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This is getting really cool!
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Chapter 14:
Shirley crawled faintly in the blizzard, shivering repeatly.
She looked n the distance, she was flaming.
She wanted to get revenge on Zip so badly.........
Shirley glared dizzly and fell flat on her face into the freezing fost.
She felt a wet damp patch on her back,she managed a weak giggle,as it tickled.
She look up, she couldn't make it out at first, then the creature moaned in a fimalar way.
Shirley rubbed her eyes in and looked.
"An Elum......."She said.Her eyes lit up sightly.
The Elum was hungry for honey.
Shirley hugged the Elum tightly, and got on it's back.
The Elum grinned sightly and mooed at Shirley.
"What's that.....you say?" Shirley peered at the Elum.
The Elum spoke in it's language, mooing and roaring.
Shirley was unclear, so she shrugged.
The Elum started running with Shirley on his back, for no reason.
"Whoa boy!!" Shirley said grabbing on tight.
The Elum raced though the snow, and there was a gate covered in frost.
Shirley jumped off the Elum and told him to stay put.
She dusted off the frost and read the sign on the gate.
It read:"Scrabania ---->"
Shirley's eyes lit up and turned to the Elum exticley.
"You were taking me to Scrabania???"
She hugged the Elum tighly and firmly.
The Elum put her on his back and headed towards Scrabania.
Shirley grinned at the Elum.
"I'm gonna keep you and call you Kiros!!!"
Kiros dusted his feet happyiliy.

Coming Soon...............
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Keeps getting better! I can't wait.
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Keeps getting better! I can't wait.
yep, i cant wait to read the next chapt.
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Chapter 15:
A Mudokon Tomhawker appeared in the ruins of Paramonia, slowly stepping towards two massive pillars.
Another Mudokon stood there silently, it's ponytail swaying.
"Adel.....Sam isn't here."said the Tomhawker.
The Mudokon turned sollowfully.
"I know. I'll never find her. The Queen Mudokon and mother to all Mudokons." said the female Mudokon.
"I know, how much you want to help her. We have to get there before Mallet and crew find her." said the Tomhawker.
"You're right. I better not give up now." said the Mudokon confidently.
"Adel, we should go now."
Adel nodded.
"By the way, where's Beatrix and Ward???"

Two Mudokons appearered.
"We're here."
"Good, let's go to Scrabania. She may be there." said Adel.

(NOTE: Sorry it's so short. You find out more about them in the next chapter OK???)

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Excellent can't wait! Check tonight for chapter two of Failure to comply!
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I will check out your new story Al.

Chapter 16:
Adel and crew were heading towards Scrabania, for their quest to find Sam the mudokon queen.
Adel suddenly clutched her head.

"Adel........."

"What was that???" said Adel oddly.
"Adel?" said the Tomhawker.
"I thought I heard a voice." Adel looked around strangley.


"Adel........."

Adel froze.
"She's back....."
Ward ran other to Adel, and put his paw on Adel's shoulder.
"Princess??"
Adel fell to the rocky ground, her head hanging in fear.
"She can't be here."

"Oh I can........."

Suddenly smoke appeared and a dark figure was summoned among the smoke, she stepped out weakly and feebly.

"Mab.........The Sorceress is back???" said Adel.
The other whipped out their weapons while she was walking weakily towards them.

"Wait." said Adel. She had realized something.
"That Sorceress we defeated long ago is looking for someone to pass her powers on to. I'm surpised she lasted this long."
Sorceress Mab stared coldly.
"I can't die......yet!!"
"Princess! You can't take the power from her!!!" said Mack the Tomhawker.
Adel shook her head cooly.
"I don't intend to."
Beatrix looked at the Sorceress oddly.
"I'LL TAKE IT!!" Beatrix walked to the Sorceress.
The others looked at Beatrix stunned.
"Beatrix???"
Beatrix turned.
"I don't want you guys to take her powers. It's not safe for you guys."
Adel rose up slowly.
"You're 13 Beatrix!!"
"So??" snapped Beatrix.
"It's a big step........" said Adel.
"I know. But it's best you don't become a Sorceress,Adel. It's not right." explained Beatrix.
Beatrix nodded at Mab.
Mab exclaimed: "I can't die......I must achieve my goal......"
Mab rose her attached wings and rose her hands extracting all her powers to Beatrix, then she fell on her knees and disapearred for good.
Beatrix fell frightened by the change she'd made.
Everyone ran to Beatrix.

