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01-11-2003, 06:30 AM
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Oddworld Ghost! (finish this story)

Look, I'll do the Epilouge then you finish it.


Bos checked his sights. This night was creepy, and very foggy.
Oh, why did he have to be the active slig on duty? His friend
Argo walked in to the the tower door and tapped Bos on the
shoulder. "Scared?" He said. "N...no." Lied Bos. Cowardice
was frowned on by his superiors, But all sligs had it.
He trotted down the stairs and out for his patrol. Sweat
Dripped as he walked towards the mist. Something was
watching him, waiting for him.


Into the mist.................

someone makes the next chapter and then someone else does their version.
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01-11-2003, 08:51 PM
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Post hurry up!

I'll do Chapter 1.


Bos was getting nervous. Why were the readers on his gun playing up?
It was like something was behind him, then zipped in front and then jumped over his head. What was going on? Suddenly Bos's gun flew from his hands and landed over near a rock, covered with moss. Bos walked towards the rock when a horrific face came out of the ground and nearly gave him a heart attack! Bos ran of into the the light of the early morning mist while screaming his lungs out, while the face thought to itself. "I'll Get to you, soon............"


Please finish this story.
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Ah, we are high school boys,
the miserable high school boys.
If we were girls, we could get popular by doing anything:
rock band, jazz band,
karate, kendo, mahjong, cyborg, synchronized swimming...
On the other hand, high school boys are
useless outside battle and sports anime.
But they're recklessly trying to make a slice-of-life anime about us.
Ah, we are high school boys,
the miserable high school boys.

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01-11-2003, 08:52 PM
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Please reply.
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Ah, we are high school boys,
the miserable high school boys.
If we were girls, we could get popular by doing anything:
rock band, jazz band,
karate, kendo, mahjong, cyborg, synchronized swimming...
On the other hand, high school boys are
useless outside battle and sports anime.
But they're recklessly trying to make a slice-of-life anime about us.
Ah, we are high school boys,
the miserable high school boys.


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01-12-2003, 03:00 AM
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Okay, so you want us to like...write the next chapter? Or what? I'm confused... eschplain it to me lucy!!
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01-12-2003, 02:23 PM
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I think im meant to be writing my own version of chapter 1 so i'll do that.

Bos walked towards the mist. Suddenly, behind him he thought he heard a noise. He spun round. There was no one there.
"Stop tryin to scare me Argo!" It was the only thought he could come up with - his friend was messing him around.
Suddenly he heard a growl behing him and he spun around, to quickly. He fell over. He jumped up again and ran towards the base. After running for 5 minutes and not seeing anything he was getting worried.
An evil barking in front of him made him spin around again and run back the other way. But again he heard the vihsus noise in front of him and spun around. Every way he ran he heard the noise. Whatever was in the mist, it had him surrounded...
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01-13-2003, 07:46 AM
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Heres my chapt 2


Chapter 2

By the time Bos burst through the door, Argo was fast asleep. "WAKE UP, WAKE UP!" He shouted as he shook Argo. He woke with a start. "What,What, What? Calm down, what is it?" " G.....g..ggggg....ghost...." Bos Muttered, now panting hard. "A ghost? Ha, there are no ghosts here screwhead." Taunted Argo, laughing hard. " G..g..ghost.......outside...." Bos whispered, then he settled down to take a nap.


Splat is right!
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Ah, we are high school boys,
the miserable high school boys.
If we were girls, we could get popular by doing anything:
rock band, jazz band,
karate, kendo, mahjong, cyborg, synchronized swimming...
On the other hand, high school boys are
useless outside battle and sports anime.
But they're recklessly trying to make a slice-of-life anime about us.
Ah, we are high school boys,
the miserable high school boys.

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01-13-2003, 05:51 PM
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So we all right our own version of the story!

