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Biggy Bro Slig 06-30-2005 06:42 AM

The Terrible Truth
 
I slumped on the floor in the lonely hut.
I was pondering how in Odd’s name I was going to Fix Chunky.
A rather un-usual file crammed with paprer in it distracted me.
I walked over to it.
I opened it up.
I pulled out the sheets.
It said:
Spoocemining & Co, Kronk Mcblaster gang and Humanoid Foundries have all joined the Monosaic Battle Council.

Spoocemining- Selling Chrystals for Mullah for The Monosaic Battle council.

Kronk Mcblaster Gang- Forcing Companies and Gangs to join The Monosaic Battle army.

Weapon Federation- producing weapons for the MBC.

Humanoid Foundries- Producing Robo-lice and more Advanced battle droids.

$100,000 for Training Land.
$200,000 for 100,000 droids.
$500 for 200 Spoocebows.

Signed,
Syrom, Tyronus and Scrutter.

Well, the note was alarming enough, but what made it worse was the name Scrutter.
Scrutter filled anger into my heart.
I thought the gang had taken care of the Guru, but somehow, he had come back.
Well, I new Chunky owned Spooce Mining & co, And Kronk Mcblaster I had encounted him before I new the Guru. But I never would of Guessed That the Humanoid Foundries were with Syrom.
The Humanoid Foundries were a big hit with the Army. The created Robotic Humans educated in Combat. They were really Clever, and great Strategists.
But one day, something went wrong with their Brains, and, they got smart enough to wonder why they had to Battle for Armies. Then they turned on their Slig Generals, and they then scattered away, leaving The Humanoid Foundries scattered and they were never seen again.
Well that explained a lot. No wonder they didn’t re-appear. They were under command of The Guru.
I folded the Papers into my belt-pouch.
I then went back on how to fix Chunky.

Munch's Master 06-30-2005 08:08 AM

Hmm, interesting. So is the Guru returning? I hope so, he was a great bad guy. Just 2 questions:
1) Who is Kronk McBlaster?
2) How are there humans/humanoids on Oddworld?

Biggy Bro Slig 06-30-2005 09:29 AM

Well, I started a story called Smog's oddventure, which he was the main badguy. I then quit the htread on OWF, and am still writing it now.

Humanoids are creatures with Two arms and two legs. So they don't acttually have to be human. They are Robotic Mudokon like droids.

Munch's Master 07-01-2005 10:50 AM

Ah right, ta for clearing that up. Could you give a link to Smog's Oddventure, and will it ever be finished, and was Biggy Bro Slig in it, and where there any other characters from this series in it? A lot of questions I know, but i had a lot to ask. :D

odd chick 07-01-2005 03:16 PM

Cool chapter, BBS. ;) Humanoids, huh? Sound neat! And I was wondering whatever happened to Smog's Oddventure, but now I know! :D