More Coming Soon............
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Great Job, I will update my story soon............ Thanks !
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(Oh sweet jeebus, finally a new chapter!!! *does the hocky coky* Awwwww there it goes.......

Chapter 17:
Wind was howling with flicking bits of frosts, as Kiros led Shirley into the mists of Scrabania.
Shirley clinged on tightly as she she shivered,Kiros tugged along
not giving up. Shirley's flowery patterned skirt was blowing across her sandels,she looked unsure that they were goning to make it to Scrabania. Kiros being the loyal pet carried on.
Shirley and Kiros came up towards another sign, she dusted off the frost to reveal the writing that said: 'Scrabania 2 Miles'
Shirley grinned slighly, it wasn't far now.
Her feet dragged in the snow and she climbed the shivering and howling Kiros. Shirley whistled and the Elum ran fowards.

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Meanwhile........
Beatrix looked shocked at what she had become,
She had intheried evil powers from Mab.
"Beatrix......" whispered Adel.
"It was best......You didn't want powers did you Adel?? So I sacfcied everything for you and them." announced a shocked Beatrix.
Adel bent down flicking her feathery pony tail and her dress.
"It's alright I understand, but you mus ive them to someone who can control these powers......." began Adel,then she stopped.
"What about Mother?!" she suddenly spayed.
Mack comforted her, "I know someone who can do this."
"Who?" exclaimed Adel.
"Someone in Scrabania......Sorceress Lulu."(Ring A Bell Peeps??)
"We're near Scrabania anyway so that almost prefect since we're looking for Mother!!" Adel said her eyes twinling.
"We can only hope....." said Ward dully as he looked woridly at Beatrix. She looked at him back. "Ward......Help...me" she muttered weakly as she collasped in a heap.
"BEATRIX!!" shrieked Ward
"Calm down......it's the effect of the inheirtence Ward. Lulu will know what to do about it." said Mack ever so calmy.
"You better be right Mack....."
Ward pulled up a cold Beatrix and lifted her off her feet.
Adel peered scared at the collasped Beatrix, she pulled her cloak
up over her head an hanged her head in shame.

More Coming Soon...........

~MOT
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Chapter 18:
Chomp sat sadly on a log glazing oddly around him.
"I'll never find out where I belong Chris......I'll never find my kind.."
Chris sighed and twitched.
"Don't be so fricking negative man!!! You'll find them....."
He put his hand on Chomp's Shoudler.
"I promise" He said eriely.
Chomp sighed but managed a weak smile.
"I can't without Shirley.....she's gone."
Chris hung his head.
Suddenly a ring was heard.
Chris picked the walkie talkie up, and rose it up.
"Hello?"
"Chris!?"
"Hello?"
"Hey it's Mr.Han from the Fish Maket."
Chris slapped his head dimly.
"Another shadow of my past?" he thought to himself.
"Chris??"
"Hey long time no see Han"
"Hey.....Listen..."
"I'm listening." Chris said with a deep sigh.
"I want you to do me an easy peasy job....."
"Yeah?"
"An easy pick-up and go....." Mr. Han said slowly.
"Oh?What's the catch?"snapped Chris.
"A big cash settlement.......500,000 Moolah."
"Oh, don't you remember how unreable you are with cash??" barked Chris rolling is eyes at Chomp.
"But that's in the past now Chrissy......."
"Don't call me Chrissy please."
"Tsk tsk, very well Chris."
"This is the last time for this Han!!!"
"Very well.....tell me when you are ready......."

