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11-24-2009, 12:14 PM
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Yet another truly awesome chapter. You take all the best parts of the RP and make them even better XD

Especially that last bit with the conversation between Expert and Kix. Although I suppose Cyber-Slig and T-nex deserve most of the credit for that conversation, it's still very deep and you did add your own flourish to it

And off-topic, LOL at your new signature Remind me not to post directly after you
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Heh, it's just to fill the gap until December when I go to the Christmas banner I made for this year. The last one was more or less made just because I was too miserable at the time to think of anything clever.
Though it's a bit generous to call this one particularly clever Never mind.

Glad you enjoyed the chapter so much. I've half-written chapter 40 now (been on a role since Friday!) and I think part 6 will be done by 43 (Remember how I always used to type 'Gretin' when I meant 'Groll'? Still not over that). Still the longest part of the story. And only three more parts after it! It suddenly doesn't feel like very much.

Dryadri, I just want to say thanks; you have no idea how encouraging it is to hear that.
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wow somehow I feel a little sorry for Nick xD

^.^ nice chapter ...lol I also read the short part from the real rpg with Kix and Expert... you did quite a good job the way you put it in the story ^-^
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THIS IS MY 3000TH POST!!!! OH MY GIDDY AUNT!!!!!

So let's make it a good one!

I agree with you about Nick; he's not that bad, as sligs go. A bit of a coward maybe, but he doesn't mean any harm.

There are so many great bits of the RPG that didn't make it into the story. There was a great moment T-nex reminded me of where Razor tries to bully Dean and Javi and just gets ignored, which has a damaging impact on his self-esteem. There's also a great conversation in part 4 that I was tempted to put in, but in the end won't, because even though it's great, it doesn't affect Anni's plot.
So much good stuff, so little time...

I have a horrible ear-ache, and my headphones have broken (why is it always the left one that goes first?) but it doesn't matter, because once I post this I'll have 3000 posts, and there are so many awesome avatars in this thread right now!
And it's December! Happy December everyone!

Enough of his chatter! There's a new character in this chapter that a few people might vaguely remember.
So on with the show!


Chapter 38

The last two days in the factory had been melancholic at best. Nick of course was a more valued employee than Reg had been and so he hadn’t been fired on the spot. The fact that he had attacked Anni – who was not the most diligent worker – and not Kix may also have helped his chances.
Seven had told the mudokons that Arnie was thinking the whole situation over and would let them know his decision soon.

In the morning, two days after the incident outside the security office, Nick wandered down to the cafeteria and leant unhappily against the counter, looking sourly at the ceiling. Dean, who was working in the kitchen then, paid him little attention.

“New slig coming today,” Nick said suddenly.

Dean looked surprised, “I didn’t know Arnie was looking for another?”

Nick nodded, “Dunno if you’ve heard but Expert and Bela are leaving in a couple more weeks so Arnie was looking for someone. Didn’t want to spend the money on a big bro, but he found this guy cheap, so he’s coming early. It’s not great news now the main grinders are offline; that’s slowed down production a lot.”

“Nice of them to tell me,” Dean muttered, abandoning his washing up and pulling a laden clipboard off of the top of the fridge.

“Pass us a brew,” Nick said and Dean did so automatically, looking through his menu plans and stock lists.

“You’ve gotta pay for them,” He added absently.

“I put fifteen moolah in at the start of the month!” Nick lied. He’d get Bela to lend him some money later.

Dean sighed and dropped his clipboard onto a worktop.

“What’s up with this place, recently?” Nick grumbled as he flicked the cork from his brew, sending it skittering away across the floor.

Dean looked at him sceptically, “Don’t you think things are bad enough without you going for the ‘act dumb’ tactic?”

Nick rolled his eyes, “Well I can’t exactly talk to her. She runs off whenever she sees me coming.”

“Nick, I don’t want to be rude, but that’s ‘cus you always look like you’re gonna hit her again when you pass her.”

Nick muttered something unpleasant and took a deep gulp of his drink. “I dunno, she’s usually not like this.”

Dean grunted as he started manoeuvring an enormous cooking pot off of a shelf, but conceded, “I haven’t seen her so upset in years.”

“She usually sort of… bounces, doesn’t she?” Nick said conversationally, “I mean normally it’s really annoying, but I didn’t expect her to go this low.”

“There’s a song she sings to herself when she’s really upset, like she doesn’t want anyone to hear, but she sings it really meaningfully. I think she hopes it’ll cheer her up,” Dean added as he went to the fridge at the other end of the room and started pulling out scrab legs. “Like, I don’t know,” He went on distractedly, “I think when the vykkers still kept her she could use it to cheer herself up, but now it doesn’t-”

Nick swallowed hurriedly and blurted out, “Vykkers? What did she have to do with vykkers?”

Dean jerked out of his reverie, “What? Um, I mean, nothing, I mean nothing.”

“Are you saying she was an experiment?”

Dean looked pained, “Um… I really shouldn’t have said that.”

“She was an experiment?”

“Nick, please don’t tell her I said anything!” The mudokon pleaded desperately.

“Don’t worry; I’ll keep it quiet, but… Ugh, poor girl. I used to work in a lab; I know the sort of stuff they get up to. Odd, ugh!”

“Don’t say anything to her!”

“I won’t, but… Ok, I shouldn’t have hit her. Maybe I should go and talk to her about it. Say I’m sorry…”

* * *

Anni was sulking outside the slaughter room. This wasn’t a great place to sulk, but Kix and Math were working in the slaughter room and every few minutes Kix would come out for a breath of air that didn’t taste of guts and would grudgingly give her sympathy.

When Nick came into the room he saw Kix, leaning against the wall, breathing deep with her eyes closed tight. Anni was beside her, staring moodily at her feet. “Anni,” He said uncomfortably.

The girl looked up at him with surprise, then glared.

Nick would later blame everything that followed on that glare. Had the glare not been there, the next two years might have been completely different for everyone. Nick was far from the factory on the day it all came together, but he heard about it in greater detail than most, and could guess more than most, and he blamed it all on the expression on her face that day, because that way he never had to blame any part of it on himself. Because the glare made him angry, and he was never any good at hiding his temper.

“I just want to talk!” He said defensively.

Kix opened her eyes, hearing the irritated tone of his voice, and as tactfully as she could said, “Nick, maybe you should-”

Correctly predicting the end of the sentence, he cut her off, “Shouldn’t you be working, Kix?” He said wearily.

“Oh, that’s all you care about isn’t it!” Anni yelled, rolling forwards, balling her fists, looking at him with hate, “Stupid work in your stupid factory!”

“Anni, I wanted to talk!”

“About what? Feeding me to some other animals or when you’re going to hit me next?”

Nick’s expression twisted but Kix suddenly understood why he had come and said, “Anni, I think you should-”

“Oh, I don’t CARE!” Anni sobbed, “I just want people to leave me alone!” And she ran past Nick and away.

“Well,” Nick said, sounding slightly hysterical from annoyance, “So much for trying to say sorry!”

Kix looked pained, “Sorry, Nick,” She said helplessly, “She’s- she’s really upset, and-”

“Don’t you apologise for her,” Nick growled and stalked away angrily.

Walking out of the warehouse he caught sight of a clock; Hell, he was supposed to have met the new slig at the station half an hour ago.

* * *

Anni ran through the factory, forcing back tears. She just wanted to get as far away from that stupid slig as she could! She stopped running very suddenly when, going round a corner, she collided triumphantly with another slig and they both went flying to the ground. The slig let out a curse as Anni pushed herself dizzily to her knees. She looked at him, puzzled, “Um, who are you?” She said.

