Ok here is one more problem with this chapter (And the other 2). Capitals are for beginings of sentances and proper nouns only. You don't seem to have much grasp on that. I haven't read all of it but you appear to need a better eduacation on the english languge (and I've probrably spelt that wrong which is kind of stupid-looking.). I'm sorry but people prefer stories where capitals and good english are used. This may vary in various contries where the languge is different. Again I apologize but I'm just not interested in this story.
Edit: So sorry if I offended you. And if you make a mistake you can edit it by using the edit button. And I've just proved it as you can see.