My slig story

Wolfbane · #1 03-06-2003, 06:59 AM

I'm not very good at Oddworld stories but i'll try. It's set just after Rupture Farms:

It's Midday now and i've been traviling over Scrabania for a couple of days now with my only friend left. I'm number #456 and my friend is #453. My name's Tyson. I had once taken down 7 Slig Poppers. We've just escaped Rupture Farms. But not without casulties. We had another friend but he was killed by a Scrab, It took Rif 6 shots to bring it down. We call him Rif because we don't know how to pronounce his real name. And I have 3 missing fingers. Rif knows everything about combat. He once saved me from falling into a Paramite pen. "Um... where are we ment to be going?" I asked
"How the hell do I know?...Um maybe FeeCo. Depot"

That's it so far. I have to go now

Wolfbane · #2 05-09-2003, 10:32 AM

I see no one has replied. Is it because i suck at writing Oddworld stories?

Sekto Springs · #3 05-09-2003, 10:50 PM

it's a good story...ppl are just rude not to reply....just make it longer

Seargentbig · #4 05-10-2003, 03:11 AM

It seems good, but I think it needs to be longer to attract more people.

Sekto Springs · #5 05-10-2003, 03:31 AM

SBs right u cant make an introduction without atleast part of the story attached (that is the indroduction right?)any way u should edit it and explain it a bit better like introduce the chars better or sumthin'

Stripe · #6 05-14-2003, 02:06 AM

Things may have started out short and simple, but now you've left us with ALL kinds of questions!

*eye twitches*

Must......have.....more.......story!

*tic*

You're comitted now (aren't we all? *G*) you HAVE to write more. There's no turning back now....(!) MUWAAAAahahahahaha!

Abe16 · #7 06-25-2003, 09:03 AM

I like it very much don't feel bad wolfbane the point is you gotta make it more longer so people could be more into your story okay.Redo the story,USE THE EDIT BUTTONS AT ALL TIMES.Sorry