Biggy Bro Slig 07-02-2005 01:17 AM

The Fight for Freedom
 
I heard a loud thump.
And another.
I turned around, and went out of the hut.
There was an Outlaw, with an Oktigi sucking on it.
“Show me where Syrom is.” The Oktigi asked.
I looked over the edge.
“Down there.” I said, pointing to the rock he was lying on.
Sekto peared over.
“He is dead?” Sekto asked.
“I killed him.” I answered.
“Exellent. Now I can use this land to build on! Then I shall use the Industrialists to work for me!” Sekto bellowed.
“Never!” I screamed.
Sekto pulled out a sword.
I pulled out mine, knowing if I was against him, I would die.
Sekto tried to stab me, but I rolled out the way.
I jumped up, hit Sekto on the head, and was about to stab him when a huge brown foot went flying into me.
I was kicked into a hut.
I pulled out a pistol.
I fired, and re-loaded.
The bullet hit Sekto, but it bounced off, sending it straight back to me.
I took a step back, into two Gloktigi.
They glared at me.
They kept on spitting Webbing at me.
The webbing hit me.
I struggled to get out.
I wiggled a little, but it didn’t brake free.
Just as I was about to be stabbed by a huge claw, I broke free.
I rolled away, and chopped the Gloktigi’s claws off.
It screeched, and fell to the floor.
The smell of Gloktigi blood wasn’t pleasant.
I rolled towards the other Gloktigi.
I stabbed it in the Stomach.
Hot acid poured out, which moulded into webbing.
I ran towards Sekto.
“You may have killed them, but not me.” Sekto said.
I pulled out a missile launcher.
I launched.
The missile went into Sekto, pushing him back.
He hit the floor.
I ran up to him.
“Now sekto, tell me how to get Tyronus back.” I growled.
“Gloktigi webbing.” He panted, looking at the acidic webbing.
I walked towards it.
I pulled out the vomit gun 1000.
I loaded it up into the gun.
I walked back to Sekto.
“Now what?” I asked.
“Glue your friend back together.” He gasped.
I walked into the hut, and glued the pieces together.
Suddenly, Chunky dissapeared, and Tyronus appeared.
“Traitor.” I mumbled under my breath.
“So what have you done while I’ve been in Solid Space?” Tyronus chuckled.
I didn’t answer.
“Now to save Monty.” I said.
“Only one problem.”
“What?” I asked.
“I killed him.” He said.
“And what does that mean?” I asked.
“I can’t come with you. And besides, it’s Grunt next.” Tyronus said.
“I killed Syrom and he killed Grunt so Grunt is alive.” I answered.
“You idiot! If I ever turned away from you, I wouldn’t have a boss!” The Stroppy General barked.
“What about Scrutter?” I said, smiling.
Tyronus stopped still.
He clicked his fingers
We dissapeared.

Munch's Master 07-02-2005 01:58 AM

Ooh, interesting! So will they all be saved? And I still ask: What happened to Marty and Timothy, Richey and Monty's near-doubles. Will they survive?

Biggy Bro Slig 07-02-2005 02:44 AM

I cant really remeber how they died, but I might bring them back in the last story.

odd chick 07-03-2005 08:20 AM

Nice chapter...things are coming together very well in this story! ;)

Biggy Bro Slig 07-04-2005 07:17 AM

Who's laughing now?
 
We re-appeared in the Rocky, crumbling surface of the Arena.
Grunt however, didn’t appear.
“Where is he?” I asked the Shrykull.
“You killed Syrom. But if he wasn’t from that time, he traveled aswell. So Grunt is still dead.” Tyronus replied.
“I read some secret files while you were gone. The Guru’s back? How?” I asked him.
He looked nervous.
“Tell me!” I screamed, and pushed him against a rock.
“Spirit of the Dead. Remember how there were three weirdos? He is one of them now.” Tyronus said.
“Why do you want to kill me?” I asked the Grinning shrykull.
He pushed me back onto the floor, and had his arm on my neck.
“Revenge” Tyronus grinned.
I pushed him back.
“Why revenge?” I asked, pulling out my blood-drenched sword.
“You killed Kakulana. You killed Syrom aswell. You murderd an entire species! The Grushes only wanted land!” Tyronus said, making them sound harmless.
Killing of an entire species was a bit extreme, I said in my head.
Tyronus pulled out a sword.
“My sword has been dipped in a lot of people. And you are going to be the next!” I said.
Tyronus dived, kicked me over and he slipped up backwards.
I got up.
“I’m sure we would all like an audience when you die.” Tyronus said, getting.
He clicked his fingers.
The battle started.
Strangly, there were far more Sligs this time.
I dived; he spun round, and kicked me.
I went flying.
I jumped up, and sliced all of the general’s feet off.
He screamed, as the bone sent a chill down his spine.
He tried to stand up, but the bone snapped.
There was a cry of pain from Tyronus, and he hit the floor.
The battle stopped and turned to see the General.
I put my sword next to his heart.
“Who’s dying now?” I said, and stabbed him just below the heart.
The Shrykull’s scream was mixed with the splatter of blood.
The screaming stopped, as I dug my sword into his neck.
I pulled it out.
The battle stopped.
The Mudokons and Grubbs started retreating.
Ziggy and Slug ran up to me.
Look at the hills.
Millions and Millions of Robolice, tons of Thousands of Battle Droids marched down the hill.
“We won this battle, but the next we will lose.” Slug said, running back to the only Jeep in the Arena.
We all drove off, with tanks behind us.
“Where are we going?” I asked Slug.
“Back to the Slig Barracks. We’re going to need some reinforcements.”

