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=O Brave little scrub. Good thing Nedd didn't tear his face off. Lady... that is a gay name. No offense. Why didn't Lady go into the basement if that's where Nedd went? Not trying to critisize but I just wanted to ask. All in all good chapter. I'm just waiting for the next chapter.
The doors were shut. Maybe I should've mentioned that... o.o

This crack-indused chapter was made possible by countless doses of stress, homework, school, and blood tests.
You've made me what I am today, thank you very much.
I am aware that this chapter is confusing. This is for me to be angry about.

Strong language was used. It seemed only necessary.



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In the end, Durc ended up sending three seperate patrol squadrons into the basement: his own squad, which Dan was a part of, a smaller squad with gas masks and anti-bacterial suits who would enter the more dangerous rooms, and a squad with attack slogs who would attempt to sniff out the perpetrator. They went their separate ways and abruptly vanished into the gloom, leaving only wet footprints behind.




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Dan was surprised. He had always thought that the basement would be an evil place with black walls and scattered with dead bodies (or at least zombies), but he was wrong. The basement looked like every other floor on the airship, only it was dark, wet, and smelled like decay. It was disappointing. Dan had always hoped that venturing into the basement would give him certain bragging rights, but now he wasn’t so sure.

“Well,” Durc sighed as he stroked Lady’s head, “Here we are.” he didn’t sound frightened at all. The same couldn’t be said for the rest of the group.

This place looks like some sort of hell hole, an intern next to him muttered dully, twirling his snoozi. Dan recognized him as Red, an intern with bloodshot eyes who used to work for the chemical division of the ship. He was a rather depressing fellow. Standing next to him was Ian, an intern who was practically Red’s shadow, Hal, an intern who was usually too drugged up to say anything but was damn useful with a snoozi, and Jub, who was shaking as much as he always did.. There were five other people there whom Dan didn’t recognize.

Durc stepped into the darkness without even a passing glance and flicked on his flashlight. Lady trotted ahead of the group, trying to pick up a scent in the wet air, but to no avail. “Okay, so here’s the plan,” Durc said. “You see someone who’s not a member of our squads. You shoot at them. We get on with our lives. Questions?”

Dan didn’t like the plan, but he wasn’t one to complain. He frowned and followed behind the rest of the group, deep in thought.

He hadn’t seen Nedd in days, not since he had gone into the basement. Dan had always figured that Nedd was simply having a bad day and wanted to go somewhere where he could cool off. But now, with the news of a cylonite-infected intern loose on the grounds and the kitchen raid, Dan was getting different ideas. What if Nedd had something to do with all the strange occurrences? What would they do to him if it was him?
Dan sighed and caught up with his group, trying to detract himself from his questions.

A musty smell like upturned soil hung in the crisp, frigid air. The only sounds that broke the silence was dripping water, footsteps against the soggy floorboards, and the buzz of a nearby intern’s headphones as they blasted heavy metal. Dan looked from side to side with each passing hall, constantly alert for anything that could jump out and attack.

A scent wafted in the air that made Dan freeze. It was horrible and familiar, a bitter, metallic smell that stung his eyes. Durc put a claw up against his mouth in the ‘hush’ pose. Everybody fell silent, slowly brandishing their desired weapon. The lead vykker pushed open a door and recoiled as the stench overwhelmed them like an avalanche. The floor of the room was covered in gore and bones that were kept wet from the humid air. Mixed in with the carnage was an array of shimmering glass and a clear, cream-colored liquid: formaldehyde.
Durc bent down and picked out a small, hard fragment that was nested in the gristle. He turned it over in his claws, looking distraught.

“A slog tooth.” he muttered, shaking his head. Lady shrank away from the door, whimpering. “This used to be a slog.”
Dan stared at the floor in pure repulsion. The body had been mutilated so badly that it completely covered the floor, smearing it a ruddy scarlet. No mere slog fight could cause that much damage.

Durc continued down the hall with a wave of his hand, suddenly uninterested. “Come on.” He grumbled darkly. The team followed behind, huddled closer than ever before, their eyes shifting in the dark.

The basement became more and more appalling as they continued their search. Broken glass littered the floor. Bones were piled up in corners. Medical tools, shaped like twisted weapons of torture, glinted evilly in the flashlight’s glow. By the time they reached the heart of the basement water was up to their ankles, sloshing under their feet with each step. Durc held Lady in his arms to keep her from getting wet, looking distressed. Ian yawned.

This is getting nowhere. He complained, kicking aside a jar that was resting nearby.

Red leaned against a wall and crossed his awkwardly-bent legs. How do we know that the guy we’re looking for is even down here? I bet that stupid slog couldn’t find him even if it---

A pale streak shot past the team and slammed Red to the ground, suffocating him under its weight. The water boiled as Red fought for his life under the biggest, ugliest slog Dan had ever seen. It had blotchy skin the color of maple syrup and jaws that spread monstrously wide, flashing serrated shark-like teeth.

Red! Ian cried, diving in to the fray. He pried the crazed slog off of the struggling intern and a bullet screeched through the air, striking it dead. It fell limply at Ian’s side, coloring the water an ailed red.

Durc flourished his snoozi and pointed it at Red, who was soaking wet and breathing heavily. Red’s eyes widened and he stepped back, his hands out in front of him as though to block an attack.

He’s gone crazy! Red hissed, backing up against the wall.

“Did the slog bite you?” Durc demanded, sounding frantic. Red shook his head. “Did it scratch you?” Red shook his head again. Durc sighed and sheathed his snoozi, eyes hazy. He turned to the group, who looked stupefied at his sudden outburst.
“That,” Durc said, motioning towards the dead slog, “Was a highly infectious, highly dangerous cylonite slog.”

Jub jerked involuntarily. But I thought only an intern was supposed to be infected...

Durc rolled the slog over with his foot. It toppled to its side, blood splashing from the wound in its head. Dan stared. Was it just him, or did it have holes in its neck that resembled intern teeth?

Durc said in a voice that sounded worn out, “Lets get out of the water, shall we?” But he didn’t draw on the fact that a practically rabid slog had just tried to maul them.

They stepped out of the ankle-deep puddle of water, their legs sloshing with each unsteady step. Lady whined and nudged Durc’s leg with her snout, wanting to be picked up, but she was ignored.

Durc said quietly, “I have a feeling we’re dealing with something much worse than we thought.”



<~{.epidemic.}~>



‘How dare they come to this place.’

He was unconscious of what he was had done, what he was doing, what he was about to do. Dismemberment was easy. Undoing it was hard. Facing it, he knew in the back of his head, would be impossible, unbearable, worth killing over and over and over again for. His eyes were red with pain and his breath made a hollow, ragged sound. He spotted his target. He was standing alone, his blitz packer clattering in his hands like an angry hornet. His butchered comrades lay silent at his sides. The slig whispered,

“Hello?”

And a startlingly sickening voice, like somebody who had never spoken before, replied harshly,



‘I... am here...’




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A scream, sounding as though it had come from far away, echoed eerily down the narrow passage. Dan whirled around. His eyes reflected his horror like small, golden pools. Did you hear that?

The question was pointless; it was obvious that everyone had heard it. Durc flourished his lil’ hacker, twirling it effortlessly in his claws. He rapped out orders, his voice surprisingly calm.

“Get in a line, follow me, and keep your head down. Grab a weapon and prepare to shoot like a lunatic.”

They left the hall at a brisk pace, weaving through the labyrinth of corridors with a hushed silence. They had no idea where they were, but one thing was for certain; if they stopped moving it would surely get them, whatever it was. Dan’s hand reached for his snoozi every time something rustled in the dark, and he had to strain his brain to keep calm. One slip, one out-of-place sound, could facilely give them away.

A faint slosh came from behind. Durc raised his little hacker, whispering,
“Look behind you.”

Dan turned his flashlight, his hands shaking, towards the pathway behind them.
Something sped through the light and vanished

“There’s something back there,” a slig said anxiously, cramming a cartridge clip into the back of his gun. Durc swung around and shushed him.

“Keep quiet.”

Lady growled viciously, swaying her bulk from side to side like a caged lion. Durc stiffened.

“Lady.” He called. “Get back here!”

Lady advanced a few steps, warily sniffing the air with her enlarged nostrils. Then, as if deciding that there was no threat, she darted forward so as to be friendly with the newcomer. Durc cursed and let her go: he wasn’t about to advance into the darkness alone. Lady was quickly consumed by the empty void, and her loud footsteps were drown out. Durc motioned for the team to follow before retracing his steps in search of his ignorant pet. Dan muttered,

Maybe its just another squad?, but he spoke too soon.

Droplets of blood began to materialize on the floor, glinting banefully as they walked past. The drops soon grew to splashes, and the splashes grew to puddles.

Durc quailed like a cornered meep and whispered, “Lady?”

Dan stopped and examined the blood. Smear marks as thick as tire tracks stained the floor, as though somebody had run through it. He looked up slowly, perplexed, as the bloodshed lead them to a large chamber that seemed to serve no purpose. The ceiling was spider-webbed with rafters five feet thick that dangled haphazardously only a few dozen feet above their heads. In the middle of the room was Lady, blood dripping from her mouth and nostrils from internal bleeding. She tried to stand up, but staggered to the side instead. Something had slammed into her and broke her ribs without breaking the skin, but how?

“L-Lady!” Durc cried, running forward. A slig yanked him back roughly.

“I don’t like the sight of this. It looks like a trap.” Muttered the slig.

“But my slog!” Durc whined. “Lady! We can’t just leave her there!

The argument heated up abruptly, but Dan wasn’t paying attention. He shone his flashlight on the wall, squinting against the dim light. Something glittered back at him, dark and messy.

‘Is that blood?’ He wondered, looking at the long streaks. They seemed to go up the wall... and into the rafters. Dan stiffened in horror.

“Fine,” The slig relented. “We’ll get the stupid animal. But after that we have to get out of here.”

Durc sped into the chamber to grab Lady—

DON’T! Dan warned, running in after him. Durc picked up Lady gently, lovingly, and she softened under his grasp. Dan skidded to a hault...

And then: pain. Colors bursting through his skull like fireworks. His collarbone nearly snapping under an impenetrable weight. Dan was slammed against the wall by what felt like a freight train. Bullets filled the air, startled cries followed. Dan felt whoever had grabbed him lower him carefully to the floor before taking off in the opposite direction. Dan tried to get to his feet, but instead of standing he felt a splitting sensation in his stomach, as though his insides had turned to liquid fire. He collapsed to his knees and looked weakly to his side.

Blood and guts were being thrown in the air like confetti by a monster. When the downpour subsided and the figure swung around, Dan realized who it was, and felt as though the world had come crashing down on him. His eyes rolled back and he fell with a loud thump. The screeching of bullets subsided at last.

Dan felt somebody lightly turn him over. Dan tried to open his eyes, but his eyelids fluttered instead. A voice asked,

You okay, man?

Dan forced himself to look up. His vision watered momentarily before revealing Red, his headphones gone and his face bruised, kneeling close by. Red looked fearfully over his shoulder and said venomously,
He got Ian. I swear, if I ever see that bastard again, I’ll kill him. He looked down at Dan sadly. It was Nedd. He’s gone ballistic. I tried to shoot him, but he was too fast...

Dan sat up and rubbed his head. The chamber was as dispiriting as a morgue, illuminated only by Red’s flashlight. Dan could feel a river of something hot and sticky sopping the floor. He looked around wildly, spotting limp bodies silhouetted in the darkness. They were bleeding profoundly, soaking the entire tile flooring. Dan shakily rose to his feet. Red followed.

Where did... he go? Dan asked. He was so horror-stricken that he couldn’t bring himself to say Nedd’s name. Red looked around.

That way, He said, pointing off to the side. He dragged Ian off with him. He turned his attention to the dead bodies, and turned one over with his foot. It was the body of Jub, his stomach torn to tatters and his eyes red and glassy. Red murmured, I thought I could trust Nedd. I thought he was a good guy. He was a coward Why would he ever do this?

He wouldn’t, Dan replied quietly. After a thoughtful pause Dan added, We need to get out of here.

They left the room hastily, wandering the corridors like mice in a maze. Red kept his eyes focused on the ground without saying a word. The soggy floor splashed under their feet and Dan’s insides ached, as though something was punching him in the stomach with brass knuckles. A faint light shimmered ahead, a teal blue that rippled like light passed through water. Red looked up.
This must be the cooling system, he said quietly. We’ll be safer there.

They entered a square-shaped door in the wall that was barely tall enough to fit through. Dan looked around in awe at the watery, underground mote that wound its way around the thin wall separating it from the generator system.

Look, Dan muttered, gazing over the edge of the protective wire. Its like a river–

IAN! Red yelped, jumping back.

Nedd had Ian in a strangle hold and was slamming him against a wall, slowly suffocating him. Ian kicked and struggled, putting up an impressive fight, but to no avail. Nedd hardly seemed to notice Dan and Red standing there, watching in horror as one of their friends fell victim to his mindless killing.

Nedd! Dan exclaimed.

Nedd’s head snapped up, locking Dan with his imposing gaze. Dan was smart enough to guess what was wrong.
‘Cylonite,’ He thought darkly. ‘Why oh why had they ever even considered studying it?’
Dan backed up instinctively, repulsed. The whites of Nedd’s eyes were blood red, a startling contrast to his dark brown irises and diamond-shaped pupils. He looked startlingly thin, like a starving animal, and his mouth had been practically gored, revealing his vertical jaws. He had bruise-colored stretch marks on his arms and legs; his bones and muscles were growing faster than his skin, pulling it to its limit. Nedd stared at Dan and Red, his horns flat against his head defectively. Finally Red broke free of his hypnotic stare and snarled,

Let Ian go!

