You are the one,
My heart, my soul, My true love, For, whenever i am close to you, I feel whole, The chosen one, For you see, Its in my heart, To be with you, All the way, For now, and forever more.. And, i just made that up right now, so its kinda rubbish... |
good job, Blue! (meet me in Oddchat on January 28! Any time!)
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I say I did a fairly good job for listening to bloody techno music while thinking up a poem:| But it was directed to a special girl, I hope she liked it;)
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Yes i did like it Kai, and AG stop pretending you like my poems, cause they are rubbish.. I put down anything that comes into my head...:D
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Well done, everyone!
Another nice poem Blue (89da11), Spectacular Abe-gun! Erm.....Kai...a nice poem, shame it didn't ryme, though. I love poems that ryme. Now, the thing that I wasn't quite sure about in your poem, kai, was this: :
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Odd, why did you say that? Over all Kais poem was good, but i didnt really like that bit... Sorry.. :(
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Critisism, critisism:rolleyes: Number one, not all poems rhyme...reason, it's a bit of a kidish thing, so to speak. Two, so my poem was a little "sexual" but love isn't all about hugs and kisses is it :| If you ask me, making that up on the spot, was brilliant. However, some people don't appreciate the feel of certain poems:fuzemb: I will now go about my life making poems that rhyme and talk about hugs and candy...and compare lovers to the sun and the moon:o But you haven't seen the last of me:fuzvamp:
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I wasn't criticizing, merely comenting. And Kai, you said that not all poems rhyme, that is true, but, you said it was kidish when they do.....the best poem i have ever read rhymes, it is called the rime of the ancient mariner, and it is NOT 'kidish'. Oh, and Kai....the fact that the poem was 'sexual' was NOT appropriate, especially over the internet, and im sure blue didnt approve of it...ik. Oh yes...and kai, you said you made it up on the spot...i made both my poems up on the spot :p . And all that rubbish about hugz and candy....that is not at all what i write, ok? jesus, man...no romance at all.... :p
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I was gunna post one but you guys blew it to peices so never mind
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Grow up people. If you dont like something then try to avoid it. Yes you are commenting on what he said. But how do you know he meant it in a sexual way. Is it because your mind's have not expanded beyond a certain point because of your age. Or that you dont take time to just let people have poetic freedom. Your going to have to learn that there are some things in this world that you will not like and you will deal with them. Plus if you notice there are some older people on these forums too, we dont just listen to one group and please them, we work together for the well being of these forums, and all different types of people young or old, etc.
Kai do not worry about the critisim, there are worse problems in this world, and I think they will eventually have to learn that. Keep up the good work everyone with your writings. To add also, the main purpose of these poems as the title leads everyone to believe are romantic poems, dealing with love. And if his works were meant in a sexual way, sex is defined as also making and creating love, thought I might refresh what it was originally conceptualized as. Thankyou for listening to me once again, and your time for reading this. -Sincerely Al the Vykker |
Jesus Christ, Al.....
1, I was not critizing, I was merely commenting, I liked Kai's poem apart from that bit. 2, :
3, Al....my thread is entitelled Romantic Poems, the idea of that was not sexual poetry, but of romantic poetry, to spread the idea of romance...Like the kinda ickky stuff that Shakespere wrote. Now, Al....I really love being told to 'grow up'. (By the way, there was quite a lot of sarcasm in that sentance) But Al....may I remind you that I am an imature 12 year old, and that I may say things that seem very...'stupid' :p . Right, Al, now that I've said a few 'childish' things, I'd better put in that I hope this doesn't seem offencive and rude...I have a trouble of accidentaly offending ppl....unfortunate habit, I am afraid... :) . Oh yes...why don't you send in a poem, Al.... oddchick |
To reply, to you statements oddchick, I never said you were immature specifically, I was painting a general picture. The more you point out something the more it starts to be brought up, and it sticks out like a sore thumb. I which case with the line from Kai's poem.
If you would have addressed it to Kai in a Pm or on oddchat etc. It would have saved me time and you wouldnt have gotten a lecture by me. And at the time when I asked how do you know if he meant it in a sexual way. I missed the line where he said he did mean it in that way. Anyways I dont like to argue much, and most of the time I'm really laid back. But I just wanted to tell you in life there are things you will like and there are others you will not like. Its best to get used to it now rather than be suprised at something later. Thats all I have to say. Sorry If you felt hurt by my statments, I just wanted to try and settle a disupute I felt could have been avoided earlier. -Al the Vykker |
bravo bravo 2 u all there fab well they are fab
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I'm not going to disect that single line of my poem for you:fuzblink: However...I am sorry that you (miss odd) does not understand the fact that "sex" is all a part of love...in the future I will remember to put this above my poems
Warning, this peom contains a singal line of sexual expression, suggested for the mature only! And that wasn't sarcasm:| I just can't stand a immature mind saying I should not have included "play toy, play girl" in my poems. Anyway enough of all this. Continue with the poems people. P.S. I still believe poems that rhyme every line is rather..."childish". |
Ok, Kai, that wasn't funny. Yes, I do understand that sex is a part of love, so you didn't have to make me look like a complete ass hole on my very first thread! I maybe immature, but you didn't have to point that out, either. And, I wasn't the only one to feel unconfortable when reading that line...I believe that 89da11 was not sure either. I did like the poem apart from that, as I stated earlier.