“Watch where you’re going!” The slig barked in response, glaring at her, seeing her scarred skin with all the interest he might show half an ant.

She tried again, “Are you new here?”

The slig glared at her as he pushed himself to his feet, “I thought someone was supposed to meet me at the station,” He grumbled.

“I can show you where Arnie’s office is, if you like?” She offered. “Or the security office, where Seven sometimes is; he’s the head of security or something.”

The slig looked at her surprised, scratching his side as he clambered to his feet, “You see a lot of the boss?”

“Not really. But I know where his office is. It’s on the corridor between the production lines and the mudokon bunks, so I walk past it all the time,” She replied, looking curiously at the objects attached to his pants; a pair of grenades and a fold-away knife.

The slig still looked uncertain but said moodily, “Alright; I guess no one else is coming to look for me.”

Anni smiled, “It’s just this way,” She said and hurried down the corridor, slowing down after a few metres to match his more sombre pace. “Um, what’s your name?” She asked.

The slig grunted before answering, “Stivik.”

She smiled, “I’m Anni.”

Stivik ignored this and walked on.

* * *

Kix had shirked her bloody apron and, forcing a nervous Math along with her, and gone looking for Anni, once again worried for her wellbeing, “Kix, she’s fine!” Math grumbled as he was half dragged along a middle-floor corridor, “What’s she gonna do, throw herself from the roof?”

“Ugh, don’t even joke about that!” Kix reproached him, “I just want to know she’s safe.”

“Why would she not be safe?”

“Anni!” Kix cried out and ran down the corridor, having spotted Anni with a strange slig.

Anni looked uncomfortable as she approached, “What’s wrong?”

Kix stopped before her and looked up at the slig (though taller than him, Kix always seemed to look up at people). Math came up behind her, trying to look inconspicuous (at which he was failing terrifically). “Um, you must be new?”

The slig looked ill-tempered, “She was just leading me to the boss’s office. Shouldn’t you all be working?”

“Oh, well, just wanted to make sure Anni was ok!” Kix said with false brightness. She didn’t like the look of this slig, “Come on, Anni,” She added, grabbing for her arm.

“I’m ok!” Anni replied tartly.

“Maybe you should go back to work,” The slig grumbled.

“It’s only just round here! Kix, this is Stivik.”

Kix tried to give him a friendly look but was too flustered to manage it. “Come on.”

“Is Nick still around?”

“No, he’s gone.”

“Who’s Nick?” Stivik asked.

“Just a slig,” Kix said quickly.

“Just a psycho slig who thinks he can break the rules and beat up everyone,” Anni replied, a fair and impartial witness to Nick’s character.

“Um, sligs are pretty well known for beating up muds,” Stivik said sceptically.

“Not here!” Anni said defiantly, “Arnie, the boss, says he doesn’t want his sligs beating up mudokons!”

Stivik looked surprised but said, “I had heard something about that, but…”

“Come on, Anni; we need to get back to work!” Kix said more insistently.
Stivik nodded, “Go on; just round here? I can find my own way, then.”

* * *

All in all, it wasn’t proving a great day for Nick. He’d spent over an hour running around looking for this new slig who either hadn’t arrived or had somehow disappeared, and then he had run into a flustered-looking Groll and spent the next hour explaining that the red wire was red so you knew it was the red wire, and therefore knew what to do with it, and the reason the thing wasn’t working was because Groll had used the blue wire instead.

When that mind-numbing conversation had finally come to a close, he stumbled back to the security office hoping he could spend the next hour listening to the radio while trying to find out why the parts he had ordered for the grinders hadn’t arrived on that day’s train.

Seven was in the security office, talking with the new slig. Nick nearly groaned when he saw them; he had once again completely forgotten that the slig had been his responsibility (as if he didn’t have enough responsibility!)

“I was wondering where you’ve been,” Seven said grimly and Nick had a feeling that he was about to get yelled at. In fact, it was worse than that, “Arnie’s decided he wants to talk to you and Anni, tomorrow evening, and sort this all out properly.”

“He what?” Nick asked bug-eyed while the new slig looked surprised.

“Tomorrow evening,” Seven repeated, “You and Anni. I don’t know if he’ll see you in his office or one of the conference rooms on the top floor.”
Nick sank miserably into his chair.

“Um,” Said the new slig under his breath, so only Nick would hear him, “Did I get off at the wrong station? I wanted Rupture Farms, not the We-Love-Mud Asylum.”

“Congratulations, here we have both under one roof,” Groaned Nick.

* * *

Dean, Javi, Kix and Math were sat around a table in the cafeteria with Anni the following evening. There were butterflies in her stomach at the thought of what was about to come.

“I’m not going to apologise! I’ve got nothing to say sorry for! He hit me!”

Kix looked uncomfortable, “But he was going to say sorry, Anni. Yesterday, in the slaughter house-”

“I don’t care!”

“It’s her choice,” Javi said firmly; this had been his standpoint from the beginning, which thoroughly irritated Kix. Dean on the other hand had kept his opinion to himself and wasn’t speaking. Math was sort of siding with Kix in an uncomfortable way that said he thought she was right but didn’t really want to cause any trouble.

“Right, it’s my choice,” Anni agreed and edged closer to Javi.

“Anni, do you really need to take it this far?”

“Yes.”

“Anni,” Math said uncomfortably. It was the first thing he’d said since Anni had gotten here and everyone instantly turned to look at him, “Look, I know Nick’s got some bad points-”

She snorted.

“-But he’s not that bad as sligs go. I mean, he’s better than most, isn’t he!”

Anni stayed silent and looked sour. Kix pressed the advantage, “He’s not the sort of slig who usually loses his temper over nothing-”

“So you’re saying I deserved it?!” She demanded furiously.

The painful answer to this was of course, ‘yes’ but before plates could start flying, Dean, watching the clock, called out loudly, “It’s time.”

There was a tense pause, then Javi stood up. “Come on. We might as well go with her.”

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Stivik's here! On my 3000th's post! (Alright, get over that, Splat.)
Finally we're reaching a part of the story that I helped create!

Originally I was going to have Stivik become a focal character once he appeared; right at the beginning when I first started writing this story, I had an image in my head of a conversation between Stivik and his superiors, with him being told about his mission at Rupture Farms, but when I came to write it a few weeks ago, this way seemed so much better. We get to see him from the other side, from the outside, and I now you can all watch all the little things that happen around him that look bad for Arnie!

Next chapter covers possibly the most famous event in W@RF's history, which is of course Anni and Nick's trial, though it's rather different in the story (sorry, everyone).

Anni's fair and impartial judgement of Nick is one of my favourite lines for a while And that conversation where Dean accidentally lets slip about Anni was once again lifted quite faithfully from the RPG.

Part 6 will now reach at least Chapter 44, because I accidentally wrote Chapter 40 twice.

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Lol.. You wrote 2 chapters twice .. funny...


Hm.. Stivik doesn't show a lot of personality yet. He seemed to be much nicer towards Anni, yet we still knew what was going on in his mind.

What does "Focal Character" Mean?

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A character the story focusses on. Like the main focus now is on Anni, and occasionally Kix or Nick.

And I mean just the words 'Chapter 40'. I didn't write the same bit of the story twice. Even I'm not that daft.
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Woo, 3000 posts! I don't think I'm even up to 1000 yet. Shows how much I post

Anyway, onto the story, I loved that line “Just a psycho slig who thinks he can break the rules and beat up everyone,” Anni replied, a fair and impartial witness to Nick’s character.