Ian’s eyes rolled back into his skull and his feeble kicking subsided. Nedd didn’t even look. Red stared on in alarm, his face a mask of horror. Ian?
Nedd, Dan breathed, sounding exhausted. Nedd didn’t even blink. You don’t have to do this. Let Ian go.
There was a pause. Nedd stared down at Ian as though he just noticed him. Dan continued,
Just let him go. The secrets out. You’re infected. But we can help you.

There was a horrible pause. Then, as if finally deciding, Nedd dropped Ian. He fell limply to the floor. His head rolled. His eyes closed. Nedd backpedaled quickly, looking at his crimson-tinted hands in panic. Red ran over and shook Ian gently, staring at him with a look of dread.
Nedd, too preoccupied with realization, muttered

“I didn’t kn---”

Durc sprang out from a doorway and tackled Nedd to the floor, slashing away at him with his lil’ hacker.

“YOU KILLED MY SLOG!” He screamed, diving the weapon into Nedd’s face. “I’LL KILL YOU FOR THAT, YOU SON OF A BITCH!

They grappled on the floor in a tumbling mass, slashing away at each other every chance they got. Durc, seeing as he was an experienced officer, managed to hack away at Nedd while avoiding his attacks. Unfortunately for Durc, Nedd was a raving berserker, and was practically immune to pain. Dan looked around frantically, unsure of what to do. Either way, one of them was going to die, and Dan was helpless to prevent it.

He ran back off into the basement and searched a nearby room, looking for anything he could use as a weapon without killing anybody. He grabbed a shovel (‘What the hell is this doing here?’) and zipped back to the cooling system as quick as a flash. Ian was awake, and both him and Red were backed up against the fence, terrified. The fight showed little progress as Durc and Nedd were of equal strength and speed.

‘What should I do, what should I do, what should I do?!’

He quickly made a decision, though he regretted it. He ran over, gave an exaggerated battle cry to boost his morale, and smacked Nedd across the face with the shovel as hard as he could.

Nedd lost his grip and fell back, twitching. Dan felt a sudden flush of pity; not for Durc and not for Ian, but for Nedd. Durc laughed in triumph.

“For Lady!” he howled, raising the little hacker over his head.

STOP! Dan snapped. Durc swung around, and stared straight down the barrel of Dan’s snoozi. Dan motioned with the weapon, warning Durc to step away.

“Are you threataning me?” Durc snarled. Dan’s face fell as he realized he was pointing a gun at his boss. He held it out nonetheless, his face blank. Durc stepped away from Nedd and threw his lil’ hacker and snoozi aside, looking, quite frankly, pissed. “There. Now put the gun down.”

Dan new better than to do that. Durc sighed and whipped out his flashlight.
“Okay, look, I’m leaving. Don’t shoot. Okay?”
Dan nodded. Durc flicked on the light and cautiously left the cooling system, looking back over his sholder as if expecting Dan to fire at any second. Dan didn’t lower the gun until Durc’s footsteps gradually faded away.

Nedd groaned and rose, his eyes murky. Suddently his pupils swivelled, and Nedd shot Dan a look of loathing so intense that it made Dan wince. A ragged gash ran across Nedd’s left eye and down his face in a zig-zag. Dan muttered quickly,

Nedd, your eye is cut. It could get infected. If we don’t do something, it’ll go blind... if you’ll just let me—

“GET OUT!” Nedd roared, his jaws snapping shut like a steel trap. They didn’t need to be told twice. Dan, Red, and Ian sped off into the basement guided only by their flashlight, leaving Nedd alone in the cooling system.




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Ian whispered a brief thanks.

I thought he was gonna kill me... I would’ve never thought that Nedd would do something like that...

He was infected. Dan said, wincing in pain as his stomach groaned. With cylonite. It wasn’t his fault.

Red rolled his eyes in disbelief, but he didn’t say anything. Ian blinked at Dan strangely.

You okay? You look kinda sweaty.

Dan rubbed his face, feeling beads of water forming on his forehead. Its nothing. He said. When Nedd slammed into me back there, I think he bruised my stomach, but I’m okay.

And suddently, unexpectantly, his vision flashed red. A screech echoed in his ears, a metallic taste filled his mouth, and he felt his bowels jerk as though they had split in half.

Red shrugged. If you say so... Dan?

And suddently there was nothing exept a few brief words that faded into Dan’s brain like a rock vanishing into an ocean.

Dan? DAN!

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Poor Dan. Lucky Ian. I thought the Durc was kind of funny in this chapter. What's happend to Dan? By the way there was a single spelling mistake. That would be when "Dan knew better than that" knew was spelled new. Awsome chapter and the only confusing bit was the thing with the slig that said "Is anyone there.". And as a small nitpicky note how do interns know that their teeth look like that?
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Poor Dan. Lucky Ian. I thought the Durc was kind of funny in this chapter. What's happend to Dan? By the way there was a single spelling mistake. That would be when "Dan knew better than that" knew was spelled new. Awsome chapter and the only confusing bit was the thing with the slig that said "Is anyone there.". And as a small nitpicky note how do interns know that their teeth look like that?
I figure they must have some idea. o.o;

I made this chapter because it seemed completely necessary to explain what cylonite does and the effects it has on the victim's body. Yay.
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It was cold and dark. He felt something tugging at his consciousness, prodding him like a curious animal. Dan moved away impulsively, disconnecting his thoughts.

What happened?

The incident in the basement was the most recent thing he could remember, yet it seemed far away, as though he had missed out on something important. He opened his eyes groggily, wincing as he felt an aching pain near his hip. Solid white light blinded him temporarily. His vision swam. The back of his head pounded slightly. Dan reached up and felt his face; he had an anesthetic plate strapped firmly over his mouth. He tore it off and tossed it aside, sitting up.

He was in the sickbay on a stretcher-like bed. The room was pure white and completely sterile, ready to use. Stainless steel tools and machines rested in a corner next to a night stand. There was a barred window in the middle of the wall to his left, draped in thin white curtains. Through the window he could just barely see the tops of trees as they passed over a forest, scattering startled birds in every direction. Somebody, Dan was surprised to see, was in the back of the room, by the door.

Ian? Dan asked with a yawn. Ian turned.

Oh, hey! You’re awake.

Dan rubbed his eye with the palm of his hand. He still felt dazed. What are you doing here?

Ian grinned. Lookin’ at this. He said, holding out a jar. Dan blinked.

Whats that? Dan asked.

Ian looked and said casually, Your appendix.

Dan stiffened. My APPENDIX?

Well, yeah. Ian said defensively. It exploded. We got some vykkers to cut it out. He shook the jar roughly. Its fun to shake it up and watch it roll around—

Give me that! Dan snapped, grabbing the jar. Looking at it made him feel sick. Dan knew how vykkers acted during an operation: they were giddy and over-enthusiastic, often cutting out extra feet of intestines just because they could and coming up with an excuse later. Chances were they’d cut out a kidney as well. Half of their patients died in surgery just because their doctors were too chop-happy.
You cut out my appendix and didn’t even ask me first? Dan demanded, his voice shrill. Ian shrugged.

You were unconscious. Plus it popped like a water balloon, so we didn’t have many options. But don’t worry: you can live without your appendix. Helix said so. Ian looked up at the ceiling as though examining the lights. ... or did that only count for tonsils? Ah, whatever.

Dan leaned against the stretcher-bed’s banister. How long was I out?

Only a day. You didn’t miss much. Ian sighed. After you fainted in the basement—

I didn’t faint! Dan grumbled.

Anyway, like, a second after you passed out a bunch of sligs and interns in these silvery-suits barged in. Somebody had managed to contact them and radio for help before Nedd, you know, slaughtered them. Ian fell silent. There was a long pause where no one seemed to know what to say, so Dan didn’t respond.

Dan pulled the thin white covers off of his body. At the left of his hip, barely hidden by his speedo, was badly done row of stitches, the outsides of which were chafed and swollen. The incision seemed unnecessarily long and made Dan feel even worse.
Dan got up out of bed and searched the night stand for his baseball cap, grumbling to himself. Ian blinked.

Shouldn’t you still be sleeping? He asked accusingly.

Screw that. I’m getting out of here.

Dan crammed the baseball cap over his head, twisting it so it faced the right way. The stitches in his hip were repulsive and completely noticeable. Dan pulled up his speedo in remorse, covering it the best he could.

Ian examined his nails boredly. By the way, there’s an informative-presentation-type-thing on the affects of cylonite going on in the Lecture Hall. I’ve seen it three times already, but apparently we’re supposed to go over it, like, five times, so we might as well go now.

They know about Nedd? Dan asked quietly.

We told them everything. We didn’t have much of a choice.

They left the sickbay, passing rooms full of people who were either missing a limb or had been mauled by fuzzles. Both Dan and Ian left the chambers with a growing sense of dread.

They eventually came to a quiet section of the ship that was rather inactive. The floor was covered with clean red carpeting that made a zipping sound under their feet. The hallways were wide and lined with cubicles on either side where interns were typing. The wall to their right was made completely of glass windows; the halls were to the side of the ship, giving them a perfect view of the guard tower and the forests below.

Red was leaning against a wall by a plain metal door, drinking a bottle of prescription penicillin. He eyed Dan distastefully.
Nice, he grumbled, taking a swig of the medicine. That scar makes you look like a thug. Did you kill somebody?

Shut up. Dan muttered.

Red pushed open the door and entered the Lecture hall, flanked by Dan and Ian. The room was long, with a stage-like podium on one side. A vykker stood on the podium, energetically explaining the horrible side-effects of the disease. Behind him was a large screen nearly as big as the wall, flashing pictures as demonstrations to help explain. Dan wove through the crowd of interns and vykkers so that he could get close enough to hear what was being said.

“...It overwhelms the Cerebral Cortex of the brain, much like a drug, damaging the victim’s hand-eye coordination. However, it is believed to improve the senses greatly, particularly one’s vision...”

The Cerebral Cortex produces antibodies to fight some diseases that try to infect it. That’s usually enough to destroy the infection, but Cylonite is too powerful. Red explained. He had always been better at advanced anatomy than Dan. Dan nodded slowly, perplexed.

The vykker said, “Cylonite is spread in only one way: by being bitten, or sometimes scratched, by an infected person. Cylonite spreads like crazy, traveling the bloodstream until it reaches the brain or heart. When it gets into the heart it either eats through the arteries or clogs them, each of which eventually result in death.”

Dan gulped. ‘What a horrible way to die.’ He thought.
He immediately worried for Nedd, but banished the thought immediately. He couldn’t worry about him; he tried to kill him, for Odd’s sake

“Sometimes, however, the heart can produce enough white blood cells to wipe out the cylonite threat. But there’s little that can stop it from infecting the brain. Once the blood gets inside the skull it damages the brain cells of the cerebellum, causing it to deteriorate. The deterioration screws up the body’s system, resulting in either loss or gain of muscles and bone marrow.”

An image appeared on the screen behind the vykker. He didn’t mention whether it was the nerve cell of an intern or a vykker, but Dan got the general idea. “As mentioned before, it damages the Cerebral Cortex until it eventually breaks out. But after it fights its way through the delicate tissue it reaches the brain stem. From there it squeezes inside nerve endings, slowly working its way down the spine, tearing away at nerves.”

An image appeared on the screen. It was a real picture of some creature’s spine, wrenched from its body and split in half, lying on a table. The inside of the spine was a foul dark brown, and the soft tissues inside, instead of being grey like normal nerves, were an eggplant color. A gag seemed to sweep through the crowd as a second picture was swept into view. It was a picture of the inside of the nerves, which seemed to be made of small, overlapping honeycomb. A dark red liquid the color of spoiled meat was dripping down at its base.

They vykker continued pleasantly, “This is the spine of an elum that had been infected for two months. So as you see, cylonite pretty much eats the shit out of the victim’s spine.
Now, as you clearly see, the ‘benefits’ of cylonite don’t outweigh the negative affects it has on one’s body.
One of the worst negative effects appear to be the inability to venture out into the sunlight. We’ve discovered that the cylonite germs die in bright places. The germs squeeze in-between skin cells, replacing a few of the nerves. When the victim goes out into the light, it starts killing the cylonite, and it causes the nerves to go crazy. When the nerves go crazy, the brain jerks, sending small electric shocks to the body. The shocks, which are usually used by our brains to transmit commands throughout the body, causes the lungs to fail which results in lack of oxygen. Prolonged exposure to light often results in a stroke or heart failure.”

The vykker grinned, satisfied. “Questions?”

Dan raised his hand. The vykker passed him a pen and a piece of paper, and he scrawled his question down.

The vykker read the paper critically. “I was getting to that.” he insisted. “Now, as many know, the cooling system in the basement is lit with blue lights.
These lights do not affect cylonite victims. Cylonite is killed off by exposure to Ultraviolet rays as well as the ‘hot’ lights in the color spectrum. FYI, red, yellow, and orange. The blue lights, which contain no UV rays and are, (wouldn’t you know it,) blue, have no affect.” The vykker scratched his head. “Kind of a flaw on our part, actually.”

The vykker continued answering questions. Dan sighed.
Maybe this isn’t such a big deal, he said. Maybe Nedd will die before he can do any more damage.

Ian crossed his arms. What your forgetting, he said bitterly, is that this is Nedd we’re dealing with. He’s survived more diseases than I can count. If anyone can survive a cylonite infection, Ian frowned, he can.

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Now that chapter was explanitory. Interns have appendix's? And kidneys? And tonsils? Cool. I'd prefer that you built a tv out of my comments and watched it for 1 minute on weekends. And that I built myself a huge temple out of your story, put 10 large statues of you inside and outside, and went there on sundays instead of at church (Which I don't go to.). Carry on Moosh!
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Or I could build a huge empire-state-building-sized monument of a huge Russian dwarf hamster out of your comments and dance around it in preperation for their dark harvest...

