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Oddworld Let's try this again!

So, they said it would never happen again. They said it couldn't be done. I don't even know who 'they' are, but anyway, they were wrong.

Because 2 years, 2 months and 9 days since I last updated it, my ancient fanfiction is rising from the dead.

The only people who I think even might remember it are Splat, T-Nex and perhaps dripik, but hey. After a bigger writer's block than, uh, some other big writer's block, I'm going to be continuing my fanfiction.

I'll post the brand new chapter tomorrow, but until then, here's what's been before in its entirety for you to catch up (note, features overly fast-paced action, rather poor writing, and rather short chapters. The new chapters will be much better.)
This is a LONG read, by the way.
So, on with what was to be the first story in the first part of a Quintology of mine, but will probably just be the first in a 3-part saga (If I ever finish them, that is)
FREEDOM FIGHTERS

Chapter 1: Hardships

Thud! Larry’s face hit the hard corrugated steel floor. “And don’t you try that again, or it’ll be broken bones, not just bruised.” Snarled the Slig guard through the door bars, as he slammed the metal door shut. Larry was a mudokon, your bog standard green mudokon with straggly feathers and a dislike of Industrialists. He had been enslaved long ago, by RuptureFarms, before getting freed by the Mudokon Saviour, Abe. But knowing his luck, he got enslaved again for a new factory- the Septik Snaks Food Corporation. Larry lifted his face off the floor gingerly, still in pain. The blood from his mouth mingled with the tears he was trying to hold back, as he muttered “Y-yes s-s-sir.” The Slig just flipped him off, spat at him and left, saying “Don’t you take the piss with me mud.” And he left.
“Caught trying to escape again Larry?” Larry turned to the mudokon who had said it-Trevor, as always. From what Larry knew, Trevor had been training to be a shaman at his village before being captured, and he was seemingly level-headed, well, most of the time. He was decked out in the shaman paint, but didn’t have the feathers yet and his powers were unfinished. Still, he was a trainee shaman, and that kept some of the more superstitious Sligs wary of him. “Of course I did Trev, otherwise I wouldn’t be lying here beat up and bleeding, would I?”
Trevor shrugged “Well be careful. That’s the 5th time you’ve tried, and you’re lucky you’ve been caught by different guards in different Zulags. Don’t forget the 3 escapes and you’re out rule.” He sighed, drawing his finger across his throat to illustrate the point.
“Yeah well, maybe death would be better than this.” Larry muttered, trying to hide his pain as he crawled over to his fellow cellmates.
“Don’t say that Larry. At least we get fed here.” Another mudokon spoke up. Larry sighed. That was Jeff. He was a bit of an oddball even among mudokons. He was often quiet, sounded like he was high on something even when he wasn’t, and wore countless bracelets and rings that he said got him in touch with Odd. He was probably the mudokon equivalent of a hippy. “Food? How is gone off, mashed up scrabmeat food? Odd I wish we could get out of here.”
A large, muscled and bulky mudokon who had kept quiet for a while suddenly threw himself at the door and banged on it again and again, screaming madly “Get back here you Slig bastards! You can’t enslave us! Next work shift I’m gonna strangle each and every one of you scumbags!!”
“Max Max Max, yelling won’t get us out.” Trevor admonished him, sighing and picking at his nails. The dark red, big and bulky mudokon,-Max, spat, muttered something involving a lot of curse-words, then flopped down, still breathing heavily, and slowly returned to a more green colour. Larry was still irritable though, and turned to Trevor once more “Max has had a hard time in slavery, so you gotta understand why he’s doing that.”
“Hey, I can speak for myself Larry.” Growled Max, and he punched the wall again.
Trevor spoke up “Larry, I was just saying yelling and raging gets us nowhere but punished. Remember, we’re all in this together, we have been since the beginning.”
Larry reminisced at Trevor’s words. “The beginning.” He remembered; and thought back.


Chapter 2: The Beginning

Larry thought back, remembering how it all began:

It had been a relatively warm day in the village, good conditions for Larry’s crops, as he was a spoocefarmer. He had just finished taking the last of the ripe spoocebushes, ready for sale, consumption and use by the village Shamen, when a faint buzzing had reached his ears. The sky became speckled with dots of black, gradually growing larger and less contrasted against the sinking sun. Several other villagers had come out to see what was going on, as the noise grew louder, and the spots grew larger, suddenly resolving themselves into- “Flying Sligs! They’re coming here!” Larry had yelled to the other villagers. They had ran for their huts, but the Industrial hunters were too close, and began firing, their tranquilizer rounds finding the occasional mudokon amidst the fleeing crowd. There were a few mudokons who had grabbed spoocebows, tomahawks and spears from their huts, and attempted to fight off the Sligs. A couple of the industrials fell to the mudokons, but the weapon wielders were quickly neutralized and knocked out by the Sligs. The last thing Larry remembered was seeing several sligs airlift a few mudokons away before feeling 2 painful needlelike darts in his side. Larry had been enslaved once before, and just when he was free and happy, they had got him again.
Larry temporarily snapped out from his reverie. Trevor’s words had reminded him of the nightmarish truth of his capture, and he rarely liked thinking of it. He looked at Trevor, Jeff and Max. His 3 best friends in this hellhole. Each of them had their own memories, their own tales, and they had told Larry.
Max had been a tomahawker in his village. A similar style of Slig patrol had come, only supported by pant-wearing Sligs and BigBros in a land vehicle, a crawler. He had fought hard, but 2 BBS’s had pinned him down, trapping his arms and legs while 3 Sligs tranquilized him in unison.
Jeff had been a... well, Jeff. Supposedly he had been making and selling miniature statues made from earwax when they came. He had been easily captured, as he was pretty much unaware of what was going on until he felt a heavy club strike the back of his skull.
Larry actually believed that, even the earwax thing. From what he could gather by Jeff’s actions and the accounts of mudokons from his village who had been captured, Jeff was an oddball. Spaced out, possibly sent mad by his previous time as a slave, or just a weird one.
Trevor had been a Shaman, or at least a Shaman in training, a spiritual guide and high ranking mudokon in his village. Patrols of Sligs had come to his village, he had fought using his shamanic powers, but combined efforts had overcame him. He now wore metal, chant suppressing shackles around his ankles, neck and wrists at all times to prevent him using his abilities.
Larry stopped his musing as he realised Trevor was looking at him. “Larry you, you alright? I mean, you just sort of went all tranced there.” Larry smirked, in spite of himself. “Yeah, I’m fine as I can be considering how things are Trev, I was just thinking about how it all started. It just makes me realise that, Odd, we have gotta get outta here.”
“You and all of us keep thinking that Larry. Trouble is, there ain’t much we can do about it right now.” Replied Trevor, ruffling his own head feathers in depressed frustration.
“Yeah, but, there must be, someday. I am gonna try again, with a plan this time. Will ya help me man?” Asked Larry, looking Trevor square in the eyes.
“Course I’ll help you Larry. So will Jeff, and Max, if you ask ‘em. But we can’t help you tomorrow. Remember, because you got caught, you’ve got to feed the Slogs, unarmed.”
“Heh, it’ll be the 5th time I’ve done it. I’m getting used to it now. Well, goodnight, if you can have a good night in this place.”


Chapter 3: Trials and Tribulations

A hammering on the cell door woke Larry and the others up. That was strange, normally they would simply have a Slig barge in and yell loudly and incessantly at them all to wake up, causing them all to stagger bleary eyed out of their gritty cells and off to that day’s first work session.
The banging continued, followed by a muttering of “Oops, forgot I had the keys.” Larry smirked as he realised who the guard was. A chink and the door creaked on rusty hinges and swung open. Sure enough, it was Arthur. Larry smirked again to himself. Arthur was alright as far as Sligs go. He was extremely lazy, even by Slig standards, and actually wasn’t that mean. Sure, you could still get a beating from him, but it normally only occurred if you annoyed him. Even then, he was often lighter in the beating than others. Considering the normal Slig mentality, Arthur was almost what you could call clever and actually, friendly. You might even be able to get a decent snack off him if you did as he said and brought him the Daily Deception newspaper for him during his work shift.
Many of Larry’s cellmates were complaining at Arthur’s noisy arrival, as normal ‘waking’ (If you could call getting yelled at by Sligs and clubbed until you got up and headed off to your Zulag station waking) time was at 5:00 am, rather than 3:30. Larry and a yawning, slightly disorientated Trevor exchanged looks. The early waking time was for Larry, as his oh so unenjoyable Slog feeding punishment for escaping was at 3:35, nice and early so he could like it as little as possible.

“Y-yeah I’m c-coming Arthu-ur.” Slurred a half-asleep Larry as he flopped out of the hard, bloodstained, corrugated metal board that formed the beds of the slaves’ quarters.
“Larry, I almost like ya, so I don’ really wanna have ta make you do this, but you shouldn’t try to escape. Yeh’ll only get yerself killed, and besides, you’re breaking factory rules.” Honked Arthur as he clamped his hand around Larry’s arm and frogmarched him out of the cell.
“Ugh.” Was Larry’s only answer.

“Look, consider yerself lucky it’s me. At least you aren’t gettin’ knocked about by another guard fer taking your time an’ I was considerate enough ta give you a few minutes to get up an’ out of bed.” Arthur remarked to him as they exited the slave quarters and began heading up a corridor to the sloghuts.

“Gee, wasn’t whoever set your rota kind to me eh?” Replied Larry dryly.

“’Cause I’m nice, I ain’t going ta hit you. Watch yerself though Larry, insultin’ yer superiors will only get you hurt more.” Larry noticed two things about what Arthur said there. The first being the fact that Arthur referred to him as Larry, rather than the customary ‘mud’, ‘slave’ or curse-name that the other Sligs spoke to the mudokons by. The second thing was the pained emphasis and distasteful expression on Arthur’s face as he said ‘superiors’. Maybe Arthur doesn’t like this place as much as he claims. Thought Larry to himself.
Larry stayed silent for the short remainder of the journey, grimacing inside as he saw the now-familiar, blood and rust-encrusted doors of the room in which the sloghuts were. Arthur released his grip on Larry and walked out of the room, leaving him to the mercies of the supervising Slig. Again, Arthur seemed to be less vicious than the other Sligs, letting go instead of hurling him face-first to the floor, and he muttered to Larry as he passed:
“Look, I know how many times you’ve tried escapin’ Larry, and Management’ll check the records eventually, so I’d not try again if I were yer.” And with that he exited, and Larry was alone with the Slig and the Slogs.
“Well, get to it p**shead.” Spat the Slig.
Larry tiredly plodded over to the meat bucket to pick up some bones and scraps for the Slogs, which were clamouring and barking to be let out of their kennels and into the feeding area, when he looked at the bucket. Wait, he thought, where’s the bucket?
He turned to the Slig, who had lit up a cigar and was grinning cruelly.
“Hey uh-sir, there’s no food here, how do I feed them?” He asked the Slig, cocking his head to one side as the Slig began to laugh openly.
“You figure it out, mud.” He guffawed as he pushed Larry into the large, open feeding pit.


Chapter 4: The Punishment

Crap. Larry thought as he fell into the pit. He landed with a hard, rather painful and ever so slightly squelching whump at the bottom. The Slig cackled loudly again “Yer’ve let yerself in fer it now mud.” Larry slowly picked himself up off the ground, rubbing his back and finding-Yuck! -remains of the Slogs’ previous meals on his back. Picking the bits of flesh and slivers of bone off his back, he turned around as the metal doors of the kennels grated up. Double crap. He thought as the Slogs scurried out. A good dozen or so of very big, bulky, fully grown Slogs were sniffing around, trying to detect their meal. Which is me. Larry thought miserably. Smaller sloggies ran around, yipping as they picked at the odd few remains from previous feedings. Larry knew they’d be after him right about….now. Which they were.

The bigger Slogs seemed to have picked up his scent and, just as Larry thought this, as if on cue, some of the Slogs began to approach him. Larry did all he could do. He began scooping up handfuls of the leftover flesh, and piling it up in front of him. The slogs were still nearing, going faster now at the smell of fear and raw meat. Larry knew not to panic, noise and fear gets you detected by 'em and killed, he thought, picking up a decent sized, relatively intact bone.

“Nice Slog, good Slog,” Larry spoke quietly to the nearest Slog, whistling to get its attention. As it ran towards him, he tossed it the bone. The slog had opened its jaws to bite Larry, but instead the bone landed in its mouth. One down Larry thought. The other Slogs were mainly eating at the pile of carcasses Larry had hurriedly made, but with so many eating at it; there was soon little meat left.

“Oy, yer supposed to feed ‘em fresh meat not leftover stuff ya f**kbrain!” The supervisor Slig yelled at him. Larry ignored him for now, concentrating on staying alive. He picked up what looked to be half of a Scrab’s rib, and tossed it at a Slog nearby. Unfortunately for Larry, he hit it on the head rather than in its mouth. The Slog began growling and barking angrily, certainly preparing to charge. Larry couldn’t hide his fear now, and the scent of fear just gave the beast a beacon towards him.

The Slog lunged on him, bowling him over and it began ripping and biting at his leg. Larry swore and tried to get it off, but that prompted the creature to snap at his hands and continue mauling his leg. Larry knew he was in a fair deal of trouble now. He panicked more and more and screamed in pain as it continued biting, sure it would reach the bone. That’s it, a bone! He thought. Larry clawed around, finally laying hands on a chewed, cracked but still intact bone by the wall of the feeding pit. His paw’s fingers brushed it and finally clasped it, and he swung the bone at the Slog’s head, prompting a yell from the Slig above.

“Hey, yer can’t attack the Slogs!” Once again Larry ignored him. The Slog however, had recovered from the blow, and was pretty mad , meaning Larry was in a lot of danger once again. It snapped at Larry was holding Larry, aiming for where the blow came from, and ended up locking its jaws around the bone he was holding. Larry quickly let go, relieved inside that it hadn’t got him. Fortunately it then began gnawing and chewing on the bone, leaving the injured Larry to huddle down and try to rest his hurt leg. The Slig above, seeing that the Slog had left Larry, seemed to get bored with the spectacle. He watched Larry whimper a little longer, but grew tired of it. Rummaging around for a packet of cigars, he plucked one out, lit it, and started to smoke while taking out a copy of the Daily Deception. at least he's not paying too much attention now. Larry thought, futilely trying to stem the blood flow with his paw.

A couple of the other Slogs approached him, sniffing for the scent of warm, fresh blood. Larry was a bit surprised by this, as the pit was ful of blood, albeit dried blood. He dragged himself over to the ribcage he had been crouched by earlier, and desparately tried to snap a rib off. One of the slogs had started charging at him, so Larry thought fast. He crawled over the Scrab ribcage, trying to let as much blood of his smear onto it as was healthily possible.The Slog continued its charge, and bombed into the ribcage, snapping a couple of the bones. It started gnawing at one fragment, but Larry knew it soon would be done.

He seized a sizeable piece of a rib that had cracked at an angle, forming a sharp edge. Ensuring the Slig was immersed in the paper, Larry started stabbing at the Slog with the bone. The creature reacted ferociously and leapt at him, but by now it had been stabbed with the bone 3 times, and was dead as it hit him. The thing went into convulions, the smell of dying, fear and blood attracting the other Slogs like Iron filings to a magnet. Just to be sure, Larry stabbed another Slog that was ripping at the dead one, hoping that would provide suffcient meat to feed the beasts. The Slogs pounce on the dying Slog in a frenzy, fighting each other for the meat, bting and growling, snarling and tearing. Soon, sveral more Slogs were wounded, and they then became set upon by the other Slogs. Unfortunately, the commotion atttracted the attention of the Slig, who, looking down, saw the Slogs fighting and eating each other.
"Hey, what did yer do ter make 'em do that?" He leered at Larry.
"Uh, n-nothing, sir. They j-just started, fighting each other. I think the bl-lood and lack of food m-made them go canni-bu-bal." Larry stammered, hoping he had made himself sound confused but not overdone it.
"That's weird, cause you were s'posed ta fill in fer the lack o' food." The Slig growled at Larry, tapping hi foot on the ground.
"They hurt m-my le-gu-g, maybe the b-blood confused them." Larry got out, the blood loss starting to make him slur and stammer for real. He shrank away as a hefty Sloggie started sniffing at him, curling up into a ball small enough that made the sloggie lose interest and turn back to the more meaty Slog carcass nearby.
"Well, I still don' believe ya." He spat. And the Slig studie the Slogs.

The beasts were now picking at scraps of the carcasses or fighting each other, and Larry lay there, trying to stay small and insignificant as he watched on. A couple of Slogs did approach him at times, believing him to be a wounded Slog, but Larry grabbed any remains he could find in reach (however unpleasant it was to pick up Slog enttrails) and threw it away, distracting the beasts and sending them away, giving him time to quietly move into another corner. This didn't please the Slig though
"Ey, what uyer up ter? Why'd yer do that gobs***e?"
Larry was getting woozy now, and barely replied "I w-w-was j-just tr-tr-tryin-g to l-live, so I c-caa-n-n s-still w-work."

Just about satisfied, the Slig guard fired his gun into the air. That meant the feeding was over. The Slogs froze at the gunshot, and then returned slowly and warily to their kennels, understanding the sound as a signal to stop. Larry sighed as it was over and shakily hauled himself up, using the dead Slogs and pit side as support,then the Slig hauled him out of the pit by his neck; and threw him down on the floor. Larry lay there for a while, moaning slightly and cradling his wounded leg. “Consider yerself lucky yer survived mud.” The Slig sneered at him, spitting on Larry then kicking him in the ribs. The Slig then decided to take a more active notice of Larry’s injury and purposely stepped on his hurt leg before bending down and once again, roughly hauling Larry up.

“Now back ter work, yer lazy scrounger. An’ yer gonna be workin’ with that bad leg, serves ya right fer trying ta escape an' kill the Slogs.” Larry cursed inwardly, and remained silently in agony as the Slig marched him (slowly, to cause him more stress on his wounded leg) off to the mess hall. “Oh, and yer’ve missed breakfast if yer were wondering, so get in there and get ter yer station, slave.” The Slig dumped him down on the floor in the hall then stomped back off to his post.

Larry half dragged, half limped over to an eating table and sat down heavily, looking around through teary eyes as the mudokons still here ambled off to their posts. He saw Trevor approaching with a look of concern on his face, but didn’t feel like recounting the punishment right now. Larry just tilted his head back, resting it on the rough but cool surface of the dining table, and closed his eyes, trying to blot out the pain.

Chapter 5 (the chapter with no name)

“Larry? La-rry?”
Larry opened one eye to find Trevor, Max and Jeff crowded round him, looking quite worried. Well, Trevor and Jeff quite worried, Max was his usually p’ed off self, flexing his hands angrily as a sign that he was close to boiling point already. He opened his other eye slowly and glanced around, trying to take in his bearings. Still in the cafeteria. Oh well, better than being operated on by a Vykker. Larry thought to himself.
“Hey, you’re awake.” Trevor smiled at him, patting him on the shoulder.
“How long was I out?” Larry replied, still in obvious pain from his leg.
“About 5 minutes. Arthur was on duty and he let us stay behind and make sure you were alright. I think he’s gone to get some stuff to bandage up your leg.” Trevor replied, gesturing at his injured limb. Larry looked down and felt nauseated. His leg had teeth marks all over it from where he had been bitten; bits of dead skin had peeled up here and there, and partially dried blood encrusted his leg all over.
“I hope Arthur hurries up soon.” Larry grimaced, the sharp pain becoming a constant throbbing ache. The others just stayed silent, except for Max, who was still muttering darkly. Larry lay there waiting for a short while, until finally Arthur came walking back in, carrying a small roll of grubby looking bandage in one hand. He hurried over to Larry, and set the bandages down on the table.
“You’re going ter need that rinsing first Larry, all that blood won’t help.” Arthur simply stated.
“I can’t get up on it, how do I get to a sink to wash it?” Larry asked, more of a rhetorical question that anything.
Arthur gave the expected answer “Fine, we’d better carry yer. Trevor, support him by that side, Jeff, turn on the sink, Max, err, just keep doing what you are doing now.”
Max continued his angry mutterings and pacing, while Jeff hurried and turned on the taps at the sink. Together, Arthur and Trevor supported Larry, one under each arm, and helped him to the sink. When there, they waited as Larry rubbed his leg clean of the dried blood and skin as best he could with the warm water, then they helped him back to the bench and sat him back down.
Arthur picked up the bandages and handed them to Trevor just saying “I take it you know how ter do bandages?”
“How did you get these?” Larry asked before Trevor could reply.
“Eh? Oh, I err, got ‘em from the surgeon, they’re quite old an’ dirty, but they’re better than nothing.” Arthur answered, not bothering to look at him.
Trevor got on with the bandaging, Arthur standing watch. It all was going quite well until another Slig entered the mess hall, and saw what was going on. Trevor suddenly felt a hard crack in his back, and ended up on the floor with a nasty pain in the small of his back, followed by another painful thud and another pain, this time in his shoulder; with the Slig honking in his ear “What do yer think you’re doing, eh mud? Why are you bandaging him? Leave him to it, he’s hurt, he has to sort it out himself. You help him any more, and I’ll clobber yer some more.” The Slig then turned to Arthur
“And why were you allowing it? Leave ‘em to deal with their own problems, that’s what yer should’ve done, mudlover.” The Slig snarled.
Arthur’s reaction was instantaneous: the Slig suddenly found himself on his back across the table with Arthur’s hand fixed around his neck. Even Max, who had moved for the Slig the instant he struck Trevor, was surprised by Arthur and halted, slightly dumbfounded, while Arthur, his face inches away from the other Slig’s spat out: “Listen Lak, that mud ain’t of no use to nobody with a leg like that, so I figured that if he’s fixed up a bit, then he may be able to get on with some work.”

“Not that you’d know much about doing work, what with you sleepin’ all the time.” The Slig, apparently called Lak responded.
Arthur’s grip tightened ever so slightly around Lak’s throat. “You really don’t have any brains at all do yer? Well, lemme try and get it through your thick skull that if he’s in a capable working state, then he can do something useful, which is something you aren’t used to doing is it? Now p*ss off before yer start annoying me.” Arthur released his grip and shoved Lak away.
Lak, looking decidedly harassed, picked up his dropped baton and shuffled off through the door, but not before muttering a quick “Stresshead fag.” As he left.