I also noticed the foreshadowing here:

Nick would later blame everything that followed on that glare. Had the glare not been there, the next two years might have been completely different for everyone. Nick was far from the factory on the day it all came together, but he heard about it in greater detail than most, and could guess more than most, and he blamed it all on the expression on her face that day, because that way he never had to blame any part of it on himself.

So I'm curious to see just how you write about the next two years I'm also very curious as to what the conversation in part 4 that you decided not to include is. Is there any chance you could provide linkage?

And why won't the blue wire work?
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The blue wire won't work because it's the wrong wire. I hope you don't mind that I've given Groll more limited mechanical ability than Nick; I've always seen him as a less intellectual slig, so I don't think he'd be hyper-skilled. His mechanics training is explained in a few chapters' time.

The conversation involves Stivik and Arthur and is wrapped up in a conversation between Stivik and Dek, which I will be using (and really need to get on with writing) so to avoid spoilers I'll link when I post that chapter. It's not an important one; just a nice one.

I love the fair and impartial line, too.
As for the foreshadowing, I've recently put some particularly foreshadowy bits near the beginning of chapters, so that you've nearly forgotten them when you reach the end, so it creates a sort of lost sense of unease Or something. So you completely ruined that! Thanks a lot!
Nah, just kidding. It's cool to see people picking up on it. There was one earlier that I really wanted to comment on myself but chose not to for this reason. I think I might have subconsciously picked this up from Steven King, too.
I only read the 'Dark Tower' series, and only 'cus of that old OT RPG with Dave and all the tigers (man, that RPG rocked!)

When Anni's little individuality is finally revealed to those who don't know it, I might post a montage of the previous hints dropped

Also, thank you for the nice, long reply That's just the way I like 'em! I especially liked the way you picked out the bits you liked (especially cus they were also the bits I liked!) Everyone do what he did!
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I have no problem with how you've portrayed Groll, my question on the blue wire was actually supposed to be a kind of subtle hint/joke to show my appreciation of how you are portraying him While in my original story he was based on he did build a completely custom and relatively complex sniper rifle, that wasn't done on his skill alone, his work place had a lot of sophisticated machinery which took care of the tricky bits.

Like using red wires in the place where red wires are supposed to go

And technically, my reply wasn't actually that long since most of it was made up of quotes from your story <- you're not the only one who uses this smiley too much

And who says the blue wire's the wrong wire? I'll use whichever wire I feel like using!
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You're doing an awesome job Splat! I like how the story is going, the bits and pieces you're adding and stuff. And you're doing a great job keeping Nick in character .
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Wow, I'm glad you like it, Havoc! And I'm glad you think I'm doing your slig justice; he's a pretty cool character

Gretin, if I wired your heart in backwards, would it work?

I have just finished writing the last chapter of part 6! And it was chapter 45! So there ya have it.

I will not be writing any more of this until my characters move on in the RPG, which should be during W@RF 10, and what with the way its going at the moment, that shouldn't be too far away. I will keep updating weekly until I run out of chapters and see how it goes. I don't wanna keep you all waiting too long for the RPG, especially as you're all gonna hate me for the cliffhanger at the end of the last chapter, so... yeah. I'll just see how it happens.

Man, the last two chapters of Part 6 are intense! Anyway, I'll keep you posted on progress and stuff. Next chapter on Tuesday, as per usual.

Man, this part is like 16 chapters long and nearly 100 pages long on Word! It is huge! I think its more than twice the length of the second longest!

EDIT:
Did some maths! Part 6 is 88 pages long. The second longest part is part 3, at 37 pages long (that's Sadist's Creation). The shortest part is Warrior's Birth, part 4, at 20 pages long (unless you count the prologue with is 3 pages ).
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wow this chapter was really awesome! i luv how you described everything ^^

dawww come on Anni, Nick wanted to say sorry after all! ;__; x3

I also like that you didn't focus on Stivik here... the reader knows more about Stivik than the characters in the story and that creates a certain suspense... a tiny little bit like in the movies from alfred hitchcock... well at least if you keep focussing on other characters... xD


...can't wait for the next chapter n.n
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I will not be writing any more of this until my characters move on in the RPG, which should be during W@RF 10, and what with the way its going at the moment, that shouldn't be too far away
What? Does that mean you'll be leaving W@RF?

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I won't be leaving W@RF. I did, for example, introduce Grace so that when I do bring on the action, I won't be left with next to no characters.

I'm glad you like the way I'm doing Stivik, Sci. I just like the little hints dropped now and then that he's picking up dangerous information. But he does become pretty significant before long!

Anyway, on with the show! This chapter dramatises one of the RPG's most famous scenes. I'm afraid it changed rather a lot in translation... (sorry, everyone who was looking forward to this as it was! But at least there are no fuzzles throwing video tapes around anymore!)


Chapter 39

The five mudokons were in the main lifts, Javi pulling the rope to raise them towards the top floor. Kix stood the opposite side of him to Anni and was using the noise of the lift to whisper at him angrily, “I can’t believe you’re letting her go through with this. She’s just going to get upset.”

Javi checked that Anni wouldn’t hear him (she was looking slightly sick with nervousness and seemed hardly aware of anything around her), “She’s old enough to make her own choice.”

“She’s just a little girl! You’re supposed to be responsible for her!”

“It’s her decision, Kix.”

“You don’t really think the glukkon will side with her?”

Javi didn’t answer, and to be perfectly truthful, he was sure the glukkon wouldn’t side with Anni. Before his lack of reply could become suspicious however, the lift arrived at the top floor, Dean woke Anni out of her daydream with a tap on the shoulder and they all piled out.

Arnie had chosen to hold the meeting in the smallest of the factory’s conference rooms. Nick was already waiting outside when they arrived and Groll was with him. He nodded to Dean as they approached, ignoring Anni. Both sligs looked edgy and were smoking. Kix tried to remember if she’d ever seen Nick smoking before.

Before anyone could think of something suitable to say to break the unpleasant silence that fell between the sligs and mudokons, the door to the conference room slid mechanically open and the two parties were drawn in.

Though not a big room, it was none-the-less designed to be an imposing one. All good glukkon conference rooms naturally were. Though not circular, the walls curved round making a sort of round-cornered triangle. There was a raised podium at the far corner where Arnie was standing with his junior executive, Otto, and Seven. There were other, small podiums in the other corners which, of course being designed for glukkons, were rather austerely furnished, and to the nervous mudokon girl looked horribly exposed. The room was plainly decorated; the metal walls were exposed and, though brightly lit, it was lit in such a way that seemed to make it harder to see clearly.

The first thing Arnie said was, “I don’t think we need all of these mudokons.”

Dean instantly grabbed Math’s wrist, “We’ll wait outside,” He said softly to Anni and the two of them slipped back. Javi stood tall and firm on her left, between her and Nick. Kix was just behind her. Arnie, though evidently still not entirely satisfied, nodded, gesturing her and her friends to the podium on one side of the room, and Nick and Groll to the other. He nodded again to Seven, who pulled an unobtrusive lever on Arnie’s podium and the floor of the room sank two or three metres, leaving them all marooned on their platforms. Javi uncomfortably wondered what prompted this, unaware that it was a fairly standard architectural feature. He and Kix stood close behind Anni, who was boldly standing at the middle, highest point of their podium. Nick was opposite her, cringing slightly, Groll leaning back on the wall behind him.

