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Phew, I was afraid you were gone or something. I've been reading these stories for about a year now, and I was afraid you were "on da verge of goin' outta business," as Alf says.
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02-04-2010, 10:15 AM
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Sorry its been so long. Coursework and exams getting in the way. anyway here is the next chapter
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Chapter 8
Discovery and Transformation

After a couple of miles, a few Dagger Roaches joined the two Sligs in their Journey to find Solister. They were very friendly now as they would defend them to the death. “When will we know when were there?” asked Zaypher. “I don’t know” replied Admeet, “we’ll just have to follow the PDA’s signal”. It was starting to get cooler as the sun was starting to slip below the horizon. Night was moving in. “We’d better hurry” said Admeet, “its getting dark”. The two Sligs hurried on towards the location.

Then there came a strange object in the horizon. Whatever it was, it was emitting a brilliant purple light. “What’s that over there” said Zaypher looking at the dazzling spectacle. “I don’t know but the PDA says that’s the location” replied Admeet, “Let’s go”. The object got closer and closer as the Sligs ran towards it. Then it became clear, this was no ordinary place. The purple light was a large beam that was emitted from a large piece of floating rock. The two Sligs couldn’t believe what they were seeing. “How many odd spectacles are there on this world” said Zaypher, “This is by far the oddest”. Four stone half-arches surrounded the circular pit where the beam shot through. “Well, I think we are here” said Admeet, “Shire’s Beam”. The two Sligs came closer to the beam. However, they saw some Sligs sat down by the beam. Their skin colour was a dark black and their eyes were pure white. However, they did not attack. “What are they doing?” said Zaypher inspecting them. They noticed that bands of purple essence soaked into their skin. “Well, judging by what has happened to Solister and if she is here, the purple beam has something to do with this” replied Admeet, “Maybe, that beam is the pure essence of evil”. What they didn’t notice however was a female being, crawling among one of the half-arches and inspecting Admeet’s every move. “We are only here for Solister, no one else” said Admeet. Then, the female being jumped from the top of the half-arch and landed on the brown dirt and dust. The Two Sligs turned around in surprise to see it was Solister. However, she had changed since the last time they saw her. She was just like the others, dark black skin and white eyes. Evil had taken over her completely. Admeet felt terrified but he had to hide away inside him. Zaypher led the Dagger Roaches following them away; he knew Admeet had to do this alone.

The dark and light eyed each other for a bit but then Solister leapt forward and shot purple electricity at not Admeet, but Zaypher. Zaypher didn’t realise this until he felt the bolt knock him back a long way. “Not again” he shouted as he flew through the air. He landed on the hard ground and the Dagger Roaches quickly tended to his wounds. Admeet seized his chance and tackled Solister to the ground. They fought on the ground for a bit with no side gaining an advantage. However, Solister managed to get her feet under Admeet’s stomach area and she kicked him really hard. He was thrown pushed towards the beam. He landed on the dirt but got up quickly. Solister just eyed the Slig next to the beam. “There’s only one thing I can do” said Admeet looking at the beam. Zaypher lifted his head and looked at Admeet. Then he realised what was going to happen. “No Admeet, don’t do it!” shouted Zaypher weakly. “I have no choice” said Admeet, “Just snap me out of it when the time is right”. And with that, Admeet stepped into the beam. He was magically lifted half way up the beam. He felt so much dark energy flow through him. Solister just stared at the floating Admeet in anger. Admeet’s skin started to turn black and his eyes turned from a bright red into a white. A black and purple aurora shimmered across Admeet’s body. He then flew out of the beam and landed on the ground. His body was made up of pure evil now. Admeet and Solister eyed each other with anger and hatred in their faces. The clash of the darkness had begun.
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Oh no... what if Admeet fails and turns into a force of evil to be with Solister?! Will the world end?
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Nah, you know how these stories work. He beats Solister, and either she dies or is turned good again...unless (subtle hint here) Slig75 decides to make something unexpected...
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Ah... Not what I had expected, which I thank you for.
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Chapter 9
Clash and Remove

