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CHAPTER 6

TRAVEL, AND OTHER SPEEDY CONCOCTIONS

BANG

Nox awoke with a sudden jerk, to see three sligs standing over him in his cell.

“Whoa!” He yelled, then clutching the top of his head with both hands; dull pain.

Stupid. Don’t yeh remember ya’ got hit over the head?!

“Nox” A deep slig voice said, “No need to panic, we’re here to escort you to the train section of this courthouse.”

Nox peered up at the sligs. He hadn’t seen any of them before, so they couldn’t be the same guards as last time.

“Ok…right” Nox replied sleepily, then swinging his robotic legs off of the board he was lying on, and stood before the sligs, “Lets get on with it then.” He spoke, whilst rubbing his head.

Nox was taken out of his cell, and into the corridor outside of it. The door emitted another sharp bang as it slammed shut.

BANG

Frog marched down the corridor, only in the opposite direction than before, and taken to a tall flight of stairs, this time; no green marble, instead; bare, white concrete. They came to a halt.

“Is it just me, or do these stairs get bigger every time we escort someone up ‘em?” A slig voice whined from behind Nox.

“Yeah, its just you.” A second slig chuckled to Nox’s left.

“Come on you two! We’re gonna’ miss the train at this rate!” The deep-voiced slig spoke to Nox’s right.

A couple of sighs, then a trek up the staircase. Nox had to admit to himself, it was pretty tiring climbing them stairs.

Phew…fuck me! Them…them stairs are much too big…

Get over it! jeez…

They reached the top, with considerably less energy than when they began.

“Fuck…sake…” One of the sligs panted.

Nox looked on, to see a small, deserted train platform: wooden, warped benches and old peeling posters on the walls. A large, iron clock was fixed into the metal framework of the shelter up above, it read 7:02 pm, to Nox’s surprise; he’d been asleep nearly all day!

Bad dreams, bad dreams…

The train line stood close to the platform itself, and the air was unusually fresh and good, and Nox felt, all of a sudden, relaxed. The view from the concrete platform was bleak: it surveyed the dark-blue, tiled rooftops of the courthouse, and the sky was grey and cold.

“Can I give you lads a message for someone in Slig Barracks?” Nox questioned hopefully.

What? Stollin and Wrask?

The deep-voiced slig had seen this before, proving so by leaning on one hip in an annoyed fashion, baton clinking against his robotic legs whilst dangling from the sligs belt.

“Look ‘ere sonny, we’ve got no time for games. You ‘aint gettin’ no message. Look,” He pointed up the train line to a fast approaching train, “The train’s already here.”

“Shit.” Nox sighed, slumping slightly.

Suddenly, one of the sligs gave Nox a hard pat on the back from behind, taking him by surprise.

“Don’t worry pal. You might be able to get one at Sronti’s.” One of the sligs comforted, uncharacteristically.

“Yeah! Yeah, they’ll let you at Sronti’s!” The other slig chirruped in.

Nox highly doubted.

The train was noisily smoking to a stop by now, and Nox could see the black, heavy iron plating covering the hull. Stained with some patches of light rust, and greased up with thick, industrial oil, the train looked quite opposing, and certainly should have been in this instance; this would be the train that took him to Sronti’s Prison…quite possibly the last journey he ever made, if things didn’t go well there.

The shutter-doors on all six carriages rolled open with a loud rattle, and the captain of the train stepped out of the cabin, wearing a black & white pinstriped flat cap, and thick, elum-skin gloves.

“Phew!” He whooped, wiping his gloved hands on himself, leaving dirty smears. “I tell yeh boys, that cabin sure does get hot when you’ve been driving for three hours straight! Phew!”

“I’m sure, Bill.” Replied the deep-voiced slig, “And now you’ve gotta’ go all the way back with this one.” He indicated at Nox.

The train driver, Bill, peered at Nox, seeming to be almost blind.

“Oh yeah, I see ‘im.” He said, not giving up his bent over form in Nox’s direction, staring.

“Anyway Bill, we’ve got some business to discuss. Shall we?” The deep-voiced slig stretched his arm out in front of him, inviting Bill to a private chat.

The last words Nox heard from the two before they hushed was “Now, you know that package I asked you to get? Well…”

“Oh,” One of the other sligs said with a humph, “He’s doin’ his ‘dirty dealings’ again.”

“What about that message?” Nox asked slyly.

“No.” Was his flat reply.

Don’t take this shit Nox! ‘Ave ‘em! Heh heh, ‘ave ‘em all!…

A few moments later, the two sligs finished their conversation and proceeded to usher Nox into the first, grubby carriage behind the trains cabin, then slamming shut the shutter-doors. A dull light bulb flickered on above Nox.

That’s it now Nox’y! Good ol’ prison!

The carriage had no windows and smelled strongly of oil, but was surprisingly un-greasy. A door to the neighboring carriage was to Nox’s left, and a small stack of three wooden pallets lay in the corner to Nox’s right, with a cloth sack sitting next to them. The train’s horn blew, and the carriage itself rocked forward, soon settling into a steady swing as the train gathered speed.

With nothing else to do to pass the time, Nox carefully made his way over to the stack of pallets, looking closely at a red spray mark on the side of each one: SLOG PELLETS – SLOG HUT No: X-20 069. The sack also had a spray mark on it, this time black: FEECO DEPOT – CRANKSHAFT PARTS. Nox picked the cloth sack up and gave it a shake. There was a jingle, proving that some parts were still in the bag.

Growing bored of the ‘crankshaft parts’ sack, Nox tried the door, to no avail. Locked.

“Well this is gonna’ be boring.” Nox grumbled to himself.

Your tellin’ me! Nothin’ but you for three hours! Kill me now!!

Ditto.

The hours passed frustratingly slowly, and Nox eventually arrived at his destined destination; Sronti’s prison. A large detention center notorious for its prisoner riots and zero tolerance attitude carried by the guards, but most of all, notorious for the fact that it was a mixed prison, and few of its kind, letting sligs and mudokons in together to serve sentences, and sometimes even share cells. Of course, not all sligs that ‘misbehaved’ were lucky enough to get sent to a prison, some were sent to the dreaded Skillya. The end was nigh for those poor souls who were…

Nox felt the train come to a squeaky stop, and the shutter-doors rattled open once more. Light blinded Nox briefly, and he had to squint to see for a few seconds, before his eyes justified themselves. Getting up from the corner he was slumped in, he ventured outside, onto the station.

“End o’ the line!” Yelled the train captain, already out of his cabin and standing crookedly on the concrete floor of the station, even grubbier than before. “C’mon! I haven’t got all fucking day!!” He yelled again, clearly flustered.

“Hey! I’m the one goin’ to prison! Not you!” Nox snapped sharply, putting the old train driver back in his low, low place.

At this moment, Nox noticed four sligs making their way up the stairs towards him. Nox could only see their heads at this time, wearing officer caps, but knew they were coming for him. He’d already had enough for one day, and wasn’t thinking of doing anything rash.

The train station was a lot like the other, almost identical in fact. Apart from the peeling, water-stained posters on the walls were now monochrome slogans: PRISONER TODAY, DEAD TOMORROW, THINK!…ALL RIOTS ARE TURNED AGAINST THEIR CREATORS…JUST SERVE YOUR TIME, AND GET OUT LEGALLY! Etc…

“Prisoner!” Barked a slig in Nox’s direction. He turned towards the four sligs.

“Yeah?”

“This way. No funny stuff! I clock off in two hours and I don’t want you givin’ me shit.” The same slig said sternly.

Nox obediently made his way towards them, sneaking a peek up above at the clock for the time. 10:11 pm. As he got closer, he noticed the sligs didn’t just have batons hanging from their belt, but pistols also.

This is a bit heavyweight…but its gonna’ be fun! Heh heh…

Nox, once again, was escorted down concrete stairs, and down a corridor similar to the last one, but instead of a large courtroom being stationed at the other end of the corridor, an even larger, and taller, hall with barred cells lining the green walls, took its place. Metal stairs led up to the second and third levels of cells, and Nox was taken to the second floor, whilst imprisoned sligs and mudokons made whooping sounds and shouted random insults. As he was shoved into an empty cell with a double bunk bed, sink and toilet, one of the guards whispered into his ear.

“Your gonna’ love it here, newbie.”

And then Nox’s amazing journey was over. It ended in a dirty prison, in a cramped, cold cell with a hard bed and stained sink, joined by an undignified shitter. Well…it may of done in anyone else’s case, but in Nox’s, no. it did not end there. Some sligs give in, others fight. And it was obvious what Nox was.

The first night in that cell was pretty hard, and was for anyone that was new to the place. The prisoners goading newbie’s to breakdown or snap didn’t help either, but all newbie’s had to be cut down to size, no matter who they were. Not that it was right, but it sure did happen anyway.

Nox fell into an uneasy sleep, this time not dreaming. It would seem Nox was already living the nightmare in his waking hours anyway. This, could be perceived as a ‘hidden blessing’. Not much of one by anyone’s standards.

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tar AlexFili. that last chapter was a bit boring i know but it had to be done. anyway, back to Nox.
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CHAPTER 7

JAILBIRD

Pain…

Twinge of pain…

Sharp pain…

Stabbing pain…

Eventually, Nox’s stomach woke its master, reminding him undoubtedly that he hadn’t eaten anything for a day and a half.

“Arrrgh”, Nox groaned, soon realizing he was in prison, on the first day of his sentence. At least his head was much better now, but his stomach still felt painful. Not just hunger pains. Something else…

Nox cocked his head down towards his own stomach, whilst lying on the bottom hard bunk.

“Bloody hell…” Nox mumbled. Big blue and black bruising covered his stomach and bottom of his chest, from where he had been struck with a slig guard’s baton. Nox just hoped there wasn’t any broken bones.

He rolled painfully out of bed, and peered through the bars of his cell, looking into the row of cells adjacent to him. That’s when he noticed the clothing the prisoners were wearing. A mudokon standing idly in his cell, with his hands around the bars, was wearing typical black & white striped trousers and shirt, whilst a slig in the next cell (sitting on the edge of his bunk, smoking a cigarette) only wore the striped shirt. His robotic legs would tear any clothing, obviously.