Munch's Master 07-04-2005 09:25 AM

ooh, good chapter! But just 2 things:
1) Is Grunt permanently dead, as well as Chunky, Monty and Richey?
2) I'd have liked there to be more information about how the Guru became a spirit.

But still a good chapter, the Guru's a classic baddie so good work!

Biggy Bro Slig 07-04-2005 11:02 AM

Grunt, Monty & Richy can be saved, but Chunky is gone forever.
I am not telling how they are going to come back, because I have not thought any story up yet.

Munch's Master 07-05-2005 07:44 AM

LOL! Ah well, we all get brain blocks when writint a fic. Keep it up though, we demand more! :D

Biggy Bro Slig 07-08-2005 09:37 AM

A new member
 
We reached the Factory named Splinterz.
Well, what was left.
They had just finished re-building it, by the looks of it.
They must have been attacked when they weren’t ready.
Scaffolding had been knocked down, and burnt.
A slig lay underneath the Scaffolding, blood leaking through his head.
We all hopped out, and ran towards him.
His visor was glowing dark, but he was alive.
He had blood splattered all over him, from a crushed slig next to him.
We dragged him out and put him against the Jeep.
Ziggy poured some water over him.
He shook, spraying blood on us.
“What happened?” Slug asked the injured Slig.
He breathed hard. Then he looked at Slug.
“We were attacked. I was just drilling and Rolling robots came from everywhere. They shot us of the Scaffolding. Then Robot Humanoid commanders kicked over the Scaffolding. I fell off, and they burnt it.” The Slig moaned.
“What’s your name?” I asked him.
“Jick. I worked in the F Sector in Boneworkz. I was then transferred to here.” The slig moaned.
“Okay, Jick. Slug will look after you while me and Ziggy explore.” I told him.
We wondered off.
We walked towards the entrance of Splinterz.
Scaffolding had blocked of the door.
Ziggy crawled under, and stood infront of the door.
“Come on!” Ziggy answered.
The words echoed across the Warzone.
Someone would have answered if they heard that, but nobody did. So there must have been no survivers, exept for Jick.
Seems that I couldn’t get the rest of the Gang back, I could bring Jick in.
I crawled under.
The scaffolding started to fall.
The grey clowds made the right place to settle. It matched the theme of the massacare.
I rolled away, and knocked down the door into Splinterz.
I got up.
I was standing in Blood.
I reached for the lights.
They turned on.
A shiver went down my spine. Ziggy shuddered.
The building was drenched in blood.
Sligs lay on the Catwalks, blood dripping from them.
I looked around.
Not one Slig had a head.
Ziggy and I looked up.
I wished I had never of Volountered to kill the Guru now. Because I wouldn’t have seen this.
The heads were tied to the ceiling by thread, and blood was dripping from them.
Two Humanoids walked out of Splinterz office doors.
They spotted us.
Ziggy and I realised we had left all our weapons back at the jeep.
If we didn’t find a weapon quick, we would end like the rest of the sligs.
I grabbed a slig’s body, and chucked it at one of them.
Blood splattered all over its white shiny armour.
It loaded its gun.
Bullets went bouncing everywhere.
I hid behind a pile of Sligs, along with Ziggy.
I saw a slig lying with a rifle on the Catwalk.
“Ziggy! You make sure they don’t get us. I’m going to get us some guns.” I said.
I picked up a stone.
I hurled it to the Catwalk.
I bounced off, and catapulted back to me.
The object brained me.
I picked it up again, and chucked it at the Catwalk.
I chucked it to High, as it hit a head.
A slobbery Pink squishy thing fell out.
I was sitting with a brain on my lap.
I kicked it off, and it went straight into a Humanoid.
Its curcuits went up in flames, and the other Humanoid’s eyes went red.
I tried again, and knocked the slig off.
I ran for the gun.
Bullets pelted me.
I crawled for my life in pain, as I had been shot to many times.
I gave the gun to Ziggy.
I was hit by a rock, and I was nearly killed.
My vision dimmed.

