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I know... *looks evil and points at Carak, Noka n' Vivay* it's all thier fault that it became like this, if they on the other hand hadn't cared about the leadership it wouldn't have happend. But I'll see what I can do to next update... something good I suspect

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Here's a new update, hope you'll enjoy it...




- Aha, here’s something I think you guys would like, Hunter bursted out with joy as he picked out a couple of dark green shirts with light feathers on the shoulders.
- Those are looking real nice, Stranger began, can I try it on?
- Can I try one as well, the Grubb asked.
- Sure, here you go, Hunter answered with a grin.

The two guests put on their new clothes. They felt more nicely and comfortable than the other ones they tried before.
- Whoa, this fits me perfect and it has a soft cloth, what is it, asked the Grubb with curiosity.
- These clothes are made of the most rare cloth in the whole world, Thymesis is it called if I remember right, Hunter answered.
- What about the feathers? Are they rare to, Stranger asked.
Hunter chuckled and said:
- No they aren’t. After my pals and I have hunted, in this case birds, then we pluck them. At first we didn’t know what to with the feathers, but then my wife and I decided we could use them to design and decorate our clothes.
- That’s a good thought, Stranger filled in.

Hunter nodded and smiled at them. Suddenly, it knocked on the door and a hoarse but still deep voice spoke to them:
- Hunter? Are you in there?
- Yes I’m here, Hunter began, is it Stormous I’m talking to?
- Yes it’s me; can ya open the door, please? I’ve something important to tell you.

Hunter walked away and opened the door for him. Stormous went in to the hut and in to the living room together with Hunter, and got suprised of what he saw. He grinned and said pleased:

- Well, oh my! You guys really found some clothes, eh? Hehe those are real nice if you ask me… great job Hunter!
- Thank you Stormous, Hunter said with pride.
- When can we see Vivay, asked the Grubb.
- Now if you’d like, well I spoke with the leader a few minutes ago and he would be glad to meet you, now when he knows a little more about you, Stormous cleared his throat, are you guys ready?
- Sure, the Grubb answered and turned her head to Stranger.
- Let’s go, Stranger answered looking pleased, but still a bit nervous.




Chapter nine: Stranger VS Maki – part one



It was noon and the small Steef gang went away to see the leader, Vivay. Stranger thought about how to began the speech, but as before no good results were in sight, not yet. They reached the hut where the Steef leader was, not aware of that Thunder was in there as well, except for Stormous and went in. When Vivay saw them, he welcomed them as he had done before to the Guardian brothers, but this time Maki joined him. The two newcomers raised an eyebrow while greeting on them.
- Welcome, to my village strangers! You might have heard of me already, haven’t you? Well then let me introduce Maki, my son.
- Welcome, I hope you’ll enjoy your time here, Maki joined in while shaking hand with Stranger and the Grubb.
- Thank you, they both answered at the same time.
- Be my guests, Vivay began, please sit down!

They all sat down and Vivay continued:
- I’ve heard from certain sources that you have traveled from far distances to see me, correct me if I’m wrong, but are you, young Steef a lost member of Alca’s tribe?
- Yes I am, how could you’ve known, Stranger asked a bit confused.
- Everything that my Guardians can find out… back to the subject, why are you guys here anyway?

Then both Stranger and Grubb began to tell their story. Afterwards, Stranger said:
- So that’s why we’re here.
- I see…in that case if you Stranger really want to take my place as the General leader, then you have to do a little test, to make sure that I can trust you otherwise I won’t, Vivay said as he turned his head to Maki, my son has for a long time be trained to become my personal guard if not, then the next leader of my tribe. Maki has for almost seven years of his life being training hard to reach his goal. If you think you can beat my son in a duel, then you’ll be the next who’s responsible for my tribe.
- But Father, Maki bursted out in supricement.
- Silence son, Vivay reprimanded.
- Yes Father, Maki answered ashamed.
- Well then, I expect you at the great meeting place about a couple of hours.
- Of course leader Vivay, Stranger answered as he and his friend bowed in front of him and went out from the hut together with Stormous and Hunter.


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Ooooooo, scrap... Must go get my popcorn and 'Go Stranger' hat fer that.

