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01-31-2005, 02:46 PM
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Oddworld Haikus

This might be fun.
If you don't know what a Haiku is, it's a short (3 lines) japanese style poem that doesn't rhyme.
example=
Frog hops
water splashes
water is calm

Okay here's my oddworld one=

Abe speaks
Mudokon walks
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01-31-2005, 02:53 PM
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Actually a haiku is a Japanese poem with 3 lines with the first line 5 syllables, the second like 7 syllables, and the third line 5 syllables again. Nice try though.

Oh, and are you trying to make like a contest thing? 'Cuz if so I'll try to think of a haiku.
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01-31-2005, 03:50 PM
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Here's one. It's just a random one that I thought up.

Munch swims gracefully,
and he finds a dark tunnel.
He wonders what's there.
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01-31-2005, 04:32 PM
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You're right Kimon, should have listened better in english last year I guess. :P
Ya sure, how about its a contest.
Keep dem haiku's comin.
And nice one odd chick.

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S'Okay Under-Foot. I'll do one now:

Abe saves his brothers
They are now chanting at home
There are more out there
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01-31-2005, 10:06 PM
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That's a good one, Kimon. And thanks for the compliment, Under-Foot!
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01-31-2005, 11:07 PM
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Under foot, I thought you were Alcar because of your avatar! XD
Heres a crack at one from moi...

Munch lost his brothers,
Now he must raise his species,
Now wish him good luck.

(Lazy last line, I didn't know how to conclude it )
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02-01-2005, 04:38 AM
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Ya I guess I should change my avater, I'm new to these forums so I didn't really know who had what.

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You have as much rite to it as Alcar. It wouldn't be on the list if you couldn't.
I did 2:

Greeters block Abe's path.
Unlucky slig gets possessed:
Greeters all go boom.


Abe sneaks silently
But noise wakes slig; Abe is shot.
Good job I Quiksaved
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02-01-2005, 11:35 AM
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Erm, I had a go

In the boiler room
Abe turs the power weel off
Ruptre Farms stops dead

and another go...

The birds form portals
The mudokons jump right through
Abe has rescued them. (Lame line)
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02-02-2005, 11:29 AM
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ndeed he has! Nice ones smell
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Stranger caught a Skunk
Then he killed the Looten Duke
and got some money

Abe farts on a stage
Big Face pushes him off
Three wierdo's come

Munch just broke some eggs
Abe was mad and possesed him
Then he blew Munch up!
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02-02-2005, 04:24 PM
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Ha ha! I really like your last one, Fuzzle Guy. Good haikus, everyone!
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cool haikus

Abe was caught by sligs
What on earth was he to do?
Why escape of course!
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stranger sees bad guy
stranger take out his gun and...
BOOM! no bad guy now

or

Mudokons work hard
Abe frees all the mudokons
Mudokons happy
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Maggog on the March
News to let you take a snooze
I'm your host Slig Greg
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Those are awesome

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Abe rolls into rock
He is mad and cusses bad
Abe keeps on rolling

Corney, I know
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Abe dropped dead once
a slig came along
he ate little abe
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:
Abe dropped dead once
a slig came along
he ate little abe
That has 4 syllables, then 5, then 5 again. Nice poem though.

Stranger bags bounties
He goes to the bounty store
Then he gets moolah
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Abe ran from a slog
He then possed him
And did the CanCan
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Scrabs screach out loudly.
Abe wanders into their land.
They begin to chase.
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Paramite climbs web
Calls to other paramite
They climb together
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A scrab dies painfully
and a fleech eats him
and slurg eats the fleech
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Abe-a-gogo is
A pretty funny name
For Oddworld: Abes Game

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Abe-a-gogo is
A pretty funny name
For Oddworld: Abes Game

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That's really cute, Super Munch!
Paramites scatter
About the vast, dark forest.
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Wha? Whats cute about it? I was commenting on the fact that Abe-a-gogo is a rather funny name. Thanks for the compliment though :P
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I meant it was cute in a sort of funny and strange way. Oh, nevermind...
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Mudokons are cute
They are not there for eating
There normal creatures

*sigh* That's actually really lame

I write lame haikus
I won't get better at them
Oh well tough, I'll live
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