Munch's Master 07-08-2005 10:24 AM

Yay! New chapter *does the new chapter dance*. Good work, nice stuff about this battle. Buv I didn't get this business of rocks on the catwak making brains fall down, could you explain what he was doing?

Biggy Bro Slig 07-08-2005 11:19 PM

A deadly foe
 
He saw a dead slig on the catwalk with a gun. He was throwing rocks to see if he could get it to kill the robots.

I woke up, amazed that I was alive.
I was lying in a thick, dark pool of blood.
Ziggy lay next to me.
“Shhhhhh…there are more.” Ziggy whispered.
I peeked over the piles of Sligs.
“They seem to be Guarding Splinterz Office.” I whispered back.
“At the count of three, I want you to throw a pebble over to the catwalk. Then Slug and Jick will throw boddies down on them. Then we run for the office.” Ziggy said.
He passed me a pebble.
I threw it, and two Humanoid Guards came rushing towards it.
Jick and Slug jumped up, piling rotting sligs on them.
They ran about the place, trying to get the bodies off, and one slipped, making its head flying towards me.
I was hit in the stomach, and I picked it up.
Its eyes were red. It started to bite me.
I yelped, and threw it into the other.
A beautiful display of fireworks filled the bloody room.
Slug and Jick climbed down off the Catwalk, and they followed us into the office.
Two Robolice were there, with their guns fixed into their sides locked on us.
“Sir, we have some survivors.” One of the Robo-lice said.
That’s a new feature.
“Very good, Coporal.” A voice said, echoing around the room.
Splinterz chair swirled around.
A tall robotic man with a black cloak on stared at me.
“Biggy Bro Slig? Is that you?” The robot asked.
I didn’t answer.
“Don’t you remember me?” The robot asked.
I shook my head.
“Rukkise, perhaps would remind you?” The robotic man smiled.
“You’re a slig though!” I said.
“Who ever told you that utter Crap? I’m a wolvark. Or I was. I would be alive if you saved me.” Rukkise screamed, banging his fist on the table.
“And Rukkise isn’t my real name either. It’s Pox.” Rukkise said.
Ziggy pulled out the machine gun.
I pulled it down.
“If you are the Commander of the Robots, then why didn’t they kill you?” I asked.
“You stupid soul. I told them to turn on the sligs. I told them to kill them. I wanted power! But then your stupid boss turned me in. That’s why I got a job as commander and changed my name to Rukkise. It was the perfect plan. And it worked! But now, I have been offered a share of Mudos once this battle is over!” Pox bellowed.
Ziggy pulled up the Machine gun again.
But this time I didn’t pull it down…

Munch's Master 07-11-2005 10:40 AM

Oh, good chapter! Sorry for not replying though. Anyway good work. Jick's recovered already? Whoever healed him did a good job! Anyway, nice work. Good twist with Rukkise returning as a wolvark, will Ziggy succeed in killing him? Can't wait!

Biggy Bro Slig 07-11-2005 01:10 PM

Traitor!
 