Great chapter Steef mate.
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Good story, Dancin' Steef! I've only read up to where Stranger meets Lia in the jail, but I've reading it when I've got the time I'll keep readin' and let you know what I think of the rest of it later =^__^=

I like the Legendaries; they sound kewl (I like warriors in stories and stuff). There's a few questions I wanted to ask about the story plot and stuff, but I'll wait 'till I've read the rest ('cause my answers will probably be answered in the story).
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Thanx Lobo n' Steefie

Glad ya liked the Legendaries and sure ask me questions if ya want to, but do via PM's, please

I'll be updating the story this afternoon so ya wont get too bored reading the old chapters over n' all over again
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Chapter nine: Stranger VS Maki – part two




They all four sat down in Hunter’s hut and was talking about how to find Maki’s weak points. Stranger asked Stormous:
- Vivay said that Maki had been learning for seven years ‘bout how to fight, but who did actually train him? I mean he can’t have been learning by himself.
- Well, err…Stormous began.
- Well what?
- Actually… I trained him, funny you’d ask. But I only taught him the basics of fighting and then my big bro handled the rest.
- You, asked the Grubb with confusion.

Stormous nodded and felt a bit ashamed. Hunter continued:
- So Stranger it seems obviously that you have greater plans in your life, Stranger looked at Hunter confused, I mean jus’ look at the story you told us about – only that one proves that you’ve followed your heart.
- What do you mean with that? Are you saying that I actually got a future, Stranger asked.
- What I meant was; that you searched for your species and found them and now you want to reunite them all tribes, which I can see as magnificent solution of our great problem.
- Wait a sec, I didn’t really say that I was going to reunite them, Stranger bursted out.
- You sure did, the Grubb said while she crossed her arms, looking quite annoyed.
- I didn’t! The Wolclark Oracle jus’ told me that I had a destiny and that was to become a general leader of them Steef tribes – I didn’t mentioned that I wanted to become one, but the Oracle did – so why care?
- … Because it’s your family we’re talking about now – your parents may have died under the attack against Alca’s tribe - but remember you still got Steefs around you so you’re not left behind. And if you actually got a destiny and a future, then why not take the opportunity, Stormous asked while he laid one of his huge hands on the Stranger’s shoulder.

Stranger became quiet. He didn’t know what he was going to say, what Stormous and Hunter had have said made him feel bad and on the verge of tears. Stormous continued:
- What I know is that Maki is very stubborn as many of the Steef Guardians are, but I remembered that his most weak point is to fight. He doesn’t like to fight and he have never done that, so if you could compromise, then it’ll be fair not only for him but for you as well.
- Maki doesn’t like fighting, but he’s about to become a Guardian… why can’t I jus’ defeat him and then become the one who’s in charge over the tribe?
- As I said before it wouldn’t get fair. And here in the village there are rules that are against injustice, so to follow the rules you better make your decision.
- Right… I’ll talk to him, Stranger said as he rose up from his position and went out to see Maki.


* * * * *


Maki, who was sitting in his room in front of his desk studying, didn’t notice that he had a visitor. A shadow suddenly appeared and stopped the light from coming in to the room, which came from the window. Maki said with anger:
- Go away from the light you stupid oaf; I’m trying to read here.

Nothing happened. Maki turned angrier and replied the same phrase, but this time with the touch of ‘I’m-going-kill-you-‘ style. When he turned around and was about to fly on the ‘intruder’ Stranger grabbed his throat and said both gently and determined.
- Remember me, Maki?
The Steefs eyes went wide and he tried to pull away the big hand of his throat, but it didn’t work. Stranger continued:
- I want to compromise with you so listen up. You don’t like to fight neither do I, so lets make a deal.
- If it is only the pride and the crown you want then forget it, Maki replied with a hoarse voice.
- I’m neither after the pride nor the crown! I want me family back and I want it to become reunited… here’s my point; if we choose not to fight against each other, then we’re not jus’ following the rules, we’re not risking to become fools or known as ‘The nerds of the east’ so what do you say, Stranger asked while he put Maki down back to his chair with ease and removed his giant hand from the throat.
- … You… you’re crazy and who persuaded you to come here anyway to persuade me of not fighting you?
- I have my special authorities…Stranger said looking a bit bossy.
- Then what do you think we should do instead, Maki answered cocky.
- I know what we may do, come lets go to Stormous hut and I’ll tell you, Stranger answered as he laid one hand on Maki’s shoulder and grinned.




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Wehey! Go Stranger baby! And awwww, he was gonna cry fer a second there... Great bit DS! Lookin' forward to more buddy!
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he was gonna cry fer a second there

Yeah he sure was, they reminded him 'bout his past and if it's bad then it'll hurt. I've been through kind of things like that myself, but not exactly the same as our furry 'lil' friend Stranger here - poor Steef Anyway I'll put up more story here next week.

