern nodded, “We need to prepare for attack. Une Honora, pick up the plated shield”.

Une rushed towards the nearby wall, removing the special defensive shield. It was about 5 foot tall with a narrow gap in the metal for the wielder to see. Mern instructed Une to place the shield on the floor and sit behind it. As she did so, Mern and Nara stood behind Une, clutching their long-range throwing daggers.

The first Outlaw held his gun as he ran towards them, he aimed towards Nara but Mern threw his dagger. Mern's dagger almost entered the Outlaw's head completely. He fell over and the other Outlaws began firing. Une managed to deflect most of the shots. Nara threw her dagger at another Outlaw, this time the Outlaw's jaw was injured, it fell on the ground. As another Outlaw fired, Une moved the shield and the shot was deflected back to the Outlaw, who fell backwards.

The last Outlaw with the spear ran towards the group and jumped into the air. Mern jumped upwards and slashed with his dagger. In an instant, the Outlaw landed on his feet... a fresh wound made him look down at his chest. A few seconds later he fell forwards as Mern put the dagger back in it's sheath.

Suddenly, Mern heard a war-horn from nearby. It seems that a new wave of Outlaws was on it's way.

MA · #36 05-25-2009, 06:09 AM

oh dear, more outlaws.

these sligs are more than capable of looking after themselves.

Oddey · #37 05-27-2009, 10:06 AM

(Raises eyebrows) Where could these outlaws be coming from? Are they just a minor distraction from the main plot? Or are they the main plot? I don't seek answers, just more questions.

AlexFili · #38 05-27-2009, 12:35 PM

=Chapter 15: Howls of War=

Where the heck are all these outlaws coming from? This is what was going through Mern Honora's mind at this moment in time. Unfortunately, he wouldn't get an answer. The closest thing he got to an answer wasn't a word, but a sound. A loud war-horn was heard, almost deafening the defenders.

Mern tried to count the number of attackers on the horizon, but it was impossible. The warning bells from the towers had alerted all of the dominions. Prida was covering the East side, Fortuna was covering the North. The West side was where Nara, Une and Mern were standing. Soon, they heard some familiar voices as the rest of the Honora clan ran towards them. Mern nodded and stepped aside, allowing the Honora clan to defend the West region.

As Brava had just finished their shift recently, it took a while for the Brava clan to get back into action. Warro and Maru were among the Brava clan members who were headed towards the South gate. The outsider was standing there with his mouth wide open (although because of the tentacles you couldn't really tell). His eyes opened in shock, "This is normal?". In this case, the outsider was completely and utterly right.

Oddey · #39 05-28-2009, 05:25 AM

That outsider has an amzingly hilarious personality.

MA · #40 05-28-2009, 07:07 AM

a fights a-brewin.

AlexFili · #41 05-30-2009, 03:28 AM

Chapter 16: Dawn of War

Warro was fighting some Outlaws with a sword. He stabbed one and then slashed another Outlaw's gun in half before kicking him in the chest. Maru was wrestling with a skinny Outlaw, the Outlaw moaned as Maru punched him in the head and then held him in a chokehold.

Park was using his spear to attack a group of Outlaws. He swung the spear from left to right, making them all trip up. He jumped onto an Outlaw, crushing his bones under the weight of his armor, the Outlaw howled with pain. Tury, Une and Aero were all firing their arrows towards the Outlaws. As one Outlaw went down, another stepped up and tried to fire his gun towards the tower. Tury dodged the shot and then sent a flaming arrow towards the Outlaw. The Outlaw was running around trying to put the fire out.

Nara and Oren were dueling with some Outlaws. Nara's curved dagger made it easy to deflect their knife attacks and then attack with ferocity. Oren punched an Outlaw and then threw him into the moat area. The Outlaw cursed as he tried to get out of the moat, but was struggling under the pressure of the water. Mern stood next to the tower and threw a dagger towards the nearest Outlaw, the Outlaw collapsed on the ground.

It looked like they were winning, but could they keep this up before more of the city re-inforcements arrived?

MA · #42 05-30-2009, 04:07 AM

good fight scene, i liked Park's actions.

Oddey · #43 06-01-2009, 06:51 AM

Seems to me that those outlaws are on orders to certain death.