“I heard that!” Arthur honked after him, but then turned back to Trevor, who picked himself up off the floor, but was still wincing
“You alright?” He asked Trevor, who weakly grinned back as he finished bandaging Larry up.
“Yeah, I’m alright, but-” however, before Trevor could continue, Larry cut across him: “Arthur, how did you do that? I mean, I always thought you were a take it easy, non-violent guy?”
Arthur grinned, before answering. “Well, since I am a take it easy guy who ain’t that violent with muds, the other Sligs started taking the piss with me, calling me a mudlover, shoving me around, you know, treating me like one of you, no offence meant. So I go into a fair few scraps, and I had to learn to fight decently well because they kept grouping on me. So cause I got so much practice, I can deal with little sh!ts like Lak there, it’s only the older and tougher ones and BigBros that I gotta watch out for.” He explained, rather cheerily.
Larry however, had a frown on his face, and asked “Well, if they all are like that with you, why don’t you try and leave?”
“In case you’ve forgotten Larry, you can’t get a transfer from here. I tried to go back to the reopened RuptureFarms, I liked it there and had friends, plus it was much easier, but I wasn’t allowed to leave. When you come to Septik Snaks, you’re stuck fer life.” He replied, much less cheery and much more darkly.
“No, I don’t mean get a transfer, why not escape, that way you can be free, you’re your own boss, nobody attacks you, and you can do what you want!” Larry replied, slightly hysterical. Jeff looked quite eager, Max suspicious. Trevor however, slapped his forehead, having a good idea what Arthur’s reaction would be. He wasn’t disappointed.
Arthur’s expression changed from a thoughtful but upbeat look to an irritated and slightly angry look, and he sharply clouted Larry around the back of the head, before answering in a rather annoyed manner “Shaddup Larry! Escape? Are you mad? I don’t personally fancy the idea of getting my brains blown out; I’d rather slug it out here, not fully happy but at least-” His voice halted ever so momentarily, but Larry picked up on it “-making an acceptable living. Now get to work; I ain’t covering for you any longer.”
The four of them knew not to disobey Arthur, as he could get quite unsafe when stressed, as he had proven with Lak earlier. Max and Jeff went to their two separate workstations while Trevor continued to aid Larry along to the Zulag area that they both worked at. When there Trevor asked the obvious question:
“Why’d you say that Larry? You were bound to get in trouble.”
“I guess I thought Arthur was… different to the others. Better. But it seems I was wrong, at the end of the day he’s the same.” Larry sighed, although he didn’t believe himself when he said that. Arthur did hit him yes, but it seemed almost half-hearted, and Larry had picked up on the pause, although Arthur had also looked unsure of himself even before he spoke. Maybe he was different.

Chapter 6: Planning an Escape

Larry was relieved when the morning session was over, as pulling levers for a grinder was repetitive, and he had other things on his mind. He was able to traipse back to the mess hall for the mudokons’ 5 minute gruel break, where he could think properly and without interruption. He was consumed with thoughts of both Arthur’s behaviour, and of new ways to escape the factory. Ever since the night before, when he had been caught yet again, his fevered brain had been working on a method of escape that he hadn’t tried. He had thought up many outlandish ideas, and he definitely did not want to get caught again, he hardly relished the thought of having both his legs broken, so that he was confined to a wheelchair for a lengthy period. But last night, during the 1 hour of sleep that the slaves got, he came up with an idea that could work. It relied heavily on luck, and on where he was working for that afternoon. He limped over to the schedule board and checked, he was stationed by Boiler 4, and the heating units for it. Perfect, his plan could be attempted today, although it did rely on Trevor or one of the others helping him out. He hobbled back to Trevor, who had been served some of the greyish mess of the slave food, and relayed the idea of his plan:
Hey, Trev, I’ve thought of a way we can escape, no joke, no dumb idea, this could actually work!”
Trevor was hardly impressed “Larry, you invent hundreds of escape ideas every day, and none of those you’ve tried have worked yet. I suggest you give it a rest man, Abe, or Munch, or someone like that will come and save us eventually. Until then, all we can do is put up with this and hope.”
“Hope? We have no hope unless we try. Waiting will just get us killed, through the guards, the conditions or the time.”
“And escape attempts kill us quicker mate.” Trevor replied, resuming eating his gruel.
“Just, let me tell you the idea.” groused Larry, getting impatient. ‘Lunch’ break would be up shortly and unless he was able to explain his thoughts to Trevor, or Max, his escape would have to wait.
“Fine then.” Sighed Trevor, finishing his gruel and pushing the bowl aside.
“Look, this afternoon we’re working at Boiler 4, doing cleaning, right? Well, the heaters are great big metal cylinders, and have pipes leading from them to the factory roof, where they open theses hatches on them to ventilate too much hot air, right? You see, I’m thinking that I find some way to get into the heating tank, then climb the pipe and get out through the hatch. Whaddaya think?”
Trevor shook his head. “Another harebrained scheme Larry. First off, you need to find a way to get into the heater without there being too much hot air to kill you, second, to get the hatch open the heater needs to overheat, and that’d kill you. How do you do it?”
Larry grinned a nervous grin “Well, I was thinking, what we do is find a way to get the heating units to overheat, and then I climb into the tank, while it’s overheated but cooling down, the hatch will be open at this point, so I then just climb up the pipe, out the hatch, then walk along the roof, slide down the factory wall and get out!”
“It could work, but its unlikely Larry, ‘cause how do you get into the heating tank anyway?”
There’s an emergency manual door for when it gets really boiling in there, so that the door can be opened and it can be ventilated quicker, I get the door open, get in, and then climb up and out the pipe. I won’t get burnt ‘cause if I move quickly enough, I can’t get hurt by it, I’ll just sweat and be uncomfortable. And I needed to tell you Trevor, cause I’ll need you to shut the door after me so nobody knows it’ ever been opened, and you have to distract the guard while I reverse the heating direction on the boiler with the wheels so the heating units overheat. This factory’s boilers just distribute the warmth; it’s the heating units that actually warm the water for the boilers. Just trust me on this one.”
Bu, before Trevor could give his answer, he and Larry found themselves getting marched back off to their afternoon workplaces. Larry was bursting with anticipation inwardly, regardless of Trevor’s answer, he was going for it. This could be the moment he gets out.

Chapter 7: Barracks Life

Arthur watched Larry limp off to his Zulag, supported by Max and Trevor, and then sighed, shaking his head in thought and regret before walking off to his own station, as delivery loader. A boring job, which simply required taking the packaged food up onto a factory train then radioing the Depot or factory it was to go to when he was done.
'Just like my job at RuptureFarms, in the old days. Gee I miss them days. Wonder what they’re doing now.’ Arthur thought to himself, thinking of the friends he had made at his previous job. He shrugged dejectedly and continued on to his station.
2 hours later

Arthur headed off back to the lunch hall after the morning session, quickly took a Paramite Pie and then began towards the Barracks. Seeing as his job relied on the trains he often had a decent amount of free time, and today he decided to spend it on three of his favourite pastimes, drinking, reading the paper, and sleeping. He saw Larry entering the mess hall out of the corner of his eye, and watched him check the work rota board. He hurried out quicker, not wanting to have to talk with them now about what occurred earlier.

He entered the Barracks room and sat down on his bed. The Slig bunks were marginally better than the slave quarters, they were bigger for a start, and had no dried blood, but were just as hard and rusty. He began eating his Paramite Pie with a bottle of Brew at his side, deeply immersed in thought. That is, until the whirring of fellow Slig’s pants brought him back to reality. He looked up and gave an inward cringe. It was Lak. But not alone, he had a few buddies of his with him.
“Why’d ya do that earlier freak?” He yelled at Arthur, who ignored him and continued eating.
“I said, why’d ya do that earlier freak!?” He screeched louder, pushing the pie away.
Arthur gave him a look of extreme annoyance, reclaimed his pie and muttered
“I’d appreciate it if you’d let me eat my food in peace, sh*tstirrer.”
Lak and his four cronies looked angry, but then laughed, Lak retorting “I’m sure you would mudlover, but why should we? Go off and sleep wit’ one of your dear mudokon friends.”
Again, Arthur reacted to Lak’s taunts quickly, and physically, by standing and simply swinging the half-eaten pie right into Lak’s face, and following it with a left hook again to the head that floored the cocky Slig.
“Well, seein’ as I can’t eat in peace, leave me be and lemme have my drink, cause if ya don’t this’ll end badly for you.” Arthur snarled, reaching for his brew.
But before he could even take off the top, two of Lak’s cronies lunged at him, one striking his stomach, the other punching him in the chin. Arthur dropped a little, winded and dazed, but retaliated by driving his own fist into the first Slig’s stomach, and braining the other with his bottle, which cracked but didn’t break. It broke though when he stuck another of Lak’s pals who went for him, two of them now down with glass in their bodies and Brew all over them. The fourth and first ones however, got him down, one tackling him while the other swung at his face, catching him just below the mask.

They pinned him down as he kicked, bit and struggled, scratching them and weakening their grip, but Lak had got back up, and planted the ball of his pants’ foot right into Arthur’ chest, then kicked him sharply in the mouth (just under his tentacles). The two bottled ones didn’t get up, but Lak hauled up Arthur and punched at him while his friends pinned Arthur’s arms back. They shoved him onto his bed, and Lak reached for his throat to pay Arthur back for earlier, but soon found Arthur’s mouth clamped tightly around his fingers. He kicked and punched, taking Lak down again, but soon was down himself after getting clouted and ganged up on by three of the Sligs, one having recovered from the bottle blow. Arthur soon had the fight knocked out of him, and Lak and his goons beat him up a bit more, other Sligs who had lunch break having wandered in to watch the fight and cheer on Lak’s gang.

Arthur lay in a bruised and bloodied mess, while Lak grinned, still clutching his bitten hand, and leaned down, hissing “Don’t start what you can’t deal with mudlover.”
The other Sligs, bored now that the fight was over, and merely having to squabble over winnings form bets placed on the confrontation, ambled out, leaving Arthur to drag himself wearily onto his bed, spit out a broken tooth, and slip mercifully into unconsciousness.

Chapter 8: The Plan in Action

Larry was quite confident as he and Trevor hurried to their stations. Trevor kept trying to persuade him out of it, with comments like:
“Larry, you mess it up you might get killed.”
“Larry, this is too risky.”
“Look man, I think you should take more time about planning this.”
“You’ll end up hurt and in a lot of trouble Larry, don’t do it.”
“Larry, just bide your time until something better comes up.”
But Larry ignored it all, defiant that it would work. Trevor, seeing this, sighed, resigned that Larry was too stubborn to be swayed, and realised he would reluctantly have to go through with this.

They arrived at the station, and Larry seemed to get more good luck, the Slig on duty was late.
‘Hopefully drunk or in a fight.’ Larry thought to himself.
“Wait here Trev, when the guard turns up, whistle, or kick your bucket over or something to warn me, and keep him distracted as long as possible. When I overheat the boiler, get the door open as quick as you can, and try and make a lot of noise to get ‘em confused. I’ll take a deep breath, go in, and get out the vent shaft. Oh yeah, you’ll need to open that too when it overheats. ‘Kay?”

Trevor nodded dejectedly “Yeah sure. I still think you shouldn’t go through with it though.”
“Trev, you always were a pessimist.” Grinned Larry, and he hobbled off on his one good leg down the corridor, to find the heater wheel.
Meanwhile

Arthur lay unmoving on his bunk, in agony. He began to stir after a few minutes, and looked around, seeing no other Sligs in the barracks room.
‘Great, I’m late back to work and I’m going to get in trouble for fighting and slacking.’ He thought, wincing as he got up, and then vomiting instantly on the floor a mixture of blood and bile.
‘I need to get to the doc’s to get these injuries sorted out, but it’s on the other side of the factory.’ He thought again.
He hauled himself painfully out of the room, and began the long walk down the corridor to the medical room.
Back at Boiler 4

Larry finally reached the wheel; it was currently on the hottest green setting on the meter. To get the heater to overheat, it’d need to be in the middle on the orange setting.
‘That way I can get in but it shouldn’t kill me.’ He thought to himself.
He began turning the wheel, it was stiff and rusted, and hard work, but gradually it moved and the pointer began to creep into the pale yellow zone.
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Trevor looked up the corridor, while scrubbing the floor and at the boiler door handle, figuring the soapy floor might help make the Sligs slip, and if he could clean up the wheel, Larry might get it open easier. It’d have to overheat for the lock on the vents and door to automatically unlock.
‘And the easier Larry can get in, the better.’ Trevor mused.
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Larry continued turning it, the meter now on bright yellow, a few inches off orange. It was getting hard work now, the further the wheel was turned, the stiffer it got, and with only one good leg, it was difficult to put much leverage on the wheel.
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Trevor suddenly stopped his work at the sound of Slig pants, the guard was approaching. He quickly swung his bucket at the boiler door, the clang hopefully loud enough to get Larry’s attention.
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Larry heard the loud clash of metal upon metal, and realised the Slig was coming back. He’d have to work twice as fast. He began twisting the wheel quickly and forcefully, hoping he’d get it done before the Slig arrived.
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Trevor looked up as the guard rounded the corner, and it was apparent why he’d been late- he had obviously been I a fight. This Slig was quite burly, Trevor recognising it as one of that damn Lak’s friends. He had a nasty cut across his skull, which had been hurriedly bandaged with makeshift bandages-toilet roll and newspaper. There were also a couple of small glass shards on his face, and he was moving a little gingerly. Yet despite his injury, he had obviously heard what Trevor did, as he screeched
“What did you do here mud? Try to break the boiler, ya idiot?”
Trevor had been preparing himself should something like this occur, so he answered readily, yet in a convincing manner
“Uh n-no sir, I slipped on the floor while cleaning the boiler, and it hit the boiler, and it all spilled on me, and I h-hurt my head.” He rubbed at his eyes, attempting to make it appear like he was holding back tears.
“Good job you got hurt might make ya less clumsy. But hey, why’re there two sponges?”
Trevor was thrown off “…..erm, well I have two so I can clean it quicker.”
The Slig didn’t buy it “Ain’t there supposed to be two of you’s I’m watchin’?”
“Er,” Was all he could say, before the Slig shoved him aside and walked up the corridor, calling out
“Ohh green freak, Come out, or I’ll fill that corridor with lead.” Despite not having a gun, he figured it’d be a way to get Larry to show himself.
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Larry was panicking, the Slig was getting close and closer, but then, finally, he got the wheel into orange. The boiler had been gaining heat anyway due to his actions, but now it was going to blow. He waited, until-
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“What’s going on!?” The slig yelled as he rushed back to the boiler, hearing the warning sirens.
“Oy, what you done to it?” He demanded.
“Nothing, how could I have anyway?” He replied, quickly wrenching on the vent control wheel, and opening it. The Slig commanded “Open the door; get that steam outta the boiler before it blows!”
Trevor turned on the wheel, just as Larry reached the corner. He waited until Trevor got it open then rushed forward as fast as he could with one good leg. He timed it until there was a thick cloud of steam, and he heard a clunk and yell of pain- Trevor had tripped the Slig. Larry’s foot brushed something, a bucket, and he reached down, waited until he heard the Slig get up and with his eyes still shut against the steam, swung it in the direction he heard the Slig. Another yell of pain, another loud thud, and then Larry nipped into the boiler itself.
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He kept his breath held in, cool fresh air still in his lungs but running out, and made his way blindly over to where he knew the ladder was to the manual vent controls. He began climbing it, gradually running out of breath, but he finally reached the top, where steam was billowing upwards but out of the vent. He reached his hands up to grasp the edge of the coverless vent and pull himself out, but his luck had ran out.
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‘CRAP! It’s a shutter vent, not a lidded vent!’ He thought to himself, and wondered what he was to do now. He began to climb back down, hoping against hope that when the group of armed Sligs that was supposed to finish sorting out the boiler arrived, they wouldn’t notice an additional mudokon. His prayers were unheeded however, as he soon heard the sound of multiple Sligs’ pants, and one of them honking
“Hey, I can see some green blobbish thing in the boiler.”
‘Why me, Odd.’ Larry begged, as he heard the two fateful words.
“Kill it!”
Shortly followed, by the sharp ratatatatatat of gunfire.

Chapter 9: Failure Once More

“Kill it!”
The words that would spell Larry’s death rang out. Larry did the only thing he could do to have any chance of survival, he let go of the ladder. He fell a short distance (due to being over halfway down) as the bullets rang out, and luckily, as they had fired at the point where they saw him, most of the bullets missed. But only most.
Larry fell hard in a painful crumple, the searing pain of hot, shaped lead burning in his left arm, hand, shoulder, and back. It appeared his fall had caused most of the bullets to skim over him, but some had still connected. And filled his arm and left upper back with lead. He lay on the floor in agony, twitching and convulsing from the wounds, and realised that more or less half of his body was now useless.
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“Hey look, it’s that guy who keeps on trying to get out, whatsisname? Lardy?”
One of the Sligs kicked him in the side hard while the others sniggered, and then yanked him up roughly by his shot up arm.
“Heheheh, got yer eh? Well, I don’t envy yer. Yer second punishment’s s’posed to be ter get yer legs broked, but yeh’ve already got one broke and yer arm’s shot, so I bet we get to use yer fer clubbing practice.”
A second Slig sniggered as he said this.
Larry looked through watery, half closed eyes around. About Five or Six Sligs, probably the cleanup crew, were surrounding him, chatting, shoving him and laughing. The steam appeared to have cleared, and Trevor was also being clamped tightly around the arm by the original guardslig.
Trevor didn’t communicate with Larry at all as he was dragged out of the boiler.
‘Good.’ Thought Larry. ‘Maybe Trev won’t get anything for this.”
Meanwhile

Arthur had stopped walking when he heard the sirens, and turned to try and discern where they were coming from, merely thinking
‘Great, what now? Hopefully Abe’s broke in, that way I can frag him and get the reward, then bribe the boss so I can quit this place.’
He turned around and began to head in the direction of the sirens, soon joined by a couple of other Sligs. Well, not so much joined as got bustled long with them. They were busy chatting away about the sirens and what might’ve happened, one offered a bet, and the other accepted. This left Arthur alone with his thoughts.
‘What do I do now? If Larry’s got himself caught again then I’ll get busted down fer being friendly with a repeat offender. If he’s escaped I’ll get interrogated fer suspicion of helping hi escape. Gee Larry why d’you have to do this? You make it worse fer others as well as just you.......There’s only one thing I can do, I s’pose. Become a 'proper' Slig.’
“Ouch, watch where you’re going, dumb@ss.”
He had been so busy with his thoughts that he hadn’t realised where he had walked, he ended up walking into one of the Sligs he had been fighting earlier, that appeared to be restraining, Trevor?
He decided to start his new method now, he may not enjoy it, but it might at least give him an easier time of things. “Shut up you, I cracked you with a bottle before and I’ll do it again if yer don’t tell me what this guy’s done.” He snapped back gesturing at Trevor.
“’Ere, why should I tell you, anyway, and, ha! You hit me? Yer fergetting we creamed you before.” The Slig snapped back.
“Look idiot, I can just go to Management and say who yer not co-operating in an escape case, and then you won’t be too poplar in high places.” Arthur retorted, balling his fists regardless.
“Fine then. Well, we think he may’ve tried to help a mud try an’ escape. Green feller by the name of summat like Laffy. Tried ter get out before an all.”
‘Jus’ perfect. I’m gonna end up as Slog trainer at this rate. Thanks Larry.’ Arthur thought.
“Right, well, where is he then?” Arthur demanded.
“Why d’you wanna know? Not going to try and save him are you?”
Arthur realised he’d have to prove he had ‘changed’ physically rather than just verbally, so he swung out and gave Trevor a punch hard in the gut, sinking him to his knees, before giving him a blow about the head.
“Do I look like a mudlover anymore? Show me the creep so I can kick him.”
“Can’t. He’s been sent to Punishment Office ‘cause they reckon two broken legs doesn’t teach him anything, on account of having one broke already.” The Slig responded.
“Fine, I’ll deal with him when he’s back. And I swear, call me a mudlover from now on and I’ll prove you wrong, cause I’m different, and, I like it.” Arthur whispered in the Slig’s ear dementedly, kicking Trevor once for good measure before walking away.
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‘Oh Odd, what have I got myself stuck into doing now?’ Arthur thought.
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Trevor coughed up some blood, watching Arthur walk off ‘He’s been in a fight? Well, it’s changed him, and for the worse it’d seem. Looks like anything close to “happy days”, are gone for good now.
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Larry hung across the two Sligs’ arms before the doors of the Office, knowing that he’d soon find himself face to face with the irritable, sadistic Vykker Murphy, who was head of the Punishments Office. ‘I just hope that whatever I get sentenced to isn’t too bad, I don’t want to end up classed an invalid, cause that’ll be the end.’ He mused miserably, praying that the Vykker was in an extremely un-cruel, good mood.
The sliding door of the office opened, and Larry and the Sligs were dazzled by a rather unsettling purplish light.
“Come in.” Warbled a nasal, grating voice.


Chapter 10: Sentencing and Surprises

Vykker Murphy was the model Vykker. At least, the model Vykker in Industrialist eyes. He was grouchy, overly cruel, selfish, short-tempered, greedy, callous and profit-crazed. Again, the perfect role mode for any young Vykker. His appearance was pretty much of the standard Vykker, purple, a bit shorter and fatter than most, and wearing undersized spectacles. And today, Larry was going to get a punishment courtesy of him.
“Better behave good and act however he wants. I can’t afford too severe a sentence.”
Larry entered the Vykker’s office in pain, still sore from his mauled leg and obviously agonized by the bullets. The two Sligs threw him into the hard metal chair before Murphy’s desk, strapped his wrists down and tied his legs to the chair legs, then one moved to guard the door while the other moved to guard the Vykker, who had just risen from his chair and was peering at Larry with a malicious smile upon his face.
“Ah, the infamous escape artist Larry. Well, I cannot deny I have been anticipating sentencing you to something for some time. Now, I believe the usual punishment for two escape attempts is to have both of your legs broken, but one already is so, I may need to rethink.”
The Vykker sat back in his chair and turned it around, facing away from Larry; who currently was feeling a strong urge to tear the Vykker limb from limb, but obviously couldn’t in his current state. He kept his face looking fearful and tortured however, so that there would be no reason for the Sligs to further beat him.
‘Not that that ever stops them.’ He thought worriedly.
One of the Sligs had moved towards Murphy, asking about the punishment
“Err, sir? I were wondering, could you give him to us as clubbing and training practice? Cause I’d love ter beat the lil’ whelp up a bit.”
The Vykker turned to look the Slig in the eye, who shifted under his gaze
“No, oh no no no my silly little Slig. You see, this pest has been a great deal of trouble for us in Management, so I think he deserves a more, lasting punishment.”
‘That can’t be good.’ Larry thought as Murphy swivelled back in his seat to face Larry, and then stood again, scuttled around the desk, and bent down to whisper in Larry’s ear
“I know how many times you have tried to escape, you little piece of vermin, and believe me, it only takes one word to make Boss Godrar stick you in the grinder, but I’m keeping you around for now so as to crush slave morale each time you try and escape. So, I wouldn’t advise another escape, or I may just let something slip in one of the Directors’ conferences.”
Larry shivered, he knew he’d have to be very careful from now on. It looked as though he truly was unable to try and get out from now on.
Murphy returned to behind his desk, with another of his evil grins on his face.
“But enough talking of the future, now I must decide your punishment. And I think it should be I who carries it out. Well, for some time now, the few Vykkers here have been trying to develop a serum which prevents meat from going off, by numbing it, cooling the blood and basically draining all nutrition from the meat temporarily, so that no bacteria eat it, and it doesn’t rot, and it can be stored for as long as we wish without the need of salting. It has to be temporary, as flavourless, useless lumps of cold meat would not sell. Now, we believe we have developed a formula to do this, but I personally do not wish to test it on our produce. So, I will test it on you. I don’t wish you to die, as a lost worker requires expenses to be paid to replace you, so you will probably survive the testing. But believe me; you will probably have some after-effects for some time after, which will hopefully teach you to NOT WASTE OUR TIME BY ESCAPING. Now, Sligs, remove the slave from his chair and bring him to the product testing laboratory, and we can begin.”
He then turned back to Larry as he was hauled out of the chair
“Oh, and believe me slave, it won’t hurt a bit. At least, not until I give you the injection!”
Larry shivered, terrified, as Murphy laughed sadistically and exited, the Sligs frogmarching him out straight after the Vykker.

