Buckwheat's Journal

[sliguy101]

When I came up with this idea for a fan fiction, I thought it was quite the creative one. The story will not be divided into chapter, but journal entries. Meet Buckwheat, a steef that was back in the old years of Oddworld, where a big war was raged between the steef tribe and the mudokkon tribe. How will the war end, and at what cost? Read this fan fiction for yourself.

Buckwheat's Jornal
By-Sliguy101

2/21
Years past-234

I can't believe our chief gave us these stuid journals to express our so called 'feelings'. We don't have feelings! We are warriors in a war that is desprate to us. This war decides our fate! Well, I guess I'll have to live with this dumb journal for the rest of my life.
The darn mudokkons are capturing all our men and roasting them over an open fire. They're insane! When they run out of rations, they just capture our men and eat them! I feel like I could just shoot them at first glace. But I just had to have the position as a scout. The chief said that I wasn't qualified to be a soldier because I kept flunking the tests. I could have sworn I passed them! Maybe he might be up to something.
We should be lucky that we're receiving ammo and guns from the sligs. It seems that they wanna help us. That gives us an advantage, but the mudokkons have learn a new kind of magic from this mudokkon that wears a huge mask. They him the Big Face. I think it's a stupid name, but if I told him that right in his face he would absolutely KILL me.
Enough about the war, let me tell a little bit about myself. My name is Buckwheat. I am young, about 26 years to be exact. I have never held a gun before, and I always have a desprate need to do so. It would be even better if I could shoot it at a mudokkon. But I have to follow the cheif's rules. I think he is the one who'll be shot.
My mother was a nurse for a few wars, and the retired at only the age of 54. My father was my rolemodel, because he was one of the best soldiers in Oddworld. He died when he was 30 because he stepped on a land mine. I hope to be just like him one day. It was lucky for him that he wasn't a scout, because he aced all the tests.
Hey, I think I'm goanna like this journal after all.

[sliguy101]

2/25
Years past-234

The past four days have been going by smoothly. It seems that Big Face wasn't able to assist them those four days. The sligs sure did give us the good stuff then. A few of the mudokkons had memorized Big Face's spells, and I mean a few as maybe like 10 out of 250 mudokkons.
I made a new friend today. He calls himself 'Broken Shadow'. I have no idea why. He is some little guy that wears a black cloak. In the head hole, I saw a red eye. And his legs were mechanical, so he was obviously a slig. He told me to be warned. He also said that a female mudokkon is pregnant. Big Face said that the baby being born is going to save the mudokkons' precious little souls. 'I highly doubt it!' I yelled out. Then the slig just dissapeared as fast as you could say shotgun shell.
The female mudokkon has only been pregnant for a month now and counting. I shouldn't have to worry. She was eight months to go.
While I was scouting, I heard the female mudokkon chatting with her friends. I hid behind the bushes and listened carefully. One of the friends asked if it was going to be a boy or a girl. The mudokkon said that it was going to be a boy. Then another friend asked what was the baby going to be named. This was the part when I got interested. My eyes opened wider than ever befoe. The mudokkon said that she and her husband were going to decide on three names. The first one was Yelkovik. What a dumb name, I thought. The second name was Relo. Relo? Ha! Now that's a good one. But the final name struck fear into me. That final name, was Abe.
I quickly ran away back into my room inside the big cabin. Why did that name fear me so much? Well, I don't care if it scared me. I now have a job to do. That job is it kill Abe.

[sliguy101]

Man. This is boring fan fiction, isn't it?

[andy86]

Hey, I don't read fanfics but the tragicness of 3 posts with no response got through even my hardened exterior. Maybe a whole bunch of people will be along in a mo who will read it and encourage you (I don't know if that happens here or what) but if not, then I dunno, tell some other fanfic author that you'll read theirs if they read yours and critique each other or whatever writers do. Have fun is all.

Ok I even skim read your story now. Looks pretty well written, not that I'm any judge. That'll have to do as encouragement.

[big bro boogie]

I like the story, but wasn't abe Sam's child, and wy does a steef need to kill abe?!

[sliguy101]

1-This is a FAN FICTION, okay? It doesen't need to follow the real plotline in the series.
2-Hello? The mudokkons and steefs are having a war!

[big bro boogie]

Sorry to piss you off friend. I was curious.
I read some FF's and i think this one's good, being original.
keep up!

[odd chick]

Sorry it took me awhile to reply, Sliguy-I was away for a few days. Anyway, I like the idea of this-it's very different and original...and hey, big bro boogie...what if the Abe in this story is a DIFFERENT Abe that the one we all know about? Or maybe it's not....oh well. Still, interesting idea, Sliguy. I hope you continue with it.