*shudder*

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It was late. Possibly four am, maybe five. Not that it mattered, anyway.

Nedd clamored up a tall stack of wooden crates, his blood-red eyes flickering slightly in the dark. Something ruffled in the dark and Nedd swung around, hissing like a taunted snake. Whatever it was ran off in sheer terror.
Nedd winced and warily felt his eye. The zig-zags across it were swollen and wet, and stung like a spider bite. Whenever he tried to open it a blinding pain filled his head, and his eye would crack and drip blood. He tried his best to ignore it, but something as degrading as losing an eye was hard to forget.

Once he had reached the crate’s pinnacle, Nedd sprang forward in a catlike motion, gripped the rafters with his powerful fingers, and hauled himself up without making a sound. The rafters stretched on all around the basement, making it a perfect hiding spot. He could pass right over a group of people and they’d never know he was there.

He moved stealthily across the platforms as though he had done it a thousand times, his feet splashing softly against the metal’s wet surface. He took a few turns and jumped across gaps in the grating, alert for danger the entire time. Eventually he came to a wide vent in the ceiling that had been torn forcefully from its hinges. He tilted his head to the side and examined it, making some quick calculations. Then, after what felt like hours, Nedd climbed back down to the basement floor. He looked satisfied. With a little more muscle he’d have no problem getting up the vent and into the room above, whatever room that could be.

He swung around suddenly, his good eye reduced to a slit. His night vision scanned the basement with almost daylight perception. A slog was nosing around a pile of bones, its tongue rolling in a docile manner. It spotted him and whined nervously, drool dripping from its mouth. Its jaw hung at an angle and its skin was a dark, lightly tanned color. It licked its snout curiously. Nedd stared. Where had he seen that slog before? He suddenly remembered, and said,

“Come here.”

The slog looked at him as though it had been slapped. Nedd repeated, this time with a no-nonsense voice,

“COME!”

The slog yawned, flashing its cream-colored mouth. The blotches in its skin rippled as it bent down to sniff the ground. Nedd sighed. What stupid name had they given that thing? Lugy? Lardy? Laddie?

“Lady.” he snapped. The slog yapped with glee and ran over, moving gingerly. Nedd could tell by the bruises on its sides that it had broken ribs, but it didn’t seem to notice. Nedd was slightly surprised; he thought he had killed that thing. Durc sure had acted like it was dead. Maybe he had been so traumatized that he didn’t bother to check for a pulse.

Lady sniffed his hand with her dilated nostrils. Nedd smiled broadly to himself. He could think of at least fifty things he could do with a slog that could track down whatever he wanted. He patted her gently on the head and she basked in his praise, her heavy panting echoing in the dark.



<~{.epidemic.}~>



Dan didn’t even know why he had bothered to show up to the guard tower the next morning. It was a complete waste of time; he knew that, either way, he would be fired. He had pointed a gun at his boss and threatened to shoot him, and for what? To save the life of a berserker who had tried to kill them? Dan wilted visibly. He couldn’t believe how badly he had messed up.

It could be worse. Red said, searching in his silver-armor suit. When he found what he was looking for (a bottle of aspirin, which he stole from a medicine cabinet) he continued, You could have once been a smart, clever, handsome intern....

Ian rolled his eyes.

... just hanging out and sorting chemicals like your supposed to, when suddenly a beaker explodes in your face, permanently turns your eyes red and—

Shut up. Dan grumbled harshly. I’m not in the mood to listen to you bitching about how horrible your life has been---

And instead of fixing your eyes, which would have been, like, freaking awesome, your boss sends you to work for the guard in a hellhole under the ship where a monster that was once a friend of yours is waiting to disembowel you and eat your insides like noodles. He finished his venting with a sigh. Dan looked away. Red might have been an easygoing, cool guy, but that didn’t stop him from complaining about his life once in a while, which often sent him into a spiraling depression.

The elevator jerked to a hault. The whiplash cracked Dan’s neck, and he winced. ‘Well that’s just fricking wonderful.’ He thought.

He glanced around quickly. The room was filled with about twenty other people. Everybody, like Dan, was wearing their shiny protective suits. Durc was saying something that sounded important, so Dan, Red, and Ian hurried over to listen.

“.... would be the left side,” he was advising, pacing back and forth for no reason in particular. “I stabbed its left eye, so chances are it would’ve gone blind by now. Be warned, cylonite victims are violent and extremely aggresive. Don’t mistake them for diseased, brain-dead losers either. They’re clever.”

Dan felt anger burning inside him. They were discussing tactics to kill Nedd, who had once been one of Dan’s only close friends, and they weren’t even referring to him as a ‘he.’ They kept calling him ‘it’, as though he were just an object in need of disposing of. Dan suddenly felt anger for himself overwhelming everything. Nedd was a monster! He deserved to be called an ‘it!’ He wasn’t Nedd anymore. Thinking that way made Dan feel unexpectedly sad, so he shook it off.
‘Don’t think about it... for odd’s sake, he’s not even Nedd anymore...’

“Remember to watch your backs.” Durc finished. “You never know what evil thing he’ll do to lure you in so he can tear you apart from the inside!” A slight sob followed.

Silence. Somebody in the back coughed, making the situation seem even more uncomfortable. Dan looked around.

‘For odd’s sake, it was a damn slog, buy a new one and get over it!’ He thought.

Durc suddently turned to Dan. Dan tensed, preparing for the worst.

“I have a special mission for you.” He said, though something about the way he said ‘special’ seemed to give the word the opposite meaning.

Dan hummed hopefully, Does that mean I’m not fired?

Durc knew what he was asking. “If it were my choice I’d have you fired and thrown forcefully off this ship in a heartbeat.” He said acidly, his teeth grinding slightly. “But, seeing as its not my choice, you’re staying. My supervisors have decided that, seeing as you used to be a colleague of Nedd and actually spoke with him in the basement, you would have a better chance of getting close enough to him to kill him.”
He turned around towards a closet where a slog could be seen rummaging around. Durc called in a musical tone, “Oh, Huuuuugoo~!”

The slog stomped out of the closet. Dan could’ve sworn he felt the ground shake. The slog was absolutely huge, with flabby, overlapping skin and teeth the size of Dan’s fist. Its snout ended in a shovel shape that was bigger than Lady’s had been, with wide nostrils. It trotted over obediently. Dan cringed. It smelled like an animal that had been hit by a bus and left out in the sun for a week.

“This is Hugo.” Durc said, clipping a leash around its fat neck. He handed the lead to Dan. “You’ll have to lead him into the basement.”

Dan jerked the leash. He instantly regretted it.

“Be gentle with him!” Durc whined. “He’s very sensitive---”

Hugo swung around, snarling and foaming like an angry bear. Red and Ian’s hands went instantly to their snoozis, but they didn’t fire. Hugo slammed Dan to the ground and dove forward as though to snap his head in half, when the rope jerked again. Durc held the leash, frowning.

“... and he’s a little temperamental.”

TEMPERAMENTAL? Dan shrieked, fumbling to stand. Durc shrugged.

“No skin off my bones.” He said simply. “But it will be for you if you keep messing with him, if you get my drift.”

Dan picked himself off. Hugo jerked forward, just to mess with him, and Dan flinched. Durc handed the leash back. Dan held it away from him as though it were a poisonous snake that could bite at any second.

“Here’s what we’re going to do.” Durc said. Everybody leaned in eagerly. Durc pulled a large, metal object from a closet. It was a large cart with a huge box on top. The box was filled with little barrels covered in shimmering glass. “This is a strobe light. Its extremely bright, even for normal people.” He pointed to a ring around its outside. A tube wrapped around it, holding a metal coil in place. “Its been fitted so that it magnifies the ultraviolet rays twofold. Nobody with cylonite will bear to get near it. We have six of these lights. We’ll be dividing most of the guard into eight groups. Six of them will enter the basement with the lights on, each mapping the entire premises. If all goes to plan, they’ll flush out the monster into the main intersection. There will be two teams- one team who waits in the intersection to kill the damn thing, and the other team who guards every exit and attempts to sniper our target with these.” He held out a weapon that had been in his belt. It looked like a snoozi, only it was longer and thinner. Durc grinned. “They’re really cool. Anyway, after this is all done, we take the body, disinfect it, burn it, then disinfect the ashes. Questions?”

“What if it doesn’t work?” A slig asked. Durc rounded on him

“What the hell do you mean? This plan is flawless!” The slig looked as though he might object, but faltered at the last moment.

Durc finally said, “Suit up! Meet me in the intersection in exactly o-ten-hundred hours...”

“We’re already suited up.” A slig said.

“So what?”

“...we could go now, if you want.”

Durc checked his watch. “Fine, suckup.” He growled. He turned his attention back to the crowd.

“Meet me in the intersection...” he paused, “...right now!”

They marched off to do his bidding. Dan sighed. What a relief. He would get to keep his job, he wouldn’t be kicked off the ship, and—

Hugo bit his leg. Dan yelped and jumped back. He frowned, suddenly remembering that no matter what you did, there would always be somebody to ruin it. He sighed darkly.

‘Story of my life.’

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What's Nedd going to do with Lady? And what's going to happen to Dan? I must see the next chapter. And slightly off topic: How did you know I liked Russian dwarf hamsters? Love your fanfictions.
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Sorry for the short chapter. As said before, i've been extremely busy, but recently i've gotten a break so i'll try to cram in as many chapters as I can. Plus I had to re-write this one cuz' the first one sucked.
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Dan was in a sour mood. His hip ached from his stitches and lack of appendix, and Hugo was gnawing on his leg. Dan tried to pull back, but when he did Hugo snarled, as though saying ‘would you rather have me chewing on your leg, or your face?’ So Dan had to stand there, helpless, as the slobbering slog bit away as though Dan were a scrap of meat with no free will.

“Okay,” Durc said, holding the neck of one of the strobe lights, “here’s a quick review. When we get inside the basement, you turn on the lights. Everybody takes a separate hall and shines it on anything that goes bump in the night. If said monster happens to be a twisted intern intent on snapping your neck and drinking your blood, shine the light and run like hell.” Durc pulled a pair of bulky goggles over his head and strapped a belt around his waist. “You’ll each be wearing one of these belts as well as infra-red goggles. They’re really great. The belts have a bunch of equipment on them, I doubt you’ll need any, but its basic regulations that you wear them. And with the goggles, you can see in the dark by heat, so if you see anything that looks like---”

“Why will we need infra-red goggles if we’re going in there with strobe lights? Won’t the lights, like, light up everything?” Somebody asked.

“Shut up and do what I say.” Durc said smugly, crossing his arms.

Hugo barked viciously as Dan tried to walk over and get some goggles from the bin. Dan was fed up. He kicked the slog’s snout with all his might and ran like he’d never run before, barely avoiding the fat slog’s snapping jaws and serrated teeth. He grabbed a pair of goggles and ducked behind whatever was closest- which happened to be Ian.

Sh– Ian cursed as Hugo lumbered over, licking his jaws and pulling back his gums.

“Enough ” Durc snapped, jerking Hugo’s leash. Dan nearly cried out in horror as Durc tied the end of the rope around his wrist so tightly that his hand turned purple. “Keep. Ahold. Of. Hugo ” He said piercingly, prodding Dan in the chest with each word for added emphasis. Dan flinched away from the slog, pulling back his leg to avoid it from being bitten.
“Now,” Durc said, “here’s how the squads will go. Dan will take Hugo and go with squad one, Red will go with squad two...”

The list seemed to be endless. Dan spent the entire time stiff with fear as Hugo crept slowly closer, his lips pulled back in a silent growl. Dan tried scooting away. Hugo only advanced more rapidly.

“So, questions? No? Well good, lets get this over with.” Durc turned on his goggles. Dan did the same. The quiet hallway went from grey to blue and purple, and the people around him turned red and orange. He couldn’t make out any defining features; he could only see their silhouettes.
“Okay, lets hurry this up. Now that we know what we’re dealing with, we shouldn’t have any problems.”



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The basement was just as Dan had remembered it; dark, damp, and dismal. Hugo trudged around at his feet, nearly knocking him over as he ground to a halt and nudged the floor, as though spying something very interesting.

Ian was in charge of the strobe light. He flicked a few switches and stood back, satisfied.

That should do it.

The lamp rattled as light poured out of its glass window, buzzing like a nest of angry hornets. The wheels at its base clattered and jumped violently, and sparks were shooting out of its back like fireworks. The screen of Dan’s goggles turned bright red from the sudden heat. He flinched and pulled them off, blinded.

Why the hell is it doing that? He complained. Ian shrugged and kicked it roughly.

Cuz’ it’s a piece of crap. We got the worst one.

Dan looked around quickly. There were only three other people in their squad, defiantly not enough to take down a rabid intern. They were sligs, fiddling with their weapons in an inexperienced manner- one had his finger caught in the barrel of his snoozi and was struggling to pull it out. Dan suddenly wondered how much of their well-beings were at stake.

Ian cocked his gun. Lets get going. He said, his feet splashing against the soggy metal floor as he continued down the corridor. Dan followed closely, worriedly eyeing the rafters above; it struck him that if there was any way Nedd could kill them before they even knew he was there, it would be from above.

Hugo tugged furiously at his leash and scrabbled his claws against the ground, plowing the small group aside with the force of an angry bear.

What the hell— Dan cursed, straining against the leash and digging his feet into the ground. Hugo spun around and bit down on his hand, hard. Dan cried out and jerked his hand back, freeing the leash from his wrist, and Hugo took off running.

Dan had enough to worry about as it was. His friend was a murderer, his appendix had exploded, his boss had nearly fired him, and they were putting their lives on the line just to try to get things back in order. The last thing he wanted to do was to let Hugo get away.