“The aim of this,” Arnie began, “Is to work out exactly what has been going on here over the last few weeks. What I understand happened three days ago is that Anni borrowed Nick’s keys from the security office without asking, but under Expert’s orders, to shut down the malfunctioning grinders. Nick returned to the office before she did, found them gone and rightly alerted security of what he took to be a theft. Then Anni returned with the keys and Nick… reacted with an action which might have been justifiable – I say might – if Anni had indeed stolen the keys with bad intent.”

He stopped and there was a long silence. Anni felt a sort of sinking in her stomach. She hadn’t realised how things had looked to Nick before.

Arnie looked up at the ceiling and spoke again, “Nick, you’ve worked for me for nearly three years now, and the impression I’ve been given of you is not that you are quick to take the law into your own hands. I’m wondering just what provoked this.”

Nick looked startled, suddenly realising he was expected to explain and fixed his eyes very firmly on the wall a foot to the left of Arnie’s head, “It’s been a few things, sir,” He muttered, then coughed and went on, “Just since I’ve gotten back from my… my break, I’ve noticed Anni hasn’t really been working hard, playing around and stuff. Then she wasted a whole morning painting the cafeteria wall and had to spend the next week clearing up the mess she made. And she…” Odd, it all suddenly sounded so petty. What had she done, spoken to him at the station? “She…” Painted more flowers? “She was told not to waste any more time, and she went back and painted more of the cafeteria, and-”

“I didn’t!” Yelled Anni angrily, red-faced.

Nick jumped and glared at her. Before anyone could silence her, she shouted, “Kix and Math painted the rest of the flowers, not me! I wasn’t going to! He told me not to!”

“What?” Nick spluttered.

“It’s true,” Kix said meekly, just about raising her eyes enough to talk to Arnie’s elbows, “Me and Math finished them. We wanted to do it as a present for her.”

There was a long pause which Nick broke, “But then she jumped on me! I went to talk to her and she attacked me!”

Anni snorted, “I did not attack you!”

“You leapt on me and tried to-”

The other glukkon, Otto suddenly cut in, speaking over him, “Are you saying you were attacked by a little girl mudokon?”

Behind Nick, Groll let out a snigger. Nick spun round and glared at him.

“And Nick threatened to kill me!” Anni put in suddenly.

“I did not!”

She nodded stoically and addressed the boss, “He dragged me out into the stockyards and said he was going to feed me to the scrabs! And I told him he couldn’t kill a mudokon and he said he didn’t care! Then Javi saw us and stopped him.”

“I was just kidding! I just wanted to teach her a lesson! I wasn’t even hurting her; I was only going to scare her!”

“And you did a good job of that!” Javi interjected.

Nick rolled his eyes and muttered, “Not that good.”

“And what happened three days ago?” Arnie cut in, addressing Anni.

Anni looked annoyed at how little sympathy her near-death-experience had garnered but answered, “Expert sent me to get a key from the office, or get Nick. He wasn’t there when I arrived but I saw the key he’d described on a desk and took it. I didn’t have time to get it apart from all the others.”

“Well you should have brought it back, afterwards, not leaving me to worry!”

“Expert told me to stay where I was! I brought them back when I got your message! I could have gone to him, or hidden them or something! But I did what you’d said! That’s all I was doing!”

“What exactly happened when you saw her with the keys?” Arnie asked Nick firmly, but Anni interrupted.

“Kix was there!”

Arnie gave a sort of ‘whatever you say’ shrug and turned to Kix. She looked uncomfortable and now looking at Arnie’s boots answered, “It… It was scary. I mean, he really wouldn’t listen to us…” She took a deep breath and looked straight at Nick, “I’m sorry, but I really thought you were going to kill her. I was panicking and maybe I was wrong, but… If Expert hadn’t come, I don’t know how far you would have gone.” She fell silent and then added apologetically, “But, I mean, I’ve never seen him lose his temper like that before. Even when Reg was here and hitting us all when no one important was around, Nick wouldn’t join in, when some of the other sligs would.”

She spent the next minute meeting as few eyes as possible.

Arnie was silent for a while, “I think it’s fair to say,” He eventually began, “That it isn’t in Nick’s character to act in the way he did. While this doesn’t absolve him of what he’s done, it does mean we have to address why it happened, which seems to be Anni’s particular attitude to work.” He turned to Anni, “I don’t know what things were like for you in that place you and your friends came from, but here I expect you to work, as hard and as long as anyone else. Obviously, you seem prone to getting distracted, so it may do well to assign someone the role of keeping your attention on your work…” He looked around at Groll, “You seem to like following people around where you’re not invited; maybe you’d like to follow Anni.”

Groll jerked to attention, “Uh, sir, but, um, with respect, uh, I mean, I’m not really used to this mudokon thing, nice to mudokons, not yet, and I’m still sort of used to… So I don’t know if my… If I would be suitable-”

After letting him stew for a full 20 seconds, Arnie gave him a nasty look, “Perhaps not, then. You two,” He turned his attention to Kix and Javi, “Perhaps you’d be more suitable for the job of keeping your friend focussed.”

“I don’t mind having her help me in the stockyards; she’s useful to have around out there,” Javi said. Kix nodded.

“Good,” Arnie snapped and nodded to Seven, who reached for the lever to raise the floor. “Then you two are assigned to making sure Anni keeps working. Seven will work out something official for tomorrow. You can all go.” Anni balled her fists and glared at the glukkon, but Kix gave her a firm push and led her out of the room.

Looking relieved, Nick hopped down off of his podium. “Oh, except you, Nick,” Arnie added, “You can meet me in my office in five minutes. We still need to discuss this little incident, you and I.”

* * *

Dean and Math spun around as the door opened. “Anni!” Dean declared, “How did it go?”

“He didn’t care about Nick at all,” She said angrily, “He just told me I had to work with Kix and Javi, to make sure I keep working!” She gave a horrible laugh and ran off.

Dean looked questioningly at Javi, but before he could speak the four mudokons slid back respectfully as Arnie, Otto, Seven, Nick and Groll also emerged.

“Get us a bite to eat, Dean?” Seven muttered wearily as the door closed, “Cafeteria in ten minutes. You lot can have something afterwards, too.”

Dean nodded and turned to the others, “What happened?”

* * *

Nick was scuffing his heels on Arnie’s not-very-expensive rug while Arnie settled himself slowly behind his desk.

“You’re not a natural trouble-maker, Nick,” Arnie said mildly.

“No sir,” He replied uneasily.

Arnie sighed, “Why do you think you’re here?”

Nick looked puzzled, “Um, because I hit a mudokon?”

“Because you broke one of my rules,” Arnie corrected. “It doesn’t matter if the rule was ‘don’t hit mudokons’ or ‘don’t drink when you’re on night shift’. We have rules; it’s your job to keep them.”

“Yes sir.”

“I have a factory to run. It’s not a big one, but none-the-less it only works if all of the pieces are doing their jobs properly. How do you think I should treat someone guilty of sabotage?”

Nick didn’t answer, but seemed to be renewing his familiarity with his feet.

Arnie growled, “You’re a hard working slig. There aren’t many about in the world, especially for someone in my position. But I still have expectations of you.”

Feeling he ought to say something, he settled for mumbling, “Sir.”

Arnie nodded, “Take this as a warning. I don’t want to see you breaking rules again. And if you can’t cope with Anni, then stay away from her.”
“Yes sir.”

