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11-12-2002, 07:33 PM
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The Tales of the Shrink (interactive story)

......this story will involve many before mentioned characters and places in my story Vykkers Lab Installment 147, in order to avoid confusion, please refer to that story in case any questions arise........

...........This story is also interactive. I will give you the basic situation and present you with the multiple solutions to the problem facing the character, you as the readers will decide what will happen. I will take the greater of the first three responses and continue with the story with that choice.......

And so the story begins.......

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My name is Shrink, I'm not the only one I'm sure. But I'm different. Most Shrinks get confined to a single assignment, but not me, I escaped with Ben! I'm free, but then again I'm not. I have an obligation to help mudokons, that may just very well be a part of my programming, but then again, I WANT to help them. It's the first time in my life that I've wanted anything, besides freedom. This is my story......

Day 1-Morning
Ben has already left for Necrum.

My screen blinked on. The room slowly illuminated, I was out in the woods near the Rehab. I clamored over and pushed open the door to my hut. I walked out into the forest a little, I guessed it was a warm day as I could see the sun, but I couldn't feel it. However, a nice day anyway, the birds were chirping and singing their happy little songs, the forest was alive.

Then it got quiet.

"Why is everything so quiet?" I whispered to myself.

Footsteps............

In a green blur hundreds upon hundreds of Mudokons came streaming out of the forest, darting and dodging past trees.

All of them terrified.

"RUN RUN! OH MERCIFUL ODD RUN! THEY'RE GOING TO KILL US ALL! THEY'RE RIGHT BEHIND US! HURRY AND RUN!" screamed a very frightened Mudokon who stood on top of a rock.

.........should I,

a) Ask him what is chasing them.

b) Go find out what is chasing them.

c) Run with them.

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11-12-2002, 10:46 PM
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I pick A. I wouldn't want to run into something without some idea of what it was...
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C! Oo, pick C, mister Shrink! Ya dont know what the jeebus it is, don't just stand there!
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One more vote and then I can continue.....
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11-15-2002, 01:38 AM
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I say....

Get some info from the mudokon, fore warned is fore armed!
At least have SOME vague idea of -what- exactly is chasing them.
(Was that *A*?)

So thats my vote and I'm sticking to it!
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11-15-2002, 10:25 AM
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I vote A.
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.........so the A's have it! Here is the continuation of the story.....
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I figured that I best find out what was chasing them exactly. I quickly darted over to him and stood near the rock.

"What is it? What's chasing you?" I asked as I quickly peered into the forest.

"It's-" A burst of machine guns exploded through the forest and cut him in half mid-sentence.

The steady barrage of machine guns continued to rip through the undergrowth. Bullets pinged off of my metal body, but I wasnt invulnerable to them. If a single bullet were to pierce my screen then my systems would fail.

At that moment I figured it best to run with them instead.

I ran as fast as I could, mudokons getting shot down everywhere. Running and then being picked off by the continual stream of fire. I didnt dare look back, I just ran as fast as I could.

I hadnt seen them, but I knew what they were.

Sligs.......

The muds split up into three groups, one group went deeper into the forest, another followed a small river's path, and the third streamed into a cave.
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should I......
a) go deeper into the forest
b) follow the river
c) hide in the cave
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11-18-2002, 04:28 PM
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THE FOREST, THE FOREST, THE FORESSSSSSSSSSSSSSST (thats 3 answers now start obeyin me!Anything could be livin in that cave, a scrab, a heard of paramites, some strange, unknown bloodsucking monster
If you run up the river you'll have no shelter from the bullets, and you'll be in clear veiw, not to mention the fact that the water may short cercuit ya. I say the forest.

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A. Deeper into the forest.
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A.What kind of idiot would hide in a cave?They probaply find a dead-end and get shot to death.And the river,if it's deep enough they could swim upstream but hey,you can't hold you breath forever.Shrink could,but he probably rust or the cold would freeze his systems
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Could ya right more, youve got ya 3 ansers, everyone says A.
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Sorry about that................here is the continuation!
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I figured that the best place to go would be deeper into the forest. So picked up the pace a little bit. i ran for what seemed like hours, but since I am a machine I didn't grow tired. Trees and all sorts of foliage were being torn down by the never ending seige of fire from behind us. Then it happened.........

*CRACK*

A tree to my side snapped with the gunfire.

*WHAM*

The lone tree collapsed down upon me, heaving all its weight down. I was still concious, but I was pinned down. I heard footsteps......

"Sligs are getting close," I thought to myself, "What do I do?" I hurriedly covered myself up in some leaves in an attempt to hide myself. The footsteps got closer (I could barely hear them through the raging gunfire), but they didnt sound like a sligs footsteps, they weren't metallic, it was a mudokon.

"Hey, help me up!" I yelled.

He glared at me. His eyes were completely white, no pupil or anything, and they seemed to be glowing quite bright.