AlexFili · #44 06-02-2009, 12:07 AM

Time for a bit of explanation. Emarka means; "A large amount of luck / The luckiest day".

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Chapter 17: General Chaos

Park just swiped his spear towards another Outlaw when he saw something in the distance. It was a golden flag, with a skull imprinted onto the fabric. "Look! It's their leader!".

The golden flag was covering a large mechanical travelling device, on the device was a large Outlaw. The Outlaw had numerous scars and was carrying a large axe. Engraved on the axe were the words "Death Tribe". The Outlaw guided the rolling device towards the nearest gate. Park noticed this and yelled, "We need the Prida Chief".

Nara was trying to hold off some Outlaws, a couple of the Fortuna and Honora fighters had some injuries and had to pull back. Une appeared as Nara's reinforcement and helped her to defend her line. Nara turned to look at her, "Thank you, Une Fortuna". Une smiled, "No problem, come on... let's make them run back to their mothers!". Nara smiled and focused on the attackers in the distance.

A few minutes later, Park saw the leader of the Prida clan. His armor was much thicker than the armor worn by Park. Galamos wielded two spears, his steel tipped boots made a lasting impression on anyone who saw them. Galamos looked at Park, "I will settle this". Park nodded, "Emarka sir". Galamos smiled, "Emarka on you as well, Park". A fight would happen fairly soon, Park could sense it.

Oddey · #45 06-02-2009, 02:56 AM

Main characters are a writers biggest enemy and greatest friend. They make the story go round, but if you don't write in their shoes, they won't work with it. Just some advice.

And I look forward to reading Galamos spearing this outlaw.

MA · #46 06-02-2009, 08:30 AM

that boss outlaw seems to be made of tough stuff.

AlexFili · #47 06-08-2009, 06:48 AM

Chapter 18: Only Warfare

The Outlaw reached the gate and climbed off his vehicle. Galamos stepped forward, "You led this ambush to our city. Why?". The Outlaw chuckled, "We placed a tracking device in a common Slig and observed his movements, leading us here. We plunder and pillage, we kill and burn, we slash anyone and everything in our way. The Death Tribe will never stop". Galamos sighed, "In that case... Shall we settle this in a one-on-one match?". The Outlaw laughed, "You don't stand a chance against me". Galamos smiled, "We shall soon see".

The Outlaw threw off his robe menacingly, it hit the ground with tremendous force. Park looked closely at the robe to see it had weights connected to it. It was obviously a garb used to train the body. Galamos withdrew his two spears, entering into a battle stance.

The Outlaw gave a yell and ran towards Galamos. Galamos twisted his body and jumped out of the way. He used his spear to slash at the Outlaw, leaving a small wound. The Outlaw swung his massive axe, the axe was flying through the air towards Galamos, but he ducked and ran towards the Outlaw. He plunged one of the spears into the Outlaw. He started walking away when he heard a laugh behind him.

MA · #48 06-08-2009, 08:02 AM

i hope Galamos hasnt put himself in a trap.

Oddey · #49 06-09-2009, 02:05 AM

That cheif is probrably like the Urak-Hai leader from Lord of the Rings.

AlexFili · #50 06-10-2009, 09:57 AM

Chapter 19: Resolution

The Outlaw got up and hit Galamos with one gigantic fist. Galamos was thrown to one side, Galamos stood up, his spear was still sticking out of the Outlaw's body. Galamos held his other spear in his right hand, "You're lucky to be alive". The Outlaw once more picked up his axe and swung it at Galamos. Galamos rolled out of the way just in time, he jumped onto the Outlaw's back and kicked it. The Outlaw gave a yell of pain and fell to his knees.

Galamos and the Outlaw started fighting again, the Outlaw kept trying to attack Galamos, but Galamos was far too quick. Galamos managed to slash the Outlaw many times, the Outlaw kept getting back up. The Outlaw then punched Galamos, but Galamos then stuck his spear into the Outlaw's fist, "You're too slow... Outlaw". As Galamos raised his weapon, Park looked away from the final blow.

The outsider was shaking, the computer chip in his hand. "I... I didn't know anything about that locator chip, honest!". The guard held the outsider up by his robe and raised his weapon. Nara raised a hand, "Hold, He is telling us the full truth about this. I believe him". The guard let go of the outsider's robe.