Arnie rolled his eyes, “And you can get your own meals tomorrow. From a vending machine. Alright, you can go.”

Nick was gone from the office faster than a fleech from a scrab-nest.

* * *

“Anni?” Kix was standing in the doorway of the bunks. She spotted Anni’s shape in the gloom, lying on her bed, and approached. “Anni?” Other than the girl, the room was empty. As far as she was aware, all the other mudokons were down in the cafeteria going over the trial. She was more popular that evening than she had been for weeks.

“What?”

Kix chewed her upper lip, “Dean’s making some food. He thought you might want to come down and have something.”

“Not hungry.”

Kix looked upset, “Anni, I’m sorry about what’s happened.”

“It’s alright. I’m tired.”

Kix hesitated, but nodded, “If you want anything, you can come down.”

Anni lay in bed as her friend left. She had a horrible head-ache, like she hadn’t had in years.

* * *

“So Arnie’s like, ‘Just make sure she keeps working and that’s fine’! I mean, who’s he kidding?”

“You’re joking?”

Groll, Razor and the new slig, Stivik, were noisily discussing the results of the trial at the other end of the cafeteria. Ignoring them, Kix sat down with Javi and Math at the counter, “She says she’s not hungry.”

“You should have told her to come down,” Javi said.

“Well I don’t want to push her around, not when she’s this upset. Odd, she’s going to get enough attention after this, isn’t she?”

The other mudokons had been told very firmly by Javi to leave them alone, but the trial was a hot topic, and people would want to hear the story not warped by the sligs.

“I’ll go up and check on her later,” Math offered.

“Dean or I might. We’re both well used to trying to guess her moods.”

“I dunno, it’s just… I didn’t expect her to take all this so hard,” Kix muttered.

Dean, coming over from the depths of the kitchen with a plate of sandwiches said soothingly, “It’s alright; she’ll probably be over it in a few days, if Nick leaves her alone.”

“I’m not sure; she’ll be even more upset when Expert goes next week.”

“Just keep an eye on her,” Javi said.

“That won’t be hard now.”

“Kix…” He said firmly, “Watch out if she’s acting odd. And let me or Dean know, really! I don’t want her doing anything stupid.”

Kix nodded. “I’ll tell you.”

* * *

In her bed in the bunks, Anni groaned, clutching her hands to the sides of her head, “You’re hurting,” She muttered. Tossing and turning, she murmured to herself, “It hurts, go away…”

You knew he wouldn’t do anything; you knew the slig would get away with it.

She groaned, hating the world. ‘Arnie won’t do anything. Nothing you do matters. You’re nothing to them.

“It hurts…”

You shouldn’t be here.

“Go away…” She muttered again and stopped tossing. The pain eased a little and a while later she was able to fall asleep.

* * *

Work recommenced at Rupture Farms the following day, four days since the grinders had broken down, and Nick was promising to have them running again by the end of the next week – the same time Expert and Bela were leaving – assuming the parts he had had to order arrived when they were supposed to.

To Kix’s consternation, Anni’s mood didn’t recover quickly. Now that Anni had to be working inside with her or outside with Javi all of the time, they were able to keep better track of her. “You haven’t visited Somi for ages,” Kix said the next week, two days before Bela and Expert were due to leave. The air of melancholy was pervading the factory; Kix would miss the big-bro, too. He wasn’t exactly a friend, but he was something she could trust, and it hurt her to lose him.

Anni shrugged, “I haven’t seen her for a while. I’ve been going down and there’s no sign of her.”

Kix was surprised by this news, “Well, I’m sure she’s down there somewhere. You should go and look for her this evening.” Kix didn’t exactly approve of the paramite, but she wanted to see Anni happier again.

Anni shrugged and didn’t answer. Several minutes passed before she spoke again, “Have you ever thought about… what’s out there, Kix?”

“What do you mean, ‘out there’?”

“Outside the factory. It must be so big out there, so much to see.”

“Anni, don’t think about it. Really,” Kix murmured.

“But don’t you want to see any of it? I would love to!”

“Anni,” Kix said sternly, “Don’t talk like that; you’re going to get in trouble. Don’t think about it. We’re ok here!”

“I’d come back! I just want to see a little of the world!”

“Anni!” Kix said firmly, “Get those ideas out of your head! The glukkons would be so angry if they heard you’d been talking like that!”

Anni pouted but fell silent. Kix eyed her uneasily as she returned to her work, wondering if she ought to tell Javi and Dean about this.

In the end, she kept it to herself. Such a short conversation surely couldn’t really mean anything; Anni wouldn’t really try to escape…

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Of course she wouldn't, Kix.
Man, I really don't have much to say here, for once. It wasn't the most active chapter. I promise more excitement in the next one!

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I guess I can come back as a zombie! Funny thing is, just recently on another forum I pronounced myself dead as well. However the cause of that one was a shot to the head brought about by extreme shame. This case was just extreme stupidity XD

Anyway, getting onto the story, I don't really remember exactly how the case between Nick and Anni went, so I don't know how far off you went from the RPG version I do like the way you stopped to describe the room though. And this line cracked me up:

The other glukkon, Otto suddenly cut in, speaking over him, “Are you saying you were attacked by a little girl mudokon?”

Behind Nick, Groll let out a snigger. Nick spun round and glared at him.


As well as this one:

Groll jerked to attention, “Uh, sir, but, um, with respect, uh, I mean, I’m not really used to this mudokon thing, nice to mudokons, not yet, and I’m still sort of used to… So I don’t know if my… If I would be suitable-”

(Disclaimer: The fact that Groll is my own character has no bearing whatsoever on some of my favourite lines involving him. Honest!)

And poor Kix, she just doesn't want to cause anyone any trouble but she might've saved them some trouble if she'd been more forward in telling the others about Anni.

Also, I hope you haven't neglected to retain Nick's habit of calling Stivik "Stavik" XD
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I did neglect that, sorry... Basically, everything that has happened in this RPG in Rupture Farms so far apparently took place in a single day in the RPG. Any confusion with names tends to get sorted out pretty quickly I think, so if I had included it, it might have been mentioned once in the middle of Anni's feud, so the joke would have been a bit out of place.

Yes! I should have bored you all with six paragraphs about the RPG meeting when I posted this! (I wrote these so long ago, I'm forgetting things like that).
In the RPG, nearly all of the RPG's character's turned up (dunno how they got away with that). The room was a lot more... Earthy. Stivik stood up and said something pointless 'cus I was new to RPGing then and was bored of my character doing nothing for ages. Arnie was less in charge of the discussion which was steered more by Anni and Nick.
And while all this was going on, Rick was finding a robot in a cupboard. Said robot will not be in the story on account of RPG logic. Sorry Dripik.

I'm glad you like those lines, though I also enjoyed the next bit, Arnie letting his stew for a full twenty seconds. Poor Groll

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Omg after reading this chapter(which i did when I was really tired) i went to bed and friggin dreamt the whole thing >_< I was Anni in my dream and was as bratty as ever.

Anyway how come Stivik had almost nothing to do with this chapter? In the RP he was much more active, and he and Anni were sort of ok with each other in the start.

Also how come the robot isnt logical? I like RG
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Yeah, I liked the stewing for 20 seconds bit too, but I didn't want my quote from the story to get too long. It might've been like:

"Well, I like the next bit so I'll include that... but I also like the next bit. And the next bit... Ooh, and that bit's quite cool... Oh, what the heck, I'll just include the whole story!!!"

