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09-02-2005, 07:51 PM
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The Luspadian Race

PROLOGUE

They say the highest threat of being attacked on Oddworld is at night. It was all because of a betrayal by a Mudokon Shaman named Porou. He had a large obbsession with dark magic. Ever since he had first discovered the great power of dark magic, all he used it on is to threaten the citizens of all native villages. He is now banned from the native forests, and now lives in the darkest montains of Oddworld. One day, Porou had found out how to make a rare summon. He had found a scroll being guarded by a group of Paramites inside a cave for some reason. It was awfully old, and had a few tiny rips in it. Other than that, it was still readable. The title of the scroll was 'The Luspadian Summon'.

He took the scroll over back to his tent and read it. It told him to go over to all the snowy peaks of Oddworld until he found some ruin with blue markings. Then he would say a chant. So he had searched about six peaks until he found the ruins. Then, he had made the chant. It went something like this:

"Rus Villodiop Bev Zeee Shlllguo e Imko Qeryulados Ballo e Elmov Yopu!!"

All of a sudden, among the open field north of the ruins, a great church-like build rised out of the ground. Porou could not believe his eyes! He had made a great building rise out of the ground only with some anchient words. His eyes were wide open, and an evil smile was right on his face. So evil, that it would scare you and really give you a bad feeling inside of you. Once the church-like build fully rose from the ground, a figure opened the doors.

The figure was male, and very tall. Bald, but gorgeous. It actually appeared to be human, but it looked like it had been out in the cold for over two years. He was wearing a blue cloak and some white linen socks. That was about it. The stange being aproached Borou.

"Thank you!" The being said.
"Why?" Asked Morou.
"Are you blind? You have freed us!"
"I have?"
The being rolled his eyes.
"I am a part of the Luspades. My name is Qwellp." He mentioned.
"It is an honor to meet you, Qwellp." Replied Porou.
"Follow me. We have much to discuss."

At first Porou was quite uncomfortable trusting Qwellp. He didn't look very friendly, and it looks like he didn't sleep for days. Not only he was uncomfortable, he was confused with many questions like 'Who are Luspades? Why are they honoring me? Can I possibly try to calm down?'. He tried to stay relaxed as he followed Qwellp into the building.
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09-02-2005, 07:58 PM
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This > My pathetic one that no one reads Anyway I luv it!
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09-03-2005, 05:28 AM
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Not a bad idea.
I would like to see the first chapter expanded upon, and maybe some continuation. Don't leave us hanging. Please.

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09-03-2005, 06:14 AM
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Despite its shortiness, the imagery you used in it was pretty nice. A good base.
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09-05-2005, 07:12 PM
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That was a nice way to begin a chapter, sliguy. Yes, it was short, but it builds up very well. It all seems like a mystery right now, though. I can't wait to see how everything comes together.
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