The computer chip was a small black box with a red circle in the center. The circle blinked on and off, like a GPS tracking device. The outsider held out his hand, Nara took the computer chip and smashed it. "Obviously he could not have been the only one. Question all newcomers about this and discover any remaining computer chips". The guard gave her a salute, "Confirmed". The outsider bowed to Nara, "Thank you". Nara smiled, "Let us take you back to the information point".

MA · #51 06-10-2009, 01:14 PM

Galamos beat the outlaw pretty bad.

AlexFili · #52 06-12-2009, 12:35 AM

Time for a new phrase to be revealed; Demda - This is a shortened version of "I demand to hear the truth". Usually this phrase is offered to Honora clan members. Honora members are bound by this rule to tell the whole truth about a particular subject. However, this phrase should not be overused and never for personal matters of any sort.

I'm putting a cap of 20 chapters for this story, just so I can re-formulate some ideas and get a bit of breathing space. I will be continuing the Four Dominions story in due time.

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Chapter 20: Knowing Them

Park was tending to Galamos' wounds. Park dabbed a white cloth onto Galamos' shoulder, "What do you think that was sir? A warning?". Galamos shook his head, "It seemed more like, an aggressive takeover. This Death Tribe situation worries me". Park looked up at him, "How so, sir?". Galamos put his hand on his chin, "Well... we don't know how many of them there are. What if that was just a scouting party and we are all in serious danger". Park looked a bit shocked, "Do you think this is some kind of conspiracy?". Galamos sighed, "Hard to tell. We'll just have to wait".

Warro had found Tury. Tury wasn't too badly injured, but his arm was aching from the previous battle. Warro waved, "Hey Tury". Tury walked over, "Oh, Hi Warro. Everything alright?". Warro sighed, "Yeah, it was annoying to be woken up so early though, we'd just finished a long shift was well". Tury smiled, "Never mind, let's go see how the others are".

Honora members often stick to having a few close friends, most of these friends will be from other clans. The reason being that Honora members are famous for not talking about their injuries to each other. Park walked up to Nara, "Demda, did you sustain any injuries during the battle?". Nara smiled, "Negative, I did not sustain any injuries". Park chuckled, "Okay then, I guess that was a bit unnecessary then". Nara walked up to Park and put a hand on his shoulder, "Thank you Park Prida. You were checking my personal condition, I appreciate that".

= Epilogue =

The next day, a strange sequence of events occured. Sarouki, Galamos, Rikardo and Valhala, the four leaders of each clan called together a council and arranged to meet with one of the clan members. The room was dark and circular. The leaders wore black robes and sat on four thrones.

The nervous clan member stepped forward, "You asked to see me sir?". Sarouki spoke, "We are in need of your help. We have a quest you must complete. Take three of your closest friends, one from each clan. Your destination is north, to the Blizzard Mountains". As the clan member left the hall, Sarouki spoke once more, "Emarka... Warro Brava".

MA · #53 06-12-2009, 06:41 AM

good edition. i'll be awaiting the next.

AlexFili · #54 06-12-2009, 02:20 PM

Appendix! Here's some extra bits for you to sink your teeth into!

Drawing of the clans; http://alexfili.deviantart.com/art/F...nfic-125711596

Here are the names of the leaders and the weapons they use;
=BRAVA: FIERCE WARRIORS=
Sarouki - Longsword

=PRIDA: JUSTICE KEEPERS=
Galamos - Two Spears, Leader

=FORTUNA: KEEN ARCHERS=
Rikardo - Repeating Crossbow

=HONORA: HONORABLE FIGHTERS=
Valhala - Sacred Sword

=DEATH TRIBE=
Oraka - Axe dude (the outlaw that Galamos defeated)

MA · #55 06-12-2009, 02:53 PM

oh this is good, a bit of info. i like the pictures also.

Oddey · #56 06-13-2009, 12:33 AM

I look forward to the next bit. Until then... Good job.

AlexFili · #57 06-13-2009, 02:28 AM

The next thing you can expect is a Four Dominions spin-off game. It will be in the style of a tower defense game.