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11-23-2005, 06:36 AM
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hehe thanx Lobo and yer story rox as well anyway I'll send in a new part of it as fast as I can, well this afternoon... hope I can make it in time

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Lookin' forward to it.....but I still think Vivay's gonna kick Stranger's fuzzy butt and pound 'im into the dirt.....
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well I didn't mannaged to write two pages, but here's one and a quarter


After the supper, Stranger and the Grubb decided to go to bed, it had been a long journey and both of them were extremely exhausted. The Guardians showed them their guesthouse they had built not long time ago; it was more like a cottage hospital than a guesthouse. When the Steef guardians got harmed or injured in battles, they went to the cottage hospitals to get well. The one Thunder and Stormous had built was only one of many others, which was made for those who had got heavy injured.

- Well, as you can see there are a couple of beds here and in that closet there are some sheets and some blankets… and in that little cupboard above it, there are some pillows, Stormous said as he pointed at them.
- Thanks, the Grubb said while she yawned, thanks a lot!
- Hope you’ll enjoying your time here friends, by the way how long are you going to stay, Thunder asked.
- Err, I’m not sure but… yawn… Stranger tried to continue but Stormous said:
- We’ll see tomorrow, Good night both of you… Stormous nodded at Thunder as he walked out from the guesthouse.
- G’ night, Thunder said as he also walks away and closed the door behind him.

Inside the hut they talked in a low voice to each other:
- I wonder what we’re going to do with them I mean our leader won’t like that we’ve invited a couple of strangers to our village… Thunder said.
- Well we couldn’t have left them out there in the forest, could we, Stormous added.
- No, I guess you’re right, but seriously what do think about them?
- They seem to be nice, Stormous began, and that little Grubb makes me laugh, he he…
- How ‘bout that Stranger then? He’s quite a mysterious one, Thunder said as he sat down on the sofa.
- What do you mean by “mysterious”, asked Stormous while he joined him.
- He’s quite nasty for being so young; jus’ look what he did to your eye, Thunder said as he pointed at his brother’s black eye.
- You’re overdoing a bit, don’t you? This is a simple scratch a part from the usual damages I often get when I’m joining fights, so why worry?
- Better to be prepared than unprepared.
There was a pause. Thunder continued:

- If I hadn’t told him to stop then you would be dead by now, I don’t know if I had managed it too…
- Wait a minute; he was only trying to protect his friend, the Grubb leader remember? I don’t think he’d kill his own species without a good reason and protecting a friend is a good reason, Stormous said.
- Then why do you think he asked for our leader? He might be a spy of Sekto, the terrible creature who killed a whole Steef tribe and do you remember which?
- …Alca’s tribe… I know but what sort of harm could a Steef do to his own kind?
- Maybe that little shit head got captured and was forced to show Sekto where the tribe laid. And that might have been a safe way to get out from the danger zone for him,
Thunder said as he rose up from the sofa and walks to his room. Stormous followed his brother and grabbed his shoulder. Thunder turned around and looked in Stormous eyes with a chock. Stormous said with anger:
- I don’t want to hear something like that again you hear me? Stranger is a nice fellow and I don’t think he wants to harm anybody. He might have been looking for our leader Vivay, but not to make a trespass. I’ll lead him to Vivay tomorrow and don’t you worry jus’ leave the Stranger to me n’ I’ll take care of it.
- You’re nuts you know that? Well little bro then I suggest you may take the task, but if anything happens to our leader then I make sure you’ll regret it, Thunder said as his bro let go of his arm and walked in to his room.

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11-23-2005, 07:53 AM
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Wehey! Nice chapter DS, oooo, I wonder what Thunder and Stormus say when they found out that Stranger IS part of Alca's tribe....wait, he was right? Oh dear....confused...
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11-28-2005, 08:01 PM
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That chapter was very good, DS. Everything is starting to get a bit intense, in my opinion, with the ideas that Stranger is really with Sekto (yeah, right! ). I wish I could've replied to this sooner, but I've been in and out of these forums for awhile. Nice work, though.
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hi ya!


