A Shattered Alliance

[sliguy101]

No questions asked. I'm in a hurry.

A Shattered Alliance
By sliguy101

1-I forgot the past

It is yet another day in the O.H.C (Oddworld Human Capacity).
In here, life is completely miserable. Take the Nuthouse, times it by seven, and you would get the horror of this place. The sligs, vykers, and interns have joined forces and held all humans in this place. Every day, it had the stench of bad meat. Security was tight, and no human has escaped over the past three years. Oh, and at first, there were over one hundred trillion humans inside this building, and all of them are wearing prison clothes. Three years later, there are now exactly one million, three hundred forty three thousand, nine hundred fifty one, because many of them were executed for their insolence.
The O.H.C was a big place, so it was easy to get lost. On each floor, they would have an age. So floor one would be for the one-month-old babies up to eleven-month-old babies. On the second floor, they would hold the one-year-old babies. On the third floor, they would hold the two-year-old toddlers, and so on. The whole building has one hundred and forty floors, because they had extra floors for the guards and employees. At the very bottom was the lobby, and the very top floor was the boss room. A huge slig by the name of Kill-Gun runs this place, and he sits in this room practicly all day. Let me tell you this, HE IS BAD! No human has ever set foot in this room, and no human ever will. If anyone does, they would be shot ASAP.
But life wasn’t always horrible for the humans. They have been cleaned and cared for. They even had an education system in there. But they didn’t learn about the things they were used to. They learned about Oddworld-related topics like scrabs, paramites, and many more creatures. Possibly the most horrible rule in the O.H.C is that no human was ever to go outside the building. If they would (like I said before), THEY WOULD BE SHOT.
The O.H.C itself looked like an asylum, only much more bigger and didn’t have any windows. The inside was pure, dark-blue metal that also had gears on the walls. The O.H.C’s only light supply was from some light bulbs on every floor. Some of the walls even had blood on them because of the killed creatures of Oddworld. Yes, this place is also a meat processing plant that is even more famous than Rupturefarms. The main meat processing plant was a little bit to the right of the O.H.C. A huge bridge known as ‘Major Fury’ connected it so that people could get to and from easily.
But enough about the O.H.C’s descriptions. There are two main characters in this story, and their names are Ryan Keys and Carla Davidson. By the way, they are both at the age of twelve. ‘Ryan is a love magnet.’ As others say. He has silverish-blonde hair, gray eyes, and pure white skin. His hair feels like a pillow and his breath seems to smell like freshly baked muffins all the time. Carla was a beautiful young lady. Her dark brown hair and green eyes dazzled every boy.
Now, let’s get to the story.
On a Monday in April, it was raining like mad outside. Everyone in the building couldn’t hear it because the O.H.C’s structure is very thick. As Ryan and Carla are hanging out in their cell (because they were obviously cell mates), Carla stood up from the hard, metal bench and looked at Ryan sitting in a corner.
“Ryan, I need to ask you something.” Said Carla.
Ryan had stood up as well.
“What is it?” He asked.
“I need you to tell me about the past again.” Replied Carla.
Ryan took out a huge sigh. He was pretty much the only one that knew about the past. Everyone else had completely forgot. You see, Ryan has a very good memory. He remembers how they ended up here three years ago. It is like a vivid dream to him.
“Let’s sit down.” He said.
They both sat down on the hard, metal bench and Ryan began the story.
“It all started on a beautiful sunny day back on Earth. While you were outside talking to your friends, I was skateboarding on this gear I set up on our cul-de-sac. I was trying to show off my moves to you, but you didn’t pay attention to me.
“All of a sudden, I saw a huge black figure in the sky. It looked like a UFO to me, but it was more than just that. It must have been the size to a blue whale that just multiplied its size by four. I could no longer see the sky, because it was that big. It stopped about twenty feet over my head. All of a sudden, sligs came out of the UFO like ants. All of them ambushed us. Once they had us all in a net, they threw us into the UFO. ‘That’s all of them.’ A slig told the pilot of the ship. Then the ship took off. There were lots of humans on the ship. It was so unbearable.
“We must have gone into outer space because I moved around enough to look out the window. We weren’t alone, because there were over ten thousand of these UFOs surrounding the Earth. All of a sudden, the ships fired laser beams at Earth, and then it was destroyed into tiny pieces. I must have went into tears, because everything was blurry. After the Earth was obliterated, the windows had been shut for some reason (the sligs did not want to let them know how to get to Oddworld). I had no choice but to go to sleep."
“Lunchtime!” Yelled a slig.
“I’ll tell you more later.” Said Ryan.

