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Thank you so much! and I'm also looking forward to that pic

Oh and here's the next chapter, enjoy!


Chapter seventeen: The secrets of a Stranger – part two: Love grows where my dear goes



- Mmm! That was a very good meal I’m full, Maki said as he made a small burp.
- Eh, behave yourself! We have ladies here you know, Stranger stern said to him.
- Ops, sorry guys, uhm… I mean girls, hehe!
- It’s alright I’m quite used to that actually, Yoanne explained.
- To that kind of nonsens? Where are you from anyway, Frayda asked.
- I rather not speak about it…
- Why not? Hard times or what, Maki asked.
- Maki let her be alone fer a minute she jus’ arrived here after being hunted by some Slegs out in the forest, Stranger said protectively.
- Eh, I’m only asking, no ofence!
- Stop you two, the Grubb demanded, if you guys are about to fight then do it outside while we girls enjoy the rest of the night inside the hut, understood?
- Alright, they both said.
- Good. Now who likes to have some cookies? I baked them while I was waiting for the meal to get done. Hope they’ll taste good – I got a little distracted when Stranger here was talking with me while I was working.
- Oh, I’ll try one or two Maki said as he grabbed a couple and ate them.
- Well?
- They tasted great! Can I have some more?
- Sure, but let the other taste first, Frayda said as she past the box with the cookies to Stranger.
- Thanks… he began but let Yoanne have some before him, you want some?
- Thanks, but no thanks I got quite full after the great meal.
- Okay, stranger said as he grabbed a few and ate as well.

The hours flew away and they all four talked, laughed and had a fun time together.

… or so it seemed.

Yoanne looked out from the window and sighed. Stranger saw that and wondered what was going on. Just as he should ask she rose up from her seat and said:
- I’m jus going out for some fresh air, it’s getting a bit warm in here.
- Alright do so, the Grubb said and continued her chat with Maki.

Yoanne went out and stood at the porch while she looked at the horizon above the wall that surrounded the village. Suddenly she heard some Steefs, whom she thought, were drunk. And she was right. They were four, large Steefmales, each one had a half bottle of wine and were wagiling around on unstable legs. First, she thought that they wouldn’t recognize her, but she was dead wrong. The one who seemed to be the oldest of them, saw her and whistled at her while he started to show his great musles and look “to-handsome-to-resist”. Yoanne turned her head away from him and tried to ignore him. He noticed it and went up to her and made his little show again. But when he saw that she still didn’t cared, he grabbed her around the waist and sqeezed her against his own body.
- Go Bocey, one of the other Steefs shouted.
- Yer my little… flower… now ain’t you, the intruder whispered toYoanne with a hoarse voice and a smell of alcohol reached her nostrills and she began to panic.
- Let me go you scumbag, she screamed out.
- ‘ey, sweetheart! When Mr. Bocey here has picked out a female, he will never let go o’ her till he’s done with little work o’ his, another one shouted.

Yoanne screamed louder and this time Stranger and the other ones heard it and Stranger rose up from his seat and went out to see what was going on and got really pissed of when he saw that they were mistreating the Steef female.

”His” bride.

Stranger roared and smashed the older Steef male with all of his streingth. He fell down and Stranger stomped on him with his hooves till Bocey began to cough up blood. Yoanne sat on the floor and took shelter behind some dustbins with her hands over her head. The Stranger stopped fighting and watched Bocey with flaring eyes as he exposed his large and sharp teeth. Bocey looked up at him, rose up quickly and ran over to his buddies.
- I’ll only say this once so listen carefully; nobody then I mean none are allowed touch her! And if you try to do it anyway then I’ll personaly give that person one hell of a fight that he’ll never forget. Now LEAVE, Stranger shouted to the crowd.

They walked away – a bit frightend – after what happend to Bocey, that appeared to be older than Stranger himself.

The hero turned to Yoanne and crouched down beside her and laid his hand on her shoulder.

- Are you okay?
- I…I-I was so scared… I didn’t know what to do, Yoanne said shaking.
- Shhhh, it’s alright now they’re gone. You don’t have to worry anymore…

Then Yoanne wrapped her arms around his waist and crying out of relief. Stranger, who got suprised over that, embraced her and stroke his hand comfortingly over her head.
- Everything’s going to be fine, jus’ stick to me and nobody will try to harm you.

