Prison OtherSide: Night Watch -

Slig75 · #31 12-10-2009, 11:17 AM

Hmm, I don't really know
Good chapter

AlexFili · #32 12-10-2009, 12:23 PM

Thanks again for the support. Here is some more of my story.

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Chapter 9: Justice

During his nights on the rooftop, Rook would search for more soft material to keep. He found rags and washing cloths, with the occasional towel thrown in. Even Rook couldn’t really understand why. Perhaps out of boredom, or some kind of compulsive behaviour.

When Rook went on hunts now, rare as they are, the Dark Wings would fly away from him. They were almost reluctant to attack him for some reason. Perhaps they had finally realised that Rook was a force to be reckoned with? Rook didn’t care too much. He had taken to eat more during the mealtime… his hunger seemed to grow day by day. He started to crave more meat than usual, sometimes even eating it raw. Rook found it much easier to chew the food. His canines had increased in size, only just visible outside of his mouth.

One evening that week, Flek walked over to Rook. “Hey Rook, I’m glad you did a good job recently by catching those Dark Wings. You definitely need a break, you look even paler than usual.” Rook chuckled, “I know, thanks.” Rook handed Flek something. Flek looked down to see a little metallic necklace. “What the?” Rook smiled, “I should give you something for all the help. Without you I wouldn’t have lasted as long as I have.” Flek smiled, “You really outdid yourself Rook, it even has an F shape…” Flek moved to closer to Rook and hugged him, “Thanks man.” Rook squirmed, “Yipes, too close too close!” Flek laughed, “You’re a funny guy.”

Rook smiled and walked away, a tear forming underneath the eye socket of his mask. Why was he being so emotional? Was he stressed out?

Slig75 · #33 12-10-2009, 01:33 PM

More bed material, more hunting, darkwings not attacking, craving of meat, canine size increased, THIS CAN ONLY MEAN ONE THING.......

enchilado · #34 12-10-2009, 01:34 PM

Uh oh. Good chapter

AlexFili · #35 12-10-2009, 01:53 PM

Chapters 10 and 11 will blow your minds. Oddey, what do you think so far?

Slig75 · #36 12-10-2009, 10:50 PM

Oh ek D8

AlexFili · #37 12-12-2009, 12:38 AM

I hope you enjoy this chapter. This is what it's been building up to.

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Chapter 10: Killer Instinct

Rook was staggering as he made his way to the rooftops and into his cabin. He closed the door and placed his back to it. ‘What does all of this mean? What is happening to me?’. Rook took out a small mirror given to him by Queck. He looked at his skin, it was very pale and light grey in colour. Rook put a finger into his mouth and could feel the fangs. ‘Oh Ode, what shall I do?’. Rook looked around the cabin. None of this was right. He used to sleep in the dormitory with the other Sligs, he never looked at nature before. He looked at the pile of soft rags on the floor. The rags were arranged in a circle, almost as if forming a nest.

Rook felt sick with himself, “No, this is wrong. I have to tell someone about this. I have to do something. This is…” Rook’s words were cut short and he felt out of breath. For a few seconds, his breathing was heavy and uncoordinated. It was like being punched in the stomach over and over, Rook could barely breathe. It felt like he was drowning, he couldn’t breathe normally. Sweat began pouring from his body and his eyes were streaming with shock and uncontrollable pressure.

He gasped for air and leaned against the wall for support. Rook’s throat felt more crowded than it should be, Rook felt like he was going to lose his lunch. He bent over, feeling incredible pain and tension. He let out an ear-piercing yell as an object fell out of his mouth. A few seconds more and two more objects left Rook’s throat. Rook could finally breathe, he fell backwards and gasped for air. For a few minutes he remained like this.

He then moved over to examine the objects. Fearful of what he would see.

Slig75 · #38 12-12-2009, 06:13 AM

What could these objects be?
Good chapter

Oddey · #39 12-12-2009, 06:23 AM

My occasionally too wild imagination has already come up with the least likely objects.

AlexFili · #40 12-12-2009, 11:22 AM

Chapter 11: Lifeline

He picked up one of the objects. It was oval shaped and was dark grey in colour. He rubbed the object, it was hard. He could feel warmth from inside. He almost lost a grip of the object before yelling, “No!” Rook grabbed onto the object, which had to be an egg of some sort. “I must protect you, above all else.” Rook placed the egg within the soft nest, doing the same with the other eggs. “My… babies.” Rook stroked the eggs, with a look of longing in his eyes as he did so.

Flek was getting worried. He hadn’t seen Rook all day. A few days passed and still no sign of Rook. Flek realised something had to be done. He gathered some other red cappers and went to find Queck. He tapped Queck to wake him up. “Sir”, he whispered, “What is it?” Flek looked at Queck, “It’s about Rook. I think he needs our help.”

Flek, Alon, Karbo and Queck all climbed up the metal staircase leading to the roof. Karbo looked at Queck, “We’ve been getting really weird readings up here lately… the signals have become stronger and stronger. We need to find out what’s up here.”