[sliguy101]

2-Please, tell me more

After only a moment Ryan had said that, a huge swam of Interns came rushing in with metal plates. On those plates was guck, the most common thing that is served at lunchtime. Nobody knew what was in it, and people didn’t want to know, or else they’d probably throw up. Ryan and Carla were lucky because they were nearest to the door and got served first. There was a small metal pit about three inches deep, two feet wide and six feet long. This was how the food got served. The intern put the plate into the pit and slid it to the other side. Carla got it out and set it in the middle of the cell. Ryan and Carla both sat down and started to eat.
Nobody talked, because that was another rule. No talking during Breakfast, Lunch, and Supper. If anyone did, they would get their food taken away. In about fifteen minutes, all of the interns were gone, and the whole floor was dead silent.
All of the security cameras in the cells kept a close eye on the twelve-year-olds. ‘They’re completely unexpected little brats.’ As sligs always say. Luckily, not a single child ‘Ewed’ or ‘Yucked’ the food. They’ve eaten this stuff for a while now, and they’re quite used to it, too. All of the vykers tried to tell all the humans what was in this stuff, but Kill-Gun always seemed to cut him off.
When Ryan, Carla, and the rest of the twelve-year-olds were done, they simply slid their tray onto the other side so that the Interns could pick them up and bring them to the dishwashers (which were most commonly vykers). The Interns came rushing in once again in a shortly elapsed amount of time. They now came in just as fast as ever, like locusts. Once all the plates were picked up (every Intern had about thirty to fifty dishes to carry), they carried them over to the twelve-year-old dishwashing area.
“Attention all humans.’ Said Kill-Gun in a voice box on every floor. “You runts are going to be on a job in ten minutes. Don’t get too comfortable.”
Ryan and Carla sat down once again.
“Please, tell me more.” Ordered Carla.
“Very well” Replied Ryan.
He shuffled his hands and continued on with his story.
“I was awakened by a slig, because it kicked me. ‘Wake up!’ He was yelling. I got up on my hands and knees. I found myself inside this building. Only it wasn’t in this cell. We were at the hundred thirty-ninth floor, known as the depot. I got up on my hands and knees. I was no longer in the net. Everyone was separated from me with sligs kicking everybody. ‘What is this place? Where am I?’ I kept asking him as I followed him. It was uncomfortable walking with him, because he had his gun pointing at me all the time. ‘You are in the Oddworld Human Capacity building.’ He replied.
“I was really confused. Lots of sligs were following other humans with guns as well. ‘Where am I going?’ I asked. ‘To your new home.’ The slig replied. I was thinking, ‘New home? What is he talking about?’
“Then, all of us went down an elevator, always stopping at a floor wither saying, ‘One-hundred-twenty-year-olds go here’ or ‘Eighty-one-year-olds go here’. When I finally got into my cell, I saw you in there, too. Once the slig closed the barred door, he explained everything. I guess that’s how it went down.”
“That’s very interesting, Ryan.” Carla commented. “How do you remember these things?”
“I’m unlike any other child. I am a destiny child.” Replied Ryan. He got up from the bench and held the bars of the sliding door. He could barely see any movement. "I wish I could be free, Carla.”

[odd chick]

Interesting story, Sliguy-it's very different from any fanfic I've read on here. I wish you would continue because I can't wait to see what else you write-it's that interesting. The only thing I can point out is that you used both the past and present tense to write the story when really you should've used one or the other, but other than that, it's excellent.

[sliguy101]

3-Ryan’s clever trick

“Free?” Carla yelled out.
Ryan immediately covered her mouth.
“What’s going on in there?” Asked one of the slig guards.
“Oh nothing” Replied Ryan. “She’s such a chatterbox.”
The slig walked away from their cell.
“Will you be quiet?” Asked Ryan. “You don’t need to mention that word. If anybody thinks about that they’ll be beaten!”
Carla pulled with hand away from her mouth and they both fell to the ground. They seemed to be getting into some kind of fight. They both closed their eyes in anger, when all of a sudden, Ryan found his mouth touching something. He opened his eyes as slowly as a frog would. Him and Carla found their mouths very close together.
They were kissing.
Ryan and Carla immediately got ‘unhooked’ as they called it.
“EWWWWW!!!” They both yelled out.
“Hey!” Yelled a slig as he ran over to the gate of their cell. Ryan was so angry that he slid his hand through one of the spaces of the bars, grabbed the slig’s snout and slammed his head against the hard bars. The slig fall to the stone ground, now unconscious. Luckily, all the sligs had their backs turned. Suddenly, Ryan started screaming “HELP! HELP! HELP!!!”
Three sligs ran over and saw the unconscious slig.
“What happened?” Asked one of the sligs.
“All he did was fall to the ground. I think he had a heart attack!” Replied Ryan.
“A heart attack, eh?” Said another slig. “Those are rare nowadays. C’mon men, lets get this slig to the medical center.”
All of the sligs pick up the unconscious slig and carried him to the elevator. It closed as fast as you could say ‘Thing’. As Ryan turned his back, he saw Carla with an angry look on her face. Not only that, she was panting as well.
“Let’s pretend this never happened.” Ryan suggested.
“Good idea.” Replied Carla.
“Attention all humans!” Kill-Gun announced over the voice boxes. “For the next four hours, you’ll be on duty fixing up this place. Be ready to work!”

