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06-23-2003, 07:09 PM
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An un-named story

I wrote this story when I was back in school, proberbly about five years ago. I just found it now on my computer, so I thought I would share it with you people. Enjoy



I was standing ontop of the hill looking down towards the town. The house at the bottom of the hill was my house, I had ran away from home two weeks ago because my parents never let me do what I wanted to do. I was standing on the hill for about twenty minutes wondering if I should go home or not. I had a bag of clothes over my shoulder and another bag of clothes in my hand. I was thinking what it would be like to go home again, having my parents making up my mind for me, and thinking what it is like away from home doing anything I want and making up my own mind.

After a while I thought that it would be better for me to stay away from home so I can do what ever I want. I turned around and walked back down the other side of the hill.

As I was walking down the road, I couldn't stop thinking about mum and dad, wondering what they're doing right now, if they are thinking about me at all wondering what I'm doing. I was thinking what would happen if they call the police or if they start walking around the streets looking for me. Then I thought they can't be too worried about me because I haven't sees any of that happen or any posters up of me.

Suddenly as I was walking up the dark, straight road, a police car came straight into view, then I started to think if they had called the police and they're the ones out looking for me. I didn't want to risk going past the car incase it is them looking for me, so I turned around and started to run back down the road.

As I was running, I was keep looking behind me to see how close the car was coming then I saw a small little lane going into the forest. I stopped just by the lane, looked back at the police car, looked down at the forest, then had one look at the police car then ran down the lace into the forest.

In the forest I couldn't see a thing, it was completely dark and the big trees were clocking the moonlight, the air I was breathing smelt of mud and the soil I was walking on was all slushy and in some parts it was burying my feet, and in the distance I could hear the owls talking to each other.

After walking for ten minutes I came to a sudden stop, my legs couldn't take any more walking. I was looking around for somewhere to sit down, then all of a sudden I heard this really loud bang, like a riffle being shot off, I sat down on the nearest fallen tree that I could see then the riffle shot off again, I looked up to the sky and all I saw was what looked like hundreds of bats flying out of the tallest trees, then it sounded off again and even more bats were flying out. I started to get really scared so I started to run away. I don't know where I was running to, I just knew I was running away from the gunshot sounds.

I was running through the forest with the gunshots going off behind me, the noise didn't seem to be dying out, infact the noise seemed to be getting louder, but I knew I was running away from the sound because I could hear it behind me. After a minute the shooting stopped, so then I stopped running and looked behind me to see any body, but I couldn't see anything.
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06-25-2003, 02:47 PM
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Mmm... deep.

Any hidden meaning relating to your life, Nath?
Or was it just random thought at the start?

It's a good story.
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06-25-2003, 04:13 PM
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Well I think it was just a random thought, i had to to a short story for my english project and i didn't know what to write about, then this came into my head.
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06-27-2003, 02:53 PM
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Yep, that's how most of my stories developed!
Well, exept for Cairin's Tale, that was based on my own Odd interests.

Um, my stories (that I decided good enough) are here if yuo want them:
http://www32.brinkster.com/adder/addvormahn/main.html
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06-27-2003, 06:09 PM
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I checked out that site, pretty good stuff in there. Reading that now has triggered off thoughts in my head for more stories/stage plays.
I like all the charachteristics they all have
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