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Sad I'm so sorry...

Sorry guys for not updating - I've been very very ill for almost two weeks now so I haven't been able to write anything. But as fast as I get better then I'll send in some more of me story


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Hello everyone and sorry for delaying with me story here are a few chapters I wrote - one yesterday and one today enjoy...


Chapter ten: The battle



It was nearly afternoon when the inhabitants gathered around the great meeting place, where a fight between the Stranger and the son of a leader should take place. Vivay went out from his hut and walked to the centre of the “circle” and exclaimed:

- Friends we’ve here today to see a scene full of justice, doubt and a taste of defeat. As a few of you know, a couple of unknown creatures came to the village and as the rules say “Those who are strangers shall not fear anything, except death itself”.

While Vivay was sharing his wisdom with his people, Maki and Stranger prepared themselves for battle.
- Are you sure this will work, Maki asked nervous.
- Eh, stop worry Maki – they won’t suspect a thing, Stranger said as he grinned evilly.
- Best for you, Maki mumbled.
- Who’s going to stop me? C’mon lets go out and see the audience.

The two young Steef males went out from Stormous hut and walked to the meeting place. Well there they saw Vivay and the great crowd, and for the first moment after a long time in Strangers life, he felt nervous, not because he was about to fight another Steef but because of the number of Steefs around them. Those were shouting phrases like “Beat the Stranger, kill him, kill him!” Stranger felt an unwelcome presence, which made him feel bad.

- Ah! At least you’re here! Are you ready to rumble now, Vivay asked them while he looked at his son with pride.
- Yes father we are, answered Maki with a lump of regret in his throat.
- Good. Well then take your positions and wait for my signal.

The two nodded and took their positions. Vivay let out a roar and the fight was on. The two youngsters went around in the circle of death and waited for the right moment of defeating each other. Vivay sat down on a chair and watched them closely. Suddenly the young Steef boys bent their heads against and started running towards each other. The leader got surprised of what he saw and shouted:

- Stop!

Stranger and Maki stopped in the nick of time and looked at the confused father who came running to them – he didn’t look any pleased.
- Father what’s wrong, Maki asked and “played” a bit confused.
- What’s wrong? I’ll tell you: you can’t fight against this Steef here – you and Stranger ain’t got any horns and for that matter I’ll see this as a draw.
- But didn’t you propose that we should fight, or have you changed your mind, Stranger asked sounded disappointed.
- I said you should fight, yes I did, but not bare headed! You could have smashed your heads in to little bits and I don’t want to loose my only son. Maki you ought to know better, Vivay said as he looked at his son with frustration. He continued his conversation with the crowd:
- Maki’s too young, still ain’t got any horns he isn’t up for a fight! Sorry friends but the show’s over!



* * * * *


At the same time as Vivay made sure that everyone went back to their chores and work then Maki and Stranger went to Stormous hut, laughing at the face expression the leader had shown.
- Hehe your father became real angry eh, Stranger said as he sat down at a chair beside a table.
- Yeah he sure did, but I wonder what he’ll say to me now, Maki said as he stared at Stranger.
- He’ll punish you or what?
- I don’t know. Perhaps he let you take his place instead of me jus’ to chastise me.
- Nonsense! He’ll not give up his place that simple, you’ll see. But that face expression of his was priceless, Stranger laughed again.
Maki smiled, but still aware of the wrath his father should share with him. Unexpectedly Stormous came in to them together with Hunter followed by Thunder.
- What were you guys doing out there, Stormous asked with eager.
- You could have killed yourselves! Why didn’t you tell us about your plan, Hunter joined in.
- None of us wanted to fight, Stranger began, so we or… I decided that we could make a fake fighting scene to get away.
- He’s right, Maki joined in.
- A fake fighting scene, Thunder asked, why?
- We jus’ told you, Stranger explained at the same time as he recognize a wound on one of Thunder’s hind legs.
- What’s happened to you leg, he asked.
- Nothing you ought not to care about, Thunder said as he went out.
- What’s up with him?
- Maybe he didn’t like the way of being treated by a leader, Stormous said as he grinned.




Chapter eleven: A new Friend



Thunder didn’t like the way it was right now, when Stranger had given his proof of trustworthiness to Vivay. He wanted that little pound head to disappear and to not come back. But that could become a problem…Vivay had called on the youngsters to his hut to talk to them about something important. Thunder himself or the rest of the friends didn’t know what the two Steef males were up to.