Chapter seven: A strange meeting- part one




Next day Thunder decided to get up early before his brother and tell Vivay about the strangers. The leader usually wakes up early in the mornings, to take his morning walk around the village as he often does. Thunder sneaked out from his room and gently pulled the door handle, to be sure that his brother wouldn’t wake up. He slowly opened the door and tiptoed out from the room while he closed it behind him. The Steef guardian went to the little hall and put on his poncho and his boots, grabbed the handle and went out from the hut.


Meanwhile in the guesthouse Stranger and the Grubb finally woke up from their sleep, rested and ready for new adventures. The Grubb stretched and rubbed her eyes while she yawned. Stranger still laying on his back looked dreaming up at the roof and asked her:
- Mornin’ dear friend you slept well?
- Yawn, yeah… slept like a log he he, you, asked the Grubb.
- Same here. How do you like these Steef Guardians and their hospitality? That Stormous seems to be a nice guy, don’t you think?
- Yeah you’re right about that, but that Thunder-guy is quite scary if you ask me.
- Well I don’t think he’s scary, Stranger sat up, he’s rather a bit mean and… quite boxer looking if you ask me, he he…
- Boxer looking?
- You know a bit raw and rough.
- Oh, yeah he sure is, the Grubb said as she giggled.
- I wonder if we’re going to meet Vivay today, I mean at least we came here to see him, didn’t we?
- Sure, but the Guardians might have to prepare their leader and themselves before introducing us in front of Vivay and by the way we have to look good too. If you are supposed to meet with someone who has greater power than you, and is a part of the “royal” family then it’s much more important to set a good example of being a stranger.
- You have to know a lot ‘bout leaders, don’t you?
- Being a leader for some years do give you inspiration, eh? Anyway we should get some clean clothes… maybe we could borrow some from the Guardian brothers, they might have some “spare clothes”.
- You’re right about that though, Stranger stood up while he brushed of the dust from his armour lying on a chair.
- Oh would you stop that brushing? I’m getting a cough if you do that!
- Ops! Sorry about that…
- If you really want to brush your armour away from dust then you may go outside, but whatever you do don’t get attractive.
- No I won’t. Shall I take yours to?
- No that’s not necessary.
- You sure? It would be a pleasure, Stranger asked pleadingly.
- Aw, all right you big fuzzy, go a head, the Grubb said as she hands over her suit to him.


I jus' send the part in now cuz I'm in a hurry

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11-30-2005, 11:43 AM
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Sweet work DS! I like to see how stranger is that close in meeting Vivay.
Also sorry that I stopped replying since, whenever it was. I'm just too busy to check on everything lately...
Anyways, keep it up!
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I like your story. Good work.
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Nice work, DS. I like how you capture the characters in your stories. Keep it up!
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More story! Woot! Good bit Dancin' Steef, wonder what Vivay's gonna do when Stranger shows up...having a heartattack probably.
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Sweet work DS! I like to see how stranger is that close in meeting Vivay.
Also sorry that I stopped replying since, whenever it was. I'm just too busy to check on everything lately...
Anyways, keep it up!

Yay BBB's back! glad you still enjoy reading the story First I thought that you just stopped reading, cause it was getting boring... anyway gald to see yer back

more story will come later this afternoon...

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Just as Stranger was about to pull the handle then he heard some voices from outside. He opened the door on ajar and looked through it. There he saw Thunder and another Steef; with larger horns than the Steef guardian and wore a light poncho over his shoulders. The Steef was a bit plump, but still very muscular and he had red-orange coloured eyes, that shined in the early morning dark.
- Stranger! What are you doing, the Grubb asked with a weird look on her face.
- Come and have a look at this, Stranger said as he beckoned for her.
- What is it? Oh, there was a pause, Stranger I think we’re about to say hello to the leader…
- That’s the leader Vivay? I thought he’d be much more evil looking than chubby, oh well can’t have right all time I guess.
- “Right all time?” you DON’T have right all time, nobody’s that perfect!
- Ah c’mon I jus’ played a joke, don’t get upset. But if that’s the leader then whose with him? I can barley see in this darkness... is it Thunder?
- I don’t know… he looks like, oh no…
- What?
- It is Thunder! But what is he doing?
- I’ve no clue, but whatever they’re up to, then we are not supposed to join ‘em. C’mon lets get dressed up and then we’ll see Vivay.