And yeah, I notice you have Arnie's personality more like what it presently is in the RPG rather than how it was when it first started. And it's lucky for you you're not leaving the RPG, otherwise I might have had to GET MAH STABBIN KNIFE! I must apologise, but I think this is going to become a running joke XD
It'll still be sad to see some characters go though
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Aw poor Nick getting told off like that . He had it coming though.
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Stivik will slowly ascend to a more central role. At this stage he didn't have too much to do with Anni. Plus I'm building on his hate of mudokons, which didn't really come out until later in the RPG. He has to do his job at Rupture Farms, but he won't interact with mudokons any more than he has to!
This will come out more over the next two chapters, methinks.
And, ya know, not everyone hates Nick... Poor guy; he's having a really bad week

Just think Gretin, after they leave you can read here and find out what happened to them next! Happy endings all round?
There just aren't intelligent robots on Oddworld, so RG would be a bit out of place in this story. And did you really dream about Anni? Nihihihi! I am taking over your brain! Another few chapters and my evil scheme will be complete!
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(sorry, everyone who was looking forward to this as it was! But at least there are no fuzzles throwing video tapes around anymore!)
-that makes me really curious about how it was xD

anyway.. the chapter is great i love how all the different personalities of the characters came out through their behaviour...^^

... and Groll was really funny xD
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I'm on chapter 35 *oh joy* not far to go!

As promised to Splat a while ago, some fanart of Dion ^^ She's a pretty lady.
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Oh my gosh. Any chance you could draw a Slig wearing a similar outfit (but in blue)? Please?!
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Oh my gosh. Any chance you could draw a Slig wearing a similar outfit (but in blue)? Please?!
That is the single creepiest thing anyone has ever said in this thread... Including that chapter where Skillya cannibalises her babies.

In Other News,
Dryadri, that picture is AWESOME! You got her skin just right methinks, and her clothes are pretty cool, too. I'd say her expression is perhaps a bit too benign, but never mind And the rings were silver, not gold, but never mind! It is very awesome! I love it!

Glad you likes, Sci Here's a link to the trial from the RPG (starts about halfway down that page, and goes on for a couple of pages) but you might find something else to occupy yourself before you look at that, cus it's Tuesday again...


Chapter 40

Anni was distracted for the next few days, and barely came out of her thoughts, even when Expert left. She cried as she waved him off, but soon she turned inwards again.

It took two more days for her to make up her mind. She was out in the stockyards, looking into the face of a caged scrab, doomed for the slaughter, and suddenly she felt that she couldn’t take it anymore. She had to get out, just for a while, a night, and then she would come back. No one would even miss her, probably!

She dredged up from the corners of her mind all she remembered hearing about Abe. They said that he had escaped through the stockyards, met natives living nearby, and come back.

She remembered Javi telling her (perhaps having heard it from Nick) that the stockyards used to be much smaller, filling only the space of what was now the courtyard, though the factory had then owned all of the land it did today. She wondered why the glukkons would have had all this space and not used it, and she guessed that maybe they had known the natives lived at the far end and wanted to keep away from them! She knew they said now that the natives were gone, but what did the industrials know? Surely the native mudokons could hide themselves?

Excitement thrilled through her at the thought of actually meeting a native, and she made up her mind to go to the far end of the stockyards and escape through there. She looked around and saw Javi far from her; he was busy moving animals round to the slaughter house and wouldn’t even notice if she disappeared. Grinning manically, she ran for the factory entrance. She would take some supplies from the warehouse! And maybe she could go and look for Somi, and take her with her!

She ran into the warehouse without trouble, and hurried to the back of the room where she found a crate of scrabcakes that she guessed wouldn’t be missed, and broke it open with a crowbar she found (breaking the crate into rather more pieces in the process). Five minutes later she was hurrying with laden arms towards the door (and wondering as she went if she’d thought this through properly) when the sound of voices ahead slowed her down.

A moment later, to her utter annoyance, she realised that some sligs had stopped to chat outside of the warehouse doorway. Muttering a curse under her breath, she wondered if she could go through the kitchen, but of course, then she would run into Dean and have to explain. She would have to wait for them to go.

“Dunno about Nick,” She heard as she approached the door, and she tried to put a face to the voice, “But Arnie’s gonna be in trouble if the Cartel find out about how he’s running this place.”

“Oh come on, is the Cartel really gonna be interested in a little place like this?” That, she recognised, was Groll. She reached the doorway and looked out; Razor and Stivik were with him.

Stivik (owner of the first voice) rolled his eyes, “Oh no, the Cartel will have absolutely no interest in the factory where Abe came from, where this whole stupid rebellion began. Do you really think they’ll overlook Rupture Farms? Not likely!”

Razor scoffed, “Oh come on; that was ages ago. Abe’s no where near here anymore and Arnie says he had the native land north of here looked through and didn’t find them; they’ve all cleared off.”

“Still, they don’t want the same thing happening again with another mud, do they?” Stivik said with the air of a conspiracy theorist in full swing, “Arnie treats ‘em way to soft, from what I’ve seen! You give muds too much freedom and they start doing damage.”

“Um, but didn’t the whole thing start ‘cus Mullock started killing muds?” Groll put in.

Stivik shrugged, “That’s a rumour, isn’t it? One of many about this place.”

“That girl of Nick’s is a brat though; she deserves worse than what she got,” Razor muttered, and hidden in the shadows around the door, Anni glared at him.

“Any other gluk would have given her worse,” Stivik agreed, “Any other glukkon wouldn’t have gone through with the ridiculous meeting first!”

Anni’s fists balled with rage and a scrab cake slipped from her arms. As she scrambled to grab it, most of the rest fell too, and their wrappers crackled as they hit the ground.

“Huh?” Stivik turned around and squinted into the shadows. There was a bang of a gunshot and she jumped with a squeak; Groll was firing through the doorway, “Come out,” He ordered.

Reluctantly, she straightened up and strode forwards. The three sligs glowered at her, radiating menace.

“So you’re adding spying on sligs to your list of trouble?” Razor said blithely, lighting a cigarette.

“I wasn’t spying!” She replied defiantly.

Groll and Razor were leering like this was about to become fun, but Stivik looked absolutely furious, “You’re supposed to be working, mud!” He barked, “And you’re supposed to be with one of your friends! You wanna get them into trouble, too, for letting you run off without them?”

“I…” She began feebly, but Groll saved her thinking of an excuse by barking at her.

“What are you doing with that?” He demanded, pointing at a scrab cake she gripped in one hand. She was mildly surprised to find it there.

“I just wanted a snack!” She said, glad they couldn’t see the others on the floor.

Stivik glared, “I’ll give you a snack!” He hissed and suddenly lunged forward and grabbed her by the arm.

“Where’re you taking her?” Razor demanded.

“To the other girl, who she’s supposed to be working with! Arnie’d fire us on the spot if we did anything to her!” He growled this like it was a bad thing, and started dragging her away.

Evidently, he knew where Kix was working, for he took her straight to the production lines, maintaining a lethal silence all the way. When they arrived, Kix was alone and looked up in surprise when Stivik called for her attention. “Aren’t you supposed to be watching this?!” He demanded, waving Anni forwards.

Kix looked surprised, “She was working with Javi today, out in the stockyards,” She said, looking enquiringly at Anni.

“So care to explain why me, Razor and Groll caught her spying on us?”

