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nice chapter but i liked the other one better keep up the good work
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Interesting evolution of both the Paramites and Scrabs. Keep it up!
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chapter 26 The Second Revelation!

And thus our friends made it pass the giants into the deep forest un noticed and quite. They decided to stop and take a rest for their Alpha Elums were tired and they needed to be fed.

"Guys, lets stop we have gone far enough lets take a rest." said Silak.

And so they did. Zin decided to lie down on a log and rest a little and Kluna was down by the river bank drinking some water. And Silak was feeding the Alpha Elums. It was quite for a while when Zin once again found him self standing alone. Then as he looked ahead of him self and saw Kluna standing there stareing right at him with an strange grin on his face. Then Zin asked.

"Kluna whats wrong?"

But Kluna did not answer him. He just stared at him with a hunting grin on his face as if he was evil himself.
Suddenly Kluna answered.

"Follow us Zin, we need you!"

A strange force came over Zin that caused him to hover off the ground to follow Kluna. Zin tried to resist but couldent.

"I don't want to go, don't let me go please I don't want to go!" cried Zin.

"Follow us Zin, we want you!" replied Kluna.

"Who?"

Then as Zin was slowly hovering behind a seemingly possesed Kluna the sky once again grew dark and the moon became blood. They came up to the river and the river became a stream of blood as Zin was slowly let down. And then he looked, and there came upon thousands of mudokin sauls drowning in the river reaching out for Zin but could not touch him. all of them were expressing the words I am what I am. Then as he looked, Kluna expressed an evil grin on his face like the face he saw in the first incounter.

"What are you?"

Kluna took his finger and scraped in the ground five familure words "I am what I am." with a large engraveing of a C around the words. The words then filled with blood and Zin looked up and saw the evil one stareing at him like Kluna was. Kluna was gone and the ghostly face remained stareing at him huntingly.

Suddenly he awoke yelling once again.

"Nooooooooooo!" Cried Zin.

"Are you alright?" "Oh odd you had another dream right." said Kluna and Silak.

Breathing hard and frighten for death, Zin took his finger and pointed at the ground behind Silak and Kluna.

"What is it Zin?"

"Look!" replied Zin.

And so they did, and what they saw was the words I am what I am with the engraveing of the C around it covered in blood.

"What is that Silak?" cried Kluna.

"I don't know but I bet it has to do with Zin and his dreams." "Look at him he is breathing hard." "Something is controling and scareing him through his dream."

"What?"

"I don't know, but I feel we are going to find out sooner or later."

Zin got himself up and told his friends all about his dream and how it related to the first one. He was not sure why he was haveing such dreams but for one thing they all knew, was the fact that something or someone is controling them. what, we don't know. Our friends then got back onto their alpha Elums and started up again following the river.

Meanwhile far off over the hills and mountains and across the great lake to the deepest darkest cornor of the continent, a strange light appeared through the mist and began to pulsate as two red eyes blinked out of the mist and dissapeared into the unknown. What is in store for our friends? What is the meaning of the bloody words with the C? Why Zin? Time will only tell.
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Chapter 27 The Creature of the River!

The river flowed steadily throughout this ancient forest, curving throughout the tall ancient trees. The massive trees sweyed back and forth in the gentle breeze of Oddworld's lush cornacopia of life. The sounds of many creatures filled this ancient forest, as if it had a spirit. Meanwhile our friends were following the winding river, when Kluna noticed something jump out of the water and back in.

"What was that?" yelled Kluna.

Then anouther thing jumped out of the river and back in again. This time it started moveing to the bank of the stream to our friends. Our friends stood there motionless and scared. For they did not know what was comming. Suddenly, it hopped out of the water onto the bank. The creature stood there in a dark shadow underneath a willow. Kluna paniced, but the creature began to talk.

"Why do you panic for I am friendly to all?" said the creature.

"What?"

Suddenly, it came out of the shadow to reviel himself to our friends. What creature is this that seems to approach our friends in a friendly manner?
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I'm back, I'm glad you finally updated your story! I'll be on most of the time starting next week, because summer vacation begins, and I will be completely ungrounded. I'll Pm You about that MSN community. K?

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chapter 28 the Two Legged One!

With astonishment and amazement Kluna and Zin stood there stareing at the so called mysterous creature. Silak, suddenly was glad to see the creature there for he knew him well.