[odd chick]

Interesting chapter, Sliguy-I liked how the slig and the kids got into the scuffle and Ryan's excuse was that he had a heart-attack! There was only one teeny little error that I noticed and it was this: "Him and Carla found their mouths very close together. " That should've been HE and Carla. Other than that, it was great as usual.
Keep it going!

[sliguy101]

4-A plan that just might work

All of the sligs used their keys to open the cells and lead separate groups of humans down the elevator, because it could only so many at a time. The work that the humans were going to do is in the back of the lobby, which the energy room. It is a giant tower that runs the gears, nuts, and bolts of the O.H.C. The tower is about ten feet bigger than the O.H.C, and it needs fixing about every six weeks. It was the job that Ryan and Carla dreaded.
I must have forgot to mention this in the beginning of the story. The humans of the O.H.C of all ages work on any job. Yes, they work no matter how young, and no matter how old. Even the newborns work. But don’t worry, their jobs are small and easy to complete. It’s the same with seniors, too.
Once all of the humans were in the tower, they got to work. The strong ones got to go higher up the tower, where all the harder work was done. They got up there by using hand-used elevators, which you would have to pull on a rope in order to raise it. Ryan and Carla working on the very base, because they have to wait three more years until they can use the elevator. That’s right. The O.H.C’s policy is that humans under fifteen may NOT use the hand-used elevator for working.
As Ryan worked, he had been cooking up some terrible thoughts in his head. ‘I can’t believe I have to do this for four hours straight. I may have done this a million times, but I still don’t like it. I know something that’ll make me happy. How about Kill-Gun commits suicide. Then, nobody will run the factory, and the humans can finally run free into the outside land known as Oddworld! Wait, that won’t work. I guess I’ll just have to escape. The question is how exactly do I get out of here?’
As Ryan was working on fixing a few gears, he looked around while thinking of a plan. After a while, something came to him.
‘That’s it!’ He thought. ‘If I could just use one of the elevators, I could dive into that hole! There, I’ll brace myself for a hard fall and get into the sewers of this place. If I follow the sewers to the end, maybe I’ll find a manhole. I’ll opened the manhole, and then I’ll finally be in the outside world!’
All of a sudden, he formed an odious grin on his face. He walked up to Carla. It seemed that she was using a wrench a little bit bigger than her to tighten the old nuts and bolts of the gears.
“Carla.” Ryan whispered.
Carla had turned around and stopped using the wrench.
“What do you want?” She asked.
“Just come with me.” Ordered Ryan.
“Why?”
“You’ll see. Just don’t say a single word until I say so, or else I’ll never speak to you again.”
Carla followed close behind Ryan. All of a sudden, Ryan yelled out, “Hey, you sligs!”
All of the sligs turned around and faced Ryan.
“Kill-Gun told me to send you guys a message.”
“What is it?” Asked the sligs.
“He said that you guys could have the day off today.”
With sligs being careless of guarding them, they cheered and ran off. Ryan and Carla walked up to an elevator.
“Help me pull on the rope.” Ordered Ryan.
Carla did as he said. They both pulled the rope, which pulled them up higher and higher every try. Once the got close to the hole on the wall, he told Carla that they both should jump in the hole on the count to three. When Ryan said three, they jumped in. They barely made it, but now they were falling at a high speed and both of them were screaming. They should be lucky the humans just worked and didn’t notice them.
“Brace yourself!” Ryan yelled to Carla.

[sliguy101]

Heh, Summer Vaction sure is kicking in.

[odd chick]

This story just continues to get more and more interesting as it goes along! I can't wait to see what is to become of Carla and Ryan! Keep this story going!