Wonder when you’ll get your clothing?

Yeah, then you’ll be a REAL criminal! Eh Nox’y? heh heh, eh Nox’y noo! You’ll be the best of the best, wont ya’ Nox’y!!

“Shut up.” Nox muttered to himself.

A loud, echoing clang. The barred cell doors rolled open, as did all the others in the cell-lined hall. Inmates walked out of their cells to join others, and made their way down the metal stairway situated in the center of the hall, to the ground floor. Then sitting on wooden chairs at cheap, fold-away tables that Corrections Officer sligs (CO’s) had set up for breakfast. The only thing that told CO’s apart from slig inmates was the fact that they didn’t wear prisoner shirts, and that they all wore officer caps.

Nox made his way out of his cell, joining the huddle of inmates swarming around the stairway. He kept to the back, behind everyone; he didn’t want to be shivved just yet. During this thought, a slig inmate noticed Nox lingering behind them, and spoke to him.

“Alright mate?” The wiry old slig said to Nox, “I see yer new here, not got the old prisoner shirt on just yet, heh heh.”

“Err…no, that’s right, not quite yet.” Nox replied warily.

The wiry slig held back from the rest of the mixed inmates, so as to speak to Nox in a more relaxed manner, rather than directly.

“You know, newbies usually last longer in here when they mix with us scumbags straight away.” The inmate said solemnly, “You wanna’ make friends fast in here, its not a nice place – but hey! What can I say? I’ve learnt all my best manners in here!” He joked, giving Nox a sideways glance to see his reaction.

Nox relaxed slightly, and laughed, “Yeah, same here, except my manners were part of Slig Barracks doing.”

“Oh, you’re a soldier lad are yeh? Mmm…”

“What?”

“I wondered what that tattoo on your arm was, but now I know. Let me be the first to say, ‘welcome!’” The wiry slig finished with a dirty laugh, and held his hand out to Nox, who shook it quite readily.

“Names Glon.”

“Oh, Nox.”

First friend.

Aww, how nice. Get a fuckin’ grip kiddo! We’re not here to make friends! We’re here to HAVE FUN!! Heh heh heh…

Nox and his newfound friend made their way down the stairs with the others, soon sitting at a random table.

“In here,” Glon began, “They wheel the meals out on a trolley, and they serve it on your tray and give it yeh without you even having to stand up! Now that’s service! Ey?” Another dirty laugh.

A bulky mudokon approached the table Glon and Nox were sat at, taking a seat next to Glon, while eyeing up Nox carefully.

“Who’s this?” He asked.

“Now now Billy,” Glon eased, “This is Nox. He’s a friend of mine, the one that came in last night.”

“Oh!” The strong-looking mudokon exclaimed, switching off his defensive stance, “I remember! Last night?”

“Yeah Billy, last night.” Glon repeated with a slight shake of his head in annoyance.

“I SAW YOU!!” The mudokon yelled at Nox with a huge grin on his lips, suddenly standing over six feet tall with a scrape of his chair. Glon immediately intervened.

Fuck! He’s nuts!

Nox slid his chair back slightly from the display before him.

“Billy, come on now!” Glon whispered hoarsely, whilst pushing the large mudokon back into his seat, scanning the hall wildly to check if anyone was looking, “Your gettin’ excited! Bloody calm the fuck down!!”

“Sorry…sorry.” Billy replies sulkily.

Glon gestured Nox to lean towards him for something secret to share, and Nox obliged by leaning inwards also. Glon placed his hand next to his face on Billy’s side, and whispered.

“Billy’s a bit…you know…funny upstairs…a few fingers short of a Paramite Pie, if yeh catch me drift. That’s why they call him Billy the ‘bull-scrab’, ‘cus when he gets angry with summat there’s no stoppin’ him. I like to keep him close for that reason, a bit o’ protection.”

“I see.” Nox replied, nearly made speechless from the set of random events that had just taken place so briskly.

The food trolley wheeled in from a doorway at the opposite end of the hall that Nox had entered through the day before. Mudokons, supervised by slig CO’s, began dishing out dark coloured mush onto food trays and giving them to inmates.

“Ah,” Glon let out, looking at the food trolley, “There’s nothin’ like minced fleech first thing in the morning!”

Nox assumed he was joking, and braced himself.

Dirty bastards! That’s vile!

Soon enough, one of the mudokons working the food trolley came over to their table, giving Glon and Nox a tray each, then coming back to give Billy his share. A tin bowl full of grey-green mush was upon Nox’s tray, along with a bent up spoon. Billy immediately began his breakfast, much in contrast to Nox. If the food wasn’t enough o put you off eating, Billy certainly was.

“Whats this?” Nox asked Glon, whilst letting a spoonful of the stuff plop back into the bowl.

“I told yeh, minced fleech. Why? Think I was joking?”

Nox looked at Glon, then they both looked at Billy as he finished off his last spoonful. He noticed the two looking at him, and swallowed.

“You gonna’ eat that?” He asked Glon.

“The hell I am!” He replied, then tucking in, but more cautiously.

“What about you?” He questioned Nox.

Sharp pain…

Remembering he was no use dead and he needed to eat, he reluctantly replied, “Yeah, I spose I’m gonna’ have to eat it.”

A sulky expression.

Then someone else slammed their tray down next to Nox. It was a slig inmate.

“Mornin’ all!” He yelled.

“For fuck sake!” Glon scoffed whilst looking over both shoulders, “You wanna’ grab everyone’s attention?!”

The slig put a hand on Nox’s shoulder and said loudly, “You’ll have to excuse my friend Glon here, but he has clinical paranoia.” Finishing with a laugh. Billy didn’t abide.

“Stop it! Stop it! -”

“Yeah yeah Billy, ‘leave Glon alone’, fine!” The slig mimicked, making Glon smirk and Billy scowl.

Feeling at ease, Nox decided to take the first step for once, and held his hand out to the new slig.

“Names Nox.”

“Ah, a fellow slig with manners! Mines Rowl.” And he shook his hand.

Nox began to swallow the tasteless gunk when Rowl said,

“Fuck me, Billy! You eat your already? Again?! Jeez!” Then starting his own breakfast.

Glon had finished his by now, and the old slig proceeded to tell Rowl, the young and troublesome slig, how Nox was a war veteran.

“Are ya’ now? Well I’ll be damned!”

“HA HA, you said ‘damn’!” Billy interrupted with a chortle.

“Oh yeah Nox,” Rowl continued, “Billy here is a little potty.”

“Yeah, Glon told me.” Nox finished.

Rowl then began to taunt Billy, but in a way that Billy wouldn’t know he was being taunted.

“Your mad ‘aint ya’ Billy! Billy-boo! Nutty Billy-boo! Heh heh, mad mad mad, Bill Billy-boo!”

After every mention of his name, Billy laughed like a dopey child, clearly amused, but mentally disturbed. It would seem he acted at a low mental age, around that of a mudokon child. Rowl was being cruel, but Billy knew non the wiser anyway.

Nox finished his tin bowl of gloop, and their trays were taken from them. That’s when Nox noticed a ruckus in the corner of the hall. A mudokon was standing next to a table with his metal tray in his hands, trying to hold off three slig CO’s, wielding his tray as a weapon.

“Just calm down Bor! No one is going to hurt you, you and your pals are going to be just fine!” One slig CO carefully worded, edging closer to the crazed mudokon.

“No…n-n-n-n-no!” The mud stuttered, looking wildly around him. He lashed out with his tray, hitting the closest slig CO around the face with a metallic twang, letting the slig spin on the spot and fall to the ground, unconscious. The other two sligs pulled out their batons and moved in swiftly towards the mudokon.

The mud used his now bent tray, to jab one CO in the visor with the edge of it, and then throw the tray at the other slig CO, attempting to make his escape whilst everyone in the hall just watched. Two more sligs ran out of the corridor that Nox had walked down the day before, and bumped into the mud unexpectedly, their batons at the ready.

A baton whistled its way towards the loopy mudokons jaw, and he was out for the count. The madness was over as quickly as it had started. The two sligs in the corridor dragged the mudokon into a room from the corridor, out of sight, and the slig CO that had been jabbed in the visor was lucky enough to escape with just a scratched lens, whilst the knocked out slig CO was picked up by two mudokons working for the CO’s, and also carried off to a room off of the corridor.

“Well,” Glon began, turning back to Nox, Rowl and Billy, “That was fun!” He chuckled.

“Steady there old slig,” Rowl joked, “You might ‘ave heart attack.”

The group of them laughed a little, settling in to the fact that Nox was now part of their ‘gang’, their attitude currently being, ‘the more the merrier’, or more realistically, ‘safety in numbers’. Either way, Now was now part of a gang, and he would have to pay his due.

Nox tried to feel eased, like the others clearly were, but couldn’t help the fact that they had just witnessed a fight, and the inmate that had started it was now in a room out of sight. His capturers knowing they could do anything they liked to him now. Such is prison life.

You need to get used to not holding on to the past Nox, or you ‘aint gonna’ last in here.

It was one of the few things Nox knew the voice was right about.

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Wicked. Can't wait to see if Nox managed to escape. I quite like these prison dramas, my favorites are; Shawshank Redemption, The Green Mile, Prisonbreak, Riddick: Butcher Bay... I guess it's a glimpse of life that we don't normally see. Excellent work with the characters so far, I wonder if Nox will be given something to stop the voices?
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oh i cant beleive you just said that list of films! they're in my list of films to watch before you die!

i spose i like prison dramas as well. and that bit where the captain of the guards beats that fat geezer to death in shawshank redemption. i found that quite disturbing when i frist watched it. its violence like that that fuels my imagination for sligs fighting in my story.
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Yeah, It's strange how prison life almost becomes a ritual... like how they treat newbies and the kind of things that go on in prison. In Butcher Bay, most of the downtime is Riddick beating up Prisoners and doing deals with them... meanwhile the officers turn a blind eye, some of them even do deals with you. It's very surreal and quite strange. The whole 'prison gang' thing is quite weird as well. Some of the prison gangs have more power than some of the officers... Freaky...