Chapter 11: Pain and Suffering

Worry. At what would happen to him.
As the Slig ‘escorts’ marched Larry to the product testing lab, Murphy grinning and making notes on a clipboard along the way.

Dread. For what was soon to come.
As the laboratory’s doors opened, and Larry was marched inside, while Murphy hobbled over to some sort of chute and inserted a bottle of some strange liquid into it.

Fear. Towards the horrors that he would experience, and his impossibility of escape.
As he was strapped into a traditional Vykker operating chair. Straps were bound tight about his wrists and ankles, more tied across his shoulders. A leather choker was fastened about his neck, and a metal head restraint jammed about his forehead roughly. The restraint was old, and carelessly jammed on, cutting his head slightly. The restraint was clamped on, and winched up slightly by a button at the panel which Murphy now stood at. Larry felt his head and body straightened, as he sat there, unable to move, in utter terror.

Whatever the metal thing that Murphy had put the bottle in was, it was moving. Towards him, at a frightening pace. Noticing the end of the contraption being a long point with a slight hole in it, Larry suddenly twigged.
Ahh, it’s a big syringe....then…Dammit, I’m in trouble.
The syringe neared, the point of it inches of his neck, which was apparently the injection point. And the tip was drawing nearer each second. Larry could feel his heart hammering inside his ribcage, as the bluish fluid that was in the inserted bottle seemed to drain towards the end of the mechanical syringe.

The fear intensified. Then, Pain. Lots of pain.
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Trevor sat gloomily in his cell, pondering Larry’s fate. He had been sent back to his cell rather than made to continue the work shift because, under directions from a Junior Executive towards the sligs, he was a threat to the work force and needed isolation then questioning.
He remained in his worry, looking up for a moment s he saw a Slig walk in, holding some pieces of paper. The Slig tied each onto a bar on each cell using some string that had been threaded through the paper, and then made to leave. Trevor, curious, called after the Slig.
“’Scuse me, but what’re them pieces of paper for?”
The Slig smirked, then walked back towards him a bit.
“Well, I don’ need ta tell ya, ‘cause you can find out for yerself. Just ‘ave a read, that is, if you can read, mud freak.” The Slig honked a laugh then continued out. Trevor shuffled over to the paper, tied to the bar, and read what was on it. The more he read, the more his face began to show a look of distaste and gloom.
“Oh Dear.”

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Larry screamed in pain as the needle broke the skin on his neck, hot tears of agony flowing down his face as the point entered his flesh, before feeling a horrible liquid enter his throat.
The pain continued, burning as though a white hot poker had been stabbed into his neck, before the feeling spread around the whole of his body. Gradually however, the pain fade, to be replace with a more chilling sensation, literally. He felt his body go cold, not on the surface, but inside. It was a peculiar feeling, to have your outer body warm but your bones, blood and muscles feel iced. But soon, he couldn’t even feel that. In fact, he couldn’t feel any of his body. He felt numb, as though he he’d been standing in severe frost with nothing but his loincloth on.
Soon, more strange feelings developed. The pain returned, but in his head, and in his heart, a dull ache and sharp throb respectively. He tried to cry out, but found he couldn’t. He tried to move his fingers, but his whole body felt like jelly, and felt shrivelled and itchy. His brain processed as well as it could that this must be the stage where the nutrition is drained, but shortly he couldn’t even think, or see, straight. He couldn’t even tell if his heart was beating, having lost completely all feeling in his body. A dull pressure seemed to be beating on the inside of his head, his lungs struggling to draw breath, before stopping.
Even as he gradually suffocated from paralysis, Larry’s mind dimly registered that this must be what it’s like to be a zombie. Everything seemed to fade, Larry barely knowing he was alive, until a second injection, unfelt but felt at the same time was made into his stomach. Gradually the pressure on his head faded, the pain changing to more of a weary ache, as though he had overworked himself physically. Sight, and thought, and feeling, returned to him, warmth very slowly reappearing as well. His body felt less atrophied and he felt less ill, these sensations being replaced by a strong desire for rest, and a nausea that was nothing to do with his emotions, but all to do with his condition.
The Sligs, who had watched with fascinated glee, now unstrapped him and threw him hard onto the floor, one kicking at his ribs as well. Murphy peered down at Larry with a look of triumph, slight surprise, and a sneer.
“Well well well little troublemaker. It seems you’re tougher than I thought, and you have proved my serum to be a success. I congratulate you for surviving, but, had my formula been incorrect, I promise you that I would have informed Boss Godrar of your past misdemeanours. As it turned out correct, I’ll spare you the grinder for now.”
He turned quickly to the Sligs, who snapped to attention.
“Sligs, take this piece of filth back to his cell, now. And make sure he doesn’t leave your grip or sight.”
Both Sligs gave out the standard reply. “Sir yes sir boss Murphy!”
The two then saluted, hauled Larry up quickly and painfully, and half marched; half dragged him wordlessly out of the labs.

Chapter 12: Consequences

Thud! Larry’s face hit the hard corrugated steel floor. “And don’cha try that again, or we’ll make sure you end up dead, mud.” Snarled one of the Slig guards through the door bars, as he locked the barred door shut. Larry was unable to reply, the blood from the cuts on his head and now on his face mingled with the tears he tried to hold back.
‘Wait, this is familiar, like the last time I was caught. I hate déj* vu.’ Larry thought. Although this time, there was no consolation from Trevor, no ironically just words from Jeff, only the anger from Max as the brutish slave shoved Larry into the far wall.
“What the-” Larry began, but was soon silenced when Max threw him down onto the floor.
“This is what’s up!” Max raged, forcing Larry to the cell bars, making him look at a piece of paper that, while now tattered and muddy, could still be read. Trevor looked on in worry, as did Jeff, as Larry read on, still held tight by Max.
Upon the paper, it read:
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By order of Septik Snaks CEO, Chairgluk and President- Boss Godrar, the following orders have been imposed upon mudokon employee life to prevent any more escapists:
1) Sleep will now take place with two Slig guards to a cell for the full rest period.
2) Lunch is now cut to 15 minutes, and any mudokons finished before that time report to their stations immediately. No exceptions for handicapped, incapacitated or late mudokons. Any that stay beyond the lunch period will be physically punished and put on Stockyard cleaning duty for a week.
3) Two Sligs will now stand guard at each work location within each Zulag, and they may use any force necessary to keep mudokons in order.
4) Company Policy #134, also known as the three strikes rule; is officially ended, to be replaced by Company Policy #326 aka the 1 strike rule. This new penalty means that any Mudokon in breach of 1st degree rules will be isolated with 1 meal a week for 3 months, those in breach of 2nd degree rules will be isolated with 1 meal a week for 5 months AND be put on Slog feeder duty in one of the Livestock Zulags for 1 month. Finally, Mudokons in breach of 3rd degree rules (Such as assault upon an Executive, escape attempts and persistent or organized mass work haltage) will be executed in the grinders.

These new orders are in conjunction with the new Company Employment Decree #97, as officially signed by Boss Godrar. If you have any complaints about these policies, please take them out on Mudokon Employee 230, known as Larry. We have provided his Employment Induction photo below should you have difficulty in recognizing him by name alone.

Signed
Vykker Rasputin, Employee-Management Relations.
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Larry stared at his picture in horror, before he felt himself wrenched away by Max who, still red with anger, struck him down with a hard right slap. The other twentysomething mudokons in his cell had crowded around to watch, half enjoying seeing the one who had caused such strictness get injured, the other half-including Trevor and Jeff- watching in fear and fright.
Max spat a rage-filled sentence out slowly, forcing Larry back down with each pause:
“You made…our life even…harder…you ruined any chance…of getting along… in … this place…you sneaking…moronic…stubborn…pissheaded little slurg!”

Trevor watched on, his chant-suppressing shackles stopping him from using his (admittedly incomplete) shaman powers to help Larry. So he could do little but think to himself ‘Max is started to sound like a Slig. This looks bad.’ What was worse was with each venomous insult and shove or blow, Larry gradually turned bluish, a sign that depression may be imminent. Max, not noticing, persisted, until Larry finally snapped, and he curled up, blue-skinned, in a sobbing ball, weeping with regret about his actions and begging for Max to not hurt him. This pitiful sight seemed to finally bring Max back to as close to sanity as he gets, and, rage spent, he sagged to his knees, patting Larry and mumbling that he hadn’t meant it.
Half the crowd looked relieved that the onslaught was ended, the other half looked as though they wished Max had done just a bit more to make sure Larry got the message that he’d f***ed up. Trevor noticed that they were no longer alone, that a few Sligs had turned up to watch, including, to his disgust, Arthur and Lak, who were muttering to each other and exchanging what appeared to be light-hearted apologies and acceptances. However, Arthur seemed to have a hint of….something not quite genuine about him. Whether his stance, his expression, his actions or what, Trevor didn’t know, but something was up.
“We better check on Larry.” Jeff muttered, who was seemingly in tune with reality for the moment, which snapped Trevor out of his thoughts.
“Yeah, right.” He replied, and they both hurried over to Larry, crouching down and trying to bring him out of his depressed state. Chatting amicably, giving him sympathy and encouragement, this worked with most mudokons. Larry’s appearance seemed to become healthier in mindset, the blue tone faded and he stopped sobbing, but Trevor and Jeff, and Max to an extent, knew it would be some time, if ever, before he was back to his old state.

Chapter 13: 1 Year Later

A Year had passed since ‘The Day’, as the four called it. A year since the day when it had all turned around. A year sine the slig they had thought of as a friend, Arthur, turned out to be like the rest. A year since the escape that had gone so badly wrong had nearly cost Larry his life. A year since the Preservation Pills had first been tested (And were now making very good money for Septik Snaks), and on Larry no less. A year since the day when the Company Employment Decree #97 aka the 1 strike rule, had been implemented. And a year since the friendship between four mudokons had been so badly shaken by the repercussions of this Decree.
Little has changed in the running of the factory, the new rule and new product being the only difference between now and a year ago. However, much has changed for the inhabitants of the factory.
Larry, once an optimistic, stubborn, dreamer of a mudokon, who never said die, has changed. The depression, sparked by the fight with Max, has faded, but it has left its effects. Through his 3 companions, Larry was able to shake off his misery; however it has struck deep, with Larry no longer having the will to resist, t try and escape. His courage has been destroyed, and he has become just another slave, rather than a secret source of inspiration.
Trevor has grown wiser, yet weaker as well. The new Decree has made it impossible for a mudokon to live a capable life, the Sligs on guard at sleep-hours preventing Mudokons from getting rest, and the scarce time for lunch draining them of food, and of sources of energy. While Larry has been hurt mentally, Trevor, like Jeff, has been drained physically.
Speaking of Jeff, he too is a shell now. No longer the relaxed, calm-in-any-situation, carefree guy he was, he is now a recluse. His past addictions to Brew and Gas haunt him, his addled mind no longer proving a source of untimely calm. The hardships of modern factory life have affected him to the point where he is often the one in the corner, remaining quiet and still. Not in a depression, but in solitude. He brightens up occasionally, but his weakened body doesn’t do well for his conflicting brain.
Max has also changed. His rage is harder to spark off now, for he fears he may again harm a companion. He is not shunned by Larry, yet is viewed as a crazed lunatic by most, feared by Trevor and not so much ignored as treated indifferently by Jeff. Those who supported him in the fight now steer clear of him, afraid they might set him off. This has sent Max dangerously close to depression, he is no longer a permanent reddy-green, but at times of trouble, almost a turquoise colour, signs that he may slip into the state that afflicted Larry for almost 5 months. His physical state has drained too, his formerly bulky form now a slightly lankier frame that shows he was once a formidable mudokon, but a harsh lifestyle has got the better of him.
But it is not just the mudokons who have changed. Arthur has changed too. He is now pretty much a ‘normal’ slig. He won’t say no to beating a mudokon, he may not be friends with Lak and his gang but is no longer an enemy of theirs. As for his treatment to our four....heroes, for lack of a better term, Arthur is cold. The neutrality bordering on friendship he once shared with them is gone, replaced by a dislike for them. He will beat them viciously if they displease him, and yet, behind this new Arthur, there is still something not quite genuine.
So all in all, life at Septic Snaks has taken a turn for the worst in the past year. The friendship of Max, Larry, Jeff and Trevor is hanging by a thread, Arthur has gone all-out Slig, slave life is at its hardest, and the factory is making enough money to replace the slaves who die of the conditions.
‘Things can only go up from here right?’ The 4 mudokons would each think, unknown to each other; as every day drew to a close. These thoughts occupied the minds of all four more or less every night, ‘Sooner or later, that Abe guy or someone will save us, hopefully.’ was the thought each had at many mornings. And morning it soon would be.

Chapter 14: A Further Descent.

Larry dragged himself up of his bunk as he heard the door flung open, he hadn’t been able to sleep anyway. He, and the other mudokons, rarely slept anyway, especially considering how hard they were worked now. His body felt cold- a lasting side-effect of ‘Meat-Freez’ as it had been dubbed. He shuffled out of the door noticing that it was Arthur who had woken them. He looked at the Slig he had once nearly been able to call a friend, almost trying to look into Arthur’s soul. Arthur looked away uneasily and pushed him on, hurrying the mudokons out and off to work.
Pull the lever. Wait for the meat to drop onto the conveyor belt. Pull the second lever, moving it along the conveyor belt for another mudokon to move on. Repeat. Larry was sick of it. Over 22 out of 25 hours a day spent performing one action. Today he hadn’t even got breakfast; another mudokon had taken his bowl from him before he could even start to eat.
‘They still hate me for what happened last year.’ Larry thought, miserably. Every day he’d come close to returning to his depression, indeed there had been points last year when he had. He’d never attempted suicide though; his resolve had always held just enough to prevent that. ‘But maybe death would be a release.’ Larry thought again, and again had to shake himself out of his misery by returning to his job- He’d pulled the lever for the meat chute several times without moving the conveyor belt on. Meat was piling up and the others on his station were moaning already. He hurried to pull the other lever, trying to let the others catch up, repeating “Sorry, sorry!” as he did so.
Trevor, a few sections along from Larry, was also deep in thought. Rather than being depressed however, Trevor was thinking about a mixture of Larry and Arthur. Never did a day pass when he didn’t think about one or both of the two- Concern for Larry’s emotional state and whether he would ever be able to try for freedom again, and for Arthur, he was trying to find a way to widen the chink he’s spotted nearly as soon as Arthur changed.
‘Arthur never seemed quite normal about his new attitude. There seems something forced about it, part of it is real hate and desire to fit in, but there’s also something I can’t put my finger on. As though he doesn’t completely resent us. I’ll have to try and get to him; back when he was ‘with’ us we always had a hope of freedom, what with having a guy on the inside more or less.’ Trevor finished his musings, focusing on the task at hand. Only 4½ more hours until lunch.
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Max hauled another crate up onto the back of the truck, watched by an armed guard constantly. His strength was put to use here- lifting heavy food products in crates onto the truck, saving Slig work and saving the use of more mudokons. His anger motivated him, yet he would never go for the guard. Max knew the Slig would pop a clip of bullets in him if he so much as looked at him wrong.
‘I may be hot-headed, but I ain’t stupid. I know where to stop. At least I do these days.’ Max thought to himself, straining and lifting another crate onto the truck. He’d do this for 20 hours, and then work another 2 hours feeding the scrabs, trusted to be able to handle them. He was hungrier than usual today though, having had little food, so wasn’t sure how he’d cope when it came to his end-of-day routine. 2 hours until the 15 minute lunch break.
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Jeff scrubbed away, working his rear end off cleaning the bloodied floor of the meat storage room. He watched another chunk of meat, this time seemingly Elum, drop through the trapdoor, and watched as another pair of mudokons dragged a slab of meat over the trapdoor for the next drop.
“Stop slackin’” Thwack!
The slig keeping guard over his area, who was standing next to him as it was a convenient position, raised his club again. Thwack! Thwack! Thwack! Another three blows. Jeff’s back was screaming in pain, as was his head. He kept submissive and returned to scrubbing, before shuffling on to another part of the floor.
“Wait! I wan’ this floor so clean I can see my magazine pics in it an’ this ain’t good enough.” The Slig screeched at him. Not wanting it to be any worse, Jeff shuffled back and cleaned the same spot again. When worked like this a job that should take 1 hour could take 5, which got him in trouble for not working enough.
‘Stupid Slig, being awkward just to make things worse for me.’ Jeff thought, his bead necklace rattling as he dipped his sponge back into the soap bucket.
The horn blew, signifying a 15 minute lunch break. Jeff got up to go, before being shoved back down by his guard.
“Were do yew think yer goin’? I want that floor clean!” His guard honked.
Jeff was used to being picked on by the Sligs; his eccentric personality was often the butt of physical or verbal abuse.
“Getting’ my lunch.” Jeff answered, getting up to go again.
Another shove back down, and a blow from the gun. “Don’ backtalk me mud!” The Slig snarled.
“Lemme go for my lunch!” Jeff retorted.
“Yeh’ve brought this on yerself.” The Slig answered, before beginning to lay into him with his gun.
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“Where’s Jeff?” Was the first thing leaving Trevor’s mouth after he got his gruel and sat with the other 2.
“Hey yeah, he’s usually here quite early, cause he’s stationed near the entrance this day of the week.” Answered Larry.
“Think something’s up?”
“If there is, I’ll sort it out.” Max snarled.
Trevor shook his head “I have a better idea,” he gestured to a group of Sligs “Arthur.”
“Yeah, get us another beating why don’t you. He. Has. Changed, you need to get that Trev.” Larry responded sarcastically, taking another mouthful of gruel.
“Look, I know you’ve noticed it about him too-something seems wrong.” Trevor got up and walked over to Arthur, who was talking casually to another Slig.
“Hey Arthur, can I speak for a minute.” Trevor asked.
Arthur turned, laughed and clouted Trevor “What? Talk ter me? Spit it out quick mud, I don’ wanna hear yer life story.”
“Well, my friend Jeff hasn’t showed up for lunch. He should’ve been here ages ago, and it’s nearly end of lunch. I think he might be getting beat up.” Trevor spoke bluntly yet carefully, giving the facts yet not asking for help.
Arthur’s eyes flashed with something other than sarcasm and hate, before returning to normal “And what? You want me to go watch it? Sure, a mud beating sounds fun.” Arthur shuffled off towards where he knew Jeff’s station for the day be, and Trevor, Larry then Max followed, the former looking satisfied, the latter 2 curious as to what Trevor was up to.
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Arthur entered the room to see a Slig beating the life out of a bruised and frightened Jeff.
“Scrub” Scrub! If you don’t start workin’ I’ll just club harder!” The Slig raged, forcing Jeff to clean the floor as he beat him.
Max started, but the other two held him back
“Lemme see what Arthur does.” Whispered Trevor.
Arthur started as well, but then stopped and strode up behind the Slig, grabbing the club as he raised it and yanking it off him.
“What’re you doing?” He asked.
The Slig looked confused, snarling back “Beatin’ a mud.” He said casually.
“No yer not, not like this while I’m here,” the mudokons looked on hopeful, only for their hopes to be dashed.
“That’s not the easiest way to beat a mud like this guy. This is.”
And with that, Arthur started laying into Jeff, over and over, hard, quick, smooth, back and forth, overhead and backhand swings with the club, pounding Jeff’s bare body time after time.
Trevor, Max and Larry looked on, horrified.
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So that's where I left off. The new chapter will be posted tomorrow if enough interest in this is shown. Anybody who is able to find the time to read it all, please post back with your opinions.
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I'm finished reading it and I have to say I'm falling in love with this fanfic. I love how you made the Sligs so mean and I love the Mudokons too.
Great job! I must read more!
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Wow. I've just read so much I think my eyes have withered up like raisins. >>
Awesome work! Nice to see you're continuing it after the cliffhanger. I feel bad for Jeff now. :C
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OK, the first update to this story in over 2 years. I've been worknig on and off on this chapter for ever, so I hope you like it.