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i enjoy reading this story, im glad your addin on
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I'm glad you have finally updated your story, its been so long, great job! Keep it up!
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Chapter 19:
"Who was that?" Chomp said curiously rubbing his hands near the fire.
"Oh, just a face from the past."
"Oh?" said Chomp oddly shiftly looking at a puzzled Chris.
"Some Glukkon wants me to do some simple pick-up and go job. He makes it sound so easy."
"You can't do this!!! What about Shirley.....AND THE GABBITS!!!"
boomed Chomp fluming.
"I have to Chomp. I get 500,000 moolah."
"Is that all YOU care about?! Hm?"
Chris started to get a sick feeling inside he was flaming too, he wanted to scream blue murder.
"WHAT ABOUT YOU CHOMP??!!! ALL YOU CARE ABOUT IS YOUR FRICKING DAMN GABBITS!!!"
Chomp went quiet instantly, with a worried expression on his face, then he suddenly frowned.
"Fine." He says. "Fine go get your precious moolah!! By yourself! See if I care!!"
Chris twirled round and folded his arms. "Vey well Chomp. I'll go alone."
Chris began to walk away into the mists of Scrabania, while Chomp yelled after him: " I'LL FIND SHIRLEY ON MY OWN!!! SHOWS WHAT A GOOD FRIEND I AM!!!"
Chomp fell on his log in a sitting position, glancing into the sunset guitly.
"Chris......" he whispered.
His voice echoed eeirly.

"Chomp....."

Chomp froze.

"Chomp......"

"Who is it??!" Chomp said raising his hands.
Then a dash ofsmoke burst out of no-wjere and a transparent figure shot out and flew to the ground, as it was lightweight.
Chomp looked up at this figure, oddly his eyes widened with a puzzled look.
"Don't fear me Chomp, I'm just like you." said the Spirt.
Chomp opened his mouth to find no words come out.
The spirt was a Gabbit, a dead one from perhaps a 100 years ago.
"You're like me?" said a bewildered Chomp.
"Yes, you have a destiny and I can prove it to you. But you must find Shirley, she is lost but not alone. She is amcompannied with a wild Elum." explained the floating spirit's eeirly voice.
"Destiny?"
"Your destiny, is t find and save the last few Gabbit's. And make them lead a good life and keep them safe."
"That's what I intend to do."
"Good. I will lead you to them."

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Testify, testify kick a hole right in the sky
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Tesify, testify kick a hole right in the sky
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Wow!19 Chapters of a great masterpiece!keep it up, can't wait for the next chapter!
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Thanks Sligface202!! I've not seen you for quite some time. See you around man.......And back to the story....

Chapter 20:
Back At Revalation's Fridge........
The Sligs wheezed and huffed as they rushed to the Exucutive Office, they had to stop in between corriders.
"Boss! Boss!"
Mallet triwled to see the wheezing Sligs clutching their backs.
"WHAT?!" He boomed like a volnaco waiting to euprt.
"Boss, that what-his-name Mudokon is returning shortly."
The slig said saluting immediantly.
"Excellent." Mallet said with total glee and a smirk on his face.
"I take it that other Mud is dead then." said Lulu while thinking about his 'promotion'.
"When that Mudokon returns, we'll celebrate!!" said an estatic Mallet.
"Now, now boss. Calm down you're making me exticed too!!!" said Toast jumping up and down with joy.
"SHADDUP!!!"
"Sorry Boss."
Then suddenly the automatic doors opened and out stepped a figure. Zip the Mudokon Shaman.(?)
"Sweet Mother of Abe!!" said Toast.

"I hate that guy!!"