Overall, it makes me definately not want to go to prison. When you look at Morgan Freeman's character at the end of the Shawshank film, you can see that he is a broken man with absolutely no prospects of getting a normal job or anything like that. The ending is quite nice though. I like how that guy managed to escape as well, I love it when they explain how their plan worked.

Oh yeah I totally forgot another good movie; The Count of Monte Cristo. It had the late Richard Harris, and it was about being in total isolation in a cramped cell. Then the two prisoners meet up and teach each other and help each other try and escape.

Glory Slig is a good story in general, I quite like the flashback to the pub as well. It's great to revisit old locations that the character mentioned. Keep up the good work
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Ive not seen the count of monte cristo, but i think its a real shame how brookes in shawshank hangs himself, but thats how it goes when you spend the majority of your life in prison. They learn to survive, but then cant readjust.
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CHAPTER 8

PRISON PERSECUTION

The rest of Nox’s day was pretty eventful, as it always was for newcomers of prison life, and Nox understood that mudokon inmates stuck to their own kind, and vice versa for the sligs. Billy the ‘bull-scrab’ was the only exception, but he had a mental age of a child, so he hardly understood it all anyway. He was just very protective of Glon.

Rowl and Glon told Nox all this after breakfast, at exactly 08:44 am, according to Nox’s watch. They left the hall through the door at the opposite end of the hall that Nox had entered from the previous day, and walked out into the sunshine.

“This is the yard.” Rowl informed, as they all took in the view from the outdoors.

Nox could see a very formidable wire mesh fence, standing eight feet tall and topped with coiled razor wire. A couple of sentry towers made from logs of wood stood at either end of the yard, standing on the dusty, bare ground.

“Don’t even think of escaping out here,” Glon warned Nox, “You see them guards up in them towers?”

Nox looked up at them to see a couple of slig silhouettes, rifles loaded and ready to go.

“Them bastards will shoot yeh down before you even make it to the top o’ the fence. I know, I’ve seen it happen.” Glon mentioned in a serious tone.

“I saw it happen too!” Billy noted in contrast with Glon’s tone. Then forming a grimace. “There was lots of blood. Urgh, blood blood blood. Spraying it was.” Billy seemed lost in his own world for a moment, before Rowl began clicking his fingers.

“Hello? Come back to Oddworld, Billy!”

“Yuck!” Billy finished, un-phased by Rowl’s incessant clicking.

“Another thing,” Glon mentioned, “We like stickin’ together in here. Sligs with sligs, muds with muds. We don’t like mixin’ ‘em up, Billy here is a different sorta thing though, but usually, muds hate the sligs, and same goes for us. I’m just tellin’ ya’ in case yeh find yerself in a room fulla muds.” Glon then leaned in closer to Nox, “Just don’t trust ‘em!”

many of the inmates were leaving the hall now, and coming outside into the yard. Gangs took up their different loitering places, and so did the gang Nox was in. just underneath one of the sentry towers, they lingered in the shade; Billy leaning his massive frame against the logs of wood that made the base of the tower, his eyes closed, Rowl on his back on the dusty earth, sleeping, and Glon sitting against the tower, picking dirt from his fingernails, whilst keeping an eye on everyone in the yard. Nox was taking it easy also, but was interrupted by someone clearing their throat.

Nox looked up to see a slig CO standing before him, truncheon dangling from his belt and chunky-looking pistol sealed in its holster on the slig’s hip.

“Your clothes are in ya’ cell, newbie.”

Rowl woke with a jump, taking the CO by surprise, Nox noticing his hand reach cautiously to his baton.

“Whoa!” Rowl emitted, “I didn’t see yeh there, sir.”

“Whatever dip-shit.” The slig CO answered spitefully.

“Leave him awone!” Billy bumbled, standing over the slig CO, oblivious to his mispronunciation.

“Don’t make me do this shit-face!” The CO said whilst pulling his truncheon off his belt, obviously wanting to fight.

“Alright alright!” Nox said as he stood, “I’ll go get my stuff.”

The CO laughed mockingly, and replaced his baton on his belt.

“Come with me.”

Nox obligated.

He followed the CO through the yard, receiving threatening glances from various slig and mudokon gangs hanging around. Into the hall, and the cool air, up the metal stairway, to the second floor. Then towards his cell. Nox noticed the black & white striped shirt folded neatly on his bottom bunk when he reached his cell, and put it on. It felt slightly itchy and worn. Probably because it had been worn by hundreds of other criminals before Nox.

Just think about it Nox, all those evil beings, murderers, burglars, petty thieves, thugs, molesterer’s, sicko’s, muggers, evil bastards, violent scumbags, treacherous swines! All of ‘em, every single man jack of ‘em! They all wore it before you Nox’y! they all sweated in it, thought their own little twisted thoughts in it, all of ‘em! Heh heh, that’s right Nox! Every single fucking one!!

I don’t give a shit!” Nox shouted aloud accidentally, immediately looking at the confused expression on the slig CO’s face.

“What?”

“Its nothin’, just me…not concentrating.”

“Whatever.” The slig said once again, passively, “Look,” He began, rubbing his visor in a troubled fashion, “Don’t think I’d care if I found you hung in here tomorrow mornin’ or dead in the yard in the next ten minutes, but you’re a slig, and I cant ignore the fact.”

He walked close to Nox, and muttered quietly, “I don’t like you mixin’ with that gang your in, none of the CO’s do. That mud, he ‘aint right in the head, and all muds are theivin’ scum. Mix with another gang, one that likes stickin’ muds and shit like that, and if you get a chance, stick one for me, eh?” He slapped Nox on the shouder, in an attempt to be friendly, “We’ll turn a blind eye to it every now an’ then. You know, just…don’t be mixin’ with them weirdo mud-lovers –”

“They don’t love muds!” Nox butted in, feeling irritated by the sligs ignorance, “Billy’s a different matter, any other mud would like to kill one of my mates nearly as much as they’d like to kill you!”

The slig CO gave Nox a sharp look.

“You threatenin’ me boy?!”

“I ‘aint threatening yeh, and I ‘aint no boy. Why don’t you tootle off and help your muds make dinner.” Nox couldn’t help it, and laughed in his face. He knew he’d gone a step too far.

“That’s it!” The CO began, “You’ve made a fucking powerful enemy my boy!” He pulled out his truncheon and pointed it at Nox whilst backing out of his cell, “You’ve got one foot in the grave, sonny! Watch ya’ back, ‘cus I certainly will be.” And in a moment, he was gone, to pursue whatever duties he had.

You’ve done it again!

Nox let out a long and deep sigh, one that only a slig as troubled and in as much danger as Nox was would ever be able to emit. Then, striving to keep control of himself, he broke down slightly, if that’s possible, and wept in well deserved self pity.

You disgust me…

♠♠♠♠♠

Nox was lying on his bunk when he heard a CO blow his whistle, and he looked at his watch, 12:31 pm.

Must be dinner.

Shift yer arse Nox! Might miss another fight!

He hadn’t moved from within his cell since his little chat with CO ‘shit-face’, and continued to lie on his bunk regardless. After a while, he heard a CO yell up from the ground floor of the hall.

“Come on suckers! Don’t wanna’ miss dinner now!”

Nox thought better of it, along with a few other inmates in a similar situation to Nox, and trudged out of his cell and down the metal stairway, sitting at a table on his own. Nox was given a tray with a tin plate and another spoon (not daring to give inmates potential weapons), a lump of cooked meat lay upon his plate, along with grey mush. Then Nox noticed something; a sligs hand waving at him a few tables away. Realization: Rowl and the group. Nox obediently joined them at their table.

“Where yeh been all day?” Rowl questioned.

“Oh, you know…gettin’ used to my cell.” Nox lied.

“We thought a group o’ muds had done you over or something!” Glon spat with a mouthful of half chewed meat, concerned.

“You know,” Said Rowl, “If a person says on their first day of prison life, ‘I was getting used to my cell’, they’re usually lying.” Rowl was clearly cleverer than he looked.

Nox just looked at him, not wanting to talk about it. He took the hint.

“What do we have here then?” Rowl started whilst picking up the meat with his spoon, changing the subject.

Glon glanced at him. Billy didn’t have a clue what was going on anyway, he was just trying to shove as much meat and mush into his mouth without choking.

“Scrab meat and processed slurg.” Glon informed.

“Whoa! You sure know your food, old slig!” Rowl laughed.

“Ah, can it.” He replied, scooping up some mush and eating it.

“Do ya’ think if I take this back and ask for my scrab meat rare, they’ll do it?” Questioned Nox jokingly, his mood lifting.

“Heh heh, yeh can try!” Glon joined in.

“I bet they have better meat than this outside!” Billy spoke, unusually, clattering his spoon down onto his empty plate.

Nox began his meal, eating the chewy meat first, then starting the slurg mush. Suddenly, a revelation came about Nox, and he felt he had to share it with his friends as soon as possible. This very second. He spat his mush back onto his plate and blurted;

“We could escape!”

Glon spat out his food also, and Rowl choked on the last bit of meat in his mouth, both recovered to say simultaneously: “What?!” Billy stared at Nox.

There was silence for a few sconds, before Billy broke it, starting to guffaw. Then the others joined in, hoping Nox was joking. He was far from it.

“I’m not joking.” Nox counteracted.

“Listen Nox,” Rowl intervened, “First things first: you’ve not even been here a day an’ your talkin’ about escaping! Secondly: Billy and Glon have been here longer than I have! We’re talkin’ three years for Glon, and ten fuckin’ years for Billy! It’d be like takin’ a slog out into the wilderness when its been livin’ in the factory for half its life; it wouldn’t know where to begin! And thirdly: it’s impossible!!”

“Hang on, hang on. You’ve got a point there Rowl,” Glon said, looking down in concentration and pointing his hands in Rowl’s direction, “But…I’ve got another two years on my sentence, and…I don’t wanna’ stay here a day more than necessary. I don’t even know if I’m gonna’ make it out of here alive! I could get shivved tomorrow, next week, next year! I’m fed up of havin’ to look over my shoulder. I might not even get shivved! I might just cark it tonight! My heart just…give up on me! I’m old, after all.”