- I can’t see why you two did fight against each other without realizing you didn’t have horns! Why this sort of madness, Vivay asked them.
- Father you knew for a long time that I hate to fight and I can do anything else just doesn’t make me do what I hate to, Maki answered.
- It’s the same here, Stranger began, and it was first of all my idea. I didn’t want to battle either so… I made this whole fight up.
- I see… well then I don’t think that there is anything I can do to stop you, but there is however one thing I’d like to talk about with Maki about. If you don’t mind?
- Sure I’ll jus’ wait outside, Stranger said as he went out from the hut.

Vivay cleared his throat and said to his son:
- My son you’ve finally reached the age to take over the tribe, but there is something you have to do before.
- I’m able to take over the tribe? But shouldn’t Stranger do it, Maki asked a bit surprised over his father’s choice.
- No. I got another mission for Stranger. Now to become the next leader you need someone to take care of you, all you need is a wife.
- What! I’m getting married? But I’m too young, I don’t know if there is anyone who wants to marry me though…
- Of course there is! Don’t you worry; I was just like you when I was ‘bout to choose a bride, hehe… Stranger you can return now.

Stranger went back to them and Vivay continued his chat with him.
- Stranger I got a mission for you.
- A mission? What kind of mission then, Stranger asked curios.
- You’re about to lead my son Maki here to Noka’s village. I found you trustworthy enough – you didn’t want to hurt my son when I wanted you two to challenge each other. So do you accept the task?
- Sounds interesting, but what for?
- He’ll tell you; at least it’s his business.
- Alright why not, Stranger began, but do you believe in my story? And that I’m about to become a general leader for all the Steefs?
- Yes, I do believe you. Noka and I have always wanted the tribes to become reunited for a long time. Go a head, but I have to warn you though about my brother’s temper – he’s quite nasty and can be pretty evil sometimes.
- Err, thanks for the tip.

The night came and Stranger told his friend, the Grubb about their new task. At first she didn’t accept it as true, but after a while she understood. Her friend had just won another friend for the trip and found trust in the heart of a leader.

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Yay Stranger! Great scene DS, had a funny mental image though, when Vivay was yellin' about no horns. Heh heh, Stranger and Maki smackin' heads and then wobblin' around all cross-eyed.

Anyway, twas fantastic an' I'm lookin' forward to more! Oh, and can't wait to see them piccies.
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Thanx Lobo I finally come up with something - I had a writing cramp before I send it in I didn't know how to start, but next chapter will be longer, more exciting and last more interessting than before Oh and I read yer fic two days ago - it was fabulous Can't wait to the next bit either

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this is jus' the first part of the continuation, but I'll update the story again tomorrow when I get time, but for now here's the twelvth chapter of me story, enjoy...


Chapter twelve: Moving on



Next morning the Grubb woke up early to pack her stuff before Stranger, he was only in the way even if he jus’ was a young Steef and smaller than the other ones she have met, he took almost up the whole place in the room. She packed down all her things in her rucksack and sat down on her bed a bit tired. It didn’t take long before Stranger woke up as well, out rested and ready to leave the village to face new adventures.

- …You slept well, he asked through a wide yawn.
- Yeah I did and I woke up earlier this time to fix our package, the Grubb answered as she climbed down from the bed.
- That’s great, Stranger said as he rose up from bed and stretched, have you eaten any breakfast yet?
- Nope, I wanted to wait for you so we could eat together like we did as old times…

Stranger smiled at his friend. He hadn’t have eaten breakfast with her for a long time – not alone with her - he’d been busy doing other things with Hunter during the last days after “the fake fight” against Maki. All of a sudden it knocked on the door and a voice spoke:
- Stranger? Grubb? Are you in there?

They both recognized the voice and the Grubb opened the door. There he stood dressed and ready to set out for his new destination, Maki who’d never left the village before was a bit anxious, though it wasn’t only the trip he was worrying ‘bout, but how to choose a wife. Now that was a hard thing to face, a really hard thing to face.

- Maki? What are you doing here, the Grubb asked.
- Err, I jus’ wondered if you guys wanted to eat together with me… uhm and talk, Maki said quite embarrassed.
- Sure, three’s better than two, the Grubb said as she turned to Stranger, right Stranger?
- Of course you can eat with us – it’s no problem at all, Stranger said as he smiled some more.