The Grubb Leader agreed and Stranger closed the door carefully, to be aware of that they shouldn’t hear.


Back at the hut…

Stormous had just woke up when he heard someone opened and closed the door.
- Stormous, a familiar voice said.
- Stranger is it you, Stormous asked as he went out from his room.
- Yes it’s my friend, and I said Stranger.
- Oh have you slept well? I was wondering if you ever would get up in time…
- In time for what, the Grubb Leader asked.
- In time to meet the leader and I’m going to show you the way to him.
- Meet the leader? When, Stranger asked with curiosity.
- As fast as we’ve got something to eat and got dressed up, then we might go to see him. But when I’m thinking you guys do have to get some clean clothes, don’t you? Thunder and I don’t have that many clothes, but I know someone who might be able to give you some.
- Thanks a lot Stormous; we really appreciate your hospitality and generosity, the Grubb said with happiness.
- You’re welcome guys, I jus’ want you to feel like home… oh and by the way where are you guys from anyway?

Stranger felt a lump of saliva in his throat and he felt warm, too warm and too unsure to answer. He saw Stormous painful look in his eyes and didn’t know how to began.

- Well, Stormous asked.
- Err… well, um…Stranger tried to speak, but then the Grubb took the lead and said:
- He’s from Alca’s tribe, which he first thought, was the only and the last Steef tribe in the whole world. But the tribe got terrorised and destroyed by some nasty Wolwarks and Stranger was the only one who survived the attack against them.
- Oh really… but that’s impossible!
- What do you mean, the Grubb asked.
- I knew that the tribe got destroyed… I was there when it all had stopped, together with my brother and Quizy.
- But how could you know? I mean why were you there, Stranger asked a bit confused.
- It’s a long story, but I’ll tell you the short version. Before Vivay and his brothers, Noka and Carak went separated ways then Noka and Vivay decided in secret that they still would see each other, by sending their messengers between the villages. And as time went, they decided to see the others as well, but still in secret. So they send their guardians to their brothers’ places and watched over them for a couple of days. Till the day we discovered that Alca’s tribe had been destroyed. We searched all over the village, but we didn’t find any survivors, only dead bodies. Some without their heads.
- Without their heads?
- Yes. The rumour says, that a guy named Sekto had send his men, the Wolwarks to get some of the bodies, but most of the bodies were to heavy for them so they decided to just take the heads, because of the horns sake. Other says that Alca himself became a host for the Oktigi. But who knows, it’s just rumours.
- An Oktigi, Stranger said with amazement.
- Yes an Oktigi…and I’m afraid that he still hunts us.
- Excuse me Stormous, but this Steef here has defeated the Sekto-demon’s forces and Sekto himself, so there’s no need to worry anymore, the Grubb said with comfort.

Stormous eyes went wide and looked at the young Steef with shock. Stranger didn’t say anything or didn’t smile; he just stood there looking at the older Steef, but with pride and relief in his chest. The Steef guardian stuttered:

- Y…You killed Sekto? And his armies? But you are just a young Steef, too young to make through that kind of adventure… how?
- Maybe I’m the only one who tried and succeeded, Stranger answered.
- You’re an odd fellow; you know that, Stormous asked as he grinned.
- Yeah I know and I guess I’ll be it the rest of my life, Stranger said as he smiled.
- Hrrm…well I guess you should be off now, getting new and clean clothes before seeing Vivay.
- Okay, but I don’t know the place yet can you help me find this guy?
- Of course, but don’t make any sounds, the inhabitants might still sleep.
- Sure, the Grubb said as she opened the door and went out.


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Heeee, love it as always DS! Made me laugh quite a bit this part did. Good work.
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Nice work, DS.......so they believe that Sekto's dead, huh? I see an appearance by him happening sometime...... Anyway, that chapter was one of the most interesting ones yet! Keep it up.
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thanx Guys yeah, the do belive that Sekto's dead, but he ain't well I'm about to send in another chapter here now, but it's a bit short... anyway it's just what I've been written so far. Here it is enjoy...



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Stormous lead them to a large hut, with a sign on the door, which said “ Clothes for your own need”. Stranger raised an eyebrow while he scratched himself in the neck.

