Why do you keep saying these aren't very good if they are great!? Cool poems alpha..:)
~Danielle... |
Brillient Alpha! I, once more, agree with 89da11. Those poems are the best I've ever read! Honest! I like the mild humour in them, and the thing with the colours to spell words like 'love' and 'you'.... Really touching :). Keep it up. ;)
Oddchick P.S. Thanx for voting for me on that irritating poll in the General Oddworld Descussion. It's appreciated :) |
Gee thanks guys, erm... gals... and no problem about the voting thing :D
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Alpha, I'm only speaking the truth about your poems, they are good... Really they are... Alot better than mine...:fuzsmile: *goes to read all of Alpha's poems again*
Oh and heres another rubbish poem.. Together Together, We've shared everything, That life has brought our way, Together we shared, Dreams and plans. Walked side by side each day, And my heart is filled, With love for you, Far more than words can say. ____________________________ That was bad.. ~Danielle.. |
O_O !!! Whoa Danz! That's freakin' BRILLIANT!!!!!1 Best I have ever seen you do....anyone here do...Man, I wish I could do poems like that! *Oddchick goes green with envy* Well done.
Oddchick P.S. Quit saying your poems are rubbish, I find it incredably irritating! |
Thanks Odd, I didnt think it was that good, but yeah I'll stop saying my poems are crap now...
~Danielle... |
HI all, I'm back with anuther poem...
The only thing is, I couldn't find a proper thread for it to put it in, the dark-poems are too evil, and mine is just.. Well, you'll see... HOLE... My life is empty I feel like sh*t I wanna end it now I'm a total misfit. My life, full of scars I feel like a black hole, amongst the shining stars. My life's a ruin A ruin, full of cr*p Walking down the stairs not watching where I step I think, I'm gonna end my wars I'm like a black hole, amongst the shining stars. I'm staring through the window to the night outside I'm too depressed got nowhere to hide It's like, a life behind iron bars I am a black hole, amongst the shining stars... Sooo.... That's about it. Gosh, that's the longest poem I've ever wrote... As you might have noticed, I'm extremely depressed when I'm writing this, thinking about all the sad things in my life, and all the sad things in the world, and about the fact that love hurts... So much for now, hope y'all like it. And if not, I couldn't care less... EDIT: I don't know if you have seen it, but those words which are red form a sentence... The first 1 is 'Love is all you need.' and the second one is 'Life sucks.'... Soo... There you have it... |
Awww! That was a really good poem Alpha. Don't be depressed! *Hugz Alpha 'til he goes pop*. Even though my view of your life is very unclear, I can tell that you have nothing to be depressed about. You are a great guy Alpha, really. Talk to us about it, man.
Oddchick |
Don't be depressed,*hugs Alpha*
~Danielle.. |
wow danz! they are some beautiful poems ya got there!!!! keep up the good work!!!!!
i hope ya get better alpha, dont be depressed all the time, and ya got meh to kick around! |
Aww thanks guys, this really means alot to me... :D
well, back to reality now.. Cya |
Thank you Ferill about the poems, but I know you don't mean that..:fuzsmile:
~Danielle xxx |
i do mean it really!!!!!! hehe, i'm not that anti-girly
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Right, okay, but thanks about the poems anyways....:fuzsmile:
Here's another poem: My Special Love You wait you entire life, For that special love, Then it is unreachable. Perhaps because of fear, Perhaps because of circumstances, Or perhaps because of love itself. The special love that leaves An emtpiness within you, If you cannot hear the other person's voice, But that makes you feel whole again, With one special hello. Oh my special love, Please come to me, My special one please hold me, And tell me this Is not all for nothing. _____________________________ Okay, ummm I personally don't think that was very good. ~Danielle... |
good, good...was it...inspired by something...?
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Thank you Ferill, and to answer your question, I'll say I don't know, as I really can't be bothered to type.:D hehe
~Danielle... |
Okay..I don't have any gosh darn clue why I haven't seen anybody in a while..... I guess I was just surfing too much other places.....oh well.....whatever the heck's going on...I got an idea.