Later on when they all three had eaten their breakfast, Maki start telling them about his “Dilemma”.
- I don’t know why my father wants me to get married; I’m too young and feel I’m not ready…yet.
- Then why don’t you jus’ tell your father you don’t want to? I mean he can’t make you do it, at least you got your own life and you need to take care of yourself, the Grubb explained.
- Back at the old times, when his father and his fathers were leaders, they all had something in common and that was to get married before becoming leaders. This rule or invention was made by my great, great, great grandfather. He had father that didn’t care about him that much – till his last day came. The son known as Yocka didn’t know what he was about to do until one of the Elders, the Steefs personal guides came to him and said ‘if you really don’t know what to do, do at least what your father did’. At first he didn’t know what the Elder meant, but after some thinking he figured it out.
- Did he found a partner then?
- He certainly did, but it did take a long time. Anyway so… when a father tells his son to get married then it’s a good advice he shares and I don’t want to miss the chance when I ever get it, but now’s not the right time.
- My father once told me to get married, but I didn’t want to. I didn’t care about to get married but then I was too lazy and was like you – not interested at all. But know I do regret my choice, Stranger sighed, I don’t know if I can get married now – I lost my tribe and one rule I know is that a member of a tribe shall marry one from the same and only tribe. Everything else is or was forbidden.

Maki’s eyes went wide and he began to feel ashamed.
- I’m sorry for that…but, he began, maybe there is anyone for you out there as well. I mean at least you deserve a second chance after all you’ve been through.
- You think so, Stranger asked.
- Of course, everyone has to get a second chance – even if they had thrown their first in to the dustbin.
- Thanks, Friend. I’ll remember those words; Stranger said with a smile on his lips and laid his hand on Maki’s shoulder.


* * * * *


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Yeh, Stranger definitely needs someone to look after him...even if it's just to remind him to Brush His Teeth...

Great start Dancin' Steefy mate looking forward to the next bit tomorrow.
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Thanx Lobo and I promise you that this trip will become fun and... unexpected things will show up, but I'll not say anything more; ya got to have a lil patience

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.....Meany....

Nah, jist kiddin'. I can wait. Just...
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Yeah I'm mean anyway here's the next bit as I promised enjoy...


Stranger, the Grubb and Maki decided to start their journey as fast as they could before it was getting too dark and windy, though the autumn was here and it wouldn’t last long till the winter would share its cold. They had to get moving, reach Noka’s village before anything else – if they were out in the wild while the cold was upon them, then they’d probably wouldn’t make it in time. Worst of all – the Grubb couldn’t survive in the chilly weather for too long and that in turn would make Stranger very lonely and depressed if she’d die.

They all three went to Maki’s place to get the valuable things for the trip; A map, a compass and last the most important of all, provisions and warm clothes.

- We already got a map Maki. Why do we need another one, the Grubb asked while she packed down the last provisions for the trip.
- You have? Well it doesn’t hurt to bring a spare one, in case we should loose the first one, he answered.
- Okay do what you want, the Grubb began, all we need now is warm clothes hrrm… Stranger can you go over to Hunter and get some warm clothes?
- Sure, Stranger said and went out.
- You two are really good friends, aren’t you, Maki asked.
- We sure are, the Grubb answered and sighed.
- What’s the matter?
- I miss my tribe though, I haven’t seen them in a while now and the inhabitants are probably worried about me.
- You got a tribe of your own? And you jus’ leave them? I wouldn’t have done that if I was in your clothes.
- No wait just a minute here! I didn’t want to leave my inhabitants, but my friend needed me to guide him to the Grubb Oracle and well… now he needs me more than ever. I can’t immediately leave him without saying anything, now can I? What are friends for?
- You’re right about that though…ah well.
- What do you mean by that?
- Mean by what?
- Nothing. I better check our hut if we’ve left something, the Grubb said and left Maki behind.


Chapter thirteen: The trip to Noka – part one.




- Here I come with the clothes, Stranger shouted as he went in to the hut, which Maki still was in.
- Great, Maki mumbled.
- What’s wrong with you? And where’s the Grubb?
- Err; the Grubb went back to your hut to see if she had forgot anything…me I don’t know…
- What do you mean with “don’t know”?
- Stranger can you keep a secret?
- Sure, what’s on your heart buddy?
- I haven’t been able to tell my father yet, but…I’m afraid to travel to a place where the dangers everywhere and, Maki paused, where I’m not welcomed.
- Maki are you actually telling me that you’re scared of travelling and that you ain’t welcomed to your uncle’s place?