Flek opened the door slowly. He saw Rook, but not as he saw him before. Rook was pale and his ribs were showing. Rook looked outside of the cabin and saw the red glow from their Slig masks. “I… I…” Rook felt tears welling up in his eyes, the tears ran down his face and he started sobbing uncontrollably. Flek sighed, “Rook…”

Oddey · #41 12-12-2009, 12:01 PM

Well, it wasn't what I expected, but it'll do just the same. I was thinking they were vital organs or something. Now I need to go, my sister's being a jerk right now, and needs seeing to.

enchilado · #42 12-12-2009, 02:18 PM

Oh my! He just layed eggs out of his mouth.

Good chapter, but I hope you're aware that isn't really where they come from...

AlexFili · #43 12-12-2009, 03:02 PM

It is according to King Piccolo in Dragonball!

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Chapter 12: Madness

Queck looked at the nest. “Are those… Dark Wing eggs?” Flek nodded. Queck looked at Rook, “Why did he bring them here?” Flek shook his head, “He didn’t bring them. He… made them himself. I’ll explain later.” Karbo moved towards the nest. Rook was staring at him, tears still in his eyes. “Wh-What are you doing?” Karbo tried to pick up one of the eggs, Rook moved closer to them. “No! Don’t touch my children.” Karbo took a few steps back. Alon sighed, “This is the manifestation of the Dark Gift.” Queck turned to face Alon, “a Dark Gift?”

Alon turned to look at Queck, before looking towards Rook. “The Dark Gift is what a Slig receives when they are bitten on the neck by a Dark Wing. The benefits may include heightened senses, better night vision, extra strength, faster speed….” Queck interrupted, “Then why are we so worried?” Flek let out a small growl and spoke, “There are negative aspects to this gift as well. To start with, there is only a fifty percent chance that the transformation will be beneficial. Otherwise, the subject undergoes a slow and painful process which results in them becoming a Dark Wing themselves.”

Alon looked at Flek, “That was the worst case scenario. Rook seems to have avoided that fate at least.” He glanced back at Rook before continuing, “This type of transformation occurs when the victim does not have enough time to inject the anti-venom into the bite wound. Rook was lucky enough not to die from the venom.”

Karbo turned to face Rook and whispered, “So, shall we take the eggs from him now?”

Slig75 · #44 12-13-2009, 01:16 AM

Well, this is getting very interesting, wonder what will happen next?

Oddey · #45 12-13-2009, 10:03 AM

I bet Rook won't be too happy when they start grabbin' his eggies. Not only that, I'm pretty sure Rook is full of venom too...

AlexFili · #46 12-14-2009, 07:58 AM

Chapter 13 will definately turn some heads. I'm so glad you like this story. I might even make a videogame.

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Chapter 13: Nothingness

Alon grabbed Karbo’s hand, “No, we must not tamper with the eggs. He has developed a very strong link with the eggs. If we even so much as touch one, he might lose his mind forever. We have to tranquilise him.” Flek sighed, “Sorry buddy.” Flek aimed at Rook and fired a tranq dart into his neck. Rook tried to walk but he lost his leg control. He fell on the floor and fell into a soft sleep.

Flek approached the eggs. “We’ll need to take these for examination. Don’t let any get broken”. Karbo and Flek picked up the eggs and carried them down to the labs. Alon looked at Queck, “You’ll need to help me carry him to the labs.” Queck nodded and assisted Alon.

When Rook woke up, he was in restraints. He was lying against an operating table. Rook looked around and saw Flek. “Flek, I’m so glad you’re here.” Flek smiled, “I’m glad you’re okay. The treatment seems to have worked.” Rook looked around, “Treatment?” Flek nodded, “You were injected with a suppression drug. Basically, it removes any kind of mind control or birthing capabilities that the Dark Gift grants. It also keeps your dietary requirements in check.” Rook looked at his arm which was in a restraint. “What will happen to me now?” he asked.

Oddey · #47 12-14-2009, 10:15 AM

Restraints? Side-effects are probrably on the way...

AlexFili · #48 12-14-2009, 10:51 AM

Chapter 14 has a helluva ending. Thanks Oddey, your comments are very much appreciated. You too Slig75 and Enchilado.

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Chapter 14: Offspring

Flek looked down at him. “That’s up to you.” Rook waited for Flek to continue. Flek started speaking again, “You have a choice. Because you were lucky enough to survive the initial conversion, you are faced with a possible benefit to all of this.” Flek sat down. “You may be surprised to find out that you are not the only prison officer with a Dark Gift. In fact, there is at least one Dark Gift Slig who is with the black caps. The black caps are the elite prison guards, as you may already be aware of.”

Rook looked at Flek again, “How does the black cap officer cope with the Dark Gift?” Flek smiled, “The same way you’re coping now Rook, with suppressants. Taken weekly, these will keep your condition in check. In return, you have all the benefits of a Dark Gift victim, without all the… complications.” Flek pointed to his mouth, to remind Rook about the birthing.

Rook looked a bit crestfallen, “And the eggs? Did you break them all?” Flek looked back at Rook, “Two of them are broken. One egg however we left.” Rook looked surprised, “You left it?” Flek nodded, “We carried out some initial tests on the egg and there is some good news. It’s an unborn Sliglet. He’s yours.”