"Guys don't be scared it's Blunk my friend!" Explained Silak.

"But Silak It's a....!" said Zin.

"Yes I know it's a gabbit." Said Silak.

"But gabbits have only one leg." said Kluna. "Not two."

"Yes maybe where you come from but here the gabbits have two legs." Explaned Silak.


"You never seem to amaze me Silak." "Wow two legged gabbits, Interesting!"

Then Blunk the two legged gabbit spoke.

"What are you three doing this far into the land?"

"We are in search for the lost relec of the Omega to bring an end to Clorns raign over this land." Explained Silak. "My two friends are from Mudos and are trying to find their way home."

"Wow guy's unfortunatly Clorn has taken control of the western and southern territorys with his army of Dark Mudokins." "We saw them destroy your city of Zilanoff Silak." "I am deeply sorry!" "We are gathering an army together to take him on." "The great Chun of the Alpha sligs are also joining as well." "We must not let Clorn destroy us!" "My friends of Mudos we were told that you were sent here by profacy to liberate this land." "We wish to help you on your journey." Explained Blunk.

"Silak, Chun must of told him everything." said Zin.

"Thanks but where we are going you could not come."

"The center right?" "Guys I know the wilderness all over the place and you will need me." "I will swim down stream and let you know whats ahead and I will tell the rest of my people to help as well." "And we will do this until you are safely to the lake of Osmika the Misty one." "She will help you from their." "It is known that she is more wiser than the Great Almighty Raison." "She lives on Misty Island at the center of the lake."

"Thanks my two legged friend." "We will seek her out!" Explained Zin.

And so he did and our friends got back on to their Alpha Elums and journeyd off again this time with the clever help of their new found friends the two legged gabbits. Meanwhile up on a hill a dark scout was watching them but Kleek took his knife out and slashed his neck after sneaking up on him.

"Ah yes they found our two legged gabbits may they find Osmika and soon find the relec of the Omega." Thought Kleek.
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As I have said this story gets better and better! The two legged Gabbit, possibly an early evolution on this continent?
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Chapter 29 The growing evil!

"Lets stop we shall rest!" Yelled Trilas.

The dark muds stoped their spheres on the trail and got out of their vehicals to stretch from their long journey. Trilas stood over the rise and took his scope to view the land ahead of them. He was abel to look above the high trees for they were high up on a rise in this forest. He then saw The Great Lake off in the distance. He then looked down and noticed our friends resting.

But Trilas suddenly was taken over by a mysterious fog that lifted him off the ground. He was scrambleing but could not yell for the fog also hid his voice. Then suddenly Trilas disappeared in mid air.

He awoke from passing out and opened his eyes and saw the deepest black void in front of him. A deep voiced cried out.

"Trilas....Trilas!" cried out the voice "Come to us!" wispered the voice.

"Master?" replied Trilas.

"I have summon you here for a purpose!" Replied the voice. "You will destroy the Relec of the Omega." "That is what your mission is now." "The so called heros are after it and with it, they could destroy me."

"But they don't know where it's located!" Yelled Trilas. "It may be at the center but it's missing for what I have heard." "What power do you give me to beat these guys voice?" explained Trilas.

But it was silent and then a crack of thunder ripped through the void with the angry voice yelling with a goddly temper.

"IS IT NOT I WHO GIVES YOU YOUR LAND?" "IS IT NOT I WHO PROVIDES YOU WITH YOUR RICHES?" "I GIVE YOU ALL THE POWER IN ODDWORLD AND YOU DO NOT THANK ME FOR IT?" "YOU WILL FIND THAT RELEC AND YOU WILL BRING IT TO ME SO I CAN SEND IT TO OBLIVION!" yelled the voice. "PERHAPS YOU SHOULD MEET YOUR PITIFUL FATE AFTER ALL!"

Then suddenly a river of fire opened up in front of Trilas and he yelled in horror.

"NOOOOO PLEASE DON'T KILL ME I WILL DO WHAT YOU SAY!"

"Very well my friend go now and continue your journey and stop them." said the voice.

Trilas suddenly dissappeared out of the void and reappeared back in the forest.

"Dark Muds lets go!"

"But sir we just started resting."

"I don't care, LETS MOVE!" yelled Trilas.

And so they did but Trilas started to show an errie grin on his face as if he knew something that nobody knew not even his master. There is a growing evil and it has manifested it self within Trilas.
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Wow!!!! that was great!!!!Keep it up Paramiteabe your doin great!!