Maki nodded, terrified of getting teased by some Steef that almost was in the same age as he was. But he didn’t. Stranger continued:
- I too have been scared. And I’m not the only one who has. I remember my first trip, he, I was so excited that I couldn’t sleep the night before and I got myself a bad stomach ache. By the way, do you get enough time having fun with your dad?
- Why do you ask that, Maki asked as he gazed at Stranger with his big red brown eyes.
- I mean since I got here I haven’t seen you together with him. And it does seem that Vivay’s way too busy taking care of you, am I right.
- That’s not true! My father does have spent a lot of his time with me, especially when I was younger. Now when I’m getting older and can take care of myself, then he doesn’t have to watch over me like a hawk all the time. So don’t call my father a lazy donkey, or I’ll give you a punch in the face, Maki said, annoyed ‘bout what Stranger told him.
- Okay, sorry ‘bout that. But you should however say good bye to your father, ‘cause we’re leaving soon, Stranger said as he went out to see his Grubb.


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Thanx Lobo n' Snoozer sorry for not sending in a part last week - I had much things to catch up, after these weeks of illness anyway I'll update it as fast as I can


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Finally the part you've been waiting for is complete Enjoy... Oh and by the way if the text shoud contain any "odd" info, then check the link below


Chapter thirteen: The trip to Noka – part two: Separation



- Grubb? Are you in here, Stranger asked while he knocked at the door.

No one answered. He knocked again, but still no answer. He laid his head against the entrance and heard some noise – a weak sound of cry, a cry both of urge and sadness. Stranger opened the door on edge while he called on her. She turned around, her eyes full of tears and with something in her hands. The Steef went in carefully and sat down beside her on the bed, while he stroked her gently on her back. He asked:

- Hey… what’s the matter?
- I… I rather don’t want to talk about it, the Grubb began.
- It’s going to be all right. You know you can always trust me, Stranger said the same time as he wiped away her tears.
- It’s my people – I can’t jus’ stop thinking of them… if I only could have the opportunity to see them again then I’d be very happy indeed, but all these searching and traveling after your Steefs has made me busy enough…
- I’m sorry ‘bout that, but I need your support now. It might sound selfish, but it’s true – I can’t continue my trip without you. You’re my best friend…
- You sure can! You’re not alone on this trip anymore, you got Maki on your side now and he needs you more than you need me. And I’ve been of too long for my tribe. The inhabitants need me now!
- I’m jus’ a bodyguard to Maki and it’s my mission to protect him from any danger. But a lifeguard can’t be lead by someone who hasn’t being traveling before – he needs a Guide.
- So that’s what I am? Jus’ a simple guide here to help you out?
- No that’s not what I meant. What I meant was that, you’re partly one of my best friends I’ve got but you also got the gift of leading, which according to my beliefs is very rare. And why not use it when somebody, like Maki and me cries out for you help and guidance?
- Stranger… you are mostly aware of that a people have to be lead by a leader, not by himself or herself. So when you and your newfound friend here want help from me, then my answer is no. I’ve been away too long from my tribe now and the inhabitants want me back. By the way if you can read the map then it’ll be easy for you to find your destination and with Maki on your side then nothing will be trying to stop you.

Stranger didn’t know what to say. His closest one of friends is about to leave him and may not return in ages. He said with a lump of disappointment in his throat while he rose up from the bed:
- If that’s what you want to do… but you’re always welcomed back if you change your mind.

The Steef went out from the room and closed the door behind him.





* * * * *




Later that day when Stranger and Maki left the village the Grubb was still sitting in her room, feeling bad after her decision. She had to travel alone now and without company it would get real hard, especially if she met something on the way. Vivay, who had left his hut to see Stormous and Thunder, saw that the door to the newcomers’ hut stood on edge got curious and went in.

- Grubb? What are you doing here all alone? Shouldn’t you follow Stranger and Maki, he asked as he walked towards her.
- Yes and no, she began, I have to return to my people – they need their guide to lead them on the right way in life. Without me they’re nothing.
- Now you’re wrong. Your inhabitants are doing fine they got each other. On the other hand… your friends need someone who can lead them, they may have each other, but they need guidance. They haven’t been out in those territories while you and your elders have. I gave you my confidence on this, but I guess I’ll take it back instead – you’ve proven to me that you’re not that Grubb leader I once thought you were, Frayda.
- No! I mean… wait a minute how did you know my name, The Grubb asked suprised.
- I have my authorities, there was a pause, look I can help you get home, but not alone.
- You… help me? But you got to stay with your…
- I know, but you can’t stay here if you want to return home, right? I’m personally not going to lead you there, but I know someone who can.
- Who?
- Come to my hut ‘bout an hour and I’ll tell you, Vivay said as he walked out to fulfill his quest.