“Look, don’t say that Glon,” Rowl said, concern in his voice, “Your not gonna’ get shivved or have heart attack, that’s your paranoia talkin’!”

“I’m not soddin’ paranoid!” Glon dismissed frustratingly.

“Don’t argue!” Billy added.

Thinking along the same lines, Nox interrupted, “Ok ok, lets take it somewhere more private.” Noticing a couple of mudokons and sligs looking over at their table. None, luckily, CO’s.

They stood, leaving their empty plates on the trays at the table, and Nox followed them to a cell on the ground floor, where a stranger mudokon lay on the top bunk.

“Oi.” Rowl spoke, sounding tired.

The mudokon inmate sat up, alarmed.

“Beat it.” Rowl said, with more authority this time.

The mudokon did as he was told and left the cell, his head bowed. Nox assumed this was Rowl’s cell.

“That was Ilon, Nox, he’s my cell mate.” Rowl told Nox, “Cowardly bastard, type that would stab yeh in the back for a shot o’ some Vykker drugs.”

Rowl sat on the bottom bunk, whilst Nox displayed a surprised expression. Billy stood by the barred cell door, apparently keeping watch.

“Yeah,” Rowl said, noticing his expression, “He’s a proper druggie. Vykkers Labs born an’ bred. Dirty, thievin’ sod.”

Nox felt outraged at Rowl for uttering such a comment. Such an ignorant comment. And in front of Billy of all people. Well, not that bad; he wasn’t listening, but still.

Let go…

Nox had to withstand the simple, sometimes over simplified, way of things in prison. If it’s a mud, it’ll stay to its own kind, if it’s a slig, it’ll make its own little gang, but still be against you. Same for other muds too. Everyone was fighting everyone in prison, and the whole process was watched and sometimes goaded by its overseers; the CO’s. a small, sick game, owned and run by Sronti, the glukkon boss of the whole prison.

Wakey wakey Nox! Losing your trail of thought again!

“Well, if we’re gonna’ do it, how we gonna’ do it?” Glon spoke, sitting next to Rowl on his bottom bunk.

“Hang on! Who said we were gonna’ do it anyway?” Rowl started, soon giving in. “Oh bugger it.”

Pleased with himself, Glon asked again, this time directed at Nox, “Well…how?”

“I’m not sure, I’ve not thought that far ahead.”

“Tunnel?” Rowl asked.

“Ay?! Tunnel?” Glon began, savouring the chance to take the piss out of Rowl whilst his subject put his head in his hands, realizing he’d just opened a whole tin of worms. “Where could we get the tools? How do we keep them hidden? How do we tunnel without drawing attention? And last but certainly not bloody least, where the hell would we tunnel?!”

“Alright, it was just a suggestion! Anyway, we don’t have to worry about tools or equipment, I know a slig who can get stuff for us, as long as it’s not too conspicuous. Friends with a CO, yeh see.”

“Well that’s good,” Nox added, “Wire clippers could come in handy.”

“Now your talkin’!” Rowl said.

“Look,” Glon began, “I told yeh, we cant get out via the yard, we’ll just get shot. That’ll be it, game over.”

“They lock it up at night as well. Padlock on the door.” Rowl said, sounding defeated.

“Well…” Nox started, but didn’t finish. He was well and truly bamboozled.

Then, unexpectedly, Billy had something worthwhile to add.

“I can open any padlock.”

Rowl shook his head, “Sure you can.”

“No really!” Glon, Nox and Rowl looked at him, and he proceeded to tell them how he had gained the skill of lock picking. “I used to work in this oil factory, and my friend taught me how to open locks with a nail or needle. You know, something long and thin. We used to break into the food store by doing it,” He gave a little chuckle, as if the old memories brought him joy, and again, he seemed lost in his own world, eyes glazing over. “Until this slig guard shot him. There was blood then, too. I don’t know why, but there was. Whenever there’s blood, someone dies, I think anyway.”

Glon and Rowl looked dumbfounded.

“Why the hell didn’t you tell me that three years ago?!” Glon yelled, Rowl looked astounded. “We could o’ picked some locks ourselves!”

“I didn’t want you to die Glon! I didn’t want you to die! Every time I did it ever since my friend died, I saw blood! And every time I see blood, someone dies!”

Nox suddenly understood. The mind is such a fragile, yet hardy, piece of work. Once something terrible happens to it, either by witnessing something terrible, or experiencing it firsthand, it then relates whatever tasks were being planned or acted out at the time with the terrible experience. And so, with a mind like Billy’s; so simple, it would translate the act taking place or perceived at the time directly with the horror. Therefore, never wanting to do that particular act again, in fear of a repletion of the scene.

“I know what you mean, Billy.” Nox comforted.

“Well, the yard would still be suicide, I think.” Rowl said, thinking more realistically.

Suddenly, a slig CO stuck his head around the open door, making Nox jump slightly. He walked in, swinging his baton around by the string lazily.

“Whats goin’ on ‘ere then?”

“No no no, see! I told yeh! Now someones gonna die!” Billy wailed, much to the others dismay.

“What’s he on about?” The CO questioned, ceasing his flailing baton.

“Err, nothing sir. We were just talkin’ about when that chap got shot by the fence. Nasty way to go, don’t yeh think?”

The CO said nothing, and instead turned to Nox.

“I hear you’ve been threatening our staff.”

“Oh no. Look, he was twisting my words around –”

“I couldn’t give a shit less,” The CO interrupted coolly, “If I hear anymore of it, you’ll be the one that gets shot. You hearin’ me sonny?”

That’s when Nox remembered who he was, the stern CO that led him off the train station when he first arrived here.

“I hear you, sir.”

The CO gave Nox one last look, and then walked out of the cell in his own time, swinging his baton around by the string once more.

Glon let out a sigh of relief, “I knew someone was listenin’ to us!”

Rowl seized his chance, “No you never, that was just your fuckin’ paranoia! Jeez!”

“Well I’d say it’s a good job I’m paranoid, because if I had my way, I’d of stopped talking way before he came in!”

“You were meant to be keepin’ a look out anyway!” Realised Rowl, turning to Billy, who hung his head in unnecessary shame.

Nox knew that this escape plan was going to need a lot of careful planning, and even smoother action when the time came. It weren’t going to be easy.

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19 fun filled chapters. i was originally going to write 25 to 30 but by the time i neared the end i thought it might start to drag out a bit (if it hasnt already, HA!).
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In my opinion the series is probably paced quite well. You had conflict in the very first chapter, which is quite a good way of starting a new story. I think the supporting characters work well, especially the more heroic characters.
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CHAPTER 9

BLOODY DEEDS

They spent most of the rest of the day in Rowl’s cell, up until supper, when another array of culinary delights was served up. They ate, talked, and had to cut short their planning when the CO’s ordered all inmates back to their cells for the night. The cell doors locked shut once more. Nox sat up late on his hard bunk, thinking, planning ahead for the big bust. It seemed foolish to Nox when he looked at the plans they had from an outsiders point of view, but what the hell else was there to do?

Who cares if I end up dead anyway? Sure Stollin and Wrask would be shocked, Dran wouldn’t even know who I was by then, and Loke probably wouldn’t give a shit. After all, I did try to kill him, inadvertently. What’s waiting for me back at Slig Barracks? Jack shit, that’s what.

You’re here to live out the day to day life, not career! Stuff your career! That went out the window when you survived the ‘D&M’ war!

Don’t listen to him, Nox’y! Go down fightin’ my son! Start a riot! Kill as many CO’s as possible! Leave a fucking mark!! Heh heh…

Eventually, he drifted off, and was awakened by a whistle blow some hours later.

♠♠♠♠♠

“Breakfast, y’all!” A CO shouted from the ground floor. Another whistle blow.

Nox got up off his bunk, to see the cell doors had already been opened, and so he left his cell and joined the slow-moving huddle around the stairway. Eventually reaching the ground floor of the hall, and sitting at a table, waiting for his fellow inmates, and an unappetizing breakfast. First to sit at his table was Rowl.

“How yeh doin’, Nox? Ready for work?” He greeted.

“Yeah – what?” Nox replied.

“Rowl laughed, “That’s right soldier! Work!”

“Why didn’t we do any yesterday?”

“Ah, well when a new prisoner enters the prison, the place is put on hold the day after, while that lot down there,” He indicated down the corridor Nox had entered the prison facility through when he first arrived, “Sronti, the glukkon boss, and his fellow CO captain of the guards, Rolin, sort out your paperwork. Its only a small prison compared to others. You remember Rolin from yesterday don’t ya’? Nearly caught us planning to escape?”

“Oh yeah. So today’s work as usual?” Nox asked.

“Yup. But it should be easy for you, seeing as you’re a soldier an’ all.”

A mudokon gave Nox and Rowl a tray of breakfast mush each, and returned to the trolley to deliver yet more trays to hungry inmates.

Same shit as the day before.

Glon appeared next to Rowl, and carefully placed his tray on the table whilst sitting down.

“Mornin'.” He muttered.

Rowl started to laugh at the grimace of face-tentacles on Glon’s face.

“What you laughin’ at?” He muttered again.

“I told yeh that shit was strong stuff! He makes it in one of the broken boilers here, sells it to the guards.”

“What stuff?” Nox asked.

“I got Glon here some liquor, that an associate of my associate makes an’ sells to people. Glon gave me two packs of fags to give him! I couldn’t even keep some for myself! I’ve been gaggin’ for one for ages!”

“The hung over Glon rubbed his head and began slowly eating breakfast, “Today of all days for work.” He mumbled.

“Serves ya’ right for not givin’ me a smoke!”

“There bad for yeh health, I was doin’ yeh a favour!” Glon patronized, jokingly.

Billy slammed his tray down onto the table next to Nox, and without saying a word,began wolfing down the mush.

“One day you’ll choke.” Rowl commented. Billy wasn’t listening.

“What work do ya’ do?” Nox questioned, spooning some mush into his mouth.

“Oh you know, not hardcore stuff, just washing laundry, cleaning sheets, sometimes cleaning out the stove the kitchen staff use for cooking. But if you step outta’ line, or a CO takes a particular disliking to yeh, you’ll end up in the chain gang, doin’ nothin’ more than mining useless rock in this mine they got out there. I wasw put there for a week once, ‘cu I cussed a CO. hardest week o’ my life! I can tell yeh that! Just do as they say and don’t get sent down there. Billy was down there for three years! That’s why he’s so…well, big! But he wont say what he did to deserve it.”

