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02-05-2004, 06:10 AM
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Oddworld Ultimate Sligs-Chapter 1 (In progress)

I decided to leave another taster of the up-coming fan fic, in fact when its done I might post the entire story...until then; I havent removed much gramatical or layout errors yet so dont think it will look like this in the end, also it may undergoe several reworks (as it already had).



Chapter 1: It is time
-Secure Chamber, Secret Level, Slig Barracks-
-3 days after the destruction of Rupture Farms-
Eba lay asleep, curled in a ball on the floor of his small metal chamber. It was a small room, a few metres in length and width, with a metal door through which food was given. This was all Eba knew. Eba had never seen beyond his rusted chamber, or out of the food flap, in fact he would have known nothing of any other life if the guard at his door did not talk to him regularly, although without being visible at all. He probably would have thought that the food was given by nothing, it just was there.
He had just had another ‘trip’. Every week Eba was given a special food, a kind of purple jelly. After eating it he would fall asleep, and when he awoke he would have a mark on his arm. The guard at the door said that was from the ‘in-jekk-shons’ whatever they were. He said that the jelly made Eba tired, and that when he slept the ‘Dokk-tors’ came and gave him his ‘Stare-oids’. Eba did not understand most of these words, but he didn’t think about it. In fact, he didn’t think about much. He had spent maybe two decades in his chamber, never seeing anything, and not thought about it at all.
“Hey! Eba!” Eba raised his head groggily and rubbed the needle mark in his arm. “Wha…what?” Eba pushed himself up and crawled across to the door. “What’s going on?” still drowsy from the drugs. “Good news buddy!” said the door guard “Today’s the day you join the rest of the barracks!” This woke Eba up with a start. Ever since the door guard had taught him to speak, and he had learned a little bit about his surroundings, he had always wanted to be with the rest of his kind, in the mainstream barracks. This is one thing he had thought about, why wasn’t he with the others his age, training to destroy the evil tribe’s people, and keep them under control in the amazing world saving factories owned by the Glukkons. His information source was slightly biased. “General Dripik sent a personal message requesting you!” This was big, really big! General Dripik himself. Eba didn’t know much, but he did know that Dripik was the owner of the illustrious Slig-Barracks! “When will you bring me there? Will it take long?” Eba crawled around in circles with excitement, its not he could much else after all. “Well? When will you take me there?” he repeated unable to hide his excitement. There was a pause, then a sigh from beyond the door. “…I’m gonna miss you little guy…” said the door guard quietly. “You’re not coming to?” Eba asked puzzled. “Hehehe” the door guard laughed, but still sounded sad, “You don’t need a door guard anymore, you’re gonna be trained, special like. You’ll be well able to guard yourself” Eba’s excitement turned to confusion. “Where will you be?” Eba stopped crawling around and leant his head on his arms. “Ah, after these new events at Rupture farms…” of which Eba knew nothing “…and my ‘outstanding guard work over the years’ I’m being added to a new crack anti terrorist force.” Eba knew he should feel happy for the door guard, getting a new and special post, but he didn’t. He felt angry, and betrayed. “But you’re the only Slig I know! How can I go without you?” He banged his fist on the door “How!?” No answer came from the corridor, only another sigh. “I’ve been told to give you this message; Use the well and wait for someone to come and collect you.” There was a cranking sound behind Eba, and he turned to see a circular hatch, which he had oddly never noticed before, opening outwards. When hatch was fully open, there was a whooshing sound from the hole it had revealed, and tiny rust flakes blew from it and floated to the ground. “…I guess that your ride little guy, and I guess this is goodbye…” Eba crawled slowly towards the well. “When my trainings done I’ll come find you, and then we can see each other, face to face. I promise!” Another sad laugh came from beyond the door “I look forward to it, Eba. I’ll be waiting.” The sound of the door guard’s footsteps faded as quickly as they had begun. Eba hung his head after he could hear no more and crawled closer to the well. He peered down and couldn’t see past the dark first bend. He didn’t like the look of it at all. He began backing away when a sudden gust of air blew rust flakes right into his eyes. He yelped and toppled head first down the chute, and with a whooshing sound, was sucked around the bend.
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02-06-2004, 09:17 AM
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02-07-2004, 03:53 AM
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haha. Fine, I'll post chapter two...but I might not post any more...and this is even less reworked than the first so dont expect any good stuff:
(and I'm not gonna include a picture yet)