- Here it is… I’ve to warn you about this fellow in here; he’s quite nasty and weird so watch your back, you might never know what’s on his mind, Stormous said with a serious voice.
- Right, Stranger began, but what kind of clothes are we going to wear?
- What does fit for a meeting, asked the Grubb.
- Well the latest fashion is to wear a large poncho with decorations like feathers, beads and different sort of patterns. And to that comes a couple of fingerless light gloves with patterns as well, but that’s just the latest though.
- Kind of advanced fashion, eh, asked Stranger.
- It isn’t that much advanced as it sounds, it’s just much describing… shall we go inside?
- Why not it seems to be pretty quiet and, the Grubb began before she got interrupted of a sound, a Steef scream. She hided herself behind Stranger and shaked with fear.
- W…what was that, Stranger stuttered with frightening.
- That’s him, the guy we’re about to meet, answered Stormous, still calm.
- Who, asked the Grubb.
- The Ultimate Hunter, answered Stormous as he knocked on the great door.
- Who is it, a deep and serious voice asked.
- It’s the Steef Guardian Stormous with some friends, answered Stormous.

The door opened and a tiny, but pretty strong- and dwarf looking Steef came out from the hut. He had very large horns, too large for his head and he had long dreads in both black and light colours, together with his normal hair colour. The eyes of the Steef were yellow; a very rare paint for Steefs and a scar that was running from the left eyebrow to the cheekbone. He was wearing a murky cloak with small beads and large red feathers along the shoulders and the neck. The fur was dark brown except for his fists – they were black as the night itself and so were his hooves and legs as well. He looked at the newcomers with both curiosity and doubt.

- Who are these jokers, huh, the Ultimate hunter asked with a hoarse but still deep voice.
- These are the newcomers whom my brother and I meet yesterday in the forest, Stormous began, and they need some clean clothes do you have anything that would fit them?
- Well certainly… it’s easy to find Steef clothes in here, but I’m afraid that Grubb clothes are very rare. Who knows if there are any, lets have a look, the Ultimate hunter said as he welcomed them in to the hut.


Ta ta!

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Excuse me but...ROTFL! Midget Steef! MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! That's hysterical Dancin' Steef, hys-te-rical. Anyway, great bit you's got here. Well done.
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Yeah, Midget Steef.......that reminds me of something that I'd see in Ratchet and Clank 1 (Drek) or Shrek (Lord Farquad)! Anyway, nice chapter, DS. It was one of your best ones, in my opinion.
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Yeah, Midget Steef.......that reminds me of something that I'd see in Ratchet and Clank 1 (Drek) or Shrek (Lord Farquad)! Anyway, nice chapter, DS. It was one of your best ones, in my opinion.
yeah yer right about that Odd Chick but the fact is; that Hunter isn't small, well he's small but not that small... he's about 5.10 feet high and it's about my leingth if I could think of a leingth for Steefs then I guess around 6-7 feet for males and 5-6 for females. just a thought though

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Yeah, that's about what I'd think, too, but that's just me. Well, I can't wait to see the next chapter!
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...And you don't have to wait longer

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Here it is!



Chapter seven: A strange meeting – part two





Inside the hut the newcomers discovered a lot of dissimilar things. The living room was, unlike the other living rooms they had seen, ovate shaped and in the centre of the room there was standing a huge sofa with a nice red cloth, and some soft pillows laying at it. Right under it there was a large carpet with dark and light green colours. A window formed like a circle allowed the early daylight to light up the place, and down to the left of the window there was a fireplace, which crackled. The Grubb went in to the living room and sat down on the comfortable sofa, followed by Stranger and the Ultimate Hunter. Stormous, who still stood in the door opening said to them:
- I’ll be back about an hour and while you find something to wear then I’ll prepare the Leader for the meeting. The Ultimate Hunter will help you find some clothes, but remember to wear something not too colourful, Vivay doesn’t like when clothes are too “flashy”.
- Right, Stranger paused, but what are we supposed to wear then?
- Just ask the Ultimate Hunter; he knows, Stormous answered as he went out and closed the door behind him.