“That reminds me,” Glon said, “What did yeh do to end up here?” He aimed at Nox.

“Oh…well I got murder dumped on me.”

“Murder?!” Rowl exclaimed, spitting mush out.

“No, he said it got dumped on ‘im, you know, when they cant be arsed to investigate a crime and bin the sentence on the next criminal they find.” Glon said in a ‘matter-of-fact’ tone.

“Well why the short sentence, Nox?” Rowl asked.

“Well, the judge said there wasn’t enough evidence that said I did it, so I got three months,” Nox didn’t want to mention the fact that he was quite possibly insane, “What did you do anyway, Rowl?”

“Me? Argh, you know, stole this, that, and the other. Then got caught with it in me hands. Three years.”

“Before yeh ask,” Began Glon, “Attempted murder. I was working security by Rupture Farms stockyards actually,” He added, as if old memories had come flooding back, “Yeah, superior officer being a moron, and for trying to kill ‘im I got five years. Don’t bother askin’ Billy. He don’t tell no one. Don’t even know how long he’s got left.”

After breakfast, all the inmates were told to stand in lines in the yard, and were sorted into different working groups for the week. Nox and a few others were set to laundry washing, whilst Glon and Rowl, among others, were set to cleaning out the thick charcoal that had set at the back of the prison stoves, unluckily. Billy and some others were set to ironing sheets.

They were immediately sent to their working positions, and Nox’s group for laundry washing was marched back through the hall and down the other corridor, led by a couple of CO’s, taking the first door on the left. Seven massive vats, more wide than they were tall, were situated in the laundry area, filled with boiling water and industrial strength washing powder, ladders attatched to the sides leading up to a thin walkway around the brim of the vat. They were given a long, thin wooden pole each, and the others began climbing the ladders to the tops of the vats. Nox followed suit.

When Nox reached the top of one of the vats, he saw the other inmates begin poking and swirling around the laundry in the vats, washing them. It didn’t take Nox long to get to grips with it.

Nox worked up until dinner, where he ate alone, seeing as his friends had had dinner early. Nox understood how Glon must have felt constantly, and found it hard not to act paranoid with all the whispering going on around him…at least he thought there was whispering.

Your going loopy Nox! Heh heh, loopy loo Nox’y noo!!

Nox noticed a folded newspaper lying on an unoccupied table next to his, and leant over to pick it up. He scanned the front page of ‘The Daily Deception’ to see that it was a couple of days old, the front page heading; RUPTURE FARMS ALMOST OUT OF BUSINESS! ANIMALS NEARING EXTINCTION! Nox, not caring what was going on in the outside world, simply placed the paper down, and waited.

Soon, dinner was over, and they were led back into the laundry room, to wash yet more bed sheets and pillowcases in vats of boiling water. Then, something terrible happened.

A fight broke out in the laundry room. Nox didn’t know if it was the intense heat of the room, the boredom of the job, or an old grudge, but it happened. Only this time, someone ended up dead.

Nox had been swirling a particularly dirty sheet around in the hot water with his pole, from a distance, when he heard a mudokon shout from the ground floor. He looked down from the top of the vat to see two mudokons circling each other, one with a homemade shiv in his hand, the other had nothing but his fists.

The armed mudokon lunged at the other mud, shiv first, who dodged it and counteracted with a powerful-looking right hook into the other mud’s nose, popping it with a cry. Blood drizzled from his nostrils, and the armed mud slashed in criss-cross style whilst advancing towards his enemy.

By now, a small crowd of mudokon and slig inmates had gathered around the two scrapping mudokons. No one offering help. Only goading, half-chanting ‘Fight! Fight!’.

The unarmed mud backed away from each slash, and dropped to the floor rather athletically, better than any slig could perform, and kicked the mud’s legs hard, forcing him to fall to the ground with a thud. Seizing his chance, the unarmed mudokon crouched over the downed mud, and repeatedly punched him in his bloodied face, grunting with effort, the other mudokon yelping with each blow.

The beaten mudokon gained enough sense during his battering to plunge his sharpened shiv deep into the soft flesh of the attacking mudokon’s belly. Hot blood covered the downed mud, and the other rolled sideways off of him, clutching his stomach, moaning; the homemade shiv still sticking out of his body. The crowd backed away from him, emitting a low gasp at the bloody sight. A pool of blood had already gathered around the stabbed mudokon when the CO’s arrived.

Nox was wrong to think they would bring peace to the situation, and he watched in numb horror as the CO captain, Rolin, pulled out his pistol, pulled back the loading mechanism, put it to the top of the injured mudokon’s head, and pulled the trigger. A sharp bang.

The bullet burrowed its way through the skull of the mud, passed smoothly through the goo of its brain, and burst out the other side, near his neck, with an explosion of splintered bone and bloodied mush that was moments previously a perfectly formed brain. The bullet then hid itself deep in the concrete floor, as it attempting to evade justice for what it had done. The mudokon fell onto its side, and twitched for a few seconds as the crowd of inmates took in the gruesome sight.

Nox had seen sights similar to this during the ‘D&M’ war, and so was hardened by it, allowing himself to think rationally as the others bathed in the silence of post murder. Thing is, his mind was blank.

The CO captain, Rolin, spoke.

“I want you lot to get back to work. He was no good…beyond saving.” He shouted almost robitcally, as if practiced by repitition, “And I don’t want to hear anything more about it. Anyone thinking of revenge, or simply breaking the boredom, I will personally shoot down and fucking torture! You hear me!” He sputtered, then clearing his throat, gaining self control with a small silence. He put his smoking pistol back in its holster, and bent down to pull the blood-stained shiv from the stomach of the mudokon. “Right…you two,” He pointed it at two of the CO’s, “Get this lump of shit outta’ my sight.”

“We’ll get the mudokon staff to –”

NOW!!”

“Yes sir!”

The two did as they were told in fear of receiving a severs beating, one picking up the feet, the other, the arms. The dead meat was carried out of sight, and Rolin characteristically took one last look at the vats, and followed them out, eyeing the shiv he was holding. The small crowd slowly dispersed, along with the beaten mudokon, and by the time the mudokon staff had arrived at the scene to clean up the pool of blood, all the inmates were working as usual, as if nothing had happened. Nox was in slight shock, but not at the scene he had just witnessed, it was at the heartless reaction of the inmates.

No time for fucking sorrow!! Get a grip!

Nox hadn’t moved from the top of the vat, and he had had a birds-eye view of the whole fight…or murder. And so, he carried on washing the sheets, after all, clean sheets were more important than dead bodies in this place.

Nox worked until supper time, where he was the last in the laundry room; he hadn’t realized it was supper before he noticed he was the only one still working on the vats. The others had all already climbed down and began filing out the door. He must of missed the whistle; it was quite noisy in the laundry room.

Nox made his way down the tall ladder, and by the time he’d reached the ground, he was the only inhabitant of the room. Then…he heard a noise…it came from behind him…

Nox, half expecting a group of slig or mudokon inmates to be standing behind him, slowly turned around. What he saw took his breath away.

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No problem, I love reading this story. The prison section is really interesting.
I find Nox to be quite a good character, although he is plagued with the voices in his head. Does he ever get that sorted out at all? Or is it a permanent thing?

Nox's squad commander and Nox's new prison-mates seem to be the most heroic characters. However, I see you have given each character some specific flaws... which is great The corruption is interesting as well, can't wait to see what happens next.
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CHAPTER 10

UNEXPECTED ANOMALIES

Nox stood before a mudokon child. Its small, fragile form was much in contrast to Nox’s, and it wore inmate clothing that had been cut at the sleeves and legs to help fit it. These clothes had obviously been given to it.

“How in the name of fucking Oddworld?!” Nox simply exclaimed.

“Where’s uncle Frally?” It whimpered, clearly frightened by Nox. It couldn’t of been older than five years.

“Oh shit…shit, shit, shit!” Nox bumbled, pacing back and forth before the mudokon child. He looked at it again.

“Have you seen uncle Frally?” It asked.

Shit!”

Nox suddenly realized. ‘Uncle Frally’ must have been the mudokon that Nox had witnessed get shivved, and then shot. It would explain the fight as well, if you were to take the viewpoint of a mudokon defending a child; then the fight becomes a desperate struggle to keep something secret, or protected.

Nox looked at the child, and spoke to it. The words seemed to leave his mouth too easily, as if someone else was controlling him.

“Don’t worry kid. I’ll take care of yeh. Uncle Frally’s gopne away for a while. I’ll be looking after you.”

How, in the name of sweet odd, did he keep this thing secret?!

The mudokon child slowly advanced towards Nox, and he backed away at first, but then realized he was frightened of a child…frightened of being loved.

Hurt always happens when your loved.

The mudokon child eventually reached Nox, and it hugged one of his robotic legs, sniveling.

“When will he be back?”

“Not for a long time.” Nox replied coldly, then realizing it was only a child. “But I’ll be here for you, don’t you worry.” He comforted, stroking the kid’s head.

What the fuck are you doing?! You cant keep this hidden!! It’ll be dead in a week!!

FUCK OFF!! No it will NOT!

The next thing Nox had to think about was how the hell he was going to keep this a secret. And it would seem, escaping, would either be the most important thing to do right now, or the least important thing to do. Nox didn’t know which one, bu he was leaning towards keeping the child safe and secure, and not putting it through any peril, but was it worth while to put it through life-threatening danger in order to keep it safe?

Nox’s mind was a mess, more so than usual. He needed time, and that was just the thing he didn’t have.

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i'm glad you like it.
the films that inspired me, the ones i can remember anyway, were Shawshank Redemption, Green Mile, Cool Hand Luke, Papillion, and the fan fic Fragments written by Danny Rettick.
also Saving Private Ryan, helped me with conflict, and the film Enemy Minehelped me with relations between two different species.
all of them, good films in my opinion.