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Chapter 30 Wheely

It was hot and muggy in the dense forest. Our friends on their Alpha Elums were getting close to the Great Lake of Osmikea. There, they shall find her and recieve information on the Lost Relec of The Omega. For she knows all about it. Possibly where it is located. Meanwhile a strange visitor came among them and called out in rhyme.

"Not here over there!" said the voice.

Confused, Zin cried out "What!"

"You seek me not she!" replied the tiny voice. "I know this land very well mann!"

"What in Odds name?"

"Hey, down here K?" replied the tiny voice.

As Silak, Zin, and Kluna were looking all around for this odd visitor, the vistor jumped up onto a small tree branch and startled Zin.

"WHA!"

"Hello there nice to be here!"

"Me name is Wheely whats yours?"

"Um....um yea I am Zin this is my friend Kluna and he's Silak." "What are you?"

As the little industrial robotic looking thing rolled up to our friends he told them that he was a member of a race of industrial machines that call them selves junkyaks and that he was hideing from a sinister race of even stronger industrial machiens that were hunting them to extinction. After that he told them that he can help.

"Me want to help you guys." "I will save you a trip and give you a ship!" said Wheely.

As Zin turned to his friends he asked them. "do you think we can trust this thing?"

"He seems to be nice." replied Kluna.

"I say we should follow him he seems to know a lot." said Silak.

"Wheely it is right?" "Well you know whats ahead?"

"Yes I know the best!" replied Wheely.

"Follow me and from this forest you shall be free!"

"Oh my odd we found a crazy thing." said Kluna.

"You know we are headed for Osmikea right?"

"Yep me was following you all along through thick and thin and through great fog." "So me know everything!"

"Thats good so you know where we are headed?"

"Yes like I said not here over there!" replied Wheely.

And the funny thing on wheels pointed for they were close to the lake.

"Lets go guys were close I can feel it."

And so they were off towards the lake but now with their new found droid friend (Wheely).






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Chapter 31 The Great Lake

It was mourning and through the night our friends kept moveing through the bush, to reach the Great Lake of Osmikea The Misty One. Even though they made it to the lake, they have to cross it first in order to reach her. For this lake was very dangerous and it was 4 miles across. There were monsters in this lake that made the Sea Rex look like a fish. It was a foggy mourning and the fog was increadibly dense. Our friends could only see 2 ft in front of them.

"Mann I can't see anything!" said Zin. "Its this damm fog!"

"We must be on the beach of the lake." replied Kluna. "We would need a ship to to reach Osmikea. But we don't have one."

"Maybe we could build a raft?" said Silak.

"You get ship if I get trip!" replied Wheely

"What do you mean?" asked Zin.

"Give stare, over there!" replied Wheely.

"Look it's a raft but it's pretty small looking." said Zin.

"Yes only one shall cross lake and you stay here and wait, film at 11!" said Wheely.

"Well how do we know where to find this Osmikea Wheely?" said Zin.

"You find her on island in middle of lake bleepbleep!" replied Wheely.

"Well I guess we can draw blades of grass like we did before, when we cross that bridge a while back."

"Alright." said Kluna and Silak.

And so they did and this time Zin pulled the longest one so now he is the one that has to cross to find Osmikea.

"Hmm I have the longest piece of grass. I guess that means I should find her." "Great who would of thought that me of all muds especally muds from Mudos and has know idea whats out there, be the one to do the job." Ok guys take a rest here on the beach. Set up camp and I shall return with wisdom my friends." explained Zin.

"Be careful Zin." said Kluna. "You don't know whats out there."

"Yes be careful Zin." said Silak.

"I will be back before you know it mates."

And so he left them and he took the small raft and jumped onto it and sailed off into the foggy waters as Kluna, Silak, and Wheely looked on.

"Mann I hope he finds her and makes it back!" said Kluna.

And our friends stared as Zin disappeared into the fog. Mean while Trilas was looking on them from a small patch of trees.

"Ah yes go my fellow mudokin of Mudos. Lead me to Osmikea hehe!"
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Chapter 32 A Turning Point

The water was calm on the great lake. And the little raft that held Zin was gliding across smoothly. The sound of small Oddworld birds of all types chirped gracefully as they were feeding on small worry fish, and other small aquatic fish. The sound of splashing of the paddel in which Zin was useing was makeing the most noise.