“Spying? I don’t-”

She was cut off by an enormous blare of noise, a scream of agonised metal that made the noise Anni had heard in the grinders a few weeks ago seem like a weak whimper by comparison, going on for several seconds so the three of them in the production lines clapped their hands over their ears, and then a BOOM that seemed to make the production lines shake, so loud that it drowned out even the scream of metal and left their hearing muffled for several seconds, and then with another bang and a hiss of steam, the sound ended.

All previous enmity forgotten, the two mudokons and the slig ran as fast as they could towards the door to the grinders. Kix got there first, and then Anni pushed past.

The rail of the grinder was torn into shreds of steel for nearly ten metres of its length, finally breaking in two near the bottom. The blade itself had apparently come to pieces and several enormous blades were lodged in the walls. Steam was hissing angrily from severed pipes and the catwalk in the grinders’ middle floor was cut through and hanging from a crazy angle. Math was slowly climbing out from behind a cluster of packing crates in a corner, looking traumatised.

In the midst of all of the wreckage, standing before the grinder’s control panel, was Nick, so pale he was almost grey, a look of horror embedded on his face.

* * *

Nick was sat on his bed in the slig bunks, his head in his hands, the horrified look still deeply etched in his features. Stivik and Razor were nearby, talking quietly.

The rest of the day had played out like a nightmare before the mechanic, everyone running into the grinders, Arnie coming into the grinders, the long walk back to his office, the long, long silence that had followed, then contemplating drowning himself in the shower…

He barely registered when the door opened and Groll entered, looking hunted. He joined the quiet discussion for a few minutes at the other end of the room, and then approached, “What happened?” He asked.

Nick shook his head, without looking up. He had been asking himself the same question over and over again; what had he done so catastrophically wrong to cause the grinder to tear itself apart so massively? How could it have happened? What had he missed?

“You know,” Groll said nervously, “They say that mud, Math, was with you.”
Nick grunted. He thought if he tried to speak, he might throw up.

Razor spoke up, “You don’t reckon he could have… done something?”

Nick still didn’t move, but inside his head the gears were turning. Could Math have sabotaged the grinders? Because of the business with Anni, maybe? Oh, it was a blissful thought to imagine having a way out, a way to escape responsibility, to lay the blame with someone else. He could just see the other sligs ganging round Math, demanding to know what he’d done, Math’s hunted look, the sligs jeering.

He swallowed heavily (made difficult by a lump the size of a beach ball in his throat), “I…” He swallowed again, thinking of Javi, “I don’t know what Math could have done to cause that…” It was all he said. He couldn’t bear to say more.

* * *

Steam had been flooding from the broken pipes in the grinders and in the end they had had to turn off the factory’s two underground boilers, leaving the factory without power. Seven came up to the slig bunks that evening to talk it over with Nick. “We need to get power back on.”

Nick numbly reported on the unbearable maze of plumbing in the pumping station in the basement below the warehouse, “They’re a complete tangle; I dunno which pipes work the grinders and which do the rest of the factory.”

Seven nodded, “Well until we work them out and shut down the pipes that lead to the grinders, we’ve got no power. So no heating, no cooking, no computers, no factory production at all. How long do you think it’ll take us to work it out and get power back on?”

Nick shrugged mechanically, “If we start early tomorrow, we might get power back by evening the next day.”

Seven nodded, “Right; you, me and one of the others go down to the basement first thing, and Groll can get to work seeing what he can do with the mess in the grinders, ok? He can make a list of the parts you need to order and see what he can save.” Nick nodded, still looking traumatised, and Seven left.

Meanwhile, Dean was having troubles of his own, trying, with increasing despair, to explain to Arnie that without main power and only a useless backup generator in the kitchen, he could no more cook a meal for every person in the factory than fly them all to the moon. In the end he said, “I can manage a cold breakfast, but for an afternoon meal, we’ll have to stagger it over the day. First people eat at midday, and we work through until about the time work ends. But I can’t cook for more than a few people at a time with that thing.”

Arnie relented and Dean left.

Not very much happened the next day. Without main power the production lines couldn’t run, the conveyors that carried crates to the station couldn’t run, the station itself couldn’t be used; Arnie was able to use his fone for an hour to cancel the trains and hire another mechanically minded slig to help with the repairs, who would arrive in a week with the other two sligs he was hiring to replace Bela (he had made the decision to hire seven sligs in better days when the factory was running to its potential, but at least he would only have one big-bro now, which meant he should be able to afford all seven and the short-term mechanic for the time it took for the grinders to come back online – he was more worried about paying for the other new employee who would be arriving soon).

In the evening Stivik was the first slig to emerge, greasy and exhausted, from the factory’s basement and stumble into the cafeteria, where he overheard Dean having a mild-to-serious tantrum in the kitchen. “What’s up?” He asked, leaning over the counter, too tired to be aggressive to the mud.

“This stupid, stupid generator has just shut off again! And every time it cuts off, it takes me half an hour to get it working again! And I’m supposed to be making dinner for all the sligs down there and I haven’t have a minute’s rest all day, and this thing is stinking out my kitchen, and-”

“Hey, is that one of the old ScarCo generators?!” Stivik interrupted with rather uncharacteristic enthusiasm.

“You know how to work this thing?” Dean put in hopefully.

“Sure, I used to have one of these. Never worked, but it’s a great, old thing!”

Stivik hurried into the kitchen and a minute later and with no bloody fingers (to the envy of Dean, whose hands could barely be seen for improvised and worryingly unsanitary bandages), he had the generator chugging along happily.

“Thank Odd!” Dean muttered, “Now can you stop it turning itself off every hour?”

* * *

The next day was much the same for the mudokons, except colder. There was only so much work that could be done with no power and inside the factory Anni was feeling very useless. What was the point of her being here? She wasn’t even doing anything half the time! Kix, meanwhile, was somehow finding ways to be busy and wasn’t paying her any attention, and so she decided to slip away. No one would miss her; probably no one would even notice she was gone for ages!

So, sneaking away from the other mudokons who were clearing half-finished paramite pies from the dysfunctional production lines, she made her way to that little passage that led back into the factory to look for Somi.

She reached that old place where she had hidden the baby paramite so long ago and waited. There was no sign of the paramite and her continued absence lowered Anni’s mood. However, just as she was thinking that she probably ought to return to work, she heard a hiss and looked up, “Somi!”

The paramite came bounding out of the shadows and into her arms.

Half an hour of play later, Anni was lying back with the animal beside her, thinking over the last few days, remembering her attempt to escape. “If those sligs hadn’t gotten in the way, I reckon I could have gotten out,” She said aloud, and Somi, hearing her voice, squeaked a little in response.

“I could still do it,” She said. “I could go out, just for a night, and come back.”

A few minutes later, she added, “It’d be so much fun – better than staying around here for a day! It’s not like anyone’s working that hard today anyway.”

Five minutes later, with Somi close against her heels, she ran through the factory and out the front door. Laughing madly and hugging the paramite, she ran through the courtyard and out into the stockyards.

* * *

Kix had noticed that Anni was missing.

For the first ten minutes, she thought the girl had probably just hidden herself away somewhere to avoid work, but then she remembered her conversation with Anni from a few days before. She tried to push the thought out of her head, but when nearly an hour passed and Anni failed to reappear, she could no longer contain her worry.

It was worse because of the conversation she had had with Anni, when Anni talked about running away. Of course she should have told Javi and Dean about it, and now she thought of going to them and telling them she was worried Anni might have tried to escape because of a conversation they had had, which she should have told them about before. She hated having to confess to them that she had kept her talk with Anni a secret, especially as it may now be causing so much trouble.