Kai, I also feel that having sexual expression in poems is not a bad thing...unlike what you think I think....Although when I started the thread, I intended it to be of the Shakespear style... Right, now I ask, can we please forget all this unpleasant buissness about the way in which we write our poems, and simply go back to the topic of the thread 'Romantic Poems'....I appologise for my behavior towards you poem, which was totally unlike me, for I believe that people should have the freedom to write whatever they wish. Thank you for you time, please continue with the poems, Kai...and everyone else :) oddchick |
Heya people,
Heres my crappy one i don't even think it an be classed s a love poem oh well, *writes*: Sitting here, watching over you, Nothing simple has ever occured, I see you smile, my heart lighens, From the depth of my soul the world shines, All of my memorys out cast by theese few seconds, Just trying to make my dreams come true, Your all I need right now, You don't understand that, you shut me out, And you aused m distress, but i love you, and thats what matters, But for now I just want to dissappear, and never come back until you realise, how much you mean to me, And how much I love you........... told yas it was crappy! |
Well done, Rexy!!!
*Claps*... :) :) :) :) Great work, really fab. :) I may write some more poems yet....keep 'em commin' ppl!! :D :D :D oddchick |
Alright Miss Odd, I'll get off your case, and set aside our differences. Anyway, love poems in it's deepest most meaning, expresses things people feel, and apply to there lives. This poem I am about to share, explains just that.
------------------------------------------------------------------- The Fire As you and I sit there by the fire, our hands together, we lean against eachother, oh what a peaceful moment in time we share, when no hardship overules us, and all we do is whisper sweet words to eachother, and kiss under the sky above, like the fire we lay next to, burning with an endless glow, so to does our hearts shine, with loves eternal flame. -------------------------------------------------------- Alright, now that expresses the way one feels about love, and how I applied it to a fire. Pretty basic concept. Once again like most of the poems here, this one was made on the spot. |
Hey, well done Kai :) :) :), I take it that we're friends again *hugz*. Here is another poem of my own:
I Long For You I long for you to love me, I long for you care, I long for a true love, For us both to share. I long to see us together, Walking hand in hand, I long for you to be by me, There forever, you should stand. I long for you to realize, That you could be for me, I long for you to notice, That forever, we could be. ________________________ I think they more and more cheasy....ick....:) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) oddchick |
Well nice Job Miss Odd...
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-_- earlier I was going to say "this topic should be entitled, 'Arguments', where you can let it ALL out...like the Real World.... : )" Yes....I was just gone a while! :P Why hasn't anyone replied in a while? Oh, well....
The Shine in Your Eyes I look at your eyes, the sparkle, how it shines, I look into your eyes, and it makes you mine! The shine in your eyes, makes you look so great, the sparkle in your eyes, makes my world clear of hate. And now I know, and now I see, that if you say "no" that you'll still see me. I know you feel, I know you see, I know you'll kneel, and you'll be with me, for all of eternity. too mushy *X's it out* UGH! |
This is tight... I think im in love...... Miss Odd
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Another stupid poem here,
My love My love, i wish you could know, How much i really love you, I just want you to know, I love you with all my heart, And wish to be with you all the time, This time not leave your side, For, i wonder on nights to come, Where i would be without you, Not there in your arms, my one true love.. ___________________________________ Really bad poem, maybe cause i made it up on the spot but who cares? |
Great poem Blue, Abe-gun... lol Stan...i know my poems are good :lol: , but they aint that good :lol: (j/k).
Right...another poem of my own, I't a little different to the other ones that I've done...sorry...but i can't think of a title.. Think of a sad story, Something to make you cry, But I bet I know something sadder, This you cannot deny. Think of the power of love; Someone in love with another, Then think of the feelings of the someone, When the one she wanted had a lover. Think of the way she felt, To see them hand in hand, To see them kiss by moonlight, Or cuddle in the sand. Then think of the problem, That her heart could not mend, Was the fact that his lover, Was her only bestest friend. Then think of her emotions, On the wedding day; As she sat and heared their vows, She wished her life away. Then think of the passing people, Who on the river bank they saw her lie, With slit wrists and tears... That was how she wanted to die.... _____________________________________ What do you think? oddchick |
I like that poem odd, you dont usually write ones like that, nice to see a change.. Good work.
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I love you so
I love you, You dont love me, You are with her, Not with me, I want to be with you, You dont want to be with me, Ive got no-one, You've got her, I love you so very much, But you dont love me.. ________________________ Thats just a weird one, tried to write in the same style as odd, it didnt really work.. |
Xp She's dead....because, *GASP!*
...lol...Good joke Blue, but it did work a lot like Oddchick's! This is sort of like it, too;
_____________________ The Knife When I saw it in your hand, I knew I had the proof, All the good times we've spent, And now you do this? "POOF!" Now you're gone, And I wonder why, All the good times we had, So now you want to die. So I look at you on the bed, You laying there, This thing knocked the wind out of me, I have no air. I look at what did it all, what made you lose your life, It was right in your hand, It was a knife. ____________________________ Hmm....the knife...thank god it's not true!!! LoL |
right....soz for double-posting but I had a slight problem with the quoting area...lol! Please deleate this mods...
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Cool poem AG.. I'll say no more...:)
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*Sighs* Lovely work, Abe-gun and Blue.....but did you really have to copy that idea of mine? :p ...*Sighs indestinctly* Honestly...whatever I do, someone always has to copy the idea and make it better....*looks up* Oh well :D, keep up the good work, guys....wow...I can't believe how well this thread is doing! *giggles*
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