Zin knew he had to find Osmikea for it was of great importance. She has the answers in finding the So called Lost Relec of the Omega. Still not known, the powers of this Relec was a mystery to all of the inhabitants of the Continent. Nobody knew what sort of power it holds. But for one thing, everybody knew that it could destroy Clorn and bring piece to the land and once again light this Continant's darkest hour, and send Kluna and Zin back home.

Zin thought to himself of the adventure he has endured in last four weeks. He was woundering if any of the elders back home were searching for him and his pals. He was woundering if they were worried or even worse, gave up searching and thinking that he and his friend are dead. That thought alone made Zin even more determind to get home. But he also knew of the inhabitants of this Continant. "Could for some odd reason these seemingly different spiecies of gabbit, mudokin, glukken, scrabs, paramites, etc be what Mudos is headed for?" thought Zin. "Could they be the direct result of evelution on Oddworld?" The mystery cringed at Zin's mind all the time. But it did not stop him on this great journey.

Zin started to hear the sound of breaking water like on a beach. He couldent see what was ahead of him because of the fog. But he knew that there was land close. He started paddeling faster and faster until the little raft broke out of the fog. And there, ahead of him, was a small island that was gloomy in it's looks. He apprached the island and landed his raft on the beach. He then took a small rope that was on his fishing belt and tied the boat to a small tree that was on top of a small mud mound. He then started calling out for Osmikea.

"OSMIKEA......OSMIKEA!" yelled Zin

But nobody would answer him. The island seemed deserted and dead. Zin was confused.

"Where is she?" said Zin.

"This place is small and gloomy theres nobody here." "Hell, I can see the other side of the island it's so small."

But then the muddy ground started to shake underneath Zin's feet and Zin started to fall down the small mound of mud that he was standing on. Then a powerful force threw Zin off and sent him hurtiling into a dead tree.

"SWOOSH! AHHHHHHAHAHAHAHAH!" yelled Zin.

Then as Zin hung there on the branch getting himself together again, a slimy snail like creature of imense size came creeping out of the mound of mud and dirt.

"Who comes to bother my beauty sleep?" said the snail like creature. "I am Osmikea the Misty One."

"Your Osmikea?" in amazement Zin was surprised to see that the island was Osmikea. The whole island itself must be her body. "What are you?"

"I am the oldest creature on Oddworld." said Osmikea

"Older than the Almighty Raison?" asked Zin

Yawning with her slow loathsome voice. "yes, I am ancient."

"What do you want from me?" asked Osmikea. "And make it quick for I (yawning)....I need my beauty sleep!"

"Where is the Lost Relec of the Omega?" asked Zin.

(Yawning) "It is far from here!" (yawning) "On the other side of the lake. In a place called the Junk Waists the center of the Continant."

"Do you know where?" asked Zin

(Yawning) hehe, in the center but..... you have to watch out for the gonkyaks." "They...(yawning) they are.... a race of sadistic industrial droids who don't like strangers. They (yawning) are fighting the ever so elusive Junkyaks who are another race of industrial droids." (yawning) "The leader of the Gonyaks is called the empireal majestry." "Now my friend leave me alone for I am tired and I need my beauty sleep!"

Then Osmikea slipped awey into her usual deep sleep and slithered back into mud in where she came from. Zin Now knowing where the Relec is, he calls out.

"THANKYOU!"

Yawning again "What ever!" And she snored and went to sleep.
The sky was gray and it started to rain. A small crack of thunder was heard in the gray sky and Zin was headed back to his raft. Indeed Zin thought this was a turning point into his adventure and that he and Kluna will be home. But he knew of the other task at hand. And that is to destroy the evil of this land.
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Cool!Ummmm i'm starting to run out of things to say soooo................................... snoogens?

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SO FAR THE STORY IS SOUNDING QUITE GOOD I HOPE IT TURNS OUT GOOD AS WELL.

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P.S IF YOU HAVE ANY FURTHER QUESTIONS PLEASE FEEL FREE TO PULL THE LEVER TO YOUR RIGHT
what and have a big rock fall on my head? I'll do that when sligs fly!! Oh wait they can fly, can you get me a really big rock, a peice of string, a peice of wood a bit wider than the rock, and a lever of some sort? Thanks.(Makes a contraption that when you pull the lever a rock falls on you) Well here it goes! *SPLAT*

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Chapter 33 A New Game!