He pushed the sligs aside and dove, slamming his hands down on the leash. He grabbed it and swung back with a Herculean effort, and Hugo yelped in surprise, strangled by the whiplash. Dan jumped on the slog and slammed it to the floor, his eyes like angry, yellow pools.
You stupid animal He snarled, struggling to keep the slog pinned to the ground.

Ian whipped out his snoozi and looked around wildly. Keep quiet He urged. Dan shot him an icy glare.


I’m kind of busy here He snarled. Ian backed up against the wall.

I heard something.

Dan clamped Hugo’s mouth shut, looking around uncertanly. The sligs slowly brandished their weapons of choice and looked nervously over their shoulders and into the darkness.

Where? Dan hissed.

Ian motioned towards a door to the side. In there.

Dan took the leash and wrapped it roughly around Hugo’s snout, forming a makeshift muzzle. He hooked his arm around the slog’s chubby waist and picked him up, clamping on tightly as the beast kicked and struggled. Ian shoved open the door and thrust his snoozi inside, flaring it from side to side.

The room was large and looked as though it were once a storage area. It was roughly circular, about two hundred feet around, and scattered with tall racks that towered over their heads, forming an imposing labyrinth. The racks were stacked with glass jars filled with a yellowish liquid, each with a mangled test subject floating inside. Dan shuttered. The light from the lamp shone through the bottles, casting twisted shadows on the floor.

Ian switched off the light and motioned for the group to follow. They entered timidly, fixing their aim on anything and everything. Ian stepped carefully around a rack and continued down a narrow passage, his team trailing behind. Dan avoided looking at the ghastly creatures and body parts inside the jars, and focused instead on holding Hugo, who had ceased to put up a fight. Dan pulled his goggled back on worriedly, and the room immediately turned a greyish-blue, with the people around him and the still-hot strobe lamp glowing a beet-red.

Something clattered up ahead. Ian tensed and backed up against a rack, motioning for his team to do the same.

Something’s up there. He whispered. Dan tried to look through the glass jars, but recoiled when he realized his view was blocked by a giant tube as thick as his arm tangled inside one of them. It looked like some sort of tapeworm. He shuddered.

What do you see? Dan asked darkly. Ian replied without taking his eyes off his target;

Something too big to be a slog. Its giving off heat, but the jars are blocking it, so I can’t tell what it is. He reached into his belt and emptied his contents- a pocketknife. He frowned.
What did you get? He asked.

Dan rummaged around in his thick combat belt that had come with his infra-red goggles. The belt was thick and bulky, but only contained one thing- some sort of smoke grenade, possibly a flare.

Perfect. Ian said, grabbing it. Without a second thought he pulled off the tab and threw it as hard as he could. It flipped through the air and slammed the ground, popping like a balloon and filling the air with a powdery white gas that stung their eyes and made them gag. Dan snapped his eyes shut, his vision a blur.

A faint hiss filled the air as the gas subsided, leaving a powdery mildew on the floor. Ian stepped forward and peeked around the corner worriedly.

“YOU IDIOT ” Durc screeched, slugging Ian with his fist so hard that he staggered back. “CHECK WHO YOUR DEALING WITH BEFORE YOU THROW A GRENADE!”

Ian looked hurt. I thought you were—

“Thats the problem!” Durc snarled. “You don’t think! You interns are all the same! You can never get the job done! It takes someone with at least half a brain to do the job correctly!

The racialism against interns was unexpected. Dan’s horns flattened against his head defectively and his teeth grinded under his stitches. How dare he say something like that!

Durc sighed and crossed his arms. “Turn the strobe lights back on; or is that to difficult?”

With obvious loathing, Ian shook the lamp, causing light to brighten the large room. Dan frowned and looked the other way. He had reached his limit with Durc.



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“...WHO YOUR DEALING WITH BEFORE YOU THROW A GRENADE!”


Nedd’s head snapped up. Lady looked at him strangely, a faint whine forming in her throat, and nudged his hand with her snout.

Voices! Had they dared to return to this place, his place? Nedd growled loudly, foam dripping from his jaws, and spat a command to Lady. She whimpered and ducked back.

This was his fight.

He would teach them the true meaning of reverence.

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Everyone has seemed to lost interest in this fic, so I don't know if i'll be continuing. I'd really like to, because I never finished my last one and would like to be able to say that I had managed to finish one, and because I really like this plot. I might continue it just for the hell of it, though this story seems to be a bit straightforward and the characters are plain. *sob*

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Nedd crept down the hallway with catlike stealth, his baneful red eyes flicking left to right. With surprising content he peeked inside of a nearby room where voices could he heard.

Light. It was everywhere, glistening through the jar-covered racks and shimmering on the floor like stained glass. Nedd gave a throaty growl and pulled back. He looked around quickly; and, as if spotting what he was looking for, he sprang up onto a metal crate, grabbed a loosely-hanging pipe with his hand and swung across to the rafters. His breath cast small, milky clouds of steam in the frigid air. Quietly, he sneaked across the rafters and crouched at one end, watching, waiting...



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Durc gave a dramatic sigh.

“What did you do to Hugo?” he demanded. Dan looked down at the slog in bewilderment, having completely forgotten he was there. Hugo’s upper lip lifted, revealing sharp fangs the size of baseballs. He grumbled loudly. Dan carefully lowered him to the floor and untied his snout from the leash. Immediately the slog swung forward and bit Dan’s hand, almost drawing blood, before slinking off behind Durc.
Durc crossed his arms angrily.
“What are you doing here?” he finally asked. “I gave you a specific route to take.”

But we did– Dan began, but was cut off. Durc rolled his eyes.

“Fine, whatever happened, its too late now.” Durc crossed his arms. “Keep the lights off until we leave. I think all the havoc you caused could’ve attracted unwanted attention.” He glared at Ian. Ian turned away, muttering something.

They left as a group, taking a separate way, incase they were being followed. They came to a hallway that Dan had never seen before; the walls were painted a steel-blue, and the rafters were decorated with haphazardly-hanging lights that gave off sparks every minute or so. Puffs of steam erupted from broken pipes in the walls, hissing faintly. Dan noticed that the floor was made out of metal grating instead of plates. He eyed the floor warily, anticipating an attack from below, but none came.

They continued down the hallway at a brisk pace, weaving around discarded crates and rotting slog carcasses. Soon the flickering lights vanished behind them, and they were cast into inky darkness, fumbling for a moment before turning on their infra-red goggles. It didn’t help much; the rooms were still dark, and the only things that gave of heat were the steaming pipes and people around him.

Have you ever had the feeling you were being watched? That tingling at the back of your neck that quickly builds in your throat and makes you want to gag? And when you turn towards the source, because there must be somebody there, you find yourself alone?
That’s how Dan felt, only he knew that there was somebody there, and he knew that that somebody was out to kill him. This was not mistaken paranoia. This was real.

Ian. He hummed urgently. Ian grunted in reply. Ian, I think someone’s following us.

Ian rolled his eyes from under his goggles and turned away sulkily. Dan hissed Ian, I’m serious!

We have heat-seeking goggles, Ian said bitterly. If we were being followed, we’d know it.

Durc hushed them. The strobe light’s wheels squeaked as the metal grating turned back into floor, and they returned to more familiar territory. Dan swung around in horror. He had heard somebody breathing. Durc stiffened. He looked behind him slowly and pulled off his goggles, his beady eyes swiveling.

A clatter, a clang, something scuttling across the rafters above their heads. Something wanted to scare them, as though it were some twisted sport that it enjoyed. Durc brandished his lil’ hacker.

An inhuman scream howled through the air, filling Dan with sheer terror. Bullets were fired, whizzing through the air and rebounding off of walls. Durc screeched “The lights! Turn on the lights!”

Something swung out from the darkness and clipped a slig’s neck with a curved claw, slitting its throat. It collapsed to the floor, gurgling, and the strobe light was literally torn apart, its glass and metal peeled forcefully off of its wires. Dan fired a shot blindly into the dark. What was wrong with their goggles? Why couldn’t they see him?

The second light came on, clattering angrily. Ian shone it everywhere, but whatever it was seemed to have vanished.

‘The rafters,’ Dan thought.

RUN! He warned, backpedaling furiously. The group shifted uneasily before breaking out into a dead run, the slig’s gears whirling and the intern’s feet slapping the floor. The rafters rattled and creaked, and something zipped over their heads as quick as a flash. Dan swung around, still running, and crammed a cartrage clip into his snoozi. He fired once, twice, three times, all of which missed, and reached for another clip.

His face collided with the floor, and he preformed an elaborate double front-flip before finally grinding to a halt and laying twitching on the floor.

Dan opened one of his eyes, pulled his broken infra-red goggles off of his head, and heard the sound of the group moving before vanishing in the dark. In sheer terror he forced himself up and looked around. There were two separate pathways. They could’ve gone either way.

He slowly stood, his eyes rotating in their sockets. His snoozi clattered in his hands as he turned in circles, prepared for an attack in any direction; but nobody came. He was alone; just him and his snoozi.

Hello? Dan called quietly. His voice resounded before fading. Cautiously he took the path to the right, hoping that somehow he would catch up with the group and not fall victim to Nedd’s mindless killing.

Soon the metal plates under his feet were replaced with something hot and sticky. Dan stiffened and cranked his head downwards, dreading what he would see. The floor was dripping with crimson, still-warm blood. He felt a gag rise in his throat, as though he might throw up. The blood was splashed across the walls in crosshatching lines and lead pipes lay shattered everywhere, signs of a struggle. Dan looked up slowly into the rafters, and was alarmed to spot the mangled limb of whatever the victim had once been draped over its side. How it had gotten up there, he didn’t know.

...oh odd, oh odd, oh odd... He said in a tearless sob, staggering back. He slipped and fell on the bloodstained floor, dying his armor wine-red. Something moved in the rafters with a faint chuckle. Dan tried to stand, but his limbs jerked convulsively. Being paralyzed with fear only fueled his terror.

He could see the shape more clearly now, hunched over but still big. Suddenly it stood to its full height, tall enough to tower over Dan, its right eye glowing an evil red and its left eye swollen shut. Dan raised his snoozi, but fear got the better of him, and he dared not fire.

The once-wimpy intern eyed him critically: his eyes, Dan noticed, were no longer wide and scared as he had remembered. They were half closed, making him look bored, and almost proud. Dan could barely see him in the dark, but he could still sense his intent.

“I should have killed you when I had the chance.” He said quietly. Each syllable strained on his mouth, revealing it for what it was: a ragged, toothy hole.

Dan flinched. You don’t have to kill me. He said rather uselessly. He was going to die.

Nedd began walking towards him in slow, terrible steps. Dan pulled himself back weakly, but was up against a wall. The feeling was starting to return to his limbs, but was it too late to run?
Nedd reached out and grabbed a heavy-looking metal pipe that was leaning against the wall. It was long and thick. He gripped it tightly between his long, spidery fingers. Finally he was a mere three feet away. He raised the pole over his head, words forming on his lips, his eyes revealing nothing, and brought it crashing down.

Dan dove to the right in a last-ditch effort to save his own life. The pole smashed through the soggy plaster in the wall, crushing it. Dan whipped out his snoozi and fired, grazing Nedd’s shoulder blade, but he hardly seemed to notice.

Nedd bared his vertical, needle-sharp teeth and gave a savage hiss, pouncing forward. Dan fired, and Nedd zig-zagged to the left and gave a mighty leap up into the rafters. His breathing slowed. He became deathly silent, and virtually untraceable. Dan snarled;

Why are you doing this!

There was a pause, and for a brief moment Dan thought that he was alone; but suddenly the rabid intern slammed into him from above, knocking the wind out of him. He grabbed him by the throat and pressed him against the slimy wall, foam and saliva dripping down his face. Dan looked up hopelessly and saw a broken, heavy lamp hanging from the ceiling. It dangled and flickered, and was supported by mere cords wrapped around a support beam across the room. If he could just break free and get to the beam...

“You’re even more pathetic than I remembered.” Nedd eyed him unfavorably. Dan managed to choke,

You’re the last person who should be saying that.

Nedd chuckled quietly; is voice was deep and unamused. “I’m going to kill you. I’m going to kill everybody on this ship. Then I’m going to crash it into the ground.”

Why?

“After all the grief everyone’s caused me,” he paused thoughtfully, “why not?”

He squeezed Dan’s throat so tightly that he couldn’t breathe. Dan still held his snoozi, and in all the havoc he had forgotten about it. He raised it and fired one shot across the room. Nedd frowned at him, his ugly teeth tightening together.

“That’s it? That’s the best you can do? You’re a sickening, pathetic idiot---”

The timber in the rafters groaned in protest as the light fell, tearing away at wires and metal as though they were thread. Nedd swung around, fury in his eyes, but it was too late. The 200-pound metal box slammed down on the top of his neck and the dip of his shoulders. He jerked forward, balancing unsteadily on his feet, dazed. The metal pole clattered noisily from his hands. Dan grabbed it and swung it like a hammer. It struck the side of Nedd’s head, and he flopped over, unconscious.

Dan dropped his snoozi. Things went on as usual. The water dripped from the ceiling, the pipes hissed and sighed, the ratz and whatever else claimed the basement as their own scurried about in the vents.

Dan reached for his walkie-talkie and spoke into it, only to find it half broken. He gave his message anyway (‘Nedd’s incapacitated, I’ll try to keep him out, hurry.’) and stood by anxiously. After a while he decided that it would be best to tie Nedd up so that he wouldn’t wake up and kill him.

He searched around for a rope, but found a metal coil instead. He shrugged; it would probably work just as well. He busily began tying Nedd to the support beam the light had once been connected on, thinking.

Nedd, he noticed, was nearly twice as tall as the last time Dan had seen him, with long arms, legs, and a long torso that seemed strangely out of place. His skin was a dark purplish-grey color from where the cylonite was replacing his skin cells, and being near it made Dan fear that he would catch it. The wounds that had once crosshatched his body had healed and turned to dark grey scars, as though they had been bandaged for weeks, though it had only been days. His left eye was crossed over with four zig-zags, resembling a shaky swastika. The actual eye had turned to a crusty, brownish-red material that was bleeding. It was disgusting.