Chapter 15: Anguish
Shocked yelps. Cries of pain. A Sliggish cackle. The thud of a hardened artificial object on living flesh. The crack of bone and coughing of blood.
The sound of wood splintering as a conical shaped metallic projectile burst through it at 100 mph. Mechanical footsteps on earthen ground.
Metal feet resounding off metal flooring. Stunned silence. Coughs and cries, detected yet unseen. Gasps, tentacle-obscured sniggers. A clapping, patting noise. The crack of shaped steel into thinner metal. The hiss and wail of a door opening with strain, as though it were buckled by a kick.
Again, the fragmentation of wood as a smaller object exploded through it at terrific velocity. More mechanical footsteps, the sound of gyros whirring. A strangled sigh.
“Finally ya show some Slig in ya!” Congratulations from near-identical creatures, the familiar voice of the same species. The chugging noise and acidic, brain-warping taste of Brew. “Kick the scum like that a bit more, an’ yer might get ter play with the big boys!” “Seems the mud-lover’s gone mud-psycho! ‘Bout bloody time!” More peer praise.
The explosion of wood and ringing of metal colliding at high speed, as the sharp drumroll of a spray of steel, pointed pellets burst through thin wood and into the linked metal of a fence. A roar of rage and pent up frustration. A heavy thud as curved metal resounds of soil.
Arthur hurled the gun across the target range. The factory-line weapon rebounded off the chain linked fence, reverberations sent through the air. Kneeling on the sodden ground, he released the torment bound-up in his psyche. The tempest faded, the tidal waves of anguish shrinking to a gentle lapping. Still he knelt there, not moving except to bring his palms up to the temples of his skull, then down across his brow. An act of irritation, of subduing anger and restoring calm.
“What’s up with you? You regrettin’ the switch from peace-lovin’ choir Slig to slave-driver?” An oafish remark, made by an equally oafish personality. Arthur turned his head to look at 2 spires of metal, which resolved into a Slig as he turned his gaze more skyward. “Whaddeyew want, Lak?” The slig whom had once been a hated entity in Arthur’s life, still far from a companion and drinking buddy, yet now a person who he could accept in a small degree, stood over him.
“You look like you’ve been smokin’ some of the Boss’s funny fags while pissed on Brew. You suffering from a hangover, or is yer brain explodin?” Oafish remark, oafish cackle.
“It’s something you ain’t too acquainted with, Lak. It’s called a brain, an’ a conscience.” Servos whirred, bent steel straightened out. Arthur stood up.
“So you are regrettin’ hittin’ that mud. It happened a week ago, ferget it. An’ I do have a con-shee-ence, I was conshee-enshus enough ter just rough you up that time a year ago when you thought yer’d take on me an’ my crew.”
“Crew? We ain’t in the streets of the big cities, so drop the gangster speak. An’ it’s not that I’m regrettin’ it, it’s somethin’ you don’t have the thought capacity ta comprehend. An’ yer pronouncin’ conscience wrong, prick.”
Arthur turned to walk away. A slap of skin on skin. He looked at his shoulder. A Sliggish hand clasped it. He sighed.
Gyros clicked as they turned round. Arthur knocked Lak’s hand away and leered up close. Mask to mask. “I tried bein’ tactful, and that didn’t work, so I’m tellin’ ya plainly. F**k. Off.”
Gyros clicking and turning again. The whirr as motors started up. Arthur walked away.
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“Tehehehehe.”
“……I’m getting worried mate.”
“Tehe, guhuhuhuh…..”
“I know what you mean Larry.”
“………BWAHAHAHA!!! HA!”
“Ah, I’ll sort this out!”
“Hey Max, wait-“
“Um, Max don-“
“Tehehe-ugh!!”
Trevor and Larry sadly looked on as Jeff hit the floor, propelled largely by Max’s fist. The poor, space-out mudokon, so severely troubled by his suffering the week before, had been dozed out on Laughing Gas. Unfortunately, getting him back off of it had proved near impossible.
Trevor trudged to his work wheel, turning it and opening a cargo door. “I’m concerned about Jeff, Larry. He always used to be so laid back, even if he was a bit…..weird. But since Arthur went nuts on him, he’s been bad. We only put him on the Laughing Gas yesterday, and he’s already off his head.”
An anger-flushed red face twitched into a snarl as the big Max hauled a crate of unidentifiable Septic Snaks product onto a trolley. “I told you, I sorted it out! Fist to the face, he’ll wake up fine!!”. The voice was less of a remark, and more of a booming yell. Enough in fact, to return the prostrate form of the less-than-watchful guard Slig to a state resembling consciousness.
Larry moved to take the trolley through the cargo door. “Wake up fine? You know what happens to guys out of it on Gas! Hit them and they get depressed or go psycho. He’s already well on the way to being a fully addicted Giggler after just 2 days. Somebo-“
Larry’s words were cut of by a piercing “OI!!!” from above. The clear winner of the Efficient Slig of the Month award had apparently noticed the comatose form of Jeff on the cargo bay floor, and remembered his Moolah was earned for stopping that kind of thing. The familiar ear-grating sound of Slig pants plodding assaulted the eardrums of the mudokon crowd as the Slig climbed down the ladder and walked over.
“Right scum, I see that gas-happy little twerp o’ yours is stargazin’. Who’s the guy that knocked Mr Cheery inta la-la land?”
Larry sighed inwardly. Another Slig who felt he had to stick his nose in. Normally, they didn’t care what the Mudokons did as long as there were no casualties. But lately, they’d been actually going out of their way to get the labourers into hot water. Larry was still surprised the Sligs could take the effort to do so.
“Eh? Yer not gonna own up? Who’s the braindead lummox who likes ta hit things?” The Slig cast his grotesque goggles over each of the nearby mudokons, with more slaves wandering over. A bit of factory drama was at least a distraction from the monotonous yet lethal tasks pressed upon them.
The Slig finally glared at Max, and a low cackle emitted from his gullet. Gyros squealed as the guard went tentacle-to-lack-of-nose with the scarlet brute. “I think, it were you. I think, youse the troublemaker. Yer that big red bastard that likes ta pick fights, ain’t yer? What’s yer name, Max? Well, Maxie, yer gonna be in maximum trouble, hur hur, get it? How’s about Mr Angry gets introduced to Mr My Gun? Eh?”
If hatred could kill, the Slig wouldn’t even have a corpse left. Max’s rage was bubbling over to the point that you could almost see it bursting out of his eyes in physical form. His hand twitched, itching to give the Slig a physical form of that anger, but Larry and Trevor, well aware of their friend’s less than saint-like temperament, quickly stepped in, gripping his wrists.
A malicious grin. A cocking of the head. The Slig’s visor-covered eyes glanced from Larry to Trevor, eyeing them up. “Hoo hoo haha, I know you.” He glanced at Larry “You’re that muppet who kept tryin’ ter escape about a year ago, ain’t ya? What’s the matter, ran outta ideas? Have yer escape plans escaped yer head?” The squid-faced creature grinned like a buffoon at his own joke “I think Mr Escape Master needs a reminder from me about what happens ta pesky grunts like you.”
Larry stared the guard right back, not with anger, but with defiance “I think Mr Guard needs to stop referring to everybody and everything as Mister. I think you’ve got some inferiority complex. I think you should just turn around and leave, cause it’s just going to be that much worse for everybody if you don’t.”
The silent member of the mudokon triumvirate in Trevor cringed, knowing what was coming. But, instead of the cold feel of rifle on malnourished flesh, there was just the odour of the Slig’s breath as another snigger reeked forth from his mouth. “Yeah. You think you’re smart, think you’re witty. Don’ worry, I won’t bother hittin’ ya. I jus’ need ta report you ta my superiorior” The Slig’s diatribe paused, his brain trying to catch up with his mouth and vocabulary “….ior, fa breakin’ employee conduct again. Remember, you aren’t allowed ta give ya bosses back talk, an right now I’m yer boss. An I think I’m gonna have ta file another complaint about how ya hurt the laughin’ lad down there, cause I actually don’ think tha roid monster ere did it anymore, I think it was you. You’ve always been trouble, an I’ve got ta take care of that trouble as part o’ my job. It’s my duty as an employee ta uphold factory rules. I might even get a promotion.”
Steel pivots sharply rotated as the Slig turned and stamped away. Larry released a frown. “Small words from a small Slig.” Trevor however, shook his head. “He can punish you Larry. You know that.”
The more outspoken of the two nodded. “I know, but he won’t. you saw him slumbering up there. He’s just trying to scare us.”
Max’s fists clenched, the silent leviathan finally emitting speech again “He can’t scare me. I’ll knock his tentacles down his throat next time!!!”
Shaman-in-training Trevor again shook his head. “You won’t Max, you won’t. And you can’t.”
A grimace emitted from the 3rd of them again. “Can’t do this, can’t do that. Things are getting worse every day. Jeff needs his head sorting out. Max needs a Chill Pill. You Trev, you need those chant-supressors off. And I need to get out of here.” And with that, Larry turned, trudged to the trolley, and started wheeling it into the loading bay.
And the wise eyes of Trevor observed Larry closely. Finally, Trevor allowed a small smile to cross his face. Upon seeing this out-of-place expression on the visage of Trevor, one of the watching slaves was curious. “What are you smiling at?”
The ghost of the smile vanished again from Trevor’s face. “You heard Larry. He wants out. He’s getting back to his old self again…..Though whether that’s good for us or bad, I don’t know.”
The mudokon made no inclination towards either mindset, and resumed working. And the prone form nearby stirred. “……HA!!!”
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I'm not 100% happy with it, I admit. I think the Slig and Larry interaction seemed a little forced, but I need to keep the plot moving to stop it just being lots of words and not much happening. Next chapter will arrive in a week or so.
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Great chapter!
I can wait a week. I think I'll read the other chapters again.
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As I promised, an update. This chapter has very little happen in it I'll warn you know, and I don't think it's up to much, but it's part of a driving force in a character direction so I'll stick with it anyway. But first, a history lesson on my characters:

Some of you may recognise Arthur from the W@RF RPG. His origins were this fic, not the RPG. Same with Dek, in fact. Both were intended to be characters for this story and the followups all along, but I first chose to use them in W@RF to flesh out their personalities more. I try to do this with most of my characters so they aren't 1-dimensional, with the aim that even the most trivial character has a personality.

Dek and Arthur grew beyond that purpose though, hence their seemingly perpetual time in the RPG, and of course the RPG has established a link between them, although again I had created a link between them already for the purposes of this story. For those who don't know, Arthur's backstory is that he worked at Vykkers Labs, before transferring to a FeeCo, (then W@RF), then to the factory in my story. Dek was at the same Labs, then went to a different Lab, then W@RF. Wait and see what hapens next with him (I already know).

These characters have existed for over 3 years, and were invented when I first started on the story. So it's not RPG characters appearing in a fic, its the reverse. Also, this story is of course set after W@RF, so again, that might explain some character traits.

Just a little explanation/clearup for anybody who recognises the characters. Anyway, on with what IMO is the weakest chapter of the story, since not much happens and it is pretty short (don't worry, the following chapter is much better):

Chapter 16: Psych Out
In the Slig quarters, a mind ticked on into overtime even after the body had shut down for the day. Arthur dreamed.
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Walking. Walking towards a door. Is this Septik Snaks? It looks like it. Along the corridor are mudokons working. But nearer to the door, there are mudokons in pain. Further on they are dying. Corpses follow, then skeletons, then dust. Then Arthur saw that the door was not a door, but beams of light that gave the impression of a door. He walked through.
A Vykker hunched over something. Ws it Murphy? Yes, must be. But these surroundings? They aren’t Murphy’s quarters. Fear. Memories. Arthur saw the Vykker turn around. It was not Murphy, but instead a former friend from times long past. Arthur heard his own voice speaking.
“Dek?”
The Vykker shuffled across the floor towards a cabinet. “You disappoint me Arthur. I’ve been watching what’s been happening. I’m always watching. Always there.”
Again he felt his tentacles move of their own accord. “Yer a memory. The past. I’ve not seen yer for years.”
“No. but I’m here. In your head. Memories are light, and sound are they not? What are we? Light and sound. Everything is here. Everything you remember. And everything you are.”
“But not everythin’ you are. You ain’t real, right now.
Arthur then saw what Dek had been working on. It was an operating table, and upon the table, was him. His own body was lying on the table, chest cut open and innards on display for all to see. A strange sensation, as if his stomach had just fallen down through the floor and been replaced by an agitated Slog, struck Arthur. There he was, looking at himself. And he was being operated on.
Arthur took notice of himself, and observed something strange.
“There’s no heart. My-that……body there. There’s a heart missing.”
The echoed memory of Dek busied himself with a cabinet. “Yes indeed. Curious, isn’t it? ‘That body’, as you said, I know you recognise it as yourself. And like you said, there’s no heart. The heart is linked to the soul, isn’t it? Or at least it is thought to be. No heart, no soul. Your heart’s missing, so your soul is. I believe that says something about you, and what you’ve been doing. How you’ve been misled. Or mislaid.”
Mechanical pistons transported Arthur nearer to Dek. He tried to clasp a hand on his shoulder, but it passed through. Dek’s skin was transparent, appearing to be a hologram rather than solid. Again Arthur spoke “You’re speakin’ in riddles. That aint’ like ya. You ain’t real anyway.”
Dek ignored him and walked to a door, that Arthur could have sworn wasn’t there a moment ago. “I’d like to show you something. Another experiment I’ve been working on, besides you yourself.”
Arthur shook his head. “You ain’t been experimenting on anything. You ain’t real.”
Dek again dismissed Arthur’s rebuttal and pressed a button. Arthur watched, confused, as Dek and the room seemed to melt away, as if wet paint running down a wall.
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The setting had changed. Where was he? The Barracks quarters? No, wait. Like the Barracks, but not. No beds, for one thing. Instead, they looked like…coffins? Arthur turned. What? How? In front of him, where again there hadn’t been seconds before, was Lak. Wait, not Lak. Two Laks. And their clothing. One, dressed in white. A white robe, a golden halo above his head. The other, dressed in red, with horns bursting fro mthe top of his mask, and a crimson trident in one hand. The 2 figures started moving closer, and as they moved, they flickered, as if poorly recorded camera footage, their garb switching between the 2 over and over. They began to speak. What had started as the Devil-Lak, but was now switching from devil to angel so fast Arthur had no idea what he was, spoke first, patting Arthur on the shoulder. “Well done Arthur! You’re finally being a proper Slig! Bout time too! Keep it up. Yer might finally achieve summat now. I’ll be glad ta go fer a drink with yer sometime!”
The Angel-Lak, or was it Devil-Lak? Then spoke, shoving the other Lak aside. “What the Odd’s got inta yer Arthur? This ain’t like ya. Now I may not like ya, but you used ta at least stick ta yer guns. I admire that in a Slig, it shows guts. But now you’re just tryin’ ta fit in, ta be one o’ tha gang. D’ya really think anyone’ll ever accept yer anyway after what you’ve done before? All that you’ve done is drive away the only allies ya had. Best ta undo what you’ve done, or just go.”
The other Lak re-emerged, striking the speaking Lak to the floor. “What’s he talkin’ about! Listen Arthur, you go back ta yer old self, an we’ll make Scrabmeat of yer. I can tolerate you now, but nto if ya be that snivelling lil’ mudlover again.”
This Lak was then struck by the other Lak again, and then, as Arthur watched on, the 2 Laks forgot him ,engaged in their combat. One of them gripped the other by the throat, throttling him. But then, as Arthur watched, that Lak’s head exploded into dust and nothingness, the rest of his and the other Lak’s body soon mimicking this action. Arthur saw a smoking rifle barrel in the corner of his eye. The scene changed.
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Arthur felt as though a centrifuge was swinging him in an arc, and suddenly, he was the one holding the smoking barrel. Where was he now? The rifle range!? Arthur then moved. But not of his own accord, as if he was a puppet on a marionette’s strings. He tried to speak, but nothing in his oesophagus moved. He watched as his arms lifted the rifle, shooting down a wooden target. Walk on, fire. Target destroyed. Walk on, fire, target destroyed. He then saw the next target, only it was not a target, but Lak. Tied to a post, immovable. He watched as his hands pulled the trigger, and Lak slumped, a metal slug buried in his chest. He walked on, and now lined up at a mudokon. Who, he didn’t know. Just a mudokon. Again, unable to stop himself, he fired, and the slave fell, bereft of life. He felt and heard his own metallic feet stomping on the earth. Wait!? Jeff? Now it was Jeff tied to the post, and a gunshot later, it was Jeff now deceased. Then Max, shot through the head with Arthur unable to do anything. Arthur gulped, as then Trevor was sighted on through the rifle, the mudokon giving him a look of disappointment as he fired the rifle. Arthur felt himself walk along the firing range again, and saw that the next target was Larry, and again, Arthur was helpless to watch as the mudokon’s life was exterminated. And then, Arthur saw, tied to the post, himself. Once more, with no power over his actions, he looked through helpless eyes as the rifle came up, the cartridge was loaded, and the weapon fired at himself. A sudden change of perspective, and he was the ‘him’ on the post, watching himself administer the lethal shot. A shimmer in the air, like a heat haze. The scene dissolved.

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Arthur woke up.
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There it is. Comments, opinions, critiscisms, whatever. Next chapter will be a little longer wait due to real life, expect it between 1 week and a week on Saturday.
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Chapter 17: Things to Come
Repetitive metal clangs rang out down a corridor. Hydraulics whirred as they carried the slig towards the door of an office. A plaque on the wall marked it as the residence of the owner of the factory himself, the Glukkon known to his workers as Sir, and to colleagues as Godrar. Arthur pressed his palm to the access panel. The automated voice lock bleated something in Sliggish, which Arthur responded to. The door slid open with a hiss of air, and Arthur stepped through, to be greeted by the unpleasant visage of Alberto, Godrar’s secretary. Alberto was a Chronicler, and like all of his species, ideally suited to tasks involving papers and forms due to an analytical mind, great patience and complete absence of an imagination. His beige skin was tight to his flesh, and though he was hardly a bony creature, the impression this gave was of a package wrapped in too small an amount of clingfilm. He didn’t have fat rolls, his skin was in too short supply to crease into such layers. Beady eyes flickered up at Arthur from behind thick-rimmed glasses, with no sign of interest nor indeed, life, from behind them. A stuffy voice was all that was needed to complete the picture of a perfectly uninteresting twit, and luckily it was supplied as Alberto squawked out “Yis?”
Arthur coughed. “Er, I wanna see the boss. Or at least, someone who can sort out the employment details.”
“Whit about?”
Arthur sighed. “I want a transfer. I’m……getting bored with my job here. I’m in a solitary rut, an I wanna go somewhere else.”
The Chronicler, not having the creativity to consider boredom, or indeed, a question about it, simply stated “Boredom.”
“Yeah. Boredom an’ just generally being unsatisfied. You know how it is.”
“Nyo. I do not. My jyob is to file papers, pass on messages, collect reports and h’assemble data. h’As far as I can see, satisfaction does not h’enter into h’it.”
Arthur was nonplussed. “Oh. Right. Well anyway, can I see the boss then, about a transfer?”
“Nyo. He is very busy, mhm.” Alberto answered.
“….Right. Well, who should I speak to then?”
“Vykker h’Rasputin. Ee is head of Employee-h’Management h’Relations. Ee deals with h’all the employment details. I sort out the paperwork.” The Chronicler said, and would have regarded Arthur with, if he had had the personality to do so, a scrutinous gaze.
Arthur turned to the door. “So, I can ask him about a transfer then?”
Alberto’s face showed no emotion. “Nyo. You are in a guaranteed contract. I know, as it is my dyuty to check all contracts and papers. You are not h’allowed to leave until you finish the remainder of your contract. Whit is your name?”
“….oh, Arthur.”
“Muhmmmmm.” The Chronicler turned to a shelf, withdrew a file, and leafed through it, stopping once he reached a certain sheet. “mhmm, yis. You have syixteen months to serve on your contract.”
Arthru stood there like a lemon, not knowing how to react. The Chronicler seemed to have said his piece for the day, for his face was buried in sheets again.
“Oh….right….well, thanks then.”
“Yis.”
Arthur turned and exited, glancing briefly at the opposite door, leading to Godrar’s personal office, as he left.
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Meanwhile, on the other side of that door

“….So I told ‘im what for about it bein’ the last time he’s gonna break the rules like tha, an came right here ta tell you.” The Slig wrapped up.
The back of the high swivel chair didn’t budge, but a Glukkon’s voice emerged from it “And what did you say his name was?” The voice barked.
The Slig paused. “Uhhh…Larry. I think. Anyway, he’s caused loadsa trouble before, an then he was mouthin off ta me an I reckon he attacked that stoned mudokon I jus’ told yew about, so I do, an from what I here he’s been tryin ta escape loads in the past, an I think he was the one what got those new reg-yer-ler-ations put in on the muds about a year ago.” The Slig paused again, seemingly to feel something was lacking. “…..um….and I think he tried ta sabotage a production line once. An’ I also heard he killed a Slig in the Slog pens, but he covered it up.” The Slig rambled, his less-than-efficient brain whirring into overdrive as he conjured up further crimes to place on Larry.
The Glukkon however, just chuckled. “Heh heh heh. I know ya made that last bit up. I’m also well aware of all the past crimes that that mud has committed.”
The Slig’s face glazed over “You are? Oh, right. But, hasn’t he broken the policy more than 3 times?”
A sucking noise, then a small cloud of grey smog puffed from behind the chair. “Indeed he has. 24 times, including escapes and cheekery, I believe. And though that would normally be grounds for execution, in this case he’s amusing me.”
Now it was he throat of the guard that constricted “Amusing?...Oh yeah….He tries to escape an is bad at it…..hur hur….”
“Don’t humour me ya idiot. I keep that skinbag around because it’s bit of a game. Executin’ him won’t do no good. He’ll just be a martyr, an then we’ll have 10 times the number o’ the slaves tryin ta rise up.”
Again, the Slig filled the silence. “Yeah. A mary-ter. Yeah.”
Another chortle from behind the chair. “Martyr. It’s martyr. Don’ use words yer peabrain can’t cope with. But it sounds like the lil’ vermin’s whipping up them mudokons inter somethin’ rebellious anyway. Gets em fightin each other, they watch when he insults yer instead of runnin away an hidin. He’s startin’ ter make em rebellious. 1 mud isn’t a problem, it’s a bit of sport. A whole Zulag of ‘em, that’s a problem. The whole slave base, that’s a problem. We don’t need another Abe.”
The Glukkon fell silent, pondering something. A slightly lighter shadow moved in the shadows behind the chair, as the Glukkon stood up and walked to a picture of the factory on a wall, keeping his back to the Slig. Finally, he spoke “Leave him fer now. It’s still a case of Fleech an’ Slurg, yer know, the predator playin with the prey. He’s doin no harm, and is just a lil pest. But if he starts becoming a big pest, bring him in. He’ll get a short drop an’ sudden stop.”
The Slig giggled “Heh heh heh. Into a mneat grinder, right sir?”
The Glukkon replied with a mix of sarcasm and frustration “Yes. Into the grinder. Now get out.”
The Slig nodded and hurriedly backed out of the office.
After he was gone, Godrar turned and walked to a floor-to-ceiling window, overlooking a vast expanse of the factory. He took a deep drag of his Lungbuster, and a smirk spread like a crack across his menacing face. “Heh heh heh.”
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Lift up sponge. Dip in bucket. Gather suds. Scrub.

Larry glanced up from his prone position at Trevor, catching his friend’s eye. The 2 were on scrubbing duty for the day, the idea behind alternating work designed not to improve mudokon job satisfaction, but to tire as many muscles in their bodies out as possible. After all, an exhausted workforce is less likely to be a rebellious workforce.

Lift up sponge. Dip in bucket. Gather suds. Scrub.