Slig75 · #49 12-14-2009, 01:15 PM

Good chapters

enchilado · #50 12-14-2009, 06:23 PM

Very good

AlexFili · #51 12-14-2009, 11:30 PM

I think Chapter 15 has the best twist ending I've ever written. Let's know what you're thinking Oddey!

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Chapter 15: Prodigy

Rook was surprised, yet again. “A Sliglet? My Sliglet?” Flek nodded. “His genetic material is ninety percent of your own. The other ten percent is random, those genes are from the Dark Wing itself.” Rook looked at Flek, “Will it lead a normal life?” Flek nodded once more, “It will be just like a normal Slig, but slightly better overall. Faster, stronger, more intelligent. He won’t need the suppressant like you either.”

Flek smiled, “Rook, you’ve become quite a popular Slig. The downside to all of this would be that you’ll have to accept some more risky missions. To cope with your increased ego.” Flek chuckled, even Rook joined in. Rook waited before speaking again, “Will I lead a normal life?”. Flek looked at Rook, “Yes. Besides the suppressants and the extra benefits of being a Dark Gift victim, you’re a perfectly normal Slig.” Flek turned to face the wall, “Not only that, you’re a dear friend of mine too.” Flek let a single tear fall down his mask, before he wiped it and turned around.

Rook smiled as Flek took off the restraints. “One more question Flek, where will my son grow up?” Flek looked at Rook, “He will be assigned to grow up in one of the Sliggies Academies. When he’s of age, he will be recruited to join the Keeya prison guard. Just like his father. You will be introduced and you will be one of a kind.”

Rook smiled, “Thanks Flek.” Rook pointed his gun at Flek, “By the way, you forgot to take this away from me”.

Slig75 · #52 12-15-2009, 07:29 AM

Good chapter

AlexFili · #53 12-15-2009, 09:12 AM

I wonder where Oddey's gone?

Oddey · #54 12-16-2009, 04:34 AM

I apologize most sincerely for the delay. December is a time of great activity for me.

I will say, that I find the idea of a trigger-happy baby quite cute in a sort of strange way. Stroke of genius, if I do say so myself. Very sweet as well. Now, we just have to wait for the sequel to a sequel, Prison OtherSide: Little Rookie. I'm assuming this is a finale, which is a very nice one with a good twist.

AlexFili · #55 12-16-2009, 07:41 AM

Usually I keep my stories to 20 chapters long. At the moment I'm not sure how far I will go, but 20 is looking like the most logical number of chapters to use. Thanks for all the comments so far, keep up the good work! As for a spin-off, that could work nicely. It would be nice to write a really good Slig training story.

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Chapter 16: Queck’s Message

Flek laughed, “There are two good reasons you still have your gun my friend. One, you were tied up...” Flek moved to Rook and looked directly into the barrel of the gun. “… and secondly, there is no ammo in that gun, Rook.” Rook smiled, “You’re right Flek.”

With that, Rook leapt out off the table and gave Flek the tightest hug that any Slig has ever given to another Slig. Flek laughed again, Rook joined in. Soon they were both laughing and rolling on the floor. Just goes to show doesn’t it? Even guards have a sense of humor. Most of the time…

Flek and Rook left the room. Flek handed Rook a piece of paper. “Queck left this important message for you.” Rook took the piece of paper and read the note. “Hi Rook. I am glad that you are okay.” Rook looked puzzled at Flek, who smiled. “Turn it over Rook”. Rook turned over the piece of paper. “PS. You owe me a beer.” At first Rook didn’t react, he looked at Flek. Flek was suppressing a laugh. Rook too was trying his hardest to not laugh, but he failed miserably. Both of them were soon chuckling and then they both broke out into the biggest fit of giggles ever.

Slig75 · #56 12-16-2009, 11:59 AM

Good chapter

enchilado · #57 12-16-2009, 05:32 PM

Good chapter

AlexFili · #58 12-17-2009, 12:13 AM

I wasn't sure if I made it a bit too silly, but I think the humor balances out the emotions of the previous few chapters.

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Chapter 17: Recovery

Rook’s life returned to normality. He returned to his regular daily routine with little fuss. When he went into the dormitory that night, everyone was happy to welcome him back and talk to him again. They stayed up late and chatted to him about all that he missed while he was away. Queck and Karbo were especially glad to see him return.

Rook took his suppressants every morning without fail. His fangs were still visible, but his skin was now much closer to his normal skin-tone. His hunger for meat subsided, but he still liked eating meat every so often. After all the events that happened during the previous month, Rook was finally glad to get back to his normal duties.

Scraper’s influence seemed to be waning. He had failed to send anyone to beat up Rook for a long time. Perhaps the word of Rook being a Dark Gift victim had spread throughout the prisoners? Whatever the cause, Rook was happy for it.

There was still something he had to do though… have a drink with his best friend Queck.

enchilado · #59 12-17-2009, 12:28 AM

Good chapter

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really, though

Oddey · #60 12-17-2009, 06:08 AM

That chapter was a bit sillier than I would have liked.

The next one evens it out a bit.

Scraper's in for a surprise all right.