Admeet leapt forward and tackled Solister to the ground. But upon rolling over, Solister kicked with her legs and sent Admeet towards one half-arches. But as soon as he hit the ground, he was up on his feet again. He quickly shot out purple electricity out of his hands but the bolt missed and hit another half-arch. Solister did the same but it also missed and this time entered the beam. The beam shot out the electricity again but this time it was more powerful. It hit one of the half-arches and cracked part of the stone to reveal a peculiar pattern of bronze and gold metal. Admeet and Solister ignored this and kept on fighting. Admeet ran towards Solister and got ready to punch her. However, when his fist made contact, Solister counter-attacked and blocked his fist with her left hand. She in turn tried to punch him but was blocked with his left hand as well. The two were struggling to keep a firm grip on the opposition. Then Solister started to create electricity around her hands which started to make Admeet struggle even more. Admeet did the same with his hands but the effect wasn’t as powerful. He then, with all his power threw Solister over himself. She hit the ground with a thud but quickly got up again.

The two of them fought for at least an hour with scorch marks littering the battlefield. Admeet Leapt up onto the top of a half-arch and Solister did the same on another opposite him. The two eyed each other. Then Admeet shot an electric bolt towards Solister but she did the same towards Admeet. Strangely, both bolts connected in a flash of light and sparks; both sides weren’t retaliating. It was around a minute later as the two began to struggle and notice something at the same time. Shockwaves from the connection started to break the remaining labs of stone to reveal a larger view of bronze and gold. At the end of each half-arch was a large purple gem stone. They all emitted purple electricity and the bolts hit the centre of the connection. A large orb of dark energy was forming around the centre of the connection. And strangely, Solister was starting to lose her black skin and white eyes; she was reverting back to her normal self. However, Admeet was getting more powerful and more evil by the second. The surge of energy in the orb was becoming too unstable as the connection started to weaken. Solister had now become too exhausted but Admeet just kept on going. Then finally, Solister fell to the ground, shattered. The fall from the half-arch broke some rib bones inside her; she screamed in the pain. the connection was broken. Admeet stopped the flow of electricity to his arms and looked at Solister on the ground. He then leapt of the half-arch and landed on the ground. He walked over to Solister, more anger in his eyes than before. Solister lifted her head weakly. Zaypher ran over to her, ignoring his pain and focusing on hers. “Admeet, snap out of this” Zaypher shouted, “You don’t know what you are doing”. Admeet said nothing and edged closer to the pair. “Please, Admeet, stop” Solister wheezed out of her slightly crushed lungs, “I don’t want to lose you like the way you lost me. Please Admeet. I... I... I love you” The last words stopped Admeet in his tracks. He stood there wide-eyed looking at Solister. He then realised what he was doing. His black skin started to fade into the original dark green. His eyes turned back to the original red. He stumbled slightly but then fell to the ground; he breathed heavily. All of his energy had vanished. Solister crawled slowly towards him and looked him in the eye. Admeet smiled towards her and she smiled weakly back. Then they brought their arms around each other in a comforting hug, relieved that it was all over.
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That's going to be quoted out of context in no time. And Admeet's probrably going to reacte a bit strangely to that as well. Zaypher must've said it out of desperation. I wonder if he really meant it...
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See? I told you Admeet would win! But, anyway, nice chapter! I like this story. I check for updates every day.
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While I knew this was probably going to happen, I'm really relieved right now. I felt sorry for poor Solister. Chapter ten should be very interesting. Keep up the good work!
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Chapter 10
Lost

A while past before the two Sligs got up on their feet and walked feebly towards Zaypher. “Good to see you again, Admeet” Zaypher said warm-heartedly. Admeet smiled and helped Solister to her feet fully. The three walked away from the shrine and towards a patch of forest on the horizon. A couple of dagger roaches joined the three. Solister didn’t flinch at the site as she somehow knew they wouldn’t attack. She just walked on trying to ignore the pain inside her. Admeet was also struggling slightly as he was totally exhausted from before. It was only Zaypher who wasn’t struggling as he helped the two along. “Almost there” said Zaypher encouraging the two.