CHAPTER 11

HEROES ARE BORN WHERE SINNERS ARE PLENTIFUL

Nox heard the robotic footfalls of slig CO’s, and had to think fast.

“Fuck!” Nox swore, grabbing the mudokon child and placing it in a trolley full of sheets.

The child looked confused.

“What are you doing, mister?”

Nox felt an urge to tell the kid his name.

Now ‘aint the time for talkin’!

“Call me uncle Nox.”

“Ok!” The child replied happily.

“Now stay here ‘till I say so, ok?”

“Is this a game?”

“No – yes, oh just stay still! Its important!” And before the mudokon child could answer, Nox dumped a bundle of soft sheets onto it, obscuring it from wary eyes.

Nox turned around just in time to see the two slig CO’s enter, asking suspiciously;

“Why are you still here?!”

“Oh, sorry, I was just finishing a rag. It was filthy!” Nox deceived.

“Whatever, just get the hell out before I decide to beat yeh! I gotta’ lock up!”

You could ‘ave that scrawny shit!

“Yes sir, sorry sir.”

Nox walked out, past the CO’s, and into the corridor where he proceeded to enter the hall, and grab a tray of supper off one of the kitchen staff at their feed trolley. Nox soon found his pals and sat with them.

“How’d it go?” Rowl asked, spoon in hand.

“Oh, well. Yeah, alright actually.” Nox replied, the kid hiding in the laundry basket and getting locked in, still fresh in mind.

“What’s up? You look like yer miles away?” Glon tested.

“There was a fight in the laundry room -”

“Oh again!” Rowl interrupted, “Their always bloody fightin’ in there! Must be the heat.”

“Nox here has been in the ‘D&M’ war, it couldn’t of been just a fight that’s makin’ him look so…odd.” Glon corrected Rowl.

“Was there blood?” Billy asked, minced fllech dripping from his half open mouth.

“Yeah…yeah, there was blood. Quite a bit.”

Billy resumed his eating.

“And?” Rowl said ignorantly, “That couldn’t of been it?! There’s nearly a fight everyday here, and your lucky if yeh see one die!”

“Lucky? Lucky?! These are lives we’re talkin’ about! Not programmes on telly! ‘Lucky if yeh see one die’, what planet are you on?!” Glon scolded.

“Alright! Calm down old slig!” Rowl snapped. Glon gave a disapproving look.

“No. It weren’t the fight.” Nox said solemnly.

“Then what was it?” Rowl asked yet again, patience growing limited.

“Look, I’m just having a funny day is all. Nothing of interest to report, captain.” Nox joked, trying to throw Rowl off the scent. Glon knew something had happened, but could never have guessed.

They ate in silence, and bid farewell to each other when supper was over, and time in their cells had drawn close. The cell doors locked shut again, and the lights went out, leaving hazy silhouettes. Nox pondered what the kid might be doing right now. Playing around with tools in there, wheeling the trolley around. He laughed at first, then concern dawned upon him. He was going to make sure he was first in there tomorrow, and just hope the kid was still in the laundry basket.

“Hope…huh, enough to keep any fool occupied.” He muttered to himself. He fell asleep shortly after.

♠♠♠♠♠

a whistle blow…



“Breakfast…people…”



…Wake up Nox…



…Get the hell up!…



…Heh heh, WAKEY WAKEY!!

Nox awoke with a start.

“Whoa!” He yelled.

…Bad dreams…

Realizing his task, he immediately left his opened cell, and ran down the stairs, beating the crowd. Luckily, not many people where in the hall, eating, and there were no CO’s to be seen. He just hoped the door to the laundry room was unlocked.

He reached it and gave the handle a turn.

Open.

“Yes!” Nox said under his excited breath, knowing he’d done something right for once.

The room looked the same as when he’d left it the day before. He made his way to the laundry trolley, slamming the door shut behind him.

“Come on…be here…be here…” Nox mumbled whilst searching through the sheets.

He touched something hard.

Is it?

He lifted a big pile of sheets from the basket and flung them onto the floor. There it was, curled up and fast asleep, the baggy inmate clothing camouflaged it quite well. But Nox knew the kid couldn’t stay in here, who knows where it would end up. Probably in some thug’s cell when the sheets were being given out. He couldn’t let that happen.

He paused for a moment, a very risky moment, so as to look at its sleeping form. So innocent, so guiltless, nothing to worry about…strangely enough, it reminded him of himself before the ‘D&M’ war. Well, he wasn’t going to let something terrible stain the soul of this innocent creature.

But where?! Where the fuck do I hide you?

“Uncle Nox?” The kid had woken up, and was rubbing its eyes.

“Do you know any hidin’ places kiddo?” Nox asked lightly.

“…Yes, why? Can I stay with you this time? I’m hungry.”

Oh shit!

As strange as it may seem, Nox had forgotten that the thing had to eat.

“Stay here.” Nox said, running out of the laundry room, ensuring the door closed behind him, and into the hall. Not many inmates were around, but three CO’s stood by the food trolley, taling. Fortunately, they had their backs to Nox.

He approached the trolley, and took a tray off of one of the mudokons as he heard the sligs talk.

“Well, there’s no point installing a new fire system without the electronics getting fixed first.”

“No no no, the system would sort out the electronics, easily!”

“Oh remember when that slurg crawled into the circuiot box and short circuited the whole lot? Yeah, we nearly had all the inmates runnin’ loose!”

“Yeah, but I’ve seen worse. Let me tell yeh, scrabs and circuit boards do not mix. Had a bad bout of paramites covering ‘em in that sticky shit at Rupture Farms too, last I heard…”

Nox had already made his way back into the laundry room again, and gave the mudokon kid the tin bowl of processed fleech, along with the spoon, leaving the tray on a table in the hall. The kid needed it more than he did. Now Nox had to think.

Where the hell do I hide this kid?

Nox noticed something around the back of the third vat. He investigated to find that it was a small hole in the plaster of the wall, revealing a hollow between the wood and bricks of the wall, but it wasn’t big enough for the kid. Nox used his initiative and pulled the edge of the small hole, tearing the plaster away to reveal a bigger hole.

Yes! That’s right my son!!

Fuck me, if you spent as much time on you as you are already on this kid, you wouldn’t even be here! Huh…

“Kid,” Nox whispered, returning to the trolley, knowing someone could walk through the door at any moment, “Come ‘ere.” He said, lifting the child out of the basket and taking it towards the hole.

Putting it amongst the shit and ratz, shame on you!

“You’ll have to stay here, until I find somewhere better. You now not to go out when I’m not around don’t yeh?”

“Yeah. Thanks Nox.”

“Whats your name anyway?”

“Lage.”

He noticed the kid had finished the tin bowl of mush, and still held the bowl and spoon in its hands.

“Let me get rid of them.” Nox said calmly, taking them and dumping them on the ground.

BANG

“What you doin’ in here?”

“Nox stood up swiftly, and turned towards the CO. he already had his baton drawn.

“Just some sheets been dumped here. I tell yeh, no matter how clean yeh get ‘em, they just get dumped on the floor anyway!” Nox faked whilst putting the sheets he’d thrown out earlier back into the trolley.

“You may as well stay in here, the others are comin’ now.” The CO spoke kindly, much in contrast with his officer friends.

He then put his baton back onto his belt, and begun whistling as he exited. Nox exhaled deeply.

That was too fuckin’ close!

That’s what I’m talkin’ about!!

♠♠♠♠♠

After one month of sneaking food into the laundry area, and keeping it hidden and safe, Nox developed a bond. One particular supper time, Nox was sitting behind a laundry trolley, hiding himself from the view of a potential CO looking in from the doorway, and the child was stretching its legs from out of the hollow wall. It seemed cruel to keep it hidden in there, but it was either that or the unbearable suffering of being captured, by inmates or CO’s.

Nox would rather die than let them capture this child.

“You know uncle Frally?” The small child asked Nox.

“Yeah.” Nox lied.

“Has he gone on holiday?”

“Yeah…you could say that. Why? Is it bad being with me?” Nox asked, actually feeling slightly hurt.

“No!” The kid answered, “I like being with you.”

Nox’s mood immediately lifted, “Thanks kid.” And he patted its head.

“Nox?”

“Yeah?”

“Why do you look different to Frally?”

How the hell do I answer that?

“Because…” Nox began, “Err…I come from somewhere different.”

“So…did I come from where Frally came from?” Lage asked, looking slightly confused, now picking its fingernails.

“Yeah. Don’t you ask me where that is!” Nox teased, Lage laughed.

The kid made Nox feel settled, and he noticed that the voice had quietened down whilst he spoke to it.

I’m still here, Nox…

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A bit of bad news.
Due to a few internet 'complications', I'll have to put this on hold for about 3 weeks, if all goes according to plan, until I've got the crap sorted, sorry!
I've already written the whole thing up, its just the fact i cant transfer large pieces of text like chapters, only small pieces.
You have no idea how much this is frustrating me, cus i'm dying to post the rest of this story.
PLEASE dont lose interest, i only post if people still read.
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this is quite an active chapter, so i hope you like.

CHAPTER 12

IN HELL

Nox spent many a suppertime with the kid, Lage, and grew quite attached to it. The secret remained secret, even to his fellow inmates, but one thing was affected. Nox had decided to serve his time, and forget the escape; it was safer for the kid. This meant that he had to try and dissuade the others from it, or simply opt out. They didn’t take this kindly, when Nox told them at breakfast, the next day.

“What do yeh mean ‘not gonna’ bother’?!” Glon questioned aggressively.

“I thought we were gonna’ be an odd damn team!” Rowl joined, equally as aggressively, whilst Billy sat sulking.

“Look, you gotta’ see it from my point of view, I’ve only got two more months on my sentence, and I don’t wanna’ throw that up the spout! Come on lads, I can opt out cant I?”

“Yeah, I spose.” Glon answered, looking around himself, paranoid.

“No! No fuck that! Fuck this!” Rowl shouted, standing up, much to Glon’s panic.

“Sit down!” Glon said aggravated.

“Shut up! Shut up!” Billy added, clutching at his ears, trying to block out the arguing.

“I’ve got another fucking three years on my sentence!” Rowl yelled, flipping the table over, covering nearby inmates in mush with shouts of un-appreciation.