Yoanne looked up at him and smiled. Stranger returned it, by smiling back and helped her up on her feet again.
- I can’t believe you. You’ve just saved me two times at one day and… thank you.
- Nah you don’t need to thank m… Stranger began before he got kissed by her.

What they didn’t notice what that Frayda and Maki had seen everything through the kitchen window.

- Aha! I knew that he loved her, Maki exclaimed.
- Oh, Mr Smarty when did you discover that, Frayda asked and raised a brow.
- Well… errr forget it!
- Thought so.


~DS~

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Aawww, such a damn good story. ^^


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- Nah you don’t need to thank m… Stranger began before he got kissed by her.
Especially this was cute!



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What they didn’t notice what that Frayda and Maki had seen everything through the kitchen window.
- Aha! I knew that he loved her, Maki exclaimed.
- Oh, Mr Smarty when did you discover that, Frayda asked and raised a brow.
- Well… errr forget it!
- Thought so.
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Alcohol is not good... at all...
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Thank you so much for the comments and I'll be updating it soon !!!


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Cool!
By the way, I still work for the picture with Stranger and his enamored look. But I can't get it right. Darn, I'm just not good in drawing sweet things...!
Maybe it's a personal problem of me... it's too hard.
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You? With your drawing talent? You can't draw this kind of expression?
Hmm... that's interesting.

But I'm sure you get that, anyway. It's merely a matter of time, I guess.
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Okay guys... I'll update the story this or maybe next weekend. Jus' so you now.

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Okay, no problem.
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Jus' so you now.
Hehe, good to know!
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Thanks for waiting and here's the reward!


Chapter eighteen: Plans – part one


Bocey and his friends had returned to his home to tell his father about the accident.

- Father! You can't believe what happened to me, Bocey explained.

- What, Son... he asked and got chocked over his boy's new appearence.

- What is this? Have you've been out for a fight again with your friends? Ya know what I've been telling you about these days, why can't you jus' learn?

- I'm sorry papa... I couldn't jus' help it... My friends made me drink the pesty wine... and if I didn't drink it then they'd think I'd be a wuzz, Bocey lied.

- Oh, is that so? Well tell me... why do you go of with these "friends" of yours when you know they're making you drink alcohol?

- I don't have any other friends... But it wasn't them who were fighting me!

- None of them? The who did it?

- I don't know whom he was, but he seemed to be new and... he also seemed to have a beauty flower to bride as well.

- Bocey... don't say that you actually tried to rape his...

- No!

Then one of Bocey's friends, Hogey said to protect his older mate:

- Well actually, Bocey tried to propose to the female but then she jus' began to scream without a reason!

- And then the "newcomer" arrived out from the hut and attacked Bocey, another friend joined in.

- A newcomer you say? Well I'll have a talk with the leader and I'll see if he could solve this "problem"...

- Thank you father I... Bocey started.

- But you stay out of it - I don't want any more drinking or fighting to cause any more trouble in to this family again, do you understand?

- Father!

The father looked at his son with deep wrath in his eyes and went out.

- Propose?! What was that all about, Bocey bursted out in anger.

- Well couldn't you come up with a better reason, Hogey answered a bit frightend.

- This "newcomer" will pay... and think I know exactly how to make him do it...

- How, the other friend asked.

Bocey looked in their eyes with a burning lust of fight and said:

- I'll tell you tomorrow what we're about to do.

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That's kinda unfair... but that makes it awfully exciting!
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Thanks I don't know when I might be able to update this thread, cuz of all the things I have to do... so... *sighs*

See ya!

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Oh, well. Okay. See ya then (and hope to see the next chapter)!
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BAD NEWS!

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Oh, well. Okay. See ya then (and hope to see the next chapter)!
Well... I'm sad to make you disappointed - I'll not update the story here anymore, but on Fanfiction.net instead. I feel stressed when everybody around me updates a lot more than I and that I won't be able to write cuz of, as I've said before, school works and projects... *sighs* but I'm trying to write on the weekends and might probably send in one or a couple chapters for you.

It's not hard to find the story - first click on the category "games" and then scroll down till you find "Oddworld". There are a few contents in the right upper corner and if ya click on "M" (means mature) then click on the "go" - button and you might find my story.

I'm really sorry for this, but I feel very stressed and I need a time out. Though I'll send in pictures/photos - it's easier and a simple thing to do.

So... I hope to see you on ff.net then?

~Dancing Steef~

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