When they finally reached the near-centre of the wood, they could hear a rushing stream. The three quickly reached the water’s edge and took big mouthfuls. “Lovely” said Admeet quietly. Solister collapsed on the soft grass just near a grey boulder. Admeet sat down next to her and put his right arm around her back. Solister leant beside Admeet and closed her eyes. “In the nick of time” said Zaypher, “The sun is starting to slip down over the horizon”. Admeet nodded but said nothing; he closed his eyes. Zaypher smiled at them and sat down in front of a tree. He closed his eyes and waited for the new day.

Meanwhile near the edge of the wood. “Got to get away, got to get away” whispered a figure to himself. He was running through the wood into the centre. He then tripped over a half-buried root and fell to the soft ground. He panted heavily and looked into the dark of the forest. He saw three Sligs near a flowing river. He felt lost and confused. “Where am I?”
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Yay story!!!
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Well done Slig75. I enjoyed this story and I am glad there was a happy ending
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This is a new story now in this series. It's showing how this mystery Slig ended up in the previous story. Please comment on the first chapter .
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Portal Conspiracy

Chapter 1
Entryway

3 days ago

The rubbing of the tram along the rails made a screeching sound as it ran along. Inside were at least four Sligs carrying suitcases full of their private belongings. One of these Sligs was sitting down on one of the tram seats. He was wearing a black leather jacket and black trousers. He tapped his fingers nervously on the suitcase he was holding. Standing by the tram door was a soldier who held his assault rifle by his side. The Slig was nervous about this because he knew that every soldier had an itchy trigger finger. He waited anxiously for the tram to stop at the nearest station. The next stop was a station connected to outpost X16. To take the time, he looked out of the tram window next him. It was a strange environment out there. It was a mix of greenery and industrial machinery. Then there were square shaped houses crammed inside the industrial sites. Then he finally saw the station up ahead near a large factory. The tram started to slow down as it came under the station roof. The soldier in the tram kept an eye on the other passengers. Then the tram finally stopped and the automatic doors opened. The Slig stood up and followed the others out of the doors and onto the station platform.

The Slig walked towards the end of the platform only to find the others being registered by another soldier. These soldiers were strangely humanoid and always carried a slightly modified Walther SP22/M2 hand gun with a notch and post site. The others were standing in a single-file line saying their name out to the soldier while he registered them down on a note book. The queue moved slowly forward; the Slig was right at the back of it.

After a minute or so, it was the Sligs turn to register. “Name?” asked the solider inaudibly under the grey gas mask he was wearing. However, the Slig could hear it. “Rigel” the Slig replied. The soldier wrote the name down and put the pencil in his left buttoned pocket. “Move” he said in a commanding way. Rigel moved away from the soldier and walked towards a passage with a sign above it saying “D Boundary”. He recognized this as the downtown area. The passage was a set of steps leading down to a long hallway similar to that of a metro station. He walked down the steps and entered the long hallway.

The floor of the hallway was mostly paved but had a few tiles scattered along it. The walls were completely tiled with small square slabs that were white. Some had been cut off from the wall - either they were on the floor or they had been taken away. Bits of paper and rubbish littered the floor. Rigel ignored these pointless obstacles and carried on. It was strangely quiet with only the noise of some of the paper being blown down the hallway by the wind. He knew that there was an exit somewhere to the outside. Soon he reached a turn to the left where he saw daylight. The exit was in the middle of a town square. However, it was even quieter out there. Rigel walked up the steps to the square only to see a quiet existence.
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Good chapter.

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Yay story!!! An interesting beginning...WHICH WILL SOON DEVELOP INTO TONS OF SHOOTING, HAHAHAHAHA (man, my evil laugh isn't very evil in text)!
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lol
You'll just have to find out what happens next
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I sense a great deal of inspiration from Half-Life 2 again... Although, I could also pinpoint a good deal of this story to other games, but I believe a lot of it is coincidental or subconscious. At least it's inspiration from a good game and not a bad one.

I still feel a great deal of newfound mystery in this new installment. Where exactly is this... Hold on a minute... How do sligs wear pants? Regardless, where is this slig, what's so important in X16, what's in his suitcase, and who is he?
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Even how they wear pants over their pants?
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I don't know really, even they have to keep their dignity sometimes
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It sounds like a good idea to me. It would stop their legs seizing up with rust and dirt.