Toast alway heard that voice in his head if he mentioned Abe, or anything to do with Abe.
Zip stepped wearly into the room. He staggered strangley eying everyone cautious his spear blade held in his right paw.
"I'm here Mallet." he spoke with a evil snicker which followed.
"You assinated Shirley I take it?"
"Yes Mallet. To prove it, look at the blade. LOOK AT IT!!" he said sharply which made Toast squirm.
"He's right boss, look." he said putting his finger on the blade and looked closely at the blood.
"You have sucessed mud. I congratulate you." said Mallet.
Just then another Mudokon ran in alarm, jumping up and down urgently.
"What now Mer?!!"
The Mudokon held a piece of paper in front of him.
"I got this info from the computer just now, and we've located a mysterious Mudokon and an Elum in the Scrabanian district. It looks strangley fimalar. "said Mer glancing closer at the paper.
"I'll see if I can zoom in and stop who it is. Back in a Mo." Mer rushed out the Office and into the Photocopier Room.
"What's this?" said Toast scratching his head.
"YOU IDIOT!!!MER IS GONNA GET A CLOSE UP OF THE MUDOKON YOU HEAR ME!!!" shrieked a flaming Mallet while he repeatliy nudged Lulu for back up.
"Errrr yeah. Mallet is right." said Lulu blankly.
Mer came shortly after waving the paper around.
"Letmee see." said Mallet.
Mer placed it on the desk.
"HOLY ABUS!!!"
"What now boss??" Toast said filing his nails boredly.
"It's......I-it's......"
"Spit it out." said Mer looking at Mallet oddly.
Mallet shruddered angery.
"IT'S SHIRLEY!!!!! YOU DIDN'T ELIMATE HER YOU STUPID IDIOT!!! TOAST ATTACK!!! ATTACK!!"
"What?? Oh yeah...I'm on it." Toast dropped the nail file and picked up his shotgun and repeatly smacked him with the base of his gun.
"PUT THAT ZIP IN A CELL!!!I'M GONNA HAVE A WORD WITH THAT THING NOW!!!" said a provked Mallet strorming out of the Exucutive Office.
"Geez he's in a right strop." said a Slig to a nodding Lulu.
Mallet exploded into the Main folly room.
"RIGHT..I WANT..........."
The Shrink dropped from the celing from it's string.
"What in the name of odd and crusty pants is all that......."
"DON'T GIMME THAT S**T SHRINKY!!! I WANNA KNOW.....WHY IN HELL THAT PLAN DIDN'T......."
A eletric bolt come out of the Shrink and shocked a fluming Mallet.
Mallet fell in a reddy carpet and squirmed.
The Shrink swang towards him, frowning and tutting.
"Tsk tsk, and who is it who put you in this job and odd-forsaken world mmmmm?? Maybe I didn't make it clear who's boss mmmm?
MAYBE IT'S BECAUSE OF ME YOU OWN REVALATION'S FRIDGE!!!"
hissed a booming Shrink a mancial glint in his eye.
"Please!!! No.........more........I'm sorry." said a bleeding Mallet.
"Sorry?" The Shrink managed a weak laugh. "Sorry isn't good enough. You'll have to do a simple task to gain my forgiveness!"
"Anything Sydney!!! Oh please anything!!!" said a struggling Mallet.
"Anything??" said The Shrink with a mancial grin.

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Testify, testify kick a hole right in the sky
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Hey munchy, Glad to see you have updated your story! I have to say that was your longest chapter yet! Keep it up, and you might get an award.
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Thank you Al. What kind of a award??? *grins*

Shirley: Probably none. I should get the award,............

Why don't you put a cork in your mouth I can get on with the story?

*puts a cork in Shirley's mouth*

*shrugs and cracks up* There.........easy.

Shirley: *muffled*

Tsk, tsk that was a word from our sponsers so back to the story...........*grins broadly*