"Are ya gonna help me or just stand there?" A smile came on his face.

He unearthed a gun, which he had been holding at his side, and raised it and readied it to fire at me.
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Should I.............

a) try and push the log off and run.

b) push off the log, smack the gun away, and give him a royal beat down Shrink style!

c) talk him out of it.
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11-25-2002, 09:56 PM
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hmmm... You might not be able to get the log off you, or something could be damaged....
So I chose C, plus I want to keep this guy talking, find out why he's got a gun and what's wrong with his eyes for a start....
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Pauses. Reads chapter 7 times. Maybe you should have risked the river! i agree with Kes. If it could move the log it would already have done it. so talk him out of it and start interogatin about why he has no eyes. Hes probably one of ya soaless mudokons from one of ya other fics good ending (I cannt remember its name but i'm sure youll remind us.) Wait, no, move the log ang whak is gun, B. If he's soalless he wont respond to begging! Ok, B
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So the b's have it...............
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I didn't know why this mud had no pupil's or why he had a gun, but I knew that he was pointing it at me, and in my book that calls for a red-ass beat down.

I hurriedly used my arms to rip the log off of me. He seemed suprised and he reeled back in shock. I hurled the log at him.

*WHAM*

It cought him square in the chest and took the wind right out of him. His gun went spiraling through the air and hit the moist ground. It seemed that I had knocked him out, as he remained pinned under the log.

I walked over and picked up the gun and began to walk deeper into the woods.

*CRACK*

A twig behind me snapped. I whirled around. The white-eyed mud had raised the log above his own head and was readying it to throw at me.

I raised the gun and fired.


It felt like it was the wrong thing to do, but I knew that I had to protect myself and the others.

The bullets flew into his fleshy body repeatedly, spouting his blood forward, it splattered all over my screen. He fell back and onto the ground, still alive.

The log fell from his grip and, in what seemed to be slow-motion, landed on top of his head.

With a final kick of life and a jerk of pain, he ceased moving.
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Should I.........

a) Bring his body to the Monsaic Lines.

b) Bring his body to the tribal elders who are meeting in a secret location.

c) Leave him there to rot.

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C! C! do C! C I tell you! C!!!!!!!!!



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Ill say, B. The best thing to do would be to take him to someone important. Take it to the elders, get some advise and then take it to Abe to start a new game!
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okay, we need someone to break the tie. One more vote!
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I also choose B, what in Odd's name is a souless anyway??
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Hey guys, I'm not gonna be able to work on the story for a couple of days, but I just wanted to tell you that I have some really good ideas for this story.

P.S. Kes, it isn't "a souless", it's just souless. As in soul-less, lacking a soul. Get it now?
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Hey Kes, try readin vykker lab installment 147 or whatever that number was. The good ending should answer any questions.
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so "b" it............get it? So "b" it, as in "so be it". Bah! What do you know of funny!
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"I killed him......" I gazed at his limp lifeless body. "I killed him...." I slowly walked over and picked up the log. I looked down,

His skull was crushed in almost two halves.

I gently picked him up and hurried deeper into the forest, still aware of the enclosing danger.

The tribal elders were meeting in a hidden passage in a tribal cave. The cave was unbeknownst to sligs and Glukkons only because it was never used. The cave was actaully behind a small waterfall, which I was conveinently near. I walked a little farther, still carrying the dead mud in my robotic arms.

I walked in.

The cave was covered in all sorts of beuatiful cave-drawings. Paramites, Scrabs, Mudokons, Tribe Leaders of Old, Mudokon Shaman, BigFace, Abe (of course), and a faded, scratched out picture of a Meech. I continued down the narrow cave's path.

The door had a bell, flint, and spooce lock all placed right in front of the entrance. The spooce was no problem, it only required 150 and I picked that up when running through the woods. I set down the mud's body and then I dropped the spooce into the basket in front of the lock. The counter spiraled down and made a descending tone as it did.

*BING*

It opened.

The lever for the flint lock was hidden behind a boulder and I knew where that was. I leaned around the side of the boulder and I pulled the lever (which was attached to the wall of the cave).

*CLICK*

The lock lit with fire.

*DING*

It opened.

The bell lock was the hardest thing. I could never remember the song. I back tracked through my memory until I found data on the bells. I leaned over and hit each bell accordingly (mudokons don't have to possess them in order to enter. Showoffs).

*DING-DONG-DING-DANG-DOONG-DING-DANG-DONG*

The door behind the bells ripped open.

I walked back and picked up the Mud. I entered the door.

*SLAM*

It closed behind me.
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oooh, this is good, it waS A Great idea for an interactive story, there should be more. keep goin, i cant wait for the next chapter. The best bit is that ive won every vote so far!
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I plan to do the next section soon.

And again I do thank everyone who has replied.
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Hey, lindsey, i can do it (the Oddworld story and splat areboth in the first few chapters.
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