I Love You. Why don't I tell you? You know I follow you around all the time. My eyes feist apon everything about you, girL So now I say that you are great, Love is the answer, babe, So tell me nOw, tell me, Do you love me? A Ventruiliquist can test your mind, and tell mE about your thoughts, and now I know, and You know we love each Other. I Love U. I suck at poems. EDIT1: HOLY CR*P!!!! THAT WAS AN AWESOME POEM, BLUE. AND THE OTHER ONE...WHY ARE ALL MY FRIENDS BETTER THAN ME IN POETRY??? YOU ROCK 'N' ROLL FROM THE EIGHTY'S, BLUE!!!!!!(89DA11) Edit2: Evry1...stop this nonsense at once...no, not the thread...not the replies...no....I mean...evry1's gotta stop saying that they suck. I mean, jeez. show a little graittitude in ureself, I mean, come on, really. I still suck at poems, though. I said evry1...not myself, though. ;) |
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Hey, nice poem, Danz.... Oh, ferill....I see you have taken an interest in the thread :). Although, I noticed that you have only commented on Danz's poems, none of mine. I have come up with a number of plausable reasons for this: 1) You haven't seen the whole thread, asd most of my better poems are much more farther up. 2) You thought they were very igneramic (is that a word?), therefore choosing not to comment on their cr*ppiness. 3) You couldn't be bothered to read them, therefor having no comment. 4) You just....didn't comment for various reasons above. (j/k) Anyways, I have created another poem for your pleasure, or rather, displeasure.... Right, here goes: I stand and wait Alone by the river, I stand and wait, By the setting sun, I know you're late. As the clouds gather, The lightenning streaks, And a tear falls, Down my cheak. As darkness falls, I gaze over the lake, My eyes tire, As my heart breaks. I spend my life Waiting for you, I used to love you, And you loved me too. But now I stand, all alone. I go from love to hate, And in the darkness, by the river, I stand alone and wait ___________________________ Oddchick |
Wow, great poems all...You'se far better than me...
Anywayz keep up the good work : D |
Good poem Odd.. That poem reminds me of that song, what was it called? *runs away in fear of getting slapped*
~Danielle... |
holy crap...Odd-Chick...out of all ppl...copywrited a friekin' song?
LoL! Odd friekin' copywrited a song??? Holy cr*p! hahahahahaha! Wait till "The Daily Prophet" sees this! "GIRL NAMED ODDCHICK FROM ODDWORLD FORUMS COPYWRITES A FRIEKIN' SONG TURNED INTO POEM!!!" Okay...now odd's mad. *Gets the heck away from OddChick*... BY THE WAY...GO TO OFF-TOPIC AND READ MY ONE POST CALLED "MAKE FUN OF SINGERS YOU HATE(NOW'S THE CHANCE!!!)" but it's not in caps-lock. GO SEE IT(and hopefully reply to it making fun of (a) singer(s) you hate).
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-_- :lol: Abegun....Relax, I did not copy the song....I just used the idea, anyway, I like the singer. If you must know, it was from Avril Lavigne's "I'm with you". The first lines go:
"I'm standing on the bridge, I'm waiting in the dark, I thought that you'd be here, By now." Is that coppying to you!? :
Oddchick |
oh...that's right...Anvil....erm...sorry...Avril Lavigne rocks! also...what's the p*ss? say it in full-form...and english...please.
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Oddchick |
Well, here's another poem that I wrote...
When you enter the room I suddenly go still I keep looking at you against my will... I wanna feel the warmth of your love Walking under the stars in the skies above... I'm thinking about you all the time Constantly wondering how to make you mine... Your long brown hair, your pretty blue eyes You look as yummy as a pair of apple pies... When you laugh at me, I laugh back helplessly I get all warm when you sit next to me... Your pretty smile, your gentle touch You know, I love you very much... But you only see me as a friend It's not the kind of love that I meant... I wish the love was mutual Cuz I still think you're a great gal... Whadda ya think? |
Great poem Alpha! I really mean that... :fuzsmile:
~Danielle.. |
Awwwwww, that was really sweet Alpha! :) Really touching, oh and of course, exellent. You keep up the brillient work, man. It's nice to see that you're feelin' better :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :).
Oddchick |
Gee thanks u 2...
though I think the last line sucks... But I couln'd find a word that rhymes with mutual... |
No problem Alpha, and it was still a great poem.. Anyways, here is another poem..
That Is Love. I love you like I have loved no other. You may ask how I know I am in love, Well let me tell you what love is. When I am holding you in my arms, I feel content and peaceful, That is love. When we are together, I want to be nowhere else, That is love. When I do anything for you, Just to see you smile, That is love. When you are sad, I make you happy, That is love. When tears come to my eyes, When I think of you and her, That is love. When we kiss, And the world stands still, That is love. I love you. You are the one thing that can always make me happy. You know I love you, And yet you play games with my heart. I know you do not mean it, But each time you do it my heart grows weaker. ____________________ What did you think, I would like to know.. ~Danielle.. |
wow... just... wow... ain't got no words for that... i can can really identify myself with that 1... though her, in the 6th verse, should be him, in my case...
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