"I wounder if he is ok?" said Kluna.

"I don't know." replied Silak. "Still, I wounder if he made it to Osmikea. This lake holds dangers and the monsters of this lake are far more aggressive than any Sea Rex I might add." "They make the Sea Rex seem like a fish."

"I hope he is alright!" "We are all counting on him to deliver the messege." replied Kluna.

"Yea!" replied Silak.

"We must be careful for beach patroled by Gonkyaks bleep bleep!" said Wheely. "Im Junkyak and Gonkyak, indeed me enamy!"

"What do you mean Wheely?"

"They will take us and torture us and put us on unfair trial. They do that to all races but them selves." "They think they superior and we are inferior." "They will exacute us if we cought!" "But first himiliate us before."

"Sounds pleasant!" said Silak

"What do we do now?" replied Kluna.

"We will just have to be more careful and wait. Any sign of trouble we need to hide!" explained Silak.

Meanwhile back within the small patch of trees, Trilas stood waiting for the right moment to strike, when suddenly the same force that took him on before, returned and caused him to hover and then disappear.

"No not again! Voice what do you want of me!" cried Trilas.

The so called deep voice of the black void once again muttered the same words "I am what I am!" I have summon you here for a purpose!"

But Trilas responded with his arrogant self. "NO BODY SUMMONS TRILAS!"

"Then perhaps this is the first time you have been summon" said the voice. "You havent found the relec and I am growing impaitient my friend!" "Destroy the Mudokin and his friends on the beach before he returns!" explained the voice.

"What do you want me to do I am trying!" replied Trilas. "I can't go and destroy them we need them to find the relec. I don't want to risk loseing my muds to them!"

"The Gonkyaks shall take care of them. Then you shall travel to The Junk Waists and find the relec."

"But what about the third member of their party?" asked Trilas. "Surely he is a strong Mud."

"PERHAPS I MISS JUDGED YOU. PROCEED, TO YOUR WAY TO OBLIVION!"

"NO, NO I ACCEPT YOUR TERMS, I ACCEPT!" cried Trilas.

"Excellent then go and I shall give a piece of my stregnth so you shall be victorous!" said the voice of the black void.

Then suddenly Trilas was overcome by red light and then reappeared back on the beach. With an evil look in his eye he promised to himself.

"I will rip open every glukken or race that stands in my way until the relec is mine!"

Meanwhile a bunch of Gonkyaks were patroling the beach when they suddenly saw them waiting for Zin.

"INFIDAL!" said the gonkyak

The Gonkyak was a massive industrial machine droid that resembled a squid.

"Gonkyaks, lets move!" cried Silak.

But as they were running from the group of Gonkyaks, Kluna triped over a rock and fell face first and Silak and Wheely were a little ways awey.

"KLUNA, WHERE ARE YOU?" yelled Silak.

"Help Silak I need you!"

"Wheely we left Kluna alone we must save him."

"No problem! With me wheels and speed we shall have speedy rescue." "Climb on!"

And so he did and they rolled back to where Kluna was but then the Gonkyaks over powered them with fierce whipping arms and suddenly were over taken and put inside a cage. Wheely was thrown to a small dip in the ground by the mechanical tentical of the Gonkyak and was slightly damage. The Gonkyak then picked up Kluna and threw him in the cage as well. Then with there arrogant laughter they left the scene with Kluna and Silak as captives. "To the Junk Waists my fellow Gonkyaks." Passed out, Kluna and Silak lied there helpless in the cage.

Meanwhile Wheely lied there in the dip unabel to move as Trilas walked up to him and kicked some sand into his gears.

"NOOOOO!" said Wheely

"Such haroic nonsense!" replied Trilas.

Then Trilas took his Mud blaster and fired and then he got into his sphere and left for the Junk Waists. The dark sphere started to transform into a flying vehical in witch Trilas was going to use to transport the relec. He flew towards his platoon and ordered them to return home for there job was done. And then he flew off into the distance. The other dark muds rolled off back into the woods to return to their fortress of Clorn. Without a doubt Wheely was damaged and Kluna and Silak were captives to a race of hideous machines. Kleek the Apha slig was with Blunk watching all of this on top of a hill. He knew this was the time in which Chun described way back when, but he could only wait until the return of Zin. What will happen now? Will Zin find the relec before Trilas does? Will he rescue his friends from the vile clutches of the Gonkyaks? And most importantly will he return? Time will only tell.
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This is really quite good well done!