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hmm, I never really thought of that, but oh well
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Chapter 2
The Lowlife (Part 1)

The people around Rigel did nothing but walk towards wherever they wanted to be. They made not a sound; like the beginning of a hopeless existence. Rigel looked around to find the cause of all of the quietness. A few soldiers were patrolling around the square and some of the streets surrounding it. This was the cause; an oppressive legion. The only sound was coming from a radio beside a window in an apartment room. It was playing a bossa nova genre tune. Rigel turned and headed down a small street. A few others walked down it as well but didn’t say anything to anybody. Rigel walked beside another person and tried to speak. “Look if we talk out here, we’ll both get into trouble” he said quickly and walked away. Rigel agreed quietly and didn’t say a word.

He looked towards what looked like a small café. There was a soldier standing outside in front of the door. Rigel walked over towards the door until the soldier stopped him. “You need retinal access” said the soldier pointing towards the retinal scanner attached to the wall by the door. He leant forward and rested his head against the scanner. It scanned his eyes and he leant back again. “Access denied” the retinal scanner showed on the screen below the scanner. The soldier didn’t look surprised about this. “Hold still” he said. But suddenly, he punched Rigel in the gut and then took out a small sized cylindrical retinal scanner from his pocket. Rigel fell to the ground back first. The soldier scanned Rigel’s eyes and then inserted the scanner into a hole in the bigger retinal scanner. It made a sort of recording sound to say that his access level was being stored. He pulled out the small scanner and put it back in his pocket. Rigel got up slowly but he felt seriously winded. “What the hell was that for?” asked Rigel painfully. “Hey, if you want get punched again, don’t ask me” replied the soldier, “now get your eyes scanned now or face being arrested”. Rigel walked towards the retinal scanner but gave a pissed off look at the soldier; he said nothing. Rigel leant forward and the scanner scanned his eyes. He then leant back again. The scanner made a beeping sound to show that access was granted. The door to the cafe opened. The soldier just stood at his post and didn’t turn again. Rigel entered the café but was only greeted by the emptiness of it.

All of the chairs were empty and there was no barman. There was a fridge on the other side of the counter with some graffiti on the door saying “Take what you want scavengers!” Rigel felt confused by this as he knew that from the graffiti and the dirtiness of the café, it was abandoned. He wondered why there was a soldier guarding the door. However, he felt intrigued by the graffiti and walked over towards the fridge. He opened the door and realised it was still running; he was lucky. Inside were a couple of portions of Slig Sushi, a bottle of Coke-a-Zade and a Scrab Cake. He took out the Scrab cake and the Coke-a-Zade and sat down at a bar stool by the counter.

He pulled the cap of the bottle and took a swig. The flavour fizzled in his mouth and made it cold as he swallowed it. He paused a bit and looked at the door. The soldier was still standing outside by the door. Then another person came to the soldier and asked for clearance. He leant to the retinal scanner and it scanned his eyes. It beeped in recognition and it opened the door. The stranger entered the café and sat down beside Rigel. He tapped his fingers on the counter while the door closed again. “Do you mind if I have that Scrab Cake?” the stranger asked. “Go for it, I’m not hungry” replied Rigel. The stranger reached over and took the Scrab Cake. He took a bite out of it and crunched on it slowly; he then finally swallowed. “By the way, my name is Valken” the stranger said. “Rigel” he replied. “Good to meet you” Valken replied. He finished off the rest of the Scrab cake while Rigel took another swig of the Coke-a-Zade. “Infact, why are we talking?” said Rigel, “We’ll both get into trouble”. “Because I know a place where we can” replied Valken. “Really” said Rigel sarcastically. “Yes” said Valken, “and if you have any second thoughts, keep them to yourself and follow me”. Valken stood up and walked over to the fridge; Rigel, intrigued by the new acquisition, followed behind.
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Interesting to have a guard outside a door of an abandoned café with a fridge sprayed with graffiti. How did the graffiti sprayer not get caught?

Perhaps there's a price to pay for entry to new places. Like a punch in the stomach if you go anywhere that you don't regularily go. It would generally help to reduce the number of places people went, therefore making them easier to find.

I can't wait to see how this will intertwine itself to Admeet and Co.
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