Trevor, careful to avoid drawing the attention of the Guardslig, met Larry’s gaze. “W-h-a-t?” he mouthed.

Lift up sponge. Dip in bucket. Gather suds. Scrub.

Larry glanced back at the floor as the artificial rattle told him the guard was walking past. He looked back up “I h-a-v-e a p-l-a-n.” He mouthed.

Lift up sponge. Dip in bucket. Gather suds. Scrub.

Trevor gave him an incredulous look, yet inside, his brain gave a satisfied “I told you so” grin. ‘What a surprise’. “F-o-r w-h-a-t?” Trevor mouthed.

Shuffle along the floor to a new patch of dirt. Lift up sponge. Dip in bucket. Gather suds. Scrub.

“F-o-r e-s-c-a-p-e.” Larry mouthed back. Trevor in return mouthed “W-a-i-t u-n-t-i-l-l l-a-t-e-r.” Larry glanced around, then signalled back “I-l-l t-e-l-l y-o-u i-n t-h-e m-e-s-s h-a-l-l.”

Lift up sponge. Dip in bucket. Gather suds. Scrub.

The Guardslig, stood behind Larry with his arms folded, uncoiled an arm and dealt a harsh blow across the nape of Larry’s neck. “Quit yer talking mud! Stop slackin’ an start workin’!!”

Sigh. Lift up sponge. Dip in bucket. Gather suds. Scrub.
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You're writing a Quitology?! Cool, I'm writing a Decology! I will read more of your fanfic!

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Hi MM, just started reading this and I noticed you used the wrong version of chapter 4, where Larry's in the slog pit. After uploading the version you posted here you then edited it because you weren't satisfied with it and one of your readers (ahem) gave you an idea you evidently preferred at the time.

Anyway, I'll keep reading and post again when I catch up. Arthur's introduction made me grin a mightily nostalgic grin.

"A hammering on the cell door woke Larry and the others up. That was strange, normally they would simply have a Slig barge in and yell loudly and incessantly at them all to wake up, causing them all to stagger bleary eyed out of their gritty cells and off to that day’s first work session.
The banging continued, followed by a muttering of “Oops, forgot I had the keys.” Larry smirked as he realised who the guard was. A chink and the door creaked on rusty hinges and swung open. Sure enough, it was Arthur."

A star is born! (But we couldn't find him so we're stuck with Arthur, who is probably more entertaining anyway.)

EDIT: in other news...
“Oh, and believe me slave, it won’t hurt a bit. At least, not until I give you the injection!”
Forsooth sirrah! The agonising horror of your terrible humour is surely torture enough for anyone!
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Great chapters Munch's Master! They gave me chills!
I love this fanfic. It makes me wanna go play AO and just beat all the Muds to death.
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BIG POST (you have been warned): Just finished reading the old and the new bits. And to celebrate your return and the revival of this story I shall now serenade you with a ballad of my own composition (about four chapters too late):

There's the National Guard and the FBI;
There's a van from the Eyewitness News,
And helicopters circlin' round in the sky!
Now the bullets are flyin',
The body-count's risin',
And everyone's dyin'
To know: why, Arthur, why?
You used to be such a jolly guy!

Moving swiftly on (and you can't complain because I can see you've been watching Pirates of the Carribean)...

I've loved these three new chapters, and particularly this sudden focus on Arthur. It's great to get such a close look at him, and this internal struggle which I think he felt he had gotten over himself. It's such a contrast from the Arthur we know and adore and (if you're Dionysia) smack upside the head in W@RF, and I'm curious to know why he left that job to come and work here; I'm guessing it was pay-related; intern soup evidently didn't go so well.
When chapter 16 started I was thinking 'ah at last, here comes the Fanfiction Gratuitous Prophetic/Soul-Searching Dream' but what I read was in fact very brilliant, very real-dream-like, not the sort of desperate trippy thing you'd usually get (which I guess reflects how much we've all developed from those early days of fanfiction; I read the old chapters from the original thread so I could read the replies you got with them, and it just reminded me of the excellent community we fanfiction writers had back then, with all the comments about Dave's and my stories, when we were but newblet writers with the world at our feet). Anyway, back on point, the dream was excellent, poetic and absorbing and as I said, suitably dream-like; you can imagine someone actually dreaming that. People usually write fiction-dreams and bizarre mashes of plot turned into nonsense - even J. K. Rowling did that - which is nothing like what real dreams are like; it's a stereotype. You wrote something convincing (though I have to say I'm disappointed by the lack of slapping black-skinned female mudokons encountered! )

This sudden, strong emphasis on gyros and bits and pieces, whirring and grinding and hissing, gives the story a very unique sound, very original, and best of all it actually works. It's great, and it makes the story memorable.

Still on the subject of Arthur, I just noted the little thing about him still having 16 months left there. He's already been a year in the story and assuming he was there for some time before it began, call it three or four years he's signed there in total. Since a slig's life expectancy is only 20 years, thats like 12 or 16 years in our standards, and you suddenly feel the despair he has; he's as trapped there are the rest, as you implied in one of the original chapters.
I loved the enigmatic characters you've put in, the chronicler in particular was fabulous. When it was revealed that the glukkon was already talking to the stupid slig there was this horrible 'Oh no!' moment that literally had me putting my hands to my mouth in worry. The fact that the boss knows all about Larry already, and is using him to manipulate the other slaves... It actually reminds me a lot of the Patrician of Ankh-Morpork from the Discworld book series (IF YOU HAVEN'T READ ANY OF THESE, DO IT NOW!), the way he's sitting in this place above everyone else, manipulating them like a chess-player. Looking forward to seeing where that goes.

It's also good to see that you're still keeping the link to W@RF. After reading the old chapters I began to think you'd probably scrapped that by now since the RPG's gotten so complicated and involved, but it's great to see you're still planning; hope Arthur and Dek don't leave the RPG too soon!

My only criticism is that having the first 14 chapters in a single post is not so much a wall-o'-text as a 80-Storey-Tower-With-A-30-Foot-Tall-Neon-Sign-On-The-Roof-Reading-'Read-This-And-You'll-Be-Here-For-A-Week'-o'-Text, which is slightly offputting to new readers, which I think largely explains the low interest you've had in this so far.
Trust me when I say a 5-page-long thread is less daunting than a single titanic post for three reasons;
1) The five-page-thread contains 4 convenient places to stop and put a corporeal bookmark, whereas a post does not.
2) The five-page-thread comforts the reader with the promise of lots of non-plot replies by other posters, which means that there is much text that the reader can satisfyingly skip over, or if they're Amateur OWF Historians they can read for added pleasure. The replies create satisfying breaks between chapters, which both build tension and effectively give the reader time to breathe; reading it all in one go without breaks is much more daunting.
3) The thread allows the reader to cling on to the most sacred hope that the final page may not be very long at all (which in your case it isn't).

Gosh I've written a lot here.
At the end of the day, this story and particularly these new chapters have made me laugh, they've made me worry and they've made me sad. You are a great writer and I sincerely hope we see much, much more of this, and indeed posts of similar quality in W@RF.
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OK, I dug it up and put it in the first post. Here's the old (discontinued) version of the chapter.
Chapter 4: The Punishment

Crap. Larry thought as he fell into the pit. He landed with a hard, rather painful and ever so slightly squelching whump at the bottom. The Slig cackled loudly again “Yer’ve let yerself in fer it now mud.” Larry slowly picked himself up off the ground, rubbing his back and finding-Yuck! -remains of the Slogs’ previous meals on his back. Picking the bits of flesh and slivers of bone off his back, he turned around as the metal doors of the kennels grated up. Double crap. He thought as the Slogs scurried out. A good dozen or so of very big, bulky, fully grown Slogs were sniffing around, trying to detect their meal. Which is me. Larry thought miserably. Smaller sloggies ran around, yipping as they picked at the odd few remains from previous feedings. Larry knew they’d be after him right about….now. Which they were.
The bigger Slogs seemed to have picked up his scent and, just as Larry thought this, as if on cue, some of the Slogs began to approach him. Larry did all he could do. He began scooping up handfuls of the leftover flesh, and piling it up in front of him. The slogs were still nearing, going faster now at the smell of fear and raw meat. Larry knew not to panic, noise and fear gets you found and killed, he thought, picking up a decent sized, relatively intact bone.
“Nice Slog, good Slog,” Larry spoke quietly to the nearest Slog, whistling to get its attention. As it ran towards him, he tossed it the bone. The slog had opened its jaws to bite Larry, but instead the bone landed in its mouth. One down. Larry thought. The other Slogs were mainly eating at the pile of carcasses Larry had hurriedly made, but with so many eating at it; there was soon little meat left.
“Oy, yer supposed to feed ‘em fresh meat not leftover stuff ya f**kbrain!” The supervisor Slig yelled at him. Larry ignored him for now, concentrating on staying alive. He picked up what looked to be half of a Scrab’s rib, and tossed it at a Slog nearby. Unfortunately for Larry, he hit it on the head rather than in its mouth. The Slog began growling and barking angrily, certainly preparing to charge. Larry couldn’t hide his fear now, and the scent of fear just gave the beast a beacon towards him.
The Slog lunged on him, bowling him over and it began ripping and biting at his leg. Larry swore and tried to get it off, but that prompted the creature to snap at his hands and continue mauling his leg. Larry knew he was in a fair deal of trouble now. He panicked more and more and screamed in pain as it continued biting, sure it would reach the bone. That’s it, a bone! He thought. Larry clawed around, finally laying hands on a chewed, cracked but still intact bone by the wall of the feeding pit. His paw’s fingers brushed it and finally clasped it, and he swung the bone at the Slog’s head, prompting a yell from the Slig above.
“Hey, yer can’t attack the Slogs!” Once again Larry ignored him. The Slog however, had recovered from the blow, and was pretty mad , meaning Larry was in a lot of danger once again. It snapped at Larry was holding Larry, aiming for where the blow came from, and ended up locking its jaws around the bone he was holding. Larry quickly let go, relieved inside that it hadn’t got him. Fortunately it then began gnawing and chewing on the bone, leaving the injured Larry to huddle down and try to rest his hurt leg.
He expected the other Slogs to be approaching him now as he was bleeding, but then, the whole pit was full of blood, albeit dried blood. At least the blood partially obscured his normal scent, effectively hiding him amidst the leftovers, from being smelled at least. The beasts were now picking at scraps or fighting each other, and Larry lay there, trying to stay small and insignificant as he watched on. A couple of Slogs did approach him at times, believing him to be some scraps, but Larry grabbed any leftovers he could find in reach and threw it away, distracting the beasts and sending them over there, giving him time to quietly move into another corner.
Finally, the Slig guard fired his gun into the air. That meant the feeding was over. The Slogs froze at the gunshot, and then returned slowly and warily to their kennels, understanding the sound as a signal to stop. Larry sighed as it was over and shakily stood as the Slig hauled him out of the pit by his neck; and threw him down on the floor. Larry lay there for a while, moaning slightly and cradling his wounded leg. “Consider yerself lucky yer survived mud.” The Slig sneered at him, spitting on Larry then kicking him in the ribs. The Slig then seemed to notice Larry’s injury and purposely stepped on his hurt leg before bending down and once again, roughly hauling Larry up.
“Now back ter work, yer lazy scrounger. An’ yer gonna be workin’ with that bad leg, serves ya right fer trying ta escape.” Larry cursed inwardly, and remained silently in agony as the Slig marched him (slowly, to cause him more stress on his wounded leg) off to the mess hall. “Oh, and yer’ve missed breakfast if yer were wondering, so get in there and get ter yer station, slave.” The Slig dumped him down on the floor in the hall then stomped back off to his post.
Larry half dragged, half limped over to an eating table and sat down heavily, looking around through teary eyes as the mudokons still here ambled off to their posts. He saw Trevor approaching with a look of concern on his face, but didn’t feel like recounting the punishment right now. Larry just tilted his head back, resting it on the rough but cool surface of the dining table, and closed his eyes, trying to blot out the pain.
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Firstly, thank you to everyone who replied, particularly Splat for that massive review. Second, sorry to double post, but this post wouldn't be registered as updated if I edited it into the old one. Third, new chapter!

Chapter 18: Curiosities

Clank, whir, clank, whir, clank, whir, clank whir.
Arthur traipsed back along the corridor.
“Oy! Angry Arthur!”
Clank, whir, hiss. Arthur stopped and turned to see, emerging from the office that he himself had just left, another Slig.
“Whatcher want Neal?” Arthur grunted, eyes narrowing.
The Slig apparently known as Neal slapped Arthur on the back heartily, causing the rotund Slig to wobble forwards a little. Neal fell into step with Arthur as they continued walking back to the work Zulag.
“I was gunna ask yer the same question. I was jus’ telling the Boss about tha’ slave what keeps on stirring up trouble n stuff. Ya know the one I mean, the one yew used ta be buddies with till ya kicked the crap out of him. Always tryin ta break out like he’s the 2nd comin’ of Abe or summat.”
A twitch of an eyebrow behind the mask, as Neal’s comment irked Arthur.
“Oh yeah? What’s he done now?”
Neal grinned “Started a fight in the package lines. Well, him or tha’ one who’s got a stress problem. Thumped the one you thumped the other day, an’ so I had ta report it. But the boss ain’ interested in it, can you believe that eh?” He smirked and dug Arthur in the ribs, before rooting around in a compartment in his pants. “Still, gives us another mud ta discipline eh?”
He produced a poor-standard cigar “Wanna smoke? They’s Tarbucks cigarettes, good ‘n proper Slig cigs.”
Arthur shook his head, his body on autopilot as his brain considered this latest news. ‘He’s still beein’ a problem. Man oh man, he’s not gonna quit, an’ that just gives me more work to do……An’ if the boss knows about Larry, he might know about my ol’ soft standards, an’ about my fights with the other Sligs. My neck could be on the line too.’
“-erself then, leaves more o’ them fer me. Ain’t ya gonna open the door?”
Arthur snapped out of his reverie as the Slig gestured to the door in front of them. He pushed the button, the door slid aside, and they carried on walking, the clanging pants echoing along the corridors.
“’Ere, so why were you there anyways?” Neal inquired, lighting up a smoke in the process.
Arthur was already tired of the company, Neal had a reputation for not being too bright even among the other Sligs. As such, he found it difficult to keep the bite out of his voice “I was askin’ fer a transfer, if ya must know. I’m getting’ on in years, I don’t wanna be stuck here forever. I’d like ta go to somewhere more, free ‘n easy. Maybe the city.”
Neal laughed “Free n’ easy? Since when is this place not free ‘n easy? Decent food, plenty o’ drink, tons o’ stress relief with the slaves, an good company!”
Arthur stopped and turned round, Neal almost walked straight into him, and the tip of his cigar bumped into Arthur’s tentacles. Arthur swatted the cigar away
“Good company? You’ve never been the most observant guy Neal, but haven’t ya noticed? Most o’ tha other Sligs still remember when I was ‘the soft guy’, the one who didn’t go along with ‘the boys’. They don’ like me, they only accept me cause I’m a mean bastard to the slaves now. I need ta get away from this, an from all the people round here, ya get me!?”
Arthur’s slow-witted colleague fixed him with a glazed over expression momentarily, before his mouth upturned in a frown “No wonder you’re unpopular, with that kind of attitude!”
He then heartily patted Arthur on the shoulder again, and once again Arthur teetered from the impact “Nah, you’re alright, just a lil’ stressed. Anyway, see ya later, I better get back to tha package lines, or another riot’ll have broken out an’ I’ll have ta start shootin them all.” He grinned widely “Good times! Seeya!”
Arthur watched, both befuddled and revolted, as Neal trekked away. He walked over to a factory map for a moment, then about-turned and headed off down a different corridor. ‘Screw that Chronicler, I’m seein’ Rasputin anyway. If I can’t change factory, maybe a change of job’ll do.’
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“So what is it now, Larry?” Trevor couldn’t even bring himself to add any inflection to his voice, having heard that many of Larry’s so-called escape plans he was getting weary of it.
Larry however, showed signs of his old spark as he leaned across to Trevor at the cafeteria table.
“Right, well, I’ve been thinking: we’ve been working in the package lines the past couple of days, right? Well, next time we’re put there……”
Another mudokon, who had been eavesdropping on the conversation; cut Larry off “Don’t tell me- you get in one of the crates with a crowbar or something, we pack you up and stick you on a train, then when on-board you break the crate open, sneak off the train when you arrive at the station, and run to freedom?! Cause that’s a great idea Larry!” The mudokon said sardonically.
The mudokon opposite this new speaker then chimed in “Of course he isn’t doing that Roy- he’s already tried that old trick! 3 times!”
The slave known as Roy smirked back “Yep Stan, darn those inspectors and there looking-in-the-crate-before-loading ways!”
Larry grimaced as the 2 other mudokons giggled to themselves. He turned back to Trevor “Right, what I was thinking was, in the loading bay we wheel all the crates over to a platform, where some Slig guards then check the crates, then have some other guys load them onto the train. Somebody, like Max, causes a big commotion over on the actual packing lines, as far away from the bay as possible. Then, while all the Sligs go to sort that out; me, you, Jeff and anyone else we can manage all start wheeling the crates towards the platform. When we get there, the Sligs check the crates as always. One of the crates, we need to smuggle something into- it doesn’t’ matter what, just anything that shouldn’t be there. Then, while the Slig’s busy with that crate and that mudokon, the rest of us load the crates onto the train instead of leaving it for the mudokons on the train. We load the crates on, then hide behind some of them at the back of the train.”
Trevor was still listening, though the other 2 mudokons resumed tittering away to themselves as they heard Larry’s audacious plan.
“The Sligs don’t check faces when they round up the mudokons responsible for loading the crates on, they just count numbers. Normally there’s about 10 or so mudokons who stay on the train, winching the crates up on the pulley. So, ‘cause we’ve slipped onboard as well, the Sligs won’t have noticed us, what with checking the smuggled crate and the chaos on the packing lines. So they herd out all the scrubs who were officially loading the shipping, then send the train on. There’s always a crowbar on board so the crates can be opened, so we use that crowbar to break your chant-suppressive shackles, Trev; while the Slig supervising the goods is napping. We then open the loading door while the train’s in motion, and jump out; and ‘cause you don’t have the chant suppressors anymore, you can whip open a bird portal or some kind of spooce cushion so we don’t get killed by the fall, and we’ve got out!!”
Larry clapped his hands together triumphantly, seemingly pleased with his plan. Trevor just stared.
“……..Larry, that is-“
“Brilliant! You should go for it Larry, yeah!” Roy chuckled, applauding the erstwhile escape artist’s idea.
Trevor snarled at Roy, and then turned back to Larry “Actually, I was going to say that is crazy. The risks involved are huge- suppose they don’t let us leave the package lines due to the commotion? Suppose some of the mudokons involved get shot due to it? Or, what if, the sabotaged crate doesn’t work, and there’s more than just the 1 Slig on duty? Then we can’t get on board. Or maybe, just maybe, we’ll get a jobsworth, ho actually checks the train for unshackled mudokons before letting it leave. It’s a crazy idea, Larry.”
Larry deflated slightly, his balloon popped. “It’s the only option left, Trev. When else could we get an opportunity? The packing and loading docks are the most exposed part of the factory, and there’s nearly always just the 1 Slig checking. And how many committed Sligs are there in the factory anyway?”
Roy again butted in “Yeah, come on “Trev”! I mean, it’s bound to work cause it’s Larry’s idea! And we all know that if it didn’t work the first time, it’s bound to work the four hundredth time! And who cares if a bunch of us get shot to bits for causing a riot, because at least Larry’s free!!”
A deep sigh, and Larry turned to look at Roy. “You know it’s not like that Roy.”
Roy cocked his head “Do I? Cause I seem to recall the rest of us getting punished for your escape attempt a year ago! Remember? The new work clauses are down to you. Sure, we weren’t happy before then, but at least we could get by!!” He snapped.
Again, a downcast expression covered Larry’s face. “Fine, whatever. But I can’t be doing with this now; I’d better get back to work.”
A scrape of chair on floor as Larry stood up to leave, then an “Oof!” and thump as his body toppled face first to the tiles. Larry picked himself up and turned to face the scrub who’d tripped him. Not so shockingly, it was Roy, who also stood up to go eye-to-eye with Larry.
“What is your problem with me?!” Larry demanded.
“Well, maybe the fact that you and your thick headed ideas keep landing all of us in shit every time!” yelled Roy back, the sarcastic demeanour having finally cracked and given way to anger.
“I don’t see you doing anything to sort it out though! You just moan and take it out on me! Why don’t you face up to your own problems for once!”
Roy bared his teeth “Because they aren’t my damn problems! They’re yours, cause it’s always down to you! Do us all a favour and stop trying! Go drown yourself or something, anything that doesn’t make things even worse for us!!”
Trevor tried to intervene “Um, Larry-“
Larry wrung his hands together, as both mudokons’ skins were gradually turned a slightly crimson hue. “Suicide?! Is that what you want! You want me to go into a bloody depression? Is that cause you just like to see me suffer, or cause you want some company to join you in your miserable, whingey, pass-the-buck lifestyle!” Larry shouted.
All eyes were on both mudokons now. Even several of the Sligs, eating, drinking or chatting, turned to watch the spectacle. Most of them were grinning widely.
“No, uh Larry, it’s just-” Trevor began again.
“I outta slap your stupid head off your shoulders right now! But I’ll save it till later, that way you can think about what’s coming to you!” Roy raged, before shouldering Larry out of the way and storming out of the canteen, back to his work station.
After a brief silence, the canteen resumed its previous action, the labourers trying to fit as much recuperation as possible into those last few minutes before end of lunchbreak. By this point, the Sligs were filtering out, their dining finished, but a few mudokons still remained here and there.
“Larry, all I-” Trevor again started.
“What Trevor? What’s the problem now!!!” Larry spat out exasperatedly.
“There’s a Slig bothering Jeff again!”
And sure enough, there was. Jeff had taken to sitting separate on occasion, his thought process so addled by the Gas used to keep him out of depression that he had no semblance of a routine anymore. Larry and Trevor were used to seeing Sligs wind him up for laughs, ever since the beating courtesy of Arthur had resulted in the gas dependency. It seemed this was the case again.
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And now let us take a look at this case, as, from a few minutes earlier:
“He hehe he he. Hello!” Jeff smiled up at the face in front of him. ‘All tentacles and big red glowing eyes, the funny-looking thing was. What were they called again? Sligs, that’s right!’
“You’re the mudokon who’s on the gas, right?”
“He he. Ha! Hello, tehe!”
“…Yeah,” The Slig paused. “I’ve been watchin yer the past few days, an’ I’ve seen that you’re a bit funny in the head. The easy pickings fer my lot.”
“Hahaha! Picking, HA!” Jeff offered the Slig another wide smile. ‘Funny nose. All the tentacles. Wonder how he sneezes?’
“…Mhm. Look, well, you just stay out of all their way, got it!?”
“Who? Haha! Hehe! Yep.”
“Yeah…..”The Slig paused again “Cause you’ll just keep getting’ hurt if you don’t. They like ta prey on the troubled ones. It’s just lucky fer me there’s none about now ta see this going on. Don’t worry though, I’ll try an’ look out fer yer. You’ll be fine round me, so you can get off the gas if I’m on duty for yer. My name’s Mikey. Try and keep out of trouble, y’hear?”
“Hehehe.” Jeff vacantly smiled again. ‘Mikey Mikey Mikey. Isn’t that short for Microphone? Mic? Mike? Mikey!’
“Yeah, jus’ be careful. Um, I’d better go.” And with that, the Slig toddled off, taking care that none of his fellow species had seen the little conversation.
Seconds later, Trevor and Larry, with Max in tow, reached Jeff.
“What was that about Jeff?” Larry asked.
“Did he bother you? If you sit with us all the time Jeff, this kind of thing will stop happening.” Trevor supplied.
“Haha! Trevor Mikey. Microphone! Haha! Larry Microphone! Hoohoohoohee!” Jeff was still far gone.
“Microphone? Mikey?” Larry was wrong footed.
“I am at just a loss as you are, Larry.” Trevor concurred.
“BZZZZTTT”. The buzzer pierced the air of the canteen. The foursome exchanged glances, except for Jeff, who just stood up and giggled. And they trudged away to their respective work areas for the rest of the day, Trevor carefully ushering Jeff along.
Trevor looked at Jeff as he helped him on his way, thinking hard. What the heck happened with that Slig back there to make Jeff ramble like this? Something strange, for sure.
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Another great chapter! Odd..I also have a Mudokon named Roy.
But anyway I can't stop reading this fanfic! It always gives me chills.
Can't wait for the rest! =)
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Wow. I'm seriously getting into this. I mean, the whole mudokons-trying-to-escape thing has been done before, but you really make it seem realistic. =D
Arthur is an awesome character btw, i'm almost sorry I made Skelter act so mean to him in W@RF.
Keep it up! ^^
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Thank you both for replying. And so now, to you, Splat and any other readers I bring you Chapter 19, in which not a great deal happens, but certain matters deepen:


Chapter 19: Conspirators
Spindly legs skittered back and forth across the floor. The owner of said spindly legs leafed through a thick tome entitled ‘Company Protocol’, seemingly unaware of his appendages’ means of inactivity relief beneath his desk. A heavy thud as the four clawed arms gripping the book dropped it back onto a shelf, and a quick flurry of movement as the claws clasped another sizeable charter. A gentle, operatic music filled the air, emitted from a nearby radio.
A series of thuds, followed by a loud buzz. The Vykker startled out of his chair, dropping the book and jerking backwards. He pressed a button on his desk, another buzz filling the air as he opened the intercom channel. The vykker’s high and snappy voice rang out over the speaker.
“What is it?”
A scratching noise could just be heard over the system, then a Slig’s gurgle “I’m uh, wantin’ ta speak ta Vykker Rasputin about my job.”
“You’re speaking to him already, moron. And shouldn’t you be in your job by now? It’s well past the designated lunchbreak.”
Shuffle shuffle from outside again. “Yeah, but I’ll make up for it with overtime. An’ can’t I come in, I’d rather speak face ta face.”
Rasputin huffed. “Yes, you Sligs and your need for visual communication. Such simpletons.”
A talon pressed a different button, and the doors slid open. The portly persona of Arthur ambled in.
“Um. You deal with employees an’ stuff, right?”
Rasputin removed his reading glasses, smoothly replacing them with a second pair of spectacles in a movement full of elbows and gangly bends. “Indeed I do. I take it you’re the person who spoke to head office about a transfer? I just had a Fonecall put through about you.”
Arthur shuffled from one foot to the other, various servos shifting about as he did so and disturbing the soft ambience in the process. Rasputin switched the radio off irritably.
Arthur spoke up “I was told I can’t get a transfer, so-”
The vykker interjected “So you shouldn’t be wasting my time. Door’s behind you, good-day.” He attempted to return to his employee charter.
“So I was wanting to see if I can have a change o’ job in the factory instead.” Said Arthur, not taking no for an answer.
The vykker slowly looked up again, narrowing his eyes. “Ah, I see this is part of your desires for greater job satisfaction. What’s the kind of job you’re after, then?”
A bastion of hope built up inside Arthur at these words “Well, I’m currently stuck on regular guard duty. I was wantin’ ta have somethin’ different. I wouldn’t mind sortin’ out tha Slog an’ Elum pens, or goin on cookin duty. I’ve got a bit of experience at kitchen work, an’ -”
Rasputin cut him off again “And that’s the kind of thing you’d enjoy? Only hiccup is that you have more experience as a guard. Oh, and that we already have a fine cuisine in the form of the standard Septik Snaks patented Grub for the Grunts, a production line delicacy that the slaves produce in the factory. So I frankly see no vacancy there.”
Bastion shattered, but Rasputin wasn’t finished.
“Also, there’s the fact that this is a factory. A business. Moolah is the main goal, and the happiness of the workforce certainly isn’t much of a matter. Maybe if you lot did your job keeping the mudokons in line so they stop rebelling; or if you all weren’t so lazy, or were valued members of staff, we’d take notice of what you think. But as it is, we don’t. Who are you to this factory, anyway?”
Arthur wasn’t sure how to respond to this. He began with “I’m Arth-” before being talked down again.
“You’re nobody, that’s who. A bottom of the barrel Slig guard who’s been here for….” He glanced at his charter without taking any real notice “About 8 years, and has never achieved a promotion. You got employee of the month once in your first year, and that’s it. You’re nobody, and nobody cares what you have to say.”
Arthur was getting indignant ‘How the frig do they know all this about me automatically? Are they spyin’ on me too!?’ “Look, how do ya-” he started.
But Rasputin was in full flow. “Ring Ring, Ring ring!” he snapped, and looked at the Fone on his desk. “Oh look, my Fone’s going off.” He picked up the receiver and mock answered it “Oh, hello? Hey, it’s Nobody on the line! He wants to know what you think about the place!” He put the phone back down, grinning cruelly “That’s all you are, Slig. A nobody and a drone. You’ll serve out your contract like everybody else, you’ll stick to your designated duties like everybody else, and I won’t care if you complain, just like everybody else.” He finished bitingly. The sweetness factor was then turned back on. “Door’s behind you, good day!”
Arthur slumped. His mind both enraged and embittered, he stomped out the door with his head lolling.
Rasputin switched the radio back on.
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“Larry. It’s really not going to work.”
“Aw come on Trevor, have a little faith in me for once.”
“No, seriously. It’s just such an illogical idea. We won’t get away with it and it’ll just end up landing us in more trouble.”
“But it’s either this or leave things as they are, and it’s hardly looking good now is it?”
“Yes but Larry, suppose somebody finds us? What then?”
Larry sighed and shook his head. “Trev, we’re not doing anything that risky. We’re only getting Jeff off the Laughing Gas.”
Trevor stood with his arms as folded as they could be in shackles, leaning against the door frame. Jeff was due another Laughing Gas dose, the Gas was wearing off and bringing him back to depression, although the return of sanity was welcome.
“Trevor, you know as well as I do that Jeff can’t stay on this forever. He’s had Gas and Brew issues before, an’ Odd knows what this’ll do to his head. You heard him rambling about Microphones before, and Gas shouldn’t be doing that. He should only be giggling brainlessly and incoherently, not talking balderdash about machinery.”
Larry was stood with Jeff by the gas machine. The newer model was set up so that after affixing an anaesthetizer-styled breath-mask over the mouth, a quick flick of a switch would send the user into Gas-happy heaven. Max loitered nearby as well, once again for his muscle which, though not what it was a year ago, was still a bulky physique.
Trevor put his hands on his hips. “But we can’t’ just take him off it, we aren’t allowed. He had the medical bill passed to keep him on it by the Vykkers.”
Larry nodded “We can’t take him off it no. but we can break the machine.” He stated, gesturing to Max, who smirked.
Palms filled Trevor’s vision as he cradled his face in his hand in resigned exasperation. “Breaking machinery? You’ll get more than a beating for that you know. Bones broken, Slog duty, the full deal.” He looked up. “But you know what, go ahead. I’ll stand guard, that way maybe I can keep out of this fiasco.”
As Trevor turned to stand in the doorway facing outwards, Larry carefully ushered Jeff away from the machine. Jeff was feeling the effects of going cold turkey, as he glanced at Larry wit half gassed, half saddened eyes “Cold, Larry. Haha. And dark, inside. Need the, hehe, Gas. Makes me happy. Too many troubles. Ha. What will we do?”
Larry put his arm over Jeff’s shoulders, a mix of comfort and concern “It’s alright Jeff. We’ll get you off the Gas, then get you back to your old self. Remember? When you were always there with a calf solution, even if it didn’t make sense. I’ll even try and get you some new beads for ya ta wear.”
He looked at Max “Go on then, smash it!”
Trevor cut Max off just before he could rip the breath-mask out of the machine “Wait! If you just bash it apart, they’ll know we’ve done it. After all, we walk in and it’s intact, we walk out and it’s junk. You’ll have to break it from the inside.”
He walked over to the large apparatus. 2 wide tubes fed from the main machine to 2 large gas cylinders. “When the switch is flicked open, the canister valves are unscrewed. That’s what these wires that run along the side of the subbing are for- sending the signals to the pistons on the valve. One wire sends the signal, the other sends the instruction back to open the breath-mask valve, completing the circuit.” Trevor explained. “What you need to do is pull out the wires and crisscross them, connecting the wrong ones with each. That breaks the circuit and sends it in a figure of 8 loop. It’ll pump the gas out of 1 canister and try and pump it into the other. The pressure will then build in the tubes inside the machine, and they should burst, meaning it won’t work at all. Then you can swap the wires back around so it all looks fine, but the thing is bust.”
Larry was taken aback. “How’d you come up with all that, Trev?”
Trevor smiled “I am a Shaman, Larry; or at least training to be one. We’ve got to be pretty smart. Also, there’s a sheet on the wall there explaining how the machine works for employees; because it’s a new model.”
Larry glanced around, feeling an idiot once he noticed the annotated diagram. “Right.”
Max walked over to the back of the gas machine and was ready to unplug the wires, when Trevor stopped him again. “Max, I think this’ll need a more delicate touch.”
Max turned around and walked back across the room irritably. “Fine then! Just cause I’m big and strong means I can’t control myself or be careful.” He snapped.
Trevor sighed, and took it upon himself to swap the wires over. He signalled for one of them to flip the switch, and Max did so, almost cracking the panel to which the switch was affixed as he took out his annoyance on the machine.
The 4 mudokons backed away from the machine, fearful it may explode. But as the sabotaged circuits strained to work, and the gas tried to pump itself through, the only thing that happened was a loud “Sprumpf!” as the tubing inside the machine burst. Satisfied, Trevor switched the machine off again, reset the wires on each canister, and flicked it back on. A sound of gas hissing occurred, but nothing came out of the mask.
“there we go!” Said Larry, and he patted Jeff again. “S’alright Jeff, you’ll be on the mend soon enough.”
“S-sure Larry. Sure.” Jeff mumbled, his skin the pallid blue of a depressive.
The 4 quickly evacuated the room, their damage done, and aimed for their respective work areas once again.
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Chink chinka click chink chinka click, thump, hiss. Arthur stepped through the other doorway, about to return to his post. His head continued drooping, with his mind lost in thought. His inattention meant he didn’t notice the Slig approaching him until they had already collided. The other Slig had been rapidly scampering towards him, but now neither of them were anything resembling rapid as they shook their heads and picked themselves up off the floor.
Arthur began “Sorry about th-”
But the Slig interrupted “Yeah yeah forget it. Listen, you’re that Slig the others used to think was soft, right?”
Arthur narrowed his eyes, the Slig already having got his back up. ‘Everybody’s interruptin me today. I’ll have Meeps talkin’ over me next, ‘specially if my sanity keeps on its current track.’
“Want me ta show ya how bloody soft I am? Who are you anyways, I’ve never seen ya before.”
The Slig again spoke in a hurry, eyes darting around as if afraid for secret watchers everywhere- in the ceiling, walls, floor. “I’m new. I’ve only just arrived. Anyway, you’re that guy right? The one who used to be friendly to the slaves? Arthur, right?”
Arthur paused. “…Yeah. I am Arthur. But that’s certainly not the case anymore, bud. What of it?”
The Slig leaned in to whisper to Arthur “The factory is cruel and oppressive. We need to help the slaves to help ourselves. We can only get out and find contentment with their help. The bosses won’t listen ta us.”
Arthur slowly backed away. “Trust me, I know enough about the management’s ignorance already. But what’s with all this stuff about the slaves?”
Again ,the Slig was less focused in responding and more intent on informing “I’m Mikey. There’s others, maybe not here but out there. We have to work with the slaves. They have the will ta break free, but we have the means. Together we can get out of this bullcrap lifestyle.”
Mikey’s unwilling co-conspirator paused. “If I just said 1 word, I could get ya killed fer that. Whaddaya want with me?” Arthur was getting concerned. ‘This guy’s an idealist and a nut. If word o’ this get’s out I’ll be facin’ another bout o’ hell from the others. Or worse.’
Mikey’s eyes rested on Arthur for the longest they had since their encounter “You feel the same. I know ya do. I heard another Slig sayin’ that someone called Arthur, that bein’ you, was wantin’ ta leave. An’ I’ve heard about how ya used ta be friendly with a mudokon who’s tried ta bust out before. Come on, get in on this. We can get away from here with them!”
Arthur raised his hands in a non-aggressive protest. “Look mate, if I was a few screws loose I might take ya up on the offer. But what you’re suggestin’ is suicide. Besides, I don’t like how everyone seems ta know what I’m doin’ right now. I don’t like bein’ treated as though my life is part of a book or story fer everyone ta read.”
Mikey again ignored him. He instead made a signal, holding his left arm up to his chest with 2 fingers extended pointing up, and placing his right arm across his body with his hand resting on his left elbow “Remember that signal. If ya see any other Slig doin’ it, they’re in on this with me. Say yes, Arthur…....I’d better go, I can’t let someone here this.” Mikey scuttled away as fast as the mechanics in his pants would allow him, the gyrating and humming a rapid metronome.
Arthur just fell back against a wall, resting his head on it and looking to the ceiling. He spoke aloud to himself. “Great. What’ve I been dumped in now?”
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Thanks to all those who replied! This Chapter is touching down a day early, because you'll needd that extra day to read it. It is by far the longest chapter yet, weighing in at over 1 1/2 times the length of the last chapter (which means a WALL OF TEXT WARNING is a prerequisite). This length is a neccessity however, as I can't split it into 2 chapers for several reasons. Anyway, hope you enjoy it.

This is the chapter where some plotlines develop, some answers are given, more of Godrar's control of the factory is revealed, some rare action takes place, and finally, the end starts to approach.

Chapter 20: Bad Omens
Working hours had finally finished, the slaves had been herded back to their cells. A trio of slaves had formed a circle around the 4th of their number. Jeff was carefully ushered towards the cells, his 3 closest friends doing their best to keep him guarded from unwanted attention- Slig, mudokon or otherwise. Clank of the door shutting, clink of the bolt being pulled across, click of the lock turning into place. The quadroon continued on their path. A huddle of shadowed shapes in an even more shadowy corner.
The blue-feathered Larry was the first to speak, as usual. “Jeff? How’re ya holding up, buddy?” He gave an encouraging smile.
The blue-skinned Jeff turned his head to focus on the first speaker “….So-so, Larry…..I guess……Just….dunno…..dunno about anything now…” He gave a strained smile.
The blue-shackled Trevor was the next to vocalise his thoughts “You’ll be alright Jeff. The Gas machine’s bust, it’ll take ‘em a while to replace it. And by then you’ll be sorted out.” He gave a friendly smile.
The blue-air filling Max huffed and spoke up “Damn slave drivers. Sticking Jeff on the Gas. Not to worry though, we’ll get Jeff right an get ‘em back for this.” He gave a menacing smile.
A blue mood then filled each of the 3 mudokons not already depressed, as, true to their words, Roy and Stan engaged the foursome once more. They gave sarcastic smiles.
“Oi! Well if it isn’t the inspirational leader Larry. Come on super-mud, why aren’t you breaking out yet?” Roy’s voice.
“Yeah. Aren’t you like, the second coming of Abe or something? Hurry up and bring down the Factory, Larry!” Stan’s tones.
Trevor extended an arm, barring Max’s path. He did not extend the other arm in time however to prevent his overly optimistic companion from rising to the bait. Larry faced the 2 pestering mudokons.
“Why won’t you drop it, you two? The plan doesn’t concern you, you don’t need to worry about anything.”
Roy rolled his eyes. A finger waggled in front of Larry’s face “Didn’t you listen to a word I said in the mess hall?! Your plans jeopardize all of us, not just you! The Sligs will only make things worse for us if you keep dicking around trying to get out!”
Larry swatted the finger aside. A hand dropped onto Roy’s shoulder, but was quickly batted away by the owner of said shoulder “What the hell can they do to make things worse for us, Roy?! What can they do? We commit just 1 offence and we can get killed as it is! Sligs are allowed to do whatever they want to us short of killing us without needing a reason! What else can be done?!! Nothing!”
Roy bared his teeth “What else? How about rounding up and executing a bunch of us an example!? Your latest genius idea involves a bunch of workers making a distraction! The Gluks would just let the Sligs shoot us all!!!”
Stan shoved Larry as well, now “Yeah, we don’t really want to end up dead thanks to you f***ing up again!”
The would-be escapist turned to Stan now “Who are you to be speaking Stan? You’re just Roy’s crony, his stooge backing him up! Besides, you wouldn’t end up dad anyway! The Gluks would be bothered more about getting rid of me than getting rid of you!”
Stan glared at Larry “His stooge? I’m not some lackey for Roy!”
Roy was now the one to swivel to face Stan “Hey shut up! You’re just here to back me up, remember!”
Stan glared at Roy now. “Screw that!”
With that, the so-called lackey slapped Roy, before turning to Larry and palming him across the face as well. Max, his once-again volatile temper boiling over again, now burst up and shoved Stan with both hands. Roy, having picked himself up, now stamped on Max’s toes, before slapping the leviathan of a mudokon. He turned to Larry and gripped him by his feather, only to have digits jammed in his eyes by the erstwhile dreamer. Larry went to grab Roy, but Stan tackled him, and before long the 4 mudokons were engaged in a rolling, broiling scuffle.
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A much less aggressive spectacle was occurring on the other side of the factory however, with all the authorities mentioned and feared in the previous incident, and more, present.
2 Departmental Heads of the factory were present in a much more expansive and much more exclusive office than their own. The wall-high window overlooked the factory complex, yet currently was presenting a different image, with a vast screen hanging in front of it, having unfolded from a ceiling compartment. A 3rd figure, that of a Slig, stood to one side with a remote in his hand, purely there as a helper and instructed to neither see nor hear anything on the screen.
Both Departmental Heads, incidentally also both Vykkers, eyed the screen with a mixture of thoughtfulness and worry. The 4th being present in the room was stood to their right, cigar smoke frequently obscuring his view of the screen. But not that it mattered, for he had seen the footage earlier.
A Slig was walking down a corridor, only to be encountered by another Slig. This 2nd guard seemed agitated and anxious. Hurried words were mumbled by the jittery Slig. The first Slig seemed bothered by the 2nd, and began to back away. The jittery Slig continued whispering, and the concerned Slig seemed to turn menacing. The jittery Slig persisted, and the aggression faded, replaced by worry again. The jittery Slig then raised his left arm to his chest, extending to fingers, while clasping his elbow with his right arm. He then glanced around and hurried off. The first Slig paused, then fell back against the wall, resting his head against it and staring straight up.
The footage paused.
One Vykker spoke up first. Had the room not been soundproofed, an eavesdropper would have recognised it as the voice of Murphy, the head of what was once known as the rather un-imaginative Punishment Office, but had since been renamed Disciplinary Procedures Bureau, in an effort to appear more benign. “So what’s that all about anyway? Strange behaviour sure, but you do get eccentric Sligs.”
The 4th figure grinned. Another puff of smoke billowed out from him. Boss Godrar spoke from the corner of his mouth “It’s not eccentrics. If I ferget picture quality an’ boost up the sound, yer can get snippets of conversation.
He nodded to the Slig, who clicked a few buttons. The footage played rapidly in reverse, the image turned grainy, and the sound of speakers flickering to life was just audible. The video-feed began again, only this time visuals were impaired yet dialogue could be heard infrequently.
The 2nd Slig’s voice was the first heard “-ink was soft-”
The first Slig’s words were then audible “…ya how bloody……ever seen ya bef-”
The audio kept crackling, static interfering often. But words were still being spoken.
The 2nd Slig’s voice again “friendly t…slave…”
The first Slig again “….am Arth……”
The jittery Slig’s words were the next audible, after prolonged interference “…factory is cruel………help the sl……elp ourselves……”
The audio went poor again, before resuming with the first Slig. “…management’s ignorance……the slaves?”
The 2nd Slig’s words came out over the speakers again, still jerky “-key. There’s oth………work wi… slaves………free, but we…………of this bullcrap…”
The first Slig could now be heard again, the possible aggression visible no more throygh pictures but through sounds “………get yer killed……Whaddaya want with me?”
The nervous Slig spoke again “…same. I know ya……called Arthur, that being……ya used ta be……mudokon that tried…before………with them!”
The first Slig’s apprehension was evident in his voice again “……was a few screws……I might take ya up on the off……suicide. Besides……… everyone seems to know what I’m doing………everyone ta read.”
The 2nd Slig’s peculiar gesture was now just visible on the nearly-pixellated footage “……other Sligs doin’ this, they’re………can’t let someone hear this.”