Dan got to tying the final knot, satisfied with his quick thinking, when suddenly he was crushed against the ground. Again.

Nedd snarled, “Who do you take me for?” And, with a quick jerk of his shoulders, snapped the coils like thread. His eyes darkened. “You really are pathetic.”

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I dunno about losing interest, but I sure have gained it. I need to read this from the start... not now though. It's like midnight thirty where I am.
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Okay I'm still trying to catch up and read through all these biiiiig chapters but...Yeah. This is awesome. S'like a horror movie of sorts, keep it up and don't be discourgaed by the people too lazy or uninterested to reply, i.e. me (I fall into the lazy category).
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I'm over 100 etc. etc. sorry about not replying. It's because my class went on a three day trip and there wasn't any computers. So now I'm back and I'm trying to catch up on whatever I missed. Now don't you stop. I love this plot as much as you do if not even more. Plain is a good thing. It's very hard to create totally ordinary fellows because most people are tempted to give them some kind of unbeleivable past. Straightforward is better than a story that goes in so many directions you get tired of reading it. Though I will say it is in a way repetitive that it's go into basement and try to kill Nedd, but I just won't get tired of it.
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Thanks for all the comments, though they don't feel deserved. I can think of twenty ways I could've improved this story and I wish I had added them. Ho hum. I'll just make my next chapters more interesting.
And here you go, so you know what I mean when I say Nedd's scar looks like a swastika and what his arms/legs look like. Man, he's bony:
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Rofl. I tried. xDD
I have a tablet pen, but no fancy art programs, so I did it with art pens. I don't think i'll color it because I don't know how I would...

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Dan was hoisted effortlessly into the air by his throat, his eyes wide and alarmed. Nedd brushed the coils from his shoulders and slammed Dan against the support beam, his jaws parting in a toothy, unamused grin.
“Did you really think that was going to work? Did you really think you had a chance?” His voice was low, and he talked surprisingly fast, as though his ability to form words had dramatically improved. “A couple of metal coils? That’s not stupid, its ignorant.” At this he leaned in closer, his eyes widening slightly, and in a mocking sing-song voice said: “I’m going to kill you.”

‘Hell no!’ Dan thought, doing the first thing that came to his mind: fight back. He lashed out with his hand and smacked Nedd across the face as hard as he could, dragging his nails. It worked better than he thought it would. Nedd howled and dropped Dan to the ground, his body shaking and his hands over his face as blood seeped between his fingers from his torn eye. His good eye snapped open from between his fingers, and his pupil dilated from the size of a penny to the size of a quarter, improving his night vision twofold.

“You bastard!” He roared, diving forward like a juggernaut. Dan sprang to the right and grabbed a metal crowbar lying nearby. It quaked between his fingers as Dan backed up against a wall in an attempt to find a door and run.

Nedd recovered himself, his jaws snapping together with the strength of a pit bull. He swung around. The empty socket that had once contained an eye was dripping rapidly, trailing long, tear-like stains down his face. A voice like an avalanche erupted from his throat, screaming wildly through the air, and he jumped into the rafters like a flattened spring.

Dan took this opportunity to get the hell away.

He took off down a hallway, leaping over broken crates and rotting carcasses in sheer terror. The rafters quaked and shook, firing puffs of dust into the air. Dan reached for his snoozi, only to find that he had lost it. ‘DAMNIT!’
Dan swung around a corner and came to a large room stacked with bottles and jars of preserved test subjects; the same room he had been in before. He squeezed nimbly between two racks, causing the jars to rattle and clink together, and ducked behind a rack filled with what looked like leeches. He held his breath, tightening his grip around the makeshift weapon in his hands as he heard Nedd enter the room. His breathing was hoarse, and in the deathly silence Dan thought he could hear the faint splash of dripping blood.

“Where are you?” Nedd muttered darkly. With his long arms and powerful legs he clamored over a rack like a spider. He crouched at the top, scanning the room with his hawk-like eye. Dan shrank closer to the floor, his golden eyes shifting in terror. Nedd became silent. For what felt like hours Dan leaned against the rack, straining his ears to try and pick up the faintest sound, but even with exceptional hearing he was at a loss. Finally he forced himself to peek around the cupboards.

There was no sight of him. The room was bathed in a faint, silvery-blue glow. The light came from a broken lamp hanging from the ceiling, which was sparking and fizzing wildly.

Dan was grabbed from behind. He swung the crowbar with titanic force, striking Nedd in the face and leaving a ruddy mark. Nedd dashed forward and slammed into Dan. He crushed him against a nearby rack covered in large, twenty-gallon jars that shattered, splaying broken glass and preserving alcohol against the floor. He held Dan pinned there, and his eyes darkened suddenly. Nedd reached inside a jar, tore the ropy experiment out from the inside, and ducked Dan’s head into the formaldehyde, drowning him.

The liquid was choking and foul, and stung his eyes like liquid fire. He closed his eyes instinctively and kicked out in an attempt to subdue his attacker, but to no use; Nedd had him in a strangle hold, and he was so powerful that he ignored the attacks completely.

‘I can’t die this way!’ A voice in Dan’s head was screaming. He wiggled and clawed, but to no avail. ‘This can’t happen!’ He felt himself growing dizzy from lack of air, and his vicious attacks dwindled to nothing more than feeble kicks. The liquid flowed between the stitches over his mouth, burning his throat. His energy vanished and he suddenly felt his body go limp. Dan weakly tried to open his eyes. Everything around him was a creamy yellow from the repugnant alcohol that was slowly killing him, squeezing his life away until he felt that his lungs might burst. This was it. He knew it. He could take it no longer. He let go, and...

...he was jerked back. He coughed and sputtered, formaldehyde splashing from his mouth. Nedd shook him.

“Give me one reason why I shouldn’t kill you.” He said suddenly. Dan blinked in surprise.

W-well... He muttered, spitting furiously. You shouldn’t kill me because...
Nedd was staring him straight in the eyes, burning a hole in his mind. He looked unamused and dead serious.
... well, you see, you’re a psychopath, and you... kill people... He paused to shake the formaldehyde off of his head. If he only had one chance to save his miserable life, he had to make it convincing. Well, my job is to kill people. I work for a freak of nature called Durc, and he’s, you know, a maniac, and he’s making me kill things against my will, but you, well, you’re killing things because you... want to... but you wouldn’t be killing anybody at all if it weren’t for the cylonite, which is killing you from the inside, just like Durc is killing me by making me want to kill myself with his @#&%ed-up missions...
Nedd’s face was impassive. Dan gulped. ...and if it were his decision I’d probably be out of work... so I don’t have many options BUT to kill people... but neither do you... so when you get right down to it, we’re kind of in the same boat... in some twisted way... He faltered.

‘Holy shit.’ Dan thought in horror. ‘I’m going to die.’

Nedd examined the ceiling, glanced around the room. “That was terrible.” He said without a hint of amusement. Dan winced. “I think i’m going to kill you just for that.”

He pressed Dan against the jar so roughly that it shattered, splashing the cool liquid onto the floor. Then, suddenly, he threw him across the room, where he collided with a nearby shelf. Nedd plucked a large shard of glass from the floor, turning it over on his palm. It was hard and razor-sharp. He murmured “An eye for an eye.”
Nedd chuckled quietly.

Dan made a reckless bolt for the exit, but was shoved mercilessly back by Nedd. Nedd had him in a corner. No chance of escape. No chance of survival. He towered over him, casting a pitch-black shadow. Nedd raised the glass over his head and swung downward, and Dan cringed, wishing he could just sink into the floorboards and vanish.

And then there was light. Dan’s eyes had grown accustom to the darkness, and the strobe light hurt as much as the formaldehyde had. Nedd swung around and horror and stared at the lamp, silent and still. Dan was surprised; he would’ve expected Nedd to run screaming like a banshee at the first sign of light, but he didn’t. He just stared at it, his horns flat against his head, a deer-in-headlights look on his face.

Drop the glass. Ian said, looking out from behind the strobe lamp. Durc was back there, too, and so was Hugo, snarling and hissing. In fact, as Dan’s eyes adjusted, he realized that there must have been fifty people there. Durc had called in backup.

Nedd reached back slowly and seized Dan’s neck. Dan flinched away, but was too scared to fight back. Steam was now lightly fluttering from Nedd’s body, as though he was burning.

Nedd threw Dan with full force and sprang up on top of the rack. Dan smashed the strobe light’s bulb, and it flickered before finally dying. Bullets screeched through the air, crunching through jars and breaking the cataplasm in the walls. Nedd was faster. He leapt from rack to rack and swung into the rafters, vanishing from sight.

“GET HIM!” Durc ordered. The group took off running with robotic obedience, cramming cartridge clips into their weapons. Nobody waited by to see if Dan was okay; they were too caught up in the thrill of the hunt. Dan picked himself up off the floor, gave himself a quick physical, and followed after them. The chase lead them down hallways and corridors, through rooms and cubicles, and over stretchers and crates, until suddenly he jumped down from the rafters. He glanced over his shoulder, a look of malicious intent on his face, before ducking inside of a room and vanishing.

Durc kicked open a door and barged inside.

“Oh dear Odd.” He cursed, backpedaling furiously as horror filled his eyes. The group behind him ground to a halt and raised their snoozis, looking appalled. “This could be a problem.”

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Oooh swatiska scar... Original. What the problem. That speech thing sounds bit like the consience thing in Pinochio. Too bad Dan didn't think to take the leeches to suck out the cylonite stuff. Great chapter maybe a little confusing with the fight but whenever I read if forget the last word ending in a big mess where I have to read 27 sentances over again. More!
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Oooh swatiska scar... Original. What the problem. That speech thing sounds bit like the consience thing in Pinochio. Too bad Dan didn't think to take the leeches to suck out the cylonite stuff. Great chapter maybe a little confusing with the fight but whenever I read if forget the last word ending in a big mess where I have to read 27 sentances over again. More!
The leeches were dead and packed in jars of preserving alcohol, so they wouldn't be very useful.
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Durc shot an accusing look up at Nedd, who was lounging idly in the rafters. “You didn’t!” He snarled. Nedd shrugged.

“I didn’t.” He said, sneering slightly. “I only bit some of em’.”

Hugo suddenly went into a rage, barking and springing on his chubby toes. The challenge was met with a roar that shook the entire room; a bark from every cylonite-infected slog that packed it. There seemed to be countless dozens of them, snarling and bristling and snapping their decay-colored jaws. Their skin varied in color, ranging from rancid milk to coal-black, and foam was sputtering down their mouths, fizzing noisily as it hit the ground. The room went still. Nobody dared to move; it was as if somehow, if they stood still, the slogs would just forget they were there. But that wasn’t the case.

Nedd looked as though he were having a great time, grinning and slouching against a nearby support beam. He whistled. A small slog trudged through the crowd of infected bodies until she stood in the front, her chest swelling with each gargantuan breath.

“LADY!” Durc squealed like a happy schoolgirl. The only thing that kept him from running over and getting mauled to death was Dan, who pulled him back at the last second.
Are you INSANE? He hissed. Nedd examined his nails and pretended like he wasn’t listening. Do you want to DIE?

“But Lady---” Durc began.

... is a cylonite-infected freak of nature who’s only interested in killing you! Dan finished, shoving Durc aside. His eyes watered noticeably.

Hugo leapt forward, mouth open impossibly wide, and went for a one-shot kill, trying to close his jaws around Lady’s neck. Lady slid to the side with ease and the two slogs circled, growling like wolves. Durc stiffened. Dan couldn’t care less which one died. Lady darted forward like a bullet from a gun and crushed Hugo’s head in her teeth like a watermelon, licking the blood from her lips as he fell limply to the floor, his head virtually severed from his neck.

“LADY!” Durc screamed in (slightly platonic) horror. “HOW COULD YOU?!” Lady acknowledged him by pouncing forward and pinning him to the floor with a mighty yowl. The rest of the slog pack followed, and Nedd watched on, a look of malevolent satisfaction on his face.

Dan really wished he had his snoozi with him.

He jumped behind a stack of crates and ducked, peeking around the corner in horror. The slogs were winning by a mile, gutting and snapping the necks of their unfortunate victims. He saw Ian fire a shot, dropping a slog, before vanishing under a mass of snapping teeth and serrated claws. Dan paled and lifted his crowbar, his hands shaking wildly as he tried to keep his emotions under control. Half of him wanted to skewer the brains of every slog in the room; the other half wanted to run away screaming and curl up in a corner somewhere.

He swung his makeshift weapon as a slog jumped at him. It pierced the slog’s upper jaw, cutting through its head. It fell with a sickening gurgle. Two more slogs jumped at him at once; one was killed by a bullet, though Dan couldn’t tell who shot it. He killed the other one by breaking its legs with a fierce uppercut, and finally breaking its back while it was immobile.

Nedd leapt nimbly down from the rafters and landed with catlike grace, his bloodshot eye flicking left and right. He passed by virtually unnoticed by the slog pack; they didn’t even give him a passing glance. They were too busy with what they were doing and they were having too much fun to stop. Dan jerked back, hoping he wasn’t noticed. He wasn’t granted such luxury.

Nedd bolted to the top of the crates and stared down at him ravenously. Dan backed up, his crowbar in his hands. He tried to look determined. He failed miserably.

Nedd hissed; “You pathetic little worm, withering in fear at the slightest danger. You’re living in a fantasy world in your head. You think that things’ll always work out for you if you just hide like a coward and feign not to exist.” He ascended from the crates stealthily, his feet not even making a sound. Dan flinched. Those words hurt, and, as much as he hated to admit it, they were true. Nedd’s eyelids lowered slightly. He said quietly “And to think you were accepted into the guard. What a waste. You’re nothing but a revolting caricature of bravery.”