The Ultimate Hunter turned around and looked at the newcomers with tired and anger gazing eyes. Then he said with a nicely and relaxing voice:
- Please be my guests, sit down on the sofa here and I’ll get some refreshments.
He went out from the room and went in to the kitchen. Stranger sat down on it beside his friend and asked her:
- I wonder what I’m about to say to Vivay… how am I in the name of Odd going to start?
- Eh matie, you have to take it easy or else it wont matter. Just take a deep breath and for once try to relax. We’re soon about to face Vivay and I guess it would be bad if we didn’t take it slow and gently, the Grubb answered while she laid herself on the sofa.

Stranger took a deep breath and let the air escape through his mouth, but slowly. The Ultimate Hunter soon returned with a bulky platter with three cups full of warm tee and left it on a table, which stood right in front of the couch. But as fast as he appeared, he soon disappeared through the living room door. He returned again but this time with some sandwiches on a big plate and laid it on the table as well. The Ultimate Hunter sat down on the sofa with them, and said:
- Well don’t just stare, dig in dig in!

Stranger and the Grubb took a sandwich each and started eating. The Grubb looked pleased and so did also Stranger. Stranger said with pride:
- These Sandwiches are so good, how did you make them?
- Secret family recipe. The whole thing with these are that you could eat yourself fill on just eating one or two, even if they’re small, there was a pause, by the way you can call me Hunter what do the guardians call you? The Greyers? The Unknowns?
- Not exactly. I’m the Grubb Leader of the Grubbs and this is my friend Stranger. What do you mean by the Greyers or the Unknowns, the Grubb asked.
- Nah Just some guys that are known more as the new enemies for us Steefs, but the odd is that I’ve only seen and defeated some of them. Anyway you said you guys looked for some clothes, eh?
- New enemies?
- Yeah, but I guess you knows them as Wolclarks, a relative species to the Wolwarks who eliminated Alca’s tribe. The Wolwarks often has yellow skin while the Wolclarks has grey skin, that why we call them for the Greyers.
- Oh, yeah we’ve heard about them, from the Legendaries, Stranger said with eager.
- You have? Well then I guess you’ve seen them as well, haven’t you?
- No we’ve just heard about them.
- Right, Hunter said as he took his cup of tee and drank it all up with haste before he continued, shall we see if there are any clothes for you then?

Stranger and his friend nodded and followed Hunter; to the great Clothes Storage.

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I think I can safely say that Hunter is my new fav character, I mean come On, how can you not adore midget Steef?? Great as always Dancin' Steef!
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Yeah he's kind of funny, eh? anyway I'll see what I can do to the next update, I want to relax a bit on me vaccation for a while now, but I'll come up with something new as fast as possible...

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Nice work, DS. That chapter was great, just as your others. Yes, you've gotta admit that midget-steefs are all the rage now. Keep up the good work.
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Yeah he's kind of funny, eh? anyway I'll see what I can do to the next update, I want to relax a bit on me vaccation for a while now, but I'll come up with something new as fast as possible...

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I'll see what I can do to the next update... I've been a bit busy lately, even if I've had vaccation sorry, but I guess I'll update the Story on monday or tuesday; same time when I send in some new pics...

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Sorry for delaying!

Hi guys, sorry for delaying one day with the story I had som much things to do at and after school so I didn't get any time to write on... well as I promised here's a new chapter of me story!




Meanwhile at Leader Vivay’s hut…



After that Vivay and Thunder had had the chat, which the leader figured out as important information, they continued the talking at the Leader’s hut. Vivay sat down in a dark green armchair while Thunder sat down the sofa, with the same colours. The leader looked at his Guardian and said with pride:

- You’ve done well in you’re quest being a Guardian of the village, but there is something very significant you must know before you’ll get promoted.
- Promoted? Leader Vivay I’m completely grateful… what something do I’ve missed, asked Thunder with a grin.
- You mentioned something ‘bout a Steef who calls himself Stranger and that he has a connection to my brother’s destroyed tribe?
- Yes Vivay. And I tried to explain to my brother that this Stranger isn’t trustworthy, but did he listen to me? No!
- Hrrm… well go find your little brother and bring him to me so we can have talk him, about this misunderstanding, whose a friend and whose a foe, Vivay said to Thunder still full with pride.
- Yes Leader Vivay, I will, Thunder said as he walked out from the hut.