The footage stopped again. Godrar spoke to his 2 Department Heads.
“Pretty incriminating evidence fer them 2 bastards. Do yer recognise anything about that footage?”
Murphy was blank, but the other Vykker, recognisable now as Rasputin, spoke up “Indeed. It’s evident from not only picture but sound that the more….reluctant of said conspirators is the Slig Arthur. It’s also evident that you have hidden cameras installed, as I also recognise the scenery as being the hallway not too far from my office.”
Godrar brushed off the accusation of spying “What do ya know of that Slig called Arthur, then?”
Rasputin paused, his beady eyes unfocused as he thought. “Well, not much. You secretary put through a call about him wanting a transfer and provided me with all his details moments before he arrived in my office. He’s clearly wanting to leave, but doesn’t’ seem the mutinous type. He looks too fat and lethargic to do that.”
A brief cackle sputtered from the Glukkon’s maw. “Heh. Well, I know a bit more about him then. The Slig ya see assistin’ us here is my Head o’ Security. He supervises the guards, an’ reports ta me. He keeps tabs on Sligs, an’ is popular an’ respected enough by the drones ta get any information off ‘em. This Arthur apparently used ta be considered the problem Slig o’ the guards. Soft on mudokons, caused fights, apparently even befriended a coupla the slaves. An’ we can’t be doin’ with that. But I also hear that in the past year or so, he’s done a reversal, an’ is now every bit as cruel an’ sadistic as the rest of ‘em. Just like a Slig security grunt should be.” Godrar grinned mirthlessly, and puffed again on his Lungbuster.
Murphy began “So why are you concer-“
“Don’t interrupt me when I ain’t finished speakin! Ya may be a high rankin’ staffer, but I can make you an unemployed screw whenever I want, so don’ irk me. The trouble is, when ya get a problem worker, it’s rare ta force the problem outta them. Ya can breed a problem into a normal Slig, but ya can’t breed normality into a problem Slig.”
The expert on the workforce out of the 3, Rasputin, again voiced his thoughts “So he may end up joining this little….rebel cult. But what of the other one? Weaselly little runt, certainly, but behind that twitchy shell is a very unwanted attitude. There’s no question about his loyalties, he will try and bring the factory down.”
The owner’s eyes gleamed “So he gets brought down first. We keep an eye on the other one, make sure he’s not been swayed. If he ain’t, ferget him ,he’s just another grunt. If he turns though, ‘e gets the quick an’ painful solution as well.”
He nodded to his Head of Security “This Slig here is known as Merrick. He’s the on who’ll worm out that lil’ bastard.”
Godrar then faced Merrick “Righ’. Did yew here any of that conversation then?”
Merrick looked beguilingly blank “No sir, Boss.”
“Well ya shoulda, an I know ya did really ya lil twerp. Now listen ta me. Get one of ya Sligs that you know ya can trust. That Slig we want ta find is obviously new, so don’t pick a new guy, yet don’ pick a vet with a big reputation, cause you an’ I both know tha new Sligs get filled in on exactly who an’ what tha big Sligs of’ tha guards are. Pick a guy ya can trust. Get him ta make that signal discreetly ta a bunch of tha newer guards. When someone recognizes it, ye’ve got ‘im. Deal with him how ya wish.”
Before Merrick could salute, the malicious Murphy interjected “Might I suggest a suitable……disposal?”
As Murphy continued explaining his solution, the 3 other occupants of the room cracked smiles.
The security head spoke up first “Ya know, I think that’s the perfect method. Sorts out the loyal Sligs, an’ gets rid of the troublemakers.”
He smirked up at his superiors, and then turned and left for the Barracks.
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A circle of onlookers gathered, witnessing the spectacle until the usually level-headed Trevor reached out at the fighting slaves. He hauled Larry back by his loincloth, then barged Roy back to the edge of the spectators’ circle.
“Stop! Stop dammit!!!!!” the apprentice shaman’s voice was enough to halt the battle-hungry mudokons. Max released Stan mid-choke, and the 2 pairs backed off from one another. The voice of reason positioned himself at the midpoint once again.
“Listen! You guys may have a problem with each other, but don’t go fighting! That won’t help you with your escape plans!” he snapped at Larry, before pivoting to Roy and Stan “And it’ll just do exactly what you feared and make the bosses punish everyone for being unruly!!”
Trevor left both arms thrust at full extension to keep both parties as far separated as possible. Eventually, they calmed. 3 of the 4’s skin returned to a normal pale green hue after deepening to scarlet. Max however, barely paled at all.
Roy lashed out with words first again “Fine then! You want us to be peaceful? OK. Let’s solve this democratically.”
Roy turned to the crowd of mudokons. Somehow, despite the fracas, the Slig on duty had not yet been woken from his slumber.
“Alright! Who here thinks Larry is ever going to escape? Come On, speak up!”
A couple of mudokons shuffled from foot to foot, but there was mostly silence. Roy seized this small victory and continued
“Everybody who thinks Larry is just a bumbling idiot who’d going to get the rest of us in more trouble and suffering, raise your hand!”
After more awkward shuffling, the vast majority of assembled slaves raised limbs in affirmation towards Roy. He turned to Larry with a face full of smugness.
Larry stared back at him unflinchingly, and spoke himself “OK then, thanks for your support everyone.” He begn, in a sarcastic tone.
“Those of you who don’t listen to Roy’s pessimistic whining and think we WILL get out of here, raise your hands.”
If Larry’s target had been 10 mudokons, it would still have been underwhelming. Besides Max, Jeff and an unsure Trevor, there was little positive motion fro mthe sea of green skin. One or two hands wobbled upwards, but many were shushed back down by the crowd. Those that weren’t quavered tremulously, and sank back into the pack of their own volition.
“Fine then! Fine then” Larry’s voice took a harsh bite. “Don’t have faith in me! But we’ll get out! We will, and then I’ll-”
Larry was cut off as the door to the main corridor burst open and a Slig hurried along it, pants clacking furiously as the motors strained to prevent him toppling head over heels. The snoozing staffer’s eyes popped open, and he composed himself into as alert a disposition as possible. The other Slig darted over and began whispering something rapidly to him, tone a mixture of urgency and glee.
Jeff, slumped down nearby the Guardslig’s chair, heard all of the conversation. In his depressed state, still semi-delirious from the Gas, he was unable to stop his mouth forming the word “Mikey??!!!”
All eyes in the room snapped towards Jeff. Many of the slaves attained to present an innocent and avoiding disposure, cowering away while still paying attention to events. Jeff, Larry and Max put their full attention on Jeff. Unfortunately, so did the two Sligs. The previously comatose guard cuffed Jeff around the head. “Shaddup you! Don’ listen in on Slig conversations!”
However, the Slig who had thundered into the room like a hyperactive Elum did not lash out. Instead, a smirk cracked his features “Yeah, that’s right. You know Mikey don’t ya? The rest of ya do too, don’t ya?”
Every face in the cells was innocently blank. The Slig was unperturbed, and continued
“Well, guess what? We all know about Mikey too now. We know how he’s been a slave helper, an a mutineer. How he’s been tryin’ ta get Sligs ta rebel, an been helpin’ you lot. An’ since we’ve been allowed ta do whatever we want ta him ta punish him, I don’t think ol Mikey Mudlover’s gonnan be talking ta any of you, ever again.”
Both Sligs cackled maliciously, and hurried out of the room.
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All he could hear as he walked down the corridor was the sound of his own pants. The repetitive thunks over and over again. But Arthur was paying no attention to the noise. It was the sounds of hours earlier, during his unwilling pact with Mikey the revolutionary, that were replaying in his head endlessly.
‘I’m gonna get done in. They’ll find out about this Mikey freak, then link me with him, or even if they don’t know, they’ll blame me anyway cause of my history, an then I’ll be Fleech food. Damn you Rasputin, ya bastard. Why couldn’t ya just transfer me like I wanted? I’d pay all the wages I’ve got with me ta get outta here!’
Arthur barely noticed as a gaggle of fellow Sligs hurried past him excitedly.
‘Huh. At least they’re happy about summat. What’ve I got ta be happy about? The closest things ta buddies I ever had here in Larry’s lot hate me. The only Slig who likes me is some insane wannabe freedom fighter. I can’t get a job transfer. I’ve got nothing like enough Moolah ta ever think about retiring. The bosses are spyin’ on me fer some reason. An’ I ain’t even got a Brew ta drown my problems.’
He continued walking. As Arthur drew closer to the Barracks, and the possibility of a Brew-filled night of sorrow and repression, he could hear a raucous din up ahead. It seemed to be coming from the Barracks.
‘Wonder why they’re all so upbeat an noisy. Prob’ly that bastard Lak’s got a promotion, an his stooges have got everybody some Brew ta make the celebrate, so Lak’ll think he’s king o’ the factory. I’m in fer a fun night tonight.’
But as he stepped through the barracks doors, he saw it was anything but that. In a situation reminiscent of the earlier squabble in the mudokon bunks, there was a ring of Sligs surrounding the centre of the room. They were jeering, cackling, or waving various foods and beverages in the air. As Arthur pushed his way towards the inner edge of the circle, heads turned to watch him, and the noise slowly faded.
‘Oh Odd no.’
Arthur stopped dead. In the centre of the room was Mikey, but he was much different from when Arthur had last seen him. His wrists were bound with some shackles, presumably lifted from the mudokon cells earlier. His mask was tattered. The right leg of his pants was buckled and broken, the metal warped out of shape as if struck with severe force. Steam hissed from it pathetically. His left pant leg was snapped off a few inches below the knee, the tip nowhere to be seen. And his body was a mess. Bruises and angry red welts adorned his form like a catastrophic attempt at body painting, blood trickled from his mouth. Yet the injuries, though grisly, were superficial. He was writhing around energetically enough, attempting to part drag, part crawl and part hobble out of the circle. But he was repeatedly getting knocked back in. The room was still populated with speech, but it had died down from what it was before. As Arthur stared, Mikey spoke
“Arthur! Ugh, thank Odd you’re here! Help me outta this!”
The room now fell silent, as every gleaming red orb behind each black mask fixated intensely on Arthur. A low chuckle started up, like a cat’s initial growl warning an aggressor to cease their hostilities. A Slig, recognisable by voice as Neal, laughed out with “See? Ya do have buddies after all mate!”, the sarcasm so heavy it was not just dripping, but cascading off each syllable.
Another Slig then clapped Arthur on the shoulder. He turned, and instantly recognised it as Merrick, the Head of Security. All Sligs recognised him and as their superior, it was his job to be recognised. His white baton and red body armour were unmistakeable, but when the armour and baton were off, as they were now, Sligs still recognised him. Or at least, if they didn’t want to risk getting themselves pulled up before the owners on false or exaggerated charges, they did. He was identical to every other Slig, yet distinguished at the same time.
Merrick grinned “Something ya want to tell us Arthur?”
Arthur’s years of gambling served him no aid in performing a poker face to try and deflect suspicion. He had always lost a lot of Moolah when gambling. “Uh….like what?”
Another grin. Merrick’s voice boomed again “Like, how you an this pathetic lil whelp had a conversation about bringin’ down this factory the other day, outside Rasputin’s office?”
Another of Arthur’s faults, the tendency to say the wrong thing under pressure, manifested itself “So you’re the one who’s been spyin’ on me, why?”
‘Nice one Mouth. You don’t listen to me enough, do ya?’ Arthur’s brain said to himself. The expression that crossed Arthur’s face was unmissable, even to the Slig furthest away at the back of the room, as one that said “Oh s***.”
Merrick’s smile faded “No. But I have seen the footage regardless, an heard te audio, an thanks ta your tongue slippin just there, I see no reason why I shouldn’t kick you inta this circle with that piece o’ guttertrash, an let all these boys do what they like.”
Arthur’s normally deep green skin paled considerably. His tongue caught in his throat “No, n-n-o Merrick, sir, I-”
“Unless……” Merrick cut him off. “Unless I can think of a more fairer punishment.” He feigned deep thought for a split second, then the sinister smile reattached itself to his features “Oh, I think I can.”
Merrick removed his arm from Arthur’s shoulders and walked around the edge of the circle, stopping at a random point.
“I have a proposal for you, Arthur. Now, the footage and audio we saw could be wrong. It coulda been scrambled. The missin’ pieces of sound may prove that you were actually resistin his attempts ta make you join his little….militia, an were instead an unwilling victim. Wrong place, wrong time.” He paused, and walked on a bit more. Arthur was too nervous to notice the melodrama.
“But the thing is, we don’t know that’s the case. An’ there’s no way of enhancin’ the audio so we do know. So you’ve gotta prove it, an there’s one way ya can do that.”
Arthur began to crawl out of the corner of despair and despondency he had ensconced himself in, desperately clutching at the thin strand of hope.
But Merrick’s eyes gleamed, and his grin grew even more menacing.
“Here’s ya way out Arthur. One simple, easy way ta prove your innocence.”
He then gestured to Mikey
“Kill him. With yer bare hands. An’ do it now. Kill him.”
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Is this already close to the end?
Yes and no. There's still about 10 sizeable chapters to go. What I meant was this chapter is where the road to the end begins.
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Excellent dilema for Arthur!
If I was feeling really dramatic I'd ask, "What will he be when he leaves the room, a coward or a corpse?"
However, I will settle for substituting 'coward' for 'killer'. Love Arthur!

A great chapter, with a lot of tension seeing the conversation between Arthur and Mikey seen by the boss, and then Arthur putting his foot in it like that.

All I'd say is that with all the focus on the sligs, the mudokon sections seem a bit superfluous, and might have done better in their own chapter. And that we've seen that conversation three times now in the course of three chapters, which works since this story is updated occasionally, but if you were reading it like a book it'd probably get boring.

still, very good. I look forward to seeing where this'll lead.
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Sorry I wasn't here to read you're two chapters...but now I did and I have to say great job!! =O I love all your characters! Love Arthur and Larry! If I where reading this at night it would have probably scared the poo outta me. -thumbs up-

The last one was rather long but it was worth it!
Is Arthur gonna kill Mikey? I can't wait to find out!
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So, I'm finally updating. This chapter took forever to do for no real reason other than my laziness. Larry & co. will return in the next chapter.

Chapter 21: Futile Actions

“Kill him. With yer bare hands. An’ do it now. Kill him.”
The words were spoken short and soft, yet were cannonballs to Arthur’s mind. The crowd of Sligs didn’t change their expression, the gleeful menace remaining. Merrick, having said his piece, folded his arms to watch, expressionless. The only 2 people to react visually were Arthur and Mikey. Mikey crumbled, folding up as much as his broken body would allow, cowering and begging Arthur to reconsider.
Arthur was equally despairing. He turned to Merrick. “What? Ya, ya can’t expect me ta just, kill him. I ain’t no mudlover, I don’;t need ta kill him ta prove that. You see me tomorrow , you’ll see. I ain’t no revolutionary neither, can’t spell the word so I damn sure ain’t one.”
Merrick’s cold stare was unshakeable. “You want me ta say “Ok Arthur, yer probably telling the truth. We’ll give ya tomorrow ta prove it.” But I won’t. You’ve caused trouble before, an fact is, I can’t risk givin’ ya till tomorrow. He’s guilty as sin. You too, far as I’m concerned. Unless you do somethin right now ta convince me otherwise.”
A tortured expression hammered itself to Arthur’s face, his inner agony expounding itself outwards.
“C’mon, Merrick. C’mon, I, I don’t like it here, I admit. But I wouldn’t take it down. I’m not that stupid, or miserable, an I ain’t got the guts fer something that suicidal neither.”
“Prove it.”
There was no way round, no chink in the mortar for Arthur to lever his way through the wall between him and forgiveness. And, as often happens when one is struck, upon hitting the wall, a red fog clouded over Arthur.
Mikey looked up from his not quite foetal position. “Arthur!....gak, you, don’t have ta prove em. Ya….ya didn’t agree ta nothing, I’ll admit! Don’ let this….cough…slave regime wi-Urrrk!!”
Mikey’s words abruptly ended as a vice-like hand clamped round his throat. An iron grip pulled upwards, forcing the aspiring mutineer’s broken body up to eye level with Arthur.
“Shut the f*** up.”
A fist followed the words, Arthur’s knuckles burying themselves into Mikey’s stomach. As Mikey fell towards the ground, landing on the 3 remaining limbs he had, another hammer like blow sledged downwards, smashing against the side of his face. It rained down again and again, each time followed by a demented yell from Arthur. Mikey’s yelps of pain were drowned out by the noise of the other Sligs, his attempts to crawl cut off as a metal leg shot forwards, motors hissing as the shin of Arthur’s pants smashed against Mikey’s arm, unbalancing him and leaving him prone again. The gyros swivelled back and forth as Arthur kicked at Mikey’s abdomen now, ribs bruising, buckling and finally cracking upon each blow from the solid metal.
“Arthur….please!”
The call of sympathy seemed to only enrage Arthur more. In Arthur’s mind, it was not the pitiful revolutionary lying before him, but a face who he detested, changing with each blow- Lak, Merrick, others whose names were forgotten or unimportant. Arthur raised his leg, lowering the irresistible steel down onto Mikey’s sternum. He pressed hard, trying to bury the pants through his chest. Mikey gripped the metal, trying to force it off, which only spurred Arthur on to reach down and drag the Slig up again. He kicked at Mikey’s buckled right leg, the broken machinery ultimately coming lose from its components. Arthur smashed another fist into Mikey’s face, before gripping his pants waist and pulling, wrenching the equipment from Mikey’s broken body. Arthur snarled again, before tossing the broken Slig across the empty circle. He pounced on the battered body quickly, clenching both hands around the shell of a lifeform’s throat, and squeezing. Mikey flailed, his battered body trying to free himself, snatching, grabbing, clawing; but his efforts slowed, before ultimately ceasing.
Arthur stood up. “Killer or corpse. Either way there’s a dead body. This way, there’s just the 1. But with the guilt I’ve gotta deal with now, I may as well be dead too.”
Arthur walked up to Merrick, going as close to the head of Security’s face as he could. “There’s yer proof.”
The senior guard’s face cracked into a grin “Indeed. Well done.”
Arthur turned menacing again, a manic edge to his voice “Don’t compliment me! Don’t thank me! I didn’t enjoy it. And don’t think I’ll be stayin’ in these Barracks tonight. Maybe not any other night neither. I can’t stay with Sligs who get happy ‘bout killin’ each other.”
He turned and marched towards the door, barely waiting for it to slide open before he exited, uncaring of his superior's or peers' reactions. They didn't matter to him anymore.
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Across and above from the Barracks, another watcher surveyed the execution, through means of a camera. Eyes gleamed.
“He’s got a killer edge then. Been in fights before from what I ‘ear, but never killed. Interestin’.”
The purple scuttling creature at the first figure’s side spoke from the corner of his mouth. “He detests his colleagues even more, now. Such actions may have aided his transformation into an insurgent.”
The first figure spoke again “Perhaps. But I doubt it, Raymond my friend. He can’t be manipulated, but he can be controlled direc’ly. It’s certainly not a matter necessary for yer ta raise at the next Board of Directors’ meetin’.”
The vykker at his side, Raymond, Chief Executive of the company, turned to face Godrar. “How is it that you intend to control him then? You know I don’t head down here much.”
Boss Godrar smirked “Indeed ya don’t. Too busy with yer paperwork an publicity over in yer off site office. And I can control him very easily. Through the correct employment, of this footage. Play!”
Godrar’s loud command was quickly acknowledged by the Voice Control, and the screen output changed immediately.
Raymond watched. “I assume you haven’t shown the others this.”
The Glukkon smirked again “Of course not. If they’d seen this, I’d be in no position to employ it.”
Raymond nodded “I’m sure you’ve got the situation fully under control, sir.”
Godrar nodded likewise “Indeed. I’ll have someone call the Slig up here tomorrow. See how he handles it.”
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Yay Munch's Master! That was awesome!!
And really creepy at the same time! I love the violence in your fanfic very much too!
I knda felt sorry for Mikey though. =o

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Wow this is great! Poor Mikey I was hoping he'd live for a while.
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See this once again throws doubt on how we expect the story to go. We were expecting Arthur to become good and help the mudokons leave, possibly taking himself away, too. This last chapter throws doubt on that.

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Well, it's time for Chapter 22, entitled The Beginning. The Beginning of what, you may ask? Well, the answer to that you shall find out at a later date, or perhaps not at all.

First, however, I have a major ENORMOUS TOWER OF TEXT AND DOOM warning. This chapter is 4717 words long, getting just onto the 9th page in Word. Read if you dare test yourselves, reply if you can survive this endless text wall.

Chapter 22: The Beginning
The morning after Mikey’s death
05:13 am. 8 out of 10 minutes into Mudokon breakfast time.

Trevor’s eyes flickered up from his food as Larry entered the cafeteria. His expression was not as ashen as Trevor’s, yet there was no mistaking the dullness in his eyes that confirmed he knew of the previous night’s events. Larry sat down beside Jeff, opposite Trevor. Max was to Trevor’s left, and all 4 were positioned distantly from the mudokons who were less than sympathetic to Larry’s goals.
“So you’ve heard then.” Said Trevor.
“Ha, how couldn’t I? The Sligs supervising my workstation were laughing all about it for ages. The Slurgs in the sewers probably heard it.” Larry replied.
“Mhm. The Sligs supervising me and the others were talking about it too. I think Arthur’s pretty much unreachable now.”
There was a pause, for both reflection and a mouthful of cafeteria slop.
“I’m not convinced about that, Trev. From what I heard, it was kill or be killed as well for Arthur.”
Trevor shook his head sadly “I don’t mean it in that aspect. I don’t mean Arthur’s settled in. In fact I mean quite the opposite.”
He gave Larry a hard look “His mind will have been shattered by it. I trained to be a shaman Larry, I know all about Quarma. He’s, maybe not a good, but at least a decent Slig who now has to deal with terrible Quarma for his actions, even though he had no choice. He’ll rip himself apart, and if we spoke to him it’d only make it worse. He’d feel hypocritical, he’d suffer from the other Sligs again. So however you hoped to incorporate him into your plan, forget it. Besides anything else, if he can put up with that Quarma, he will be settled in with the other Sligs, and that might be even worse.”
Larry looked downcast “I hadn’t planned on incorporating him into this plan, Trev. We don’t need an inside Slig, we just need a bit of help from the other guys.”
Trevor shrugged “I dunno, Larry. Your plan was to just sneak on while the loaders are loading up. How do we need help for that? We just slip on while the loaders are busy, and keep quiet.”
Larry shook his head “I mean for the distraction.”
“I don’t need help for a distraction Larry. I think you said yourself that I can cause a riot in an empty room.” Max smirked.
His companion nodded hesitantly “Well, I still think you need a guy who knows that the riot’s a fix, otherwise who do you attack to start the riot?”
Max grinned “Why don’t I just smack Roy or Stan?”
His 3 friends’ eyes each held a different response- Trevor’s rolled in exasperation, Larry’s twinkled with acceptance, and Jeff’s bored vacantly through Max’s left shoulder, the 3rd mudokon back in a world of his own since being de-Gassed.
Larry nodded again, more fervently now. “Let’s do it, then. Off to the loading bays.”
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05:21 am. 1 minute into morning work period.
Grey visors slowly slid open, revealing 2 closely spaced red orbs, beaming their brightness into the open air. Arthur clambered to his feet, from his seated slump in the stockyards where he had spent the night. The Scrab pens were to his right, the Paramites to his left, and the food hatches opposite him. His back was to the factory wall, the door inches from his left hand. He shook his head, and instantly the previous evening’s atrocities flew back to him.
“What’d I do?” He implored, gazing against the chain-link fence to the Paramite stocks. The simple pack animals cocked their heads towards him, face-fingers probing for morsels. One Paramite dashed at Arthur, its ear-grating screech cut off as it crashed against the fence.
“Dumb critter. Nearly as dumb as me fer lettin’ Mikey get me inta that mess. Stupid bastard, there weren’t nothin’ else I coulda done.”
Arthur was so deeply immersed in his thoughts he failed to notice the clacking feet behind him, until all 3 pairs of legs were close by. He looked up.
“Oh. Hello Lak. Again.”
Arthur’s former figure of hatred, now merely a less than friendly colleague, sneered back. The animosity between them was hardly forgotten. Lak’s 2 sidekicks seemed unwilling to be present, for the time being.
“Heh. Good job yesterday, getting rid o’ that mutinous lil fucker. Maybe you’ll make a decent Slig yet.” Lak said.
Arthur sighed “If you’re here ta just talk about last night, then piss off. I’ve been thinkin’ ‘bout it enough, an don’t need anyone ta repeat what Iv’e already said ta myself.”
Lak cackled “Oh! So you’ve already congratulated yerself in ya own head! It doesn’t surprise me that you’re an egomaniac, ya know.”
“Very droll, Lak. Ya know what I mean.” Arthur leaned against the fence, folding his arms.
Lak cocked his head, a cruel glint in his eyes again “….so you’re regrettin it, then, eh? Well, I wonder what’d happen if I tol’ Merrick that you’re wishin Mikey weren’t dead? If I told him that you only killed him ta save yer own treacherous hide?”