A gang of mudokon inmates noticed the disturbance, and wanting to see who the superior gang was, made their way towards them. Nox noticed them, readying himself, whilst trying to calm down Rowl.

“COME ON FUCKERS!! COME ON CO’S!! ARREST ME BOYS!!” Rowl bellowed up towards CO’s on the third floor. They began running down the staris towards them.

Glon stood and shouted; “Careful fella’s.” Pointing at the fast approaching gang of five mudokon inmates.

“You think your hard fuckers!” One of the mudokons shouted, within fist range, Nox having to duck from a swing.

A riot broke out. Everyone fighting for their own gangs.

Nox quickly winded his assailant with a punch to his stomach, making him double over, then knocking him out with a strong uppercut to his chin. Rowl hit one of the mudokons hard in the teeth, making Rowl wince, peeling skin from his knuckles, but making the mud swallow a few teeth first. Then he was hit in the face-tentacles, and fell to the floor. Glon, although old for a slig, still gave ‘em some, and kicked the mud standing over Rowl in the stomach with one of his robotic legs. The mudokon emitted a cry, but grabbed Glon by the throat in desperation, beginning to strangle him.

Billy saw this and shouted, “Get off Glon! Nasties!!”

He punched one mudokon unfortunately standing in front of his massive frame with his meaty arm, knocking him out instantly, possibly permanently. He strived to reach Glon, who was being strangled and brought down to his knees by now, but a slig from another gang got in his way. His reaction; he picked up the slig inmate with both arms, and with a roar, slammed him down onto the marble floor. There was a sickening crunch, and the slig fell limp instantly, head twisted around the wrong way.

Nox was having his own difficulties, and was currently fighting two mudokon gang members. They circled him, both armed with shivs.

We’re gonna’ need some fucking dire skill here!! Remember yer close combat training!

The mud to Nox’s left leapt at him, but Nox steadied himself, deflecting his shiv-wielding arm with his forearm and grabbing his other arm, twisting it in its socket as the mudokon screamed in pain, Nox suffering no stab wounds. He quickly spun around and ducked the other mud’s swipe with his shiv, snatching the downed mud’s blade. Moving slowly towards the mudokon, he gave a false slash, making the mudokon dodge it, but fall into Nox’s trap; he stabbed the mud in the shoulder and left it there as he wailed in pain. He pulled it out of himself in a hardy manner, and wielded both weapons.

Shit!!

Nox grabbed a wooden chair, and flung it with all his might at the well armed mudokon. It smashed off the mud’s head, and fell broken to the floor, along with the now dead mudokon, blood spreading from the indent in his head.

Nox looked around at the chaos of the hall, inmates fighting inmates, no CO’s in sight.

Rowl had already gotten up off the floor, and lunged at the mudokon strangling Glon, making him let go of him. With Rowl still hanging from his back, they fell backwords through a nearby table, smashing it in half, winding Rowl temporarily, but he didn’t slacken his grip. Glon picked up a broken off chair leg, and hit the same mud in the face with a crack, killing him. Rowl wriggled his way out from under the bloodied mudokon, readying himself for more fighting.

Billy picked up half the broken table, wielding it savagely, swinging it too and fro, giving no mercy to those who tried to oppose him.

The CO’s finally arrived, pouring off the stairs like a swarm of rough justice, the inmates then uniting with each other and fighting against the true source of their misery. It was a sight to behold, mudokons fighting alongside sligs, all battling the same ‘enemy’; the CO’s, who had been told to avoid fatalities. After all, the prisoners were their business, without them, there would be no prison.

The alarms began to whine, making even more adrenaline pump through Nox’s veins, and he thought one thing.

Lage!

He began to run towards the laundry area.

“Where ya’ goin’?!” Rowl shouted to him, his face-tentacles split and bleeding.

“Come with me, you lot!” Nox yelled back, knowing time was not his friend at this particular moment, and they needed to get out of the hall before the fighting got too heavy.

They abided, Billy still armed with half a table.

Nox led them into the laundry area, and ran up to the hole where the kid was hiding.

“Whats all that noise?” It asked, feeling afraid.

Nox’s pals grouped behind him, and took in the rare sight. Nox wondered if he’d done the right thing.

“How in the name of fucking…!” Was Glon’s only reaction.

“Who are these uncle Nox?” Lage asked.

“Uncle Nox?! Uncle Nox?!” Rowl repeated, almost dumbfounded.

“Not really.” Nox answered quietly so Lage wouldn’t hear.

Then Billy, again, said something very moral.

“We’re here to protect yeh, little one.”

Glon, Nox and Rowl all looked at him, holding his half-table like a shield, suddenly looking very chivalric. They all consciously agreed without saying a word, as the child come out and hugged Billy’s legs.

Nox felt strangely jealous.

“Come on,” He said, leading the mudokon child back to the hole, “You gotta’ stay here while we…just stay here. No peeking!”

“Now I understand.” Rowl said solemnly, and nodded in Nox’s direction.

“I think they’re coming.” Glon said.

In reaction to this, Nox pushed a trolley of sheets next to the hole in the wall, hiding Lage.

Glon was right.

A group of seven slig inmates ran I from the corridor, and stopped suddenly at the sight of them, especially Billy’s hulking build.

“End o’ the line, kiddo’s!” Glon barked, still brandishing his bloodstained chair leg, and currently pattinf it in one hand.

“There’s more of us than you! Get the fuck out!”

during this exchange of words, Nox glanced towards the hole next to him, and saw Lage peeking at him through a hole. Nox gestured with his hand not to look.

“We ‘aint goin’ sonny.” Rowl said, looking quite threatening with his battle wounds.

KILL THEM MOTHER FUCKERS!

They ran towards them, and the scrap began.

Nox received a hard punch into the side of his face. He saw stars, but shook ‘em off and counteracted with a nice roundhouse swing, striking the same slig in the visor, cracking it and causing the slig to fall over, blind, but almost breaking Nox’s knuckles. Taking the eye-watering pain, he turned, bringing his close combat skills to the fore, and strategically elbowed another slig in the face, causing it to fall, meeting Nox’s metal kneecap harshly.

Rowl socked one in the chest with a thud, but was punched in the stomach in return, lifting him from the floor and putting him down into a heap, moaning. Glon saw this and proceeded to take two sligs on at the same time in order to protect Rowl’s downed form. Swinging the wooden chair leg wildly, striking one of them on the top of the head, causing him to fall limp, presumably dead. He took a punch to the face, then another, and another, struggling to stay conscious with each blow.

Billy grabbed one slig by the shoulder and punched it in the face with his right fist, breaking its neck. Then swiping another two sligs with his half-table, knocking them out immediately, splattering blood onto Billy’s ‘shield’. He then noticed Glon’s predicament, and instantly intervened, smashing his half-table directly onto the top of the slig, narrowly missing Glon’s defeated self, currently on his knees, face bloody and dazed. The slig was literally crushed under the weight and strength of the ‘shield’.

Nox looked about himself, taking in the view, ignoring the moans of the sligs that were still alive and conscious.

“Fuck.” Rowl said, getting himself up with a wince, clutching his stomach.

“I tell yeh, that’ll bruise in the mornin’!” Nox said from experience, panting.

“You alright Glon?” Billy asked, dropping his half-table and helping him to his feet.

“Yeah son…I’m…ok…I think.” Glon replied.

“You wanna’ take it easy old slig!” Rowl began, bent over and panting, hands on his knees, “I had ‘em covered.”

“Oh!” Glon started, also out of breath, “And when were you gonna’ get up and defend yourself while lying on the floor?! Eh!”

“I think the words he’s lookin’ for are ‘thank you’.” Nox noted Glon.

“Yeah, I spose. Thanks Glon.” Rowl admitted, his pride dented.

“Ha ha, saved by an old slig? Heh heh heh!” Glon taunted.

The alarms stopped, and there was an eerie silence, apart from the fighting going on in the hall. There was a crackle of static from the speakers, and a glukkon voice spoke over the intercom, Sronti.

“Open fire.”

That’s when Nox and his group heard shots being fired, and shouts from the hall.

“Sweet odd! There fuckin’ shootin’ ‘em!!” Glon yelled.

“What do we do?” Rowl asked desperately, Billy sensing something was wrong, but not quite sure what was going on.

“I don’t think there’s anything we can do.” Nox replied grimly.

He just thanked his lucky stars they were out of the hall.

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oh excellent! another reader!

i know its a bit long, and seems to be a bit daunting at first, but i hope you carry on reading it like AlexFili has done.

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hey of course! I started reading this eons ago, I would even do some fanart for it, but I'm too busy right now ...nyah but someday I just have to do some fanart for this xD
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that would be great! puts faces to the names.

anyway, i may aswell post the next chapter while i'm here.

CHAPTER 13

UNLUCKY NUMBER

The riot didn’t last long, all in all, and prisoners that weren’t shot dead, were sent back to their cells. Nox and the group were shown no sympathy for their wounds, as with others, and were simply locked in their cells, Nox thinking about the kid, and if it saw any of the fighting. He knew what it was like to witness violence at an early age; it wasn’t nice.

The fragile relationship that had formed between slig inmates and mudokon inmates during the riot was smashed when the CO’s opened fire, and ultimately ended up back to square one. Quite possibly never forming again.

Nox and his friends never spoke of the child or the escape again. Nox wasn’t sure why, but he continued to look after the mudokon, ducking and diving CO’s and inmates in the laundry room. Nox had been kept on laundry since the day he first started work there, and didn’t know why. Nut one afternoon, two months into his sentence, during dinner, when Nox was feeding the kid and generally keeping it occupied, two CO’s entered the room and he found out just why. Luckily, they didn’t see the hole in the wall and what it contained.

“You sure like washing sheets don’t ya’!” One CO taunted, both walking towards him from behind.

Nox said under his breath, “Don’t look, kid.” And turned to face them, noticing their batons were out and ready.

Then Nox realized who one of them was; the CO that had threatened Nox in his cell on his first day. This was going to hurt.

“What’s wrong? Heh heh, don’t ya’ remember me?” The CO spoke, the other patting his baton threateningly.