Right after he had went away, Vivay’s son Maki who had heard the conversation, came out from his room a bit confused over what was going on.
- Father? Who was that you were talking to, Maki asked.
- That was just one of my old Guardians, why are you asking?
- I just wondered… I heard the conversation of yours and I…
- Yes, son tell me, Vivay asked.
- Err… I was wondering does that Stranger guy come from Alca’s tribe and did he actually destroy it? I mean after all it was his home… it’s the same thing with someone else, I mean none would actually destroy his or her own home with purpose, wouldn’t they?
- Maki… you’ve always been a good thinker and you always asks very good questions, but this time I might not be right one to answer… this Stranger fellow ain’t gonna last long here in my village until he admit his mistake and until then you have to keep this quiet, till I and Thunder have cleared this out. Is that understood?
- Yes father, Maki answered as he sadly walks to his room.

After a while Thunder returned together to the hut with his brother. Vivay rose up from his sofa and welcomed them.
- Welcome Guardian brothers to my home! Sit down please and make yourselves comfortable!

They all three sat down and then the leader began asking Stormous:
- I’ve heard from your big brother that you’ve brought some Strangers to my village, is that correct?
- Yes leader Vivay that’s correct, Stormous answered straight on the point.
- There are two of them right? Do they carry any sort of weapons? Are they dangerous at all?
- Two yes… and it’s a Steef and a Grubb. The Steef carries a double-barreled crossbow, which he reloads with live ammo; I don’t know if the Grubb has any weapon- I haven’t seen her carrying any. I can’t see them as dangerous; I mean they didn’t do any great harm, did they?
- They didn’t? What about your eye? Why is it swollen… and black, Thunder asked with a deceitful look on his face.
- … My brother and I tried to kidnap the Steef’s friend and then he shot one Thudslug at me jus’ to protect her from us. That’s all…
- A Thudslug? Right…well then, when can I meet this Steef and… his little friend?
- As fast as…they’ve got some fresh clothes. I send them to Hunter and he knows what’ll suit them… I guess, Stormous answered while he scratched himself in the neck.
- Good. Go to Hunter’s place and guide them newcomers here, so the wont get lost…
- Yes Vivay, answered Stormous as he went out from the hut.

Vivay turned once more to Thunder, but this time with an unpleasant look in his eyes.
- Come, in to my room Thunder… we have some unfinished business we need to discuss.

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*ominous music* GAH! *points at Thunder* You traitorous scumbag donkey!

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Thanx and Sure, here is a new part!

Chapter eight: A Hunter’s story



- Well how do guys like these clothes eh, Hunter asked while he looked at Stranger and the Grubb, both dressed in a wide red poncho with neon colored feathers.
- A bit too large I guess, the Grubb began.
- And quite flashy as well, Stranger interfered.
- Right… let’s find something else…err, Hunter said as both of the guests began to change to their old clothes.

Hunter went in to the huge wardrobe and searched it all over for some clothes for them, but couldn’t find any to his disappointment. He just stood there looking around at the great loads of sewed up textiles, and sighed. It took some minutes before Stranger and the Grubb, who still stood out side it began to wonder what Hunter was doing.
- He’d been in there for a while now… I better go inside and see what’s taking him so long, said Stranger.
- I don’t think we shall go in there, I mean Hunter’s quite short for being a Steef and those clothes are hanging right above his head so it may take its time before he finds out a way of taking them down, the Grubb said while she stopped him.
- But he has been there too long; Stranger began before he saw Hunter.

Hunter didn’t seem to be the joyful Steef he once was, before he had begun to find clothes for them: He looked fairly miserable now and seemed filled of an incurable desire for something. Stranger and the Grubb followed him slowly to the living room and sat down beside him. Hunter who still seemed sad looked at them and said with pain:
- I’m… afraid I can’t find anything suitable for you so… you may have to wear your old clothes…
- What do you mean? Is there something wrong, the Grubb asked.
- You’ve a lot of clothes that are magnificent! And I haven’t seen anything like it before, why do you say you don’t have anything for us, Stranger asked.

