The answer to does everyone have to copy me is... Yes:D Hehe..
I agree with the fact that this thread is going well, it has 60 posts! Well that could change.. |
Sad, voilent, and romantic.
You, Me, Him and the Beatings I hold you tight, On those lovely nights, But the next day, It doesn't go the way, That you planned. What you did to me? Aband. Find him. It turns bloody. I can't believe this is getting so muddy. The way you are, it doesn't seem true. You cheat on me and this guy beats you. Now you're dead because of them all. The beatings he gave you made you take the fall. __________________________________________ Basically about a man who had a girlfriend that cheated on him. The man she was secretly with beats her to death when she would usually be at work if she hadn't even cheated on him. |
Another poem i see, hmmm not bad.. Not my style, oh well good poem AG
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Very nice, Abe-gun......not quite as romantic as many of the other poems here, but what the hey, well done!:) I do have one comment (If this sounds completely stupid, it's because I have probably read the poem worng, or just talking rubbish like I usually do :p ), Why would a woman have an affair with someone who beats her up? Strange world....
Keep up the great work, AG. Oddchick |
Well I dont know odd, and really, I dont care, no offence or anything AG..
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Right, 89da11....Oh by the way, 89da, I like your signature, very kool. Here is another peice of work, I thought I's try something that is (hopefully) funny.
You there! In your underwear, You said you wanted me.. Oh man...I need a pee... Listen, you asked me out, Come closer, I don't want to shout. Anyway, you want to win my heart? Well, first promise that you wont f*rt. And if I were to care for you, You would often esscort me to the loo. It's not just that, It's how you act. Now trust me, that's a fact, Class is what you mustn't lack. So now you have it, Mr Man, And, if you dont mind, I'm off to Milan. __________________________________________ I wouldn't call that funny, more stupid. Hehe, oh well :) Oddchick |
Yeah odd, stupid, not funny, just plain weird, well from my signature I am weird, oh who cares! And thanx odd about my signature...:D But non the less, good poem..
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i cant really write these sort of things..but anyway
if there ever was a girl it be you my love, so very true i see your lovely face.. i need to have a trace..of you HE-EH! It was horrible wernt it??? |
No, that was quite good for a first try... Good work! Besides, my poems a rubbish anyways..
~Danielle |
I agree with 89da11, that poem was very good, Reptile. Hey Reptile, have you seen the poems that I have written farther up in the thread? They're not as bad as the last on I did....
C'mon Guys, if you have poems, don't be afraid to post 'em! Oddchick :fuzwink: |
Im afraid to post, you keep quoting me! *runs away*
~Danielle |
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Anyway, has anyone got anymore poems? You guys got anymore poems? Here is another one of my invention, it's not very romantic, it's kinda about a girl who isn't having much luck in love, it's entitled dear Morgan because I like the name. Here goes : Dear, Dear Morgan Dear, Dear Morgan, please don’t be blue, As it only makes me feel blue, too. Dear, Dear Morgan, please don’t cry, Don’t you worry, you will find the right guy! Dear, Dear Morgan, please don’t feel sad, Wait patiently now, you’ll find the right lad. Dear, Dear Morgan, I try to understand, And I’m always here, to offer a helping hand. Dear, Dear Morgan, I’ll be there for you, Through hard times and sadness, we’ll see it through. Oddchick |
Nice poem odd, but really, stop quoting me! *runs into a wall* Ow, now I'll ask you nicely, please stop quoting my every post..:flames:
~Danielle... |
Wow alot of these poems are really good, and some of them are just weird. i just wish that i found this thread last month (d'oh).
But any way here's one of my own poems. Hope you like it. I watch the T.V You listen to the radio I play games you play music I eat chocolate You eat fruit But the most important thing is You talk and I listen |
Nice poem... Good work, keep writing them! Maybe I should write some more poems, no can't be bothered...
~Danielle... |
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2) If I do quote you, it's because I find you have a point, etc. 3) What's there to get so worked up about? Hey Nath, cool poem, man.... Anymore poems, guys? *Looks directly at Kai and 89da11* :p Oddchick |
*shrugs shoulders* Ummm no more poems for now anyways..
~Danielle... |
hmmm, i think i have another....
i dont know where i went wrong i was only there to hold you before you left for the skies you were very bouncy..like a rubber bong i loved you so very true i love paramite pies!!!! |
Nice work, Reptile! Here is another poem of my own invention:
Only An Angel The church bells ring, Oh, what hope they did bring, On this glorious day in May, It would be, planned out and booked, our happy wedding-day But now the plan, Changed there and then, For terrible happenings came, Another angel heaven, had unrightly gained. As the funeral procession went by, Hope was to die. As the church rang its bell, My lover was...nothing more than an angel. Pretty stupid....It doesn't really make sense.... Oh well, I'll try harder next time. Oddchick |
I suck at poems, but I'll give it a try...
Don't laugh.. The sun is Green, The grass is BLue. I'm F*cking StOned, But I loVE You... Like I said, I suck at poems |
You think your poems are bad? Look at mine! Hehe, good poem, especially if that was your first one on this thread..
~Danielle... |
Well Thank u, thats very friendly of you : )
I wish I could come up with better poems than that |
Your poems are quite good... Im not just saying that!;)
~Danielle... |
Hey, cool poem, Alpha. I liked that, I really did, and amazingly, I thought the explicit language suited it :D. Write some more! :)
Oddchick |
Oooops forgot to comment on Odd's poem, it did make sense, well the way i read it.. Hehe:) Keep writing more poems, they are good..
~Danielle... |
Awwwww, thanx Danielle! *Hugz 89da11*. Your poems are good, too! Write some more, 89da11.
Oddchick |
erm.. okay, I'll give it anuther go...
Lemme think The warmth in your heart, the sun in your eyes, Hair as a river, shining under the skies, I dunno what's wrong with me, My mind's like a dove, Hey, I really like this, I think I'm in love... Come to think about it, I thought about a poem much like this when I was in love with this really cool girl in my class... I'm glad she is one of my closest friends now... |
Brillient, Alpha! You are a natural! Great work....I demand more! Hear me!!! (:lol: )
Oddchick |
Nice poem Alpha, keep writing them poems!
~Danielle... |
Puh. Here we go again...
BTW, aren't they a bit short? Love is a hand on your shoulder, when you need it the most. Or a bandaid on you knee, when you knock into a post. Letting a friend spill his guts to you, when he really needs. Being rescued by your Prince, on one or two white steeds. and anuther 1 Love's a bird, love's a bee A nice gesture, a warm cuppa tea. The flowers in the field, Pups drinking moms milk A warm and cozy feeling, like you're all wrapped in silk. A summer night, a winters day Lying in the sun, on a large stack of hay. With friends on a holiday, and in the van en route These are the feelings, what love's all about. |