Chapter 21:
Chris strumbled as far as those heavy mechiancal legs could possibly take him. He was trying to reach the nearest blimp....
Chris crept to it and there was sercuity, he loaded up his pistols sneaked behind them and pointed both pistols to both slig's head and fired. Chris grinned.
Both sligs lay there bleeding fatly, they barley twiched.
They both slowly closed their little eyes.
Chris screached the bodies for any useful weapons for this 'pick-up' job, Twin Uzis and Twin Magums.(Handy Upgrade!!)
The Blimp was about to rise and fly off, so Chris gripped on one of the sacks and climbed and because his legs are so heavy.
He foroze as he saw another Slig and drew out a magum, he aimed at the Slig's head then he fired and the Slig groaned fell to his death down below.
Chris finally made it the top, to find a Slig on board driving the blimp itself, he shot him though the middle, the Slig grunted and fell in pool of blood.
Chris seated himself.
"How do I work this thing??"
A montoir switched on and a Glukkon face appeared.
"Mr. Han??How did you know I was here"
"You mentioned the nearest blimp did you not?? So I figured you went to the one near Scrabanian Temple." explained a grinning Mr.Han smoking a huge cigar.
"Very well, just cut to the chase. What is it you want me to pick up then??" Chris said rolling his eyes.
"To pick this little disk from Revalation's Fridge."
"That's it?"
"That's it."
Chris sighed and slapped his head.
"Fine, fine!!"
"Good Chris, it his locked away in the 14th floor with some code-breaker thing. The cards that are coming out the system are the codes for various floors and the disk."
"Sure, but this is the last time OK?"
"Very well." shrugged Mr.Han. "Farewell."
Chris sighed and cupped his head in his hands.
"What am I getting into??"

More Coming Soon...............

~MOT
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Testify, testify kick a hole right in the sky
Slap a liar in his eye, kick a hole right in the sky
Tesify, testify kick a hole right in the sky
Johnny, Johnny Johnny..."
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I really like how diverse the characters are in your fanfic, not to mention how many characters you have. You'll just have to see about the award. * hehehe Snickers * I will choose very soon.
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Gimmee that award............

Shirley: Oooooo NO Al, gimme the award!!!!

*Shoves Tea outta the way*

That does it!!! I created you........!!!

Shirley: I don't think sooooooo!!!

That was a word from our sponsors.......ummmmmmm Revelation's Fridge!!! Onto to the story......*jumps and pulls her spiffy pal Shirley out of the post*

Chapter 22:
Chomp followed the spirits voice and presence.

"Chomp............"

Chomp looked oddly towards the path, he hopped in the forward
direction of the spirit's voice and wavering presence.
Rustling came from the bushes that Chomp suddenly passed by,
and a dark figure fell out flat on it's face.

It looked up towards the hopping Chomp, and dragged itself and gripped onto a bush branch. It was Shirley and Kiros. Kiros flipped Shirley on his back, and the followed the weirdly behaved Chomp hopped towards the unknown presence of the dead Gabbit, it was a dark night filled with beautiful glowing stars up above.

"Chomp!!!" called Shirley.
Chomp ignored the call of Shirley and hopped on.
"CHOMP!!" she shrieked impaitently.
A shock came out from Chomp as she and Kiros got nearer and electrocuted a shrieking Shirley.
She yelped in pain as blood drained out onto Kiro's nose, he attempted to shake it off.

Shirley ordered Kiros to run like the wind and catch up with the odd Gabbit, Kiros charged with all his might.
Shirley whipped out her standard staff and chanted to relase magic inside the staff.

She zapped a yelping Chomp back for basic revenge, as he collasped into a pool of blood pouring out.

Shirley jumped off Kiros guitily, "Stay here." she said to the Elum.
Kiros mooed in agreement.
She rann towards the knocked out Gabbit and kneeled down brushing her long skirt back, and she put her paws on Chomp to relase a healing spell, she chanted as she unexpectly summoned a spirit out of Chomp.......The Gabbit Spirit.

"Blast! said an annoyed Spirit. "I could of achieved my goal, you blew it. But now I can put my mind at rest.......Go back to sleep.....forever."
And it disapearred suddenly.
Shirley fell, looking a bit freaked out but then she looked at a collasped Chomp...
"He was possessed...."she muttered and put a paw on Chomp.
Kiros came forward to Shirley with a blanket in his mouth for Chomp, Shirley grabbed it and put it over him.

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Di dum di dah!!! I thought I'd make another chapter.....I'm in a story mood today!!! MUHAHAHAHA!!

Chapter 23:
Chris held the controlls of the blimp oddly looking at the unfimalr control of the ship. He shrugged and took control.
He started the blimp up and took off.........