“Yeah. I remember.” Nox spoke wearily, knowing he was about to receive a thorough beating.

“You know why we’re here then?” The other CO said.

“I can only assume.” Nox said back to him, moving out of Lage’s line of sight so the child wouldn’t see what happened.

They both reached Nox in what seemed an eternity traversing the room towards him. And by the time they reached Nox, savouring every moment, her had butterflies in his stomach, tensing for the pain.

One whack of a truncheon onto his shoulder, almost breaking his coller bone. Nox fell to his knees, not bothering to resist, just taking every last ounce of nerve-shredding pain.

The other CO had his turn, and beat Nox once into his chest with a grunt, making Nox’s breathing staggered, badly winded for a few moments.

“Fuckin’ fight me! Fight me!!” One of them shouted. Nox didn’t know which one, he just concentrated on Lage in his mind. It helped block the pain.

“You stupid fucking moron!! What are ya’?! A coward or somethin’?!”

Baton to the face-tentacles, and bone-splintering pain, again.

Fight ‘em fucker! NOW!!

No…

A frustrated fist to the side of Nox’s head. Stars, and then concrete floor. He’d been knocked out.

The deliverance of pain set by harsh words on Nox’s first day of prison life had been emitted, now Nox had less to worry about. Lage was the only thing that seemed to matter anymore.

He dreamt of woodlands as far as the eye could see, and Lage growing up there, happy with other mudokons. But he knew he would never be able to watch the kid grow up in that environment. He would never be accepted, but it mattered to the kid, and that’s all Nox needed to fuel his determination to keep it safe and secure, have a decent childhood, and grow up in a typical mudokon area, like woodlands or small villages, not factories, businesses and prisons.

Such is prison life.

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I hope Nox meets his old mates in the barracks again
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CHAPTER 14

PACKING

Eventually, Nox served his due, and the time came to pack up and leave. It hadn’t come a day too soon, and Nox had avoided being sent to the chain gang. He said his farewells to his pals, and wished them all the best in the rest of their sentences.

“Your last day today?” Glon asked at dinner.

“Yep. They said I’m goin’ in about half an hour.” Nox replied.

“Really?” Rowl said, surprised. “I never even thought about yeh leaving…its all gone so fast!”

“Don’t start crying on me now!” Nox joked, attempting to lift his mood.

“Hey Billy! What yeh doin’?” Glon questioned, turning to his side to face Billy.

He had his head bowed and was sniveling something. Glon leaned in closer to him.

“What did yeh say buddy?” He asked soothingly, then repeating his words. “He said he’s gonna’ miss yeh.” He informed Nox.

“I ‘aint done shit here, Billy. What you gonna’ miss?” Nox asked, confused by Billy’s actions.

“Company.” Glon translated.

“Don’t worry about me, Billy!” Nox attempted to comfort.

“Yeah,” Rowl started, “Nothings changing for you! Everythings still the same! You got me and Glon still! Eh?”

“I spose your right.” Billy said, lifting his head slightly and rubbing his eyes.

It was the first time he’d seen Billy at the brink of tears.

Nox shook Glon, Rowl and Billy’s hands, and made his way to his cell on the second floor, where a cloth sack had been dumped on his bunk to put his accumulated belongings in. at this point he realized he had not experienced the joy of sharing a cell, and removed his prisoner shirt. It was one thing he was glad about. As for the cloth sack? He knew exactly what to do…

He was frog marched once again to the train station, and boarded the train with wary looks from the same driver as last time, still wearing his pinstriped flat cap. The slogans on the walls; exactly the same. The life of prison inmates; unchanged and still violent. The immoral way of CO’s; un-defied.

I’ve not changed a fucking thing here…jack shit…

There goes the best days of your life, eh Nox’y! Fightin’, brawlin’, fucking MURDERIN’!!

No one bothered checking his things, and Nox managed to smuggle something on board.

The shutter doors rattled shut, and on flickered the light.

The cloth sack convulsed, and out crawled the mudokon child.

“We’ve done it, little one…we’ve done it…”

Nox knew where he would hide the kid at Slig Barracks too. There was an old, derelict warehouse not far from Nox’s bunker. The kid could stay there until he managed to get the mud into the forests with some native mudokons. It was going to be easier, Nox thought, than it was in prison.

“Where are we going again?” The kid asked.

“Somewhere better than here. You’ll have more space and can wonder about. Just don’t leave the place though, not without me.”

“How big is it?” The mudokon child quizzed, then giving a length of arm as a measurement. “This big?”

“Whoa no! Bigger than that!”

The child outstretched its arms to maximum, and said, straining, “This big?!”

“Even bigger than that!”

“Even bigger than that?!” Lage said, dropping its arms to its sides.

“Yup.”

Time passed, and the child eventually fell asleep, leaving Nox alone with his thoughts for the remainder of the journey. Not the best company.

The train finally reached a smoking stop, and the shutter doors rattled open, startling Nox and waking the child.

“Quick! In yeh go!” Nox said to Lage, opening the sack for it to crawl into, than standing and swinging it onto his shoulder.

He walked out onto the platform to see the train driver once again. This time he said nothing, seemingly learning his lesson from last time. Nox noticed a golden plaque screwed into the brick wall of the station with ‘Slig Barracks’ engraved onto it, amongst posters of different military scenes, one depicting group of sligs in a trench having a fierce fire-fight with a group of renegade mudokons, the sligs looking victorious. The heading; NO ONE STANDS A CHANCE AGAINST THE MILLITARY MIGHT OF SLIG BARRACKS! Another poster showed a highly decorated slig standing to attention with the heading; PUT YOUR OWN LIFE BEFORE OTHERS AND REAP THE REWARDS!

They’ve bought me straight to Slig Barracks instead of the courthouse…

Home, sweet home…

The train blew its horn, and began its long journey back to Sronti’s prison.

Better him than me…

Once the train had left the station, Nox was bathed in glorious, glorious silence, and he took it in, readily.

“Well,” Nox said to himself, “Spose I’d best report in.”

Nox knew his way around Slig Barracks, having spent his whole career there, and so, signed himself in, and immediately set off for the warehouse, leaving the post he’d been assigned to at the mercy of the elements.

The warehouse was situated about one mile of walkway from Nox’s bunker, and was currently derelict, say for the bit of ammunition storage every now and then. If there was ammo in there now, he’d have to tell Lage not to touch anything.

Don’t wanna’ blow the kid up, do yeh Nox? Heh heh…

The sky began to grow dark and the stars came into view as Nox made his way over to the warehouse. When he reached it, he was happy to discover that it was not in use, save for a few unloaded pallets here and there. Once inside, he let the child out of the sack, feeling slightly guilty for the way that it had been treated; like a chunk of gold being hidden from the greedy eyes of Clakkers.

Nox slumped himself against the bare, concrete wall and looked on at the empty ground of the warehouse. Lage sat next to him as the lights flickered on automatically. The outside world grew darker.

“Is this the new place uncle?” Lage asked.

“Yep, this is it. Plenty of room for you to play when I’m not here. But don’t leave the place!”

“I wont Nox. You worry too much!” The kid remarked.

Nox laughed, “Yeah, maybe your right…I worry too much…” He said as he continued to look on at the emptiness of the place.

He glanced at his watch; 9:31 pm. He had another half an hour until the end of his shift. He hoped that he hadn’t been uncovered as not at his post, or as the glukkons liked to call it, AWOL.

“Uncle?” Lage interrupted.

“Yeah kiddo?”

“I asked Frally what a meech was once, but he didn’t tell me. Do you know what one is?”

There extinct, kid. No longer around.

“Well…I dunno, I think they’re on holiday or somethin’.” Nox lied.

“What? Like uncle Frally?” Lage looked at Nox hopefully.

You asked for that, Nox.

Shit…

“Yeah…” Nox hesitated. “Sorta’ kid. Why? You miss ‘im?”

“Yeah…is he coming back?” The kid asked, voice wavering slightly.

Nox looked at the child, to see that it was beginning to well up.

Its just a child…

“Oh, come ‘ere.” Nox comforted as he put his right arm around the poor soul. “You gotta’ keep yer chin up!”

“But is he coming back?” Lage sniveled.

“I’ll be honest with yeh…I don’t think so.”

Nox’s hand felt wet, he looked at it to see tears from the mudokon child’s face falling onto it. He hugged the kid tighter with one arm.

“Don’t worry…things will get better.”

Nox sat with the kid in silence for a while, until the tears stopped flowing and their time was up. Nox peered at his watch; 9:58 pm. Drinking time.

“Sorry kid.” Nox said as he lifted his arm from around the child and stood up. Then he noticed it was asleep. Nox felt slightly callous for his sudden departure so that he could consume beer. That was his addiction, and it had to keep coming, whilst he was still in Slig Barracks anyway.

He grabbed the cloth sack he had been given at Sronti’s prison, and placed it over the child, like a blanket. He then exited the warehouse and started for ‘The Rotten Barrel’ pub.

Hope no one’s noticed me missing…

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its a coincidence you said that AlexFili, seeing as this is the chapter he gets sent back to Slig Barracks.

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So, what positions do the Sligs in your story have? Are they all security guards or are some more important than others?
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well in the detention center, CO's (Correctional officers) are basic guards to the inmates, but are below Rolin, the captain of the guards.

in Slig Barracks, it all goes by rank (from lowest to highest).
private
lance corporal
corporal
sergeant
staff sergeant
warranr officer 2nd class
warrant officer 1st class
second lieutenant
lieutenant
captain
major
lieutenant-colonel
colonel
brigadier
major-general
lieutenant-general
general
field marshal

i got the ranks out of an old dictionary years ago, i think they're the ranks used during WW1 & WW2. in the modern army i'm sure its much different now. i thought that, because Oddworld seems to have the same feel as the industrial revolution where everything was a lot bigger, heavier and almost everything was made of metal (not caring for conservation or any of that jazz), i felt that this list of ranks would fit Slig Barracks best.

Nox and his friends are all Private's, but still veterans. i'm actually in the process of writing profiles for all the characters mentioned in this story, so when i reach the end, i'll post them and you can browse at each characters history, fears, age, likes & dislikes, etc.
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That would be awesome. Thanks
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