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08-27-2002, 12:42 AM
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Great Al i cant wait to see what happens..This is getting good Keep it up..wonderfull story Bud
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09-06-2002, 11:52 PM
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Chapter 10 The Shadow's Arrival

An hour had passed, Yslam was awaiting on the Balcony outside of his office. He felt the cool evening breeze blow by, as shuttles, and taxis whizzed past and weaved in between the skyscrapers.

In the distance, one of the Chronicler Class Shuttles, arrived on the platform, where last week the meeting between Derec, and the Chronicler took place. Although, when the ramp lowered, it was not a Chronicler that stepped out.

A Glukkon in Black Robes, with his hood up proceded down followed by a few Sligs, also in robes, though they had their hoods down instead. The proceded, towards, the private taxi that would take them to their destination.

Yslam became though, more convinced every passing moment that this mysterious hooded Glukkon would never arrive.

Though to his suprise, a taxi docked with the balcony and out stepped the Glukkon in the black hooded robes. He was accomponied by two personal slig body guards.

" Ah Yslam, we finally meet." The hooded Glukkon said.

"Greetings, I wish I knew your name." Yslam, said back.

" You can call me Molluck." He replied.............


What is The Glukkon's Relationship to the Molluck we all know, only time will tell, dont worry all will be explained, in the coming chapter, as well as what the truth is about the Glukkon moon.

And stay tuned for Derec's next chapter
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09-07-2002, 12:13 AM
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09-07-2002, 12:58 AM
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Nice Al I cant wait to read the rest
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09-15-2002, 11:27 PM
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Chapter 11 Opening the Seal

The two Glukkons continued to talk on the balcony.

"You know Yslam, I think we should pay a visit to the Crypt beneath the temple." Molluck said.

"What? We cannot trespass on the spiritual place of our ancestors. Its just not right, I would be disgraced by my collegues. and all the Glukkons in the whole entire city of Mudarc."Yslam replied back.

"Why not, you do want to know the truth dont you."

"Well I guess,.....maybe I can say Im visiting due to religious purposes, Im sure they will not question me, I am the leader of the Glukkon High Council."

"Thats the response i was looking for Yslam........." Molluck told him.

The two entered an elevator inside the temple that lead to great hall, the main entry way of the temple. The ceiling was very high, and also many support pillars were alligned to the various locations throughout the temple.

They continued past the Mudokon Guard barracks, and came to a large Seal. Molluck waited with his black hood and robes still up, for Yslam to open it.

Yslam Kneeled down before the greatly intergrated and beautifully designed seal, and place his Key inside the slot. And turned it until the combination locked in.

The Seal had opened. and two torches on either side lit up, Molluck and Yslam both took one Torch and continued down the winding steps into the Crypt, and further into the Catacombs.

Along all of the wall were paintings, and writings, as well as hundreds of chambers, that infact went for miles underground as well as how deep this Crypt went down.

The two continued further, and deeper, and down further until they had reached the bottom. Two Glukkon Staues Guarded the Final Room of the Glukkon Crypt. It was now time for it to be opened............

Stay tuned to find out the truth about the Moon Molluck and what the final room contains.

And A note to the readers, after the next chapter, I will switch back to Derec's point of view for a while, until it comes time to switch again. So stay tuned.


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09-15-2002, 11:33 PM
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Nice Al I cant wait to read more.
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Still kewl, keep going at it *Coughs-check out mine-Coughs*
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10-26-2002, 04:54 PM
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Chapter 12 The Sinister Plot


The Final Room stood before Molluck and Yslam. Yslam put his hand up on to the final door, in which there was a Glukkon hand indentation. The room opened, and lit up. In that final room stood, a pedastool, in which a solitary neckalace laid.

Yslam began to walk towards it when he was thrown somehow by Molluck against the wall. Yslam struggled to move, but Molluck went towards the Neckalace in which underneath lied a scroll.

Molluck read the scroll to Yslam. And revealed that the moon that the Glukkons had worshipped for countless centuries, was in fact the in print of a mudokon paw imprinted in it.