[sliguy101]

3/8
Years past: 234

For some reason, we had huge snowstorm today. While the mudokkons are nice and warm with some blankets they received from a few natives, me and the other ones around here are shivering with no place to get warm. It's taking so long for the sligs to get us warmth. If at least 10 of our steef die before the sligs get here with warmth, I'll kill them for all I care.
The snow won't stop. It's as though it's Big Face's fault. I thought he had done this, but Broken Shadow said that he didn't. 'He is not the one that controls the weather.' Broken Shadow had said.
I'm not goanna talk about that. It makes me colder everytime I mention the snowstorm and the warmth that the mudokkons have. I also wasn't goanna focus on the pregnant mudokkon, either. I was able to steel only a few blankets from the mudokkon tribe. I didn't keep any to myself. I gave one to the cheif and gave a few to my friends. The others are begging me to steel more, but I wouldn't. If I stole too much, the mudokkons would get suspicious, and then figure out what I was doing and before I know it, I'd be roasting on a pike over an open fire.
It'll take me a while to write in here again. I don't want my hands to freeze off, because they are one of the most important things I have. So long for now.

[sliguy101]

3/25
Years Past: 234

The snowstorm has finally passed. Good thing, too. A few minutes after my other entry, we received warmth from the sligs. It took a long time to get it, but it was worth the wait. Sweet shooter! the female mudokkon is already two months into pregnancy! Possibly, seven could only seem like three months! Oh my Odd! By the way, I just received that information from Broken Shadow just while I was writing this entry.
We are completely losing this war! Many of our men have been under a deep spell of some sort. And guess what? The mudokkon have been getting help from Scrabs, Paramites, Rexes, Flying Scrapers, and many other units. But the sligs did say the war wasn't over yet. They said that they are making a project codenamed Killer. It sure had better be strong. I'm wondering about two things. Where are all these mudokkons getting help from? And what in Odd's name is Killer anyways?
You know, I have been having these crazy dreams lately. I think these are dreams about the future. There was this one dream when I saw this factory called Rupturefarms. About a minute after a looked at it, the power went down, and a lightning bolt was going through. That was just mucked up. Or this one dream where I saw a factory called Soulstorm Brewery. Only after a few moments I saw it, the whole thing completely blew up! What is up with that!?
No special info about scouting yet. No info about Killer either. I'm dying to see what Killer will be.

[odd chick]

I really like this, Sliguy-it's very interesting. It's like the reader can feel what the main character is going through...his suffering, pain, and anger. Keep it going-I loved the way it's tied in with the games.

[sliguy101]

4/9
Years past: 234

I've got one word to write down.
PROMOTION!
It's as true as us winning, too! After a quick amount of time, Killer is already finished. It was a robotic slig that was the size of a mudokkon if you multiply it's height twenty times! In only a few gunshots, it took out most of the mudokkon's army! The saddest part was that Big Face had to drop in and make it dissapear to some torture-like world.
Oh, yeah. About the promotion, I am finally a soldier in the war! Now I can finally get payback on those silly mudokkons and their grunt-like allies! The problem was that there won't be another battle for sometime now, because Killer did most of the killing.
Something interesting happened today. While I was strolling along a path, complaining on how Killer hadn't gave me a chance at killing mudokkons, a wise old mudokkon came up to me. He offered me a drink. It was a dark one, maybe as dark as an eye pupil. After the first sip, I quickly threw it to the ground. Since it was glass, it shaddered into a million pieces. 'YOU EXPECT ME TO DRINK THIS STUFF!!' I yelled out. 'I knew you were evil.' The old mudokkon said silently. I asked him what he was talking about as he walked away. As he turned, he told me that the drink I had had a kind of peaceful mix to it. If a kind person had it, it would taste good. But for an evil person, it'll aways taste horrible. It gave me alot to think about.
I'll try to make an entry as soon as I can. Maybe right after my first battle, which that'll be a long time.

[andy86]

Hey again! I still don't really read fanfics but I decided I'd bump this thread as some sort of misguided encouragement, or something. As fan-fics go, this one is really well written in way of emotive language and tone and what have you. Sometimes the grammar goes weird, perhaps you could proof read or something. Mudokon btw. Fraid this is as good as my critique gets.

[odd chick]

Great entry, Sliguy-This part was very suspenseful...so, it's highly possible that he's evil, huh? Sounds interesting.