Chapter 2: Revelation
-Slig Barracks, Central Rookie Chamber-
-5 minutes later-
Echoed screams came from the mouth of the well at the other end, and Eba hurtled out, up into the air, and landed a few metres away on the ground with a loud thud. He woke up after a few minutes, rubbed his head and pulled himself up. His vision was slightly blurred, but he could make out everything around him. He was in a small room, not unlike his cell…in fact it was exactly like his cell. ‘I must’ve fired the wrong way somehow’ Eba thought. He heard a creak and a sudden clang as the well’s lid closed behind him, and a clunk as it locked itself. He paused and then decided to shout for someone to open the door. “HELLO!?” he yelled “IS ANYONE THERE!?” he stopped for breath “I THINK I’M LOCKED IN!” The cell door gave a hissing sound, as steam shot from its sides. It then slid upwards. Eba had always assumed that the cell doors were hinged, but obviously not. As the steam cleared, a shape came into view. Eba guessed it was a Vykker, although he had never seen one before, he was right. The Vykker stood at the doorway, behind him was a very elegant corridor with paintings and statues of Glukkons and Vykkers on either side. The walls and floor were still made of the same creamish-brown metal, but the floor at least had a red carpet down the middle. “…So this is what the outside of my cell looks like” gawped Eba. “Not quite.” said the Vykker “we merely replicated your living quarters at this end of the pipe to help you grow accustomed to your new surroundings at a faster rate, and make you feel secure.” Eba stared puzzled, he had never heard those long words before, and he had certainly never heard any accent other than the croaky one of the door guard’s. This accent fit very well with the surrounding paintings and statues. The Vykker saw the Eba didn’t understand what he had just said. “…let me put it another…more simple…way; we made a copy of your cell to make you feel at home. Understand?” Eba nodded quickly. “Don’t say much, do you?” laughed the Vykker. Eba shook his head. He didn’t know what to do or say, and decided to just stay quiet. “I have been told you have been given a real name by 335634DG6? Who is soon to become 0034EA-T1?” Eba stared blankly again. “Your door guard? Who’s becoming an Elite Anti-Terrorist?” Eba thought for a second and then said “Oh, you mean Eba. My name is Eba…sir!” The Vykker laughed as Eba attempted a salute and fell to the ground. “No need for that…Eba. Come along, the new recruits will want to see you.” Eba got up, and crawled after the Vykker, who moved surprisingly fast. “What do I call you?” Eba panted, as they reached the door after a short but very fast walk. “…Doctor Mort” he replied. The doors slid open. Eba’s eyes took a few seconds to adjust to the light, but when they did he gasped. Thousands and thousands of crawling Sligs waited in this cavern, down some steps. When they saw Eba they all roared and cheered. Eba was almost deafened by the screams of the crowd, as Dr Mort led him to the edge of the top step, looking down upon the crowd. The doctor raised his hands slowly and the crowd stopped making noise. “SLIGS OF THE NEW GENERATION!” He shouted, surprisingly loud “YOU ARE GATHERED HERE TODAY, NOT ONLY TO BE TRAINED AS NEW SOLDIERS OF THE MAGOG CARTEL…” He paused dramatically as the crowd cheered again “BUT TO WITNESS, AND TRAIN ALONGSIDE, THE NEW FULLY GROWN SUPER-SOLDIER!” The crowd became even more deafening. Eba started to feel slightly worried. “HE HAS BEEN KEPT OUT OF CIRCULATION FOR MANY YEARS...” He paused again “SO HE COULD FULLY GROW, AND THEREFORE IS MUCH OLDER THAN ANY OF YOU HERE TODAY…BUT HE DOES NOT APPEAR MUSCULAR LIKE ANY BIG-BRO, OR SMALL LIKE ANY FLYER. OH NO, THE CHEMICALS PUMPED INTO HIM HAVE CAUSED ANOTHER DIFFERENCE, ONE WHICH YOU CAN ALL RECOGNIZE…” He beckoned Eba to come into view of the crowd “HE HAS BECOME A STRONG GREEN COLOUR!” he motioned his arms towards Eba and the crowd roared. Eba looked at all the Sligs, a writhing mass of green-tinged yellow. He then looked at his own arm, which was fully and un-mistakably bright green. What?…this didn’t make sense, he was kept out circulation for years, and his arm was green, surely that didn’t mean…he was the Super Soldier! His head began to spin, the crowed began to blur and the sound became a loud piercing screech. Eba clutched his head and collapsed, he then blacked out.

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are you gonna make a new topic for every chapter?
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WHAT! What du you mean by "but I might not post any more".
That just means that you started a story without finishing it???
Your story is good, when will you post more!!????
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02-08-2004, 03:27 AM
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Ferill: No I'm not going to make a new topic for each chapter (seeing as there are two chapters in this topic ) maybe for every two chapters, and to T-nex: In my other topic I explained that this would have its place at the necrum story stone, but I decided to post some here, and I may continue to. Btw I havent just stopped, I'm actually on chapter 4 at the moment.

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