But who else could she go to? She couldn’t tell Seven because he would go wild, but with Expert gone the only other slig she respected was Nick. She tried to imagine how Nick would react to the news; he would be angry, but he would see that bringing Anni back was the most important thing, and he wouldn’t want to frighten her into just running faster.

She stood and stewed for a little longer, but in the end she crept away from the other mudokons and made her way down to the basement.

The space under the factory had once contained a production line that was no longer used, and storage space, as well as the pumping controls above the boilers and the tangle of pipes that distributed steam-power around the factory. Since Arnie had reopened the factory he had had the boiler pumps and the waste disposal pit beneath the production lines restored, along with a corridor between them, but otherwise had left the space untouched. Some of the mudokons suspected that wild animals had moved in down there but no one had ever been attacked and as far as Kix cared, if any animals left them alone, they could stay.

The basement corridor was dark and dirty, lit by dim electric lights that the sligs had evidently set up from a small generator while they worked. Kix had never been down there before, but managed to find her way to the pumping area where the sligs were working, passing a huge, heavy looking security door locked with a glukkon voice-lock on the way, jumping as it switched on and croaked 'hey!' at her as she passed.

At the end of the corridor was a door propped open by one of the electrical lamps, sat on the floor. From inside came the sounds of sligs calling to one another and Kix approached it cautiously, slipping through quickly and into the shadows of the room beyond.

The room was indeed a mess of tangled pipes, crisscrossing through the room, twisting and weaving. Pipes divided all over the place, valve wheels and handles and pressure gauges seemed randomly placed and the sheer messiness of the pipes in the room turned walking from one side to another into an Olympic event. Nick was there, with Seven and Stivik, and they were all greasy and sweaty and covered in dust and dirt as they fumbled their way along the pipes, trying to make sense of the maze, attempting to work out which pipes carried steam where, and suddenly Kix understood why the simple task of turning off the pipes taking steam to the main grinders was taking them the best part of two days.

She slipped through the room until she was in the shadows near Nick and whispered his name. He turned around.

“It’s Kix,” She hissed before he could call out, “I need your help!”

He came closer to her under the pretence of checking the plumbing in her corner, “What’s wrong?”

She bit her lip and answered, “It’s Anni. She’s disappeared and I’m worried she might be trying to get out.”

He grunted.

“Nick, I don’t know what to do. If I tell Seven, he’ll go crazy; you’re the only slig here I still trust.”

He looked mildly surprised, “I thought all you muds hated me now.”

“Don’t be silly. You were going to apologise, weren’t you? Anni’ll calm down soon, but if she leaves the factory I don’t know what’ll happen to her.”

Nick turned his back on her and ran his hands along a pipe but muttered, “If I leave here, Seven’ll be suspicious. Hang on; Stivik’s pretty sensible. I’ll talk to him; go back to work.”

Kix nodded, “Thank you,” She whispered and crept away.

“Stivik, give me a hand over here,” Nick called as she reached the door. She stopped in the shadows and listened. They were close enough for her to hear their quiet conversation. “Listen, I’ve just been told the mud girl might be trying to escape.”

“The one who caused all the trouble before?” Stivik asked.

“Shh! Listen, this is half my fault so I need to deal with it, but I don’t want Seven going crazy about it. I don’t want her getting scared or she’ll just try and get away again, later. If I leave now, Seven’ll want to know what’s up, so I’m gonna have to wait twenty minutes before I can leave. It might be too late by then, so can you go and watch the gate by the back of the stockyards? She’s easily distracted, this mud, so you should get there before her unless she has a massive head start.”

“Alright; you gonna tell Seven I’ve gone to the grinders or something?”

“Exactly. If you see her, don’t frighten her. Just try and get her to come back.”

“Will do,” Stivik replied and hurried past Kix and out the door. She heard Nick call to Seven, “Just sent Stivik to the other side; I’m gonna try a valve and see if it does anything.”

She slipped away.

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THERE'S THE EARTH-SHATTERING KABOOM!!!!! Guess how long I've been waiting for a chance to say that?

Nick = Bad judge of character. How will Stivik's quest to stop Anni escaping end? You'll have to wait and see! Bad shizzle is coming down.
Again.

But it's ok, cus Kix still appreciates him.

When the grinders went boom in the RPG, Math was there. Is he a part-time saboteur? You decide! (Is sabotoueour a really hard word to spell? Yes!)
As a result, power got turned off (the steam escaping was my work) but that never really got resolved. It seemed to turn back on randomly at some point. So I worked on that here. I loved that talk between Stivik and Dean; I think it really pulled Stivik back to his good ole' days and helps everyone remember who he used to be, and how that compares to how he is now, and especially in the next chapter.
Stivik is sensible, but he has ardently hated mudokons since Stack died. And he's better at his job than he was when he met Dionysia. So what will win out; his cleverness and secretiveness, or his hatred of mudokons and all things native?

We have now reached the end of W@RF 3 (ish): next chapter begins telling the tale of W@RF 4. Also, remember how I said this Part could be split into three little sections? (Hint: section 1 was about Reg.) Well this chapter marks the end of section 2, which was about Nick. Section three begins next week, and if you can't guess which slig that one will be about...

If you don't reply, Stivik will get angry and the chances of Anni surviving the next chapter, well...
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Oh my gosh. Any chance you could draw a Slig wearing a similar outfit (but in blue)? Please?!
You'd have to tell me a little more about it and I'll see what I can do

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In Other News,
Dryadri, that picture is AWESOME! You got her skin just right methinks, and her clothes are pretty cool, too. I'd say her expression is perhaps a bit too benign, but never mind And the rings were silver, not gold, but never mind! It is very awesome! I love it!
Thank you! I was rushed last night to post it, which is why it isn't in my thread or I didn't reply to your pm. And I know! DX I was reading the M.O.M report on your 100,000 words achievement and the part where Dion first gets her rings was in there. I was so annoyed with myself when I read 'silver' not gold xD I'll recolor it at the weekend.
Also forgot to mention that I left out the stitches, I tried to draw them in but they looked awful so I left them out ^^;

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Oh, wow. *Kicks self for not noticing that*
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Wow, things are getting exciting now XD I know what happens next, seeing as I was reading through the WARF thread where it all happened recently

But I like the way how you make a reason for everything. Like for Stivik going out to meet Anni there, I can't remember what happened in the RPG (I hadn't gone THAT far back) but I'm guessing we were just doing the RP thing of just going whereever

It was cool how you described how there used to be the native mudokons nearby and all that too. You're certainly very skilled at making things fit realistically

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We have now reached the end of W@RF 3 (ish): next chapter begins telling the tale of W@RF 4. Also, remember how I said this Part could be split into three little sections? (Hint: section 1 was about Reg.) Well this chapter marks the end of section 2, which was about Nick. Section three begins next week, and if you can't guess which slig that one will be about...
Let me see... it must be Seven! Or maybe it's Groll?

Yes, I do know who it really is but I couldn't resist the opportunity to act stupid!
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now I wanted to make a comment about Stivik but you already said it yourself xD however I'm really looking forward to the next chapter I miss the scenes from the beginning of this story anyway...


...so I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!!! 8D

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@ Dryadri: wow!!! that picture is amazing!
And the pose is so cool aswell! I love your colouring style!
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Damnit Splat, why did you have to link to my post. I can't believe how much of a noob I was back then. And I only just now noticed I named him Math instead of what should have been Matt. Fuck, lol.
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