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Back At Revalation's Fridge Again......*groan*
Toast was viling his nails as he always did, muttering to himself in Lulu's office room. Lulu stood up and peered at this lazy idiot.
"YOU IDIOT!!! GO CHECK ON THAT ABE GUY!!!!"
Toast sighed;"His ain't name Abe boss it's Zip."
"Zip, Abe same thing."
"Whatever."
"GO CHECK ON HIM YOU IDIOT!!!"
Toast jumped up as he boomed and saluted. "Yes sir!!!"
He rushed out the room with his shotgun.

Mallet boomed into Lulu's office as Toast ran out.
"How's it's going you found Shirley yet?"
Lulu shooked his head.
"No boss, no sign of her."
"YOU DUMBASS!!!! THAT DOES IT!!! IF YA DUNNO WHERE SHE IS SHE COULD BE COMING HERE TO KILL US!!"
"Then put the place on high sercuity alert them boss."
"That's the best idea you'll have in a decade".
Lulu rolled his eyes.
"Thanks." He said with complete scarasm.
Just then Mallet walked out the office while Lulu sighed annoyed.

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Chris was having complete difficulty with the controls, they were sort of jammed, he was coming up to Revalation's Fridge now. He glanced at the state of the blimp it was on fire for some odd reason. "Oh ODD!!" he cursed;"I'm gonna CRASHED!!"
He yelled and jumped on the floor and lay here while the blimp flew itself dowards.......
And it crashed on the upstairs base of Revalation's Fridge.
Chris flew out of the blimp and landed with a crack on his back.
He groaned in agony and saw the blimp beginning to fall into him crushing him into death. He rolled sideways out of the blimps way.
The blimp landed with a crash, leaving Chris to pick himself up and load his weapons ready to retrice the disk for Mr.Han.

More Coming Soon.........
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wow, i came back to see more great chapters, keep it up, i like reading it
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Oooooooh that silly mudokon where is she???

Shirley: You want me to wear THIS???

Yup........It's part of the story......Not now though.....It's Chris' part.

Shirley: Uh uh. OH NO, I'm not wearing it.

Yes you are. Do you want me to give a tatoo that gives you BAD luck???

Shirley: *goes silent* No.

Ah shaddup, I'm the shaman ya know. *sticks out tongue*

Discalmer: This ridiculous sponser has no meaning it's just here. Ummmmmmm back to our main feature Special. *grins*

Chapter 24:
Chris dragged himself up and armed himself with a magum, and crept slowly in a random direction.
He sighted a group of sligs patrolling the main folly, he whipped out another magum and shot two in the head.
They groaned in agony and clutched their heads while falling to thier deaths.
"Get 'im!!" said a slig.
The slig aimed and shot with thier rifles.
Chris dived down, dodging the bullets rolling and turing around while shooting back accurate bullets into their smotchs.
He left a bunch of bloody corspes in the middle of the main folly.
He passed them casually ginning as if nothing happened, he got out the pass to gain acess to the lift.
"Acess denied."
"WHAT!!!" blazed Chris
He ran back and searched the bodies for clues or anything useful......One slig twitched, there was a pass in his bloody hand.
Chris snatched it and fled.
He tried to use the lift again.......
"ACESS GRANTED."
Chris smiled slyly, while walking into the lift.
He pressed the button that said '14', "To the 14th floor I go." says Chris. He gets out his celluar phone and cntacts Mr.Han
"How everything going??"
"OK so far so good."
"Excellent. Where are you now??"
"In the lift on my way to the 14th floor"
"Oh sweet!! You're on your way!!"
Suddenly the lift made a odd power-cut noise, and it stopped on 3th floor.
"S**T!!!"
"What's up??"
"The lift stopped"
"Oh odd no!! Stay put. I'll get help."
"No. I'll hop into the vent above me. This job is harder then I first thought.......geez bruther. It's VERY hard ya know?!"
"Very well. Go get the disk."
"Yes sir."

More Coming Soon..................
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HEY Munchy I have been gone for so long, I feel weird being back like it has been years, anyway I'm glad to see you have updated your story if only I could, work on mine.......
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After a long time.......here's chapter 24 rather short but it's for the suspence I tell you.....SUSPENCE!!! I went OTT again I guess...Here goes nothing.....