Yslam would not believe it, but also it said this true the moon, is the shape of a mudokon paw, but on thee other side of the moon, showed the hand of a Glukkon, although do to the planet of Oddworlds size, when the other side of the moon is seen, it is not in view of this side of the planet.

Though Molluck had a much different idea, although the scroll, had said that both the Muds and the Glukkons if they were to live in harmony could both lead Oddworld as the chosen species, Molluck decided he would spread lies among the people on this half of the planet, and turn the Glukkons against their fellow Mudokons.

Yslam said he would have no part of it but in fact Molluck told him he would be, more or less. Molluck pulled down the hood over his head, and revealed a old deteriorating face, I need you to house my own spirit, you see I am as old as Good and Evil itself, and I need you to sustain me. Dont worry your spirit will remain here, unless I would be destroyed, which will never happen.

Molluck used some techniqe in spiritual projection and remove Yslams very soul from his body, and then entered. Molluck now Yslam stood, and took his black cloak, from his former skeleton, and sealed the room with Yslam's spirit inside.

He exited the catocombs, and witnessed, the sun rising. He still had the neckalace he had taken from the chamber, and also yslams neckalace, he put on his cloak and his now blue eyes, were seen while his hood was up once again. Then he resealed the catocombs, concealing what had taken place that night.

He saw instead as the sun was rising, dark clouds began forming, over the city, in which it became blanketed in a full eclipse. The walls and corridors, became dark, and something Molluck had planned was coming to pass, the necakalace he wore glowed silently, and he laughed as the darkness was falling. For it was time in which, he would spread lies and deceit amongst the people of Mudarc, and across half of this world.......


Look for the next chapter where I will switch back to derec.

Also if you have read ParamiteAbe's story about the lost continent, this also ties into the way that on that continent, the Glukkons were peaceful still but the muds werent, the moon explanation may make more sense, for that continent, is on the other side of oddworld and this where the mud moon is seen by Abe, is seen on this half of the world. Hope it makes a bit more sense.


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10-29-2002, 12:49 AM
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WoW Al what is there to say But.........WoW I like I like More More must have more
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11-02-2002, 01:39 AM
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Im going to update my story when I get up tommorrow, hopefully along with Campaign Tour.

Though I do wondor why people dont respond to my Fan Fics anymore, it sometimes though irritates me when people say they dont like to respond after someone has a new chapter, and then turn around and continue to reply to other peoples Fan Fics after every chapter. Oh well people who are fans of my stories hopefully you will continue to reply and give me feedback.Thanks.


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I can't wait till you do more of this story Al. It has been awhile but I am looking forword to it.

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Chapter 13 Awakening


Derec once again saw the images that he could still not understand, but they still were as vivid as they had been in the past week. He awoke, still remembering bits and fragments of what he used to be. He remembered, a bustiling metropolis, a city of great importance.

Then as always at the end of the dream, the city was blanketed by a total eclipse, and storms raged on around this grand city, as darkness fell, and all the inhabitants were sent in chaos.

Derec exited the sleeping hut as breakfast was being cooked around the fire. Last night had been a grand celebration, in which all the village muds of Zarcyn had celebrated their hunting season. From what he also put together about the area where he now was, was that the villagers were very spiritual people.

And that a success even as small as a bountiful harvest was to be celebrated, as much as a small ceremony. Derec took his cooked mluck, and ate it quickly as he mounted his elum armed with his spear, an exited the village to try and gain more information on where he was.
The day earlier.....


"Ah Derec, come sit down," the village chief said.

"No, its fine, I dont mind standing up," Derec Replied.

"Well, on a more serious note, Derec have you any idea still where you came from? this whole time I have had a sense that you are not from around here."

"Well to be honest no, I know of my name, which came to me a few days ago. And have visions at night, of a city, on a distant continent, and also a laboratory where, I was held by some strange beings. But besides that no, I dont remember."

"Hmm...there is not much more here that we can do for you Derec, I think you would have better luck searching by yourself. Tommorrow after are grand feast tonight, I give you my authorization to leave the village."

"Understood."

Now going back, to the present, Derec and his elum, silently set off into the forest wilderness.....He would not return to Zarcyn again in this life time.


To be continued.....

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Nice fan fic Al. Exciting and fast paced... I like it.
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