ODDWARS

STRANGEGUY · #1 04-25-2005, 07:29 PM

ODDWARS" CHAPTER 1:INTRODUCTION_FANGUS
In a place called oddworld everthing is different, its were wrong is right, wierd is normal and death is life, and its also were all the nations of oddworld will clash. In the town of "FEARROCKS" warriors are trained to fight in the last war. There lies a hero he goes by the name Fangus he never enjoys the pleasure of killing but if he has to he will. He is also one of the most fierce warriors oddworld has ever known it is said that he took on the capitol of "ZEERONG".He also is infected with rabies but when all hell breaks loose on the battelfield he would berzerk and kill ever last soul out there. But he never needed the troops on his side nothing ever mattered in the field the olny thing on his mind was survival.

to be continued.............

Kimon · #2 04-25-2005, 07:32 PM

Sounds like a nice story, but you'll have to fix a lot of the grammar problems, i.e. spacing after a period, capitalizing the "F" in Fangus, and adding to readablility through indenting and new paragraphs. Sorry if that sounds harsh, but bad grammar makes the stuff really hard to read. Spelling too.

mudling · #3 04-25-2005, 07:55 PM

sounds pretty good.
oddwars episode VIII: munch:"abe i am your farther!" (sorry, couldn't help it! the name just sounds a bit like starwars, nothing wrong with that though.)

Abe16 · #4 04-25-2005, 07:55 PM

Yeah, like Kimon said, you have to fix some grammar. Besides the bad grammar, nice story!

STRANGEGUY · #5 04-25-2005, 08:56 PM

star wars-odd wars
damn it does i might have too fix that

General Dripikk · #6 04-25-2005, 09:08 PM

I think Odd wars is a good title. Here's something funny,
Princess Jula: I love you!

Abe: I love you to,
Just like Han solo in episode 5.

kjjcarpenter · #7 05-07-2005, 06:02 AM

Sounds cool, whens chapter 2 heres a good name Chapter II:Attack of The Fangus
Couldnt help myself