Nedd tore forward and Dan swung the crowbar without even aiming. It smacked his face, leaving a yellowish, bruised mark. Nedd swung around with spry and grabbed a wrench lying nearby, twirling it with ease. He brought the wrench crashing downward, and it struck Dan in between his eyes. Dan staggered back, crying out in pain. His vision swam. Time slowed. He suddenly went deaf. He could see his comrades being mangled by the slogs, just barely staying alive. Slogs were collapsing under their own weight; the guards had just barely gotten the upper hand. Dan hit the floor limply and struggled to stand, but there was no need. Nedd pulled him roughly up by his neck and threw him across the room, where he broke through a shelf and struck a wall. Splintered wood punctured his back, and he could feel warm blood trickling down the dip of his shoulders. His head rolled forward. Dan tried to open his eyes, but his eyelids were too heavy. He wanted to close his eyes and fall asleep, to wake up later and realize that his entire life had been one bizzare, convoluted dream. But it wasn’t a dream. It was real. The best he could hope for was that Nedd would hurry up and kill him before he could suffer any more.

Nedd walked up to him and crouched nearby, his eyes dark. Dan opened his eyes weakly. Nedd was staring him in the eyes and slowly raising his wrench for the finishing strike. He was watching his face. Watching him die.

A crack split the air as Durc broke free of the slogs and threw a grenade. It burst into uncontrolled flames that licked the air and burned through slogs all around, causing them to wither and howl. Guards and slogs alike started retreating; the fight was horrible, and everybody, even the slogs, seemed shaken. Nedd cast Dan a sideways glance, lifted the wrench, and brought it crashing down on the left side of his head. A blinding pain exploded in his scull, and he tried to scream, but no sound came.

“Something to remember me by.” Nedd chuckled, springing up into the rafters and vanishing before anyone had the chance to shoot at him. Dan’s eyelids fluttered weakly, and his head rolled. Everything went black.
‘At last.’ He thought.




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Dan was thrust back into consciousness by a sudden splash of cold water. He gasped and opened his eyes in confusion, wincing as he felt a stinging sensation at the side of his head. Durc stood nearby, holding an empty jar that looked as if it once contained formaldehyde. Just thinking about the stuff made Dan shudder.

“Get up.” Durc demanded. Dan rose slowly to his feet, and instantly his legs gave way. He slumped against the wall and his vision blurred, like looking through fogged glass. He glanced around quickly. Dead bodies scattered the floor, some of which were so mutilated that he couldn’t tell what they were. A dozen or so guards picked themselves up off the ground and were walking around unsteadily.

Durc paused. “Oh.” he said. Dan looked at him in confusion.

What? He hummed worriedly. Durc slowly lifted his hand and touched the side of his own head. Dan mimicked his motion, disoriented, and felt a pit of dread form in his stomach. He felt the left side of the top of his head, expecting to feel his left horn, but it wasn’t there. In its place was a bloodied dent.
Aw, hell. Dan groaned.
‘Something to remember me by.’ Of course.

“Sucks to be you.” Durc said, thinking out loud. It seemed like the last thing to say to a guy who was nearly killed by his former friend, but it was only expected of Durc.
Dan’s head cleared slightly, and he found that he was able to think straighter. Durc called out to the survivors (those who hadn’t been bitten; everyone who had been was torn limb from limb):

“Okay, lets get out of here. Leave the bodies, we gotta go right now before the slogs get any ideas and come back to kill us all.” He grinned pleasantly and his voice struck a cheery note that seemed completely out of place. “Kay?”

After a lot of shuffling and complaints they left the room, trying to keep as quiet as possible. Dan searched diligantly, and was finally satisfied when he spotted Ian in the back of the procession. 'At least he's alive.'
They jumped at every sound they heard and flinched at every twisted shadow they passed until they finally found the exit. They rushed up the stairs all at once, eager to leave. Dan heard somebody in the crowd say “I’d rather die then go back there, man!” and he silently agreed. They pushed and shoved through the exit, some cheering with the joy of still being alive. Dan grabbed a pack of gauze from a box nearby and wrapped it around his gashed shoulders and where his horn used to be, feeling much better now that they had left the basement.
Helix was leaning against a wall and eyed them critically.

“So, how’d it go?” He asked sarcastically. Durc hissed,

“Shut up.”

“You know,” Helix said, pretending not to have heard, “I could have thought of a hundred better---”

“Shut up!

“---ideas than storming in there with lamps and trying to shoot him.”

“They’re called strobe lights,” Durc corrected acidly, “and we didn’t have any other options!
By now everybody had gone silent, listening intently. Nothing was more entertaining than listening to two vykkers arguing. Sometimes it even led to a scuffle.

Helix rolled his eyes dramatically. “You had plenty of other options! What the hell is with you? Do you like putting your life in danger, or does it just make you feel brave?”

‘Nice.’ Dan smirked. Durc deserved to be taken down a notch.

“Oh yeah?” Durc snapped. “What’s makes you think---”

“Well,” Helix began, “I would’ve either gassed the place, re-wired the circuits so all the lights turned on, or just locked him down there so that he could die of starvation. Nobody would get hurt, except him, of course---”

“WHY WON’T YOU !#&@ING SHUT UP?!” Durc screamed, breaking under pressure. “If you’re so sure about yourself then why don’t you go down there and do-it-your-@#*$ing-self instead of ARGUING about ABSOLUTELY-FRICKING-EVERYTHING!

Helix opened his mouth, and closed it again. Somebody in the back of the group coughed. Durc was panting as though he had just run a mile, and he looked like he was about to break down and cry, but for the sake of whatever dignity he had left, he didn’t. Dan decided to take a chance, though he felt as though he were putting his life on the line.

Why don’t we try Helix’s plan? He asked quietly. Helix frowned.

“What?”

Dan rolled his eyes, snatched a clipboard from somebody standing nearby, scrawled his message, and handed it to Helix. Helix read it over.

“Exactly.” He said, beaming. “Why don’t we try my plan? We lock him down there and wait for him to die. There’s only one way out of the basement, and its those doors.” He pointed to the tall metal doors. “If we just lock them, leave them for a month or two, and come back later, our problem should be long gone.”

Murmurs of agreement followed. It seemed like a reasonable plan; much better than Durc’s plans had been, anyway.

“It wont work.” Durc sniffled weakly. He suddenly shot Dan a glance as though saying ‘BETRAYER!’ though Dan wasn’t quite sure exactly who he had betrayed.

“Well?” Helix asked smugly.

“Well what?” Durc growled, barely keeping his voice straight.

“Want to lock up the basement?”

Everyone looked expectantly in his direction. Durc frowned and looked around. Finally he swallowed his pride and said, “Okay, whatever, we’ll try his stupid plan.” He turned and muttered under his breath, "But its not gonna work."

Helix crossed his arms and snickered in a vykker-ish way. Dan felt good for once, and, if only for a little while, his head stopped hurting.

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Good chapter. I'm really enjoying this.
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I was wondering why they kept going in the basement. Durc just loves to kill directly. And Helix has much better plans than him. Good chapter.
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I was wondering why they kept going in the basement. Durc just loves to kill directly. And Helix has much better plans than him. Good chapter.
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Good chapter. I'm really enjoying this.
And thankee too.


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The vykker crossed his arms smugly and stood back, grinning. Dan stared. Sitting in front of the basement door, by the key card lock, was a large, black box-like contraption on a metal cart. Wires jutted out of its sides at almost random angles, and its top was covered completely by little silver buttons with symbols and numbers. The whole thing was rather unattractive, and looked sort of like a toaster that had been forced through a paper shredder. “There.” The vykker said. “With a little find tuning the basement’ll be locked up in no time. Hand me a B2.1 cable, would you?”

Dan opened a toolbox and rummaged around inside, turning over cords with his hands. There were dozens of them all crammed in one unidentifiable, tangled mess.
Which one’s the B2.1 cable? Dan asked. Red scratched his head.

How should I know?

“Give me that,” The vykker snapped, snatching the toolbox and whipping out a cable. He forced the end of the cord into the side of the box and connected the other end (which was shaped like a key-card) into the key slot. Dan watched uninterestedly as he proceeded to jab, tap, and even punch buttons and cables into place, looking intrigued by the entire procedure.
Bluntly the vykker asked “So, you think that Nedd guy’ll be killed off just by starving him? Seems kinda stupid, if you ask me.”

Dan was about to say some terribly uncreative comeback (‘Well I think you’re kinda stupid if you ask me, so there!’) but Red cut him off. He scrawled on a piece of paper and handed it to the vykker.

After a few months, yeah.

“Huh,” The vykker said, flicking a switch on the ugly metal box. It shuddered and beeped a few times, and the key card lock fizzed slightly. “Well, I guess that’s what he deserves anyway.”

I don’t know if he’d deserve it, Dan said quietly, still perplexed on why he was sticking with Nedd’s side, I mean, he’s been infected with cylonite. It makes everyone crazy, right?

Red looked unconvinced. I don’t think so. He said, looking over at the basement doors. They were eerie and imposing, and stood out like a sore thumb. I never trusted that guy. Nedd always seemed sort of twisted... He paused. I mean, do you even know where he came from? What he did before working in this hellhole?

I don’t know, Dan admitted. He just kinda showed up one day.

Exactly. Red said, turning away. How can you trust someone you barely know?

Dan was silent.


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Nedd woke up later feeling refreshed and fulfilled. The action and the bloodshed of the night before was still fresh in his mind, buzzing in his head like a nest of angry stingbees. He stood up and stretched, and Lady trotted over to his feet, her hips swaying and tongue rolling. Nedd leaned over and patted her on the head, which he rarely ever did; he thought of most of the slogs as tools, nothing more. But he was in high spirits for the moment, and didn’t mind how un-demonic his actions were.

He wandered down the halls with Lady trotting behind, heading for the exit; he figured that it would be around nighttime by now, the perfect time to sneak more food from the kitchen. He was sure that if he got caught, nobody would mess with him; his evil reputation had spread through the ship like a wildfire. Nobody would be foolish enough to get in his way.

Nedd walked up the steps and tried the door, but the handle wouldn’t budge. Angrily he slammed down on it like a kick-boxer: the handle swung freely, but the door didn’t open. He snapped off the handle like a toothpick and stuck his hand inside the open hole, feeling around the electrical circuits. He tore some out and tried to open the door again, but to no avail.

‘Odd.’ He thought, running his hand down the door. Suddenly he threw himself at it, kicking it and slamming it with the palms of his hands both at once, and sprang back with a half-backflip, landing expertly on his feet. There was a dent, but no hole.

He backed up, looking around in horror. His chest rose and fell with each startled gasp that filled his lungs. The door was weak. It was made of metal. He could open it easily, at least, he could before...

“NO!” Nedd roared, ramming the door with his shoulders. Lady jumped back, barking in wild confusion. “YOU CAN’T DO THIS! I’LL @#%$ KILL ALL OF YOU! BASTARDS!” He broke a rusted metal pipe from a wall and threw it against the door. It snapped in half and fell, leaving a ruddy, slightly dented mark.

Nedd collapsed to his knees, panting. Lady trotted over slowly and nudged his hand with her snout. He swung around suddenly and kicked her, hard. She collided against a rack of wooden boxes, jumped to her feet, and took off into the basement, yelping in fear.

“Stupid animal.”

He stomped off into the basement, and grunted when he felt his stomach groan. Food... he needed food. He hadn’t eaten since he’d stolen food from the kitchen days ago, and hadn’t even been hungry until recently. He sniffed the air worriedly and looked around; surely there had to be something to eat? How else did the slogs survive down there?


<~{.epidemic.}~>


Nearly a week passed. The basement was just as gloomy and hazardous as it had always had been, and was indeed, as Red had so abruptly put it, ‘a hell hole.’

Nedd forced his eye open. His eye was gluey and watering profoundly, as was the inside of his mouth; all the symptoms of a malnourished rabies victim. He sat up and groaned, his bones aching as though he had been hit by a truck. He climbed weakly down from the rafters where he slept and staggered down a random hallway; lack of food had made him as lethargic as a slug. He slumped against a wall and licked his dry lips. He had scoured the basement for food, but his efforts had been fruitless. He had even tried to eat one of his cylonite slogs, but its skin was so rough and it was so disease-ridden from life in the grimy basement that Nedd had just thrown it up later.

He kicked open a door and lurched inside with barely enough energy to lift his head. In the room near the back was a small group of slogs, huddled around something. Nedd moved closer, and he nearly had a heart attack. They had food!

He sprang forward with what energy he had left, his mouth foaming rapidly, and gave a feral snarl. The slogs ran away yelping; they knew who he was. Their master, and their worst fear. Nedd tore off a hunk of whatever they were eating and sank his teeth into it; it was soft, and appeared to be some sort of meat. He chewed, feeling a hundred times better, when suddenly he blanched and examined the food source more closely. It appeared to be some sort of decaying, dead body. It had been so mangled that he couldn’t tell what it was, but there was one thing he could see; that by a thick tendon of bone, it was connected to metal pants.

He threw the meat aside and climbed up into the rafters, turning away moodily. A slig! He couldn’t eat a slig! They were disgusting, they were...
He glanced down sideways at the body. The slogs were advancing slowly, unsure of whether it was safe to eat the meat. The more Nedd looked at the body, the more his mouth watered, and the faster his heart beat. Suddenly everything became a blur. His pupil grew to immense proportions and he howled like a demon, jumping down from the rafters like a dive bomber. He tore into the corpse with his teeth in a frenzy, swallowing without even chewing. The slig was a dark meat, oily and salty, somewhat like sardines. Once Nedd had finished the outside flesh he began cracking the bones with his teeth and chewing on the rubbery marrow, making a delighted sound in his throat that was much like a lion’s purring. The slogs crouched nearby, wary. Nedd threw the bones aside and wiped his arm over his mouth, feeling more alive than he’d felt in weeks. He grinned to himself.