Hunter became quiet and turned his head towards the wall. Strangers laid his hand on the miserable Steef’s shoulder and shake it, but he didn’t seemed to care – he just starred at the wall.
- Hey, are you okay? Eh, Hunter, Stranger said while he tried to get his attention.
- Is something wrong, Hunter, the Grubb asked carefully.

But Hunter still didn’t care - he just ignored them. Suddenly a tear ran from his eye down his cheek and soon he began to cry, but quiet. Hunter started cry out words that were frightening for the newcomers.
- Why do I exist? I can’t even think or do something right! Without thinking about you…my sweetest love…my Beautiful May…
- May? Who’s that, Stranger asked with a gentle touch.
- May…is my beloved wife…
- You got a wife?
- Yes, Hunter answered with a lump of cry in his throat.
- Did something bad happen to her? Or why isn’t she here with you?
- It’s a long story…but if you really want to know answered Hunter with a sigh and started to tell them.

- Before the tribe got separated in to four parts, then I was known as one of the eight great Hunters in the village. We were mostly supposed to hunt, but we also guarded the prison and other things as well. Many of the Steefs thought and believed that midget Steefs like me had a special sickness, which made them tiny and they called it “The Dwarf syndrome”. The sickness was unfortunately very rare so the inhabitants didn’t care much about it. Anyway some of the older and wise Steefs decided once that, Steefs who had this disease, couldn’t or weren’t supposed to get married. They wanted to eradicate the sickness so it wouldn’t affect the newborn baby Steefs with the same problems, which we had. The Leader known as Alca’s father didn’t like the “wisely” advice so he put an end to this by firing his them who had come up with this idea. I can still remember what he said in front of the wise Steefs “ Everybody should have the same rights, not because they need medical attention, but because they are normal inhabitants as the rest of us”. I really liked our Leader very much and he’ll have a place in my heart forever.

- But does this have something to do with May, asked the Grubb.
- Well of course it does! Anyhow one day when I was back from a hunt, then one of my pals told me that there was going to be a celebration for some reason, which should be later on the afternoon. It was on the party I met May and it was there I fell in love with her… we talked and she thought that I was funny and brave. Next day, after some thinking I decided to propose to her, but that’s when I got a problem. May was already engaged with someone else – to my disappointment. She was engaged with a guy named Baron and he was, according to me, an arrogant selfish old scumbag who didn’t care ‘bout nobody, but himself. Of course May hadn’t got any idea ‘bout him in that way, so I tried to explain to her, but she didn’t believe me. Two weeks later she came to visit me at my place. To my great joy she told me that she had broke up with Baron and now she came to apologize that she had wrong. I forgave her and we talked a bit more in my hut. Just before she was about to leave I proposed to her and she said yes. The odd was that she was six inches taller then me, so many Steefs called us “The ill matched couple”, but who cared? We were married in eighteen years and two months before the four brothers separated the tribe, we got good news – May was pregnant.

There was a pause. Stranger and the Grubb’s eyes went wide. Hunter continued:

- When the brothers split the tribe in to four pieces then we decided to follow Vivay, but May’s folks didn’t like our choice of choosing so the brought her with them, without asking me if I wanted to follow them. So now here I stand… all alone and I haven’t heard anything of her since then…under those eighteen years together, she and I began to make clothes for the inhabitants personal needs and both of us thought it was fun… but since she left me here I haven’t been able to make or to think of any new ideas…
- Awww, poor Hunter, the Grubb bursted out with compassion.
- I didn’t know that you’ve been through so many things… Sorry, Stranger said as he moved away his hand from Hunter’s shoulder.
- It’s nothing to be sorry for… it’s jus’ that it’s hard to forget someone you really loved so much, Hunter answered as he looked at him.
- I lost my father a while ago and I loved him more than anything else in the whole world… so you’re not alone when it comes to lost members of the family.
- Thanks both of you… Hunter said as he embraced the young Steef and the Grubb.
- Your welcome.
- Now let’s see if I can find anything for you then, you guys coming?
- That sounds great, or what do you think friend?
- Awesome, the Grubb answered.
- Okay, lets go, Hunter said with a smile on his lips again and went back to the huge wardrobe.


Hope your still enjoying it...

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Awwwww, poor Hunter! It's all so sad. Make it happier DS, can't Stranger get his fuzzy rear in gear and do something???
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