At the moment i am 'trying' to write a fan fiction all about abes escape from RupterFarms well basicly the whole story of AO but more exciting and in a lot more detail (i hope it will turn out well)

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Chapter 34 The Gonkyaks!

Deep within the Junkwaists our captured friends Kluna and Silak were being taken to a vast mountain of junk. This mountain of junk towered over the rest of the mountains of junk that was known as the Junkwaists. It has been known for travelers that enter this place never return. Kluna and Silak were awaken by the sound of a lage gate opening up.

"What is that?" said Kluna.

"It looks like some sort of fortress made out of junk. But I don't know where we are at. I hope Zin finds us!" explained Silak.

"Silance infidel you will meet your fate soon enough!" yelled the Gonkyak.

As they were being taken inside of this fortress of Junk they were thrown into a cell to wait for their exicution. But there was a small port hole in the side of the cell where Kluna and Silak could look out of and see the area in which they were in. Kluna and Silak ran up to the port hole and to there surprise they saw a huge chamber with a large pit at the center. At the top of the pit was a small platform and beyond the pit was the most hideous looking thing they have ever seen. It was the Inperal Majesty of the Gonkyaks. He was nothing more than an over sized thing with multiple heads that hovered off the ground. Below the Imperal Majesty was a normal Gonkyak ready to exicute one of the inmates. Standing on the platform tied up was a glukken ready to recieve his fate.

"Has the Imperal Majesty reached a verdict?" said the gonkyak.

"I have!" said the Imperal Majesty.

"Guilty or innocent!"

Then as the multible heads of the Imperal Majesty started to turn and rotate a skull like head answered the verdict.

"INNOCENT" said the skull head.

"Very well feed him to the water fleeches!"

"NO..NO YOU SAID INNOCENT!"

Then the gonkyak pulled a lever and the platform opened up with the glukken falling to his death.

"NOOOOOOOO AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!"

As Kluna and Silak were watching this horrible thing take place in front of them they were visited by a strange inmate who was also in the cell they occupied.

"He knew he was a goner when he steped foot here in the Junkwaists."

"Who are you?" asked Kluna.

"My name is Zadix the last of my race the Cintacons. The evil Clorn destryed my race a long time ago. I journeyed here in the center in search of the Relec of The Omega but I have failed. Now I will die for being here."

"This is the center?" asked Silak.

"Yes it is the land of of the hedious Gonkyaks and their crule pets the water fleeches. This is the Junkwaists. You too will meet the same fate as that glukken did."

Then suddenly the door to the cell opened and a gonkyak ordered the guards to take the Cintacon to the exicution chamber.

"NOOO.. YOU CAN'T DO THIS I AM THE LAST REMAINING CINTACON NOOO!" yelled Zadix.

"heh soon you will meet your fate infidels!" replied the gonkyak as they took him to the chamber. Kluna and Silak went to the hole and watched again.

"Has the imperal Majesty reached a verdict?"

"I have!"

"Guilty or Innocent?"

"PLEASE... SPARE ME THIS MOCKERY OF JUSTICE!" yelled the Cintacon

"I repeat guilty or innocent?" replied the gonkyak

Then once again the multible heads rotated and and the skull head appeared to Zadix.

"Innocent!" said Imperal Majesty

And the platform opened and Zadix was gone.

"NOOOOOOOOO AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!"

"Surly this is not the way I want to go out!" said Silak.

"We need Zin!"

What will happen to Kluna and Silak? Will Zin find them? Time will only tell.
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Chapter 35 Zins Return!

As Kluna and Silak waited for their so called execution at the hands of The imperial Majesty of The Gonkyaks. Zin was slowly makeing his way back to the beach not knowing what has occured in the time he has been gone.The fog over the lake started to lift and the sun shown everywhere. Zin was paddeling ever more closer to the beach when suddenly a massive eye appeared out of the water behind Zin. This eye was enormas in size and it stared right at the little raft in which Zin occupied. Then suddenly the the huge eye ball went back into the water. Then suddenly the water in an around Zins raft began to swirl as the most loudest roar came criying out.