Bos was terrified. He was certain he was going to die! He was to tired, and to scared to run any more. He stood where he was shivering with terror, when two gleaming green eyes appeared out of the mist. Then a body started to form behind them. Then hundreds more pairs of eyes and dim bodies apear ed. He was completely surrounded. He knew he was going to die.
Suddenly, with a terrifiying screech, the shadow in front of him dived towards him. Towards his throat!
For some strange reason he screamed some weird words. He didn't understand what he was saying: "Hana sameya tenaya kanorrr!"
The moment he finished this bazaar sentence, the ground beneath him gave way and he found himself falling,
. Down,
. down,

. down...
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Bos wasnt sure what was going on. He had lost sight of the base.
Mist was all around him. Somthing was following, circling, toyig with him.He was getting tired. He new he couldnt keep this up. He stopped and turned. He spun around while yelling, hoping to scare the whatever it is off. He heard a noise that had to be it.
It was a long deep noise that made you fell sick. Gooooooollllllllllllllllllll.
IT was circling. Bos new it. This was the end. He sat on the ground and covered his head.
But then he felt somthing.
Like the wings flapping together, like waves slapping on rocks.
HE heard slashing sounds, somecreature sputtering in pain, the woosh of the "wings" and nothing.
He stood up and walked over to directoin of the noise last was.

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iM waitin for ghost to reply before i write more.
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Chapter 3


Bos was asleep. It was midnight. Suddenly the door burst open. Nobody opened it. Bos woke up. "What tha-" started Bos, only to be cut off by a voice. " You will give me transport!" Boomed the voice. Then a large ball of fog flew in and went down his throat. Everything went back to normal.
" Well, that was kinda strange." Said Bos. He sat down. Then he went off to sleep.......
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the miserable high school boys.
If we were girls, we could get popular by doing anything:
rock band, jazz band,
karate, kendo, mahjong, cyborg, synchronized swimming...
On the other hand, high school boys are
useless outside battle and sports anime.
But they're recklessly trying to make a slice-of-life anime about us.
Ah, we are high school boys,
the miserable high school boys.

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Question Splat's chapter 3

Bos woke up, face down in a shallow pool of water. He jerked up, coughing and spluttering. He tried to remember what had happened, he had seen something in the mist, then... He'd shouted something wierd, what was it? He couldn't remember the words, but it certainly wasn't Oddish (the local Oddworldian language). And then what? He couldn't remember anything after that.
He looked around the room he was in. Stone walls, and shallow puddles around the floor. a small pool in the centre of the room. And a long shaft above his head. The cave was lighted with what looked like daylight, but there was nothing to make it. There was no visible way out of the room.
What had happened? He thought desperately. He'd shouted, then... the ground had given way and he'd fallen down. He must have lost consiousness as he fell. He looked up the shaft again. It lead up in to darkness. He couldn't see light in it. A fleech couldn't withstand a fall that far! (anyone who played around a lot in Abe's exxodus willl know that fleeches can withstand falling extremely far)
He looked down in to the water again. And stared in amazement: His eyes, they weren't red, they were blue...

and ghosts variation is really getting weird. And i would recomend to big bro slig to hurry up and write, were getting way ahead of him. Do a few chapters together.
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Chapter 4


Bos was on night shift again. Suddenly he started running. But he wasn't running, or at least he didn't want to run. His legs were running outside his control. Or somthing like that. All he knew that he was running off into the mist.....

He'd been running through the woods for days. He was so tired. Whoever was controling his legs sensed that and stopped under some shade to rest.
Bos drifted of to sleep. A minute later he was awakened be a grunting noise.
His eyes opened to greet the face of a large Scrab!

to be continued........
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the miserable high school boys.
If we were girls, we could get popular by doing anything:
rock band, jazz band,
karate, kendo, mahjong, cyborg, synchronized swimming...
On the other hand, high school boys are
useless outside battle and sports anime.
But they're recklessly trying to make a slice-of-life anime about us.
Ah, we are high school boys,
the miserable high school boys.

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02-10-2003, 05:35 PM
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Bos looked up again. Forget the colour of his eyes for now, he had to survive. he looked around for a way out. there was a small trickle of interlinked puddles, starting from a spring in one wall, then dissapearing in to a hole at water level on the far wall. The exit gap was barely 2 centimetres high. A slurg couldn't through! but he walked over there anyway. He didn't know why. He just had a... feeling.
He stared at the wall with the gap at the bottom. Then, without thinking, he rammed himself against the wall! He shouted out in pain and surprise, but instead of a wordless shout, another string of non-existent words escaped his mouth: Shaka meana selia cass!
The wall started shaking, he heard a rumbling from the wall infront and the wall behind him! THen the rock blocking his way exploded inwards, but before Bos could react, 100s of tons of water slamed in to his back, knocking him over, and throwing him down the tunnel. His head hit a jut of rock, and everything went blank...

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