Ziggy's finger pressed hard down on the trigger.
Bullets went everywhere, mixing with sparks.
The two robolice whizzed around, firingn the lasers everywhere.
I pulled out my Vomit gun, which was still full with webbing.
I smiled.
I squirted the Robo-louse's guns, making it glue.
Its blasters kept on firing, but backing up the barrel.
It exploded, alerting more and another Robo-louse came in.
Jick, who was hiding behind a safe, was calculating something in his head.
“According to Slug, you killed the Guru by launching a rocket into his chest.” Jick said.
He pulled out a small pocket book.
“The guru was designed by Humanoid technicians. Making Extreme Bulletproof Humanoid robots weakest point their main air valve. If you hit him in the chest, his curcuits will back up an he’ll be useless!” Jick said, lifting up the safe he was hiding behind.
“Someones been learning their Science.” Ziggy said under his breath.
“Throw it into him!” Jick said, throwing the safe to Ziggy.
“I’m taking no Orders from no Nerd!” Ziggy retorted.
“Do it!” I screamed.
Ziggy picked it up, and throwing it into Rukkise.
He spluttered backward and landing flat on the floor.
Deep mechanical gasps came from Pox.
“Go ahead! Kill me now!” Pox gasped. “And you’ll never find out where your boss is!”
“He’s alive?” I asked.
“Yes. He’s about the only one who did!” Pox said.
“Where?” Slug asked.
Pox gasped. “Jick may find this place familiar. Boneworkz”

Munch's Master 07-12-2005 01:42 AM

Cool, good chapter. Nice stuff about Jick working out how to kill him. But who is the traitor? And when you say the boss, do you mean Splinterz? Also 1 little error I found:
:

He’s alive?” I asked.
“Yes. He’s about the only one who did!” Pox said.
It sounds a biut wrong. Maybe it should have been:

He survived?” I asked.
“Yes. He’s about the only one who did!” Pox said.
As it is more grammatically correct. But still, a good chapter!

odd chick 07-12-2005 08:45 PM

Nice chapter, BBS. I also agree with Munch's Master-it'd sound more right if it was "survived" instead of "alive". What would also work besides that is this:

"He's alive?"
"Yes. He's about the only one who is."

Anyway, it was still an entertaining chapter....ah, there's nothing like the vomit gun...:lol:

Biggy Bro Slig 07-14-2005 07:39 AM

Steel city
 
Oops. I must have meant to put Survived instead.