Zin stoped paddeling and he started to take a look at what was happening. He began to panic but then a massive fin came flying out of the water as it came crashing down onto Zins raft. As Zin quickly managed to jump off the raft before the fin hit, the one eyed giant came out of the water and started to head streight for Zin. Zin was swimming as hard as he can but the one eyed fish monster picked him up and started to take him under. As he hung on for dear life he notice the one eyed fish had a blow hole on it's back. He thought "A fish this size should get me back to the beach." He manage to cover the hole and as the beast came up for air he blew.

"SWOOSH!"

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!"

Meanwhile back at the beach, a bunch of meeches were investigating when they herd the yelling from a distance. Each meech stared at each other and started to run awey back into the forest. As the yelling got louder.

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH BANG!"

"Oh my head!" Zin cried as he fell un concience.

A few hours past and Zin was lieing there sleeping when he woke up.

"Oh mann this is not my day at all. I got to get the others."

"Kluna, Silak, Wheely! Where are you?"

As Zin was running down the beach serching for them he noticed Kleek the Alpha slig and Blunk the two legged gabbit were standing by a small dip in the ground.

"Kleek, Blunk is that you?"

"Zin? hey Blunk Zins returned!"

"WOW Zin you made it back in one piece and good timeing too!"

"What do you mean? where is Kluna and Silak?" said Zin.

"We need to sit down and talk Zin it is of great inportance." said Kleek.

"Why are you guys here anyway?"

"Blunk show him!"

As Blunk picked up the parts that belonged to Wheely he showed Zin.

"What happened?"

"I am afraid your friends have been captured by Gonkyaks and taken the Junkwaists. explained Kleek.

"NO Ive heard of it. It's the center right?"

"Osmikea must of told you. We need to go there and rescue them before it is too late. All this time I have been following you ever since you began this journey. Chun ordered it when you were leaveing. He told to watch over you and reviel my self when the time was right and that time is now Zin. Trilas the leader of the Dark Muds was also following you and now he knows where the Lost Relec of the Omega is. My friend, Clorns army has destryed my illustrious fortress like he did with the hidden cave city of the glukkens. You know Silaks home of Zilanoff. Blunks people also have been taken capture by Clorn. Clorn is growing ever more stronger every day.

"He is like pleauge that can't be stopped!" said Blunk.

"By now the untire southern half of this Conntinent has been taken from us. Blunk and I are rallying as many survivors to bring upon a resistence to this. But we need the Lost Relec of the Omega. And Trilas has already gotten the upper hand.

"There has been something that has been hunting me on this journey. It is my dreams they seemed to mean something that I can't pick out." It is of my home on Mudos but my people are being slaughtered. What could it mean?" "And I keep hereing the word I am what I am." said Zin

"Odd I have been haveing similar dreams of my people. I don't know but I am sure we will find out. Right now we need to put Wheely back together and rescue Kluna and Silak. It will be at least a day before they will get exicuted by Gonkyaks. So we must hurry." explained Kleek.

And so they did and as they were fixing Wheely. Kluna and Silak sat in their cell waiting ever so paitiently for the exicution. Will they make it in time? Or will Kluna and Silak die?
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GREAT stuff!! More!....Must.....Read....More!!

Oh, one Question, are you familar with "The NeverHoOd"?
What your one character says,
"Hello, Me Wheely" sounds like the one character in the neverhood game:
"Hellooooo, Mee Willie"

Just thought it an interesting coinsidence. (sp?)
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Chapter 36 A Dareing Escape!


Deep within the prison walls of the fortress of the Gonkyaks, Kluna and Silak were being taken to the exicution chamber to recieve their sentence at the hands of the Imperal Majesty of the Gonkyaks. Kluna and Silak knew they were doomed but they also knew they needed to do something to prolong the exicution. As the large gate to the cell opened, the hedeous Gonkyak appeared to them and said.

"It is time infidels!"

As a bunch of Gonkyaks came rushing into the cell tieing their hands behind their backs they pushed Kluna and Silak out of the cage with their pokers.

"Move you fool!"

But Kluna was brave and he spit right onto the Gonkyak's face. But the Gonkyak laughed at him for he knew Kluna was going to die.

"HEH... it is unwise that you shall do that infidel! No matter you will die!"

"NO YOU CAN'T DO THIS IT IS UNJUST!" yelled Silak.

"Take them awey! I am tired of their bickering!" replied the Gonkyak.

As they were taken to the chamber they were put on the death platform to recieve their sentence. A Gonkyak came out and blew his horn as the Imperal Majesty came down out of the ceiling.
Then the Imperal Majesty said a few words in his own native language to one of the Gonkyaks.