Arthur didn’t budge from his slouch. “You really don’ get it, do ya? I’m a Slig. He was a Slig. Even you’re a Slig, though sometimes I do wonder whether or not you’d be more at home in one o’ the help clinics in the big cities, what with your brains. I don’t like fightin’ other Sligs. I sure as hell don’ wanna kill other Sligs, whoever they are. Leave the civil wars ta the politickers, tha Gluks an Vykkers an Chroniclers, leave the mindless killin of each other ta the 1%ers an the Outlaws. We shouldn’t kill our own. Gluks want us dead, they do it.”

Lak’s cronies glanced at each other.
“Ta be honest Lak, I kinda agree. Not with the whole let the Gluks do it crap, cause that sounds like rebel talk, but that Sligs should stick together.”
Lak turned to his accomplice “Ya don’ exactly stick together with the clowns what work in Zulag 7, do ya?”
The other Slig smirked “Yeah, well they’re a bunch of reserved lil dicks anyway. Don’ even drink Brew, fer cryin’ out loud.”
The 3rd Slig spoke up “Speakin o’ which, I could do with one.” He nudged the other of Lak’s lackeys, who took this as a cue to leave to do something more enjoyable.

Arthur grinned “Ya buddies have gone. Doncha think us sligs should stick together now, eh?”
The other Slig’s sneer didn’t leave his face. “Ya talk nice, I’ll give ya that. Ya have a way with words, maybe ya should be one o’ them politickers yerself. Certainly suit ya, what with yer actions last night, killin’ a fellow wannabe escapist. I certainly think that lil speech of yours is a very “Power to the Sligs” type of rebel speech, an if I happened ta let it slip, who kn-“
Lak was cut off by Arthur who, having heard enough, struck the other Slig across the face. As Lak stumbled, Arthur snatched the Slig’s baton from his pants belt and swung it into his lower back. Lak crumpled, and Arthur swung the bat at the lock of the feeding bay for the Paramite pens. He grabbed Lak, dragging him bodily over to the fence, before forcing him head first into the bay, which operated on a double-lock airlock type of system. Arthur reached through, and gripped the far shutter lock, lifting it ever so slightly. When fully raised, Lak would be exposed to the Paramites, who were very numerous and very hungry.
“Gimme a reason Lak, please gimme a reason ta open this lock all the way!”
“Ha! Ya wouldn’t bloody dare, ya bastard! You open that, you’ll get executed fer murder!”
“I don’ open it, you’ll give Merrick false info an he’ll feed me ta the Slogs!”
Lak’s eyes bugged out in panic “C’mon Arthur, ya don’ think I’d really do that, do ya? It was just a joke!”
“Just a threat, more like. You wanted ta have a bit of power over me, but right now Lak, I have the greatest power of you. The power o’ life an’ death. So ya better convince me why I should give ya the former, rather than the latter.” Arthur wasn’t fooling around anymore. He raised the shut another fraction.
“Ok, ok, ok!!! I’ll er, I’ll not spread lies about ya ta anyone then, K? I’ll let ‘em know that ya are an honest Slig!”
“And?”
“AND!?? Er, er, um, and, and-and I’ll er, ask Merrick ta put a word in to the boss about havin’ official executions rather than us Sligs doin em! Ya know, the old Rupture Farms style formal an’ public stuff!” Lak stammered.
“That’s not much of a reason. Not get any more suggestions?” The gap between shutter and earth increased again. The Paramites were scrabbling at the hatch now, desperate for sustenance.
“Er, I’ll er, um, er....”
“S’ok, I got 2 ideas ya could do. First, ya can put in fer a transfer yerself, cause I’m sick of havin this constant feud between me an you. Go piss off ta some Flub Fuels in the middle of West Mudos or somethin’. Second, ya can buy me a brew, cause I’m dyin fer a Brew, but ain’t got any cash on me. That alright with you?”
“Sure! That’s fine!” Lak couldn’t get the words out soon enough.
The shutter fell back, sealing Lak from the Paramites, and Arthur pulled the terrified wretch out of the feeding bay. Lak frantically reached for his wallet, tossing it to Arthur.
“A nice fresh Brew from the bar over in the rec room fer the higher-ups, rather than the Vendos, I think. That’ll be about, 5 Moolah.”
Lak snarled, but didn’t move.
“I think I’ll hang on to your club too, as an insurance policy fer ya ta get those things done that ya said about. The insurance bein’ that if ya don’t do it, I can beat yer ta death with this thing…..Ooh, an this lil thing here too,” he said, a malicious tone now in Arthur’s voice as he examined a set of cards “What’s this? “Nolybab New Stars Agencies”? “Just give us a call an you’ll be actin’ by this fall”? “Best agency in Mudos”? So, ya wanna be some TV starlet eh? Don’ think it’d help with the other Sligs if they knew ya wanted ta be a tra dee la an’ tights theatre boy, eh?”
Lak shrugged, his angry glare still affixed. “S’only actin’, nearly every Slig’s fame greedy.”
Arthur nodded “Yeah, but I can pull a page outta your book an’….lie….a little. Fer instance, I hardly think they’d be so acceptin’ if they thought it were musicals ya were goin in for? Or one of them poofter Vykkers’ lil soap operas.”
Lak stood up “You’re a right bastard, Arthur. I reckon ya prob’ly [i]are/i] an honest ‘un right now. I’ll do yer lil demands, but this ain’t settled ‘tween us.”
Arthur nodded “I wouldn’t expect it ta be.”
He turned to go to his work station, but Lak stopped him again “one more thing, where’re ya workin next? That way I can let ya know when I’ve sorted it. Don’t want ya ‘accidentally’ thinkin’ I’ve tricked ya, do I?”
Arthur nodded “I’m meant ta be in the loading bays next. If ya can’t find me there, I’m in Zulag 6 after lunch, next ta them reserved types yer cronies were talkin’ about.”
Lak nodded reluctantly, as Arthur entered ther factory. Arthur had barely set off down the corridor however, before the factory speakers crackled with a message. “Mhm, Slig nyumber 777, goes h’by the h’name of h’Arthur, please proceed dy-irectly t’hyo the h’office of Mr Godrar, h’immediately. Repeat, Mhm, Slig nyumber 777, goes h’by the h’name of h’Arthur, please proceed dy-irectly t’hyo the h’office of Mr Godrar, h’immediately.” The quickly irritating tones of Alberto the Chronicler were easily recognised.
Arthur sighed.
‘Great. What do they want with me now? I bet THIS is about the Mikey business as well.’
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05:44 am. 24 minutes into morning work period. 16 minutes until first product Train departs.
Larry looked over at Trevor, who was busy watching the clock on the work screen. “What do you reckon, now?” He hissed.
Trevor glanced back “Give it a moment. We start it too early, it’ll all be resolved too quick and they might choose to double-check the train. We can’t be on the train while it’s still in the station for much more than 5 minutes.”
Larry nodded “I know. I’m just a little….edgy. I want to get things going as soon as I can to make sure we can pull it off. I’m thinking if we wait too long, we might lose the opportunity.”
Larry threw his switch, admitting his crate onto the conveyor belt where the crates were capped. He watched as the crate was sealed, yet could still be opened for the Sligs over by the train to inspect. The final locking bolts were put in by the mudokons at the train, who then winched the crates up onto the train itself. He then glanced at Jeff, who already had the item they intended to place in a crate ready.
Jeff fingered the necklace cautiously, it’s blue jewel in the centre the reason for its choice- to the uneducated Slig, it may appear to be a spooce-charged device of sabotage.
The loading system was truly a thing to behold. A very old fashioned system, it had the look of a very ungainly and inefficient form of production, but in truth this overly complex appearance was purely superficial- the process was remarkably productive. A large number of parallel conveyor belts fed the boxed yet open-air produce up from the filling rooms, where the crates or barrels had been filled with Septik Snaks’ patented not-so-haute cuisine. A mudokon operated each conveyor belt, it was their job to check the container contained the correct product, was correctly labelled, and then pulled the lever to admit the barrel or crate onto the next part of the belt, where an automated machine sealed the container with a screwed on iron cap with a hatch. The container then departed the belt and dropped onto a push-trolley that could transport 2 barrels or 6 crates. A mudokon then wheeled the trolley to the train, for the Sligs to inspect, tick off the quantity, then admit the 10 loader mudokons to place a special bolt through 2 loops, sealing the hatch down. The bolt had steel clips on each end to affix it to the lid properly. The containers were then winched up onto the train and stacked accordingly. The mudokon who had wheeled the containers over then ran the trolley back to the belt to transport more. Multiple wheelers were assigned to each belt to ensure a continuous flow.
Larry glanced over at Max, who had made sure to position himself on the same conveyor belt as Stan. His duties were as follows- Max would accidentally send too many containers on to be sealed for Stan to cope with. When the resulting pile-up occurred, Max would blame Stan, and would, after raised words, throw a punch. The more bystanders he could get involved the better.
Max nodded, and Larry nodded back.
“Time, Trev?”
Trevor looked up at the clock. Trevor was positioned 1 belt nearer to the clock and, thus, the entry door, than Larry, and from his position could view the clock without machinery obstructing him. “9 minutes till 6.”
“OK?” Larry asked, desperate to get the plan rolling.
“Give it 2 more.”
Larry sighed. He glanced at Jeff again. Once Jeff planted the necklace, Max was to cause the transport mishap, and ideally draw Jeff’s wheeler away from the belt. Jeff would then wheel the spiked container towards the train. Larry and Trevor then had to acquire trolleys and wheel fully loaded trolleys to the train. They would have them inspected before Jeff, to allow them to board the train smoothly.
“How do we get hold of the trolleys, exactly?” Trevor hissed, above the noise of machinery clanking.
“When Max starts, there’ll be a stack-up of wheelers for his belt. We ask for their trolleys from them, and use them for our belts. The pile-up on our belts that’ll happen from us not manning our stations won’t be noticed in all the other commotion.” Larry leant in close to Trevor to whisper the detailed explanation.
Trevor nodded, and resumed his work duties. The labour continued as normal briefly, before Larry again whispered “Time?”
“7 minutes. Where’s Stan?” Trevor replied.
Larry glanced “Heading back, at about the right distance too.”
“Go.”
Larry grinned inwardly. The plan was in motion. He pushed his ponytail out of his eyes with both hands, flicking his head back as he did so- the signal to both Jeff and Max to begin. Jeff, in the process of craning into the top of a barrel to check it was the right product, surreptitiously let the necklace slip from his hand and onto the surface of the barrel’s contents.
Max barely glanced in his barrel, and pulled the lever. He did this repeatedly and rapidly, and sure enough, as Stan reached the belt, there was a pile-up and overflow.
“Oi! What’re you playing at! You’ve sent too many through too quick ya big idiot!”
Max turned to Stan “I’ve just done my job! You’re too damn slow to keep up you lazy prat.”
“I’M too lazy!? I’m running back and forth here, you’re just stood there pulling a switch! Not surprising cause that’s all you’re good for Max, I mean you are just a freakish oaf, right?”
Max left his station and shoved Stan, who shoved Max back and kicked him in the shin. Max then slugged Stan with a haymaker, knocking him backwards over his own trolley. Stan picked himself up, and as Max smoothly pushed the trolley aside, and into the path of Larry to retrieve, Stan punched Max in the gut. The bulkish conspirator, however, was not easily felled, and bodily pushed Stan into Jeff’s wheeler. The 2 mudokons fell in a ball of tangled limbs, and the unwitting bystander started scrapping with Stan now. Jeff retrieved the forgotten trolley, making sure to load the spiked barrel on.
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05:53:41 am
Trevor spied a wheeler, meant to follow Stan on Max’s belt, yet unable to work now. He hurried over. “Hey! What’s all the commotion about?”
The mudokon turned “They’re fighting about their work speed, I think.”
“Right. Look, since you’re kind of, stuck now, can I borrow your trolley? We’re a bit short on my belt.”
The mudokon nodded “yeah sure. You keep working, but this is too good entertainment for me to miss!”
Trevor procured the trolley and hurried to his belt. He quickly loaded it up, and started walking to the train in time with Larry. They looked for Jeff, but paused. “Crap.” Muttered Larry.
Jeff, in acquiring the trolley, had gotten to close to the scrappers. A wayward punch from the former wheeler had caught Jeff, who had fallen onto said wheeler. Max reacted quickly. Under the pretence of going after Stan, he hauled the wheeler mudokon and Stan out of the way, and turned back to Stan. The wheeler leapt for Max, Jeff now forgotten, and bore Max into the mudokon Trevor had been speaking to. The 4th mudokon squirmed, and caught the other wheeler round the ear before accidentally tripping Stan. Max pulled himself up with another bystander as support, before pushing him out of the way into another watcher. These 2 were soon drawn in as well, and despite the fists flying, Max felt a sense of achievement.
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05:54:37 am
Jeff, now free from the turmoil, gripped the trolley again and began walking to the train. Larry looked at Trevor. “That was lucky. Max has done a good job.”
The 3 mudokons walked in single file to the train, as a handful of Sligs passed them in the opposite direction with batons at the ready. The guards had finally taken notice of the fight, and security across the loading bay floor was hurrying to prevent the riot – sleep was all well and good, but they wanted to keep their jobs.
The 3 of them reached the train, where only 1 Slig remained, a fortuitous case, as all the others had ran to the fight.
The Slig, looking utterly bored of his job, swigged a dusty Brew can between each check. He opened Larry’s first barrel, glanced in, closed it, opened the 2nd, glanced in, closed it. “Yep, fine.”
Larry moved on to get his barrel bolted and secured, but lingered, removing the barrels from his trolley but remaining on the platform.
Trevor moved up to the Slig. Swig of brew, glance in each barrel “Yep, fine.”
Trevor moved to join Larry. He nodded to one of the mudokons “Winch us up, we’ll help them unload it up there.”
The mudokon paused “But you’re meant to unload the trolley here, then they move it on while you go to get refilled.”
“Look, that chaos over there means we’re in no hurry. And besides, it’s making your jobs easier, gives y’all less to do.”
The mudokon nodded “OK.”
The Slig glanced in each of Jeff’s barrels “yep, fi-wait.”
He fished in the 2nd barrel, and removed the necklace. “What in the hell is this?”
Jeff looked innocent “Oh. It’s one of my necklaces, must have dropped in.”
The Slig looked sceptical. “It’s all blue in the middle, an I know your funny lil Spooce things are blue, an’ they can fire arrows and stuff. I think we have a terrorist weapon here!”
Jeff looked brilliantly confused. “No, it’s a necklace, sir. My necklace.”
The Slig was amused while still unconvinced “Necklace? Only them female-dominant Vykkers wear poncey things like necklaces.”
Jeff then gestured to the bangles, chains and bracelets that eternally adorned him. “It’s just like these.”
Trevor nodded to the mudokon again. “Winch us up, he’ll be questioning him forever.”
The mudokon sighed in agreement, and nodded to the mudokon on the other side of the winch. The 2 raised Larry and Trevor, and the barrels, up, their trolleys left unattended below. They wheeled them on to the train, and made a beeline for the nearest 2 mudokons.
Trevor spoke first again “Hi! We’ve been told to help you guys up here with sorting stuff out. Cause of all the chaos outside, there’s concerns you might be overstretched.”
1 of the fellow labourers didn’t react. “Chaos?”
Trevor nodded “Yeah, some guys have started a fight on the conveyor belts.”
The other worker grinned “I gotta see this. Breaks the monotony!”
The 2 of them walked out onto the platform, calling to be winched down so they could see.
The Slig, meanwhile, was finally done with Jeff. “Alright, fine. But I’ll be watching you, oddball.”
“Bignose.” Jeff retorted.
“Watch it! An’ they’re tentacles, not a nose, ya dumbass.”
Jeff then wheeled his trolley back, his part completed too.
Larry and Trevor walked to the back of the train, in search of a crowbar to remove Trevor’s manacles.
“It’s gone perfectly, Trev! I knew we’d do it this time!” Larry said excitedly.
Trevor looked back “for once Larry, I may have to agree. It’s almost gone too well, but I think we’re home and dry. I can’t believe I’m saying that.”
Larry’s feet slapped on the train floor, before he silently yelped in pain as he stood down hard upon the pointed curve of a crowbar.
“There! Ow!” he mumbled.
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05:58:14 am
The Slig who had remained on duty watched the commotion from afar, grinning as the greater numbers and resources of the security quickly quelled the fracas.
“Some o’ them slaves’ll be in fer some shit.” He said to himself, before his eyes aught a number of Sligs quickly walking towards him, all armed with rifles except for the leader, who needed no weapon.
“Great, Merrick. What’s the guy want now?” The Slig said to himself again.
The Head of Security quickly reached the Slig, who produced his checklist. “All stock’s accounted for, sir. Train’s as good as full an’ ready ta go. I know it’s barely a minute till departure’s due but I reckon it can get turned round.”
Merrick shook his head “There’s gonna be a delay.”
The Slig quivered. “No sir, not here. I can sort things out just fine! The riot stopped some of the conveyor belts’ stock from reaching us, but we can send it through as a bump-up on the next train delivery like we do normally with delays, sir.”
Another shake, another quiver. “No, there’s gonna be a delay.”
“B-but sir! I can get the workers off the train now! MUDS, GET OFF THE TRAIN NOW! An’ besides, the bosses’ll have my blood if the train don’t run on time!”
A third head shake “No, cause I’m the one causin the delay. I got a reason.”
The Slig nodded “An yer reason fer jeopardizin’ my career an life is?”
Merrick grinned, before walking past the Slig “I’ve got information that there’s gonna be an escape attempt, involvin’ this train.”
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06:00:16 am.
Larry and Trevor, huddled at the back of the train, watched as the handful of other mudokons disembarked the train.
“There were 6 of them in all, less than normal.” Trevor whispered.
“They’re all off and counted for now though.” Said Larry.
“Mmm.” Trevor paused. “The train’s late. They never let the trains run late, even if they’ve not been fully stocked they send along supplements on the next train. Why’s it late?”
As the words left Trevor’s lips, the winch could be heard squeaking again, pulleys raising the platform back up to the train. Mechanical clacks rang out, the sound of Slig pants walking haphazardly around the train. A gruff voice then spoke.
“Come out now, the both of ya. If ya don’t, we’ll shoot ya when we find ya. Come out, an’ ya don’t get shot. At least, not yet anyway.”
Larry and Trevor looked at each other in silent horror.
“How do they know? How do they know there’s 2 of us?” Larry whispered.
“They probably don’t, they’re just guessing.” Trevor mumbled back.
The voice spoke again “Whatcher names? I think the lil birdie said Lemmy an Trigger,m or something like that anyway.” A terrified pause, before the voice spoke again, dripping with sarcasm and menace “Oh wait, Larry an’ Trevor. That was it. I’m fergettin’ stuff in my old age, heh heh.”
Larry was near delirious in panic “Someone’s betrayed us, they have to have! Oh Odd, I’m gonna get the death penalty now, after all my offences!”
Trevor was in hurried thought “We both will, remember the legislations they introduced last year?”
Larry started shaking “Oh Odd! We’re both dead!”
Trevor was still pondering. He gingerly picked up the crowbar. “Maybe not. Or at least, not both of us.”
He swung the crowbar against the back of Larry’s head. The metal struck with a hard blow, and Larry fell flat, unconscious.
Trevor slowly stood up. “OK, I’m here. It’s me.”
Merrick spun, and quickly threw an arm out to stop the handful of other Sligs from firing “Where’s the other slimey bugger?”
Trevor grinned “Other? You mean Larry? Didn’t you know?”
Merrick paused. “Know? Know what?”
Trevor ginned, and gesture to his chant-suppressive shackles. “I’m a Shaman, as you can see. These shackles, pfft, they don’t work. I’ve been possessing Larry to try and escape the whole time! He’s a pawn, I needed him to test the water for my plans. I’ve no way out now so, I figured I’d let you know how I pulled the wool over your eyes. Gives me a bit of satisfaction before my execution, anyway. I’ve de-possessed him now, he’ll probably have no idea whats’ going on but think he was behind the plans himself. But he isn’t.”
Trevor stepped out, raising his hands in surrender. “It’s me you want. It always has been.”
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fantastic cant waite to see what they do to trevor and what will happen with larry keep up the great work MM
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Ooooh noooo I like Trevor! I hope he can somehow evade execution. Great chapter Munch's Master, can't wait to see what happens next.
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Holy cow it's like a movie! I can see it all in my head!!
Great really great Munch's Master! I looove it!! :P
Let's not forget the creepy-ness! >=D

Noo!!! -hugs Trevor- I don't want him to die! And poor Larry -hugs him too-
I wanna be a Mudokon so I can be buddies with them!
I wonder how Trevor's gonna get outta this one?! And Larry what will he do when he wakes up?! Dx

I've grown so attached to your characters MM!!
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