We had been walking for 2 hours now, and still we hadn’t accomplished anything. Exept for Ziggy and Jick were arguing.
“QUIET!” I yelled. “Look Ziggy, I’m trying to concentrate here. And Jick, I know you’re new here, but just Shut up! Ziggy, if you don’t put your act together, you’re going to be arguing for the rest of your life!”
“Why?” The Big bro slig asked.
“I’ve been thinking…We found Jick, and I thought we could welcome him into the gang?” I told him.
Jick’s face lit up.
Ziggy’s angry face turned into a sulk.
I carried on my work.
I was trying to contact Maniac. He could get us to Boneworkz much faster.
A face came up ontothe screen.
“BBS! What can I do for ya?” Maniac asked.
“Can you get us a helicoptor? We’re about five miles away from Splinterz.” I asked.
“Ok, but they’re all running out of fuel. You’ll have to stop off at my base to re-fuel.” Maniac said.
20 minutes later, a Helicoptor landed.
3 other Sligs were on board.
I jumped into the Pilot’s seat.
We took off.
In the first time in my life, I saw Oddworld’s natural area.
I saw Scrabs feasting on a dead Slig.
Ewww. It was probably a slig trying to escape from Splinterz.
The co-pilot looked shocked.
“We’ve got three animals on our tail.” The co-pilto announced.
The two pulled up beside, leaving one behind.
Two Mudokons were riding on a Stegrious. A Stegrious was an endangered flying reptile.
The mud on the right side picked up a spear.
The mud threw it like a javelin. It went through one of the Slig’s heads.
The slig fell backwards, and fell off.
The Muds pulled in closer.
The mud on the left pulled out another spear.
He fired aswell, hitting the co-pilot in the arm.
He screamed, as another slig went to take his place.
The co-pilto was dragged for medical attention.
The Mud on the right pulled in too close, and was caught in the rotor.
The one at the back pulled up onto the right side.
A ghostly figure was riding.
He smiled and waved.
I knew who that was.
The Guru.
When he said, “nobody could kill the great Guru!” I saw what he meant.
“Hold on!” I screamed.
I bashed into the Guru.
I noticed that he was a spirit as a robot, not his normal self.
The guru wobbled, and pulled out a rifle.
He whistled to the Stegrious, and aimed.
He wasn’t aiming at somebody. He was aiming at something.
I found out as a bullet went into the fuel supply.
Gas went everywhere, making everyone cover their mouths.
The helicoptor shook.
“There it is. Steel City. All we need to do is get past the borderline and the Police will shoot him down.” The co-pilot pointed out.
I pressed on the pedals harder, and we reached the border.
The Guru turned away.
We smashed to the floor, sending crowds of Sligs, Wolvarks, un-wanted Outlaws and Glukkons screaming.
A group of firemen came out of the crowds.
They started spraying.
I smashed the window so I could get out.
I looked behind me.
One of the sligs on board had fallen out, and had been stabbed by an Ariel.
The crowds looked scared as the armed Sligs got out.
They were obviously were a peaceful town.
I picked up the Vomit gun.
A slig smiled.
He walked up to me.
“You know Monty & Richy?” The Kid asked.
“Yes. I did. But now they are both dead. Because of a Damn evil Bastard named Tyronus!” I screamed, storming off with the rest.
The Speared Co-pilot directed me.
“Ow…Turn left and into the hanger.” He howled.
I walked into the hanger.
I saw maniac.
“I’ve already heard what happened. Word spread fast.
You obviously need a new helicoptor.” Maniac asked.
“How do they know Monty?” I asked.
“This is his home town. Come. Sit down and I will show you the helicoptors.” Maniac replied.
I walked off having no idea or warning that I was being spied on…

odd chick 07-14-2005 06:58 PM

Wow...that was pretty long! Anyway, it was a good chapter-so the Guru's back!! Wow!! I didn't think I'd be seeing him again! Anyway, nice. ;)

Biggy Bro Slig 07-23-2005 12:56 AM

The blue helicoptor zoomed off.
The Guru trailed after us.
“Biggy bro, look down below us!” Slug shouted.
I was currently piloting. I looked below.
Armies. But not on our side. Humanoids and Robolice roamed the sandy ground.
Silver tanks hovered infront and behind. They aimed their guns at the helicoptor.
“This is Commander Droy. What side are you on?” The radio came on.
I didn’t answer.
The commander got annoyed with that. They fired.
“Ziggy! Launch the Magma Bomb!” I shouted.
The Magma bomb was the worst bomb possible. When dropped, the red-hot magma stored inside melts through oddworld’s crust, then into the core. It then turns into Chaos.
Then the floor opens up. Sucking up anything. After a while, it closes again.
We dropped the bomb.
It didn’t explode.
The army scattered.
“I never liked those bombs.” Ziggy said.
We flew away.
I saw Boneworkz in the distance.
We flew off...

I'm sorry it wasn't much of a peice of writing.
I couldn't think of anythign to write exept this.
Make the next chapter longer.

odd chick 07-24-2005 04:27 PM

It's ok...I get writer's block a lot myself-I've even got it now and can't think of anything to write for my fanfic. :D

Munch's Master 07-28-2005 11:54 AM

Cool, 2 updates while I was gone. Yeah, writer's block is tough, luckily I know what'll be in my fic's next chapter. Good work though BBS, keep it coming!