Grubbs biography



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*GASP!*

What is that Grubb doin'!? Stranger needs her! Go Frayda, go help Stranger!

Great chapter DS, very interesting and now I'm even more eager to find out what happens next...
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And you will Lobo, but it'll take a while before you actually will here's the next chapter! Enjoy...


Meanwhile a couple of miles away from the village…



-… If we turn left here and walk along the way till we reach the small creek over here then we, Maki pointed at the map while he turned to Stranger, we’ll reach Noka’s home about a couple of days.

Stranger nodded, still having the Grubb in his thoughts.

- Hey? Stranger, what’s the matter?
- I can’t continue without her, Maki… it feels like a part of me is missing and there isn’t anything I can’t do about it, Stranger sighed.
- Stranger, she has made her decision and it’s not a good point of returning now and persuading her to come with us; We have to do this trip on our own and after all if she had a tribe however, then she has to take care of them, Maki explained while he laid his hand on Stranger’s shoulder.
- I guess you’re right, Stranger turned around looking wistfully after her.
- We have to move on, Maki looked desperately at the sky, before the weather gets worse.
- C’mon then, Stranger said as he began to ride at a walk.
- Eh, wait for me you old scumbag, Maki exclaimed at the same time he began to run.

Seven hours later the dark fell over them and a cold breeze was blowing through the dense forest. Maki shivered, he’d been through colds, but not anyone like this one before. He remembered once when he was five years old:

Strong winds were blowing and large snowflakes were falling down and created a thick quilt on the ground. His father was outside and was helping the other strong Steef males to close the great gate, which stood wide open. Vivay’s wife, Yulee, who was sitting in the couch was holding and rocking Maki in her arms to calm him down. Though he loved his father a lot and was very worried about him. Maki looked in his mothers eyes and asked:

“Mom, is daddy ever going to come back?” Yulee patted her son on his head.

“ Of course he is, sweety. Your father is only helping the other Steefs to close the main gate.”

“Are you sure?” she looked at him with a fearless look in her eyes.

“Yes I am sure. Don’t you worry Maki, he’ll be back.”

A relieved breath came out from the little one’s mouth. Now he knew and felt that his father would return safety.



Maki snapped out from his daydream when Stranger rubbed his shoulder.

- Hey, something’s wrong or?
- What… oh no nothing is wrong; I was just daydreaming, Maki answered as he looked at the map again to find their destination.
- So, where are we?
- Hrrm, well we aren’t too far from… Maki looked up slowly from the map and became silent.
- Maki? What is it? Something’s w…?

He didn’t respond he just stared. Stranger turned around and he froze as well as his companion. They were standing on an unusual tall hill and beneath it an old unfamiliar village stood; both deserted and abandoned.

-… The Steef’s nest, Maki continued still quite chocked.
- The Steef’s nest?
- It says that all the Steef’s lived here, before the tribe got separated in four parts, Maki cleared his throat, you know the story right?
- Yeah, Stranger sighed, shall we move on?
- I guess we don’t have much choice, do we? And it’s still a long way left, before we’ll reach Noka’s place.
- You’re right, Stranger paused, let’s move on.

They sustained the trip and were hoping that everything would be fine when they reached their destination.



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Ooooooo, where it all started...something's gonna happen, I can feel it.
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Something yes, but what? I have been extremely busy these weeks that've past so I'll probably update this thread this week. But untill then:

Stay odd!


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I know this part is short, but I'll be updating the story more this week - I got my vaccation now so I'll have plenty of time

enjoy...


Chapter thirteen: The trip to Noka – part three: Seek and you’ll find



Frayda went to Vivay’s hut and saw him sitting outside it on a homemade bench. When he saw her then he rose up from the bench and said:

- Good you’re here. Now jus’ before we are about to leave, you have to promise me that everything you’ll see, when we reach our destination, has to remain secret. Only my son and I know about this and it would be very bad if this would spread among the people, not only in the village, but around the world as well.

“Ok, a secret is supposed to remain secret, but this is very…abnormal”, the Grubb thought but she nodded.