The meat was good; very good. Not only did eating it bring his evil meter up a few notches (‘Nedd, the Flesh Eater’... he liked the sound of that), but it also filled his stomach, and left him feeling strangely satisfied, if not empty. He wanted more.

He stood and stalked out of the room, his eyes shining brightly. Lady met up with him in one of the halls, wagging her hips; she had forgotten about his abusive actions just days before. Nedd climbed up a stack of boxes and pounced into the rafters, leaving Lady behind. With the stealth of a leopard he stalked up to the hole in the vents he had caused roughly a week or two ago. Nedd tested the metal with his arms. It would hold. He hauled himself inside the vent with a mighty heave. He had no idea where the tunnels lead; only that they would lead him to more people, which meant more food, which meant more destruction, which meant striking fear into the hearts of more of his enemies, which made killing and eating them much more fun.
He grinned wolfishly. Life was good.
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Nyahahaha, he ate slig. I always thought the disease made him immune to food somehow...Oooh, sardines...I miss the days of not beign vegan, but I must think of the...Mmmm...Fiiiish - I mean animals 8D.
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I knew Nedd was going to turn to cannible somehow. So Nedd's going to come through the ventalation shafts. Cool.
Edit: I've just realized how good of a game this would make. That would be awesome beyond recognition.
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oh noez he's escapeing! I'm guessing everyone's guard is going to be down thinking he's locked up, which will make killing everyone much easyer.

I tried Slig meat once. Didn't like it, though.
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Nyahahaha, he ate slig. I always thought the disease made him immune to food somehow...Oooh, sardines...I miss the days of not beign vegan, but I must think of the...Mmmm...Fiiiish - I mean animals 8D.
How can you not eat animals?! O:


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I knew Nedd was going to turn to cannible somehow. So Nedd's going to come through the ventalation shafts. Cool.
Edit: I've just realized how good of a game this would make. That would be awesome beyond recognition.
That would be pretty cool. If I had Adobe Flash or something I might've tried that. Too bad i'm too poor to afford fancy game makers. >:C


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oh noez he's escapeing! I'm guessing everyone's guard is going to be down thinking he's locked up, which will make killing everyone much easyer.

I tried Slig meat once. Didn't like it, though.
It could've used a little less salt. C:



Okay, here you go. Brux has a bad day, Dan gets ignored for an entire chapter, and Nedd gets what he had comin' to him. All in a day's work.


EDIT:
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Enjoy.

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Nedd clamored noisily through the vents, grunting slightly as he tried to make room. It was too late to go back; his shoulders were wedged firmly inside the air ducts. Up was his only option. He turned and twisted, frowning at the tunnels that seemed to go one forever. He wrestled one of his arms through an opening above and heaved himself up another section of the vent, sneezing as dust filled the air. Nedd squinted and looked up, his oversized pupils swiveling slightly, before finally spotting the exit. Satisfied, he kicked out with his legs and pressed himself up against metal grating- it appeared to be part of a drain. He gently lifted the tile and set it aside.

Nedd perched laggardly, watching, waiting. Nothing saw him. He pulled himself out of the vent and replaced the tile, warily looking around.

It was night. He was in one of the vykker suites. Posters lined the walls displaying household products such as ‘Lung Blaster’ and ‘Baby chow.’ On one side of the room was a desk piled high with paperwork, and on the other was a bed, inhabited by a vykker. Nedd stalked over to the bed and looked the vykker over quickly, and blinked in surprise when he realized who it was: it was Brux, the melodramatic, overly-positive lunatic Helix worked with. He was sprawled out under the covers and snoring like a foghorn, dead asleep. As fun as it would be to kill him, Nedd he had better things to do, and decided just to leave him be. For the moment, anyway.
He strode over to the door and carefully turned the handle, wincing as he heard it creak. Slowly, carefully, he opened the door and peeked outside.

Seeing as it was night, the suite hallway was deserted. Nedd stepped out, his feet sliding against the red velvet carpet, and continued down the hall, occasionally looking over his shoulder in anticipation for an attack. A deathly silence hung in the air that was only broken by his hoarse, unsteady breathing. He licked his lips dryly; he could still taste the slig blood in his mouth, driving his senses wild.

His thoughts reached out unwittingly to the interns he used to work with. ‘Dan, Ian... the rest of those losers... they have no idea what they’re missing.’


<~{.epidemic.}~>


Ever since the attack in the basement, Durc had made sure to send extra squads into designated areas at night, just incase. It seemed like a wasted effort, though. Nobody took their patrols seriously. Most of the guards fell asleep at their stations, or sat around playing cards, waiting for the shift to end. The cafeteria was another matter entirely. Those lucky enough to be sent to the cafeteria on patrol often ended up tossing their weapons aside, kicking their feet up, and binging all the booze they had swiped from the kitchen. It was like a party: a lot of drinking, a lot of talking, and a lot of stumbling around drunkenly before finally collapsing somewhere.

A slig staggered from the cafeteria, snickering so violently that his entire body shook. In one hand he loosely held a half-empty can of beer that dripped with each unsteady step he took. He grinned and took a sip from his drink, glancing around disorderly.

“Heyyyy...” He muttered with a slight hiccup as he bumped into someone. “...watch where you’re... going.”

The intern stared at the slig. The slig stared back, hiccupping queasily. The intern finally said; “Don’t you know who I am?”

The slig blinked. “Should I?”

“You’re drunk.”

“Well, then...” The slig snarled, stumbling back. “That wasn’t very nice... for a guy to say...”

The intern’s hand jerked forward, and he caught the slig by the throat, hissing “Well I’m not a very nice guy, am I?”
He snapped the slig’s neck like a toothpick and threw the body over his shoulder, thinking about how thoughtful it was for his quarry to come to him for a change. Then he reached down, picked up the can of beer, and drained its contents in one mammoth gulp, grinning ravenously.

Nedd stalked back down the hall, his feet silent against the cold metal floor. He winced when he heard drops of blood hit the ground; the slig’s throat was bleeding. He frowned and tilted back its head, stopping the flow. A trail of blood leading to his escape route was the last thing Nedd needed.

After retracing his steps he came back to the Vykker Suites. Nedd crept down the hallway, dead slig in hand, and nudged open a nearby door. He glanced around quickly, and gave a quick nod of satisfaction; this was the room, all right. He swung inside and carefully set the body down. He got to work with the drainage tile, gently lifting it with his long, spidery fingers, when suddenly he paused. He held his breath in alarm and reluctantly looked over at the bed in the left corner of the room.

Brux was gone.

‘Oh shit.’

Nedd tensed when he heard rapid footsteps coming down the hall. He grabbed the dead slig, threw it over his shoulder, and ducked under the nearby desk, cursing wildly. The handle to the door turned at an excruciatingly slow pace. Then, to Nedd’s horror, the door swung open, and Brux stumbled inside like the living dead, exhausted. He looked as though he were about to pass out right there and then.

Brux hobbled over to his bed, yawning broadly. Nedd flinched when he realized that, in his struggle to escape from the obscene vykker, he had left a puddle of blood on the floor. Brux, however, didn’t even notice. In fact he stepped right through it and crawled into bed, murmuring to himself. There was a long pause. Nedd held his breath. Suddenly Brux sat up and stared at the tiling on the floor; more specifically, the dark puddle that stained it.

“What the...?” Brux mumbled, getting out of bed and examining the stain. Nedd’s tension got the better of him. He took off like a bottle rocket and slammed Brux against the floor, leaving the dead slig behind. Nedd gagged him with the bed sheet and held him firmly in a headlock, struggling to contain the vykker’s four wildly thrashing limbs. Then Nedd locked the door.

Brux cried out and kicked over a night stand. The lamp that had been placed on it shattered against the floor, scattering shards of ceramic in all directions. Nedd winced, his horns falling flat against his head.

Light from nearby rooms flooded the hallway; Nedd could see it shining under the door. Somebody squawked “What’s that moron up to now?

“Change of plan.” Nedd muttered to himself, cracking Brux’s head against the floor. The vykker went out like a light. Nedd tossed Brux aside and fumbled with the floor tiling, but to no avail; both his hands and the tiles were slicked over with blood from handling the dead slig, which made lifting anything an almost impossible task. He could hear the vykkers outside fiddling with the knob, trying to unlock the door. Nedd hissed and ducked under the desk; it was his only option.


<~{.epidemic.}~>


“Open up, Brux!” Helix snapped, knocking on the door. “What the hell is going on in there? ”
He tried to open the door, but to no luck; it was locked tightly. He turned to a nearby vykker, ordering “Go get Durc. He must have something that can unlock this door.”

After a brief wait Durc shuffled through the crowd. He was wearing blue pajamas with a matching nightcap, and had his combat belt around his waist; it looked as though he had slept with it. He yawned.

“What?” Durc asked. Helix frowned.

“Brux must be getting kinky in there or something, because he’s making a racket. The doors locked. Do you have something so we can open the door and shut him up?”

Durc nodded smugly. “I have just the thing.”

He whipped out a bobby pin and held it out triumphantly. Helix frowned.

“What were you doing with---”

“Thats not important.”

Durc stuck the bobby pin in the lock and fiddled with it, biting his tongue in concentration. After a lot of fumbling and punching the door, the lock clicked, and the door swung open.

Durc sprang inside, waving his snuzi. Helix sighed and followed him, glancing around the room. Brux was unconscious, laying with half of his body on his bed and the other half dangling off the side. Helix frowned.

“I can’t see anything.” He muttered, squinting in the gloom. “Somebody turn some lights on or something.”

A vykker near the door flicked on the lights. An inhuman screech pierced the air. And, seconds later, vykkers were running and screaming all over the place, Nedd hot on their heels.

“RUN!” Helix cried, making a desperate dash for the exit. He careened around the corner flanked by a dozen other vykkers, including Durc, who was loading his snuzi in a hurry. Helix had no idea where he was running; only that, if they didn’t find somewhere to hide soon, they were all screwed.

“In there!” Durc exclaimed, pointing with one of this claws. Helix’s face brightened when he realised that they had reached the room where he worked; room 34, a happy place for chop-happy vykkers. They bolted inside and slammed the metal door shut, breathing heavily from the effort it took to escape their attacker.

“Is he gone?” somebody whispered, as though afraid Nedd would hear. Helix opened the door slightly and peeked out. The hallway looked deserted.

“I don’t know.” Helix admitted. He turned. “Turn on the lights.”

Durc reached up and fiddled with a medical light in the middle of the room, flicking switches and turning it to and fro. “It won’t turn on!”

“Try the red button---”

“I tried the red button!”

Suddenly a frantic voice outside the room screamed “LET ME IN LET ME IN LET ME IN!”

Helix glanced outside. “Its just Brux.” He muttered. There was a pause. “Can we just leave him there?”

“Unfortunately,” Durc muttered, “no.”

Helix opened the door. Brux sprang in and clung to Helix like a parasite, sobbing. Helix struggled to pry the abomination off of him, but to no luck; he gripped on like a steel trap.
Get off of me!” Helix snarled, managing to squirm free. Brux was still shaken.

“H-he...” He began. “T-that intern...”

“Tried to kill you, we know.” Another vykker said, looking out the door. There was no sign of Nedd.

Quietly, someone dared to ask “What now?”

Nobody seemed to have an answer. Durc pulled a walkie talkie out of his belt and spoke into it. “We need a patrol... can you hear me? Is anyone there?”

A silent pause followed. The atmosphere was tense; every vykker was quiet, waiting and hoping that a patrol would answer.

Suddenly the walkie talkie buzzed. “Gzz! Durc? Is that you, man?”

Durc looked offended. “I’m your boss! You will not refer to me as ‘man!’”

Gzzz! Oh, sorry... boss.” The voice on the other end of the line sounded slow and delirious.

“What squad is this?” Durc demanded.

Gzz! T-the cafeteria one... uh...”

“What are you doing right now?”

A pause, and then: “Gzz! Teehehe... drinking.”

“You’re DRUNK?” Durc squawked, appalled. “We have a PSYCHOTIC INTERN trying to kill us here and you’re BUSY DRINKING?”
No reply came. Helix stared at Durc, long and hard. Durc snarled “What?”

“Just what kind of protective service are you leading here?” Helix demanded.

Durc crossed his arms and turned away. “A very good one!"

“Shut up!” A nearby vykker snapped. “Stop fighting! There’s a maniac outside who is trying to kill us!”

Brux was weeping convulsively. “I don’t want to die!” He cried.

It was total anarchy. Helix was yelling at Durc, Durc was yelling at Helix, one vykker was yelling at Brux, Brux was crying even harder, and everybody was talking at once, trying to shut them up. In the midst of all the chaos they failed to notice that the metal door was slowly creaking open...

“OKAY!” Durc gave in. “All of my guards are OVERWORKED, UNDERPAID LOSERS who know ABSOLUTELY NOTHING ABOUT PROTECTING PEOPLE, are you HAPPY NOW? ”

“Yes.” Helix said simply.

Brux was staring at the door. His jaw dropped in horror. “Uh, guys...”

“I mean seriously!” Durc snarled, far from quieting down. “Most of the people on this ship are undereducated, so what does it matter if my people are?”

Brux sniffled and backed up a little. “Guuuys...

“WHAT?” Durc snapped. Helix recoiled. Brux screamed.

The door's hinges creaked in protest as the door was jerked back, dropping screws to the floor. A savage roar silenced the group, and a single red eye glared at them from the darkness, its pupils wide and horrifying.