Biggy Bro Slig 09-13-2005 09:26 AM

Hell
 
The (new) Gang and me walked towards the Gate after we had landed the helicoptor.
I knocked on the door. "Hello?" I shouted.
There was a loud creak, and the door swung open, knocking Jick off his feet.
Two Robo-lice were staring at us.
“That was stupid.” Said Ziggy.
Before any of us had a chance, the rapid fire of bullets pulsed through the Air.
I knelt down, and covered my head.
Then I realised that I still had my behind as an easy target.
Of what seemed like a hundred bullets went into my mechanical arse.
I yelped, and tried to crawl away.
My legs had shut down again.
Why me? I thought.
Ziggy yanked out his gun, and started defending himself behind a piece of rubble.
The group moved towards the door.
Ziggy made a dive to help me, but I said “Find Splinterz, leave me here.”
Ziggy stepped back, and the three ran indoors. 1 Robo-louse rolled towards me.
The door slammed, and I excepted the rest.

Ziggy ran down the large corridoor. The only light was the red glow from the bullets that the Robo-louse was firing.
Suddenly, the three tripped up, and Ziggy crashed to the floor.
The robo-louse repeated. Except he was a pile of twisted metal.
Ziggy got up. He heard faint sounds of bullets.
Poor Biggy Bro Slig, Ziggy thought.
The rest had got up now, and Ziggy turned around.
“We have to get a wagon or a train now. Either that or your boss is doomed.” Jick said. He climbed up the ladder.
The others followed him.
Jick switched on his night-vision. He glanced across the tunnel. He saw along the wire and lines, explosives tied to the far end of the wire. In the middle was a wagon.
Jick smiled.
“I think we’ve found a way to get across.” Smiled Jick.

odd chick 09-13-2005 05:57 PM

Wow, it's been awhile since this story has been updated! :D Nice chapter, BBS. ;) It was really cool and had just enough action to do it justice. ;) I can't wait until the next update! :D

Munch's Master 09-18-2005 09:37 AM

Yes, an update after nigh on 2 months of agonizing wait! As odd chick said, very actiony, and a nice cliffhanger. Good work, I look forward to seeing how this develops. Also, a little request, could you please please please read and reply to my fic?

Biggy Bro Slig 11-06-2005 12:48 AM

Explosives
 
Jick grabbed his backpack batttery, and yanked it off.
He suddenly lost his vision, and climbed up onto the wire, tossed the battery over the top and grabbed it on the other side and plugged it in again.
He started climbing slowly, trying not to wobble the wire to set off the TNT on the end.
He gave Slug the thumbs up to cross. Slug unplugged his battery and tossed it over. Well, he didn’t quite. The battery pounded the wire and Jick yelped, as the TNT’s fuse was lit.
Ziggy was the first to react, as he pulled out an old rusty knife and threw it. When it landed, it severed the lit fuse from the normal.
Five mnutes later, Slug and Jick had reached the wagon.
The small train-like cart’s brake was on. Slug released it. The wagon pumped up to the explosives.
As they hopped off, the wagon rolled all the way back to Ziggy.
Slug walked into something. He switched on his torch.
Slug’s eyes rolled out. He had bumped into a Slug hut.
He reached for Ziggy’s knife, and knelt down on his knees and peered in.
“Here Sloggy! Here Sloggie!” Slug called.
He got up and realised they had died years ago.
Wrong answer he thought, as a big, dollop of drool landed on his shoulder.
He turned around shivering.
“My god! That is one big son of a Slogette!” Slug screamed.
Slug ran around in circles trying to dodge the 10-foot Slog.
“Errr…Jick! Can you hurry up please! I’m kinda in a situation here!” Slug said.
By the time Jick turned, he was too late. Slug was struggling to survive in the belly of the Slog…

Munch's Master 11-06-2005 10:31 AM

Hey, update! And good cliffhanger, will Slug live? You like doing cliffhangers don't you? Update plese, 2 month waits are too long to wait.