- This person you’re about to meet is extremely old, but very wise. The strange ‘bout this guy is that he’s not looking old, but young. So don’t claim him for his appearance – that could result as unforgivable and impolite, Vivay continued, and when we get there I suggest you show some reverence. That could, in the other hand, be very useful if this guy is about to guide you home, couldn’t it?
- Of course, Vivay I’ll do what I can, Frayda answered.
- Good. Well, if we’re supposed to go there, then we have got to go now.

The Grubb nodded again and after a few minutes they went away to see their “guy”.


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ACK! What a cliffhanger! Darn yoooooooou!

Tis very good Dancin' Steef and I love it. *bounces* Update soon! Pleeeeease!
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Of course I will, Lobo don't ya worry I said this part was short but... as time goes by the thread will be updated

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A NEW UPDATE!

Finaly, the continuation you've all been waiting for is here: TADA!

Enjoy...



After some wandering through the foggy forest and the thorny bushes, they reached their goal - an extraordinary large hut, surrounded by high and very old trees, made of the same material which the Grubbs used to build their homes with. But the differense between this one and the Grubbs homes was, that it had windows - that were covered with murky curtains from the inside. "Maybe this guy is extremely withdrawn", Frayda thought. Vivay whispered to her:
- Stay here and I'll check if he's here - if he isn't then we should leave and come back tomorrow.
The Grubb nodded while the Steef went to the door and knocked. None answered. He knocked again, but still no answer. Vivay sighed and said with disapointment:
- I'm afraid that he isn't home right now, we'd better wait till...
Abrubtly, a dark shadow appeard behind the thick trees. It was short, about five feet tall, a bit shubby and it's eyes shone with curiousity at them. Frayda's heart began to pound faster and she hid herself behind Vivay - after all he was much bigger than her and none would be so stupid to attack an adult Steef, especially if it was a muscular and brave male of its own kind. The shadow went out from its place and made the Grubb gasp with fear.
This guy reminded her of a Legendary, but instead of wearing loin cloth as they wore, it wore a long greyish coat and a dark belt, made out of leather, around the waist. The Legendary males had often greyish or black fur, while the females often had lightbrown or grey/brown fur. But this guy was completely white except for his ears - they were pitch black. His eyes had a pale blue colour while the Legendaries often had a dark brown, a light green or a yellow eye colour. Vivay smiled and went towards him. Frayda followed the Steef closely without hesitation. The creature smiled back with a touch of pleasure in his eyes.
- Welcome to my quarters - it's good to see you again Vivay after a long time, the creature said as he embraced the Steef and patted him on his back.
- It's great to see you too. Where were you? Hiding yourself from intruders or what, Vivay teased him.
- Nah, jus' takin' a walk around the forest and me camp. He suddenly recognized the tiny Grubb behind his friend, shaking and a bit confused.
- Whose that fellow ya got there Vivay, he walked to her and layed his left hand on her right shoulder, a sacrifice for me?
- I'm NOT a sacrifice - I'm Frayda, the Leader of the Grubbs, Frayda yelled angry as a stingbee and red as a tomato.
-Eh, I was ju's teasin' ya!

Vivay giggled and explained:
- This is Frayda a headstrong Grubb, if ya ask me.
- Pleasure to meet you Frayda, the creature said as he bowed, you can call me Acroney... the Toicer.
-Toicer? One of the Legendaries protectors, the Grubb asked with haste.
- Yes and I'm the last one I'm afraid... How did you know 'bout the Legendaries anyway?

Frayda tells him everything and Acroney shakes his head in despair.
- I never thought the Legendaries have gone barbarians after all these years. When we first left them then they couldn't even hold a spear without begining to shake, but now... it seems like they've made themselves more inteligent and skillful, after what I've heard.
- What happend to the others? Did they get killed?
- Someone or something did kill 'em however, but I don't know whom yet.
- That's terrible...
- Why are you guys here anyway? Need something special? Healing herbs? Ammo?
- Frayda here needs some help to get home and we wondered... or well I wondered if you could guide her to safety, Vivay joined in.
- Vivay, I'm getting too old - even if it doesn't look like it on the outside - I don't think I'm able to manage it. Not anymore.
- C'mon Acroney, I know you can - you jus' have to remain yourself and calm down after the painful things you've been through. A little trip can't hurt, it's good for the soul.

Acroney became quiet. He knew Vivay was right, he was just to tense and afraid of his past. A horrible past with blood, gore and death. Terrifying flashbacks and memories flying around in his mind, made it a lot worse then he expected.

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That was...ominous...

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