"Sh--!" Helix squawked as the entire door rattled and shook, groaning like a wounded animal. The monster behind it forced an arm through the opening it had created and grabbed the door's handle, breaking it in half. The unfortunate vykkers pressed their backs against the opposite wall, too terrified to even scream.

The metal twisted and snapped, and Helix stared on in sheer alarm; Odd only knew how much strength it would take to bend. The other side of the door rippled forward, and a second arm appeared, scrabbling wildly at the metal. Nedd hissed and slammed himself against the door, which was slowly keeling forward, snapped from its top hinges. Durc's gun dropped from his claws, which were trembling violently; they were too shaken to act. There was nothing they could do. The door had been bent forward like a sardine lid.

The arms suddenly withdrew, and the ragged, hollow breathing that sent chills down their spines stopped. A deathly silence hung in the air. The atmosphere was still, broken only by the dust Nedd had kicked up. Finally, after a great deal of gut-retching, Helix forced in a breath.

Nedd threw himself at the huge opening in the door, snarling and sputtering foam. He managed to fit his entire torso through, but not his widely-bent legs. He lashed out with his claws, and he grabbed on to whatever was in reach; which happened to be Brux.

Brux screamed as he was dragged roughly to the door. Helix acted without thinking. He grabbed a butcher-like scalpel from a medical desk nearby, darted forward, raised the knife over his head, and, without hesitation, brought it crashing down on Nedd's arm, an inch or two above his wrist, lopping his hand off completely.

An inhuman scream split their ears as the bloodied stump-of-an-arm jerked back, spilling blood on the floor. Helix dropped the scalpel. It clattered noisily to the floor. Afterwards, there was silence. Helix wasn't even sure if Nedd was still there.
Suddenly Brux jumped up, and the bloody hand that had once belonged to the infamous Nedd thumped to the floor. Brux ran over and embraced Helix in a rib-shattering hug, squealing

"THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK---"

"STOP!" Helix wailed.

"But you saved me---"

"I DON'T CARE! LEMME GO---"

The walkie-talkie buzzed;
“Durc! Sir! We just got the message! Are you okay?”

Durc spoke shakily into the walkie talkie. “Get your asses down to room 34 before I tear out your spines and beat you with them. Have I made myself clear?”

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I'm reading this right now. If you download Gamemaker 7.0 it doesn't cost a thing, but upgrading it to pro (Which you most likely would have to.) costs a bit. I don't make games, or know how for that matter, but you could ask someone like SligStorm to try and make it.
Now then I must read the new chapter.
Edit: Yeah! Nedd's hand is off! An eye first, now a hand. What'll be next? You're going to have to make a new chapter soon because I want to read it.
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Lol. When you said that I thought of that Monty Python skit.
'Its only a flesh wound.' xD

Expect a new chapter tomorrow. I've been oober-busy simutaniously writing the next chapters for Epidemic and Charlotte, I hope I can update them on the same day.
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That most sincerely creeped me out of my skin. I can wait though.
I love Monty Python too but that's a movie not a skit. Monty Python and The Holy Grail.
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Good chapter. Love the picture (maybe you should add some blood driping from his severed hand? Or would that be too graphic?)
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That most sincerely creeped me out of my skin. I can wait though.
I love Monty Python too but that's a movie not a skit. Monty Python and The Holy Grail.
I only saw a part of that movie. Maybe thats why I thought it was a skit. It was damn funny though. xD


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Good chapter. Love the picture (maybe you should add some blood driping from his severed hand? Or would that be too graphic?)
Well I kind of just wanted it to be a reference, not an actual scene, so I didn't add any blood. Plus its supposed to look like he has stitches there, not just a bloody stump.



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Spears of pain spread over Nedd’s arm like wildfire. He screamed in agony and fell back into the hallway, cradling his severed limb against his chest. His head pounded as he felt warm blood stream down his arm, softly dripping against the floor and staining the ground red. Nedd looked up slowly. He could see the metal door, standing broken but strong, just barely protecting the vykkers from a slow and agonizing death.

“SON OF A BITCH!” Nedd screamed suddenly, flinging himself against the door. His good hand raked the air as he struggled to fit himself through the wide gash in the door, but to no avail; his legs were too wide. “LOOK WHAT YOU’VE DONE!”

Helix shrank away from the door, horror in his beady little eyes. “You g-gave me no choice---”

“YOU SHOULD HAVE DIED! OPEN THIS ODD-DAMN DOOR SO I CAN KILL YOU!

Nedd jumped back from the door, panting, and sprang at it again, making slightly more ground. The vykkers quailed like cornered meep and held their breaths anxiously. Nedd roared and swung his heavy, paw-like hand forward, just inches out of reach of Helix’s face. His eyes watered as another jolt of excruciating pain flickered up his arm, and he felt dizzy from blood loss. ‘I have to get out of here.’ He realized.

He fell back from the door and crouched nearby. He held his arm close to his chest as he looked side to side, his mind clouded from the torture in his arm that was tearing him apart. Nedd got up and stalked warily down the hall, leaving the terrified vykkers behind. ‘If I ever see that vykker again, I swear to odd I’ll hang him by his own entrails and---’

His thought was cut short. Voices erupted from around the corner; “This way! Quickly! Quickly! Durc’s in trouble!”

Guards.
‘Aw shit.’

Nedd looked around wildly for somewhere to hide; a closet, a staircase, an elevator, anything, but to no success. He was royally screwed.
Nedd bared his teeth and ducked down into a pouncing position, his bloodshot eyes swiveling in the dark. He wasn’t about to let those trigger-happy assholes catch him without a fight.



<~{.epidemic.}~>


Dan was on patrol.

To any other person, those words would mean little, but to Dan they meant nothing but torment. Because, specifically, he was on patrol in the mortuary: a small, miserable room on the first floor of the ship where the vykkers stored dead experiments, and sometimes even dead workers. The room was nearly pitch black, lit only by the guard’s flashlights, and freezing cold. Freezers lined the walls all the way up to the ceiling, packed to the brim with dead bodies, some of which had been in there for years. Dan found it to be extremely creepy, but he made sure not to show his discomfort.

Daaaaan... An almost-ghostly voice hummed behind him.

Dan didn’t even look.

I’m coming to kill you, Dan...

Would you cut it out? Dan snapped, rounding on Ian. Ian frowned.

What’s the point in being in a room packed with dead bodies if you can’t even scare people? He demanded.

Dan rolled his eyes and looked away, the side of his head pounding slightly. He had a small strip of gauze wrapped around the stump that was once his left horn. Ever since their attempted attack on Nedd Dan had been extremely moody, and a little depressed. He desperately wished that everything could go back to the way things were before, but he wasn’t granted such luxury.

A slig with a silver badge stomped into the room. The small squad of guards looked over with interest; anything as simple as a new face after endless hours of ‘guarding’ the same room was a welcome sight.

“Just got a call from Durc,” the slig said in his rough naval voice, loading his gun. “He needs us ta go over to room 34 on the second floor and deal with some problem he’s got, or something.”

“What problem?” Somebody asked suspiciously. The slig scratched his head.

“He said he ran into some trouble,” he began, “I passed another patrol on the way who got a separate transmission from him. Said it was that maniac everybody’s been freaking out about.”

‘Hell no!’ Dan thought. The last thing he wanted to do was to mess with Nedd.

“Might’ve just been a rumor though. Anyway. Lets hurry this up, I wanna get this over with.”

They shuffled quickly out of the room, leaving the gloom and the dead bodies far behind. Dan was glad to finally be somewhere a little warmer. They hurried up a flight of stairs, snuzis’ in hand, though nobody seemed to be taking their task seriously. This made Dan feel anxious and arthritic. If they weren’t scared, why was he?

The patrol group quieted down once they reached the second floor. They took deliberately wary steps, careful to avoid making a sound. The slig in front (Dan had no idea who he was, but figured he must have been important: after all, he was wearing a badge) motioned for them to follow. They stepped slowly around the corner, pointing their flashlights from side to side. The hallway appeared to be deserted.

“Be careful,” the slig cautioned as they continued down the hall, “we weren’t the only guards sent down here. Look before you shoot.”

Dan looked over at a nearby door. It had the number ‘112' painted on it. ‘112?’ Dan thought critically. ‘Just how many rooms are on this floor?’ They moved dilatorily onwards, making little ground. The sneaking around seemed pointless; but, should they run into Nedd, it could prove vital. The less time it took for him to discover the group, the better.

Somebody was screaming!

The squad flung their backs to the walls, their breathing heavy with fear. Down one of the halls they could hear the frenzied, terror-stricken cries of some unfortunate soul. The shrill calls grew louder until they formed words, and sent chills down Dan’s spine.
“HELP ME!” The voice cried; it sounded like a slig. “OH ODD, SOMEBODY, HELP---”

A twang, a splash, and the voice stopped abruptly. The sounds of the fear-stricken squads’ breathing broke the following silence. The slig gestured urgently for the group to follow, and they made quick progress down the hall, horror in their eyes. Nobody said a word. It was like a bizarre, convoluted curse; they talk, they died.

They stepped around the corner. The slig in front jerked back with a startled gag, and the group ground to a halt, appalled.

There was blood everywhere.

On the floor, against the walls, even splattered on the ceiling. Dan could see hand prints in gore smeared against doors, glistening incisively in the flashlight’s glow.

“Oh odd.” The lead slig choked, one hand over his face tentacles. He looked as though he might throw up.

Dan tried to speak, but no sound came. He had no idea how long they stood there; seconds, maybe even hours, just staring. He eventually forced himself to look away.

“Lets get out of here.” The slig said, marching off. The group forced their legs into motion, occasionally looking back over their shoulders at the massacre. The slig fumbled with his walkie-talkie. “I’ll radio in for a lockdown,” he said. “It’ll warn the ship. We need everybody to get in their rooms and hide...” He trailed off. The group listened expectantly, but he had nothing to say except; “did you hear that?”

Dan stiffened. He could hear it clearly. Rough, throaty breathing. A few muffled curses. A crinkly sound, like lips smacking. The lead slig stepped forward tentatively, pointing his gun from side to side.

“Show yourself!” He demanded.

The slig’s command was answered, but not in the way he would have hoped.

A dark shape tore itself from the shadows and pinned the slig to the ground. Its long, needle-sharp teeth snapped his spine like a toothpick, and its dark red eye pivoted wildly. Shots were fired. Threats were shouted. None of which even scraped the surface of the damage Nedd could cause.

GET BACK! Dan roared at his group. WE HAVE TO RETREAT! They didn’t listen; in fact, they even had the nerve to get closer to their worst nightmare.

Nedd sprang forward with catlike agility, grabbed an intern in a violent embrace, and jerked his arms back. The intern didn’t even get to scream. The limp body fell to the ground, bones shattered like glass.

HEY! Red taunted, taking aim. Nedd swung around. OVER HERE, JACKASS!

Nedd jumped over dangerously, claws unsheathed, toothy mouth flashing. Red’s finger pulled against the snuzi’s trigger. It would’ve been an amazing, one-hit-kill if Nedd hadn’t banked to the side and took off down the hallway like a volkswagen.

“Get ‘im!” Somebody shouted as they followed in close pursuit. Dan found this to be strange. Usually, Nedd had no problem dismembering a squad as small as theirs; Dan wondered what could have possibly urged him to flee.

He’s one fast son of a bitch, Ian gasped as he struggled to keep up. His stamina wasn’t the best.

Nedd literally jumped straight down a staircase, spilling blood against the steps. Realization struck. ‘Of course,’ Dan thought. ‘He’s injured; why else would he be running away?’
The wild goose chase seemed to be fruitless; Nedd was outrunning them, and if it weren’t for his injury, he’d probably would have been long gone. Eventually he came to the main intersection on the first floor, and Dan nearly threw a fit.

The basement! He cried. Don’t let him into the basement!

Nedd made a mad dash for the basement door. Dan fired a desperate shot with his snuzi. The bullet struck the floor at Nedd’s feet, Nedd skidded back in alarm, and he tripped over the metal cart with the ugly black lock that had been keeping the basement shut. The box shattered to the ground. The squad fired their weapons like maniacs, and bullets screeched through the air with deafening volume. Nedd snarled, flashing his broad, sharp jaws, and cut through a slig with his claws, decapitating him. Nedd’s pupils dilated so broadly that they nearly blotted out the rest of his eyes; Odd only knew how good his night-vision was now.

He darted down a hall at random, taking on a sudden burst of speed, and vanished from sight. Dan whipped out his walkie-talkie.

Can you hear me? He called urgently. This is Mortuary Patrol to Cafeteria Patrol, target is heading your way, can you hear me? Dan turned to his group. They’re not answering!

Those assholes, Red snarled, loading his snuzi. He cocked it roughly. What should we do?

They looked at Dan expectantly. Dan blinked. ‘Who elected me leader all of the sudden?’

We should... Dan said slowly, ...chase him?

“Works for me.” someone said. They took off running down the hall, herding Nedd towards the cafeteria, where hopefully (somebody sober) could finish him off.



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The basement door opened slightly. A little pink snout forced itself through the thin gap. Its wide nostrils flared as it inhaled a large breath of air, and shuddered as it released it.

Lady trotted out of the basement, panting liesurely. She looked around in a ‘where did everyone go?’ sort-of-way. Two more slogs followed behind, curious, and after a mere minute dozens of slogs had flocked to the basement door. Never before had they seen the wild world outside the basement’s walls. Their tounges rolled as they loped around in little packs, eager to explore. Finally they wandered down the many halls and corridors of the main intersection, their hips wagging.

It was the perfect time for a midnight snack.

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Ignore this post please. I accidentally posted the chapter twice.
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Oh no... Looks like even if they hadn't had enough with just Nedd they've also got a huge pack of slogs on their tail too. It really sucks to be Dan right now. Great chapter. I bet Nedd will free alll the Cylonite Fuzzles and cause a huge amount of havoc. After that then... Who knows what?
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