"Bleek sno blas con snife wasla!"

"Ah, I see your majesty!"

"Infidels... the Imperal Majesty said you have a chance to plead for your lives Sometimes it works but not to often!"

"NO!" replied Silak.

"No?" asked Kluna "Why do you say that?"

"I have a plan Kluna, relax!"

"Very well infidels, now you shall recieve your sentence let us begin!"

"You have been found trespassing on Gonkyak terretory you shall die for this!"

"You are unjust!" yelled Kluna.

"Silence or I shall have you in contempt of this court!"

"I have nothing but contempt for this court!" replied Kluna.

"Very well... Has the Imperel Majesty reached a verdict?"

"I have!"

"Guilty or innocent?"

"Innocent!"

And like before the platform opened and Silak and Kluna droped into the pit of the water fleeches. Meanwhile back on the beach Zin was just finnishing up repairing Wheely when he flicked Wheely's on switch. Wheely opened his eyes in amazement and a worried look came upon his face.

"Wheely your alive! Welcome back buddy!"

As Wheely struggled to get himself up he asked what happened.

"Where me friends Kluna and Silak?"

"I am afraid they have been captured by Gonkyaks my friend." replied Kleek.

"Who this?" asked Wheely.

"This is Kleek an Alpha Slig and Blunk a two legged gabbit we met before we met you Wheely. Anyway we need to get to the Junkwaists before it is too late. And you are our only hope!" explained Zin.

"I have the information we need in finding the Lost Relec of The Omega but first we must rescue our friends." said Zin.

"But Trilas has the upper hand Zin, we must hurry!" Said Kleek.

"Wheely I have seen your type before." said Blunk "Can you fly?"

"Why yes me friends me can fly far to the sky lets go BLEEP BLEEP!"

And so Wheely crouched down and yelled "Stand back!" And out came wings on Wheely back and soon the little rolling droid now was abel to fly. Zin and company climbed on and flew off to the Junkwaists. But meanwhile back inside the exicution chamber Kluna and Silak were under water about to be devoured by the water fleeches when Silak manage to grab Kluna with his long legs. Caughing and splashing in a small cornor Silak exicuted his plan.

"Kluna your gonna have to swim like crazy! You go left I will go right!" "We can beat these water fleeches!"

"But Silak how are we going to beat them?"

"Just watch me!"

And Silak swam right and Kluna swam left. by doing this they confused the water fleeches and all of them were in the center of the pool. As Silak yelled to Kluna.

"KlUNA... START CHANTING!"

And so Kluna did and all of the water fleeches started to become sleepy as silak did something no mud has ever seen a glukken do before. Silak took his two legs and held them close to his head as if he were sitting indean style in the water. He then was floating over the surface of the water. He began to glow and as Kluna was still chanting, the water around the fleeches began to lift out of the pool because of Kluna's chanting. Silak was getting brighter and brighter and then he let out this buzzing sound and the force of the buzzing lifted the bubble of water. It was then that the bubble of water was hurtled all the way up to the top of the pool.

Silak came down from the air and Kluna stopped chanting as the water fleeches at the top started chaseing the Gonkyaks out of the fortress.

"WOW, I have never seen you do that before!" said Kluna.

"My Mudokin friend, us Glukkens have secrets too that you don't know about. Like you and your chanting powers we have sort of a telepathic power known as buzzing."Explained Silak.

"WOW thats great Silak! lets get out of here, I don't think the Gonkyaks will give us anymore trouble!" said Kluna. "I believe the issues of this place will soon be solved momentarely hehe!" laughed Kluna.

As they looked out of a small glass hole they saw the Gonkyaks and the Imperal Majesty being chased like cowards from all of the water fleeches. Kluna and Silak were now safe but yet they were lost and still they needed to find their comrads.
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Oh and my character on Wheely. Well I sort of thought of that as a little robot running around in this story. Kind of like a malfunctioning junky robot. I wanted his speech to be kind of silly and to sort of ryhme and not make sense at times. Infact I am doing a drawing of him. But I never heard of the Never hood I guess that was such a coinsidence hehe!
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the greatest story ever!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
your story rules!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
it was so cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Paramite Abe is your story done? I hope not cuz ive got a lot of catching up to do reading I hope you add more. Then Ill post my comments, after I read all the new chapters.


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