[sliguy101]

5/12
Years Past: 234

Yes. It took me that long to get into my first battle. The mudokkons were really having trouble getting other mudokkons to join in their army. But Killer had killed most of them. Only a few soldiers surrived. What pisses me off is that the female mudokkon is still at birth. How could this happen? Her husband died, but she didn't. Thirteen more days and then she only has five months to go! By the way, my first battle was GREAT! I must have killed about ten mudokkons.
In the mail today, I received a package. When I opened it up, I saw a mix for that tea that the wise mudokkon offered me. In it was also a note. Here is what is said:

Young Steef,

In this package, I offer the mix to my tea. Pour it in some water, mix it, and then it's ready to drink. As I said before, evil people won't like this, but heroic people will find this tea the best thing they have ever tasted. Not only that, but it gives heroic people the ultimate strength. We will meet again.

Your Wise Mudokkon

My eyes grew wide open after I read it. I could have the ultimate strength all to myself! But there was a big problem. I had to work for justice. This is a big desision. I have no idea what I'm goanna do.

5/30
Years Past: 234

Broken Shadow spoke to me today. He said that this war might end real soon. It dissapointed me to hear that. But then the chief came in. 'This war is far from over.' He said. 'It might take YEARS for this war to end.' Then, right after the chief said that, Broken Shadow dissapeared like he always does.
I didn't use the tea yet. It was a good thing. Another one of the Wise Mudokkon's letters came in. I'll write down what it said:

Young Steef,

I forgot to mention something in the last letter. There is only ONE CHANCE to get the tea just right. Make sure you have done many good things. If the flavor is wrong, I won't give you another pack. You may come to me to see if the tea is just right for you to have the ultimate strength.

Your Wise Mudokkon

I decided to get ot the good things ASAP. I had complaints like 'I'm awfully sick' or 'I just remembered, I had a special event to attend to' and so on, so that I couldn't join the battle. I smuggled in guns for the mudokkons and other things, too. Things are going by smoothly. All I have to do if get the tea to the right flavor.

[drakan90]

I dont particularly like the way it messes with the plotline, Mudokons being peaceful and all, but I think its well written.
Good job

Just one question:
If it was back in the 'old days of Oddworld' when there are lots of Steef/Steefs (I dunno the plural) why is Abe in it?
Unless Strangers Wrath takes place aaages after AO, AE, and MO. I dont have an X-Box, so I wouldnt know.

[sliguy101]

Um, because I felt like putting Abe in it?

[odd chick]

I liked that part, Sliguy-I, for one, like the way this story is shaping up. It might be a bit off-par with the games, but that's ok because it's still a good story.

Just one question:
If it was back in the 'old days of Oddworld' when there are lots of Steef/Steefs (I dunno the plural) why is Abe in it?
Unless Strangers Wrath takes place aaages after AO, AE, and MO. I dont have an X-Box, so I wouldnt know.

If I'm correct, I believe that SW takes place just shortly after MO.

[sliguy101]

6/9
Years Past: 234

I was awfully close to getting caught for helping the mudokkons. But don't worry, because I have plans for this mess not to be caught. What kinds of plans. I think they're pretty hard to explain.
I sure am getting used to being nice. It feels good to be working with the mudokkons for a change. They're telling me so many things I didn't know about their aliance. But one day, Broken Shadow suprised me in the middle of the night. He said that he knew what I was doing. 'I know that you are helping the mudokkons.' He also said. I was shaking in my bed. 'If your not evil by the time Abe is born, I will KILL you!' Broken Shadow yelled silently. Then he dissapeared as quick as he could.
I had nightmares the next time I slept. I should have known. Broken Shadow is a very wise slig, and he doesn't make stupid decisions. I bet he easily knew what I was doing. Well, I don't care what he said. From now on, I'm with the mudokkons. I just can't tell the other steefs, that's all.
The mudokkons are really liking me, and the wise mudokkon has completely become my new best friend. They have been offering me food, shelter, water, knowledge, magic powers, and all thing you could possibly imagine. Forget the steef army, the chief, and Broken Shadow. Just yesterday, I told cheif that I had quit the steef army and joined the mudokkons. I ran away as fast as I could, and took my belongings with me, too. In my bag, I had the tea mix, this journal, my lucky survival knife, and my 12-shot gun that I named 'Gelg'. Boy, the other steefs and Broken Shadow are going to be PISSED when they know I've switched sides.

[odd chick]

Ooh, this is getting very intense-I can't wait to see their reaction when they've found out that he's ditched them! Keep those chapters coming, Sliguy-this is really good.