Mullock returns

[GABBITS OWN]

First fan fiction... I think is shit...
Chapter 1 the new army:
After the destruction of rupture farms everyone thought that mullock was killed by the big face... But rumours have it that mullock is building a new empire to Hunt and find the Mudokon terrorist named "Abe" that shut down rupture farms and destroyed mullocks fortune.

Abe was walking though the forest to see the " all mighty raisin" to find out his next quest would be...
Abe was talking to raisin, Raisin said" Abe you thought you succeeded in shutting down rupture farms"? Abe said "what", Mullock has survived the attack from the big face... And is hunting for you with his new army of "Big bros". Abe said " I better be careful then... Raisin then said " you have to possess mullock and order his Big bros to... To... To... ZZZZ. You fuckin jerk I never get what I need...

To be continued....
Please reply I want feedback...

[Lord Stanley]

We've been waiting for years to see what would happen if Molluck returned...now perhaps it is time.

[GABBITS OWN]

Chapter 2: right treatment...
Abe quickly ran back to his tribe, only to find mullock and his big bros tearing down the whole village. A big bro spotted Abe and informed mullock, he ordered to capture Abe and bring him to me. After a long ordeal the big bros finally caught Abe and put him face to face (again) with mullock the glukon. Mullock said " Abe you ruined my life, wasted me fortune should I show you mercy?", Abe stuttered and didn't reply, Mullock whispered to a big bro and ordered him to kill Abe, while the big bros weren't watching, Abe quietly put his hands together and started a mini chant. Mullock was now under Abes control, Abe told mullock to order his big bros to kill each other, after the smoke cleared from all the blitz packer fire no big bros were left standing, Abe stopped chanting and mullock wondered "what happened to my army of big bros?" Abe said you have to learn how to treat Mudokons properly... Mullock said" shove it up your blue ass you motherfucker!", Abe was angered by what Mullock said, so he grabbed a stick that was on fire from the destruction and whacked Mullock fair in the temple. Mullock was dead... Abe said" Serves you right, you little fuck". Abe walked out of the ruined landscape, and Abe was the only one left standing...

The end
Please gimme feedback.

[Daxter King]

What did you do once Mullock brought Abe to you?

My favorite line was, "shove it up your blue ass you motherfucker!"

[GABBITS OWN]

lol working on new one.....

[Ridg3]

Please do, this is genius!

[Alf Shall Rise]

Ha, this is pretty funny actually. Do continue.

[GABBITS OWN]

Okay thanks...