Chapter 25:
Chris tugged on the upper vent gate until he had broken inside, he struggled to climb up into the ventalation shaft. He grunted as he pulled himself upwards slowly using all his might. Sweat was glistening on his yellow skin which was cut in many places. Chris looked around awkardly, orange lights were shining in all directions, it was dark and dusty. He sighted a rusty, steel ladder to his left-hand corner, and began to climb....Suddenly there was whirring and cackling from benith the lift as Chris began to climb upwards. He gasped and started climbing faster and faster as the lift advanced nearer and nearer. Chris sweated and widened his red eyes in fear, he had tears in them. He climbed with his might......The lift advanced nearer and nearer towards the quaking Chris. Chris suddenly sighted another vent, then he looked at the lift which was slowly but surely gaining speed. He jumped inside the vent, then the lift passed upwards. Chris was safe for now. He wiped off the sweat, while hyperventalating in relif......

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Wow this is a great story (and no its not better then mine, like you said before). Can't wait for the next chapter!
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(and no its not better then mine, like you said before)
Did I say that??? I thought I said in your topic that your story is better than mine.
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Happy After a longgggggg wait.....

Ta da......I'm back after sooooooo long with my fic updated after a couple of months!! Whoo-hoo!!!

*does a little jig*

Right.....Oh peeps, I might have a fanfic extra for Special will be interviews and bloopers from any point through the story.....I just thought that up now...Happy days..... Any how back to our long awaited special.....

Chapter 26:
Adel and company were struggling towards Scrabania.....Which was a long way, they had to go all the way back from Paramonian Temple to Paranomia to return to Monsaic Lines to hop into the well of Scrabania and another long road trip awaits.
"Geez, we have to walk all this way?? I'm hungry!" complained an impatient Ward clutching his glurging stomach.
Beatrix sighed and turned. "Quit your whining okay Ward?! I can see a nearby market I'll just go steal some food and....."
Adel interupped: "What?! Steal?! You shall steal in front of my own eyes Beatrix!!"
"Relax I do this for a living" explained Beatrix cooly swishing her plait behind her.
"Silence!! A crime shall not be commited in front of the princess!!" said Mac wagging his finger.
"Oh yeah? Watch me!!" Beatrix smirked and sneaked along watching the market keepers movements in a pattern.
She ran forwards and ducked looking around closely studying the market keepers every move.
She saw some bread.....and waters in bamboo flasks.
Beatrix calmy and cooly reached out towards the teasure until someone gripped her wrist tightly.
"What the-"
A young male mudokon had his hand gripped tightly on Beatrix's wrist smirking eviliy.
"Hey!! What's the big idea!!?? I almost had the grub ya know?!" said Beatrix shaking his hands off.
"The grubs mine....." He spoke slightly.
"Yeah? Well I the master theif was here first complete with a classic apperance and bag..." She boasted. "Now get out my way!!"
He was mute, and he ingored her.
"GET OUT MY WAY!!!"
"Why should I listen to some petty crimial when I have all the food!!??" he mumered grinning slightly.
The Market Keeper who was a slig finally appeared.
"Oh right what the hell's going on?!" he said weilding up a sparking polished shotgun aimed at both mudokons.
"Right....." Beatrix thought. "What now.....?"
Beatrix raised her claw and jumped while dealing a spinning kick towards the mudokon, who fell in a slightly sandy rooky path.
She grabbed as much food as she could while the Slig cursed.
" Oh *$£@~#!!" He said while takling aim at the nippy mudokon.
"Epp!!" She squeaked and made a run for it.
He shot at all his might while she struggled to dodge the bullets. She sprinted towards the woods where the others were waiting..A bullet sprang forwards cutting into Beatrix's arm. She grunted and groaned in pain.

More Coming soon...........

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Ah the well awaited return of the Fan Fic Special. Im really glad to see you updated your story. Cant wait for more. Ps check out my newest Story campaign tour, and updates on Failure to Comply.
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Great job................I was just looking over FC and i passed this fan fic...its really great keep it up.
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